Fantasy Kaisa Ye Ishq Hai ~ Ajab Sa Risk Hai ~ Reload (Completed)

[nain11ster]

Page 766 Se 775 tak har panne par update hai.

Final closing update on page:-792


Issi ke sath Ishq Risk reloaded ka ye season poora hua. Next fantasy journey announce ho jayegi. Ummid hai pahle

"Arymani:- The Pure Alfa Between Two World's."

Yahi aaye... Jo bhi hoga purv suchna mil jayegi... Fihlaal end enjoy karenge... Aur kahani ka poora safar kaisa rahega wo ek baar jaroor sajha karen...


Filhaal Abhi vyast hun ek pure romantic journey par....

<<<< Too Young !! Too Old >>>>​

Aap sab ka hai udhar. Kahani par pahunchne ke liye story title par ulgi karne ka...

<<<< Too Young !! Too Old >>>>​

 

[nain11ster]

Update:-52 ​

Flashback…..


Takriban 2 saal pahle. 2 grahon par ek lambe sajison ka daur khatm ho chuka tha. Zoren ke tatkal shasak Mahamahim ko ukhad fenka gaya tha. Wahin Nischal ke home planet Aizem par satta me rahne wale har uss naukarsah ko hata diya gaya tha, jinke ander samuday vises ki bhavna thi aur unhe lagta tha ki kewal Dakshat samuday hi sharv shresth samuday hai… Issi bhavna ke chalte wo dusre samuday par shosan aur unke khun bahane se bhi pichhe nahi hat'te the.


Issi ke sath yah baat bhi shuru ho chuki thi ki bhavishya me jaal mahal ek rachnatmak jagah se jyada, apne vidhwanshon ke liye na jaana jaye. Jaise ki purv me bhi ek prayogsala ka parinaam poora universe dekh chuki thi. 2 planet, Aaynek aur Massori puri tarah se tabaah ho gaye the.


Inhi sab baton ko dekhte huye, naa chahte huye bhi Nischal aur Serin ko, Jaal mahal ko poori tarah se dhwast karne ki baat par apni sahmati jatani pari. Lekin Jaal mahal ke jane ka gum bhi dono ko utna hi tha. Serin aur Nischal ander hi ander poori tarah se toot chuke the.


Ussi dauran Jivisha jaal mahal ke bhraman par nikli thi… Nayla, ke sath hansi mazak karti, Jivisha uss 600 kilometer me faile bade se prayogshala ko dekh rahi thi. Medical section aur kuchh suraksha taknik ko hifajat se dusre jagah le jaya ja raha tha…


Nayla:- Shashika aap mere sath aao, aapko yahan ke sabse kamal ki chij se milvati hun...


Jivisha:- Yadi kamaal nahi hua tou...


Nayla:- Yadi kamal nahi hua tou aap mujhe saja ke taur par prithvi bhej dena...


Jivisha:- Matlab wo jarra bhi kamal ka na hai... Bus mere sath time pass karne ki kosis ki ja rahi hai...


Nayla:- Aap bahut sochti hain... Chalo mere sath…


Jivisha:- Bahut waqt ho gaya hai Nayla, abhi chalte hain. Baki kal dekh lenge...


Nayla:- Oh ho chehre par milne ki tadap aur aankhon me mayusi… Kya hua !!! Humare Sahjade ki yaad sata rahi...


Jivisha apna chhota sa muh banati.… "Mujhse Nischal aur Serin ka dard dekha nahi ja raha… Jaal mahal me jaise dono bhai-bahan ke pran baste ho."


Nayla gahri shwans chhodti.… "Unki maa ki yaden basi hai iss jagah me... Unka pura bachpan basa hua hai... Wahi to kamal dikhana chahti thi... Dono bhai-bahan khud se bhi kabhi iska jikr nahi karte… yahan kewal main aur Lobhu hi aise hai jo ye baat jante hain...


Jivisha, sawaliya najron se.… "Kaun si baat"


Nayla, bina kuch bole Jivisha ka hath khinchti usse apne sath le'kar jaal mahal ke sabse surakshit jagah me ghusi thi… Yahin tha Jaal Mahal ka master mind "Central Autonomus body".. aaj ka Alexa...


Ek chhota sa bluish half ball, lagbhag 4 inch ke ridius wala, kisi 3 by 1 meter ke ragtangle kale surface ke upar rakha hua tha… Kayi sare complex wiring aur kayi tarah ke multiple microchip ke sath juda hua tha... Jivisha jaise hi uss kamre me ghusi wahan charo ore ki raushni aise jag-mag, jag-mag karne lagi mano Jivisha ka swagat kar rahi ho...


Nayla:- Super Master, kabhi mera to aisa swagat nahi kiye...


Central Body:- Tumhe kaha tha uss gadhe Nischal ke chakkar me mat paro... Uss Lobhu ke sath jodi mat banao... Mera ek bhi kaha maani thi… Jo tumhara swagat karun...


Jivisha:- Oye budhe computer ji, khabardar jo mere Nischal ko gadha kahe tou... Achha nahi hoga...


Central Body:- Maaf karna main tou bhul hi gaya yahan kaun aayi hai... Maaf karna, muh se nikal gaya...


Jivisha jor jor se hansti hui… "Aap bhulte bhi hain"…


Central Body:- Haan bilkul bhulta hun… isliye tou sabhi yaden system me save kar leta hun...


Jivish, thodi sanjida hoti... "Kya wakai yahan yaden sanjoi hui hai"…


Central Body:- Haan bilkul…


Jivisha:- Kya un yadon ko aap dikha sakte ho...


Central Body.… Mujhse jud jaeye, main sab dikha dunga...


Jivisha muskurati hui ek puri wire ka sangrah apne dimag ke kinare se chipka lee… Jivisha jab wo pura device aur wire apne sar se connect kar rahi thi, hans rahi thi... Jivisha ke chehre par aayi hansi ko dekh'kar Nayla puchhe bina rah nahi payi...


Jivisha:- Ye wahi connection hai jise Nischal apne sar me laga'kar, Earth se Aizem par contact karta tha aur hum usse pagal samjhte the... Aisa karte sab se jyada to Nandu ne usse dekha tha... Nandu mujhse aksar iss prakar ke ajib wiring ke bare me batati thi...


Nayla:- Haan main janti hun. Prithvi par dono sath rahte the na…


Jivisha:- Sath matlab… Adbhut... Dono ka sath hona hi mind blasting tha. Main unhe 2 nahi balki ek unit hi samjhhti hun…


Nayla:- Shashika to kya Nischal aur Nandni bhi prem karte hain..


Jivisha uski baat par hansti hui.…. "Haan dono bahut jyada prem karte hain… yah ek anokha prem hai Nayla, jise sirf mehsus kar skati ho.… Isse main tumhe bata nahi sakti... Kyonki na to unke bich kisi premi-premika ka prem hai. Na hi kisi ristedari ka prem hai. Dost to Nandni ki mai hun... Nischal aur Nandni to dost se badhkar hai... Un dono ke bare me baat karne baith gayi na to Central Body sir bhi pareshan ho jayenge…


Nayla:- Fir bhi dono ke bich itna prem dekh'kar aapko kabhi irshya nahi hui...


Jivisha:- Pagal ho kya? Wo main hi to thi jo din raat bhagwan ke samne, ek hi khwaish to maangi thi..


Nayla:- Kya Shashika...


Jivisha:- "Yahi ki mere sapno ka Sahjada jo bhi ho, usse bhi Nandni se utna hi lagaav ho jitna mujhe hai... Warna shadi ke baad ladki apne sabhi dost ko kho deti hai... Kabhi meri maa ke dost rahe honge.. kabhi meri bhabhi ke dost rahe honge.… Lekin shadi ke baad pati hi sari duniya rah gayi aur pati ka pariwar unka pariwar"...

"Fir un logon ke pass koi option bhi nahi hota... Shasural ke hi kisi family frined ya pados ki koi lady ke sath naye sampark se dosti shuru ho jati hai. Lekin unme fir wo maza kahan, jo khud ke niji swatantrta se bana dost tha... Isliye meri zindgi me jab se Nandu aayi, tab se to laga ki kahan main shadi kar rahi. Fir mera parivar aur meri dost paraye ho jayege"...


Nayla:- Bus shashika... Itne bhavnao ke sath mat bola karo, dil me bechaini si hoti hai ki mera aisa koi dost kyon nahi… Waise aapne to apne hisab se soch liya, lekin kya Nandni ka pati nahi hoga...


Jivisha:- Nandni ne bhi bhagwan se wahi sab maanga hai, jo maine maanga tha... Tabhi to Ansh jiju usse mile... Unke jaisi soch yadi har pati ki hoti, fir to meri ye soch hi nahi aati ki shadi ke baad meri dost pichhe chhut jayegi...


Central Body:- Main intzar me hun... Aapki baten samapt hui ho to...


Nayla aur Jivisha uski baat sun'kar hasne lagi. Nayla ne khud se poora system connect karti... "Yahan se, kisi se sampark karna, sabse secure chhanel hai... Fir unki baat koi nahi sun sakta aur iss system ki xforum-comminication frequency to "Far Universe" se bhi kaam karti hai"…


Jivisha:- Oh, isliye Nischal aur Serin yahan se baat karte the...


Nayla:- Galat... Ye Central Body bahut akdu hai… un dono ke alawa kisi ko baat nahi karne deta... Yahin aakar wo dono ghanton apni maa ki yaad ko dekha karte the…


Jivisha:- Connect ho gaya kya??? Main bhi apni dono sasu maa se mil lun...


"Haan connect ho gaya hai. Aap aaram se chair par baith jaeye"…. Nayla sab kuch ok ka signal di... Jivisha aaram se aankhen mud'kar baith gayi... Dimag ke ander "changggg-ghannnnn" jaisi awaj aane lagi jo Jivisha ko ek gahri nidra ke ore le jane lagi. Aankh bojhil hokar bilkul band. Dimag bilkul blank… aur kuchh hi der baad dimag ke ander, multicolored ultra HD video with highly digital Dolby sound ke sath play hone laga…


Jivisha soyi hui thi lekin chehre ki bhavnayen lagatar badalti rahi… kabhi shant to kabhi muskurana... Chehre par kabhi khili si hansi to kabhi aankhon me nami... Chehre par gussa, to kabhi utni hi nafrat bhi...


Jivisha ke aankhon ke samne uss daur ka poora itihas tha, jab waqt tha Vish-Nilayni ka. Jivisha kisi aur ki yadon me nahi, balki Guru Vashudhar ki yadon me thi... Jise technology ke jariye sameta tha Nischal ke, par par par.….. par dada Duwitiya Viggo Sigma Kyos ne... Aur jab Kyos ka bura daur shuru hua tab apni patni ko Viggo viman ke sath iss complex rachna "Autonomous Body" ke sath Aizem bhej diya...


Jaal mahal nirman ke waqt, Nischal ki maa ne puri sanrachna ka brain, "Autonomus Body" ko banaya tha, isliye isse "Central Autonomus Body" kaha jata raha.… Jaal mahal ka nirman Nischal ki maa ne hi ki thi, jisme Serin ki maa ne bhi aham bhumika nibhayi thi… isliye un dono ki puri Yaden… Nischal aur Serin ke janm ki tasveeren, unka wo bachpan jo dono ko yaad nahi, sabhi iss jagah par sangrahit the... ...


Dwitiya Viggo Sigma Kyos ne jab Guru Vashudhar ke achet sharir ko dekha tha, tab manviya bhavna ke tahat apne scientist se unke sharir ko bachaya tha. Wo log Vish-Nilayani aur Guru Vashudhar ke sharir ko to chid-fad'kar fekne wale the, usse sanrakshit kiya Kyos ne...


Kyos in dono ke sanrakshit sharir ko ghanto baith kar dekhta. Dono ki kahani usse pata thi aur kewal ek hi baat dimag me ghumti.… "Aakhir ek sanyasi kya bachane ke liye khud ko ek mirt mann ke jaal me fasaya hoga"...


Yah sawal itna vichlit karne wala tha jiska javab to kewal Guru Vashudhar jagne ke baad hi de sakte the... Unhi sawalon ko sochte huye, Kyos ke mann me khyal aaya ki kyon na unki yadon ko sanrakshit kiya jaye... Wo na bhi uth sake to kam se kam wo sandesh to chhod hi sakte hai, jis wajah se unhone lagbhag khud ko mrit kar liya...


Ek sakaratmak soch ke sath, Kyos ne dimag ki yaad sangrah karne ke irade se ek artificial brain ka nirman shuru kiya... Ye bade se brain ki hu-bahu copy thi... Maksad sirf aur sirf brain ki yaden leni thi… Gupt roop se lagbhag 22 saal ki kadi mehnat ke baad artificial brain develope kiya gaya tha...


Kyos ne xforum-comminication ke circuit par ek complex nirman kiya tha. Artificial brain banane ke baad, pahle ek bade se board se joda gaya. Ye complete hard disc board tha jiski capacity lagbhag infinite rakhi gayi thi. Kyonki dimag ki yaden pata na kitna space le...


Kamal ki technology. Jab ye puri tarah se ban'kar taiyar hui thi, tab Kyos ne pahla test apne brain ka kiya tha... Apni kuch yaden daal'kar dekha, prayog purn safal raha. Itne lambe arse baad usse safalta haat lagi thi... Kyos ke khushi ka koi thikana nahi tha...


Safal parikashn ke baad Kyos ne poore nirman ko hard metel ke bich dala... Upar aur niche ka aisa cover, jise arbon varshon tak bhu-tal me dalne ke baad bhi galaya nahi ja sakta tha... Sabse thande jagah par jama kar, usse toda nahi ja sakta tha... Cover ke upar fire proof metal chadhaya gaya... Taki ander ke cover ko certain heat ke baad melt nahi kiya ja sake...


Fire proof ke liye ek kamal ki dhatu istamaal ki gayi thi, jo "ek suraj" ke pass wale Huriyant planet par milta tha. Wo dhatu dikhne me chandi jaisa aur failne me bhi ussi ki tarah tha... Uske patle ek parat ko kisi bhi aakar me bitha do... Aur usme lipta kisi bhi vastu ko suraj ke gole par kyon na fenka jaye... Heat se melt nahi ho sakta...


Mahan Teknik, umda surakha aur fir finally artificial brain ko, Guru Vashudhar aur Vish-Nilayani ke dimag se connect kar diya gaya... Lagbhag 146 din lag gaye the un yadon ko sametne me... Lekin Kyos ko kya pata tha yadon ko sangrahit karne ke dauran Guru Vashudhar ka aanshik kalpnik sharir uss artificial dimag me aa jayega...


Ye kamal technology ka nahi tha, balki Guru Vashudhar ka tha. Yun tou Guru Vashudhar ek mirt mashtisk me fanse huye the, kintu wahan unke kalpnik sharir me kayi sare kshmtayen swatah hi hasil ho gayi thi... Vish-Nilayani ke mirt sharir ke 50 meter ke dayre me aane wale har mashtishk ko Guru Vashudhar padh sakte the... Apne kalpnik sharir ko kayi hisson me bant'kar wo mirt mashtisk ke kayi hisson me khoj kar sakte the... Lekin mrit mahstisk ke bhrm jaal ko akele Guru Vashudhar nahi tod sakte the...


Dimag ki yaden jab sameti ja rahi thi, tab Kyos ko bhi pata nahi tha ki Guru Vashudhar ki poori yaad to unke kalpnik sharir ke sath, Vish-Nilayani ke dimag me uljhha hai... Unhi uljhe taar se jab Artificial brain technology ka sampark hua, tab Guru Vashudhar ne apne kalpnik sharir ki aanshik bhag uss artificial brain me jane diya, taki unki yadon ko koi bhi unki marji ke bina dekh na sake...


Ab jab Guru Vashudhar ki aanshik dimag uske ander aaya, fir uss gupt sthan me 22 sal salon tak ki hui sari ghatnayen kaid ho gayi… Kyos ki puri soch... Gahan sodh ke bich unke kushal patni ka kaam me madad karna... Unki hat'kheliyan, Kyos ki patni ki bhavnayen jab uske pati mahino bahar rahte.


In dono ke alawa yahan bahut se scientist bhi aaya karte the. Kuch achhe the to bahut sare ahankari Viggo scientist… unme se tou kayi sajiskarta bhi the..... Jab yaden sameti ja rahi thi tab un yadon ke sath wahan aaye har scientist ka dimag, Guru Vashudhar ke yaad ke roop me kaid ho chuki thi.


146 din ke baad jab Kyos aur uski patni dono poore utsah ke sath, uss gupt bhavan me pahunche. Sabhi tarah ke connection karne ke baad, dono jaise hi yadon me ghuse... Kyos aur uski patni ke liye chaukane wale tathya samne aaya, jisme pahle to Guru Vashudhar ne, unhe un yadon me jhakne se rok diya jinka vasta Kyos athva uski patni se nahi tha… fir aage Guru Vashudhar ne Kyos aur uski patni ko un yadon ki gahrai me le gaye jo unke kaam ki thi.…


Ye Kyos ke hi safal experiment ka kamal tha ki 22 sal ke lambe daur ke bich, kayi sare scientist ke dimag ki yaden, unke dwara sochi gayi theory... Experiment process aur science ke vibhinn vishyon ka concept "Central Autonomus Body" ke pass thi... Aur uss pure system ko koi machine nahi balki ek kalpnik dimag control kar raha tha, jo apni marji ke anusar kisi se yaden sajha kar bhi sakta tha ya bilkul bhi nahi... Haan lekin yaden sajha karne ka ek hi niyam tha... "Jo jiske kaam ki yaden hongi, bus utna hi dikhaya jayega"…

 

[The king]

Geeta ka ek slok hai "Neti Neti" ... Arthat na idhar ki socho na udhar ki socho... Sab bhulte huye aage badho... Main bhi yahi kar raha hun... Aap dono bhi yahi kar sakte hain

Prnam gurudev

 

[ragish7357]

wah behatrin update bro
to ab jivisa guru vasudhar ki yado m ja rhi h
wese alexa iss trh se to guru vasudhar ka hi kalpnik rup hua jo unke hisab se hi processing krta h

 

[nain11ster]

aapke nazariye se shayad aap imagine karte ho.. shayad isliye sirf aur sirf apsyu chahta ban baitha.. wo aapke liye mahaz ek kirdaar na ho aur baaki ke bhanvar wale kirdaar bhi
aur rahi baat imli ki uske liye to aapka pyar umarta hi rahta hai

aur meri nazar mein ek story ka kirdaar... jo bas kisi guru ke paas jaake thodi bahot martial arts, yoga boga, jadi butiyo ki jaankari rakhne wala jo na sirf apni hi kahani mein boss ban baitha.. even ab dusre kirdaaro ke kahani mein boss ban baitha hai.. ye baat hazam karu bhi to kaise..
aur ab baat favorite story ki favorite kirdaaro ki hi hai to aise revo na deke kya main us apsyu ki gun gaan gau... ya us apsyu ke prati pyaar dikhane wali jiviya (ex favorite character) ki gun gaan gau ...

dono baaton milaiye mat...

Jaributi bhanavr me de ya ki ishq risk par .. karega ilaj hi... Aur aap je kaun sa natak kare ho meri fav story hai isliye wo yahan aaya main kya Aarti kaa thal lekar swagat karun ... Re na kare ... Jab bhanavr me apne story par tha tab kya kiye... Tab kaun sa wo dusri story par tha..
100 encounter ke charecter ne key bigad dala tha ...

Justify to aise kar rahi jaise baki jagah sahad tapka ke aayi hain... Simple baat... Story me ka hua gaya bhar me... Chalo bahari duniya ka ki badas yahan ke msoom charecter ko gali dekar nikal lo... So u did this... Don't give me the reason ki ye yahan hain to isliye falana hua... I hate liers and excuses... Mind it

jivisha priya ji aur himanshu saheb ki beti nahi hai kya.. unki ghar ki izzat nahi hai kya..
jivisha ko kisne uthake le gaya tha... ye na kahiyega ki uski bhi manjuri thi..
jivisha is baat anjan thi ki wo kisi ki patni hai.. lekin apsyu nahi... phir bhi le gaya...

Na Apasyu gode me uthaya tha kya... Aur jab main manjuri ki baat nahi kah sakta to aap ko kya phone aa gaya tha Himanshu aur Priya ka kya... Ki uski beti ko... Ghar ki izzat ko Apasyu utha le gaya... Na boliye madam kidhar aaya tha ye baat..

Maine manjuri ki baat na ki ... Ab jarra mujhe bhi Priya aur Himanshu ke bare me bata hi dijiye... Na bata payengi aur jawab me fir kisi dusre charecter ko lekar sawal hoga... Kyonki aapko bji pata hai.....

Khisyani billi khamba noche... Maine ek khamba hata diya to ab dusra khamba pakar kar nochiyega... Yahi kar sakti hai...

Jaeye madam 4 chammach vodka pi kar neti neti ka path kijiye ... Smile plzzz

 

[11 ster fan]

Are Mai itna pareshan na hu bas thoda bura laga tha but it's ok...aur abhi Mai review aur comments nhi kar sakta kyoki Mai mahashivratri ke liye Ghar aaya hu aur kal subah ko train pakada tha aaj dopahar ko Ghar pahucha isliye Maine kah Diya ki xf se 2 din ki duri but lagata hai 7-8 din Tak xf nhi khol paunga kyoki ye site adultary hai aur koi Ghar Wala dekhega to kahega ki job lagate hi bigad gaya wo thodi dekhenge ki yaha kafi achchhe writers ki story hai wo to bas shadi karwane pe tul jayenge

 

[SANJU ( V. R. )]

Kahe kahe kahe Sanju bhai... Kahe khun jala rahe hain... Sawan ke andhe hain hara hi najar aayega... They can proof ki Harry potter me chacha chaudhary hai... Issi ka dimag laga hai harry potter me... Kuch na bigad loge aap .. ap hum... Chill kijiye aur kahani par dhyan den... Revoo band kahe kar diye waise...

रेभो पहले भी कम ही देते आया हूं नैन भाई ! मुझे समझ में नहीं आता कि प्रत्येक अपडेट पर रेभो में क्या लिखूं ! ऐसा सभी कहानियों पर करते आया हूं । शुरुआत से ही यही है ।
दो चार अपडेट्स के बाद ही रेभो करता हूं। हफ्ते में सिर्फ सात आठ रेभो कर पाता हूं और वो भी जो कहानियां पढ़ रहा हूं उस पर ।
दिन में ज्यादा समय मिलता नहीं और रात में कोई कहानी पढ़ता नहीं । रात में बस राइटर्स के थ्रीड पर घुम फिर कर ही आ जाता हूं ।

आज अंकिता जी भी यही सवाल कर रही थी पर क्या करूं ! मुझसे प्रत्येक अपडेट पर रेभो देना बड़ा ही कठीन लगता है ।

वैसे आप के फैंस फोलोवर पर आपको गर्व करना चाहिए । वो आपसे हर बात शेयर करते हैं और कभी प्यार करते हैं तो कभी झगड़ा भी कर लेते हैं ।

कहानी एक राइटर की परिकल्पना होती है । वो अपने हिसाब से कहानी के ताने-बाने को बुनता है । कहानी में राइटर की रूह बसी हुई होती है इसीलिए वह कहानी सक्सेस होती है । लेकिन यदि कहानी में क्या हो ? क्या न हो ? इसपर रीडर्स का हस्तक्षेप होने लगे तो उस कहानी की आत्मा मर जाती है ।

मेरा मानना है कि रीडर्स अपने विचार स्टोरी पर रखें न कि स्टोरी के स्क्रिप्ट बदलने के लिए ।

सुरेंद्र मोहन पाठक के नवीनतम विमल सीरीज उपन्यास में विमल की पत्नी ' नीलम ' को जान से मार दिया गया । हिंदुस्तान के सारे प्रशंसकों ने पाठक जी को भर पेट गाली दिया ।
बड़ी मुश्किल से पाठक जी ने अपने प्रशंसकों को शांत किया ।

ऐसा होता है नैन भाई । आपके प्रशंसकों को नाराज होने का हक है पर वो आपके उपर है कि कैसे सब का साथ , सबका विश्वास पाने में सफल होते हैं ।

 

[nain11ster]

wese alexa iss trh se to guru vasudhar ka hi kalpnik rup hua

Ye to jhalki hai ragish bhai... Aage 54 tak pahunchne dijye...

 

[nain11ster]

रेभो पहले भी कम ही देते आया हूं नैन भाई ! मुझे समझ में नहीं आता कि प्रत्येक अपडेट पर रेभो में क्या लिखूं ! ऐसा सभी कहानियों पर करते आया हूं । शुरुआत से ही यही है ।
दो चार अपडेट्स के बाद ही रेभो करता हूं। हफ्ते में सिर्फ सात आठ रेभो कर पाता हूं और वो भी जो कहानियां पढ़ रहा हूं उस पर ।
दिन में ज्यादा समय मिलता नहीं और रात में कोई कहानी पढ़ता नहीं । रात में बस राइटर्स के थ्रीड पर घुम फिर कर ही आ जाता हूं ।

आज अंकिता जी भी यही सवाल कर रही थी पर क्या करूं ! मुझसे प्रत्येक अपडेट पर रेभो देना बड़ा ही कठीन लगता है ।

वैसे आप के फैंस फोलोवर पर आपको गर्व करना चाहिए । वो आपसे हर बात शेयर करते हैं और कभी प्यार करते हैं तो कभी झगड़ा भी कर लेते हैं ।

कहानी एक राइटर की परिकल्पना होती है । वो अपने हिसाब से कहानी के ताने-बाने को बुनता है । कहानी में राइटर की रूह बसी हुई होती है इसीलिए वह कहानी सक्सेस होती है । लेकिन यदि कहानी में क्या हो ? क्या न हो ? इसपर रीडर्स का हस्तक्षेप होने लगे तो उस कहानी की आत्मा मर जाती है ।

मेरा मानना है कि रीडर्स अपने विचार स्टोरी पर रखें न कि स्टोरी के स्क्रिप्ट बदलने के लिए ।

सुरेंद्र मोहन पाठक के नवीनतम विमल सीरीज उपन्यास में विमल की पत्नी ' नीलम ' को जान से मार दिया गया । हिंदुस्तान के सारे प्रशंसकों ने पाठक जी को भर पेट गाली दिया ।
बड़ी मुश्किल से पाठक जी ने अपने प्रशंसकों को शांत किया ।

ऐसा होता है नैन भाई । आपके प्रशंसकों को नाराज होने का हक है पर वो आपके उपर है कि कैसे सब का साथ , सबका विश्वास पाने में सफल होते हैं ।

Main to aapko 4-5 update baad hi toka hai Sanju bhai... Aapne 48 tak ka bhi reply na diya hai... Abhi main 52 par hun

I always respect my reders feeling ... Unhi ki wajah se to likhta hun... Wrna itna dedicated kyon rahta likhne ke liye... I always love my readers ... Bus mujhe nuksan uthana parta hai iss baat ka ki log kahte hai main bada writer hun ... Toofan hun .. bawander hun... Aur fir ya to kahani par hi aane se katrate hain ya aate hain to comment maar kar nahi jate...

The same situation happen with SGP bhai and Harshit bhai... Pata nahi kyon inke itne achhe story ko open karke 4-5 update bhi nahi dekhte.. open karne se hi katrate hain ... Aur kuchh jo silent padhte hain wo himmat na juta pate ki comment kya karen ... Badi duvidha hai Sanju bhai ...

Khair narajgi aur nok jhonk to chalte rahti hai.... It's part of enjoyment

 

[aman rathore]

Update:-52 ​

Flashback…..


Takriban 2 saal pahle. 2 grahon par ek lambe sajison ka daur khatm ho chuka tha. Zoren ke tatkal shasak Mahamahim ko ukhad fenka gaya tha. Wahin Nischal ke home planet Aizem par satta me rahne wale har uss naukarsah ko hata diya gaya tha, jinke ander samuday vises ki bhavna thi aur unhe lagta tha ki kewal Dakshat samuday hi sharv shresth samuday hai… Issi bhavna ke chalte wo dusre samuday par shosan aur unke khun bahane se bhi pichhe nahi hat'te the.


Issi ke sath yah baat bhi shuru ho chuki thi ki bhavishya me jaal mahal ek rachnatmak jagah se jyada, apne vidhwanshon ke liye na jaana jaye. Jaise ki purv me bhi ek prayogsala ka parinaam poora universe dekh chuki thi. 2 planet, Aaynek aur Massori puri tarah se tabaah ho gaye the.


Inhi sab baton ko dekhte huye, naa chahte huye bhi Nischal aur Serin ko, Jaal mahal ko poori tarah se dhwast karne ki baat par apni sahmati jatani pari. Lekin Jaal mahal ke jane ka gum bhi dono ko utna hi tha. Serin aur Nischal ander hi ander poori tarah se toot chuke the.


Ussi dauran Jivisha jaal mahal ke bhraman par nikli thi… Nayla, ke sath hansi mazak karti, Jivisha uss 600 kilometer me faile bade se prayogshala ko dekh rahi thi. Medical section aur kuchh suraksha taknik ko hifajat se dusre jagah le jaya ja raha tha…


Nayla:- Shashika aap mere sath aao, aapko yahan ke sabse kamal ki chij se milvati hun...


Jivisha:- Yadi kamaal nahi hua tou...


Nayla:- Yadi kamal nahi hua tou aap mujhe saja ke taur par prithvi bhej dena...


Jivisha:- Matlab wo jarra bhi kamal ka na hai... Bus mere sath time pass karne ki kosis ki ja rahi hai...


Nayla:- Aap bahut sochti hain... Chalo mere sath…


Jivisha:- Bahut waqt ho gaya hai Nayla, abhi chalte hain. Baki kal dekh lenge...


Nayla:- Oh ho chehre par milne ki tadap aur aankhon me mayusi… Kya hua !!! Humare Sahjade ki yaad sata rahi...


Jivisha apna chhota sa muh banati.… "Mujhse Nischal aur Serin ka dard dekha nahi ja raha… Jaal mahal me jaise dono bhai-bahan ke pran baste ho."


Nayla gahri shwans chhodti.… "Unki maa ki yaden basi hai iss jagah me... Unka pura bachpan basa hua hai... Wahi to kamal dikhana chahti thi... Dono bhai-bahan khud se bhi kabhi iska jikr nahi karte… yahan kewal main aur Lobhu hi aise hai jo ye baat jante hain...


Jivisha, sawaliya najron se.… "Kaun si baat"


Nayla, bina kuch bole Jivisha ka hath khinchti usse apne sath le'kar jaal mahal ke sabse surakshit jagah me ghusi thi… Yahin tha Jaal Mahal ka master mind "Central Autonomus body".. aaj ka Alexa...


Ek chhota sa bluish half ball, lagbhag 4 inch ke ridius wala, kisi 3 by 1 meter ke ragtangle kale surface ke upar rakha hua tha… Kayi sare complex wiring aur kayi tarah ke multiple microchip ke sath juda hua tha... Jivisha jaise hi uss kamre me ghusi wahan charo ore ki raushni aise jag-mag, jag-mag karne lagi mano Jivisha ka swagat kar rahi ho...


Nayla:- Super Master, kabhi mera to aisa swagat nahi kiye...


Central Body:- Tumhe kaha tha uss gadhe Nischal ke chakkar me mat paro... Uss Lobhu ke sath jodi mat banao... Mera ek bhi kaha maani thi… Jo tumhara swagat karun...


Jivisha:- Oye budhe computer ji, khabardar jo mere Nischal ko gadha kahe tou... Achha nahi hoga...


Central Body:- Maaf karna main tou bhul hi gaya yahan kaun aayi hai... Maaf karna, muh se nikal gaya...


Jivisha jor jor se hansti hui… "Aap bhulte bhi hain"…


Central Body:- Haan bilkul bhulta hun… isliye tou sabhi yaden system me save kar leta hun...


Jivish, thodi sanjida hoti... "Kya wakai yahan yaden sanjoi hui hai"…


Central Body:- Haan bilkul…


Jivisha:- Kya un yadon ko aap dikha sakte ho...


Central Body.… Mujhse jud jaeye, main sab dikha dunga...


Jivisha muskurati hui ek puri wire ka sangrah apne dimag ke kinare se chipka lee… Jivisha jab wo pura device aur wire apne sar se connect kar rahi thi, hans rahi thi... Jivisha ke chehre par aayi hansi ko dekh'kar Nayla puchhe bina rah nahi payi...


Jivisha:- Ye wahi connection hai jise Nischal apne sar me laga'kar, Earth se Aizem par contact karta tha aur hum usse pagal samjhte the... Aisa karte sab se jyada to Nandu ne usse dekha tha... Nandu mujhse aksar iss prakar ke ajib wiring ke bare me batati thi...


Nayla:- Haan main janti hun. Prithvi par dono sath rahte the na…


Jivisha:- Sath matlab… Adbhut... Dono ka sath hona hi mind blasting tha. Main unhe 2 nahi balki ek unit hi samjhhti hun…


Nayla:- Shashika to kya Nischal aur Nandni bhi prem karte hain..


Jivisha uski baat par hansti hui.…. "Haan dono bahut jyada prem karte hain… yah ek anokha prem hai Nayla, jise sirf mehsus kar skati ho.… Isse main tumhe bata nahi sakti... Kyonki na to unke bich kisi premi-premika ka prem hai. Na hi kisi ristedari ka prem hai. Dost to Nandni ki mai hun... Nischal aur Nandni to dost se badhkar hai... Un dono ke bare me baat karne baith gayi na to Central Body sir bhi pareshan ho jayenge…


Nayla:- Fir bhi dono ke bich itna prem dekh'kar aapko kabhi irshya nahi hui...


Jivisha:- Pagal ho kya? Wo main hi to thi jo din raat bhagwan ke samne, ek hi khwaish to maangi thi..


Nayla:- Kya Shashika...


Jivisha:- "Yahi ki mere sapno ka Sahjada jo bhi ho, usse bhi Nandni se utna hi lagaav ho jitna mujhe hai... Warna shadi ke baad ladki apne sabhi dost ko kho deti hai... Kabhi meri maa ke dost rahe honge.. kabhi meri bhabhi ke dost rahe honge.… Lekin shadi ke baad pati hi sari duniya rah gayi aur pati ka pariwar unka pariwar"...

"Fir un logon ke pass koi option bhi nahi hota... Shasural ke hi kisi family frined ya pados ki koi lady ke sath naye sampark se dosti shuru ho jati hai. Lekin unme fir wo maza kahan, jo khud ke niji swatantrta se bana dost tha... Isliye meri zindgi me jab se Nandu aayi, tab se to laga ki kahan main shadi kar rahi. Fir mera parivar aur meri dost paraye ho jayege"...


Nayla:- Bus shashika... Itne bhavnao ke sath mat bola karo, dil me bechaini si hoti hai ki mera aisa koi dost kyon nahi… Waise aapne to apne hisab se soch liya, lekin kya Nandni ka pati nahi hoga...


Jivisha:- Nandni ne bhi bhagwan se wahi sab maanga hai, jo maine maanga tha... Tabhi to Ansh jiju usse mile... Unke jaisi soch yadi har pati ki hoti, fir to meri ye soch hi nahi aati ki shadi ke baad meri dost pichhe chhut jayegi...


Central Body:- Main intzar me hun... Aapki baten samapt hui ho to...


Nayla aur Jivisha uski baat sun'kar hasne lagi. Nayla ne khud se poora system connect karti... "Yahan se, kisi se sampark karna, sabse secure chhanel hai... Fir unki baat koi nahi sun sakta aur iss system ki xforum-comminication frequency to "Far Universe" se bhi kaam karti hai"…


Jivisha:- Oh, isliye Nischal aur Serin yahan se baat karte the...


Nayla:- Galat... Ye Central Body bahut akdu hai… un dono ke alawa kisi ko baat nahi karne deta... Yahin aakar wo dono ghanton apni maa ki yaad ko dekha karte the…


Jivisha:- Connect ho gaya kya??? Main bhi apni dono sasu maa se mil lun...


"Haan connect ho gaya hai. Aap aaram se chair par baith jaeye"…. Nayla sab kuch ok ka signal di... Jivisha aaram se aankhen mud'kar baith gayi... Dimag ke ander "changggg-ghannnnn" jaisi awaj aane lagi jo Jivisha ko ek gahri nidra ke ore le jane lagi. Aankh bojhil hokar bilkul band. Dimag bilkul blank… aur kuchh hi der baad dimag ke ander, multicolored ultra HD video with highly digital Dolby sound ke sath play hone laga…


Jivisha soyi hui thi lekin chehre ki bhavnayen lagatar badalti rahi… kabhi shant to kabhi muskurana... Chehre par kabhi khili si hansi to kabhi aankhon me nami... Chehre par gussa, to kabhi utni hi nafrat bhi...


Jivisha ke aankhon ke samne uss daur ka poora itihas tha, jab waqt tha Vish-Nilayni ka. Jivisha kisi aur ki yadon me nahi, balki Guru Vashudhar ki yadon me thi... Jise technology ke jariye sameta tha Nischal ke, par par par.….. par dada Duwitiya Viggo Sigma Kyos ne... Aur jab Kyos ka bura daur shuru hua tab apni patni ko Viggo viman ke sath iss complex rachna "Autonomous Body" ke sath Aizem bhej diya...


Jaal mahal nirman ke waqt, Nischal ki maa ne puri sanrachna ka brain, "Autonomus Body" ko banaya tha, isliye isse "Central Autonomus Body" kaha jata raha.… Jaal mahal ka nirman Nischal ki maa ne hi ki thi, jisme Serin ki maa ne bhi aham bhumika nibhayi thi… isliye un dono ki puri Yaden… Nischal aur Serin ke janm ki tasveeren, unka wo bachpan jo dono ko yaad nahi, sabhi iss jagah par sangrahit the... ...


Dwitiya Viggo Sigma Kyos ne jab Guru Vashudhar ke achet sharir ko dekha tha, tab manviya bhavna ke tahat apne scientist se unke sharir ko bachaya tha. Wo log Vish-Nilayani aur Guru Vashudhar ke sharir ko to chid-fad'kar fekne wale the, usse sanrakshit kiya Kyos ne...


Kyos in dono ke sanrakshit sharir ko ghanto baith kar dekhta. Dono ki kahani usse pata thi aur kewal ek hi baat dimag me ghumti.… "Aakhir ek sanyasi kya bachane ke liye khud ko ek mirt mann ke jaal me fasaya hoga"...


Yah sawal itna vichlit karne wala tha jiska javab to kewal Guru Vashudhar jagne ke baad hi de sakte the... Unhi sawalon ko sochte huye, Kyos ke mann me khyal aaya ki kyon na unki yadon ko sanrakshit kiya jaye... Wo na bhi uth sake to kam se kam wo sandesh to chhod hi sakte hai, jis wajah se unhone lagbhag khud ko mrit kar liya...


Ek sakaratmak soch ke sath, Kyos ne dimag ki yaad sangrah karne ke irade se ek artificial brain ka nirman shuru kiya... Ye bade se brain ki hu-bahu copy thi... Maksad sirf aur sirf brain ki yaden leni thi… Gupt roop se lagbhag 22 saal ki kadi mehnat ke baad artificial brain develope kiya gaya tha...


Kyos ne xforum-comminication ke circuit par ek complex nirman kiya tha. Artificial brain banane ke baad, pahle ek bade se board se joda gaya. Ye complete hard disc board tha jiski capacity lagbhag infinite rakhi gayi thi. Kyonki dimag ki yaden pata na kitna space le...


Kamal ki technology. Jab ye puri tarah se ban'kar taiyar hui thi, tab Kyos ne pahla test apne brain ka kiya tha... Apni kuch yaden daal'kar dekha, prayog purn safal raha. Itne lambe arse baad usse safalta haat lagi thi... Kyos ke khushi ka koi thikana nahi tha...


Safal parikashn ke baad Kyos ne poore nirman ko hard metel ke bich dala... Upar aur niche ka aisa cover, jise arbon varshon tak bhu-tal me dalne ke baad bhi galaya nahi ja sakta tha... Sabse thande jagah par jama kar, usse toda nahi ja sakta tha... Cover ke upar fire proof metal chadhaya gaya... Taki ander ke cover ko certain heat ke baad melt nahi kiya ja sake...


Fire proof ke liye ek kamal ki dhatu istamaal ki gayi thi, jo "ek suraj" ke pass wale Huriyant planet par milta tha. Wo dhatu dikhne me chandi jaisa aur failne me bhi ussi ki tarah tha... Uske patle ek parat ko kisi bhi aakar me bitha do... Aur usme lipta kisi bhi vastu ko suraj ke gole par kyon na fenka jaye... Heat se melt nahi ho sakta...


Mahan Teknik, umda surakha aur fir finally artificial brain ko, Guru Vashudhar aur Vish-Nilayani ke dimag se connect kar diya gaya... Lagbhag 146 din lag gaye the un yadon ko sametne me... Lekin Kyos ko kya pata tha yadon ko sangrahit karne ke dauran Guru Vashudhar ka aanshik kalpnik sharir uss artificial dimag me aa jayega...


Ye kamal technology ka nahi tha, balki Guru Vashudhar ka tha. Yun tou Guru Vashudhar ek mirt mashtisk me fanse huye the, kintu wahan unke kalpnik sharir me kayi sare kshmtayen swatah hi hasil ho gayi thi... Vish-Nilayani ke mirt sharir ke 50 meter ke dayre me aane wale har mashtishk ko Guru Vashudhar padh sakte the... Apne kalpnik sharir ko kayi hisson me bant'kar wo mirt mashtisk ke kayi hisson me khoj kar sakte the... Lekin mrit mahstisk ke bhrm jaal ko akele Guru Vashudhar nahi tod sakte the...


Dimag ki yaden jab sameti ja rahi thi, tab Kyos ko bhi pata nahi tha ki Guru Vashudhar ki poori yaad to unke kalpnik sharir ke sath, Vish-Nilayani ke dimag me uljhha hai... Unhi uljhe taar se jab Artificial brain technology ka sampark hua, tab Guru Vashudhar ne apne kalpnik sharir ki aanshik bhag uss artificial brain me jane diya, taki unki yadon ko koi bhi unki marji ke bina dekh na sake...


Ab jab Guru Vashudhar ki aanshik dimag uske ander aaya, fir uss gupt sthan me 22 sal salon tak ki hui sari ghatnayen kaid ho gayi… Kyos ki puri soch... Gahan sodh ke bich unke kushal patni ka kaam me madad karna... Unki hat'kheliyan, Kyos ki patni ki bhavnayen jab uske pati mahino bahar rahte.


In dono ke alawa yahan bahut se scientist bhi aaya karte the. Kuch achhe the to bahut sare ahankari Viggo scientist… unme se tou kayi sajiskarta bhi the..... Jab yaden sameti ja rahi thi tab un yadon ke sath wahan aaye har scientist ka dimag, Guru Vashudhar ke yaad ke roop me kaid ho chuki thi.


146 din ke baad jab Kyos aur uski patni dono poore utsah ke sath, uss gupt bhavan me pahunche. Sabhi tarah ke connection karne ke baad, dono jaise hi yadon me ghuse... Kyos aur uski patni ke liye chaukane wale tathya samne aaya, jisme pahle to Guru Vashudhar ne, unhe un yadon me jhakne se rok diya jinka vasta Kyos athva uski patni se nahi tha… fir aage Guru Vashudhar ne Kyos aur uski patni ko un yadon ki gahrai me le gaye jo unke kaam ki thi.…


Ye Kyos ke hi safal experiment ka kamal tha ki 22 sal ke lambe daur ke bich, kayi sare scientist ke dimag ki yaden, unke dwara sochi gayi theory... Experiment process aur science ke vibhinn vishyon ka concept "Central Autonomus Body" ke pass thi... Aur uss pure system ko koi machine nahi balki ek kalpnik dimag control kar raha tha, jo apni marji ke anusar kisi se yaden sajha kar bhi sakta tha ya bilkul bhi nahi... Haan lekin yaden sajha karne ka ek hi niyam tha... "Jo jiske kaam ki yaden hongi, bus utna hi dikhaya jayega"…

awesome update hai nain bhai,
Behad hi shandaar aur lajawab update hai bhai,
ye flashback to kafi dhamakedar tha,
Ab alexa ki history khul kar saamne aayi hai,
ab dekhte hain ki aage kya hota hai,
Waiting for next update

 

[Anky@123]

Pure reply me aaj pahla reader mila hai.... Maine aaj waise maine Anky aur ragish ke comment reply kiye ... Comment mile bhi the ki na... Kahin padhkar Sadma to na lag gaya... Leon bhai aap kya in dono ka haal chaal le lenge..

Baharhaal aaj din ke pahle dhang ke comment ka shukriya...

Bich me rokne ka pura maksad aapko updates me mil jayenge...

Baten abhi puri tarah se clear nahi hai isliye kisi ke b side ko decide na karen Leon bhai ..

Nana baten bhi thi... Apasyu ke ladne ka karan jo hua wo Nischal ka jor se chillana... Aur nischal ne Apasyu se fight isliye ki... Kyonki Serin ne kaha tha Apasyu ko Jivisha ke yaad jane ka pata pahle din se tha.... Tab ladke nischal ko laga ki Apasyu Surpmarich ka sathi hai aur dhaba bol diya... Baaton baaton me maine ladai ka reson in chill ice season par dal diya tha...

Aise tight situation jab aaye to samjh lijiye agle 4-5 update lag jane hai.... Milga agla update fsah back .. enjoyyyy

Bahut vyast tha bhai isliye comment na de paya us update per. Update bahut lajawab tha aur har ek scene shandar tarike se dikhaya tha.. kai baar ham samaz nahi pate ki future me kya hone wala hai aur hamara present ussey kis tarah se link hai .. isliye nandni kasak aur baki sab jinke samne jo ho rha hai usi ko apni samaz man bethe hai . Jab ki sacchai kuch hi logo ko malum hogi ki aakhir is ladai ki asal vajah kya hai . Yaha man ka majbut hona bahut jaruri hai .. logo ne jyada dhyan na diya magar aisa kya hua ladai k doran ki harte huye nishchal ne kuch yade taja ki aur fir wo muskurata hua fir ladne ko ek dum tiyar tha aur bina apni khas shaktiyo ke ...kuch to bat hogi ho hogi .. readers se request hai thoda dherya rakhiye ...nain behtreen writer hai .. kahani per sawal honi chaiye magar aaj kal bakwas jyada ho rhi hai ...aur ha Apsyu ek.behtreen kirdar hai aur rehega