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Fantasy " Girls Hostel "

harshit1890

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~~INDEX~~

Chapter 1 ~~ " Supriya "
Chapter ~~ 2 " The Illusion "
Chapter ~~ 3 " Catatonic Schizophrenia "
Chapter ~~ 4 " A True Face "
Chapter ~~ 5 " The Antiquarian "
Chapter ~~ 6 " The Amazon "
Finale
Chapter 7 : " Book Of Hoax "

Some Comments for this story :love: (Late Add-on :sigh:)

सच में , यह पुरी स्टोरी दिमाग के परखच्चे उड़ाए जा रही है । कभी लगता है कहानी में सस्पेंस है तो कभी लगता है भ्रम जाल का ताना-बाना बुना हुआ है तो कभी लगता है जैसे कोई रूहानी ताकतें हैं तो कभी लगता है यह सिंपल स्टोरी है जिसमें आरूहि एक गम्भीर बिमारी से पीड़ित है ।

मुझे लगता है इससे बेहतरीन कहानी फिलहाल तो इस फोरम पर नहीं है । और सबसे बड़ी खासियत है आपके लिखने का स्टाइल और अंदाज । आउटस्टैंडिंग हर्षित भाई ।
thoos thoos ke khana khaya aaruhi ne jo ekdam majedar horror type scene tha ..
सही में , हर्षित भाई ! मुझे बहुत ही दया आने लगा है आरूहि पर । अगर किसी हरामखोर की वजह से उसकी हालत ऐसी हुई है तो उसे जहन्नुम का रास्ता जरूर दिखला दिजियेगा ।
WTF!!! Yahi pehla reaction nikalta hai is kahani ko poora padhne ke baad... Halanki pehle bhi maine is kahani ke kuchh 7-8 updates padhe huye the par jab is baar padhna shuru kiya to ek naya sa romanch har beet te update ke saath banta gaya... Bohot hi zyada behatreen tareeke se likhi gayi kahani hai ye, ab jis prakaar ka plot imagine kiya hai lekhak saahab ne uske baad ek nausikhiya bhi likhe to bhi kahani halki nahi ho sakti, aur yahaan jis level ka narration, aur scene specialization hame padhne ko mila hai, wo kaafi hai dikhane ke liye that this is, without a doubt,one of the finest stories available on XF... Chahe wo running stories hon ya fir completed, aur chahe future mein likhi jaane waali kahaniyan, is story ka ek alag hi sthaan bana rehne waala hai forum par... Aur iske liye writer saahab ki jitni bhi tareef ki jaaye wo kam hi hogi...

Fantasy genre ke saath shuru huyi ye kahani, kab alag - alag genres ke darshan karane lagi padhte waqt katayi pata nahi chala... Horror, Suspense, Thriller, Adventure, Romance and of course Fantasy, aur saath hi mein Erotica ke ansh bhi... Ek story mein is se zyada kis cheez ki apeksha kar sakta hai reader!? Again, one of the best stories I've ever read... Outstanding Stuff harshit1890 bhai... :bow: :bow: :bow:
Kya hi khubsurat kahani likhi hai aapne bhai... I'm just speechless, jitni bhi tareef karunga kam hi hogi... Erotica ka bhi bilkul sahi situation mein use Kiya gaya hai aur sabse important har kirdaar par lekhak ki shaandar pakad bani rahi hai... Har character ka kahani mein hona justify kiya gaya hai, kahin bhi koyi bhi character bina matlab nahi ghus aaya...

Ab dekhna ye hai ke Mehta waali meeting mein kaun kaun shaamil tha aur unka maksad kya tha? Aur Shruti is sab ki sachayi jaan bhi paayegi ya nahi? Aruhi sach mein kisi beemari ka shikaar hai ya kewal naatak kar rahi hai? At last, Ek baar ko apun ko ye bhi laga ke asal mein ye sab jo ho raha hai wo kewal Shruti ki kalpana hai... :dazed:

Outstanding Story & Updates Bhai & Waiting For Next...
Harshit bhai... Kayi horror stories padhi hain maine, joki poori tarah se horror genre par based hain but jis tarah ka scene aap create karte ho, taking into note ye story horror genre par based hai bhi nahi, that's phenomenal...
meghnath naam rakhne ke pichhe ki kahani bhi majedar hai 😍😍😍..
jab me TV nahi dekhta( waise tha nahi nahi ghar par ) tha bachpan me aur bas naam suna karta tha to khudko SHAKTI KAPOOR. kehta tha dosto ke bich 🤣🤣🤣..ye kissa padhke bachpan ki yaade taaza ho gayi 😍😍😍..
Slowly my interest is increasing towards the story full of adventure, fun to read, no doubt you are a great writer, thank you for writing such a beautiful story.
Have to admit, your story completely twists the thinking, sometimes it seems in the mind that it is just a disease and sometimes it seems like something supernatural. Your writing is commendable, even after writing this much there are many questions and there will be many such points which I have missed. In some scenes there was a combination of intensity as well as erotic scenes, which you have shown very well, what should I say now, now the words of praise are over understand my feelings.
harshit1890 Hats Off... enjoyed it. :applause:
but why were you making her nude everytime in front of everyone. :angry:
मुझे नहीं लगता दुनिया में कोई भी ऐसा माई का माल होगा जिसे इस कहानी की पहेली समझ में आ रही हो। गजब का दिमाग हिला रखा है आपने हर्षित भाई।
The whole incident, that Mansion one was written so beautifully that no words are sufficient to describe it! Ismein koyi doraye nahin ki maine aaj tak kisi ko bhi is tarah ka horror likhte nahi dekha hai... Haunted ko read kiya tha maine, kaafi pehle, aur main bilkul daave se keh sakta hoon, that you're the best,when it comes to generating real fear in readers, while they read the story..
Bhatt the phakk is this estory?:redface:
 
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कोई शांति वांति नहीं छाई है हरिया भाई ! हम सभी बाकी लोगों के थ्रीड में हुड़दंग मचाए हुए हैं । :D
Fir to theek hai... yahan bhi hudang machane ka samay nikat aa gaya hai :d
waise lappy hai isliye todi bahot tasali hai...
Warna to aaj kal mobile se yahan xf pe aana bhi muskil hai, bas ek dedh ghante online raho net pack khatam :D
 
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" bada khil-khila rahi hai.. aisa kya baten ho rahi hai vishal se " aaruhi apne kapde utar kar bra penty mein khadi thi aur apne jism ko aine mein nihar rahi thi. Jab se hostel ayi hun badan mein badlav aa gaya hai, khana to kam khati hun fir bhi bhar raha hai. Uski nazar apni chatiyun ke sath apni jhanghon par bhi thi jo bharti jaa rahi thi. Fir vo aine ke nkat ayi aur usne apni ankhein dekhi, jisko vo sabse jada chahti thi, uske niche dark circle padhne lage the, patani kaise.. padh rahe hain ye.. " bolegi ya nahi " aaruhi ne toka aur pajama dalte hue shruti ki taraf dekha vo abhi bhi phone par khoi hui thi. Aaruhi ko gussa aya aur usne shruti ke pas ate hi uska pajama niche ki taraf khinch dia jo utra to nahi lekin uske jism se sarak gaya.

" badi aag lagi hai kamini tere andar.. direct niche se hamla karegi.. "

" chup haramzadi.. kuch puch rahi thi tu jawab hi nahi de rahi thi tabse.. phone ko chehre ke aage karke usme khoyi hui hai kabse " aaruhi ne ek dhili si tshirt uthai aur galle mein dal kar sine par jakar rokte hue apne hath andar kiye aur bra ke hook kholne lagi.

" to kya meri jawani inhale karne ki planing karegi " ek hath se shruti ne pajame ke sath penty ko bhi uppar ki taraf sarkaya jo khinchne ki wajah se kamar se niche ho gayi thi.

" matlab koi matlab hi nahi hai.. aise kya phone mein khoi hui hai.. theek hai khoi reh.. " bra utar kar ek taraf rakhte hue tshirt theek karke aaruhi bistar par ayi.

" matlab to hai janeman.. lekin tu jo chahti hai vo mein nahi de sakti "

" mene tujhse kya chah liya sirf sawal hi to kiya "

" sawal ki nahi mein tangon ke bich ki baat kar rahi hun jo tu abhi lene ki soch rahi thi "

" chup haramzadi, kaha na mene .. ki main bas tera dhayan bhatkana chahti thi "

" wah.. kya tarika hai.. kal ko kisi ladke ka dhayan bhatkana hoga to tu to use wahin blowjob de degi.. "

" chi... kitni gandi hai.. blowjob.. chii.. sun kar hi ulti si aa gayi "

" kya baat kar rahi hai " shruti ne apni nazar aaruhi ki taraf modi.

" dekho to kaise phone se nazar hati ab.. isko sirf gandi baton ke kisi bhi chiz mein interest hi nahi ata " aaruhi ne mobile uthate hue kaha.

" interest to bahut chizon mein hai.. tujhe kya malum.. par tujhe blowjob nahi pasand aisa kaise.. tune taste kiya hai kya "

" shutup.. kuch bhi mat bol... mujhe to dekhne par hi ghin atti hai.. eeeehhh.. " ulti wala reaction dete hue aaruhi boli " classmate ne dikhaya tha ek baar.. zee itna kharab hua tha kya batau "

" yani teri classmate bhi khelo khelai hogi.. kash wahi meri roomate hoti.. "

" han tujhe to chahie hi yahi sab.. ek mahine se uppar hua hume lekin teri is hawas ki bhuk nahi mitti "

" mitegi bhi nahi.. hum mard ke bache hai.. mard kee... "

" what do you mean? "

" tujhe har chiz samjhani padti hai... dekh.. mard ko kya pasand hai.. aurat.. aur aurat mein use kya pasand hai uska jism.. aur vo uske jism ke sath kya karta hai.. us jism ko vo bhogta hai.. uska shauk hai.. yani mard ka shauk hota hai jism bhogna.. to mard ke bachon kabhi to yahi shauk hoga na.. jism bhogna.. "

" to tu yahan kaun sa jism bhog rahi hai "

" jab andar jata hai na to ek ladke se jada ladki ko maza ata hai.. top secret hai ye.. ladkon ko nahi pata unhe lagta hai ki vo maze le rahe hai.. par asal baat to ye hai ki hum to sirf unse mehnat karwa rahe hain baki asli maze to hume hi milte hai.... " aaruhi shruti ko ghurti rahi do pal tak aur fir ek lambi ahein bharte hue kuch bol na payi.

" teri classmate hoti to jada maza ata " shruti fir phone mein lag gayi. Aaruhi use kuch der tak yun hi dekhti rahi, " kar kya rahi hai phone mein ? " aaruhi ne apna pehla sawal dahuraya jise usne shuruwat ki thi.

" facebook " shruti ne bas itna hi kaha aur chup hui " jaggu ne din mein bataya tha to socha try karke dekhun.. sahi keh rahi thi.. kuch alag hai ye... orkut se to bahut badia hai " aaruhi kuch nahi boli bas baithi use dekhti rahi.

Ghadi ke samay ke hissab se 9:45 ho chuke the, shruti kafi der tak waise hi mobile par facebook chalati rahi aur jab usne time dekha to jaggu ki profile band karte hi vo aaruhi ki taraf palti. Usko sota pakar ek pal vo use dekhti rahi jiske baad usne alarm clock ko khiska kar stool se niche gira diya jise shor hua par aaruhi mein koi halchal nahi hui. Aaruhi gehri nind mein thi shruti yahi janna chahti thi, vo palang se khadi hui, aine mein khud ke baal dekh kar use theek kiye aur kamre ki light band karke bade dhime dhime darwaja khol kar bahar nikli. Bahar nikal kar usne wahin reh kar corridor mein jhanka aur kuch sunne ki kosish karne lagi, halki fulki awazein thi jo ladkiyun ke kamre se aa rahi thi. Shruti ne ek dum se hi kadam tez kiye aur jaldi jaldi sidiyan utarne lagi, vo janti thi ki ye samay itna khatrnak hai jitna ki zindagi ke liye yamraj kyun ki hostel ki yamraj shailja thi aur agar kisi ne use dekh liya to yamraj ko khabar lag hi jani thi. Chup-chap bachte bachate hue vo niche aa gayi thi, bas ek darwaja, chillu to is waqt hota nahi 9-11 vo daru mein vyast hota hai isliye ek darwaja khulna baki reh gaya tha. Shruti ne kundi kholi par darwaja kholti use pehle ek awaz ne usko chaunka diya.

" kidhar.. itni raat " awaz ki disha mein palate hi samne dekh shruti ki sansein jo chadi hui thi usne use dhime se chhoda.

" dara diya tune, aise piche se awaz nahi lagane ka "

" awaz to mene tumhe do minute dekhne ke baad lagai thi "

" sala harami " shruti ne man mein gali di kyun ki vo janti thi ki piche kahde vo uske chutadon ko dekh raha hoga jaise pehle din jaan kar usko aage chalne ke liye kaha tha tab to shruti ko laga ki use samman de raha hai par baad mein samajh aya ki usne aage isliey chalne ko kaha tha taki vo uski matkati chutdon ko dekh sake.

" vo kya hai na kaam hai mera ye.. tum logon par nazar rakhna " debu thodi unchi awaz mein bola jise sun shruti uske nazdeek ayi, vo janti thi ki ye sala jaan kar kar raha hai.

" dhire bol na.. tere galle mein kaun sa speaker fit hua hai "

" warden madam ne chauksi nazar rakhne ko bola hai.. aur kai din se tumhe dekh raha hun der raat ati jati ho.. "

" tumne kisi ko bataya? " shruti ne use ghura

" bataya hota to kya tum yahan khadi hoti " is baar uski awaz dhimi thi. Baat vo sahi keh raha tha lekin sala ye nahi pata tha ki ye burkatta mere uppar nazar rakh raha hai. Shruti soch kar kuch bolti use pehle debu bol pada " har roz aise jana khatarnak hai jab se lavanya ka patta katta hai warden madam chokas nazar banaye hai "

" acha.. to kahan hai tumhari chokas warden madam.. " betichod na to camera theek karaya na chaukidar badla aur chokas aise keh raha hai jaise vo yahin so rahi ho, 8 bajte hi to dum daba kar apne apartment chali jati hai. Shruti janti thi shailja roz ki tarah aaj bhi hostel mein nahi hai.

" apne kamre mein hai.. bulau kya? " usne fir unchi awaz mein kaha.

" abee oo chup... marwayega kya.. salle.. " shruti ne use ishare se chup hone ko kaha to vo chup hua lekin msukura pada, uski aisi kutiya smile ko dekh kar man kiya abhi iske honth sil dun, hawas ka sehzada.
" warden kab se hostel mein rehne lagi ? " shruti ne fauran sawal kiya.

" bataya to jabse lavanya ka patta saaf hua hai tabse ... "

" dhire bol.. marwayega salle.. itni der se bakwas kar raha hai ye kaun batayega pehle sala pura plan cancel " shruti ki samajh nahi aa raha tha ki ab vo kya kare... warden ke hote hue jana yani yamraj ke liye khud kiwad kholna vo bhi aise haalat mein.

" aisa kya plan hai jiski adhi raat ko jigasya jagi hai "

" abhi adhi raat mein 2 ghante hai.. "

" tension kahe leti ho madam.. debu hai na... vaise bhi jab itne din se sambhal liya to aaj bhi sambhal lega ... bas aaj is debu ko uska inam chahie "

" tu sambhal lega "

" aaj tak apko nirash kiya hai.. jo aage bhi karunga.. " is madarchod ki gand mein bade uchak hai.. salle julab ki goli dungi ek din sab uchak tab sandas mein nikalio. Debu ne jis andaz mein kaha aur shruti ko ghura use vo samajh gayi ki sala ankhon se chod raha hai. Man to use galiyun se pelne ka tha lekin kabhi kabhi tadap ke chalte lund ke size ko ignore karna padta hai.

" theek hai.. to tu sambhal.. main ati hun " shruti bol kar jane lagi par debu ne use fir rok liya awaz dekar... " are bc.. marwayega kya.. chilla kyun raha hai " palate hi shruti uspar dabi awaz mein chillai, use bar bar yahi dar tha ki itne sanate ka shor sun kar warden jaag jayegi to sara game bigad jayega.

" sambhal to main lunga lekin mera inam ... " debu itrate hue bola. Shruti use ek pal ghurti rahi fir usne apna hath piche kiya aur top ke andar se bra nikal kar uske samne kar di.

" aila pichu se... "

" meri nahi hai.. aur jada sapne dekhna bhul ja.. ayi samajh.. " shruti ne use chatkate hue kaha kyun ki vo janti thi is waqt vo do shabd sun bhi lega. Usne meri baat par se dhayan hataya aur bra mere hath se turant le li. " ab tu sambhal.. aur agar kuch gadbad hui to beta teri kher nahi.. "

" kuch nahi hoga.. aap befikar raho.. vaise bhi warden kaun sa jagti hai.. peg laga kar ghode bech kar so rahi hai.. ab to koi uske aage horn bhi baja de to vo nahi uthegi.. ab sirf tabhi uthegi jab uske chehre par koi baraf wala pani dale " debu ki nazar bra par jami thi jisne usne uski strip se pakda tha aur uski height naap raha tha.

" iski to .. sala haramzada.. " man mein gali dete hue vo boli " ye baat pehle kaun batayega? " shruti ke sawal par usne koi jawab nahi diya vo to bra mein kho chuka tha. Shruti samajh gayi ki ab usko is chiz ki tension nahi hogi kam se kam.

" jab call karun to us chillu ko dekh lio.. mujhe koi natak nahi chahie " shruti ne kaha par vo to bra dekh kar hi un chatiyun ko mehsus kar raha tha jispar ye chadi thi. " sun raha hai " chutki bajate hue usne use hosh mein kiya.

" befikar rahiye madam.. ye debu ne aaj tak nirash kiya hai apko.. aage bhi nahi karega.. vaise madam ek sawal puchun "

" bol jaldi.. "

" ye item kis item ka hai.. " lalsa bhari nighaon se usne pucha, janti thi ki vo aaj raat bhar is bra se hi use chodne wala hai.

" tujhe use kya "

" to jab aap aogi to use mujhe kya " ek dum charmarate hue jawab ko sun shruti samajh gayi ki ye debu hai.. ise har baat ko tarike se hi jhonkni padti hai.

" are mere debu... mere kehne ka matlab hai ki ek ladki ka naam bataya to sirf uske bare mein sochega.. aur agar nahi bataungi to kis kis ke bare mein sochega.. soch? " shruti ne apna andaz hi badal diya itne pyare tarike se apni baat kahi ki debu ko apne sharir meini akdan mehsus hone lagi, usne bra ki straps ko aur kas ke pakad liya. " aur andar ki baat batau.. jitni bar jitni naye naam sochega.. utni baar.. " itna bol kar shruti chup ho gayi, vo janti thi ki itna kafi hai. Debu se shayad ab intezar karna mushkil tha.. vo bas.. ab is bra se un chatiyun par tut jana chahta tha. Shruti janti thi kaam ho chuka hai, vo wapis hostel ke darwaje par ayi, chitakni adhi kholi thi use puri kholi aur darwaja khol kar bahar nikalne lagi.

" ek minute madam.. " is baar debu wahin se nahi chillaya, pas akar dhire se bola.

" ab kya hai? " shruti ne kisi tarah gussa control karte hue kaha.

" apko kaise pata tha ki main apko jatte hue pakad lunga? jo aap mera intezam sath lekar ayi " debu ka sawal sun garv se shruti muskurate hue boli.

" shruti ke har plan mein sabhi kirdar shamil hote hai... " itna bol kar shruti wahan se chali gayi aur debu ne darwaja band karte sath hi bra ke cups ko apne chehre par dala aur wahan se apne kamre ki taraf nikal gaya.
 

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Sau baat ki ek baat is shruti ke dimag mein bas hawas hai, hawas ke atirikt aur kuch nahi.....iski besharami aur tharakpan ki hadein paar kar deni wali baatein padh yahi lage ki isko sirf kaise karke apni hawas ki aag ko mitani hai, chaahe saamne wala koi bhi ho uske samne hi let jaayegi :D
Bichari aaruhi... Ek simple sa sawal puch rahi thi usse... badle mein itna kuch ghatiya aur behaya baatein ushe sunne ko milegi, ye to soch bhi nahi sakti thi aaruhi :sad:
are, are, are.... :D... lo ji is tharki shruti ke kaarnamo mein ek aur kaarnama jud gaya..... :D
ek hawasi mard aur tharki aurat se paida hone wali shruti isiliye itni hawas khor hai.... :D
Haan yaar galti iski nahi balki iske hawasi maa baap ki hai..... kaise kaise aadatein daal di shruti ki hormones aur DNA mein....... :lol:
Khair...... ye itni raat ko akeli kaha nikli... us bhootiya hostel jaane ke liye ya visal se milne.... lage ki phir se shayad tharak chadhi isliye shruti par...
le us tharki debu ke hatho pakdi gayi... par itni convince kahe kahe karing.... waise bhi wo jaa hi rahi thi visal se milne us bhootiya hostel mein apni tharak mitane.... are debu se hi mita leti apni hawas ki aag.... Kya fark padta hai shruti ko ki saamne wala koun hai bas hawas mit ti rahni chaahiye :lol:
Khair.... btw ek baat samajh mein nahi aa rahi ki aaruhi ab bhi uske sath ek hi room mein kyun hai? :mad:
are dusri kisi achhi ladki ke room kyun nahi chali jaati as a roommate.... :approve:
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Btw sach mein har mod aur pehlu ke sath kahani aur bhi interesting hoti jaa rahi hai...
aapki dwara likhe gaye har shabd hawaon mein bhi ek nasha bikhed de... ki padhte waqt thoda sa ye nasha yun readers pe bhi chaa jaaye ....Haan.. ishi wajah se to har update padhne mein aaye readers ko maza...Aap jis tarah likhte hai har mod aur pehlu ko dhyan mein rakhte huye, readers ko baithe bithaye kirdaaro ke bhaavnao ko gehrayi se mehsoos aur ehsaas karne ke liye majbur kar de .. ... Update ka har ek shadb jaise pehli barish ki bunde ki tarah hai..... padhte waqt lage ki kirdaar jaise ankhon ke samne bhumika nibha rahe ho.... Sach mein jis tarah se realistic roop mein bhumika nibha rahe hai kirdaar, readers ko majboor kar de unke sath judne ke liye... yahin to aapki lekhni ka jaadu hai.... :bow:
Well waise aapki yahin toh khoobi hain ki har ek mudde ko darshate hai aap.. I mean to say.. sirf thrill ya suspense tak hi lake update ko pesh nahi karte balki Har us fantasy aur dar ko bhi include karte hain jisse kahani flow lajawab bani rahti hai .. aur update ke ant mein jis tarah se kabhi thrill & suspense ko, to kabhi kuch emotions ko , to kabhi khushnuma ehsaas, to kabhi fantasy se judi kuch baato ko jaise final touch dete hai woh sach bemisaal hai...
Yahan Kayi fantasy based stories read ki hai sab ek se badhkar ek hai... lekin ye kahani unsab se hatakar hai... Agar kayi saal baad bhi koi reader aake aapki ye kahani padhe yehi kahenge ki "wah kahani ho to aisi" .... aapki ye kahani jo ek bahot hi arthpurn sikh de jaaye aur aise bhi mod hai sakth se sakth reader ko bhi kabhi bhavuk ho jaaye... to kabhi dar ka ek aalam cha jaaye.... to kabhi mann ko romanchit kar jaaye......
sukriya aapko... is sandaar kahani ko likhke us kahani ke ye amazing update humare samne pesh karne ke liye.. aur jis udasya se aapne is kahani likh rahe hai usme aap sarthak hote jaa rahe hai....
aise hi likhte rahiye aur aur apne manoram lekhni se hum readers ka manoranjan karte rahiye..

naye post kiye gaye Update sach mein bahot hi dilchasp aur dilkash tha..
Let's see what happens next..
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills harshit1890 sahab :yourock: :yourock: :yourock: :yourock:
 
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