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CHAMATKAR
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Radha adii ki taraf dekhti mushkurati aur phir nazare jhuka leti.....tabhi vaha ek shisya aa gaya aur bataya ki adii ko guru vishwamitra ne bulaya hai turant.
Shisya—adii tumhe gurudev ne turant bulaya hai.
Adii—kyo koi khas kaam hai kya.... ?
Shisya—kaam ka to pata nahi lekin damnak rishi jarur bahut gusse me lag rahe the.
Adii—chal beta …ho gaya tera jan kalyan aaj to…‼
Ab Aage……
Ashram me ek kutiya ke andar guru vishwamitra apne aasan par baithe huye the…unke samne hi dmnak rishi aur kuch shisya khade huye the.
Idhar adii ashram jate huye aaj ki ghatna par soch me kho gaya…ussi samay uski jagah rishi ne le li…..vo shisya usko gurudev ke paas le gaya.
Rishi—pranam gurudev
Vishwamitra—kalayanamastu
Rishi—pranam rishi damnak
Uske pranam karte hi ashirwad dene ki jagah damnak rishi ki bhrakuti tedhi ho gayi…..ankho se chingariya nikalne lagi….poora chehra gusse se tamtama gaya.
Rishi—kya baat hai rishivar..aap ne koi ashirwad nahi diya….?
Damnak (gusse me)—ashirwad usko diya jata hai jo uske layak ho….kisi dusht aur papi ko nahi.
Rishi—koun dusht aur koun papi….? Aap kahna kya chahte hain.... ? aur maine apke sath kya hai jo aap ne aise kaha... ?
Damnak (gusse me)—achcha tumne to bada achcha kaam kiya hai.....dekh liya aap ne gurudev iss dusht ko...aap jise jan kalyan karne ki shiksha de rahe the, aur ye dusht koun sa jan kalyan kar raha hai... ?
Vishwamitra—shant vats damnak shant.....main baat karta hu.....(rishi ki oor mud kar)—vats damnak ja kahna hai ki tumne inki putri ke liye bahut hi abhadra shabdo ka uchcharan kiya hai , unke samne....kya ye satya hai..... ?
Rishi (chounk kar)—kyaaaaa.....abhadra vyavhar aur maine...vo bhi inke samne inki putri ke liye.... ? main to inki putri ko janta tak nahi hu....ye sab mithya aarop hai mere upar.
Damnak (chillate huye)—dusht…..kitna jaldi girgit ki tarah rang badal liya….mere samne meri hi putri ke liye ashobhniya shabdo ka sambodhan karne ke uparant ab .ulta mujhe hi mithya chari kah raha hai….gurudev iss papi ko kathor dand dijiye…ye iss ashram me rahne yogya nahi hai…yaha aur bhi rishiyo ke pariwar rahte hain…aaj isne meri beti ke sath aisa kiya hai kal kisi aur ke sath karega….agar ye raha to pata nahi kis kis ka kalyan kar dega.
Rishi (jor se)—rishi damnak.… tanik hosh me rah kar baat kariye…..iss tarah ka ghranit aarop mere upar lagate huye aap ko jara bhi lajja nahi aa rahi….?
Damnak (tilmilate huye)—achcha main jhuth bol raha hu.... ? to kya ye sab shisya bhi jhuthe hain, jinke samne tumne meri putri ke liye apshabd kahe hain... ? bahut bada jhootha hai ye gurudev.
Rishi (kroadh me)—rishi damnak....main kabhi asatya nahi bolta, chahe mere sar par mout hi kyon na mandra rahi ho..tab bhi main satya hi bolta hu.
Damnak (chillate huye)—dusht aur kitna jhuth bolega....tu hum sabko, itne saare logo ko kah raha ki sab ke sab jhuth bol rahe hain... ? aur tu satyavadi raja harishchandra ban raha hai....gurudev aap isko dandit kariye...aur bahar nikaliye yaha se iss jhuthe ko.
Rishi—gurudev ye aarop niradhar aur galat hai.
Vishwamitra—shant.....vats kya tum abhi kuch der pahle damnak ke paas gaye the.... ?
Rishi—nahi to gurudev....main to aaj tak inke ashram me nahi gaya…main to raat se abhi so kar utha hu aur sidhe apke paas chala aaya…main inse aaj to kya balki kabhi nahi mila.
Rishi ki baat sun kar damnak poori tarah se chounk kar aag babula ho gaya.....vo kabhi rishi ko to kabhi baki shisyo ki oor dekhta....baki shisya bhi hairan the.
Damnak (hairani se)—ohhh...bhagwan... ! kitna jhuth bolta hai re ye ladka....milne ke baad bhi kahta hai ki kabhi nahi mila....
Rishi—gurudev kya apko bhi mujh par sandeh hai.... ?
Vishwamitra—nahi vats...tum to kabhi jhuth bol hi nahi sakte.
Damnak (shocked)—gurudev.. ! to kya main jhuth bol raha hu.... ? ye kal ke aaye chhokre par apko vishwash hai aur meri baato par nahi…?
Guru vishwamitra ne apni ankhe band kar ke saare ghatna kram ko dekha aaj jo kuch ghatit hua tha….unke chehre par ek rahasyamayi mushkan tairne lagi aur unhone ankhe khol kar dono ko samjhane lage.
Vishwamitra (mushkurate huye)—satya kabhi kabhi sab ke liye ek jaisa nahi hota hai…..jo ek ke liye satya hota hai kintu vahi satya dusre ke liye asatya hota hai….aur jo dusre ke liye satya hota hai vo pahle wale ke liye asatya… halanki dono hi apni jagah par satya hain.
Rishi—sun liya aap ne damnak ji…ki main jhuth nahi bolta.
Damnak—ye kaise ho sakta hai gurudev....aap ne bhi mujhe hi jhutha bana diya....isko kada dand dene ki jagah
Vishwamitra—maine jo kaha vahi satya hai vats aur isse swikar karna sikho.
Iske baad rishi gurudev ko pranam kar ke vaha se chala gaya…..damnak bhi khinn mann se apne ashram ke liye vapis chal pada lekin uske andar abhi bhi adii ke liye behad gussa bhara hua tha.
Damnak (mann me)—kitna bada jhutha aur makkar hai ye...aaj pata chal gaya....isne gurudev ko bhi apne jhuthe jaal me phansa liya hai tabhi to gurudev ne bhi usko hi sahi thahra diya.....ab to main usko apne ashram ke aas paas bhi nahi bhatakne dunga.
Ek shisya—kaha koun si chinta me kho gaye damnak ji... ?
Damnak—tum log bhi jara savdhan rahna.....apni patni aur putriyo ko uss jhuthe se door hi rakhna....nahi to pata nahi vo adharmi jan kalyan ke bahane kahi tum logo ka bhi kalyan na kar de... ?
Vo shisya bhi damnak ki baat se chinta grast ho gaye.... Tabhi damnak ko dekh kar ashram ke hi ek shisya ne awaz de kar rukne ko kaha aur phir unke paas aa gaya.
Damnak—kya hua, tumne hame roka kyo.... ?
Vo shisya—mujhe bhi apke ashram hi jana tha, apko jate huye dekha to socha ki kyo na apke sath hi chala chalu.
Damnak—mere ashram...par main to yahi hu tumhare samne....khair chalo..vaise koi kaam tha kya mujhse... ?
Shisya—mujhe aap se nahi radha bitiya se kaam tha...vo kya hai ki adii ke doodh pine ka samay ho gaya hai to vahi lene apke ashram radha bitiya ke paas ja raha tha.
Bas kya tha..itna sunna tha ki damnak ne aav dekha na taav…bin mousam barsat ki tarah uss bechare ko dhona shuru kar diya…uski dekha dekhi uske sath ke baki shisya bhi isme shamil ho gaye.
Vahi dharti lok me charo ke raat se ghar vapis na loutne par chuttad ki biwi saroj kafi pareshan thi...usne iss bare me pangu ki biwi deepa se baat karne ke liye uske flat me jane ka vichar kiya aur kapde change karne lagi... murugan (tota) ye sab dekh raha tha.
Murugan—utar do…utar do…ye bhi utar do…yaha mere alawa koi nahi dekhega.
Saroj—bada hi badatmeez tota hai ye….chal tu bahar chal yaha se.
Saroj usko lekar pinjra sahit haal me aa gayi..tabhi door bell ring huyi to usne dekha ki deepa khud uske paas aa gayi thi.
Murugan—wow...aaj to mast maal lag rahi ho tum bhi.
Deepa—kya bola..sale harami….saroj ye kya musibat pal li tune.
Saroj—main to khud hi isse pareshan ho gayi hu.
Deepa—arey yaar tumhare vo aaye kya….?
Saroj—nahi..main khud tumhare paas pata karne hi aa rahi thi.
Murugan—kahi kisi gutter ki nali me apna muh kala kar rahe honge dono.
Deepa—shut up bastard..kuch bhi bolta hai.
Saroj—usko chhod….yaar kyo na hum inke office ja kar inki jasusi kare…pata to chale ki akhir ye charo karte kya hain aur kaha gayab rahte hain….?
Deepa—haaan…ye sahi rahega.
Saroj—to chalo phir.
Deepa—apni is musibat ko bhi le chal….raste me kisi ko bech denge.
Saroj—sahi kaha tumne.
Saroj ne pinjra utha ke deepa ke sath office ke liye nikal gayi…..raste me jab vo auto me ja rahi thi to auto wale ko vo tota bahut pasand aaya.
Auto wala—bahan ji ye tota to bahut hi sundar hai.
Deepa (turant)—haan…bahut sundar hai bahut chatur bhi hai ye….lekin hum isko bechna chahte hain.
Auto wala—kyo…?
Saroj—vo kya hai ki hamare ghar me billi roj aati hai iske chakkar me aur doodh pi jati hai.
Deepa—vaise ye tota kamal ka hai….ye har bhasa me baat kar leta hai…chahe to kuch bhi puch ke dekh lo.
Auto wala (mann me)—agar sach me aisa hua to mere vaare nyare ho jayenge…..main ye auto chalane ka kaam chhod kar iske jariye logo ko unka jhutha future bata bata kar khoob paise kamaunga…phir bhi isse kuch puch ke dekh leta hu ki inki baat sahi bhi hai ki nahi.
Auto wala (murugan se)—tum koun ho….?
Murugan—main tota hu.
Auto wala (khush)—who are you….?
Murugan—I am a parrot.
Auto wala (bahut khush)—tu ke haub…?
Murugan (khisiya kar)—tohri maayi ke dulha haeee….tohra bujhat nayikhe eke batiya ko ber ber bataye.
Auto wala (shocked)—ye to bada hi badatmeez tota hai…..isko le gaya to ye to ulta mujhe logo ke juto se pitwa dega….ohhh ab samjha ye dono isko kyon bechna chahti hain…..?
Deepa—kya hua bhai..le lo bahut badhiya hai….iski kabhi kabhi mazak karne ki aadat hai.
Auto wala—maaf karna bahan ji…ye aap ke hi yaha rahne layak hai…ye lijiye aa gaya apka stop.
Dono mayus hokar auto se utar ke office ke liye chal padi jo ki samne hi tha…..vahi rajnandini aur agni ko lekar khatra evam chitra hospital pahuch gayi.
Iss samay vaha anand ke alawa aur koi nahi tha urmila ke paas….khatra aur chitra ke sath jab usne agni ko dekha to chounk gaya…lekin jaise hi uski nazar rajnandini par gayi to vo usko shree samajh kar ashcharya aur hairangi se chair se girte girte bacha.
Theek ussi samay megha aur ajeet bhi urmila se milne hospital ke liye nikal pade….
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Bhai pata nahi ye baat kehna chahiye ki nahi per keh deta hu man ke bhaar thoda kam hojayengi
Wo baat ye hai ki aap update khafi chota dene lage ho yaa hame aisa lag raha hai ki update padte padte kitna padliya pata hi nahi chal raha ho per muje aise lagta hai ki aap update chota hi dene lag gaye ho kya iss story se ap bor hogaye isme apko utna dilchaspi nahi hai jitan ki pehle thi?
Iss sawaal ko poochke apke dil nahi dukana chahta per kya kare man nahi maan raha tho pooch baita agar bura mangaye tho teh dil se maafi mangta hu
Yaa phir aap busy honge shayad!!????
Yaa apko pehle se hi health ishyu hai tho kya ye maan lu ki aap ki tabiyat abhi tak teek nahi hui
Agar aisa hai tho chod do abhi ke liye update dena ek break lelo jitna chahe lakin update ke saath nainsafi mat karna me ye isliye nahi keh raha hu ki muje iss story se man bhar gaya hai balki isliye keh raha hu ki aapki health ko kuch na ho bas
Wo baat ye hai ki aap update khafi chota dene lage ho yaa hame aisa lag raha hai ki update padte padte kitna padliya pata hi nahi chal raha ho per muje aise lagta hai ki aap update chota hi dene lag gaye ho kya iss story se ap bor hogaye isme apko utna dilchaspi nahi hai jitan ki pehle thi?
Iss sawaal ko poochke apke dil nahi dukana chahta per kya kare man nahi maan raha tho pooch baita agar bura mangaye tho teh dil se maafi mangta hu
Yaa phir aap busy honge shayad!!????
Yaa apko pehle se hi health ishyu hai tho kya ye maan lu ki aap ki tabiyat abhi tak teek nahi hui
Agar aisa hai tho chod do abhi ke liye update dena ek break lelo jitna chahe lakin update ke saath nainsafi mat karna me ye isliye nahi keh raha hu ki muje iss story se man bhar gaya hai balki isliye keh raha hu ki aapki health ko kuch na ho bas
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Shandaar uodate bhai
Tota bhi bhttime baad dikha
Dekhte h ab kya hoga
Brilliant update
Keep rocking bhai
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Aap ki baat sahi hai bhai aur isme koi bura manne jaisi baat nahi hai
Update pahle ki tulna me chote hi hain
Aur shayad iski vajah ye hai ki pahle kewal saajan aur chamatkar hi do story thi, to update bade likh leta tha
Kintu ab stories jyada hain to unke updates likhne ke liye bhi samay dena padta hai
Lekin koi baat nahi bhai vaise bhi iske aage ke antim char updates bade hi aane wale hain..4000 to 5000 words.