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Apko ko yaha dekh kar atyant harsh ka anubhav kar raha hu Milan Bhai
Strange World aur Harshit bhai ki Haunted (both parts) meri bhi behad pasandida kahaniyo me se hain
Poori kahani behad khubsurat tarike se har update ko ek Neckless ki tarah sajaya hai aapne
Sirf kahani ka antim update kafi dukh dayak raha tha
Halanki main ye sochta hu ki shayad ye next part ki bhumika rahi hogi, par afsos is baat ka tha ki hero ko kam se kam pari ko convince to karna tha ki main return aunga ya tumhe bhi le jaunga
Agla Part padhne ki dil me kafi bechaini hai bhai
Mujhe apki story itni pasand hai ki khud maine apni story Saajan me strange world ke ek do scene add kiye hain jisse logo ke dil me is kahani ki yaade barkarar rahe
Science ka bahut hi behtareen prayog dikhaya hai aapne
Agle bhag ka besabri se intazar rahega bhai
Strange World aur Harshit bhai ki Haunted (both parts) meri bhi behad pasandida kahaniyo me se hain
Poori kahani behad khubsurat tarike se har update ko ek Neckless ki tarah sajaya hai aapne
Sirf kahani ka antim update kafi dukh dayak raha tha
Halanki main ye sochta hu ki shayad ye next part ki bhumika rahi hogi, par afsos is baat ka tha ki hero ko kam se kam pari ko convince to karna tha ki main return aunga ya tumhe bhi le jaunga
Agla Part padhne ki dil me kafi bechaini hai bhai
Mujhe apki story itni pasand hai ki khud maine apni story Saajan me strange world ke ek do scene add kiye hain jisse logo ke dil me is kahani ki yaade barkarar rahe
Science ka bahut hi behtareen prayog dikhaya hai aapne
Agle bhag ka besabri se intazar rahega bhai
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anand bhai thank you so much bhai ki aapne meri story ko iss kaabil samja
jaankar baht hi acha lag raha ha ki aapko story itni jyada pasand aayi hai
harshit bhai ki haunted meri fav story hai, unhi ki vajah se toh maine xp join kiya tha, aur meri first story likhne me unhone hi meri madad ki thi
anyways, bhai aapko end na pasand aane ke piche ka reason mai samajta hu, kyunnki saare readers ki yahi shikayat rahi hai, par bas itna kehna chahunga ki khud ko pari ki jagah manthan (mayank) ki jagah rakhkar socho ki uss par kya beet rahi hogi aur usne jaane se pehle pari se milna kyu nahi socha
anyways, i hope ki aapko iska second part bhi itna hi pasand aayega
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Update : 34 (Final War-I)
2 mahine beet chuke the, aakhir me voh din aahi gaya tha jiska sabko besabri se intezaar tha
Pichle 2 mahine se Ajit aur Mayank din raat pagalo ki tarah kaam kar rahe the, kyunki Dexter se ladyai koi aam ladayi nahi thi..aur waqt bahut hi kam tha..lekin unn dono ne bina waqt jaaya kiye apne apne kaamo ko anjaam de diya..ab baari thi toh uss plan ko execute karni
Lekin yeh 2 mahine koi aam do mahine nahi the..ek pal ke liye bhi kisine rahat ki saans nahi li thi, SPECIAL SQUAD ki mehnat se kaafi logo ki jaane bachi thi..lekin Dexter ki taqat ke samne squad bhi lacharo ho gayi thi..aur Dexter tha ki rukne ka naam nahi le raha tha
Gideon ke algorithms se SPECIAL SQUAD ko kaafi help mil rahi thi..par kehte hai na ki waqt kisi ka bhi saga nahi hota..voh toh bas aage badhna janta hai..Dexter ki power haroj badhti chali jaa rahi thi..ab toh SPECIAL SQUAD bhi uske aage lachar ho chuki thi, masum logo ke marne ki tahdat badhti hi chali jaa rahi thi
Inn 2 mahino me 100 se jyada seher tabah ho chuke the, anginat log, praniyo ki jaane jaa chuki thi, yaha tak Frequecny Manipulator bhi ab kisi kaam ke nahi rahe the..ab sirf ek chiz toh jo iss prithvi ko bacha sakti thi..ab waqt aa chukka tha ki Dexter ko hamesa ke liye rok diya jay..par kya waqt ko rokna itna asaan hoga..??
Date : 21st June 2017
Aakhri kaam jo bacha tha voh pura karne ke baad Mayank crime branch se Jungle jaane ke liye nikal chuka tha..lekin use raste me hi Pari aur uske baaki dosto ne rok liya
Mayank kuch kehta uske pehle Pari ne usse kaha “manthan, muje tere saath aana hai”
Mayank “yeh kaisa majak hai pari”
Pari “mai koi majak nahi kar rahi, mai tere sath aa rahi hu bas”
Mayank usko pyaar se samjate hue kehta hai “listen pari, vaha kya hoga mai nahi jaanta..aur voh jagah tere liye safe nahi hai”
Pari “manthan, dexter ne mere mom dad ko maara tha, usne mere bhai ko mujse alag kiya hai, kya mera itna bhi haq nahi hai ki mai use khatam hote hue dekh saku..??”
Mayank “pari..agar hamari ladayi kisi aam chiz se hoti toh mai mana nahi karta, but hamari yeh ladayi Dexter se hai, aur mai tuje kisi bhi khatre me nahi daalna chahta” Usne manthan ki aur dekhte hue kaha “ab tu hi isse samja”
Manthan “sirf Pari hi nahi..hum sab tere saath aa rahe hai”
Mayank yeh sunkar thoda chaunk jaata hai, fir voh shanti se kehta hai “manthan, pagal mat ban, iss waqt jungle me aana tum sab ke liye sahi nahi hai, yeh meri ladayi hai..Dexter ka iss earth par aana meri vajah se hua hai..aur iss ladayi ko sirf mai hi khatam karunga”
“yeh toh tune sahi kaha, yeh ladayi teri hai..aur tuje hi use khatam karna hai” Siddhe ne mayank aur pari ke pass aate hue kaha
Siddhi ki baat sunkar Pari use gusse se ghurne lagi toh Siddhi ne aage kaha “lekin yeh ladayi sirf tere akele ki nahi hai, aur naa hi Dexter yaaha teri vajah se aaya hai, tu khud ko dosh dena band kar”
Pari “haa manthan, Siddhi sahi keh rahi hai”
Manthan “haa mere bhai, iss ladayi me tu akela nahi hai, maana ki teri jitni knowledge hum mese kisi ke bhi pass nahi hai..lekin mai haath par haath rakhe nahi baith sakta..dexter yaha chahe kisi bhi reason se aayo ho..muje parwah nahi hai..mai bas janta hu toh itna ki jisne mere planet par itni tabahi ki uske samne hone vali ladayi me mai kisi kayar ki tarah ek kone me nahi baithne vala”
Pathik “aur tu yeh mat bhool yeh hamari earth hai..hamara planet, yeh mera ghar hai..aur mai kisiko bhi apne ghar ko destroy nahi karne dunga”
Pari “haa manthan, mai bas usko khatam hote hue dekhna chahti hu..please mana mat kar”
Mayank ne kuch bolne ke liye apna muh khola hi tha ki Pari ne uske pehle hi kuch keh diya “aur mai janti hu, tu hume kuch nahi hone dega..I trust you Manthan”
Mayank ka dil joro se dhadak ne laga tha, aaj use pehli baar dar lag raha tha “aur agar mera plan fail ho gaya toh..?? Agar mai dexter ko nahi rok paaya toh..??”
Pari ne mayank ke ekdum karib aate hue kaha “aisa kuch nahi hoga, You will beat him..I believe in you, and you have to do this..for me, for all of us”
Mayank kuch der pari ki aankho me dekhta raha..use pari ki zid kea age jukna hi pada..aur uske baad voh sabhi log jungle me aagaye, lekin mayank ne unhe dur hi rehne ke liye kaha
Unhone dekha ki Ajit aur uski puri team pehle se hi vaha maujud hai, jaha pichle baar Pari aur Mayank aaye the..thik vaha par kuch devices rakhi hui hai, unn devices ko dekhte hue mayank ne apne comms se Ajit se pucha “are you ready..??”
Ajit “yes mayank, everything is set, bas Dexter ke aane ki deri hai”
Mayank “thik hai”
Mayank aur baaki log jaha khade, vaha se voh jagah kaafi dur thi..lekin itna toh saaf dikh raha tha ki vaha ho kya raha hai..aur yeh devices dekhte hue Pathik ne Mayank se pucha “mayank, aakhir tu karne kya vala hai..?? ab toh kuch bata”
Mayank kuch sochte hue “thik hai, Dexter ko rokne ke liye maine particle accelerator ke principle ka use kiya hai, aur jese ki maine pehle bataya tha, tachyons ko humne jiss tarah stable kiya tha voh bhi particle accelerator ke principle se hi kiya tha, generally particle accelerator ek machine hai jo electromagnetic field ki madad se kisi bhi charged particles ko light ki speed tak le jaaya sakta hai, lekin as humne yeh already proov kar diya hai ki tachyons are faster than speed of light, so muje particle accelerator banana ki jarurat nahi thi..maine tachyon particles ki madad se yeh device banayi hai” usne gun type ke jesi device apne pocket se nikali
Manthan ajib si shakal banate hue apne baal khujata hai “tu gun se Dexter ko rokega..??”
Mayank “nahi manthan, yeh koi mamuli gun nahi hai, yeh hai Tachyons Laser Gun, iss choti se device me maine tachyons ko load kiya hai..jo as a laser beam ki tarah kaam karega”
Pathik “mai kuch samja nahi, aur muje nahi lagta ki kisi aur ko bhi kuch samaj me aaya hai”
Mayank “relax, I will explain” usne apne haath se ishara kiya jaha voh devices rakhi hui thi “yeh jo left side hai, voh hai Frequency generator, jo continuously radio waves ki beam generate karke fire karega..aur thik vaise hi jo right side hai..voh hai Frequecny Manipulator, jiska kaam hai unn radiowaves ki frequency ko iss earth ki natural frequcny aur ek empty planet ki frequency ko ek stable frequency par sync karna”
Pathik “isse kya hoga..??”
Mayank “jaise hi Dexter uss circle ke andar aayega” usne ishara karte hue bataya jaha ek bada sa circle bana hua tha “tab yeh dono device apna kaam karna chalu kar degi..aur dono device se nikal rahi radiowaves ek saath milkar Dexter ko usi circle ke andar..usi position par lock kar degi, aur Dexter ki main power time hai, yaani radio waves ki frequency Dexter ki rafter ko kam kar degi..aur bas baaki ka kaam yeh gun kar degi”
Pathik “excellent yaar”
Lekin pari ka dimaag iss waqt kaafi teji se daud raha tha, voh turant hi boli “wait..wait..wait, agar yeh itna asaan hota toh tu hume yahaa aane ke liye mana nahi karta” usne mayank ki aur dekhte hue kaha “tu kya chupa raha hai..??”
Mayank hadbadate hue “kkk..kkuu..uucc..ccchhhh..hh nn..nnaa..aaa..hhhhh..iiii, m…maa….aaiinneee sab kuch toh bata diya”
Siddhi “tu hakla raha hai..juth bolte waqt manthan hamesa ese hi hakla ta hai”
Yeh sunne ke baad Pari thodi gusse se mayank ko ghurne lagi aur uske najdik jaakar kehti hai “bata kya chupa raha hai tu..?? aur tune muje abhi tak uss problem ke baare me nahi bataya”
Mayank apne man me hi sochta hai ki ab shayad use sab sach bata dena chahiye “haa pari, ek baat hai jo maine tum sab se chupayi hai..aur voh problem bhi isise related hai”
Pari thoda dar rahi thi “kk.kko…oonn….nn.sss..iiiii b..bbaaabbaaaattttttt”
Mayank “iss plan ko execute karne ke liye mera dexter ke karib rehna bahut jaruri hai..aur sabse jaruri baat yeh hai ki dexter ko rokne ke liye mere pass sirf ek hi chance hai”
Pathik “tu abhi bhi kuch toh chupa raha hai”
Mayank “yeh sari chize, mera matalb ki jab Dexter uss circle ke andar aajayega..tab voh dono device aur iss gun ki tachyonic beam..yeh tino ek saath align honi chahiye, aur jab yeh hoga tab hi Dexter ko ek position par roka jaa sakta hai..aur tachyons ki speed ki vajah se” jaha dono device ke bich me jaga thi uss taraf ishara karte hue “uss jagah dimensional-gate open hoga, aur tachyonic beam ke andar tachyons hai..toh apni speed ki madad se tachyons Dexter ko apne saath uss gate tak ghasitega..aur jese hi dexter ek baar uss gate me chala gaya voh gate apne aap hi band ho jayega”
Pari chaunkte hue “kyaa..??” voh gussa hote hue kehti hai “aur tune mujse iitni badi baat chupayi..??”
Siddhi “mayank..yeh koi choti problem nahi hai”
Pari “tu kahi nahi jaa raha, isme teri jaan bhi jaa sakti hai, nahi Manthan..mai tuje marne ke liye nahi bhej sakti”
Mayank “relax pari, muje kuch nahi hoga, aur Dexter ko rokne ka sirf yahi ek aakhri mauka hai hamare pass, already bahut se log apni jaan gawah chuke hai..aur mai nahi chahta ki Dexter aur kisi ki jaan le”
Tabhi Gideon ki awaaz mayank ke kaan me sunayi di “sir..it’s time, he will be here in less than 5 minutes”
Mayank “copy that, and start all the devices”
Gideon “it’s been done sir”
Gideon se baat hote hi Mayank vaha se jaane laga ki Pari ne uska haath pakad liya, mayank ne mudkar pari ki aur dekha jo thodi ruansi hote hue kehti hai “please, come back..for me” Uski dhadkan bahur joro se chal rahi thi
Mayank smile karte hue haa mein apna sar hilata hai aur vaha se daudkar uss ghere ke karib aa aagaya, usne comms se Ajit se kaha “let’s do this..it’s time”