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Update hi Likh raha hu bhai...magar abhi light nahi hai
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Update 59
Behad hi shandaar or jabardast update bhai.
Bahut khoob superb.
Kamal ka mazedaar update tha bhai.
Mzaaaa aa gya hai bhai waah.
Ek or aa gyi.
Dekhe kaise nipatta h apna hero .
Or isilye ,
Aage ka intjar
Behad hi shandaar or jabardast update bhai.
Bahut khoob superb.
Kamal ka mazedaar update tha bhai.
Mzaaaa aa gya hai bhai waah.
Ek or aa gyi.
Dekhe kaise nipatta h apna hero .
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UPDATE * 61
Main unki baat nahi taal saka....un logo ne hamare baithne ke liye apne gharo se khatiya le aaye….sharbat aur nasta me phal vagairah aur kuch pakwan jo bhi tha lekar aa gaye
Nasta aur pakwan behad swadishta tha….margret aur sona sab ko poori story un aurato ke beech baith kar suna rahi thi…maine abhi kuch hi pakwan khaye honge ki kisi ne mujhe kisi ne pani pakdaya…mujhe uski awaz kuch jani pahchani lagi to maine uski taraf nazare utha kedekha
Use dekhte hi mere gale ke andar ja raha pakwan beech me hi phans gaya….joro se hichki aane lagi aur main hichki lete huye phir se apni kismat ko kosne laga
Ab aage………
Maine us jani pahchani awaz wale chehre ko dekhte hi bhauchakka rah gaya….kyon ki mujhe pani dene wali aur koi nahi balki vahi ladki agni thi jisse pichha chhudane ke liye bach kar mai jungle se bhag gaya tha
Magar mujhe kya pata tha ki vo mujhe yaha aane par bhi mil jayegi…mai ab apni kismat ko siway kosne ke aur kar bhi kya sakta tha
Mai (mann me)—ye yaha kya kar rahi hai…..? kahi ye iska hi to gaon nahi hai.... ? ya sirf bachcho ki khabar sun kar yaha akasmat aa gayi ho….? Jo bhi ho isne apni nazare niche jhuka rakhi hain…ho sakta hai ki shayad isne abhi mujhe dekha na ho…..mujhe is mouke ka fayda uthana chahiye……mai yaha se fauran gayab ho jata hu….ha..yahi theek rahega…mai gayab ho jata hu
Bas ye khyal mann me aate hi main turant vaha se uth kar doud laga diya aur jakar gadi ke andar ghus gaya....mere aise achanak vaha se uth kar jane se sabhi hairan rah gaye
Sona—ye adi ko kya hua…bhag kyo gaya….?
Margret—chal chalkar dekhte hain….nahi to kahi akele kisi naye mission par na bhag jaye wo hame yaha chhedkar….?
Sona—ha..chal dekhte hain
Ek ladka—ye to vahi hain jinhone aaj agni ko akhade me haraya tha…
Sab—kyaaaa….?
Ye sunte hi agni ne choun kar turant apni nigahe upar kar li…..aur pani ka bartan vahi rakh kar gadi ki taraf bhagne lagi aur uske piche piche baki gaon wale bhi
Main sab ko apni taraf bhagte dekh hairan aur pareshan dono gaya…..samajh me nahi aa raha tha ki kya karu to main vaha se adrishya hone laga magar haye re meri buri kismat lakh koshish karne ke bavjud bhimai gayab nahi ho pa raha tha
Mai ab pareshan ho gaya…vo sab mere bilkul najdik aa chuke the….koi aur tarika na sujhte dekh main gadi ki seat ke niche jaldi se ghus gaya
Tab tak sabhi gadi ke paas aa gaye….gate khol kar andar taaka jhaki karne lage….magar main unhe nazar nahi aaya…to agni mayus ho gayi
Margret—lagta hai adi phir se kisi mission par bina bataye chala gaya
Sona—mujhe bhi yahi lagta hai
Mai (ye sun khush hoke mann me)—hihihi....lagta hai in logo ne mujhe nahi dekha....aaj to bach gaya...nahi to is shakti ne to meri aisi taisi kara hi di thi
Vahi ladka—mujhe abhi gadi me seat ke niche kuch dikha......shayad koi chhupa hai vaha
Mai (mann me)—mc..teri gaand me bade bade kide pade..bhsdk...hath pair dhoke mere piche hi pad gaya ye to...pata nahi kis janam ka badla le raha hai.....sale bahar aake teri gaand me vimal bhar ke kisi mote dande se aisa kutunga ki hamesha bathroom karte samay tere muh se bas ‘’Bolo Juban Kesari’’ hi niklega
Us ladke ki baat sun kar sona aur margret turant seat ke niche dekhne lagi jaha main chhupa hua tha.....mujhe vaha ghuse dekh kar dono apni ankhe badi badi karke mujhe ghurne lagi
Sona—adi...yaha kya kar rahe ho….? Chalo bahar aao
Margret—jaldi bahar aao
Mai (mann me)—maine chitra ko in dono ka khoon pine se roka kar khud apne hi pair me kulhadi maar li…. Hamesha bachane ki jagah ulta mujhe musibat me phasa deti hain ye dono
Margret—adi bahar niklo jaldi se
Budhiya—beta kya hua tum aise bhag kar vaha kyo chhup gaye..... ?
Mai (jhuth)—nahi...nahi..mai chhupa nahi tha....achanak mujhe yaad aaya ki maine neela patthar kaha gira diya bas vahi khoj raha tha
Main ab kuch nahi kar sakta tha to bahar nikal aaya chup chap…sab mujhe hi dekhe ja rahe the….magar tabhi agni bhag kar mere pairo me lipat gayi
Agni—aap mujhse bhag rahe hain…akhir kyo….?..meri galti kya hai…agar main apko pasand nahi to mujhe jaan se maar dijiye
Sona (shock)—ye pair chhod adi ka….aur ye kya ulta sidha bakwas kiye ja rahi hai….?
Margret—chhod jaldi se….vo mere pati hain…
Sona—mere bhi
Agni—vo mere bhi pati hain
Sona/margret (shocked)—kyaaaaa…..?
Sona (gusse me)—adiiii….tumne iske sath aate hi apna muh kala kar liya ….?
Mai—aisa kuch nahi hai…ye sab jhuth hai…mai to is ladki ko janta tak nahi
Vahi ladka—ye vahi ladki hai jise aapne aaj swayamvar me jeeta tha
Mai (mann me)—tujhe beech me bolna jaruri hai kya….?
Margret—(hairan) swayamvar…..?
Sona—kaisa swayamvar…..?
Agni ka baap—mai batata hu beti…
Dono—ha..ha batao...sach kya hai... ?
Agni ka baap—mera naam kanchuki hai...mai is ladki (agni) ka pita hu.....vivah ke kayi varsh pashchat bhi jab hamare koi santan nahi huyi to hum bahut nirash ho gaye the...ek baar ek mahatma yaha kuch samay ke liye ruke to maine apni patni ke sath unhe apni dukh bhari kahani sunayi
To unhone meri baat sunne ke baad kuch der tak apni ankhe band kar ke kuch dekhte rahe phir unhone kaha
Mahatma—tum dono ke bhagya me santan sukh nahi hai….kintu tumhe nirash hone ki koi awashyakta nahi hai… mai santan yagya kar ke tumhe santan sukh dilwa sakta hu
Unki baat sun kar hame apaar harsh hua…hamne turant yagya ke liye ha kar di……uske agle din un mahatma ne yagya karna aarambh kiya
Poora din yagya karne ke baad yagya ke agni kund se ek chhoti bachchi nikal ke bahar aayi….jise mahatma ne hamare hatho me dete huye kaha
Mahatma—aaj se yahi tumhari santan hai…kyon ki ye yagya ke agni kund se uttapann huyi hai isliye is kanya ka naam agni hoga….yah param tejashwini aur veerangana hogi….kintu
Kanchuki—kintu kya mahatma ji…?
Mahatma—agni se paida hone ke karan iske andar kroadh atyadhik hoga….kroadh had se jyada ho jane par ye bekabu ho jayegi…us samay kisi ko bhi apni kroadhagni se jala kar raakh kar sakti hai
Kanchuki—kya iska koi upay nahi hai….?
Mahatma—kewal iska pati hi isko kabu me kar sakta hai….lekin iska vivah uske sath hi hona sambhav hai jo isse bhi adhik veer ho
Agni ki maa—ye hame pata kaise chalega ki koun jyada veer hai….?
Mahatma—yumhare gaon ka vivah ka jo rivaz hai uske dwara hi malum chal jayega…..iske vivah ke akhade ke swayamvar me jo isko parajit kar dega vahi iska pati hoga aur isse adhik veer bhi hoga
Agni dhire dhire badi hone lagi….hum hamesha use ladayi jhagde se dur hi rakhte the…lekin jab kabhi bhi usko gussa jyada aa jata to jungle me aag lag jati thi….aadha jungle to iske gusse ki vajah se khakh ho gaya
Aaj agni ke vivah ka swayamvar chal raha tha…..jab un ladko me se koi nahi jeet paya to un logo niyam ka ullanghan kar ke ek sath agni se bhid gaye tabhi aap aa gaye aur ek pal me hi agni ko hara diya aapne.... ab aap hi meri beti agni ke pati hain
Margret—achcha ab samjhi….. tabhi tum dophar me hame akela sote huye chhod kar yaha swayamvar jeetne chup chap bhag aaye the….?
Sona (ghurte huye)—hum dono se mann nahi bharta kya tumhara jo abhi bhi biwi kam pad rahi hain….?
Mai—ye sarasar cheating hai….mai ise shadi nahi maan sakta….
Kanchuki—beta ye koi dagabazi nahi hai....balki yahi satya hai ki agni ab apki patni ban chuki hai
Mai—aise kaise koi bhi meri patni ban jayegi....agar iska swayamvar ho raha tha to vaha koi board me likha hua kyo nahi tha ki agni swayamvar samaroh.....ye cheating nahi to kya hai.... ? hamare yaha shadi hoti hai to barat nikalti hai band baje ke sath...charo taraf sajawat hoti hai...har jagah ladki aur ladke ka naam likha hota hai cards aur banner par...
Margret—ha..ye to sahi baat hai
Mai—mai to bas is jungle me bheesan aag lagi huyi thi usko bujhane aaya tha….lekin loutne time jab maine dekha ki ye ladki ek ladke ki gardan pakde huye hai…to maine us ladke ko bachane ke liye isko dhakka diya tha….ab sab batao ye shadi kaise huyi..kab huyi…..?
Ek buddha—hamare yaha to isi tarah se shadi hoti hai beta…aur ek baar jo kisi ladki ko swayamvar me jeet leta hai vahi uska pati hota hai
Vahi ladka—haan…aur agar us ladke ne ladki ko aswikar kar diya to us ladki ko turant hi atma hatya karni hoti hai…yahi hamare gaon ka niyam hai
Kanchuki—beta meri beti ko apna lo….nahi to usko bhi aaj atma hatya karni padegi
Margret (gusse me)—aise kaise swikar kar le usko apni patni……
Sona—adi sahi bol raha hai....hum dono hain uski patni
Ye sun kar chitra ne ek baar phir se dono ko utha kar vahi patak diya....shayad usko hum dono sun kar gussa aa gaya tha
Dono (karahte huye)—adii...hame is chudail se bachao...
Agni (rote huye)—agar aap mujhe apnana nahi chahte to theek hai...meri chita ko aag to kam se kam jarur de dena
Ye kah kar vo tezi se bhagi vaha se rote huye apne ghar ki taraf...mai to use dekhte hi dang rah gaya...ki kaisa system hai is gaon ka....margret aur sona mujhe ulahna dene me lagi huyi thi jaise maine sab jaan bujh kar ye sab kiya ho
Mai—ab agar ek shabd bhi muh se nikla na to tum dono ko bhi hamesha ke liye chhod dunga...samajh aaya.. tum dono ko bhi mai apni biwi nahi samajhta
Dono—nahi..nahi...hum ab kuch nahi bolenge...aisa mat karna
Abhi usko gaye huye kuch hi der huye honge ki vahi ladka bhagta hua aaya aur kahne laga ki agni ne apne hath ki nas kaat li hai...uski halat bahut najuk hai
Hum turant bhag kar vaha pahuche...jaha agni niche besudh padi huyi thi...uske dono hatho se khoon bah raha tha...maine sab ko vaha se hata kar apni power se khoon ka bahav roka...
Dhire dhire uska jakhma bharne laga....mere paas ab koi aur chara nahi bacha tha......hosh me aate hi jab usne apne apko meri god me dekha to rote huye mujhse lipat gayi
Mai—ab ye rona band karo....lekin ye yaad rakhna ki tum akele meri biwi nahi ho....aur bhi hain meri jindagi me
Agni—mujhe koi aitaraz nahi hai
Mai—theek hai to phir chalne ki taiyari karo
Humne ghar jane ka faisla kar liya...lekin mujhe kya pata tha ki ghar me ek nayi musibat mera intazar pahle se hi kar rahi hai
Ye line sabse jyada pasand aati
mc..teri gaand me bade bade kide pade..bhsdk...hath pair dhoke mere piche hi pad gaya ye to...pata nahi kis janam ka badla le raha hai.....sale bahar aake teri gaand me vimal bhar ke kisi mote dande se aisa kutunga ki hamesha bathroom karte samay tere muh se bas ‘’Bolo Juban Kesari’’ hi niklega
mc..teri gaand me bade bade kide pade..bhsdk...hath pair dhoke mere piche hi pad gaya ye to...pata nahi kis janam ka badla le raha hai.....sale bahar aake teri gaand me vimal bhar ke kisi mote dande se aisa kutunga ki hamesha bathroom karte samay tere muh se bas ‘’Bolo Juban Kesari’’ hi niklega