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Orgasm? Ju ko 20k per mera orgasm dikhayi deta hai? Why are youOoops.....sorry for stopping you oragsm in between.....![]()
Mujhe dikhta nahi ju ko aata hai.Orgasm? Ju ko 20k per mera orgasm dikhayi deta hai? Why are you?
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Lekin main ne kab bola ke 20K per orgasm ata hai? Ya tum chahte ho ke aye?Mujhe dikhta nahi ju ko aata hai.
Kisi din sach me 20k update aa gaya to hila hilakar hi lakwa maar jayega![]()
you are right , author ko thodi nirasha hoti hai ayse comments padke.Dukh bas iss baat ka hai ki author itna kuchh karta hai, par log wahi ghise pite one liners comments kar jaate hai. Samajh me bhi nahi aata ki woh kahani padh bhi rahe hai ya nahi.
seriously, review Dena nahi aata ,bhai story padhna aata hai koi scene pasand na ay to ushpe lamba sa review chep denge.update padhne ke baad review aapne aap aa jata hai ,aur wolf sir jitna bada update dete hai ush update pe main toh ek chota sa story update like du yaarAur revo dena nahi aata ye toh Totally poori jhoot baat hai. Agar revo dena nahi bhi aata hai toh kam se kam aap apne shabd thode bahut toh badal hi sakte ho na har pratikriya par? Pure cnp chalta hai. Har kahani me, har update par ...!!!
20k ka update mangte ho, but ju bhi "Nice update" "Awesome update" wale ho.Lekin main ne kab bola ke 20K per orgasm ata hai? Ya tum chahte ho ke aye?
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Purane revo daikh lena20k ka update mangte ho, but ju bhi "Nice update" "Awesome update" wale ho.![]()
20k ka update mangte ho, but ju bhi "Nice update" "Awesome update" wale ho.![]()
Galty yahan dinesh ki thi ek sunsaan raaste per aise beech me gaari kon he rokta hai siwaye tab jab gari kharab huwi ho behan chod aise gari roke ga to aur kia ho ga......ye daikhne ke baad to chahe dinesh ko maar bhi do I DON'T CARE Sala itna mand buddhi bhi na ho insaan
Laura BC Glass band karne se baat nahi banti Dimagh ke glass kholne se banti hai
Rohini ke saath hera pheri wala dailouge ulta huwa hai
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Longest nahi lekin most points cover karne ki try karta tha main + 2021 se 20K words ka keh raha huoverall Update bohat zabardast tha Word limit se abhi bhi main satisfy nahi huw.....Lekin phir bhi update acha tha Niddhi aur Veer ki chemistry mujhe bohat pasand aa rahi hai saath me pari ke saath veer ki conversation bhi maze ki hoti hai......Kuch jaghao per thora weak lagta hai lekin mujhe yaqeen hai ap un jaghao per khud he pakar bana lo gye ya phir shayad sirf mujhe mehsoos hota hai......Baki ap ki writing skills ke to hum shuru se diwane hai ap ne story ko sirf hero per na rakhte huwe bohat shai andaz se har taraf ghoomaya hai......Aur bohat ache se ghoomaya hai kiu ke bohat c stories me jab storie hero se hat ker dusre scene dikhati hai to bore karti hai lekin ap ki storie me har scene khud se bandh ker rakhta hai.....
Baki acha update tha ache andaz se likha gaya tha iss liye ap ko deta hu 10 me se 1.5 point
Koshis karta hota hu review se ap ko Support mile baki mujhe review dena nahi ata bus kuch favourite writer ki storie per review dene ki buri si try karta hu hope mera review se ap ko story likhne ki motivation mile aur ap 20k words ka update roz likh sako![]()