Lagta hai tumne meri story ka name theek se nahi padha
Yup it interprets to, TV SERIAL
TMKOC AND BOLLYWOOD
ACTRESSES. I Mean you gotta change your story name, if it's anything other than that. The point is, The new character, which i am pretty sure, is neither a TMKOC character nor a tv/Bollywood
actress. I don't know, in what part of the world you think the story name even suggests that.
And a random dude character gets to take atleast half, if not full, role of main character? I mean The story was going from third person view till the intro of the new guy and now suddenly it went from third person to first person. There was no "me" but now it's "me" in story. I mean if you still don't see the problem then i don't have any nice way left to explain it to you.
Other than that You obviously just don't want to get comments other than nice story than All good man, it's your choice. But from now on don't ask for comments in updates
or rather be specific that you want only "nice story" as comment.
Because i don't know you so I don't have any grudge or anything like that towards you. It's just that i believe one can truly appreciate the story with a constructive criticism. It's my way of appreciation and POSSIBLY contributing in making it even better. You don't want that than i won't post anymore. Good luck.