Incest Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery

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Ab tak...

Uss building se hospital me laiti uss patient ko dekha jaa sakta tha.

Woh dheere dheere aage chal ke khidki ke paas aaya.

Aur…!

'I have found you…! Grace Martin!!!'

Ab aage...

"Unn~!?" Bistar par laiti ek khubsoorat si ladki karvat lete hue jab haath aage badhaayi toh usse wo ehsaas nahi hua jo hona chaahiye tha.

Usne apne haath ko tatola. Par abhi bhi khaalipann hi uske haath laga. Maathe par lakeere chhaayi aur uski aankhein khul gayi.

Usne apne bagal se dekha. Uska pyaara chhota bhai waha nahi tha. Bistar ke dusre chhor par jo laiti thi woh thi uski sauteli badi behan, Bhumika.

Tej ne dekha kaise Bhumika bade se takiye se chipke hue thi.

Usse yaad aaya ki Veer toh Paris gaya tha. Ab woh unn sabke beech maujood nahi tha. Uske jaane ke baad se hi uska mood off ho chuka tha.

Woh akeli si pad gayi thi. Na hi ab khaana khaane me mann lagta tha, na hi kisi kaam me ya kisi se baat karne me.

‘Do din bhi nahi hue tumhe gaye. Aur mujhe tumhari yaad sataane lagi hai.’

Sochte hue woh uthi. Bistar ko punaah dekhi. Woh beech ki jagah pe khaalipann dekh usse andar se ek bechaini si hone lagi.

Iss waqt Veer ko call karna usne sahi nahi samjha. Aage badh usne kamre me rakhi chair par pade kuch kapdo ko idhar udhar kiya aur usse jo chahiye tha woh usse jald hi mil gaya.

Veer ki shirt jo woh jaane se pehle pehna hua tha, woh abhi bhi yahi rakhi hui thi. Usse komalta se utha ke Tej apne chehre ke paas laayi.

Aur ahista se usne shirt ko soongha. Aankhein moond woh uss sugandh me kho gayi. Abhi bhi usme Veer ke badan ki khushboo thi. Ye uski body fragrance thi. Khushboo bhale hi kamzor thi, par Tej ke mann ko shaant karne ke liye kaafi thi.

Agle hi shan Tej ne uss shirt ko apne seene se laga liya. Aur wapas bistar par aake woh uss shirt se chipak aankhein band kar lait gayi.

‘Come back soon little brother!’

***

Veer ke ghar me harr baar ki tarah chahal-pahal hua karti thi. Par aaj aisa lag raha tha jaise ghar me kisi ke saath koi anhoni ho gayi ho. Koi zyada baat nahi kar raha tha aapas me. Suman hi thi ek jo sabse baat kar thoda bohut conversation ko chala rahi thi. Warna toh sab hi Veer ke jaane se maayus hue baithe the.

Naashte ke baad Tej sofe par baithi hui thi jab Bhumika uske bagal se aake baith gayi.

Bhumika : Aise udaas rahogi toh kaam kaise hoyenge?

Tej (glances) : Aap apna kaam kariye. Mujhe samjhaane ki zaroorat nahi!

Bhumika (frowns) : Kya tum bhool gayi? Veer hum pe ek zimmedari saunp ke gaya hai. Hume toh lagan se uske liye kaamo me haath bataana chaahiye. Right?

Iss baar Bhumika ki baat sunte hi Tej apni peeth seedhe kar ke baith gayi. Woh ye kaise bhul gayi? Veer usse apna kaam saunp ke gaya tha. Uss par bharosa kar ke gaya tha. Iss se behtar mauka kya ho sakta tha apne bhai ke liye kuch kaam aane ke liye.

Jabse woh Veer se mili thi, tab se hi Veer uski dekh-bhaal kar raha tha. Jabki hona ulta chahiye tha. Ek badi behan hone ke naate usse laga tha woh Veer ko protect karegi, uska khayal rakhegi.

Par aisa na hua. Woh kisi bhi tarah apne bhai ke kaam nahi aa paa rahi thi. Aur ye baat andar hi andar usse khaaye jaa rahi thi.

Bhumika : Bhabhi?

Ragini : Huh?

Bhumika : Idhar aaiye na!

Ragini haami bharte hue uske bagal se aake baithi toh Bhumika ne ek chart khol ke saamne table par rakh diya.

Bhumika : Mene kal ye hotel me prepare kiya tha. Ye ek blueprint hai. Hume kaise kaam karna hai, kisko kya kaam karna mene yaha roughly likha hua hai.

Ragini : Ohh! Badhiya Bhumika!

Usne chehre par khushi jhalkaayi. Par andar se uska poora dhyaan Veer pe hi tha. Ye kehna galat nahi tha ki Ragini ab Veer ko apne naye navele pati ke roop me dekhne lagi thi.

Tej ki bauhe blueprint dekhte hi kass gayi. Uski ye sauteli behan uss se kaam me aage nikal rahi thi? Woh peeche kaise reh sakti thi?

Tej : Mujhe kya karna hai?

Bhumika : See! Food truck accha chal raha hai. Lekin kisi ek aur jann ki zaroorat hai. Mom?

Shweta : Hmm?

Bhumika : Kya aap truck me Sonali ki help karwa sakti hai?

Shweta : Truck me? Mujhe laga tha tum mujhe hotel sambhaalne ko kahogi.

Bhumika : Hotel ko mein manage kar lungi. Lekin mein aapki tarah khaana utna accha nahi bana paati. Mera khaana aap jaanti hai. Just so-so hi hota hai. Aap Sonali ki help mujhse better karwa payengi.

Sonali : Koi bhi ho! Mujhe toh bas madad se matlab hai.

Shweta (smiles) : Mere bete ka kaam hai. Mein kyu mana karungi? Tum chinta mat karo, mein madad karwa dungi.

Uske ye kehte hi pal bhar ke liye Bhavna ki nazre Shweta se bhidi. Dono ne ek dusre ki orr dekha. Nazro ki bhidant se aisa laga jaise chingari nikli ho. Aur apne bade-bade thano se bhara seena taane Shweta muskuraayi.

Jaise batlaana chaah rahi ho ki woh apne bete ki yaha madad karwa rahi hai. Baakiyo ki tarah nahi jo baithe-baithe bas khaa pee rahe hai.

Bhumika : Ok! That’s settled then.

Shweta : Mere paas ek aur upaay hai beta.

Bhumika : Kya mom?

Shweta : Mukta naam ki ek aurat hai. Rajasthani khaane me nipud hai woh. Usse mein hotel bhijwa sakti hu.

Bolte hue usne Suman ko dekha. Kyuki Suman, Bhavna aur Tej hi Parijaat ghar ki aurto se waaqif thi. Bhumika, Ragini ye sab nahi.

Suman ne haan me gardan hilaayi.

Par Tej aur Bhavna dono ke chehre par chinta ke bhaav the. Unka mann nahi ho raha tha Parijaat ghar ki aurto ko apne sampark me rakhne ke liye. Magar ye majboori thi. Veer apna nirnay suna chuka tha.

Bhumika : Ohh! Agar aisa hai Mom toh aap zaroor bhejiyega unhe.

Tej : Mene kuch pucha tha.

Bhumika : Ohh haan! Tej tumhe woh Varsha jii ke saath kisaano ka kaam sambhaalna hoga. Umm-

Bhumika ki chinta dekh wahi khadi Suman apne aap bol padi,

Suman : Varsha ki chinta mat kariye aap. Mein hu na! Mein le aaungi.

Bhumika : Ohh thank you Suman aunty.

Abhi woh aage kehti ki tabhi darwaaze par dastak hui. Aur dherr saare log waha jama ho gaye.

"Arre bhai! Ye mein kya dekh rahi hu? Itni bheed?" Ek awaaz baahar se aayi.

Jisse sunn, Bhavna turant uth ke khadi ho gayi.

Bhavna : Purvi!!!

Tej : Maasi!!!

Tej uth ke baahar ko aayi aur Purvi ke gale se lipat gayi.

Purvi : Ahn! Meri beti!!! *Muah* Kaisi ho?

Tej (smiles) : Acchi hu!

Purvi : Aur ye sab kaun hai? Bhavna?

Bhavna : Mein khud nahi jaanti. Ye abhi hi aaye hai.

Aaye hue log tabhi haath jod ke khade ho gaye.

Aadmi : Hum sab ko badke bhaiya Shyaam ne bheja hai didi.

Bhavna : Ohh! Kisaan bhailog hai aap sab.

Aadmi : Jii didi!

Bhavna : Suman?

Suman : Jii?

Bhavna (smiles) : Ye dur se aaye hai. Ye hamaare mehmaan hai aur ab se hamare saath kaam karenge. Inhe acche se khaana khilwao.

Aadmi : Dhanyavaad didi! Kripa aapki.

Bhavna : Tej! Tumhara kaam shuru hone wala hai.

Tej : I know Mom!

Bhavna : Apne bhai ko niraash mat karna.

Tej : Hmph! Woh meri tareef ke pul baandhega.

Kehte hue woh sabhi ke saath andar chali gayi. Ab usme ek naya josh dikhayi de raha tha.

Purvi : Kaha hai hamare Raja-sahab? Hmm?

Bhavna : Paris me!

Purvi : Ehh?

Bhavna (nods) : Business ke liye gaya hua hai.

Andar hi andar woh ye baat jaanti thi ki jhooth hai. Lekin, Purvi ko abhi batana usne theek na samjha.

Purvi : Kyaaaa?? Paris?? Paris me kyu? Itni dur? A-Aur aise achanak se? Yaha mein uske liye uska mann-pasand namkeen, mere haatho ka aam ka achaar aur ye gulaab-jamun special uske liye bana ke laayi hu.

Bhavna : Ab jab aayega, tab tum hi usse apne haatho se khila dena.

Ek feeki muskaan liye woh boli.

Purvi : Hmph! Aane do usko. Khud keh raha tha ki maasi aaya karo ghar aur ab maasi ghar aayi hai toh janab gaayab hai. Paris ki serr kar rahe hai.

Dono abhi yu hi porch me khade baatein kar rahi thi jab scooty ki awaaz unhe sunaayi di aur baahar dekha toh paaya ki do aur mehmaan aaye hue the.

Bhavna : Arre? Aao baccho!

"Hehehe~ Good Morning Tai jii!!!"

Scooty se utar Kavya daud ke Bhavna ke gale se lag gayi.

Purvi : Aur hamare gale nahi lagogi?

Kavya muskuraate hue Purvi ke seene se bhi lag gayi. Arohi apni scooty lock kar, muh par se stowl hata ke aur aankho par se chashma hata ke gaadi ki dickey me unhe rakh ke andar aayi.

Arohi : Umm- Wo…! Veer ne call kar bataya tha ki usse mujhse kaam hai toh mein ghar par aake sabhi se mil lu.

Bhavna (smiles) : Hmm! Tum andar jao, sab samajh aa jayega.

Arohi : Jii!

Kavya : Bhaiya bohut bekaar hai. Dekho! Fir se foreign chale gaye. Aur woh bhi Paris. Mujhe leke bhi nahi gaye. Agar mere liye gifts nahi laaye na toh dekhna fir-

Arohi : Woh kaam se gaya hai Kavya. Tumhe bas khaane aur gifts ke alawa aur kuch nahi soojhta kya?

Kavya : Ahhh! Khaane se yaad aaya. Tai jii! Naashte me kya bana hai?

Bhavna (smiles) : Tumhari dusri Tai jii ne aaj sandwiches banaaye hai.

Kavya : S-Sandwiches!!? Ahh! W-Wo bhi tai ji ke haath ke? Unke jaisa khaana koi nahi bana sakta.

Apni choti behan ki harqato ko dekhte hi bechari Arohi ke gaal sharm se laal ho gaye.

Arohi (blushes) : K-Kavya!! Humne abhi ghar par nashta kiya tha na?

Kavya : Haan toh? Mujhe Tai ji ke haath ka bhi khaana hai. Zyada se zyada kya hoga? Pait fulega? Usme kya? Mein fresh ho lungi. Hum abhi thodi hi jaane waale hai.

Arohi (blushes) : T-Tum~

Arohi ko itni zyada sharm aa rahi thi ki woh apna chehra chhupa ke yaha se bhaag jaana chaahti thi. Par Kavya ye toilet waali baat itni asaani se bol gayi kyuki woh sabhi ko apna maanti thi. Uske liye ye ghar bhi uska hi tha. Aur ye log bhi. Toh fir sharm kaisi?

Do qadam badhaate hue tabhi Kavya ko kuch dhyaan aaya aur woh peeche aate hue Bhavna ko dekhi,

Kavya : Arre ek minute! Tai jii! Aap bhi Tai jii ho. Aur Bhumika dii ki mamma bhi toh Tai jii hai mere liye. Arrrghhh! Aise me toh mujhe kitta confusion hoga. Mein aap dono ko tai jii kaise bula sakti hu?

Uske chul-bule andaaz ko dekh Bhavna muskuraayi.

Bhavna : Mein tumhe iska hal bataati hu. Theek hai?

Kavya (nods) : Yes! Please~

Bhavna (smiles) : Mein tumhari dusri Tai jii se ek-do saal choti hu. Toh tum mujhe choti Tai ji kehke bula sakti ho. Aur unhe badi Tai jii kehke. Theek hai na?

Kavya ki aankho me agle hi pal chamak aa gayi. Samasya choti si thi par woh bechari iss se kaafi samay se joojh rahi thi. Bhavna ka hal sunte hi woh itna prasann ho gayi ki khushi ke maare jhoom uthi.

Kavya : Arre waah Tai jii! M-Matlab choti Tai jii! Aapne meri problem hi solve kar di. Hehehehe~ Thank youuuuu~

Aur woh bhaag ke andar chali gayi. Uske jaate hi Arohi ne maafi maangi.

Arohi : W-Woh! Sorry! Hum naashta kar ke hi aaye hai. Lekin pata nahi kyu Kavya…! Woh aisa hi karti hai. Isliye-

Bhavna ne usse beech me hi kaat diya. Uske sarr par haath ferr woh muskuraayi.

Bhavna : Paagal ho kya? Ye tumhara hi ghar hai. Balki tumhe bhi uski tarah issi haq se pesh aana chahiye. Agar mere bete ko pata chalega toh kya sochega woh?

Purvi (smiles) : Arohi beta! Tum shaant swabhaav ki ho mein jaanti hu. Par apne logo se kyu reserved rehna? Khul ke raho haan? Mujhe iss maamle me tumhari chulbuli behan behad pasand hai. Fufu~

Arohi ne sharm ke chalte bas dheere se sarr haan me hilaaya aur andar chali gayi. Uske jaate hi Purvi ne Bhavna ki nangi kamar par ek chikoti kaati.

Bhavna : Ahhn! Kya kar rahi ho?

Purvi (smiles) : Hoooooo~ Tum toh badi chalaak nikli haan? Khud ko choti Tai jii? Aur unhe Badi Tai jii? Hmm? Soch ke hi mujhe excitement ho raha hai ki kya hoga jab Kavya andar jaa ke unhe Badi Tai jii kehke bulayegi? Fufufu~

Iss baar Bhavna ke gaalo par aaj itne dino baad laali chhaa gayi. Jaise aaj maano woh apni kisi sharaarat me pakdi gayi ho. Usne turant hi apna muh ferr apni haya ko chhipaaya.

Bhavna : Kuch galat kaha kya? Yahi satya hai! Bhumika se mene uski janm tithi puchi hai. Woh mujhse ek-do saal badi hi hai.

Purvi (smiles) : Tum kehti ho toh maan leti hu. Wese Bhavna!?

Bhavna : ??

Purvi : Kahi hamare ladke ka kahi chakkar toh nahi chala raha? Paris achanak kaise chala gaya? Hmm? Kahi vilaayti toh nahi hai koi? Haan?

Bhavna (smiles) : Tum khud hi puch lena uss se.

Purvi (sighs) : Sach me! Tumhara mann nahi karta kabhi jaan'ne ka?

Kehte kehte woh andar jaane lagi. Par Bhavna wahi khadi rahi aur ahista se boli taaki Purvi ko sunaayi na de,

"Mann toh bohut karta hai. Lekin jab uska mann chaahega…! Mujhe bata dega."

***

Luxembourg Gardens
Paris, France
Evening ~ 5:13 PM

Veer aur Ava dono iss park me ek dusre ke bagal se baithe hue the. Woh dono hi scenery ko enjoy kar rahe the. Ava ki security aur bodyguards ne public ko unn dono se dur rakha hua tha. Nahi toh Ava ke liye ye sab enjoy karna possible nahi tha.



Dono ke hi haatho me garma garam buns the, jo Ava ne hi raaste me ek bakery shop se khareede the.

Aur dono uska lutf utha rahe the.

Ava : How are they?

Veer : Pretty Good!

Ava : Jab mein yaha first day aayi thi, tab mene ye ussi shop se liye the. Mujhe kaafi pasand aaye the. Back then…! Mom bhi yahi mujhe dilwaya karti thi. Jab mein unke saath streets me shopping par nikla karti thi.

Veer : Ohh!

Aaj pehli baar Ava ne uss se kuch apne ateet ke baare me share kiya tha. Woh shaanti se sunn raha tha sab kuch.

Ava : Iss park me ye mera bhi pehli hi baar hai.

Veer : I see!

Ava : It's nice. Isn't it?

Veer : Hmm!

Woh kuch derr shaant rahi. Shayad kuch bolna chaah rahi thi par bol nahi paa rahi thi. Fir akhir me usne bol hi diya,

Ava : Thank you!

Veer : Huh?

Ava : Tum…! Tum mere liye aaye. Tumhare hone se mujhe safe feel ho raha hai.

Veer : Well! Mene aapko kaha hua hai. Jab tak aapke peeche pade uss insaan ka pata nahi laga leta, tab tak aapko protect karunga.

Ava (smiles) : Suddenly, it sounds romantic.

Veer : Ahem!

*Ding*

[Ava's favourability : 39]

Woh tabhi khadi hui aur boli,

Ava : Let's go!

Veer : Kaha?

Ava : Come na! Yaha malls mene explore nahi kiye. Kahi chalte hai?

Veer : Agar aap yahi chaahti hai toh-

Ava (smiles) : Drive mein karungi!

Veer ki baat adhuri hi reh gayi kyuki Ava daud ke car ki orr bhaag gayi. Aur driving seat par baithate hi usne Veer ki taraf firse apne komal haatho se gun bana ke ishaara kiya.



Uski sharaarto ko dekh Veer andar hi andar muskura baitha. Ava dheere-dheere uske saamne khul rahi thi. Ye acchi baat thi.

Car me baithate hi dono waha se chal diye. Aur security unke peeche peeche baaki cars me aane lagi.

Veer bagal se baithe Ava ke husn me khoya hua tha.

Soch raha tha ki kitna mushqil hota hoga ek celebrity hona. Na hi aap chenn se public me ghoom sakte the, aur na hi chenn se akele me kahi jaa sakte the.

Ek prakaar se khule aasmaan ke neeche rehte hue bhi Ava kahi na kahi pinjre me band hi thi. Uska haal Kaera ki tarah hi tha kuch hadd tak.

Veer ye sochte hi maayus ho gaya. Ye teeno ladkiya. Kitni hi pareshaniyo me thi apne aap me.

Woh jo abhi kar sakta tha woh tha Ava ko kam se kam uss insaan se chhutkara dilaana.

Jald hi woh ek bade hi famous spot ke saamne the.

***

Galeries Lafayette
Evening 7:18 PM



Paris ka ye mall sabse zyada popular aur alag hi prakaar ka shopping centre tha.

Beauty aur fashion se sambandhit samagriyo ke liye ye jaana jaata tha. Paris ka aadmi fashion ke maamle me aage bhi tha.

Log khaali odhne ke kapdo par hi bohut zyada paisa kharch kar diya karte the.

Veer andar iss mall ki khubsoorti ko nihaar raha tha. Aur Ava apne liye dresses pasand kar unhe try karne ke liye jaa rahi thi.



Usne baaki bodyguards ko shop me thehraaya hua tha toh koi dikkat nahi thi. Woh baahar aake logo ko check kar raha tha.

Filhaal koi gadbad nazar nahi aa rahi thi. Usne Basic Enemy Tracker ka bhi istemaal kiya. Par koi bhi enemy saamne nahi aayi. Yaani abhi ki sthiti acchi thi.

Ava kapde badal badal ke Veer ko dikhaati aur Veer se puchti ki kaun si zyada better lag rahi hai.

Aisa lag raha tha ek couple shopping pe nikla ho.

Veer se raay leke usne apne liye kuch kapde khareede. Aur Veer ko bhi usne jaan-boojh ke kharidwa diye.

Abhi Ava apne liye kuch jewelries pasand kar rahi thi jab Veer ne dekha ki waha ki ek kapdo ki dukaan se ek aadmi ne ek ladke ko dhakka deke baahar kar diya.

"Haan gaanduo! Dekh lena! Dekh lena ek din tum sab meri kala ke saamne nange ho jaoge. Mere peeche peeche bhaagoge. Fir mein ghaas tak nahi dalunga tumlogo ko…!"

Baahar pheka gaya ladka unn logo par french me badbada raha tha.

Curiosity ke chalte Veer uski orr badha aur,

'Check'

*Ding*

[Name : Louis
Age : 28
Status : Unemployed Fashion Designer.

Bio : Louis, ek bohut hi talented fashion designer hai. Lekin aksar uski fashion drawings ko log ignore kar dete hai. Jiske chalte woh ab tak unemployed hai. Usse employment ki sakht zaroorat hai. Apni craft ko lekar bohut serious hai. Paiso se zyada usse apni craft pasand hai. Ek mauke ki talaash me hai. Abhi tak woh kisi bade invester ki nazro me nahi aaya hai. Warna kisi badi brand ne usse hire kar liya hota ab tak. Focused rehta hai, extremely creative hai, aur baaki cultures ke pehnaave ko openly explore karta hai.

Favourability : 5
Relationship : Strangers]

Uska status padhte hi Veer ki aankhein hairat me fel gayi.

'Kahi ye wahi toh nahi-!?'

Usse yaad tha Profit Path ke Path-1 me ek jagah par question mark bana hua tha.

Ye aadmi fashion designer tha. Veer ko issi ki toh talaash thi. Kya ye wahi tha?

Veer : Hey there! My friend! Kya hua?

Veer ne uska kandha thaam bolna shuru kiya. Woh french me hi bol raha tha.

Uska translator upgraded tha toh Veer ke liye language barrier tha hi nahi. Woh kisi bhi bhaasha ko samajh sakta tha aur bol sakta tha.

System ke internal features me se ek tha ye.

Louis : Ah! My good friend. Ye log harami hai. Mujhe dhakke maar ke baahar nikaal diye. Mein apni fashion drawings inke paas laaya tha. Ye dekho!

Usne apni dherr saari drawings dikhaayi jinhe dekh Veer ko kuch khaas samajh toh nahi aayi par System ne kaha tha ki ye banda talented hai. Toh Veer ne apna natak shuru kar diya,

Veer : My friend! You are extremely talented. Adhbhut! Kamaal hai! Shandaar! Mene iss se pehle itni behatreen fashion drawings nahi dekhi.

[Ye kuch zyaada nahi ho gaya!? He definitely won't fall for this.]

Veer ki baat sunn, Louis chuppi saadhe usse taakta raha.

'Fuck! Did I mess up!?'

[Of course! Aisi baat pe bhala kaun yakeen-]

Pari apni baat poori karti ki tabhi Louis achanak se Veer ke gale lag gaya aur zorr se sisakne laga.

Louis : Huuuuuu~ Aaj tak meri itni tareef kisi ne nahi ki. T-Tumhari aankhein asli kala ki qadar karna jaanti hai my friend. Merci my friend…! Merci…!

French me thank you bol, woh Veer ke haath ko thaam zorr se hilaane laga.

[What the fuck…!? He believed that shit!!?]

Veer : Hahahaha! Yes my friend. Kya naam hai tumhara?

Louis : I am Louis dear. What's your good name?

Veer : Mein Veer! Mere paas tumhare liye ek offer hai.

Louis : Ohh?

Veer : Kya tum mere liye kaam karoge? India me?

Louis : I-India?

Veer : Yes! Ye mera card hai.

Veer ne apna card uski breast pocket me rakh diya,

Veer : Jab apna decision lo. Toh mujhe call karna. Mera India me food ka business hai. Lekin clothes ka bhi shuru kar raha hu. I need a designer. Agar tum haan kehte ho toh tumhare neeche baaki designers kaam karenge. I'll make you the head of them. Sochna zaroor iss baare me.

Louis (nods) : O-Okay my friend. Merci~

Woh thoda asmanjas me pad gaya. Haan kahe ya na kahe? Usne koi jawaab nahi diya. Aur samay ki maang kar woh waha se fauran hi nikal gaya.

Tab tak Ava ki shopping bhi poori ho chuki thi.

Aur mall se nikal woh dono abhi street par hi chal rahe the jab Ava ne dekha ki road ke uss paar ek alley me neon lights jal rahi thi.

Ava : Ohh? Waha kya hai?

Uske sawaal ka jawaab uske peeche chal rahe guard ne diya,

Guard : Miss! Woh area accha nahi. Waha locals slot machines me lottery khelte hai.

Ava : That's nice!!! Kya hum waha chal sakte hai?

Guard : No miss! Itne saare log waha jayenge toh log hum par aur shaq karenge. Koi bhi galat intentions rakh sakta hai. Aur aapko chot pohucha sakta hai.

Ava : But- I really wanted to explore.

Guard : No Miss!

Ava ka muh agle hi pal utar gaya. Woh jaanti thi guard uski safety ke liye hi usse mana kar raha tha. Par fir bhi woh jaana chaahti thi.

Veer : Let's go!

Ava : Huh?

Guard : Hey! Ye tum kya bakwas kar rahe ho? Meri kahi baat tumhare dimaag me nahi gayi kya?

Veer : Don't worry! Mein personally jaunga unke saath. Unhe kuch nahi hoga.

Guard : Mujhe tum par bharosa nahi hai. Agar aisa hi hai. Toh mein bhi chalunga.

Veer : Fine! Why not!? Aaiye Miss Nat!

Ava : Hey! You can call me just Nat. Miss Nat ki zaroorat nahi hai.

Veer : Ji nahi! You are my hirer. Aapke under kaam kar raha hu mein. It's better to use honorifics in a profession.

Veer ki baat Ava ko iss baar dil pe lagi. Pehle woh duri bana rahi thi uss se. Aur ab jab woh uske prati khulne lagi thi toh Veer uss se duri bana raha tha. Usse dhyaan aaya ki unka rishta bas ek bodyguard aur ek celebrity ka hi tha. Uss se zyada kuch nahi.

Par uske ye vichaar agle hi pal gaayab ho gaye jab usne alley ke andar ka nazaara dekha.

Ava mask lagayi hui thi isliye usse koi pehchaan na saka. Par uske kamuk badan par harr ek aadmi ki hawas bhari nigaahein ghoom rahi thi. Alley ke andar toh wese hi log nashe me dhutt rehte the. Ava unke liye bhediyo ke jhund me aayi ek khubsoorat billi ke samaan thi. Jisse bhogne ke liye unki aankhein hawas saaf bayaa kar rahi thi.

Aur unn gandi nazro ko bhaanpte hi uski bauhe chidhan me sikud gayi.

Woh teeno galiyo se hote hue aur andar jaane lage. Abhi woh aage badhte ki ek aadmi ne unhe rok liya.

Uski ek dukaan thi. Jisme woh alag alag prakaar ke phal rakhe hue tha.

Aadmi : Tum sab!!! Kaun ho tum sab? Kis liye aaye ho?

Guard : Tumse matlab? Hum kisi ke liye bhi aaye ho. Tum kaun hote ho ye puchne waale?

Aadmi : Shayad naye ho yaha. Seedhe seedhe puchta hu. Kis liye aaye ho? Khareed-dari karne ya fir-

Woh thoda aage jhuka aur dheere se bola,

Aadmi : Ya fir lottery khelne?

Veer (ahista se) : Lottery khelne.

Aadmi (smiles) : Toh fir pehle yaha se pass lena hoga.

Veer : Ohh! Aur woh kitne ka hai?

Aadmi ne unn teeno ko upar se neeche dekha. Unke acche kapde dekh wo muskuraaya.

Aadmi : Hehehe~ zyada nahi. Bas 100 euros.

Daam sunte hi Ava ka guard bhadak utha,

Guard : 100 euros? Ek jhapad dunga na! Bewakoof samjha hai kya? Abhi police me inform karu ki kya chal raha hai yaha? Baahar se phal ki dukaan lagaaye ho dikhaane aur andar ye kaam chal raha hai? Ek khabar lagte hi sab chaupat ho jayega yaha.

Aadmi thoda darra. Par fir khisiyaate hue bola,

Aadmi : Toh bata do. Par ek baar soch lena. Aisa karne ke baad tum yaha par maujood harr insaan ke coverage me aa jaoge. Soch lo!

Unn teeno ne waha nazre daudaayi toh paaya ki harr aadmi unhe hi ghoor ke dekh raha tha. Khaas kar Ava ke badan ko.

Guard : Tch! 100 euros zyada hai. Apna daam sahi se lagao. Hume bas kuch derr hi yaha khelna hai.

Ava : H-Hey it's okay! 100 euros is not that much-

Guard : Miss aapke liye zyada nahi hai. Par ye aadmi humaare kapde dekh ke hume loot raha hai.

Aadmi : Hehehe~ Toh ek kaam karo. Iss ladki ko yaha chorr jao. Aur 10 euros. 10 euros me jitna chaahe utna khel-

Uske muh se ye nikla hi tha aur Ava ka guard uski batteesi todne hi waala tha ki achanak se ek haath tezz gati me aage badha aur uss aadmi ki collor pakad usse ek jhatke me neeche kheech liya.

Aadmi ka phati ke maare chehre se rang udd gaya.

Usne apne saamne dekha, unn teen logo me se ye woh naujavan tha jo ab tak shaant khada hua tha.

Agle hi pal usne dekha ki uss ladke ki aankhein ekdum se poori gehri laal ho gayi. Ye drishya itne paas se dekhte hi uska moot nikalte nikalte reh gaya.

Ek sihran uske poore shareer me fel gayi. Aur tabhi uske kaano me ek bhayanak bhay paida karne waali awaaz padi,

"Zyada hoshiyaari peli, toh aaj raat ghar apne perro par chal kar nahi jaa paoge."

Kehte hue uss ladke ne usse chorra aur woh ghabra ke peeche ko jaa gira.

Uska poora badan kaanp raha tha. Veer agle hi pal muskuraaya aur uski aankho se laal rang gaayab ho gaya. Woh Ava ki taraf mudte hue bola,

Veer (smiles) : He agreed!

Ava : Ahn!!?

Ava ke guard ki bhi nazre aashcharya ke maare feli hui thi. Woh jaanta tha ki Veer ne kuch toh kiya tha. Par kya?

Guard : T-Tum-!!

Pehle woh Veer ko ek aam ladka hi samajh raha tha. Par Veer ke iss show ko dekh ab woh andar se jaan gaya tha ki ye ladka jitna simple dikhta tha utna tha nahi.

Idhar uss aadmi ki orr Veer ne 10 euros feke aur Ava aur guard ke sang pass leke woh andar chal diya.

Agal bagal harr jagah koi na koi dukaan lagi hui thi. Par unhi dukaano me log kuch na kuch juaa khel rahe the. Ya koi business ki baatein kar rahe the. Toh kahi koi drugs ki fer badli kar raha tha.

[Master! Ye woh area hai jaha log illegally kaam kar rahe hai.]

'I know Pari!'

[Ye sab dukaan inka nakli dhandha hai. Sirf dikhaawe ke liye. Taaki raid ke dauran ye bach sake.]

'Yeah!'

Guard : Dekha Miss! Isliye mein aapse keh raha tha ki ye area theek nahi.

Ava : Yes! I understand. It was my fault.

Usne chalte chalte sarr jhuka liya.

Veer : It's okay! As long as you're safe. Nothing else matters right now.

Ava ne sarr utha ke Veer ki peeth ko dekha. Uski aankho me chamak thi. Aur woh bud-budaate hue boli,

"Thank you~"

Woh teeno hi wahi lagi ek slot machine ke paas aaye.

Guard : Mein aas paas nazre ghuma ke aata hu. Tum yahi rehna Miss ke paas.

Veer : Don't worry!

Guard ko kahi na kahi ab Veer pe bharosa hone laga tha. Isliye woh agal bagal ki galiyo me nazar maarne chala gaya.

Par wo sabhi ye nahi jaante the ki yaha aur kaun kaun baitha hua tha.

"Terashima!!!"

Ek dukaan ke andar video cassettes khareedte hue aadmi ne apne bagal se khadi ladki se kaha.

Ye koi aur nahi, Chris hi tha.

Wahi kaala French aadmi. Aur uske bagal se behroopiya bane Terashima, wahi japani ladki khadi hui thi.

Terashima : Hmm! Yes! It's confirmed.

Chris : Andre!! Tum record kar rahe ho na?

Chris ne apne baayi orr khade aadmi se kaha. Woh bhi French hi tha.

Andre apne coat ki upar ki jeb ko sahi kar bola,

Andre : Sab record ho raha hai. Don't worry!

Terashima : Make sure uska chehra saaf saaf nazar aaye.

Andre : Chinta mat karo. Shaant raho bas.

Idhar slot machine ke nazdeek aate hi Veer ne Ava ko usse istemaal karne ke liye kaha.

Ava iss waqt aisi lag rahi thi jaise ek choti bacchi pehli baar kisi mall me ya circus me jaake cheezo ko dekhti hai.

Woh lever kheench ke jackpot nikaalne ki koshish kar rahi thi aur Veer mand hi mand muskura raha tha.

Veer : Aise jackpot nahi lagta madam. Ye class 3 machine hai. Randomly numbers generate hote hai. Isme jackpot lagne ki probability bohut hi slim hoti hai.

Ava (smiles) : Ohh achha? Tum dekhna fir abhi. Dekho mein kaise jeetati hu. Watch me!

Ava ne do teen baar aur try kiya par koi safalta haath nahi lagi. Par chauthi hi baar me.

*Kling* *Kling* *Kling*

Beech ka middle column poora ka poora same number se bhar gaya. Dekhte hi Veer achambhav me reh gaya. Aur Ava khushi se jhoom uthi.

Ava : See??? Hahahaha! I won!!! Mene kaha tha na?

Veer (smiles) : Yeah yeah! Dekha mene. You sure are lucky. Mein jaata hu iske owner se baat karne. Ab toh usse jackpot ka prize dena hi padega.

Jaate jaate woh jaise hi machine se peeche hua toh,

Ava ke kamuk badan ki jhalak usne li.

Aur Ava uski aankho me hi jhaank rahi thi.



Veer ko halka sa uska cleavage nazar aaya.

Veer : Ahem!

Ava (smiles) : Like what you see?

Veer (blushes) : M-Mein aata hu. Wait for me!

Ava bas ek cute si smile liye wahi khadi rahi. Usne firse apna muh mask se dhak liya. Woh bhul hi gayi thi usne mask beech me nikaal diya tha.

Aur Veer ko jaata dekh uske gaalo par cute se dimples aa gaye.

Veer idhar slot machine ke owner se baat kar raha tha jab usse kisi cheez ka andesha hua,

'Something is wrong.'

Aur fauran hi usne,

*Ding*

[Basic Enemy Tracker is in use.]

[2 enemies found nearby.]

Notification padhte hi Veer ka shareer thanda pad gaya.

Woh ek jhatke me peeche palta,

"Avaaaa!!!"

Par uske palatate hi,

*Fsssssssss*

Ek smoke bomb waha aake gira aur chaaro aur dhua dhua ho gaya.

'Shit!!!!'

[Master! Ava ke paas jaiye. Quick!!!]

Ek jhatke me uski aankhein laal hui aur wo waha se hawa ke jhoke ki tarah uss dhuye me ghusa.

Par Ava waha nahi thi.

'Shitttt!!!!'

Tabhi Veer ko bagal ki alley se ek awaaz sunaayi di,

*BANG*

Aur uska darr aur badh gaya. Ye gunshot ki awaaz thi.

'Fuck!! Fuck! Fuck!!! Enemies pehle nahi thi. Aise achanak se kaise-!? Ava! Be safe!!!'

Woh daudte bhaagte hue uss alley ki orr gaya. Gunshot ki wajah se alleys me afra tafri mach gayi.

"Aaaaaaaaaaa"

"Haaaahhh haaahhhhhhh"

Log cheekhte hue waha se apni jaan bachaane bhaagne lage.

Veer jaise hi uss alley ke andar gaya, uske haath ek buri khabar hi lagi.

'Shit!!!'

Ava ka guard neeche pada hua tha. Uski jaangh me goli lagi hui thi. Aur apni taang pakde woh dard sehen kar uthane ki koshish kar raha tha.

Veer ne aage badh usse apni peeth par uthaaya.

Veer : What the fuck just happened?

Guard : Arggh! K-Kuch samajh nahi aaya. W-Woh! Woh police ki uniform pehne the. M-Mujhe laga wo patrol par aaye hai. Par unhone achanak hi mujhe shoot kar diya.

Veer : Cops?? The fuck!??? Ava kaha hai??

Guard : M-Mere girte hi wo tumhari taraf bhaage. B-Baad me mene Miss ko unse bhaagte hue dekha hai. Miss road ke uss side buildings ki orr gayi hai. L-Lekin woh unke peeche pade hai. T-Tum mujhe chorro- Urrrghhh! A-Aur Miss ke paas jao jaldi.

Veer : Fuccckkkk!!!!

Veer alleys se jaise hi baahar nikla, uski saasein saamne ho rahe drishya ko dekh aur atak gayi.

*BANG* *BANG* *BANG*

Achanak hi aayi gang ne Ava ki baaki security jo road par pehle khadi hui thi unn par shootout shuru kar diya.

Aur pal bhar me waha hahakaar mach gaya. Log bhaybheet hoke cheekhte chillaate hue apni jaan bachaane cover lene lage. Toh kahi kuch bhaagne lage.

'Shit!!! Shit!!! This is bad!!!'

Veer ne car ke peeche cover leke ishaare se security me se ek aadmi ko bulaaya jo sabse paas tha.

Uske aate hi Veer ne Ava ke ussi guard ko security ko thamaaya.

Veer : Seedha hospital! Theek hai?

Woh aadmi haami bhara aur Guard ko peeth par laad waha se dur le jaane laga.

Shootout ab bhi chaalu tha aur dono hi paksh cover leke raaste par hi fights lene lage.

Ye main road thi. Aisi bhaari bheed me ye sab karna koi chota kaam nahi tha.

"Ava!!! Hang in there!"

Veer security waalo ki madad karna chaahta tha. Par uske liye abhi Ava sabse zyada zaroori thi.

Woh turant hi sabse saamne waali ek badi si building me ghus gaya.

Udhar alley ke andar hamla hote hi Andre, Chris aur Terashima alert uo gaye.

Apni kamar se ek ek gun handgun nikaal woh waha se nikalne lage.

Terashima : Tumne record kiya na?!

Andre : Everything! Yes!!

Chris : Lekin order toh usse zinda pakadne ka tha na? Ye firing kyu?

Terashima : I fucking don't know!!! LEAVE!! QUICK!!!

Andre : Contact karo aur saari info batao jaldi.

Terashima : Chrisss!!!

Chris : I'm on it!!!

Unke baahar aate hi,

*BANG* *BANG* *BANG*

Shootout fight jaari hi thi.

Terashima : What the hell?

Chris : Kitne goons hire kiye gaye hai?

Andre : There are many!!!! Search for him quick!!!

Tabhi Terashima ko ek voice message aaya. Jo uske ek kaan me lage single ear headset me sunaayi diya. Aur usse sunte hi,

Terashima : Damn it!! Quick!!! Building ke andar.

Woh teeno daud rahe the. Aur firing se bachte hue woh teeno hi uss building me ghus gaye.

Kisi sajjan purush ne police ko khabar kar di thi. Aur jald hi apna siren bajaate hue police waha aa dhamki.

Par unke aane se pehle hi woh gang waha se rafu chakkar ho gayi.

Bache the toh woh the Ava ke security waale. Kuch buri tarah ghaayal the toh kuch apni maut ki kagaar par the.

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Idhar upar building me itne logo ko yu andar daudte bhaagte dekh sab sehem gaye. Baahar ki shootout ki awaazein kya kam thi jo ab suspicious se log building me aa dhamke?

Ye building ek IT tech company ki thi. Night shift waale employees ka kaam abhi shuru hi hua tha jab ye sab ghatit ho gaya.

Woh neeche jhuke apne aap ko safe rakhne ki koshish kar rahe the. Company ki security waale apna kaam kar rahe the par woh bechaare khud hi darre hue the.

Veer daudte hue upar ki orr stairs se jaane laga.

Neeche usse Ava kahi dikhaayi nahi di thi. Iska matlab woh unn sab se bhaag ke upar bhaagi hogi.

'Please!! Please!!! Just don't die…!'

[Masterrr!! If she's smart then woh bhaagte bhaagte upar hi gayi hogi. Kisi ek floor pe nahi ruki hogi.]

'Alright!'

Veer Pari ki baat samajh gaya aur woh seedhiyo ko laanghte hue sabse upar waali floor par pehle jaane laga.

Kahi ek ek floor me dhoondhne ke chalte derri na ho jaaye. Issi baat ka darr tha usse. Uska dil zorro se dhadak raha tha.

Bhale hi Ava se uski utni jaan-pehchaan nahi bann paayi thi. Par Veer bilkul bhi usko marrte hue dekhna nahi chaahta tha. Apne liye bhi aur…!

Sonia aur Kaera ke liye bhi.

'Mission kyu nahi mila mujhe abhi tak? Fuccckkkk thisss!!! At least unki location toh pata chal jaati.'

[That means abhi tak woh pakdi nahi gayi hai. Be quick! Hum unhe bacha sakte hai uske pehle hi.]

Sabse upar aate hi Veer daud ke poore corridor me ghoomne laga.

Lekin ab bhi Ava usse kahi nazar nahi aa rahi thi. Uski ghabrahat aur badhti jaa rahi thi.

"Ava!! Avaaaaa!!! Where are youu???"

Woh waapas iske neeche waale floor me jaane ke liye muda ki tabhi uske peeche se ek awaaz aayi,

"Oh! Are you looking for someone?"

Awaaz sunte hi Veer ka shareer kaanp gaya. Sirf Veer hi nahi. Pari ke andar bhi ek sihran daud gayi.

Woh dheere se peeche muda. Aur palatate hi,

Uski aankhein phati ki phati reh gayi.

"T-Tum!!???"

Agle hi shan,

*Ding*

[Mission : Get to Ava as fast as possible.

Rewards :
1) ??? Points.
2) 1 Random skill (any tier)

Mission failure penalty : 5000 points deduction.

Location : 3rd floor.]
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Aaj ke liye itna hi guys.
I know update late hai. Meri condition kuch theek nahi thi. Isliye ye bada update. 6.1k words ka update hai ye. Toh apna apna kaam karne ka. Likes thokne ka aur revos rakhne ka guys.
Dhanyavaad!

 

[spritemathews]

Fantastic update

 

[Werewolf]

Fantastic update

Abey abhi mujhe 2 minute hue hai update daale.
Naatak toh realistic kar thoda.

 

[spritemathews]

Abey abhi mujhe 2 minute hue hai update daale.
Naatak toh realistic kar thoda.

Dear I bookmark them so that I can read it in free time

 

[Werewolf]

nice1

Once again brilliant update with amazing writing skills,
1 baat pata chal gai ke veer kyu aya he paris,
Use abhi yaha ke khatron ka maybe pata nhi he aur shayad use ye bhi nhi pata he ke crimson se us ka samna ho skata he,
Kafi time baad veer ne apne stats ko increase kiya he,
Ab us ka intelligence 150 hogya he means kaera ke level pe aur us ne advanced Martial arts skill bhi purchase kar li he,
Veer ko ava ke dard ka bhi andaza hua he ke wo kin takleefo se guzar rahi he,
And end me as expected apka suspense ke crimson grace martin ke peche kyu he aur aage kiya hoga,

Superb update bro as expected,
Lot's of love and respect bro

Jabardast update bhai

Ye to Ava ki mom hai koun hai jo uski mom je piche hai

Ye to purani filmo ke seen ke jesa h jha villen hero ku maa ya baap ko kidnep karke hero ko blackmail krta tha sayad yaha bhi esa hi dekhne ko mile.

Mast update h bhai aapka

Superb mindblowing update bhai

Awesome as always.

The build up is great so the entire arc should be magnificent

Superb update

Why not using basic enemy tracker to track and hunt them down like he did during Slogan's time

Nice update bro

Nice update bro

Fabulous excellent outstanding fantastic update भाऊ

To ava ne veer ko apne security keliye bulaya hey kyu uske jann ko khatra hey isliye...


Matlab ohh veer par bohot jada vishwas karti hey ki ohh usko bacha sakta hey hmm..

Uski luxury life Dekh ke hi veer ki ankhe choudi hogyi hogi bhi kyu nhi paheli bar dekh raha tha na, ismey ava ne usko bachane ke badle payment our ye vanity bhi as a gift offer Ki, Lekin veer ne saf mana kiya ki ohh khud ke dum par lega aise gadi....

Veer ke iss decision Ke badle Ava ke Man mey veer ke prati thodi ijjat badi hi hogi...

Lekin koi kyu ava ko marna cha raha hey

Ya jo dono park mey the vahi to nhi hey insabmey

Aur udher hospital mey bhi koi shaks ava ki mom ko dhundte huve aya hey Matlab ohh uski mom ko bhi jann ko khatra hey

Ya ye sab inki past life se Juda huva hey kuch

Ava ki mom ko khatra hey to tab to veer ko uska mission mil hi jayega, ava ki mom ko bachane ka...

Fabulous Update

Hamasha ki tarah behtreen update tha janab

शानदार जबरदस्त जिंदाबाद
बहुत ही उम्दा
बहुत ही बढ़िया

Awesome update

Nice update

Thanks for coming back on schedule

Wonderful update

Bahut hi badhiya hai diya hai Werewolf bhai....
Nice and lovely update....

Beautiful update bhai

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Sandar update hai bhai

Hmm to veer or nat saath hai or net ka bhi first preference veer hi hai keara and sonia ki tarah sahi hai bhai veer ki itni izzat to banti hai

Wese net ne kaha ki koi uske piche hai or keara or soniya ka bhi to aisa hi tha bhai kya sach main in teeno ka link crimson se hai kuch to aisa hai jo samne hai par kisi ko pata nahi hai

Wese kya hume is arc main keara sonia or suhana and divya dikhengi parishad mai. Ya pure arc main or veer or crimson ki mulakat kab hogi or fight kab hogi or crimson aakhir kyu veer, net, and grace ke piche pada huva hai

Mujhe kyu lag raha hai ki ye wahi I shan hai jo main soch raha hu jiska p se shuru hota hai or R pe khatam jisne apna naam badal kar crimson rakkha hai

Or bhai thoda action scenes dikhao yaar ab thode bore ho rahe hai hum aap hi jaano Wese bhai kya is wale arc main 20 ya 25 update rahenge ya uske jyada ya kam

Bhai crimson arc main excaitment to bahot hai pata nahi kab hume crimson ka real game dikhega or wo pahadwali ladki kab nazar aayegi

Well nice update yara

Fantastic update bro
Matlab maa ko target kar ke beti ko marne ka plan hai dekhte kya hota hai ya maa ko maar ke beti ko torne ka plen hai ye to aage hi pata chalega

excited next update

Oooohhh yeahhhh.... Mza aa gya kaafi wait krwaya bhai ne but finally we got wt we needed...ab kahani Bahar gaaon pe chal ri h.. Veer bhaiya fir se action ke lie ready h...but ye kya mne jo socha whi ho ra h ab wo system wala dusra bnda(mdrchod) Sala Syd 'Ava' ko target kie hue h or bc se kuch or ni hua toh Sala uksi maa ko as a bait target krne wala h hrami...i hate this bloody motherfckr .. Bs may god save veer, ava n her mother too...well one more thing pari & veer ab kaafi ache se ek dusre se smjne lge h.. Although pari ek system but uksi feelings ab kuch insaano wali ho chali h kbi wo veer se jhutha narazgi dikhati toh kbi uski baato se blush b krti h.. I love it bs veer ne kbi use i luv u ni bola.. Bechari kya react karegi, meko soch kr hi mza aa ra h.. BTW next update jldi lana bhai ab ye roller coaster ride rukni Ni chaiye...baaki bhot sara pyaar bhai ko.. Aise hi likhte rho.. Gud luck

Mind blowing, Fantastic, Super update bhai .

Nice update

Shandaar update bro

Bhai mujhe bhi aisa hi lg raha he ke ye wohi he

Love it keep going

Nice one yaar ab lagata hai sahi mai crimson aane wala hai jab dusman tagada ho tab dimag ko goda veer kaise daurata hai interesting

Brilliant update

Nice update

Gajab ke writer ho bhai aap ki story padh ke dil khush ho jata hai .Fabulous mind blowing update Keep it up

Mast update h bhai...

Bhai bus aapse ek request hai Other family member ke sath bhi thoda incest Scene create karo.Thankyou

Bahut hi shandar aur romanchak update bhai

तो finally update आ ही गया।
इस story contest के चक्कर में किसी की भी story में अपडेट नहीं आ रहा, बहुत ज्यादा wait करना पड़ा almost 10 दिन बाद अपडेट आया है

अपडेट 106 में nat ने कहा था की see you soon
उस वक्त वीर ने कहा था may be, तब मुझे ava की बात से लगा था की उसकी स्टोरी खत्म नहीं हुई है यहां से शुरू हुई है।

इस arc में बड़े राज खुलेंगे जिसमे से एक बड़ा रहस्य होगा की grace martin कोमा में कैसे गई और ava के अचानक से india से वापस आने के बाद क्या क्या हुआ।
I guess की crimson का राज grace martin और ava से जुड़ा होगा

जिस हिसाब से crimson ने grace martin को ढूंढा है उस हिसाब से लग रहा की वो बहुत समय से उसे ढूंढ रहा था और may be ava उसका main target ना हो, उसका main target grace martin ही हो।

खैर ये तो तभी पता चलेगा जब वो वापस होश में आएगी और उसके होश में आने के लिए इस arc से बेहतरीन time नहीं है।

Terashima और chris 2 नए किरदार की entry हुई है, पर फिलहाल उनपर comment करना जल्दबाजी होगी, वो किसी भी side हो सकते है शायद crimson की ओर से or may be they will protect ava

एक लड़का जिससे वो सिर्फ 2 बार मिली, दोनो बार मिला कर मुश्किल से आधा एक घंटे के लिए, तो वैसे लड़के के लिए 32 की favorability होना भी बड़ी बात है खासकर इतनी बड़ी celeb के लिए,
Well जैसा इशारा वो last में वीर को करके गई ठीक ऐसा ही इशारा उसने last time भी किया था तब परी ने वीर से पूछा था की क्या उसके और ava के बीच कुछ पक रहा है?

Ava को देख कर अभी तक तो लगा ही है उसका वीर में intrest हैं, ये intrest और बढ़ेगा जब वो kaira को वीर के पास देखेगी क्योंकि kaira को भले ही उसके emotion का पता ना हो लेकिन kaira वीर के ऊपर अपना possession show करने से पीछे नहीं हटती खासकर जब उसे अपने सामने वाले से वीर के लिए खतरा महसूस हो जैसे वो सोनिया के सामने करती है।

और kaira जैसी beauty queen किसी लड़के में interested हो तो लड़का वैसे भी intresting हो जाता है, जब ये खुलासा होगा की kaira was the one who took veer's virginity तब भाई बहुत सारे दिल एकसाथ टूटेंगे, और kaira इस चीज का use जरूर करेगी वीर को completely own करने के लिए या शायद इसकी जरूरत ना भी पड़े क्योंकि वीर तो वैसे भी kaira को लेकर protective हैं।

And without a doubt की kaira वीर के ऊपर नजर रखवा रही हो जैसे उसने house of killers Arc के time रखवाया था

वीर ने 5000 में कौन सी skill खरीदी मुझे नही पता और मैं guess करना चाहता भी नहीं, जब सही वक्त होगा अपने आप पता चल जायेगा, but इस चीज को जरूर predict करना चाहूंगा की वो skill शायद ऐसी होगी जो इस arc के लिए सबसे बड़ा turning point होगा, जो बाजी को वीर की तरफ पलटेगा।

वैसे तो मैं काफी question के answer का wait कर रहा हूं जैसे प्रकाश और सुहाना का conversation, crimson यदि मरा तो उसके system का क्या होगा, क्या system evil काम करने का भी mission देता है और क्या ये arc crimson vs वीर होगा या system vs system, and obviously Veer ने जो pendent पहना है उसका दूसरा रहस्य क्या है।

क्या ये arc भी कम से कम 20 अपडेट consume करेगा?

बाकी तो एक बेहतरीन अपडेट के लिए धन्यवाद,
देर आए मगर दुरुस्त आए
And as always waiting for next update

Hai na broo sach main bahut strong feeling aa rahi hai mujhe

Katai Jahar update diya hai Werewolf

Kaun? bro mai kuch samjha nahi

Ava ki zindagi to sach ne muskilo or dard se bhari hue hai. Ameer hone ka fayda hai to nuksaan bhi hai.. bodyguard or security par hi apni surkhsha kar rahi thi par abhi jiss mussibat me hai usase bachne ke liye veer jaisi power or skill honi jaroori thi.. Khair veer ne ava ka problem solve karne ke liye haan keh diya hai.

Veer ava ki suksha me busy hai or enemy ava ki maa ke paas pahoch gaya hai..

Dekhte aage kya hota hai..
Superb update Bhai

Ab mera mind change horela.. hai kahi mai crimson ke sath wali ladki ko pahad wali ladki na bolne lagunga agar jyada socha to slogan ki beti bol dunga

Zaberdast update bhai keep posting on time

Sahi hai sahi hai bhai boldo sach main thodi dhamaal hogi but maza ayega

Nice update

Super update hai Bhai

Ho sakta he but mujhe kisi naye ki possiblity kam hi nazar aarhi he

Bro koi bhi ho hume it a to pata he jb ye raaz khule ga to bomb to phate ga

Ab to meko aur khujli ho rahi hai ab mai ye bhi bolna chahunga ki crimson ki kahi koi purane relation to nhi grace martin i mean natalia ke family ke sath khair Werewolf aate story ke review par to mai yhi kahunga brother ki iss story me pahle jaisa way ju jaanbuz ke khatm kar rahe ho meko aisa lag rela hai aur mai chahunga ki ju iss story ko jisse way me pahle likhte the usko ek baar checkout kro brother ye sirf meri tarf se ek request hai khair hum sab jante hai ki writter jaise jaise apni kalam aur soch badhate jaata hai waise waise uski soch aur bhi badhti jaati waise hi yaha bhi har Witter ke sath aisa hona normal hai jo ju ke sath bhi hua hai ju ki bhi transformation alag hi level pe hui padi hai writing ke mamle me ki ju kis tarike se har scenes ko samne laate ho aur hum readers ko show karte ho aur khas kar ju ke story ke har arc ek alag hi level se ju likhte ho jo dhire-dhire ju ne aur develop kia hai jo aaj epic stage par hai.

Ab aate hai aaj ke update par to brother bohot amazing aur simple chala ye update par kuch complicated matter isme the jo ju ne isme dikhaye jo future updates ke spoiler saaf jhalka rahe the.

Aur aaj veer ne ava ki ankho me akela pan aur uss panap rahe dard ko bhanp lia jo ek tarah se bohot badhiya bhi hua kyunki ye jaruri bhi tha ava aur veer dono ke liye.Ava ko future me ek sathi i mean uss angle pe abhi mat jana mera matlab uske sath akelapan dur karne wala mil jayega(meko ye likhne pe bhi hasi rahi ye ava wali line)aur rahi baat veer ki to usse uske sath i mean ahem-ahem seal tod ke thode mode points to kama hi lega khair aur bhi fayede hai missions jo ab milne suru honge jab ava ko pata chalega "meri maa ka kidnap ohh !! No" khair uske baad "Ding" "mission is on screen bhosdk" aisa likh aaye to maza aayega khair mission aapane suru honge ab.

Ab aate uss kaale bhalu par jo japani machli par line maar rela tha par uski kaali daal uss machli ke muh me jane se rahi aur n jane kis aur kya active hone ki baat kr rahe the khair ye dono crimson ke association i mean isai ke bande ya kaho to branch killers ho jo bande kidnap wagerah karte ho ya vip's ko target ke kidnap may be for crimson festival, ho sakta hai.

Khair ab aate uss crimson namak launde par jise saaf lahje me bada wala chuuuuuutiya nhi kahna usko mujhe but ek baat kahna padega ki usne veer ko yaha bulane ka plan wahi house of killers arc ke samay se hi rach chuka tha jo aaj plan safal hua aur uska ye plan lastly ava ne hi safal kia jo planned tha yes veer ke liye ye plan tha but idhar ava ke liye i mean jis tarah hospital ka scene dikhaya wo lag raha hai crimson ava ki maa ka rishtedar na nikal pade bc nhi to ek alag hi hype ho jayegi idhar to. Haa ye bhi possible hai ki crimson ava ke father ka sautela beta ho.

Khair ab aate van me entry lene se pahle bodyguard wala scene haa uss samay lajmi thi ki koi bhi bodyguard gussa hoga but jab maine ye scene padha tha to mujhe ye bodyguard ke lakshan dekh lag rela tha ki isse veer ko dekh jalan ya gussa aaraha hai ki itni Sundar singer aur celebrity ke sath jo kisi gair shakhs ko apne pass tak na aan de aur veer uske sath khair lekin ye dout ju ne clear out krdi aur pata chala ki ava par attack hua tha iss liye usne bodyguards aur security hire ki hui hai waisa kuch ya kaho to kidnapping ki koshish khair lekin ek baat bolu to iss baat se kuch points samne aaye ki

1)Jo kidnapper honge unka plan agar successful nhi hua to confirm ye ek preplanned attack ya sirf ek dikhawa tha attack ka jo ava ke dwara veer ko yaha paris me bulane ka plan tha crimson ka yes haa yahi ho sakta hai.
2)Aur dusra ye ki agar crimson ne kidnap karne ki koshish ki hoti simply to wo kr leta aur fail bhi nhi hota but agar uske association ya bando ke hisab se hum soche, jo aaj ke update me wo kaala admi aur japanese women bol rahi thi kal hume active ho jana hai to ye saaf hua yaha ki ye crimson ne sirf veer ko yaha bulane ke liye ava par fake attack krwaya tha khair yaha se crimson ke intelligence ki tulna kar hi sakte hai approx wo bohot high hoga veer se to sochne wali baat hai aur sab stats aur skills jo honge uske pass bc veer ki gand me daal dega wo skill ho sakta hai legendary bhi ho uske pass.

3) Crimson khel gaya ek teer se do nishane mano to ektraf wo ava ke sath aur dusra uska sikar veer ke sath aur meko to ye bhi dout hai ki ava ke father ka kuch relation to nhi iss crimson festival se ho sakta hai kuch bohot bada khuni khel i mean issitrah to ava ki mom comma me nhi jaa sakti aur uske father mar jaye.

4)Aur ek aur point samne hai mere ki ava ke father may be koi serial killer ho sakte ho jinki death kisi ghatna ya police ya government ke karan hi hui ho aur crimson unka beta ya sautela beta ho sakta hai jisse apne pita se kuch jyada hi lagav ho aur usske lakshan dekh to yahi pratit hota hai "HOK" aur ye crimson festival isai se kuch related ho khair ye sab sirf ek soch thi aur bhi kuch kahani maine sochi insab ke hisab se bolo to ava ki maa ki bhi pel du ek-aadh story.

Ab aate ava ki van aur price dene ki ava ko secure karne ke liye to veer ke attitude uss samay kaam kia akhir wo gift kaise le sakta na bilkul na wo bhi to kama raha tha haa aiyashi bilkul wo bhi karega wo future me jab wo uss mukam tak hoga par abhi bhi to ke hi raha hai aiyashi gulamo ke sath ek tarah se khair ab aate hai ava ke scenes par to haa ye to sahi hai ki ava unn dono se bohot alag hai aur akeli bhi jaha Kaera aur Sonia ke pass unka parivar unke pass to hai par yaha ava ke pass uska koi apna uske pass hote hue bhi soya hua hai aur ava sirf uski sanso aur dhadkano ke alawa kuch nhi sunn sakti khair veer ke sath wo
thodi-thodi khul rahi hai aur ek aur baat ki ava apni mom ke pass jati to hogi hi milne bhale wo comma me ho par wo ek beti hai wo bhi akeli to haa wo apni maa se mil apne sari bate unse share jarur karti hogi bhale wo kuch sune ya na sune but haa ye to fix hai aur ava ne american hospital of paris jo america ka hi koi branch hai jisme usne apni mas ko rakha hai.

bhai mast suspense banaya hai story me. ek baat jo ajeeb hai wo ye ki crimson ne pahle veer ko mara kyun nahin jab suhana ko goli lagi thi uske paas pura mauka tha aur agar usko us samay veer ko marna nahin tha to uske aadmiyon ne veer pe goli hi kyun chalai. ye ho sakta hai ki wo suhana ko bachana chahta tha isliye usne veer ko jane diya. might be wo koi aisa hai jo suhana ko janta hai aisa ho skata hai ki wo pushkar ho jise marte samay system mil gaya ho ya usse koi related ho. kyuki wo sonia ka dost tha to ho sakta hai isliye usne suhana ko bachane diya veer ko. pushkar ki ava se koi problem ho sakti hai past me jis wajah se wo uske peeche pada ho to mujhe ye hi lag raha hai ki crimson ya to pushkar hai ya usse se related. ye just mer idea hai asli baat to aap hi likhoge per dimag ghooma ke rakha hai maja aa raha hai

Awesome update bhai..

Mai boleto Sanki Rajput

Super Duper fantabulous update Werewolf bhai...

Shandar update bro
Keep it up

Story bahut hi acchi hai Bhai... Awsm man khush ho gaya bhai padh ke...

Phir se ek shandar update...
Crimson arc ab dhire dhire mahol bnane lga h aur apna veer Ladkiyo me aur jyada chhane lga hai...... adbhut.

Nice behtarin mast awesome update bro

superb update brother

Zabardast update

awesome , super , fantastic update bro

Ab ayega maza
Or ab update time par to aaye ge na

Behtrin umda

Mst
Bahut khas hoge aage ke update

"I need you asap" esme ek commanded tone tha jo sirf kaera ya Eva ki hi ho sakti thi. Kisi ne Eva ka nahi socha just because vo ek baar hi aaye thi aur sab etna familiar nahi the us se including myself.

Maine bhi yehi socha tha ki kaera ne bulaya hai aur finally hume kuch pata chalega but aisa nahi hua so aapne ab tak kaera wale scene ko dikhaya nahi matlab usme kuch bahut bada hua hai aur uski ek achi ploting ban rahi hai

Ragini ke sath milan bhi ho gaya lekin mujhe vo kuch short laga sayad maine jada expect kiya tha aur jaisa aap likhte ho uske according ragini ke liye expectations badh gaye thi lekin jaisa bhi hua acha hua

Sweta aur baki sab apne liye lage pade hai ki kaise bhi karke veer ke dil me jagah bana paye vahi bhawna aati hai ek sentence bolti hai aur sabse upar jake khadi ho jati hai. Just a personality she had. Just amazing

Tej is brilliant too but now I want her to do something productive. I mean apne bhai ke sath to kaise bhi rahe, kuch bhi kare lekin sirf utna hi seemit nahi rahna chahiye usko. She has the potential and she must use it. Veer will be very proud of her then

However bhumika is involving in everything like anything. Bahut jaldi usne sab sikh liya aur step in karke apna paksh bhi rakhne lag gaye. Sayad uski maa ka bahut bada role raha hai esme but still she is doing great

Vaise dekha jaye to bhumika aur arohi me kafi similarities hai. Dono shy hai veer ke samne, dono ko veer ke against koe aur hi chala raha tha aur dono apni feelings share nahi kar pati

Arohi is my favorite character in this story (nidhi ma'am is going parallel with her)

Bas uski ek chhoti si conversation aa jaye aur mera kaam ho gaya. Aapne jis tarike se uske emotions plus mental situations ko dikhaya hai mujhe nahi lagta es se acha koe aur kar kuch kar sakta tha. Also agar emotion wise dekha jaye to arohi ke emotions ko hi sabse barike se dikhaya gaya hai

Aur bhai kya chahte ho aap us se? Kitni baar galti se kiss karaoge? Es baar arohi ki marji se hi kara dena ek chhota pyaar sa kiss.

Also also I'm much more interested in Sonia and veer equation (even more than kaera aur Eva aur anybody else) may be because starting dosti se hue fir business me aur fir...
It will be very interesting to see how these two will go in future

Kavya ka role kam tha kya es baar mujhe jada kuch yaad nahi aa raha. Tej aur bhumika hi ghum rahi hai dimag me bas.

Can I imagine bhumika as a busty chick?

Ye ladki jo system wale bande ke sath thi ye Priya thi na?

Aur agar veer system wale bande ko maar de to kya uska system pari ke sath merge ho sakta hai? Fir to aur strong ho jayegi system

Abhi main kuch purane updates padh raha tha aur usme ek line thi kuch aisi- agar aapne mera galat istemal karna suru kiya ya aapme ego aa gaye to aap mujhe kho doge" aisi kuch line thi jo pari ne boli thi
Why I'm getting a vibe ki last me aisa hi kuch hone wala hai and the end will be like sab kuch pane ke baad bhi kuch hasil nahi hua aur sab khatam ho gaye?

Sach sach batana veer ko maroge na end me aap? Main kisi ko nahi bataunga

Now let's talk about this arc

Pehle to ye ki I know Eva ya nat jo bhi uska naam hai usko aapne kaera ke level ka rakha hai to thoda usko elaborate karo. I know vo abhi dari hue hai aur abhi to sirf ek hi update aaya hai lekin fir bhi main gyaan to chhodunga hi

Kuch aisa dekhna to banta hai jaisa hum kaera ke time dekha tha aur esliye hi kaera naam sunte hi ek alag personality aakhon ke samne aa jati hai
Aisa hi kuch uske sath

Ab ye arc yaha Paris me hai to Divya suhana, Sonia ya kaera ke yaha aane ki koe possibility?

I'm also getting a vibe ki koe to marega es arc me lekin aisa naam dikhae nahi de raha because all the characters are too strong right now aur unme se kisi ka marna abhi ke liye to justify nahi lagega but still koe to marega esme

Are ha us blogger ka kya hua?
Kaha bhag gaye vo?
Kuch faltu me to likhte nahi ho aap
Agar uske bare me likha hai to kuch na kuch to jarur hoga. Bulao usko aur karao ghode ki savari us bechari ko bhi


All the updates are very good bhai. Ab pace banane laga hai so most probably crimson bhi dikh jaye next me. Keep writing

sepereb

Nice one

Bhai Agla update kab tak aaega thoda Hint de do Intezar Nahin ho raha hai

Nice update

Superb update

Superb update

nice

Werewolf बहुत ही भावुक क्षणों में पिरोया है Ava की मनोदशा को...
कई तर्ज पर विचार विमर्श करने को तैयार है विभिन्न किरदार..
आज तो पूरी रूप रेखा तैयार है...
देखते हैं ये सब रहस्य रोमांच रोमांस कहा ले कर हमें जाता है
...
मजेदार भावनाओं के ओतप्रोत से भरपूर मनोरंजक अंक...

Nataliya.....iske family ka kuch purana mamala lagata....iski ma ka hispital me hona ...jabki Ava ne Veer ko ye bataya hai ki wo apni maa ko apne sath hi shift ka chuki hai ...unki medical condition k bare me kuch nahi bataya...

Koi bandna iski maa ke uper nazar laga kar baitha hai...sayad wo Ava ko direct hani na pahucha paye .....ava ko hur kane k liye iski maa ka use kare ...may be..

Ya ho skata hai ki wo koi purana dost ho ..waise jis hisab se usne bola hai ki ...AKHIR MAINE TUME DUDH LIYA ...dost kam dusman jayada partit ho raha hai...

Shandar raha bhai ...festival ka intazar hai.

Excellent update. Is update me emotion the, strategy thi, suspense tha aur aage aane wale tufaan ki chetavni thi.
Kaera ke baare me padh ker laga tha ki usko kitni kathin parasthiti se guzarna pada, lekin Natalia ki kahani sun ker to laga ki Kaera ki mushkile iske saamne kuch bhi nahi thi. Bilkul akeli, duniya se jujhati, apni jagah banati. Aur jo gana likha hai, kya khuub likha hai, dil ko chhu gaya.
Replies padh ke pata laga ki tile wali ladki Madhuri hi hai, lekin asal baat to yeh hai ki weh wahan per kya ker rahi thi, uska kya role hai.
Veer to apne points badhane ke chakkar me tha, per yahan to weh Crimson ke jaal me ja gira hai aur asli baat yeh hai ki Crimson khud kehta hai ki uska shikar aa gaya hai.
Suhana baat sun ker kyon chaunk gayi, kya Pushkar hi Crimson hai (logon ka guess), Nat ki mummy kyon use lekar India se chali gayi thi, Uski mummy ke peeche Crimson kyon aur kab se padha hai, bahut saare prashn hai. Ye Chris aur japanee ladki aur nayi tapak padi.
Dekhte hain aage kya hota hai, per lagta hai ki yeh sab kadiyan kahin se judi huyi hain.

Bahut sandaar update .....
Crimson ko veer ki puri jaankari hai lekin veer kuch bhi nahi janta crimson ke bare me...
veer ne stats badha liye hai dekhte hai kitna advance hua hai

Excellent update Bhai

Jabardasttt updatdee

Really amazing n outstanding update

Bhut hu badhiya update....

Super suspense…

लाजवाब, शब्द नही है व्यक्त करने को।

Siti bjane pr majboor kr diye ho or sath hi ansu bahane pr bhi bhaya Mind blowing superb lajvab amazing wonderful update bhai with awesome writing skills

Ava ki tasveere bhale hi 2 nyi thi pr baki sabhi ne jo us situation me impact dala hai vo kabil-e-tarif hai bhai sandar

Ava ka masti karte huye serious ho Jana

Joye ki bhi yha Charcha Hui or sath hi hame 2 nye character ke naam pta chle, Chris or Hana terasima, jo Sayad couple hi hai or vo Japan se hai pr idhar France ki nagrikta liye huye hai dono, unhe koi mission diya gya hai jisko unhe kal se hi anjam dena hai, sochne vali baat hai kahi ye Dr ya vha ke koi staf member me se to nhi jaha Ava ki mom hai...

WTF ya kahe ya soche ye Crimson hi pda hua hai apni Ava ke pichhe, Lekin vo aisa kyo bola ki Akhirkar maine tumhe dhundh hi liya Grace Martin. Crimson arc ke suru hone se Pahle Kaera ka bolna Crimson blood, Ava pr kidnapping ka asafal pryash karke use darana Taki vo veer ko bula sake idhar or sabse important ki Ava ke pita ki mrityu ke baad uski ma coma me hote huye bhi Crimson ka use dhundhna usi Samay Ava ka aisa album Jisme Uski ma ke liye pyar tadap Chinta or Dukh ka hona...

Yah sab kuchh indicate karta hai ki ye jo Crimson naam ka ghanta hai use veer bjane ka pryash karne vala hai pr veer uska direct dushman bhi nhi hai vo to Ava ki vajah se raste me aa gya hai or ab fasne vala hai...

Veer ne apne status me intelligence ko 150 or apperence ko 120 me rakh kar baki sab ko 140 kr diya hai or uske kharch huye points ko lekr jis tarah se veer or pari ke conversation show kiye hai aapne Vo pure middle class mentality ke normal life ke jaise dikhaya hai or ise padh kr maza aaya halki hasi ke sath... ( Mai bhi middle class hi hu.)

Veer ne ek gold tier ki martal art skill bhi kharid li hai sath hi hame pta chla ki dimond skill kharidne se jyada behtar legendry skill pr focus karna hai...

Akhir kya kahani rahi hogi Ava ki MA ki is Crimson ke sath ya fir Ava ke papa ki, sochne pr majboor hu, baar baar vhi dimag ja rha hai...

Dard to tha isme koi do ray nhi, Ava ke gane me, pr us dard me jo tadap jo bebasi dikhai gyi hai sach me ankhe mund kr usme ghulne ka man karta hai dubne ka ji karta hai...

Pari kuchh der kyo chup ho gyi thi Bolte Bolte, kya vo sach me pad gyi thi ki kya jvab du ya kuchh or hi baat thi jo vo chhupa gyi, pari ne kuchh Ruk kr bola,
You are such a kind Man.

Sabse spacial moment tha jb Ava ne goli Marne ka isara kiya halka sa mushkura kr veer ki taraf lift le pass or Uspr vo picture, I'm sure Readers ki jaan hi le gyi vo...

Uske baad ka Ava ka gana hi tha Best is update me...

I'm truly agree with you bhai

Bhai kya update aaj aayga?

वैनिटी वैन कोई भोग- विलास सम्बंधित आवश्यकता नही थी। एक समय हुआ करता था जब फिल्मी नायिकाओं को शुटिंग के दौरान प्राइवेसी हासिल नही हो पाती थी। कपड़े चेंज करना , बाथरूम जाने की तलब , मेकअप करना , कुछ देर रेस्ट करना इनके लिए बहुत ही मुश्किल काम होता था।
मुझे याद है वैनिटी वैन का प्रयोग सबसे पहले फिल्म अभिनेत्री पूनम ढिल्लों ने किया था। इसके बाद तो हिरोइन क्या हीरो भी इस्तेमाल करने लगे।

नतालिया का कंसर्ट और उसके दर्द भरे गीत सच मे बहुत इमोशनल था। उसका अपनी मां को दर्द भरे गीत द्वारा याद करना अद्भुत था।
कहां से इतना खुबसूरत इंग्लिश लिख दिया आपने वोल्फी भाई ? रेड कलर्स मे लिखा हुआ यह गीत किसी का हैंड राइटिंग लग रहा है। शायद आपकी ही हैंड राइटिंग हो !

नतालिया के दोहरे चरित्र की बहुत अच्छी तरह से निखारा है आप ने। कभी मां की याद मे गमगीन तो कभी वीर के साथ किया हुआ उसका बेबाक अंदाज।
तस्वीर का प्रयोग भी परफेक्ट टाइम पर करते है आप।

फ्रांस के दो जगहों पर कुछ महत्वपूर्ण घटनाएं घटित हुई।
हना तारासिमा और क्रिस का किसी मिशन को लेकर बातें और अस्पताल मे पड़ी एक महिला ग्रेस मार्टिन की तलाश करता हुआ एक युवक। यह युवक शायद वही है जिसका सामना वीर और सुहानी से बेगास मे हुआ था।

बहुत खुबसूरत अपडेट वेयरवोल्फ भाई। आउटस्टैंडिंग। और जगमग जगमग भी।

Bhai crimson arc main excaitment to bahot hai pata nahi kab hume crimson ka real game dikhega or wo pahadwali ladki kab nazar aayegi??

Update aayega weekend par ya nahi ???

Waiting for next one

Nice updates

My god .... Those song lyrics...
Tony kakkar ka poora career dubo do aap to.... Agar do teen aur aise gaane likh diye jaaye...

Ye crimson mujhe bilkul pasand ni aa rha h... Creepy vibes de rha h bahut... Iska kuch karo na Werewolf Sir...

Ava is a strong independent woman but she needs love. A shoulder on which she can put her head to rest. A person on whom she could trust. And Veer is the only person I guess.

Kafi time se Kavya, Arohi nd Kritika gayab h. Aur Nidhi mam ki family bhi... Unhe bhi to dikhaiye ...

Cutiepie juhi kaha h???

Tej nd Bhumika ki chemistry mujhe pasand aa rhi h... wo dono agar real me buddies ban jaaye to dhamal macha dengi.

Karan aur Veer ka interaction bhi aur chahiye mujhe. Veer ka first friend h wo... After golu's unfortunate demise.

Honestly speaking mujhe wo scenes bahut zyada pasand aate h jaha Veer apne family ki help karta h ... Like wo food truck wala scene. Kitna interesting tha... And my god jis way me aapne wo likha h... Especially Tamanna ka aana aur daud k chale jana... Too good ...

Lekin wo bhaagi kyu? Itna pasand aa gya kya food ki kuch bol na payi? Paise bhi ni diye usne... Loss karwa k chali gyi...

Grace ki bhi koi story h kya? Ava ke father... Jayesh... Unka bhi kuch role ho sakta h kya? Kuch surprise element prepare kar rahe ho aap?

Veer and Pari... I love both of them so much. Veer k bina Pari kuch nhi. Aur Pari k bina Veer kuch nhi ... Dono ek dusre se itna jud gaye h ki agar kisi update me Pari ka interaction na aaye to hum readers khud bechenn ho jate h...

Jaldi se jaldi is crimson ko nikaal k feko ..
Ava ko tang karta h... Uska bhurta bana do veer...

Update was superb sir as always. You keep surprising me with your talent. Abundance me bhara h aapke paas... Aur kya dekhne ko milega hame is journey me? I'm curious...

Can't wait for the next update. And plz ads ka kuch karwaiye...
Thank you so much for this beautiful update. Waiting for the new one. Keep writing.

Waiting for next update Werewolf bhai...

Zabardast fantastic update

Fantastic update bro maza aa gaya
Fantastic update bro maza aa gaya

Hi everyone sultan here,
Mera account block hogya he is liye new account banaya he aab is se reviews aaye ge.

Waiting for next update

Wating bhai

Superb update bro...
Waiting for next

Waiting

mast hai bhai aap aise hi likhte raho keep it up

Nice update

Thoda btaiye to ki kaise kahani ak page se attach rhe ya setting kre ki vah ak hi page se attach rhe padhne wale ko bhi samajh aaye aur

Intezaar rahega next update ka Werewolf bhai....

Bahot hi behtarin update ...
bahot hi safai ke sath ganne me arad ko dikhya gaya hai .....
veer aa chuka hai ava ko bachane ke liye , ya fir use bulaya gaya hai ava ke jariye ye to waqt hi batayega....

jo naye charecter dikhaye gaye hai unke bare me bhi malum chal pana muskil hai ki dono freinds hai ya foes ye to abhi suspens bana hua hai , par andaja ai ki dono dushman hi hone chahiye .....

ava ki mataji coma me kyu hai? wo admi use kyu dhundh raha hai ? kya koi secret hai iske piche ? ye bhi age dekhne ko milega hi kyuki agar wo admi dhundh raha to hai to kuchna kuchto reson rahega hi .....
ek anfdaja ye lagaya ja sakta hai ke ava ke fevorebility 80 to 90 pahoch jayegi .....

Your story is my favourite story bhai

Nice update

intzaar

BAHUT SHAANDAAR JABARDUST FABULOUS MIND BLOWING EXCELLENT MARVELLOUS AND INTERESTING UPDATE BHAI

Aakhir Crimson arc chaalu ho hi Gaya. Congrats, bro. Hope you are going to give us exciting & thrilling updates again sooner than later. Eagerly awaiting them

marvellous ..
excellent story telling...

keep rocking

बहुत खुबसूरत अपडेट आउटस्टैंडिंग अपडेट।

Fantastic update

My god women tumhe Puri story yaad h kya mai to golu ka bare m bhul hi gya tha....
Btw Nidhi's charector seriously lacking time as well as juhi and some others also.... But hope after crimson arc these will make a good comeback...

Waiting

Waiting for update

I know bhai but yahan reader active hai or ache reader or writter hai isi liye or koi problem nhi hai bhai main hata deta hun

Werewolf bhai aaj update aayega?

Behad hi shandar or jabardast update Bhai.
Bahut khoob superb.

Bhaiya ji. usual time toh ho gya

sayad kal

INTEJAAR

Bro update kab aayega.... Raat to bit gyi... Kahi aisa na ki raat gyi, baat gyi wala scene ho jaye...

Intejar karte karte ye aakhe taras gai hai ye aakhe taras gai tera Intejar karte karte ye dil bol raha hai aayega vo but ye aakhe taras gai hai intejar karte karte

boss kya likhtey ho aap,maza aa jata hai

Take care get well soon bro

Get any over the counter muscle relaxant like mobizox, cipzox or ultrazox...
Take 1 tablet.
2 minute mei aaram pad jayega..
Moove ya koi or gel se aaram kam hi milta hai..

En sab se kuch nahi hoga......aap bas raat k 3 baje jab charo taraf andhere ka sannata ho tab dono hath m ek nibu or kamar m ek jharu bandh k neem k ped k 4 chakkar laga aao....aap k sari samasya ka samadhan ho jayga....krippa udhar hi atki hai....

Update?

Intagesic MR is same it comes as muscle relaxant

You with have to take 3 tabs one every 8 hourly for better comfort ,omnacortil is steroid you should avoid , Ozile D is okay it will prevent further changes of Gas , acidity etc

Yaar aap notepad use kyon nahin kar lete
Free time per do tin aap Aram se likhkar save kar sakte hai aur apane hisab se Post kar dijiye aur aapko problem bhi Kam ho jayega. Aap dekh hi rahe hai ki update na Milne Karan Reader's kitne dukhi ho gaya hai.

Take rest bro rest is more important.

( agar rest nhi loge ko aage update jaldi kese aayega just joking)

Waiting

Superb update

मित्र इन कहानियों के लिंक भेज सकते हैं तो आनंद आ जाएगा...

Waiting for update sir g

Update 136 has been posted.