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Hello dear XFians,
The wait is finally over, here are the results of the grand Ultimate Story Contest 2025!
Before we jump to the exciting part, I want to take a moment to thank each and every one of you! The writers who poured their hearts into their stories, the readers who supported every tale with passion, and our ever-enthusiastic chit-chatters who kept the forum buzzing with energy!
This year’s USC has truly made history on desi forums. With a record-breaking number of entries we broke the last years milestone with whooping 104 stories, this was by far the biggest and boldest edition of USC ever! This wouldn't have been possible without your love and participation.
Also, a huge shout-out to our amazing sponsors vakharia Sasha! The Immortal Aakash. Damha Love 1994 for making this contest even more special.
And now, drumroll please…
We witnessed some truly phenomenal performances this year, and the competition was neck-and-neck till the very end. But after much deliberation, we finally have our winners!
Taking the 1st place crown with an outstanding 9.5 points is harshit1890 for his Thriller story "Ritual". His writing twisted minds and left a lasting impression on everyone who read it.
Securing the 2nd place with a powerful score of 9.25 points is SANJU ( V. R. ) , for his heart wrenching tale "सौतेला". A story that sparked emotions.
In 3rd place, with 9.0 points, stands Riky007 , for his brilliantly crafted Sci-fi tale "वो खिड़की जो..", a narrative that lingers in the mind long after the last word.
Landing at 4th place with 8.75 points is Euphoria , whose Sci-Fi story "The Quantum Curse" created a whole new world.
Let’s shower our love and appreciation on these amazing writers who truly lit up this contest with their words!
USC is not just about writers but its about readers as well and we appreciate readers efforts too, This year, the reviews thread was nothing short of a celebration of thoughtful feedback and reader engagement. Among the many dedicated readers, three names truly stood out with their consistent presence, detailed reviews, and genuine support for the writers.
We’re proud to announce the Best Readers of USC 2025:- Aakash. vakharia & Mr. Magnificent
Each of them brought a unique voice to the reviews section, encouraged countless writers with their kind words
And finally, the crown for our beloved chatterbox...
The unstoppable, the unbeatable, the one with the fastest fingers... Well we have a tie here as both of them were equally active in the cc thread and they are non other than our hard working staff member Aakash. And chatting queen Shivani guptaa !
both wins our legendary Spammer Dibba with over 10000+ posts! 
And that’s a wrap for this season of USC, folks. This contest was not just about stories it was about connection, creativity, and community. And you all made it unforgettable.
Until next time, keep writing, keep reading, and keep the forum spirit alive!
The wait is finally over, here are the results of the grand Ultimate Story Contest 2025!
Before we jump to the exciting part, I want to take a moment to thank each and every one of you! The writers who poured their hearts into their stories, the readers who supported every tale with passion, and our ever-enthusiastic chit-chatters who kept the forum buzzing with energy!
This year’s USC has truly made history on desi forums. With a record-breaking number of entries we broke the last years milestone with whooping 104 stories, this was by far the biggest and boldest edition of USC ever! This wouldn't have been possible without your love and participation.
Also, a huge shout-out to our amazing sponsors vakharia Sasha! The Immortal Aakash. Damha Love 1994 for making this contest even more special.
And now, drumroll please…
We witnessed some truly phenomenal performances this year, and the competition was neck-and-neck till the very end. But after much deliberation, we finally have our winners!
Taking the 1st place crown with an outstanding 9.5 points is harshit1890 for his Thriller story "Ritual". His writing twisted minds and left a lasting impression on everyone who read it.
Securing the 2nd place with a powerful score of 9.25 points is SANJU ( V. R. ) , for his heart wrenching tale "सौतेला". A story that sparked emotions.
In 3rd place, with 9.0 points, stands Riky007 , for his brilliantly crafted Sci-fi tale "वो खिड़की जो..", a narrative that lingers in the mind long after the last word.
Landing at 4th place with 8.75 points is Euphoria , whose Sci-Fi story "The Quantum Curse" created a whole new world.
Let’s shower our love and appreciation on these amazing writers who truly lit up this contest with their words!
USC is not just about writers but its about readers as well and we appreciate readers efforts too, This year, the reviews thread was nothing short of a celebration of thoughtful feedback and reader engagement. Among the many dedicated readers, three names truly stood out with their consistent presence, detailed reviews, and genuine support for the writers.
We’re proud to announce the Best Readers of USC 2025:- Aakash. vakharia & Mr. Magnificent
Each of them brought a unique voice to the reviews section, encouraged countless writers with their kind words
And finally, the crown for our beloved chatterbox...
The unstoppable, the unbeatable, the one with the fastest fingers... Well we have a tie here as both of them were equally active in the cc thread and they are non other than our hard working staff member Aakash. And chatting queen Shivani guptaa !
both wins our legendary Spammer Dibba with over 10000+ posts! And that’s a wrap for this season of USC, folks. This contest was not just about stories it was about connection, creativity, and community. And you all made it unforgettable.
Until next time, keep writing, keep reading, and keep the forum spirit alive!
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Position | Awarded to | Benefits |
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Winner |  3500 ₹ + 7000 Likes Each+ Award + 30 days sticky Thread (Stories) | |
1st Runner-Up |  2000 ₹ +5000 Likes + 15 day Sticky thread (Stories) | |
2nd Runner-UP | 1000 ₹ +3000 Likes + 7 Days Sticky Thread (Stories) | |
3rd Runner-UP | 500 ₹ + 3k Likes | |
Best Supporting Readers (Top 3) | 500 ₹ Each +  Award + 3k Likes |
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REVIEWS BY JUDGE
PART - I
Tujhse Shuru Tujhpar Khatm (Romance)
Story Review: "Tujhse Shuru Tujhpar Khatm" ek heart-touching Hindi story hai jo love, loss, aur memories ke around ghumti hai. Isme ek unnamed protagonist hai jo apne pyaar ke tragic death se deal kar raha hai, kabhi past ke romantic flashbacks mein kho jata hai, kabhi present ke grief aur office ke kaam mein ulajhta hai..... Ek cliffhanger ending ke saath, yeh story readers ko aur jaan-ne ke liye tadpa deti hai...... Pros : Story me Emotional Depth aur Poetic Style ka vikral roop se prayog kiya gaya hai.Story ka writing style dil ko chhoo jata hai, yahi style hero ke dard ko aur gehra karta hai, especially jab woh purani yaadon mein khota hai. Hero ka character bada real aur layered hai..... Woh flawed hai sharabi ban jata hai, mental health se struggle karta hai. lekin uski professional sharpness bhi dikhti hai.((din to kat jaati hai par raatein nahi kat-ti :D)) Title bhi story ke according bahut lajwab hai aur writing style bhi kisi majhe hue lekhak ki tarah bina kisi truti ke.. Great work. Cons: Kuch jyaada hee shayrana andaz hai.. Jisse kahi kahi par padhte waqt readers story ke kuch part ko skip kar sakte hai.. Khaskar ke story ke shuruati scenes me kyunki tab tak readers ko hero ke baare me kuch khaas pata nahi hota.. Yaa fir likhawat me kuch kamjori hai. Story ke twists predictable lagte hain, jaise accident ka build-up... And end me hero ki maut. Aur ek aur flaw jo story me laga wo ye ki Jaha meeting hui aur recyling ki baat chal rahi thi.. Waha ek hee baat ko 4-5 baar kaha gaya.. Jo story ko thoda kamjor banati hai.
KALANK (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Kalank.... ek heart wrenching aur thought provoking kahani hai jo Aaradhya Sharma ke safar ko bayan karti hai. XF me aisi Story aur jis style me, jis depth ke sath writer ne likhi hai.. Wo is contest ki hi nahi.. Balki pure xf ki hee shobha badhane wala content hai. Yeh story ek chhote se gaon Kufri se shuru hoti hai aur Delhi ke fast-paced shehar tak jati hai. Aaradhya, ek ambitious ladki, apne dreams ko pura karne ke liye gaon chhodkar shehar jati hai, lekin uska yeh safar tragedy mein badal jata hai. Story deep fake AI aur social media ke misuse jaise serious issues ko highlight karti hai, jo ek masoom ladki ki zindagi ko barbaad kar deta hai. Title "Kalank" perfectly fits the narrative, kyunki yeh ek aise daag ko darshata hai jo na sirf Aaradhya par, balki uske parivaar aur samaj ke perception par lagta hai..... Pros: Story ka concept bahut acha hai. Deep fake technology aur uske devastating effects ko ek emotional narrative ke saath present karna ek bold move hai. Yeh aaj ke digital age mein ek relevant aur burning issue ko address karta hai... Kahani mein emotional aur psychological depth hai. Aaradhya ke dreams, uske parivaar ka pyaar, aur samaj ka harsh judgment sabhi ko detail mein explore kiya gaya hai... Emotions kaa maano sagar baha diya gaya ho is story ke madhyam se.. Pratyek scene apne aap me lajwab aur well written hai :applause: Story ek strong social message deti hai.... deep fake AI ke dangers aur cyberbullying ke consequences ke baare mein. Aaradhya ka character arc bahut impactful hai. Uski journey... naive gaon ki ladki se confident professional, phir broken aur defeated... realistic aur heart-breaking hai. uski death sachmuch me shocking aur bahut khatarnak twist tha.. Jo readers ke dil ko tod ke rakh de.. Kyunki har koyi Aradhya se connect ho chuka tha. Cons: Karan ka badla lene ka motive thoda weak lagta hai. Uska character thoda one-dimensional hai, aur uske actions ke peeche aur depth ya backstory add ki ja sakti thi. Story ka end tragic hai, jo impactful toh hai, lekin thoda incomplete feel hota hai. Karan ke actions ka consequence ya justice ka aspect thoda explore kiya ja sakta tha... Aur train ke jo announcements the.. Wo real feel nahi hote.. Train aane yaa jaane par Aise kaha announcement hoti h ki apna saman pakad kar rakhe.. Taiyar rakhe etc. Standard announcement ka use kiya jaa sakta tha.. Jo ki hota hai to better rahta
विधिलिखित (Romance/Non-Erotic)
Story Review: "विधिलिखित" एक भावनात्मक और गहन ऐतिहासिक पृष्टभूमि से जुडी कहानी है और यही से स्टोरी ने जो अपनी रोचकता कायम की वो अंत तक रही... कहानी गौरी के जीवन के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है। गौरी, एक मराठा सरदार की बेटी, प्रतापगढ़ के महलों में रानी बनकर आती है। कहानी का पृष्ठभूमि राजस्थान और मराठा संस्कृति का एक जीवंत मिश्रण है, जिसमें परंपराएं, प्रेम, बलिदान और राजनीतिक षड्यंत्र शामिल हैं। यह एक ऐसी कहानी है जो दिल को छू लेती है और मन में कई सवाल छोड़ जाती है। इसकी शुरुआत जितनी रोचक थी उससे भी कही ज्यादा इसका अंत... मतलब कोई सोच भी नहीं सकता कि ऐसा क्यों हुआ.. पर जैसा कि स्टोरी का टाइटल है विधिलिखित... (भाग्य द्वारा लिखा हुआ, if i am correct) तो फिर कर भी क्या सकते है और कह भी क्या सकते है.. जो राइटर ने भाग्य मे लिख दिया.. वही होना है.. टाइटल से पूर्णतः मेल खाती ये स्टोरी... Pros: कहानी का कथानक बेहद अनूठा है। एक मराठा लड़की का राजस्थान के शाही घराने में समायोजन, उसके पिछले प्रेम और वर्तमान कर्तव्यों के बीच का संघर्ष, और एक बड़े राजनीतिक षड्यंत्र को उजागर करना....यह सब जिस तरीके से कहानी मे दिखाया गया है वो काबिले तारीफ है.. मतलब.. माइक्रोस्कोप लेकर भी यदि कोई कमिया ढूंढने निकले तो भी ना मिले.। ऐसी कहानियो मे जहां ऐतिहासिक घटनाये अक्सर पूर्वानुमानित हो जाते हैं... यह कहानी उसके उलट पाठको को बांधे रखती है.. लेखन शैली काव्यात्मक और भावपूर्ण है, जिसमें महलों, परंपराओं और भावनाओं का जीवंत वर्णन है। हिंदी और संस्कृत शब्दों का उपयोग कहानी को सांस्कृतिक गहराई प्रदान करता है... प्रत्येक दृश्य को इतनी बारीकी से वर्णित किया गया है कि पाठक स्वयं को उसी माहौल में महसूस करता है... कहानी में भावनात्मक और दार्शनिक गहराई है। गौरी का आंतरिक संघर्ष, उसका विद्याधर के प्रति प्रेम, और अपने कर्तव्य के प्रति समर्पण, कहानी को कई आयामों की तरफ ले जाता है....शार्ट स्टोरी मे इतने सारे चीजों का परफेक्ट कॉम्बिनेशन, वाकई मे राइटर को अवार्ड दिया जाना चाहिए... साथ ही साथ स्टोरी का टाइटल.. अति सुन्दर :bow: Cons: अब क्यूंकि मजबूरन कहानी मे कमी ढूंढना है तो.. करना तो पड़ेगा ही.. क्यूंकि यह भी विधिलिखित है :D कहानी का अंत ऐसा है कि कई रीडर्स शॉक हो जायेंगे कि.. ऐसा क्यों हुआ.. ऐसा करने कि क्या जरूरत थी.. स्टोरी को अन्य दिशा मे भी मोडा जा सकता था.. स्टोरी के climax को जिसमे गौरी एवं अन्य मिलके जफ़रुद्दीन की ऐसी-तैसी करते है.. वो कुछ ज्यादा ही आसानी से हो गया.. कही कोई ड्रामेटिक इवेंट नहीं हुआ.. जिससे थ्रील पैदा हो.. उस घटना को यदि और डिटेल्स मे दिखाया जाता तो अच्छा रहता... साथ ही साथ.. एक जगह पर मिशन शब्द का उपयोग राइटर ने किया.. जो स्टोरी के परिपेक्ष मे फिट नहीं बैठता.. वो शायद ध्यान मे नहीं आया होगा...
बंदिश (Romance+Thriller)
Story Review: "बंदिश" एक भावनात्मक और मनोवैज्ञानिक रूप से जटिल कहानी है, जो अपनी काव्यात्मक लेखन शैली, गहरे चरित्र चित्रण, और अप्रत्याशित ट्विस्ट के साथ पाठक को बांधे रखती है... यह प्यार और दर्द जैसी इंसानी कमजोरियों का गहरा वर्णन इस कहानी मे किया गया है। कुल मिलाकर, यह कहानी उन पाठकों के लिए एक शानदार अनुभव है जो भावनात्मक गहराई और मनोवैज्ञानिक ट्विस्ट का आनंद लेते हैं, जिन्हे romance+thrill टाइप स्टोरी ज्यादा पसंद आती है. यह वर्षा और अमित के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है, जहाँ वर्षा अपने पति विवेक के अचानक गायब होने के बाद टूट चुकी है, और अमित उसका पुराना दोस्त और प्रेमी है, जो उसे इस दर्द से बाहर निकालने की कोशिश करता है। कहानी का अंत एक चौंकाने वाला खुलासा करता है, जो अमित के किरदार को एक नया मोड़ देता है और कहानी को एक थ्रिलर में बदल देता है.... Pros: राइटर की एक और बेहतरीन एंट्री... जिसकी शुरुआत तो प्रेम से होती है पर अंत अक्सर निशब्द कर जाते है.. ठीक विधलिखित की तरह.."बंदिश" शब्द कहानी के केंद्रीय विषय को खूबसूरती से दर्शाता है। यह वर्षा की भावनात्मक कैद, विवेक की अनुपस्थिति, और अमित के छिपे हुए इरादों को सूक्ष्म रूप से दर्शाता है। शीर्षक कहानी के हर पहलू के साथ न्याय करता है। लेखन शैली काव्यात्मक और भावनात्मक है, जो पाठक को पात्रों के दर्द और उलझन में डुबो देती है। बारिश, मौसम, और प्रकृति के प्रतीकों का उपयोग कहानी को गहराई देता है। अमित और वर्षा के बीच जो बातचीत के दौरान शायरी या उपमा का प्रयोग किया गया है.. वो बेहद ही सटीक और सरल है.. अक्सर राइटर इस जगह स्टोरी को काम्प्लेक्स बना देते है.. जो कि इस कहानी के केस मे ऐसा नहीं है... कहानी प्रारंभ में एक सामान्य बिछड़े हुए प्रेम की कहानी प्रतीत होती है, लेकिन अंत में अमित के खुलासे के साथ यह एक थ्रिलर में बदल जाती है। यह ट्विस्ट कहानी को अप्रत्याशित और अनूठा बनाता है। यह कहानी प्रेम, विश्वासघात, अपराधबोध और उम्मीद की गहराई को छूती है। वर्षा का आंतरिक संघर्ष और अमित का दोहरा चरित्र कहानी को अलग लेवल पर ले जाता है... Cons: शार्ट स्टोरी के लिहाज से देखा जाए तो कहानी मे वैसे तो कोई कमी नहीं है, बहुत कुछ रीडर के इमेजिनशन पर छोड़ दिया गया है.. और इसमें कोई बुराई भी नहीं है.. पर.. Thrill portion को यदि और बड़ा किया जाता किसी ना किसी डिटेल्स के जरिये तो कहानी पढ़ने का मजा ही कुछ और होता.. क्यूंकि जितना भी thrill portion इस स्टोरी मे था. उसी ने पाठको के दिल मे घर कर लिया होगा.. और भूले -बिसरे... कही ना कही... पाठको के मन मे ये ट्विस्ट आ ही गया रहा होगा कि हो सकता है.. अमित ने ही विवेक को गायब करवाया हो :D, मेरे अंदर तो आ गया था.. :D
The Memory Glitch (Fantasy)
Story Review: The Memory Glitch is a fantastic read that blends scifi thrills with a heartfelt story about identity and truth. The world feels alive, Meera’s a hero you can’t help but root for, and the plot keeps you guessing..... It’s not perfect, some parts feel rushed or familiar...but it’s the kind of story that sticks with you. If you love stories with a mix of tech...culture...and heart.. this one’s a treat for you.set in a futuristic Mumbai of 2050, had me hooked from the first paragraph.... It follows Meera Joshi, a reporter digging into some shady business with a virtual reality gadget called Memento that lets people relive their memories.... Pros: Mumbai in 2050 feels so real, like you’re walking through its streets, smelling street food and seeing glowing trees.... Meera's Character is tough, daring, smart, and easy to cheer for, especially when she’s scared of losing her memories.... The story has heart, with Meera’s memories of her dad making you care about her fight. It’s fast, exciting, and full of lively details that make you want to keep reading....Title was good too.. Catchy which attracts readers.. Writer did very hardwork while writing this story as this would have required extra thinking as story is set in 2050. And he was successful in that case.. Cons: The very first thing which i didn't like about this story is its written in paragraph where dialogues of characters are merged with other things like describing the scene.. And there are many scenes or part where story became a bit boring or feels lengthy... Writer should have worked on that criteria coz the moment a short story feels lengthy readers starts scrolling. Villain's character arc is not that compelling and powerful. Overall a good read..
Kissa-e-Mohabbat (Romance)
Story Review: Kissa-e-Mohabbat ek aisi kahani hai jo apke dil mein ek chhoti si, par gehri jagah bana leti hai. Lahore ka vibrant setting, Saad ka relatable character, aur emotional moments isse ek memorable read banate hain. Thodi slow pacing aur predictable twist ke bawajood, yeh story apni simplicity aur desi vibe se jeet leti hai. Jo log realistic, emotional, aur culturally rich love stories pasand karte hain, unhe y story bahut pasand aayegi...Yeh kahani Saad ke pyar aur uske na bol paye jazbaat ki hai, jo Hania ke liye uske dil mein panapta hai. Story pyar, pachtaave, aur aage badhne ke safar ko dikhati hai..... Pros: Story shuru me utni interesting nahi lagti par jaise jaise aage badhte jaati hai.. Old wine ke tarah readers par nasha karna shuru karti hai.. Story likhne ka andaj bahut hee saral, sahaj aur sundar hai.. Ye kala long story me bahut madadgar saabit hogi yadi writer long story shuru kare toh.. Kahani me kahi koyi jatilta nahi hai.. Saad ka sharmilapan, pyar mein dooba hua andaaz har kisi ke dil se connect karta hai. Uska chhupke Hania ko dekhna most of the laundo ke liye ek universal feeling hai. Cons: Story ka plot sadharan tha.. Ye story yadi 7-8 saal pahle likhi hui hoti toh awashya hee kuch aur points isko milte par ab aajkal aise plot webseries aur movies me bahut samnya ho gaye hai... Story badhiya thi isme koyi do ray nahi, par rochakta aur romanch ke liye story ke narration yaa incident ko thoda improve kiya jaa sakta tha.Thoda sa narration par work bhi karna caahiye writer ko taaki readers swiftly story padh shake
Bewafaon Ke Peeche Bhaagi, Par Wafa Toh Saamne Thi (Romance)
Story Review: Bewafaon Ke Peeche Bhaagi, Par Wafa Toh Saamne Thi ek dil se dil tak yaa fir kahe ki dil se dick tak jati kahani hai jo pyaar, dhokhe, aur wafadari ke jazbaat ko pesh karne ki koshish karti hai... Ravi ka selfless love aur Neha ka broken yet hopeful journey (reaching dick to dil)is story ki sutradhaar hai... Thodi aur tight editing aur unexpected twists isse aur iconic bana sakte the. Agar aapko emotional dramas with kinky stuff pasand hai, toh yeh story definitely dil jeet legi. Yaa dick for sure :shag: Pros: Neha ka carefree attitude aur Ravi ka silent devotion bohot real lagta hai... Aksar aise characters hume school aur college me mil hee jaate hai... Dono ke flaws aur strengths unhe human banate hain, aur readers unke saath emotionally connect kar pate hain. Ravi ke unspoken love aur Neha ke heartbreak ke moments dil se dick tak jate hain. Letters wala climax scene kahani ke kuch ek ache scenes me se ek tha.. Story pyaar ke selfless nature ko highlight karti hai, jo Ravi ke character ke through shine karta hai. Indian family pressure, arranged marriage ka tension, aur modern romance ke conflicts ko story bohot naturally weave karti hai... Matlab kitni hee baato ka samavesh is kahani me kiya gaya hai.. Sath hee sath itna bada title rakhne ke liye writer ke sahas ko mera koti koti pranam :pray: typos ek bhi nahi :claps: aur writing style bhi thik hai. Cons: Sabse pahle to title... Itna bada title kon rakhta hai :doh: plot bahut hee sadharan tha aur uska execution usse bhi sadharan.. Story me kahi koyi thahrav hee nahi hai.. Ek express kii bhaanti bas chalte hee jati hai.. Neha dhada dhad chudte hee jati hai.. Naa sharam.. :music2: Naa lihaj... :music2: Fir naya laad aaya :music2: aise me ravi ka aise prem karna use aashiq nahi balki readers ki najar me chutiya banata hai.. Beech me aate aate tak story kafi boring lagne lagti hai... Aur vikrant wale matter ko thoda aur modify karke twist ke roop me dala jaa sakta tha.. Par writer ne ye mauka bhi hath se jaane diya.. Kul milakar ek average story...
घोर पाप - एक वर्जित प्रेम कथा (Incest)
Story Review: "घोर पाप - एक वर्जित प्रेम कथा" एक साहसी और विचारोत्तेजक कहानी है। इसमें कला, कामुकता, और नैतिकता के बीच जटिल संवाद प्रस्तुत करने का उत्तम प्रयास लेखक द्वारा किया गया है। यह कहानी incest readers के लिए उपयुक्त है, खासकर के इसकी प्राचीन काल की पृष्टभूमि.. Incest को थोड़ा अलग तरह से दिखाने के लिए लेखक की प्रशंसा की जानी चाहिए..कहानी पिशाचिनी प्रासाद के रहस्यमयी इतिहास और उससे जुड़ी पांडुलिपियों के माध्यम से एक ऐसी दुनिया का चित्रण करती है, जहां नग्नता और संभोग को सामाजिक बंधनों से मुक्त माना जाता था। यह कथा राजकुमार कामशास्त्र और उनकी माता शाकिनी के बीच विकसित होने वाले यौन सम्बन्धो को दर्शाती है, जो एक तांत्रिक साधना और पिशाचिनी के बहाने से शुरू होकर सामाजिक मर्यादाओं को चुनौती देता है.... Pros: "घोर पाप " आज के सन्दर्भ मे कहानी के केंद्रीय विषय को स्पष्ट रूप से दर्शाता है। यह माता-पुत्र के बीच incest relations को घोर पाप के रूप में प्रस्तुत करता है..... लेखक की शैली भाषा में प्राचीनता का आभास है, जो कहानी के ऐतिहासिक और काल्पनिक परिवेश के अनुसार उपयुक्त है... पिशाचिनी प्रासाद के शिल्पों और शाकिनी की शारीरिक सुंदरता का वर्णन काबिले तारीफ है। यह कथा अपने विषय के चयन में अत्यंत अनूठी है। भारतीय साहित्य में माता-पुत्र के यौन संबंधों जैसे विषय को इतने स्पष्ट और सरल रूप में प्रस्तुत करना दुर्लभ है। पिशाचिनी प्रासाद और तांत्रिक साधना का समावेश कहानी को एक रहस्यमई आकर देने की कोशिश भी सराहनीय है.... Cons: कहानी का टाइटल जहाँ एक ओर परफेक्ट है.. वही दूसरी ओर कहानी के पृष्भूमि से तर्कसंगत नहीं है.. जब कहानी उस काल की है, जहाँ ये सब लगभग लगभग नार्मल तो फिर ये घोर पाप क्यों हुआ..??? कहानी माता-पुत्र के incest रिश्ते पर आधारित है जो कि xf के कई readers के लिए सबसे टॉप है, पर इसमें sex scene के साथ उतना न्याय होता नहीं दिखा.. Sex सीन्स बहुत ही साधारण थी.. कामवासना की उत्तेजना जागृत करने मे असमर्थ... साथ ही साथ.. कई जगहों पर चूत शब्द का प्रयोग किया गया, जबकि कहानी के परिवेश को देखकर योनि शब्द का प्रयोग किया जाता तो बेहतर रहता... कहानी मे पिशाचनी और प्राचीन काल के परिवेश को शामिल तो किया गया पर उनका महत्व कुछ ज्यादा दिखा नहीं.. इसी पर थोड़ी और मेहनत करके इसे थोड़ा रहस्यमई या thrill आयाम भी दिया जा सकता था.. जिसके साथ incest का तड़का.. अंग-अंग फड़का.. वाली बात हो जाती...अंततः यही कहना चाहूंगा की.. बहुत ही अच्छा प्रयास था. 👍
The train that never stops. (Romance)
Story Review: Realism is not love's language.... Just forget the reality and logic and read it as writer wants this story to be read... Let the dream begins... The Train That Never Stops is a A Heartfelt Journey of Love and Longing.... This train is a love letter to the dreamers, a story that captures the magic and pain of a love that burns brightly but briefly. It’s not perfect... Also its idealism can feel forced, and its scope could be broader, but its emotional core and poetic prose make it a memorable journey. For those who believe in destiny over practicality, this train is worth boarding. Just don’t expect it to stop for logic. As writer said earlier in his note. Pros: The first half of the story was average, lacking anything particularly remarkable, and seemed inspired by several films. However, the narrative then took a transformative turn, elevating love and pain to an extraordinary new dimension. Every thought and desire wove its own distinct story, and it was here that the tale soared far beyond traditional love stories. Despite this, I held hope that in the end, even if both characters had grown old, they would surely reunite. That did not happen. Yet, the conclusion was profoundly beautiful, much like the entire story, and this is the hallmark of both the narrative and its author’s exceptional craft. Ananya's and Shaunak's characters are beautifully crafted, their chemistry palpable from their first exchange. Their artistic souls...her sketches, his poetry.... create a bond that feels fated yet fragile. The story’s exploration of longing, regret, and the enduring power of memory is moving, especially in moments like their fleeting glimpse years later on passing trains.... Indian Railway is another lead role in this story :D The opening disclaimer is a masterstroke, setting the tone with wit and honesty. It warns readers of the story’s unapologetic romanticism, preparing them for a narrative that thrives on hope and destiny rather than logic. Both of your stories are unique which portrays writer's skills Cons:The decision not to exchange contact details for some readers, this may feel like a contrived plot device to enforce the tragedy. The decades-long separation, while poignant, occasionally feels dragged out with repetitive moments of longing and missed connections. The constant return to similar emotional notes, Ananya painting Shaunak, Shaunak writing about Ananya, can make the middle sections feel redundant, dull.. And readers may skip few parts.Also the dialouges between the characters were Also pretty dull.
A Train to Nowhere (Fantasy)
Story Review: A Train to Nowhere is super creepy and cool, making a plain train ride feel like a trip through your own memories and regrets. The writing is awesome, though it starts slow and can be a bit confusing. Those silent passengers who turn out to be people from the main character’s past? Total chills! It’s one of those stories that sticks in your head, messing with you long after you’re done. The way the train keeps looping, showing the same stuff outside the window, makes you feel trapped right along with Anika. She’s just trying to get home, but ends up stuck in this weird, spooky vibe that’s half real, half nightmare. It’s like the story’s digging into your own brain, pulling out stuff you thought you forgot. Honestly, it got me thinking about my own past and what I’d do on a train like that. If you’re into creepy psychological stories that make you feel something deep, you gotta give this a shot.....just don’t expect it to end anywhere normal.. Pros: Title of the story is too good... Speaks heart of the story. The plot and theme... Especially psychological timeloop instead of physical is kind of new...The story also feels gripping right from the start, with the empty train and weird silence.its just hook you into this. It’s like you’re right there with Anika, getting chills from the creepy setting.The way writer describes stuff and his style..makes everything pop in your head. It’s easy to picture and super gripping... And The time loop where the train keeps going in circles is awesome..It makes you think about what’s real and keeps you hooked trying to figure it out.The story gets you feeling for Anika, especially when you find out the passengers are people from her past. It’s sad and spooky, hitting you right in the heart and at the end.. it makes you wonder about Anika’s life and what she’s gotta face. The ending leaves you thinking, which is what a writer wants afterall.. Cons: You don’t learn much about Anika’s life or why she’s so freaked out. It’s hard to care about her as muchas youwant to. Also.. The whole time loop thing is cool but super vague. You’re left wondering how it works or why it’s happening, and it feels unfinished...The story ends without answering a lot, like what’s up with the passengers or where the train’s really going. It can feel a bit frustrating... A lot thrilling and dramatic chills moments which can be created were missed by the writer... Also a bit of Anika's backstory should have been mentioned.. You just can't expect readers to imagine everything on their own.
Abbu Ki Randi Ayesha (Incest)
Story Review: It’s all about Ayesha and Qasim sneaking around, giving in to their wild, physical desires in secret moments....like in the kitchen, barn, or by the well. The story dives deep into their lust, with super detailed, graphic scenes that don’t hold back. It’s not just physical, though.... there’s this messed-up emotional pull between them, mixed with guilt and thrill.... Zain’s in the background, busy with work, until the end when he catches them, and things get complicated.....he’s shocked but seems weirdly into it. The story ends on a cliffhanger, leaving you wondering what happens next. Pros: The story doesn’t shy away from being raw and dirty. If you’re into intense incest... no-filter stuff, it delivers big time. Ayesha’s shameless attitude and Qasim’s rough energy are kind of gripping.The way they keep almost getting caught by Zain or villagers had its own charm... It’s bit of thrilling, like a secret you shouldn’t know. Images are good... Erotic. Ending the story with twist is one of the best thing that happened to this story. Cons: This story has one of the boldest incest theme (father-daughter incest ). It includes explicit elements like urophilia, covering everything from vaginal to anal sex, and features vivid, provocative imagery. However, despite its intensity, the story fails to ignite the level of arousal or passion it should. It feels as though the writer was indulging in personal fantasies(:shag:) while writing, lacking finesse and didn't had time to think about story presentation.... The paragraphs are poorly structured, making it hard to follow. Additionally, why do people often use foreign people images in desi Indian stories when authentic Indian content is widely available online? The story lacks any background setting to give it depth. It’s just a relentless sequence of sexual encounters from start to finish, with no substance beyond that
तेरहवीं मंजिल का रहस्य (Sci-fi)
Story Review: तेरहवीं मंज़िल का रहस्य... एक SCI FI टच के साथ रहस्यमयी कहानी है जो अजय नाम के एक ऑफिस कर्मचारी के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है.... अजय की ज़िंदगी बोरिंग और काम से भरी है, लेकिन एक रात जब वो गलती से अपने ऑफिस की लिफ्ट में 13वीं मंज़िल का बटन दबा देता है, तो... सबकुछ बदल जाता है... ये मंज़िल, जो कथित तौर पर है ही नहीं, पुरानी, डरावनी और रहस्यों से भरी है...इसके बाद अजय की पूरी पहचान...उसका नाम, जॉब, घर, सब मिट जाता है, जैसे वो कभी था ही नहीं...फिर वो इस रहस्य को सुलझाने की कोशिश करता है और पता चलता है कि 13वीं मंज़िल पर कंपनी के खतरनाक एक्सपेरिमेंट्स चलते थे... आखिर में वो अपनी पहचान वापस पा लेता है, लेकिन सवाल रह जाता है...क्या ये सच है या सिर्फ एक और भ्रम...ये कहानी सस्पेंस और दिमाग को हिलाने वाली है, जो आपको सोचने पर मजबूर कर देती है... Pros: टाइटल स्टोरी से मैच करता है.. और राइटिंग स्टाइल भी लाजवाब है.. स्टोरी सरल भाषा मे और सरल तरीके मे लिखी गयी जिससे readers को पढ़ने मे कोई दिक्कत ना हो... साथ ही साथ प्लाट भी थोड़ा यूनिक टाइप है...कहानी शुरू से ही आपको बांध लेती है...13वीं मंज़िल का डरावना सीन, टिमटिमाती लाइट्स और धूल भरा कमरा - सब कुछ ऐसा लगता है जैसे आप अजय के साथ वहां हो... सस्पेंस हर पल बढ़ता रहता है। 13वीं मंज़िल का आइडिया और ये कि अजय की पूरी ज़िंदगी मिट जाती है, बहुत अलग और रोमांचक है...बिलकुल किसी sci fi फ़िल्म की तरह... अजय की बोरिंग ऑफिस लाइफ, लंबे काम के घंटे और डेडलाइन का प्रेशर...ये सब इतना रियल लगता है कि आप उससे तुरंत जुड़ जाते हो... ये कहानी को और भरोसेमंद बनाता है...आखिरी हिस्सा, जहां अजय सब कुछ ठीक करता है लेकिन फिर भी शक में रहता है कि ये सच है या भ्रम, कमाल का है.. एक तरह से ओपन एंडिंग...ये आपको कहानी खत्म होने के बाद भी सोचने पर मजबूर करता है... Cons: 13वीं मंज़िल पर वो एक्सपेरिमेंट्स क्या थे, company क्या काम करती थि.. क्यों करती थी ये पूरी तरह साफ नहीं होता। थोड़ा और समझाया होता तो मज़ा और आता... शार्ट स्टोरी के सेटिंग के हिसाब से सब चीजे एक्सप्लेन नहीं की जा सकती.. या नहीं किया जा सकता.. पर फिर भी बहुत कुछ राइटर ने छोड़ दिया और स्टोरी को जल्दी से ख़त्म कर दिया दिया.. जिससे स्टोरी पढ़ने के बाद अधूरी सी लगती है...अजय के बारे में सिर्फ उसका काम और थकान पता चलता है। उसकी पर्सनल लाइफ या बैकग्राउंड के बारे में ज़्यादा नहीं बताया, तो उससे पूरी तरह जुड़ना मुश्किल है। कहानी खत्म होने पर कई सवाल रह जाते हैं, जैसे कि कंपनी ने ऐसा क्यों किया या श्रीकांत की पूरी कहानी क्या थी...?? थोड़ा और जवाब मिलते तो बेहतर होता..
A Cursed Night (Horror)
Story Review: A Cursed Night ek horror +fantasy story hai jo darrati bhi hai aur dil ko bhi chooti hai. Rajan ka pyar aur sacrifice, creepy bangla, aur secret society ka angle isko khaas banata hai. Thodi slow shuruaat aur kuch confusing bits hain, lekin agar aapko bhutiya kahaniya aur emotional twist pasand hai, to ye story ekdum try karni chahiye.... Kahani Rajan naam ke ek architect ke around ghumti hai. Rajan ek bada project ke liye Lansdowne ke Addison Palace jata hai, jo ek purana, shrapit bangla hai. Waha usko weird sapne aate hain jisme ek British officer Sir Robert usko bolta hai ki uski biwi Ridhima uske pyar ke layak nahi aur usko maar dalna chahiye... Iske baad ki kahani Rajan ke sammhohan, darawne sapne aur uske reaction par aadharit hai.. Pros: Write ne plot sochne aur story me depth dene kaa acha prayas kiya aur usme safal bhi hue...Starting se hi story mein ek bhutiya feel hai. Wo basement ka scene, skeletons, aur wo painting wali aankh jo Rajan ko ghoorti hai.... sab itna creepy jaisa feel hota hai... Rajan aur Ridhima ka pyar dil ko chhoota hai. Rajan ka last mein khud ko sacrifice karna, Ridhima ke liye, bahut emotional hai. Isse story sirf darr nahi, dil bhi deti hai.Secret society aur shrap ka idea kafi cool hai. Ye soch kar hi darr lagta hai ki koi jagah itni powerful ho sakti hai ki aapka mind control kar le. Ending ka twist, jaha Rajan khud ko maar deta hai, shocking hai... Story mein darr ke saath saath ye sochne wali baat hai ki kya sach hai, kya sapna, aur kya shrap..... Story kaa ant bahut acha tha.👍👍 Cons: Writer ko apne writing style me kaam karna padega.. Unhe samajhna hoga ki.. Kahani aur nibandh me bahut antar hota hai.. Dono ko ek tarah nahi parosh sakte.. Ye kahani kam.. Nibandh jyada lagta hai.. "A story without a single dialogue".. Usme bhi pqragraph itne bade bade... Damn.. Aur har line me rajan.. Rajan.. Rajan shabd.. Bhai, ye.. Wo.. Isne.. Usne.. Yaha.. Waha.. Shabd bhi hote hai.. Har jagah संज्ञा nahi use karna hota.. सर्वनाम bhi use kiya jaa sakta hai.. Taaki kahani jatil naa ho...Story ke plot me kya kuch nahi tha...?? Horror touch, old ford, curse, secret society etc. Par sirf writer ki lekhan shaili ne is story ko itna ka jor bana diya.. Baar baar ek hee baat ka repetition.. Readers ke liye ubayi kaa kaam karta hai... Ummid hai.. Aap winner stories ko padhkar unke style embrace karne kii koshish karenge..
Khamosh Ishq (Romance)
Story Review: Khamosh Ishq ek pyar bhari aur dil tootne wali kahani hai jo apko hasati hai, rulaati hai, aur aage ke liye tadpati hai.. Sana ka ek tarfa pyar, uski diary ke jazbaat, aur Faisal ka unexpected inkaar story ko unforgettable banata hai. Thodi slow shuruaat aur kuch unclear bits hain. last scene mein Sana ke aansu aur uski diary ka shayari dil mein ghar kar jata hai– “Mujhe pyar hua tha” par fir pata chala ye toh ek gaana hai :D, anyway.. Story ke according ye fit baithta hai... Poster me to be continue... Likha hai shayad writer mahashay.. Story ko aage continue karne kii chaah me ho.. Pros: Story ka sabse bada plus point hai uska emotional depth. Sana ka Faisal ke liye pyar, uski chhoti chhoti koshishen (jaise painting banana, letter likhna), aur last mein uska dil tootna... Emotional rollercoaster hai ye kahani.. Sana ka character bahut relatable hai...ek ladki jo apne pyar ko dil mein chhupaye rakhti hai aur chhoti-chhoti cheezon mein khushi dhoondhti hai. Faisal ka bhi carefree lekin caring nature story ko lively banata hai.Story ke saath images (jaise Sana ka painting banate waqt ya diary likhte waqt) aur detailed descriptions ek film jaisa feel dete hain. Sana ke chehre ki muskaan ya aansuon ka likha hua scene dil mein utar jata hai... Poster bhi acha banaya hai..Last mein Faisal ka inkaar aur Sana ka toota dil ek bada shock deta hai. “To be continued” wala twist story ke aage ke liye excited karta hai... kya Sana ka pyar adhoora rahega ya koi nayi shuruaat hogi?.. Cons: Ab ye unstories me se hai.. Jaha pros se jyada cons hai.. Par writer kyunki story ko continue karne ki firak me hai toh main apne taraf se jitni ho sake utni chije explain karna chahta hoon taaki ye mistakes unse dobara naa ho... Sabse pahle to.. Har 5 min me pov nahi badalna hota.. Aap bas koyi bhi achhce writer ki story padhe.. Ek pov pe puri story rahti hai.. Har scene me pov badalna matlab readers ki nashe dabane jaisa hai.. Aur short story shuru hote hee aapne 7-8 characters ke naam likhke readers ko kaam saunp diya ki ye lo.. 8 log ghai.. Inke naam, kaam, relations yaad kar lo.. 10-15 min to usko isi me lag jaane hai.. Long story me ye work kar sakta hai.. Short story me nahi... Faltu ke side characters ko daalna hee nahi tha, jinka story ke plot me koyi yogdan nahi... Aur uske baad typos had se jyada hai.. Wo actually typos nahi.. Aapki hinglish ki kami hai..Usse.. Naa ki ushse.. Aansu.. Naa ki aanshu...स... श (S.. Sh) Baith... Naa ki Bayth... Aise ... Naa ki ayse.. Yaha bhi aap yadi kisi writer ki story padhenge to aapki hinglish thik ho jayegi aur bhai.. Space wagerah dabaya karo... Ekdum chipka diya sab lines ko.
The Quantum Curse (Sci-fi)
Story Review: The Quantum Curse is an absolute thrill ride that sucked readers...right into the heart of Jaipur. As anordinary reader, I was hooked by this wild mix of science, mystery, and a touch of magic. In the main lead, we see... Riya, a scientist who finds a creepy old pocket watch that starts messing with time or mind.. streets flipping between today and centuries ago, people stuck in time loops, and a city falling apart.... The story’s got heart, adventure and a vibe that makes you question what’s possible and I couldn’t put it down Pros : Writer's writing and describing power is strong..The city feels so real, like you’re walking through its chaotic markets, smelling chai, and dodging rickshaws. The forts, stepwells, and vibrant colors make Jaipur a character in itself and it’s unforgettable.....Both Riya’s and Amit's characters were handsomely written both are smart but human, wrestling with logic while the world goes nuts. The idea of a cursed watch that tangles time, blending quantum physics with ancient legends, is so cool. The time glitches.. Deja vh... flickering cities, history crashing keep you glued to the page......Story plot felt fresh and a lot of work had been put on it.. Sci fi area was covered very well. I was searching for any mistakes in that area.. But its all believable.. Kudos to the writer.. He wrote and balanced everhthing so perfectly..title was also eye catching... Cons: Some of the quantum physics talk, like temporal entanglement may went over readers head. It’s cool, but a simpler explanation would’ve helped many readers to follow along better .The legend about the watch’s and its creator should have shown more.. This way story plot would have more depth than it has now...While the city’s chaos is intense, the personal consequences for Riya and Amit feel muted.... More focus on their fears, relationships, or losses could’ve made the stakes hit harder emotionally
चंदगी राम पहलवान (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: चंदगी राम पहलवान एक ऐसी कहानी है जो दिल को छूती है, प्रेरित करती है और मेहनत की ताकत पर यकीन दिलाती है...बिना का अपने देवर के लिए जुनून, चंदगी की मेहनत और गाँव का देसी माहौल कहानी को खास बनाता है... कुछ जगह यह थोड़ी कम विस्तृत लगती है, लेकिन इसका भावनात्मक और प्रेरणादायक प्रभाव इसे अविस्मरणीय बनाता है... यह कहानी यह बताती है कि मेहनत और विश्वास से कोई भी सपना हकीकत बन सकता है। बिना का आखिरी दृश्य, जहाँ वो बग्गा और सेवा को लड्डू खिलाती है और चंदगी की विश्व चैंपियन बनने की यात्रा... दिल में गर्व और खुशी भर देती है...चंदगी राम पहलवान एक सच्ची घटना से प्रेरित कहानी है, जो हरियाणा के हिसार में 1937 में जन्मे चंदगी राम के जीवन और उनके पहलवान बनने की प्रेरणादायक यात्रा को दर्शाती है... यह कहानी मेहनत, विश्वास और पारिवारिक प्यार की जीत का प्रतीक है.. Pros :कहानी का सबसे बड़ा आकर्षण इसका प्रेरणादायक संदेश है। बिना का अपने देवर के लिए विश्वास और चंदगी का उस विश्वास पर खरा उतरना हर उस व्यक्ति को प्रेरित करता है जो अपने सपनों को हासिल करना चाहता है...यह दिखाता है कि मेहनत और दृढ़ता से असंभव भी संभव हो सकता है... बिना का किरदार कहानी की रीढ़ है... एक साधारण गृहिणी, जो घूंघट में रहकर भी अपने देवर को पहलवान बनाने का सपना देखती है और उसे पूरा करती है, बेहद प्रभावशाली है... उसका गुस्सा, प्यार और जिद दिल को छू लेते हैं.. हरियाणवी संस्कृति, गाँव का माहौल, दंगल का उत्साह और रोजमर्रा की जिंदगी का चित्रण कहानी को बहुत ही आकर्षक बनाता है... बिना और चंदगी का रिश्ता, भाभी का माँ जैसा प्यार,और चंदगी का अपनी भाभी के लिए सम्मान कहानी xf मे एक अलग ऊंचाई प्रदान करता है... खासकर जब बिना की आँखों में आंसू देखकर चंदगी पहलवानी के लिए तैयार होता है :bow: कहानी सच्ची घटनाओं पर आधारित है, लेकिन इसका नाटकीय प्रस्तुतीकरण (जैसे बिना का मनचलों से सामना और दंगल का रोमांच) इसे रोचक बनाता है... हरियाणवी और हिंदी भाषा का समायोजन भी बेहतरीन तरीके से किया गया है... Cons: कहानी यदि biopic थी तो राइटर को थोड़ा और प्रेजेंटेशन मे काम करना चाहिए था.. ताकि स्टोरी और आगे के दृश्य को दिखा सके.. ना कि सिर्फ मेले के आखाड़े तक सिमट जाए.. इसको इस तरह से डिवाइड करना था कि चन्दगी राम जी के पहलवानी का ज्यादा से ज्यादा हिस्सा कवर हो... खैर... ये एक बिलकुल नयी चीज है फोरम के लिए, जहाँ biopic को कहानी का रूप देकर प्रस्तुत किया गया... कुछ typos थे, जिसपर लेखक ने ध्यान नहीं दिया साथ ही साथ मेले मे जब फाइनल फाइट हुई तो प्रतिद्वंदी पहलवान का नाम बिरजू बताया गया जो तीन साल से चैंपियन था.. पर लास्ट मे उसका नाम राकेश और दो बार का चैंपियन को चन्दगी का प्रतिद्वंदी बना दिया.. शायद राइटर से यहाँ मिस्टेक हुई.. या फिर मैंने समझने मे कोई भूल की..?? कुल मिलाकर बहुत ही प्रशंसनीय प्रयास लेखा का.. जो उन्होंने चन्दगी राम जी के जीवन का एक महत्वपूर्ण अंश हमारे सामने कहानी के रूप मे रखा...
अधूरी शिद्दत (Romance)
Story Review: अधूरी शिद्दत.... एक मार्मिक प्रेम कहानी है, जो दिल्ली की सड़कों और बारिश के माहौल में रची गई है...यह अंकित शर्मा, एक मेहनती सॉफ्टवेयर इंजीनियर और सोनिया कपूर, एक संवेदनशील आर्टिस्ट, की मुलाकात से शुरू होती है... एक बरसाती शाम की संयोग भरी मुलाकात धीरे-धीरे गहरे प्रेम में बदलती है, जो छोटे-छोटे पलों—कॉफी शॉप की बातों, इंडिया गेट की सैर और चाँदनी चौक की चाट में खूबसूरती से उभरता है.. सोनिया की पेंटिंग्स और अंकित की सादगी उनके रिश्ते को रंग और गर्माहट देते हैं.. लेकिन यह कहानी सिर्फ प्रेम की मासूमियत तक सीमित नहीं है... यह जीवन की नाजुकता और अनकहे दुख को भी उजागर करती है...जैसे-जैसे अंकित और सोनिया एक-दूसरे के करीब आते हैं..एक अनचाही सच्चाई उनके रिश्ते को चुनौती देती है, जो उनकी जिंदगी को हमेशा के लिए बदल देती है... जौन एलिया की शायरी कहानी की भावनाओं को और गहराई देती है, जो हर अध्याय में दर्द और प्यार का मिश्रण पेश करती है..... Pros: कहानी प्रेम, दुख और जीवन की नाजुकता को गहरी संवेदनशीलता के साथ प्रस्तुत करती है, जो पाठक के दिल को छूती है... अंकित और सोनिया के किरदार बहुत ही स्वाभाविक और relatable हैं... दिल्ली की सड़कों, बारिश, स्ट्रीटलाइट्स, और चाँदनी चौक की चाट का बारीक वर्णन कहानी को एक मजबूत पृष्ठभूमि देता है, जो पाठक को उस माहौल में ले जाता है... जौन एलिया की शायरी का प्रत्येक अध्याय में उपयोग कहानी की भावनाओं को और गहरा करता है, जो पाठक को कहानी के दर्द और प्यार से जोड़ता है।अंकित और सोनिया के बीच प्रेम धीरे-धीरे और स्वाभाविक रूप से विकसित होता है, जो कॉफी शॉप, इंडिया गेट, और हौज खास जैसे पलों में खूबसूरती से उभरता है.... सोनिया की बीमारी और अंकित की बेबसी को संवेदनशीलता के साथ दर्शाया गया है... अंतिम अध्याय में अंकित का अकेलापन और सोनिया की यादों के साथ जीना एक खालीपन का अहसास कराता है, जो कहानी की भावनात्मक शक्ति को दर्शाता है... Cons: सर्वप्रथम तो ये प्लाट इतना साधारण था कि.. अन्य साधारण प्लाट भी स्पेशल लगने लगे.. मतलब सैकड़ो बार ये प्लाट घूम चूका है... और लेखक महोदय को प्रॉपर spacing और pragraph का महत्त्व समझना होगा.. जो कि लेखन शैली मे अहम् योगदान निभाता है....सोनिया के अनाथ होने का राज अंत में सामने आता है, लेकिन उनकी पृष्ठभूमि और अतीत के बारे में और विवरण की कमी किरदार को पूरी तरह समझने में बाधा डालती है... कुछ दृश्य, जैसे बारिश में स्कूटी खराब होने और अंकित का सोनिया को गोद में उठाकर दौड़ना, थोड़े नाटकीय लग सकते हैं, जो कहानी की सादगी को कम कर सकते हैं... कहानी मे ऐसा एक भी दृश्य नहीं जो readers के लिए कुछ नयापन या उन्हें थोड़ा उत्साहित करें... सब कुछ predictable था...
Ek Shadishuda Aurat (Adultery)
Story Review: Ek Shadishuda Aurat... ek bold aur intense story hai jo shuru se hi apko hook kar leti hai. Ye ek aisi kahani hai jo adultery ke theme ko explore karti hai aur Sania ke character ke through ek newly married aurat ki zindagi aur uske inner conflicts ko dikhati hai.... Story ka setting ek typical Indian colony ka hai, jahan garmi, daily struggles aur chhote-chhote details jaise kachra gaadi wale tak ki najar gandi hona...ek realistic vibe create karte hain... Pros: Finally aisi story aayi jo vastav me uttejana badhati ho.. Naa ki sirf sex ke naam pe dull sex... Writer ki sexual scene likhne ki kshamta bahut badhiya jo apni lekhni se erotic aur intense scene create kar sakte hai.. Aur yahi art.. Incest or adultery prefix stories ki jaan hota hai.. Sania ka ghar, uski nighty, cooler ki hawa, aur rented duplex ka description itna detailed hai ki aap scene ko feel kar sakte hain. Ye chhote details story ko relatable banate hain. Sania ek aisi aurat hai jo shadi ke baad physical aur emotional changes se guzar rahi hai. Uska conservative se bold hone ka transition natural lagta hai jo ketu ke saamne uski vulnerability ko thoda logical prove karte hai...Climax mein Sania ka guilt aur confusion, jab wo apne actions pe sawal uthati hai, ek human touch deta hai. Ye dikhata hai ki story sirf physical attraction ke baare mein nahi, balki inner turmoil ke baare mein bhi hai.... Aur aage janne ki ichcha bhi readers ke man me paida hoti hai. Cons: Sabse pahle to ye title me part-1 likhne ka kya auchitya..?? Jabki yaha writer ki koshish hee hona chahiye ki story puri tarah complete hai.. Bhale naa ho :D fir aise me khud ke pair me kulhadi maarne waali baat samajh nahi aayi... Ketu ka character thoda stereotypical villain lagta hai, jo har mauke pe lustful nazar daal raha hai.... Jo aksar porn movies me hota hai.. Character ko thoda aur develop karna tha.. Sania ka itni jaldi surrender kar dena thoda unrealistic laga, thoda naa nukur toh karna chahiye tha.
A Day As A Moderator (Adultery)
Story Review: XF me honewali nok-jhok aur xf ke members ko lekar story likhne ki shandar pahal, abhay dwara.. Aise content aur aane chahiye.. Ye kahani, ek wild, chaotic aur full-on entertaining story hai jo shuru se lekar end tak aapko ek ride pe le jati hai. Ye kahani Abhay ke ek din ke adventure ki hai, jo Delhi mein ek sex story site ke moderator banne ka anokha experience sambhalta hai, aur fir uski zindagi kaise ulat-pulat ho jati hai.... Hinglish ka flavor, adult humor aur unexpected twists is story ko masaledar banate hain Pros: Abhay ka naive aur thoda bevakoof wala character story ko funny banata hai. Uska Priyanka ke saath encounter se lekar police ke haathon arrest hona.. Story ko naye naye aaymo me le jata hai.. Dialogues aur situations, jaise Aayush ka PUBG khelna, Rocky bhai ka Russian chakkar, ya LSB section ke behuda sawal, xf members ke liye relatable hai. Ye story ek typical online forum ki duniya ko perfectly capture karti hai. Story mein ek ke baad ek twist aata hai...Priyanka ka pati, XForum ka office, LSB section ke shocking queries aur fir rape attempt ka case..ye sab aapko story se baandhe rakhte hai..LSB section ke through story online adult forums ke wild side ko dikhati hai, jo ek satire ke roop mein kaam karta hai.. Cons: Writer ne achi khasi mehnat ki hogi ise likhne me aur story ki length bhi bahut hai.. Acha khasa samay bhi diya hai to.. Thoda aur aaram se, thoda aur samay dekar ise thoda aur funny banana chahiye tha.. Story me funny vibe to hai.. Par comedy kayi jagah niras lagti hai.. Matlab story funny hote hue bhi funny nahi hai.. Yadi ispe dhyan diya jata to kya pata story top 3 me shumar ho jaati...?? Afterall its a game of points.. Jyada points pao, winner bano..:dazed: Kuch scenes, jaise Priyanka ka dildo wala moment ya Abhay ka itni aasani se police case mein fasna, thoda filmi aur exaggerated lagte hain. Thodi realism isko aur grounded kar sakti thi. Shuru ka Priyanka wala part aur LSB section ke queries ka portion thoda lamba lagta hai. Editing pe thoda aur work karna tha.. Jisse typos bhi kam hote.. Jo ki is story me bhar bhar ke hai..
Maa Aur Mausaji Ke Karibi Rishte (Adultery)
Story Review: Yeh story ek bold aur controversial narrative hai jo family dynamics aur forbidden relationships ko explore karti hai....Hinglish mein likhi gayi yeh kahani desi audience ke liye engaging hai... Jisme ek beta.. Apni maa ko kisi aur mard ke sath sambandh banate hue dekhta hai.. Jaha uski maakisi chakli ki tarah apne bahen ke husband se chud rahi hoti hai... Full 2 erotic setting.Story ka plot fast-paced hai aur ek young narrator ke perspective se bataya gaya hai, jo apni maa aur mausaji ke beech chhupa rishta dekhta hai. Hinglish ka use natural lagta hai, jaise koi dost baat kar raha ho. Dialogues aur descriptions mein koyi jhijhak nahi hai, jo desi readers ko instantly connect karta hai Pros: Mausaji aur mummy ke beech baatein aur unka chemistry erotic feel deta hai, especially unke flirty aur bold exchanges... sanskari perspective ek ironic twist add karta hai, jo story ko aur intriguing banata hai.Image ke through visual elements add karne ka idea acha hai, jo reader ke imagination ko boost karta hai... Image bhi kaafi erotic hai. Cons: Bhai... Sabse pahle toh bold font me likhna band karo.. Warna world ki best erotic story bhi likhoge to wo winner nahi ban paayegi.. Just too disturbing for any reader... :sigh: aur jab aise story likho to pooja-path ko usse kahi door rakho.. Kyunki ye controversy create kar sakta hai. Characters, especially mummy aur mausaji, ke motivations ya backstory ke baare mein zyada nahi pata. Yeh thoda adhura feel deta hai... Matlab story shuru ki aur chudayi chaalu.. Thoda setup wagerah karna tha...Climax thoda rushed lagta hai, aur ending mein closure ki kami hai.
Buddhy ne Dr Mummy ko Pata kar Choda (Adultery)
Story Review: Yeh story ek bold aur adult themed based hai jo ek sensitive topic ko Hinglish mein present karti hai. Desi setting aur characters ke through yeh kahani local audience ke liye kafi relatable feel karti hai, fantasies ko pura karti hai... Story ka plot ek young narrator ke perspective se hai, jo apni mummy(Nasreen), ek physiotherapist aur unke husband ke boss Rajiv ke beech developing rishte ko dekhta hai. Hinglish ka use bohot natural hai aur dialogues daily life ke conversations jaisa feel dete hain. Story ka flow thoda predictable hai, par detailed descriptions aur slow buildup isse engaging banata hai Pros:Jon profession, clinic aur family dynamics ka setting story ko authentic desi feel dene ki koshish karte bai... Rajiv aur Nasreen ke interactions mein cultural limitation bohot achhe se capture kiye gaye hain... Aise me gair mard se sambhog karna is kahani ko masaledar banata hai.. Rajiv ka manipulative aur confident nature aur Nasreen ka initially shy but gradually bold attitude ek interesting contrast create karta hai... Jo is story ke liye perfect hai..Story me dono characters ke beech chemistry buildup karne ka acha prayas kiya gaya hai.. Cons: Burkhe jaise shabd ka prayog baar baar karna.... Yeh cultural boundaries ko cross karta hai, jo controversy ka reason ban sakta hai. Characters ke motivations ya emotional depth ke baare mein zyada insight nahi milta. Rajiv aur Nasreen ke rishte ka progression thoda rushed lagta hai.Aur kahani ka title bhi kuch khas interesting nahi hai.. Ending bhi had se jyada sadharan hai jaha dono ke bich chudayi khatm to story khatm...
कामवासना क्या है क्यू है
Story Review: Disqualified as this is Not a story, only Osho's lectures
लागी छूटे न (Romance)
Story Review: लागी छूटे न... दिल को छू लेनी वाली कहानी है जो प्रेम, बलिदान और सामाजिक दबावों के बीच फंसे दो व्यक्तियों, नितिन और पूजा की भावनात्मक यात्रा को दिखाती है... यह कहानी उनके अनचाहे विवाह के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है, जहां दोनों अपने पिछले प्रेम को खोने के दर्द से जूझ रहे हैं...लेखक ने प्रेम की जटिलताओं, सामाजिक बंधनों और व्यक्तिगत मजबूरियों को संवेदनशीलता के साथ उकेरा है... कहानी का अंत आशावादी है, जहां नितिन और पूजा एक-दूसरे के प्रति अपने प्रेम को स्वीकार करते हैं, जो पाठको को एक भावनात्मक संतुष्टि प्रदान करता है.... यह कहानी सामाजिक मुद्दों पर भी प्रकाश डालती है... नितिन और पूजा की कहानी पाठक को यह सोचने पर मजबूर करती है कि प्रेम सिर्फ मिलन में नहीं, बल्कि त्याग और समझ में भी होता है... यह कहानी हर उस व्यक्ति को पढ़नी चाहिए जो प्रेम की गहराई और सामाजिक बंधनों के बीच के द्वंद्व को समझना चाहता है.... Pros: कहानी पात्रों की आंतरिक उथल-पुथल और उनके दर्द को बहुत ही प्रभावी ढंग से प्रस्तुत करती है... नितिन और पूजा के किरदार आम पाठक गणों से सम्बंधित और विश्वसनीय हैं... क्यूंकि अक्सर ऐसे विवाह की घटनाये सामने आती ही रहती है... नितिन और पूजा की भावनाएं और निर्णय सामाज के एक सच को दर्शाते हैं, जिससे पाठक उनसे आसानी से जुड़ पाता है... साथ ही साथ...कहानी धर्म, जाति और पारिवारिक दबाव जैसे संवेदनशील मुद्दों को उठाती है, यह प्रेम और सामाजिक रूढ़ियों के बीच के बीच विरोध को भी बखूबी दर्शाता है. लेखक की हिन्दी भाषा सरल लेकिन प्रभावशाली है... कहानी का अंत मे... जब नितिन और पूजा अपने प्रेम को पा लेते हैं, यह पाठक को उम्मीद और खुशी का एहसास कराता है नहीं तो आजकल हैप्पी एंडिंग कम ही देखने को मिलती है 😁 Cons: स्टोरी उतनी लम्बी भी नहीं थी.. कि वर्ड लिमिट का issue आये फिर भी राइटर ने पूरी स्टोरी ऐसी लिखी जैसे वो किसी जल्दबाजी मे हो.. मतलब तुरंत तुरंत.. सबकुछ करा दिया.. पहले दिल तोड़ा फिर.. फिर शादी.. फिर माँ की कैंसर से मौत.. फिर तलाक.. फिर नेहा वाला किस्सा.. फिर दोनों के बीच प्यार.. मतलब कही भी पाठक को इतना समय या फील करने नहीं दिया कि वो करैक्टर के फीलिंग्स के साथ खुद को जोड़ सके... यहाँ वहां कुछ typos भी थे. कहानी के जल्दबाजी समापन मे नेहा के तलाक और गर्भावस्था का हिस्सा अचानक और कम विस्तृत लगता है, जो कहानी के प्रवाह को थोड़ा प्रभावित करता है....
आखिरी ख्वाहिश (Incest)
Story Review: आखरी ख्वाहिश.... एक ऐसी कहानी है जो एक 28 वर्षीय युवक की जिंदगी के अंतिम दिनों को चित्रित करती है, जो ब्रेन ट्यूमर की अंतिम अवस्था से जूझ रहा है... कहानी में युवक का अपनी मां के साथ भावनात्मक और विवादास्पद रिश्ता केंद्र में है, जो उसकी मृत्यु से पहले उसकी आखिरी इच्छाओं को पूरा करने की कोशिश करता है... यह कहानी मृत्यु, पारिवारिक रिश्तों और व्यक्तिगत इच्छाओं जैसे विषयों को छूती है, लेकिन प्रस्तुति कई मायनों में असहज करने वाली है... Pros: कहानी में मुख्य पात्र की मृत्यु के करीब आने की भावना को कुछ हद तक प्रभावी ढंग से दर्शाया गया है...उसका अपने सीमित समय में परिवार के साथ समय बिताने का प्रयास उचित है.. मां और पिता का अपने बेटे के लिए चिंता और प्यार कहानी का एकमात्र सकारात्मक पहलू है.... मां का अपने बेटे के साथ अंतिम दिनों में करीब रहने का प्रयास कुछ हद तक मार्मिक है... अच्छा हूँ कि कहानी छोटी और तेज गति वाली है, जो पाठक का समय बर्बाद नहीं करती... Cons: क्या ख़ाकर लेखक ने ऐसा प्लाट सोचा था..?? माँ बेटा sexual रिलेशनशिप xf पर सबसे पसंदीदा टॉपिक है.. पर ऐसा प्लाट.. जहाँ बेटा मर रहा है.. माँ रो रही है, वही बेटा चूची चूसने और माँ कि चूत मारने के फिराक मे है..?? इससे बुरा प्लाट मैंने आजतक नहीं देखा... मैंने इस स्टोरी पर अन्य readers के रिव्युज नहीं देखे.. पर उम्मीद है कि उन्होंने भी लेखक को भर भर के पेला होगा.. कतई घटिया सोच.. और घृणा को भी घृणा हो जाए वैसी कहानी... पॉइंट्स तो इसको माइनस मे देना चाहिए.. पर क्यूंकि मै जज के तौर पर अभी हूँ तो उस पद की गरिमा का ख्याल रखना पड़ेगा...
Insaaf Mukammal Hua (Thriller)
Story Review: Insaaf Mukammal Hua.... aisi kahani hai jo Dilli ke dil mein chhupi ek dark aur thrilling mystery ko bayan karti hai... Ye story ek serial killer jise..The Puzzle Killer naam diya gaya.. Uske aatank ke around ghumti hai, jo na sirf laashein chhodta hai balki har murder ke saath ek paheli bhi.... Delhi police ki nakmyabi ke baad Is case ko solve karne ke liye aata hai Armaan Malhotra, ek sharp private detective..aur Nishtha Sharma, ek bold journalist. Dono milkar ek 15 saal purane fake police encounter ke sach ko uncover karte hain, jo is killing spree ka motive nikalta hai. Kahani suspense, drama aur emotional depth ka ek mix hai... Pros: Kahani ka plot bohot engaging hai. Har murder aur paheli ek naya twist laati hai, jo readers ka utsah banaye rakhne ki koshish karta hai.. Armaan aur Nishtha dono well developed hain... Armaan ka calm aur calculative nature aur Nishtha ka fearless journalism ek perfect contrast banata hai.... Unka character apne aap me purn lagta hau.. Unka teamwork kahani ka highlight hai.Story mein 15 saal purana fake encounter aur police corruption ka angle bohot powerful hai. Ye real life issues jaise injustice aur coverups ko highlight karta hai, jo aaj bhi relevant hain... Katil ka pakda na jana aur insaaf ka adhoora rehna ek special ending deta hai... Jo ki hr kahani menahi hota.... Ye reader ko sochne pe majboor karta hai ki insaaf kya hota hai aur kya badla justify ho sakta hai... Writer ki lekhan shaili achhi hai aur presentation bhi shandar hai.. Jisse story complex hote hue bhi readers ko sahajta se samajh aati hai. Cons: Kahne ko to story ka theme suspence+ thriller hai.. Par thrill wali feeling story ko padhte waqt kahi nahi aati.. Yaha tak ki laash milne ke bawjood... Kuch jyada hee sahajta se sab kuch bayaan kar diya writer ne.. Thriller story ki setting thodi alag tarah se hoti hai.. Presentation bhi asia tha ki same chij kayi baar repeat pe repeat hui... Conversations bhi saadharan the.. Kahi bhi suspence wala feel hee nahi aa raha tha... Aur police itni bekhabar kaise thi kya.. Jo police se jude logo ki hatya ho rahi hai.. Aur unhe armaan aur nishta batate h ki ye ek badla hai..Casefile bahut saadharan tha.. Ek normal aadmi ko bhi yadi access de diya jaye to wo 15 saal pahle wala connection dhoondh ke saamne rakh dega.. Charo mrit logo ka.. Isme armaan aur nishta ka kuch khas role tha nahi...
Ek Bhayanak Mazzaq (Horror)
Story Review: Review: Ye kahani ek aise jhoot ke baare mein hai jo apne sath ek toofan leke aayi Hira ki jindagi mein aur uss toofan ne naa sirf usko balki bahut saare logo ko pareshan kar diya. Faizan Sahab jo Hira ki madad karne aaye the unki to jaan hi leke chala gaya. Ek jhoot jisne barso se soye hue jinn ko jaga diya aur uss jinn ne jaane ke badle ek jindagi maangi. Faizan sahab ne Hira ko bachane ke liye uss jinn ki iccha puri kar di aur Hira ko bacha gaye par sath hi chod gaye usko ek aise mansik haalat mein jaha wo khud ko inn sab ke liye koshti rahti hai. Pros: Mukhya kirdaro ko acche se dikhane ki kamyaab koshish kari gayi hai. Hira aur Faizan Sahab dono ko hi acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani mein twists aur turns ki koi kami nahi hai. Kuch mysterious elements to aise hai jo kahani khatam hone ke baad bhi hamare dimag mein kahi sawal chod dete hai. Kuch minor characters aise bhi the jinka role jyada nahi tha par wo sawal khade karke chale jaate hai.Story ka flow bhi kaabil-e-tareef hai jisase kahaani ko padhne mein orr romanch aata hai. Overall ek ummda kahaani. Cons: Kahani khatam hone ke baad bhi khatam nahi hoti hai. Chote sawal jo kahani padh ke dimag mein aate hai unko agar ignore bhi karde tab bhi kuch sawal aise hai jo kahani ko incomplete banate hai. Hina aur uske dost ke bich jo kuch bhi hua uss baare mein acche se explain nahi kiya gaya hai. Aisa lagta hai wo ek bahana tha. Story mein kahi kahi pe college ko school bata diya gaya hai aise thode bahut minor mistakes aur hai writing mein. Story ka narration thoda slow pace jo story k plot ki speed k sath match nahi karta jiss wajah se story bich bich mein patri se uttarti hai.
मेरी भार्या की कामांगप्रदर्शन प्रवृत्ति (Adultery)
Story Review: Ye kahani ek incident pe hai bas. Uss incident ke dwara lekhak hume ye darsana chah rahe hai ki kaise Suman jo ki kahani ki main character hai wo apne khule vicharo aur sex mein naye naye experiments ko lekar kitni aatur hai ye dikha rahe hai. Wo bold dresses pahenti hai taaki logo ko apni oor aakarshit kar sake. Iss kahani mein Sex life mein experiments ke baare mein hi bataya gaya hai bas. Pros: Kahani ke main character ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai Suman ko. Usko kya pasand hai wo kya karti hai inn sab ko ek chote se incident se batane ki koshish kari gayi hai. Story ka flow bhi theek tha jisase story padhne mein maja aaya. Cons: Iss kahani mein mainly bas Suman aur uske sexual desires ko hi dikhaya gaya hai. Writer ne kuch aur dikhane ki koshish nahi kari hai. Writer isko aur behtar bana sakte the.Sexual scenes ne sabse jyaada disappoint kiya jiss hisaab ka buildup tha and plot tha story ka uske according hum better sex scenes expect kar rahe they jahaan writer ne humein disappoint kiya.
अनदेखा,अनसुना एक किस्सा (Thriller)
Story Review: Ye kahani ek murder mystery hai. Kaise ek Masoom se bacche ne bina koi sabot chode Vivek ko maar diya. Masoom iss wajah se kyunki wo bacha Vivek ko uss karan ke roop mein dekh raha tha jiske wajah se uske Maa Baap mein ladai hone lagi thi. Antt mein kyunki murder case pahle hi close ho gayi thi aur Kabir bhi sayad nahi chahta tha uss bache ko jail bhejna to wo bacha bach gaya. Pros- Kahani ko bahut hi behtarin tarike se likha gaya hai. Kahani ka plot ek or plus point tha story ka jo behtareen tha. Kahani mein har ek character ko acche se explain kiya gaya hai incidents ko dikhaya gaya hai. Yaani harr cheej ko properly explain kiya hai .Narration bahut hi kammal ka tha. Cons- Kahani ke annt mein aate aate ye predictable sa ban jaati hai. Story ka plot jitana unique tha utana he pechida bhi jisko humare saamne laane k liye writer ko bahot mehnat karni thi but yahaan writer uss umeed par khare nahi uttar paaye jiss wajah se story thodi unfinished lagi or issi wajah se end takk aatey aatey story ka flow bhi tutt gaya or readers story se ubb gaye..
PART - I
Tujhse Shuru Tujhpar Khatm (Romance)
Written by- Aakash.
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: "Tujhse Shuru Tujhpar Khatm" ek heart-touching Hindi story hai jo love, loss, aur memories ke around ghumti hai. Isme ek unnamed protagonist hai jo apne pyaar ke tragic death se deal kar raha hai, kabhi past ke romantic flashbacks mein kho jata hai, kabhi present ke grief aur office ke kaam mein ulajhta hai..... Ek cliffhanger ending ke saath, yeh story readers ko aur jaan-ne ke liye tadpa deti hai...... Pros : Story me Emotional Depth aur Poetic Style ka vikral roop se prayog kiya gaya hai.Story ka writing style dil ko chhoo jata hai, yahi style hero ke dard ko aur gehra karta hai, especially jab woh purani yaadon mein khota hai. Hero ka character bada real aur layered hai..... Woh flawed hai sharabi ban jata hai, mental health se struggle karta hai. lekin uski professional sharpness bhi dikhti hai.((din to kat jaati hai par raatein nahi kat-ti :D)) Title bhi story ke according bahut lajwab hai aur writing style bhi kisi majhe hue lekhak ki tarah bina kisi truti ke.. Great work. Cons: Kuch jyaada hee shayrana andaz hai.. Jisse kahi kahi par padhte waqt readers story ke kuch part ko skip kar sakte hai.. Khaskar ke story ke shuruati scenes me kyunki tab tak readers ko hero ke baare me kuch khaas pata nahi hota.. Yaa fir likhawat me kuch kamjori hai. Story ke twists predictable lagte hain, jaise accident ka build-up... And end me hero ki maut. Aur ek aur flaw jo story me laga wo ye ki Jaha meeting hui aur recyling ki baat chal rahi thi.. Waha ek hee baat ko 4-5 baar kaha gaya.. Jo story ko thoda kamjor banati hai.
KALANK (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Aakash.
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: Kalank.... ek heart wrenching aur thought provoking kahani hai jo Aaradhya Sharma ke safar ko bayan karti hai. XF me aisi Story aur jis style me, jis depth ke sath writer ne likhi hai.. Wo is contest ki hi nahi.. Balki pure xf ki hee shobha badhane wala content hai. Yeh story ek chhote se gaon Kufri se shuru hoti hai aur Delhi ke fast-paced shehar tak jati hai. Aaradhya, ek ambitious ladki, apne dreams ko pura karne ke liye gaon chhodkar shehar jati hai, lekin uska yeh safar tragedy mein badal jata hai. Story deep fake AI aur social media ke misuse jaise serious issues ko highlight karti hai, jo ek masoom ladki ki zindagi ko barbaad kar deta hai. Title "Kalank" perfectly fits the narrative, kyunki yeh ek aise daag ko darshata hai jo na sirf Aaradhya par, balki uske parivaar aur samaj ke perception par lagta hai..... Pros: Story ka concept bahut acha hai. Deep fake technology aur uske devastating effects ko ek emotional narrative ke saath present karna ek bold move hai. Yeh aaj ke digital age mein ek relevant aur burning issue ko address karta hai... Kahani mein emotional aur psychological depth hai. Aaradhya ke dreams, uske parivaar ka pyaar, aur samaj ka harsh judgment sabhi ko detail mein explore kiya gaya hai... Emotions kaa maano sagar baha diya gaya ho is story ke madhyam se.. Pratyek scene apne aap me lajwab aur well written hai :applause: Story ek strong social message deti hai.... deep fake AI ke dangers aur cyberbullying ke consequences ke baare mein. Aaradhya ka character arc bahut impactful hai. Uski journey... naive gaon ki ladki se confident professional, phir broken aur defeated... realistic aur heart-breaking hai. uski death sachmuch me shocking aur bahut khatarnak twist tha.. Jo readers ke dil ko tod ke rakh de.. Kyunki har koyi Aradhya se connect ho chuka tha. Cons: Karan ka badla lene ka motive thoda weak lagta hai. Uska character thoda one-dimensional hai, aur uske actions ke peeche aur depth ya backstory add ki ja sakti thi. Story ka end tragic hai, jo impactful toh hai, lekin thoda incomplete feel hota hai. Karan ke actions ka consequence ya justice ka aspect thoda explore kiya ja sakta tha... Aur train ke jo announcements the.. Wo real feel nahi hote.. Train aane yaa jaane par Aise kaha announcement hoti h ki apna saman pakad kar rakhe.. Taiyar rakhe etc. Standard announcement ka use kiya jaa sakta tha.. Jo ki hota hai to better rahta
विधिलिखित (Romance/Non-Erotic)
Written by- Adirshi
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: "विधिलिखित" एक भावनात्मक और गहन ऐतिहासिक पृष्टभूमि से जुडी कहानी है और यही से स्टोरी ने जो अपनी रोचकता कायम की वो अंत तक रही... कहानी गौरी के जीवन के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है। गौरी, एक मराठा सरदार की बेटी, प्रतापगढ़ के महलों में रानी बनकर आती है। कहानी का पृष्ठभूमि राजस्थान और मराठा संस्कृति का एक जीवंत मिश्रण है, जिसमें परंपराएं, प्रेम, बलिदान और राजनीतिक षड्यंत्र शामिल हैं। यह एक ऐसी कहानी है जो दिल को छू लेती है और मन में कई सवाल छोड़ जाती है। इसकी शुरुआत जितनी रोचक थी उससे भी कही ज्यादा इसका अंत... मतलब कोई सोच भी नहीं सकता कि ऐसा क्यों हुआ.. पर जैसा कि स्टोरी का टाइटल है विधिलिखित... (भाग्य द्वारा लिखा हुआ, if i am correct) तो फिर कर भी क्या सकते है और कह भी क्या सकते है.. जो राइटर ने भाग्य मे लिख दिया.. वही होना है.. टाइटल से पूर्णतः मेल खाती ये स्टोरी... Pros: कहानी का कथानक बेहद अनूठा है। एक मराठा लड़की का राजस्थान के शाही घराने में समायोजन, उसके पिछले प्रेम और वर्तमान कर्तव्यों के बीच का संघर्ष, और एक बड़े राजनीतिक षड्यंत्र को उजागर करना....यह सब जिस तरीके से कहानी मे दिखाया गया है वो काबिले तारीफ है.. मतलब.. माइक्रोस्कोप लेकर भी यदि कोई कमिया ढूंढने निकले तो भी ना मिले.। ऐसी कहानियो मे जहां ऐतिहासिक घटनाये अक्सर पूर्वानुमानित हो जाते हैं... यह कहानी उसके उलट पाठको को बांधे रखती है.. लेखन शैली काव्यात्मक और भावपूर्ण है, जिसमें महलों, परंपराओं और भावनाओं का जीवंत वर्णन है। हिंदी और संस्कृत शब्दों का उपयोग कहानी को सांस्कृतिक गहराई प्रदान करता है... प्रत्येक दृश्य को इतनी बारीकी से वर्णित किया गया है कि पाठक स्वयं को उसी माहौल में महसूस करता है... कहानी में भावनात्मक और दार्शनिक गहराई है। गौरी का आंतरिक संघर्ष, उसका विद्याधर के प्रति प्रेम, और अपने कर्तव्य के प्रति समर्पण, कहानी को कई आयामों की तरफ ले जाता है....शार्ट स्टोरी मे इतने सारे चीजों का परफेक्ट कॉम्बिनेशन, वाकई मे राइटर को अवार्ड दिया जाना चाहिए... साथ ही साथ स्टोरी का टाइटल.. अति सुन्दर :bow: Cons: अब क्यूंकि मजबूरन कहानी मे कमी ढूंढना है तो.. करना तो पड़ेगा ही.. क्यूंकि यह भी विधिलिखित है :D कहानी का अंत ऐसा है कि कई रीडर्स शॉक हो जायेंगे कि.. ऐसा क्यों हुआ.. ऐसा करने कि क्या जरूरत थी.. स्टोरी को अन्य दिशा मे भी मोडा जा सकता था.. स्टोरी के climax को जिसमे गौरी एवं अन्य मिलके जफ़रुद्दीन की ऐसी-तैसी करते है.. वो कुछ ज्यादा ही आसानी से हो गया.. कही कोई ड्रामेटिक इवेंट नहीं हुआ.. जिससे थ्रील पैदा हो.. उस घटना को यदि और डिटेल्स मे दिखाया जाता तो अच्छा रहता... साथ ही साथ.. एक जगह पर मिशन शब्द का उपयोग राइटर ने किया.. जो स्टोरी के परिपेक्ष मे फिट नहीं बैठता.. वो शायद ध्यान मे नहीं आया होगा...
बंदिश (Romance+Thriller)
Written by- Adirshi
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: "बंदिश" एक भावनात्मक और मनोवैज्ञानिक रूप से जटिल कहानी है, जो अपनी काव्यात्मक लेखन शैली, गहरे चरित्र चित्रण, और अप्रत्याशित ट्विस्ट के साथ पाठक को बांधे रखती है... यह प्यार और दर्द जैसी इंसानी कमजोरियों का गहरा वर्णन इस कहानी मे किया गया है। कुल मिलाकर, यह कहानी उन पाठकों के लिए एक शानदार अनुभव है जो भावनात्मक गहराई और मनोवैज्ञानिक ट्विस्ट का आनंद लेते हैं, जिन्हे romance+thrill टाइप स्टोरी ज्यादा पसंद आती है. यह वर्षा और अमित के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है, जहाँ वर्षा अपने पति विवेक के अचानक गायब होने के बाद टूट चुकी है, और अमित उसका पुराना दोस्त और प्रेमी है, जो उसे इस दर्द से बाहर निकालने की कोशिश करता है। कहानी का अंत एक चौंकाने वाला खुलासा करता है, जो अमित के किरदार को एक नया मोड़ देता है और कहानी को एक थ्रिलर में बदल देता है.... Pros: राइटर की एक और बेहतरीन एंट्री... जिसकी शुरुआत तो प्रेम से होती है पर अंत अक्सर निशब्द कर जाते है.. ठीक विधलिखित की तरह.."बंदिश" शब्द कहानी के केंद्रीय विषय को खूबसूरती से दर्शाता है। यह वर्षा की भावनात्मक कैद, विवेक की अनुपस्थिति, और अमित के छिपे हुए इरादों को सूक्ष्म रूप से दर्शाता है। शीर्षक कहानी के हर पहलू के साथ न्याय करता है। लेखन शैली काव्यात्मक और भावनात्मक है, जो पाठक को पात्रों के दर्द और उलझन में डुबो देती है। बारिश, मौसम, और प्रकृति के प्रतीकों का उपयोग कहानी को गहराई देता है। अमित और वर्षा के बीच जो बातचीत के दौरान शायरी या उपमा का प्रयोग किया गया है.. वो बेहद ही सटीक और सरल है.. अक्सर राइटर इस जगह स्टोरी को काम्प्लेक्स बना देते है.. जो कि इस कहानी के केस मे ऐसा नहीं है... कहानी प्रारंभ में एक सामान्य बिछड़े हुए प्रेम की कहानी प्रतीत होती है, लेकिन अंत में अमित के खुलासे के साथ यह एक थ्रिलर में बदल जाती है। यह ट्विस्ट कहानी को अप्रत्याशित और अनूठा बनाता है। यह कहानी प्रेम, विश्वासघात, अपराधबोध और उम्मीद की गहराई को छूती है। वर्षा का आंतरिक संघर्ष और अमित का दोहरा चरित्र कहानी को अलग लेवल पर ले जाता है... Cons: शार्ट स्टोरी के लिहाज से देखा जाए तो कहानी मे वैसे तो कोई कमी नहीं है, बहुत कुछ रीडर के इमेजिनशन पर छोड़ दिया गया है.. और इसमें कोई बुराई भी नहीं है.. पर.. Thrill portion को यदि और बड़ा किया जाता किसी ना किसी डिटेल्स के जरिये तो कहानी पढ़ने का मजा ही कुछ और होता.. क्यूंकि जितना भी thrill portion इस स्टोरी मे था. उसी ने पाठको के दिल मे घर कर लिया होगा.. और भूले -बिसरे... कही ना कही... पाठको के मन मे ये ट्विस्ट आ ही गया रहा होगा कि हो सकता है.. अमित ने ही विवेक को गायब करवाया हो :D, मेरे अंदर तो आ गया था.. :D
The Memory Glitch (Fantasy)
Written by- Adirshi
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: The Memory Glitch is a fantastic read that blends scifi thrills with a heartfelt story about identity and truth. The world feels alive, Meera’s a hero you can’t help but root for, and the plot keeps you guessing..... It’s not perfect, some parts feel rushed or familiar...but it’s the kind of story that sticks with you. If you love stories with a mix of tech...culture...and heart.. this one’s a treat for you.set in a futuristic Mumbai of 2050, had me hooked from the first paragraph.... It follows Meera Joshi, a reporter digging into some shady business with a virtual reality gadget called Memento that lets people relive their memories.... Pros: Mumbai in 2050 feels so real, like you’re walking through its streets, smelling street food and seeing glowing trees.... Meera's Character is tough, daring, smart, and easy to cheer for, especially when she’s scared of losing her memories.... The story has heart, with Meera’s memories of her dad making you care about her fight. It’s fast, exciting, and full of lively details that make you want to keep reading....Title was good too.. Catchy which attracts readers.. Writer did very hardwork while writing this story as this would have required extra thinking as story is set in 2050. And he was successful in that case.. Cons: The very first thing which i didn't like about this story is its written in paragraph where dialogues of characters are merged with other things like describing the scene.. And there are many scenes or part where story became a bit boring or feels lengthy... Writer should have worked on that criteria coz the moment a short story feels lengthy readers starts scrolling. Villain's character arc is not that compelling and powerful. Overall a good read..
Kissa-e-Mohabbat (Romance)
Written by- Zaman
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Kissa-e-Mohabbat ek aisi kahani hai jo apke dil mein ek chhoti si, par gehri jagah bana leti hai. Lahore ka vibrant setting, Saad ka relatable character, aur emotional moments isse ek memorable read banate hain. Thodi slow pacing aur predictable twist ke bawajood, yeh story apni simplicity aur desi vibe se jeet leti hai. Jo log realistic, emotional, aur culturally rich love stories pasand karte hain, unhe y story bahut pasand aayegi...Yeh kahani Saad ke pyar aur uske na bol paye jazbaat ki hai, jo Hania ke liye uske dil mein panapta hai. Story pyar, pachtaave, aur aage badhne ke safar ko dikhati hai..... Pros: Story shuru me utni interesting nahi lagti par jaise jaise aage badhte jaati hai.. Old wine ke tarah readers par nasha karna shuru karti hai.. Story likhne ka andaj bahut hee saral, sahaj aur sundar hai.. Ye kala long story me bahut madadgar saabit hogi yadi writer long story shuru kare toh.. Kahani me kahi koyi jatilta nahi hai.. Saad ka sharmilapan, pyar mein dooba hua andaaz har kisi ke dil se connect karta hai. Uska chhupke Hania ko dekhna most of the laundo ke liye ek universal feeling hai. Cons: Story ka plot sadharan tha.. Ye story yadi 7-8 saal pahle likhi hui hoti toh awashya hee kuch aur points isko milte par ab aajkal aise plot webseries aur movies me bahut samnya ho gaye hai... Story badhiya thi isme koyi do ray nahi, par rochakta aur romanch ke liye story ke narration yaa incident ko thoda improve kiya jaa sakta tha.Thoda sa narration par work bhi karna caahiye writer ko taaki readers swiftly story padh shake
Bewafaon Ke Peeche Bhaagi, Par Wafa Toh Saamne Thi (Romance)
Written by- Kinkystuff
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Bewafaon Ke Peeche Bhaagi, Par Wafa Toh Saamne Thi ek dil se dil tak yaa fir kahe ki dil se dick tak jati kahani hai jo pyaar, dhokhe, aur wafadari ke jazbaat ko pesh karne ki koshish karti hai... Ravi ka selfless love aur Neha ka broken yet hopeful journey (reaching dick to dil)is story ki sutradhaar hai... Thodi aur tight editing aur unexpected twists isse aur iconic bana sakte the. Agar aapko emotional dramas with kinky stuff pasand hai, toh yeh story definitely dil jeet legi. Yaa dick for sure :shag: Pros: Neha ka carefree attitude aur Ravi ka silent devotion bohot real lagta hai... Aksar aise characters hume school aur college me mil hee jaate hai... Dono ke flaws aur strengths unhe human banate hain, aur readers unke saath emotionally connect kar pate hain. Ravi ke unspoken love aur Neha ke heartbreak ke moments dil se dick tak jate hain. Letters wala climax scene kahani ke kuch ek ache scenes me se ek tha.. Story pyaar ke selfless nature ko highlight karti hai, jo Ravi ke character ke through shine karta hai. Indian family pressure, arranged marriage ka tension, aur modern romance ke conflicts ko story bohot naturally weave karti hai... Matlab kitni hee baato ka samavesh is kahani me kiya gaya hai.. Sath hee sath itna bada title rakhne ke liye writer ke sahas ko mera koti koti pranam :pray: typos ek bhi nahi :claps: aur writing style bhi thik hai. Cons: Sabse pahle to title... Itna bada title kon rakhta hai :doh: plot bahut hee sadharan tha aur uska execution usse bhi sadharan.. Story me kahi koyi thahrav hee nahi hai.. Ek express kii bhaanti bas chalte hee jati hai.. Neha dhada dhad chudte hee jati hai.. Naa sharam.. :music2: Naa lihaj... :music2: Fir naya laad aaya :music2: aise me ravi ka aise prem karna use aashiq nahi balki readers ki najar me chutiya banata hai.. Beech me aate aate tak story kafi boring lagne lagti hai... Aur vikrant wale matter ko thoda aur modify karke twist ke roop me dala jaa sakta tha.. Par writer ne ye mauka bhi hath se jaane diya.. Kul milakar ek average story...
घोर पाप - एक वर्जित प्रेम कथा (Incest)
Written by- Vakharia
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: "घोर पाप - एक वर्जित प्रेम कथा" एक साहसी और विचारोत्तेजक कहानी है। इसमें कला, कामुकता, और नैतिकता के बीच जटिल संवाद प्रस्तुत करने का उत्तम प्रयास लेखक द्वारा किया गया है। यह कहानी incest readers के लिए उपयुक्त है, खासकर के इसकी प्राचीन काल की पृष्टभूमि.. Incest को थोड़ा अलग तरह से दिखाने के लिए लेखक की प्रशंसा की जानी चाहिए..कहानी पिशाचिनी प्रासाद के रहस्यमयी इतिहास और उससे जुड़ी पांडुलिपियों के माध्यम से एक ऐसी दुनिया का चित्रण करती है, जहां नग्नता और संभोग को सामाजिक बंधनों से मुक्त माना जाता था। यह कथा राजकुमार कामशास्त्र और उनकी माता शाकिनी के बीच विकसित होने वाले यौन सम्बन्धो को दर्शाती है, जो एक तांत्रिक साधना और पिशाचिनी के बहाने से शुरू होकर सामाजिक मर्यादाओं को चुनौती देता है.... Pros: "घोर पाप " आज के सन्दर्भ मे कहानी के केंद्रीय विषय को स्पष्ट रूप से दर्शाता है। यह माता-पुत्र के बीच incest relations को घोर पाप के रूप में प्रस्तुत करता है..... लेखक की शैली भाषा में प्राचीनता का आभास है, जो कहानी के ऐतिहासिक और काल्पनिक परिवेश के अनुसार उपयुक्त है... पिशाचिनी प्रासाद के शिल्पों और शाकिनी की शारीरिक सुंदरता का वर्णन काबिले तारीफ है। यह कथा अपने विषय के चयन में अत्यंत अनूठी है। भारतीय साहित्य में माता-पुत्र के यौन संबंधों जैसे विषय को इतने स्पष्ट और सरल रूप में प्रस्तुत करना दुर्लभ है। पिशाचिनी प्रासाद और तांत्रिक साधना का समावेश कहानी को एक रहस्यमई आकर देने की कोशिश भी सराहनीय है.... Cons: कहानी का टाइटल जहाँ एक ओर परफेक्ट है.. वही दूसरी ओर कहानी के पृष्भूमि से तर्कसंगत नहीं है.. जब कहानी उस काल की है, जहाँ ये सब लगभग लगभग नार्मल तो फिर ये घोर पाप क्यों हुआ..??? कहानी माता-पुत्र के incest रिश्ते पर आधारित है जो कि xf के कई readers के लिए सबसे टॉप है, पर इसमें sex scene के साथ उतना न्याय होता नहीं दिखा.. Sex सीन्स बहुत ही साधारण थी.. कामवासना की उत्तेजना जागृत करने मे असमर्थ... साथ ही साथ.. कई जगहों पर चूत शब्द का प्रयोग किया गया, जबकि कहानी के परिवेश को देखकर योनि शब्द का प्रयोग किया जाता तो बेहतर रहता... कहानी मे पिशाचनी और प्राचीन काल के परिवेश को शामिल तो किया गया पर उनका महत्व कुछ ज्यादा दिखा नहीं.. इसी पर थोड़ी और मेहनत करके इसे थोड़ा रहस्यमई या thrill आयाम भी दिया जा सकता था.. जिसके साथ incest का तड़का.. अंग-अंग फड़का.. वाली बात हो जाती...अंततः यही कहना चाहूंगा की.. बहुत ही अच्छा प्रयास था. 👍
The train that never stops. (Romance)
Written by- Vakharia
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: Realism is not love's language.... Just forget the reality and logic and read it as writer wants this story to be read... Let the dream begins... The Train That Never Stops is a A Heartfelt Journey of Love and Longing.... This train is a love letter to the dreamers, a story that captures the magic and pain of a love that burns brightly but briefly. It’s not perfect... Also its idealism can feel forced, and its scope could be broader, but its emotional core and poetic prose make it a memorable journey. For those who believe in destiny over practicality, this train is worth boarding. Just don’t expect it to stop for logic. As writer said earlier in his note. Pros: The first half of the story was average, lacking anything particularly remarkable, and seemed inspired by several films. However, the narrative then took a transformative turn, elevating love and pain to an extraordinary new dimension. Every thought and desire wove its own distinct story, and it was here that the tale soared far beyond traditional love stories. Despite this, I held hope that in the end, even if both characters had grown old, they would surely reunite. That did not happen. Yet, the conclusion was profoundly beautiful, much like the entire story, and this is the hallmark of both the narrative and its author’s exceptional craft. Ananya's and Shaunak's characters are beautifully crafted, their chemistry palpable from their first exchange. Their artistic souls...her sketches, his poetry.... create a bond that feels fated yet fragile. The story’s exploration of longing, regret, and the enduring power of memory is moving, especially in moments like their fleeting glimpse years later on passing trains.... Indian Railway is another lead role in this story :D The opening disclaimer is a masterstroke, setting the tone with wit and honesty. It warns readers of the story’s unapologetic romanticism, preparing them for a narrative that thrives on hope and destiny rather than logic. Both of your stories are unique which portrays writer's skills Cons:The decision not to exchange contact details for some readers, this may feel like a contrived plot device to enforce the tragedy. The decades-long separation, while poignant, occasionally feels dragged out with repetitive moments of longing and missed connections. The constant return to similar emotional notes, Ananya painting Shaunak, Shaunak writing about Ananya, can make the middle sections feel redundant, dull.. And readers may skip few parts.Also the dialouges between the characters were Also pretty dull.
A Train to Nowhere (Fantasy)
Written by- Euphoria
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: A Train to Nowhere is super creepy and cool, making a plain train ride feel like a trip through your own memories and regrets. The writing is awesome, though it starts slow and can be a bit confusing. Those silent passengers who turn out to be people from the main character’s past? Total chills! It’s one of those stories that sticks in your head, messing with you long after you’re done. The way the train keeps looping, showing the same stuff outside the window, makes you feel trapped right along with Anika. She’s just trying to get home, but ends up stuck in this weird, spooky vibe that’s half real, half nightmare. It’s like the story’s digging into your own brain, pulling out stuff you thought you forgot. Honestly, it got me thinking about my own past and what I’d do on a train like that. If you’re into creepy psychological stories that make you feel something deep, you gotta give this a shot.....just don’t expect it to end anywhere normal.. Pros: Title of the story is too good... Speaks heart of the story. The plot and theme... Especially psychological timeloop instead of physical is kind of new...The story also feels gripping right from the start, with the empty train and weird silence.its just hook you into this. It’s like you’re right there with Anika, getting chills from the creepy setting.The way writer describes stuff and his style..makes everything pop in your head. It’s easy to picture and super gripping... And The time loop where the train keeps going in circles is awesome..It makes you think about what’s real and keeps you hooked trying to figure it out.The story gets you feeling for Anika, especially when you find out the passengers are people from her past. It’s sad and spooky, hitting you right in the heart and at the end.. it makes you wonder about Anika’s life and what she’s gotta face. The ending leaves you thinking, which is what a writer wants afterall.. Cons: You don’t learn much about Anika’s life or why she’s so freaked out. It’s hard to care about her as muchas youwant to. Also.. The whole time loop thing is cool but super vague. You’re left wondering how it works or why it’s happening, and it feels unfinished...The story ends without answering a lot, like what’s up with the passengers or where the train’s really going. It can feel a bit frustrating... A lot thrilling and dramatic chills moments which can be created were missed by the writer... Also a bit of Anika's backstory should have been mentioned.. You just can't expect readers to imagine everything on their own.
Abbu Ki Randi Ayesha (Incest)
Written by- Naruto411
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: It’s all about Ayesha and Qasim sneaking around, giving in to their wild, physical desires in secret moments....like in the kitchen, barn, or by the well. The story dives deep into their lust, with super detailed, graphic scenes that don’t hold back. It’s not just physical, though.... there’s this messed-up emotional pull between them, mixed with guilt and thrill.... Zain’s in the background, busy with work, until the end when he catches them, and things get complicated.....he’s shocked but seems weirdly into it. The story ends on a cliffhanger, leaving you wondering what happens next. Pros: The story doesn’t shy away from being raw and dirty. If you’re into intense incest... no-filter stuff, it delivers big time. Ayesha’s shameless attitude and Qasim’s rough energy are kind of gripping.The way they keep almost getting caught by Zain or villagers had its own charm... It’s bit of thrilling, like a secret you shouldn’t know. Images are good... Erotic. Ending the story with twist is one of the best thing that happened to this story. Cons: This story has one of the boldest incest theme (father-daughter incest ). It includes explicit elements like urophilia, covering everything from vaginal to anal sex, and features vivid, provocative imagery. However, despite its intensity, the story fails to ignite the level of arousal or passion it should. It feels as though the writer was indulging in personal fantasies(:shag:) while writing, lacking finesse and didn't had time to think about story presentation.... The paragraphs are poorly structured, making it hard to follow. Additionally, why do people often use foreign people images in desi Indian stories when authentic Indian content is widely available online? The story lacks any background setting to give it depth. It’s just a relentless sequence of sexual encounters from start to finish, with no substance beyond that
तेरहवीं मंजिल का रहस्य (Sci-fi)
Written by- JOKER.
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: तेरहवीं मंज़िल का रहस्य... एक SCI FI टच के साथ रहस्यमयी कहानी है जो अजय नाम के एक ऑफिस कर्मचारी के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है.... अजय की ज़िंदगी बोरिंग और काम से भरी है, लेकिन एक रात जब वो गलती से अपने ऑफिस की लिफ्ट में 13वीं मंज़िल का बटन दबा देता है, तो... सबकुछ बदल जाता है... ये मंज़िल, जो कथित तौर पर है ही नहीं, पुरानी, डरावनी और रहस्यों से भरी है...इसके बाद अजय की पूरी पहचान...उसका नाम, जॉब, घर, सब मिट जाता है, जैसे वो कभी था ही नहीं...फिर वो इस रहस्य को सुलझाने की कोशिश करता है और पता चलता है कि 13वीं मंज़िल पर कंपनी के खतरनाक एक्सपेरिमेंट्स चलते थे... आखिर में वो अपनी पहचान वापस पा लेता है, लेकिन सवाल रह जाता है...क्या ये सच है या सिर्फ एक और भ्रम...ये कहानी सस्पेंस और दिमाग को हिलाने वाली है, जो आपको सोचने पर मजबूर कर देती है... Pros: टाइटल स्टोरी से मैच करता है.. और राइटिंग स्टाइल भी लाजवाब है.. स्टोरी सरल भाषा मे और सरल तरीके मे लिखी गयी जिससे readers को पढ़ने मे कोई दिक्कत ना हो... साथ ही साथ प्लाट भी थोड़ा यूनिक टाइप है...कहानी शुरू से ही आपको बांध लेती है...13वीं मंज़िल का डरावना सीन, टिमटिमाती लाइट्स और धूल भरा कमरा - सब कुछ ऐसा लगता है जैसे आप अजय के साथ वहां हो... सस्पेंस हर पल बढ़ता रहता है। 13वीं मंज़िल का आइडिया और ये कि अजय की पूरी ज़िंदगी मिट जाती है, बहुत अलग और रोमांचक है...बिलकुल किसी sci fi फ़िल्म की तरह... अजय की बोरिंग ऑफिस लाइफ, लंबे काम के घंटे और डेडलाइन का प्रेशर...ये सब इतना रियल लगता है कि आप उससे तुरंत जुड़ जाते हो... ये कहानी को और भरोसेमंद बनाता है...आखिरी हिस्सा, जहां अजय सब कुछ ठीक करता है लेकिन फिर भी शक में रहता है कि ये सच है या भ्रम, कमाल का है.. एक तरह से ओपन एंडिंग...ये आपको कहानी खत्म होने के बाद भी सोचने पर मजबूर करता है... Cons: 13वीं मंज़िल पर वो एक्सपेरिमेंट्स क्या थे, company क्या काम करती थि.. क्यों करती थी ये पूरी तरह साफ नहीं होता। थोड़ा और समझाया होता तो मज़ा और आता... शार्ट स्टोरी के सेटिंग के हिसाब से सब चीजे एक्सप्लेन नहीं की जा सकती.. या नहीं किया जा सकता.. पर फिर भी बहुत कुछ राइटर ने छोड़ दिया और स्टोरी को जल्दी से ख़त्म कर दिया दिया.. जिससे स्टोरी पढ़ने के बाद अधूरी सी लगती है...अजय के बारे में सिर्फ उसका काम और थकान पता चलता है। उसकी पर्सनल लाइफ या बैकग्राउंड के बारे में ज़्यादा नहीं बताया, तो उससे पूरी तरह जुड़ना मुश्किल है। कहानी खत्म होने पर कई सवाल रह जाते हैं, जैसे कि कंपनी ने ऐसा क्यों किया या श्रीकांत की पूरी कहानी क्या थी...?? थोड़ा और जवाब मिलते तो बेहतर होता..
A Cursed Night (Horror)
Written by- Amour
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: A Cursed Night ek horror +fantasy story hai jo darrati bhi hai aur dil ko bhi chooti hai. Rajan ka pyar aur sacrifice, creepy bangla, aur secret society ka angle isko khaas banata hai. Thodi slow shuruaat aur kuch confusing bits hain, lekin agar aapko bhutiya kahaniya aur emotional twist pasand hai, to ye story ekdum try karni chahiye.... Kahani Rajan naam ke ek architect ke around ghumti hai. Rajan ek bada project ke liye Lansdowne ke Addison Palace jata hai, jo ek purana, shrapit bangla hai. Waha usko weird sapne aate hain jisme ek British officer Sir Robert usko bolta hai ki uski biwi Ridhima uske pyar ke layak nahi aur usko maar dalna chahiye... Iske baad ki kahani Rajan ke sammhohan, darawne sapne aur uske reaction par aadharit hai.. Pros: Write ne plot sochne aur story me depth dene kaa acha prayas kiya aur usme safal bhi hue...Starting se hi story mein ek bhutiya feel hai. Wo basement ka scene, skeletons, aur wo painting wali aankh jo Rajan ko ghoorti hai.... sab itna creepy jaisa feel hota hai... Rajan aur Ridhima ka pyar dil ko chhoota hai. Rajan ka last mein khud ko sacrifice karna, Ridhima ke liye, bahut emotional hai. Isse story sirf darr nahi, dil bhi deti hai.Secret society aur shrap ka idea kafi cool hai. Ye soch kar hi darr lagta hai ki koi jagah itni powerful ho sakti hai ki aapka mind control kar le. Ending ka twist, jaha Rajan khud ko maar deta hai, shocking hai... Story mein darr ke saath saath ye sochne wali baat hai ki kya sach hai, kya sapna, aur kya shrap..... Story kaa ant bahut acha tha.👍👍 Cons: Writer ko apne writing style me kaam karna padega.. Unhe samajhna hoga ki.. Kahani aur nibandh me bahut antar hota hai.. Dono ko ek tarah nahi parosh sakte.. Ye kahani kam.. Nibandh jyada lagta hai.. "A story without a single dialogue".. Usme bhi pqragraph itne bade bade... Damn.. Aur har line me rajan.. Rajan.. Rajan shabd.. Bhai, ye.. Wo.. Isne.. Usne.. Yaha.. Waha.. Shabd bhi hote hai.. Har jagah संज्ञा nahi use karna hota.. सर्वनाम bhi use kiya jaa sakta hai.. Taaki kahani jatil naa ho...Story ke plot me kya kuch nahi tha...?? Horror touch, old ford, curse, secret society etc. Par sirf writer ki lekhan shaili ne is story ko itna ka jor bana diya.. Baar baar ek hee baat ka repetition.. Readers ke liye ubayi kaa kaam karta hai... Ummid hai.. Aap winner stories ko padhkar unke style embrace karne kii koshish karenge..
Khamosh Ishq (Romance)
Written by- Mrxr
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Khamosh Ishq ek pyar bhari aur dil tootne wali kahani hai jo apko hasati hai, rulaati hai, aur aage ke liye tadpati hai.. Sana ka ek tarfa pyar, uski diary ke jazbaat, aur Faisal ka unexpected inkaar story ko unforgettable banata hai. Thodi slow shuruaat aur kuch unclear bits hain. last scene mein Sana ke aansu aur uski diary ka shayari dil mein ghar kar jata hai– “Mujhe pyar hua tha” par fir pata chala ye toh ek gaana hai :D, anyway.. Story ke according ye fit baithta hai... Poster me to be continue... Likha hai shayad writer mahashay.. Story ko aage continue karne kii chaah me ho.. Pros: Story ka sabse bada plus point hai uska emotional depth. Sana ka Faisal ke liye pyar, uski chhoti chhoti koshishen (jaise painting banana, letter likhna), aur last mein uska dil tootna... Emotional rollercoaster hai ye kahani.. Sana ka character bahut relatable hai...ek ladki jo apne pyar ko dil mein chhupaye rakhti hai aur chhoti-chhoti cheezon mein khushi dhoondhti hai. Faisal ka bhi carefree lekin caring nature story ko lively banata hai.Story ke saath images (jaise Sana ka painting banate waqt ya diary likhte waqt) aur detailed descriptions ek film jaisa feel dete hain. Sana ke chehre ki muskaan ya aansuon ka likha hua scene dil mein utar jata hai... Poster bhi acha banaya hai..Last mein Faisal ka inkaar aur Sana ka toota dil ek bada shock deta hai. “To be continued” wala twist story ke aage ke liye excited karta hai... kya Sana ka pyar adhoora rahega ya koi nayi shuruaat hogi?.. Cons: Ab ye unstories me se hai.. Jaha pros se jyada cons hai.. Par writer kyunki story ko continue karne ki firak me hai toh main apne taraf se jitni ho sake utni chije explain karna chahta hoon taaki ye mistakes unse dobara naa ho... Sabse pahle to.. Har 5 min me pov nahi badalna hota.. Aap bas koyi bhi achhce writer ki story padhe.. Ek pov pe puri story rahti hai.. Har scene me pov badalna matlab readers ki nashe dabane jaisa hai.. Aur short story shuru hote hee aapne 7-8 characters ke naam likhke readers ko kaam saunp diya ki ye lo.. 8 log ghai.. Inke naam, kaam, relations yaad kar lo.. 10-15 min to usko isi me lag jaane hai.. Long story me ye work kar sakta hai.. Short story me nahi... Faltu ke side characters ko daalna hee nahi tha, jinka story ke plot me koyi yogdan nahi... Aur uske baad typos had se jyada hai.. Wo actually typos nahi.. Aapki hinglish ki kami hai..Usse.. Naa ki ushse.. Aansu.. Naa ki aanshu...स... श (S.. Sh) Baith... Naa ki Bayth... Aise ... Naa ki ayse.. Yaha bhi aap yadi kisi writer ki story padhenge to aapki hinglish thik ho jayegi aur bhai.. Space wagerah dabaya karo... Ekdum chipka diya sab lines ko.
The Quantum Curse (Sci-fi)
Written by- Euphoria
Rating – 8.75/10
Story Review: The Quantum Curse is an absolute thrill ride that sucked readers...right into the heart of Jaipur. As anordinary reader, I was hooked by this wild mix of science, mystery, and a touch of magic. In the main lead, we see... Riya, a scientist who finds a creepy old pocket watch that starts messing with time or mind.. streets flipping between today and centuries ago, people stuck in time loops, and a city falling apart.... The story’s got heart, adventure and a vibe that makes you question what’s possible and I couldn’t put it down Pros : Writer's writing and describing power is strong..The city feels so real, like you’re walking through its chaotic markets, smelling chai, and dodging rickshaws. The forts, stepwells, and vibrant colors make Jaipur a character in itself and it’s unforgettable.....Both Riya’s and Amit's characters were handsomely written both are smart but human, wrestling with logic while the world goes nuts. The idea of a cursed watch that tangles time, blending quantum physics with ancient legends, is so cool. The time glitches.. Deja vh... flickering cities, history crashing keep you glued to the page......Story plot felt fresh and a lot of work had been put on it.. Sci fi area was covered very well. I was searching for any mistakes in that area.. But its all believable.. Kudos to the writer.. He wrote and balanced everhthing so perfectly..title was also eye catching... Cons: Some of the quantum physics talk, like temporal entanglement may went over readers head. It’s cool, but a simpler explanation would’ve helped many readers to follow along better .The legend about the watch’s and its creator should have shown more.. This way story plot would have more depth than it has now...While the city’s chaos is intense, the personal consequences for Riya and Amit feel muted.... More focus on their fears, relationships, or losses could’ve made the stakes hit harder emotionally
चंदगी राम पहलवान (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Shetan
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: चंदगी राम पहलवान एक ऐसी कहानी है जो दिल को छूती है, प्रेरित करती है और मेहनत की ताकत पर यकीन दिलाती है...बिना का अपने देवर के लिए जुनून, चंदगी की मेहनत और गाँव का देसी माहौल कहानी को खास बनाता है... कुछ जगह यह थोड़ी कम विस्तृत लगती है, लेकिन इसका भावनात्मक और प्रेरणादायक प्रभाव इसे अविस्मरणीय बनाता है... यह कहानी यह बताती है कि मेहनत और विश्वास से कोई भी सपना हकीकत बन सकता है। बिना का आखिरी दृश्य, जहाँ वो बग्गा और सेवा को लड्डू खिलाती है और चंदगी की विश्व चैंपियन बनने की यात्रा... दिल में गर्व और खुशी भर देती है...चंदगी राम पहलवान एक सच्ची घटना से प्रेरित कहानी है, जो हरियाणा के हिसार में 1937 में जन्मे चंदगी राम के जीवन और उनके पहलवान बनने की प्रेरणादायक यात्रा को दर्शाती है... यह कहानी मेहनत, विश्वास और पारिवारिक प्यार की जीत का प्रतीक है.. Pros :कहानी का सबसे बड़ा आकर्षण इसका प्रेरणादायक संदेश है। बिना का अपने देवर के लिए विश्वास और चंदगी का उस विश्वास पर खरा उतरना हर उस व्यक्ति को प्रेरित करता है जो अपने सपनों को हासिल करना चाहता है...यह दिखाता है कि मेहनत और दृढ़ता से असंभव भी संभव हो सकता है... बिना का किरदार कहानी की रीढ़ है... एक साधारण गृहिणी, जो घूंघट में रहकर भी अपने देवर को पहलवान बनाने का सपना देखती है और उसे पूरा करती है, बेहद प्रभावशाली है... उसका गुस्सा, प्यार और जिद दिल को छू लेते हैं.. हरियाणवी संस्कृति, गाँव का माहौल, दंगल का उत्साह और रोजमर्रा की जिंदगी का चित्रण कहानी को बहुत ही आकर्षक बनाता है... बिना और चंदगी का रिश्ता, भाभी का माँ जैसा प्यार,और चंदगी का अपनी भाभी के लिए सम्मान कहानी xf मे एक अलग ऊंचाई प्रदान करता है... खासकर जब बिना की आँखों में आंसू देखकर चंदगी पहलवानी के लिए तैयार होता है :bow: कहानी सच्ची घटनाओं पर आधारित है, लेकिन इसका नाटकीय प्रस्तुतीकरण (जैसे बिना का मनचलों से सामना और दंगल का रोमांच) इसे रोचक बनाता है... हरियाणवी और हिंदी भाषा का समायोजन भी बेहतरीन तरीके से किया गया है... Cons: कहानी यदि biopic थी तो राइटर को थोड़ा और प्रेजेंटेशन मे काम करना चाहिए था.. ताकि स्टोरी और आगे के दृश्य को दिखा सके.. ना कि सिर्फ मेले के आखाड़े तक सिमट जाए.. इसको इस तरह से डिवाइड करना था कि चन्दगी राम जी के पहलवानी का ज्यादा से ज्यादा हिस्सा कवर हो... खैर... ये एक बिलकुल नयी चीज है फोरम के लिए, जहाँ biopic को कहानी का रूप देकर प्रस्तुत किया गया... कुछ typos थे, जिसपर लेखक ने ध्यान नहीं दिया साथ ही साथ मेले मे जब फाइनल फाइट हुई तो प्रतिद्वंदी पहलवान का नाम बिरजू बताया गया जो तीन साल से चैंपियन था.. पर लास्ट मे उसका नाम राकेश और दो बार का चैंपियन को चन्दगी का प्रतिद्वंदी बना दिया.. शायद राइटर से यहाँ मिस्टेक हुई.. या फिर मैंने समझने मे कोई भूल की..?? कुल मिलाकर बहुत ही प्रशंसनीय प्रयास लेखा का.. जो उन्होंने चन्दगी राम जी के जीवन का एक महत्वपूर्ण अंश हमारे सामने कहानी के रूप मे रखा...
अधूरी शिद्दत (Romance)
Written by- Mahakal
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: अधूरी शिद्दत.... एक मार्मिक प्रेम कहानी है, जो दिल्ली की सड़कों और बारिश के माहौल में रची गई है...यह अंकित शर्मा, एक मेहनती सॉफ्टवेयर इंजीनियर और सोनिया कपूर, एक संवेदनशील आर्टिस्ट, की मुलाकात से शुरू होती है... एक बरसाती शाम की संयोग भरी मुलाकात धीरे-धीरे गहरे प्रेम में बदलती है, जो छोटे-छोटे पलों—कॉफी शॉप की बातों, इंडिया गेट की सैर और चाँदनी चौक की चाट में खूबसूरती से उभरता है.. सोनिया की पेंटिंग्स और अंकित की सादगी उनके रिश्ते को रंग और गर्माहट देते हैं.. लेकिन यह कहानी सिर्फ प्रेम की मासूमियत तक सीमित नहीं है... यह जीवन की नाजुकता और अनकहे दुख को भी उजागर करती है...जैसे-जैसे अंकित और सोनिया एक-दूसरे के करीब आते हैं..एक अनचाही सच्चाई उनके रिश्ते को चुनौती देती है, जो उनकी जिंदगी को हमेशा के लिए बदल देती है... जौन एलिया की शायरी कहानी की भावनाओं को और गहराई देती है, जो हर अध्याय में दर्द और प्यार का मिश्रण पेश करती है..... Pros: कहानी प्रेम, दुख और जीवन की नाजुकता को गहरी संवेदनशीलता के साथ प्रस्तुत करती है, जो पाठक के दिल को छूती है... अंकित और सोनिया के किरदार बहुत ही स्वाभाविक और relatable हैं... दिल्ली की सड़कों, बारिश, स्ट्रीटलाइट्स, और चाँदनी चौक की चाट का बारीक वर्णन कहानी को एक मजबूत पृष्ठभूमि देता है, जो पाठक को उस माहौल में ले जाता है... जौन एलिया की शायरी का प्रत्येक अध्याय में उपयोग कहानी की भावनाओं को और गहरा करता है, जो पाठक को कहानी के दर्द और प्यार से जोड़ता है।अंकित और सोनिया के बीच प्रेम धीरे-धीरे और स्वाभाविक रूप से विकसित होता है, जो कॉफी शॉप, इंडिया गेट, और हौज खास जैसे पलों में खूबसूरती से उभरता है.... सोनिया की बीमारी और अंकित की बेबसी को संवेदनशीलता के साथ दर्शाया गया है... अंतिम अध्याय में अंकित का अकेलापन और सोनिया की यादों के साथ जीना एक खालीपन का अहसास कराता है, जो कहानी की भावनात्मक शक्ति को दर्शाता है... Cons: सर्वप्रथम तो ये प्लाट इतना साधारण था कि.. अन्य साधारण प्लाट भी स्पेशल लगने लगे.. मतलब सैकड़ो बार ये प्लाट घूम चूका है... और लेखक महोदय को प्रॉपर spacing और pragraph का महत्त्व समझना होगा.. जो कि लेखन शैली मे अहम् योगदान निभाता है....सोनिया के अनाथ होने का राज अंत में सामने आता है, लेकिन उनकी पृष्ठभूमि और अतीत के बारे में और विवरण की कमी किरदार को पूरी तरह समझने में बाधा डालती है... कुछ दृश्य, जैसे बारिश में स्कूटी खराब होने और अंकित का सोनिया को गोद में उठाकर दौड़ना, थोड़े नाटकीय लग सकते हैं, जो कहानी की सादगी को कम कर सकते हैं... कहानी मे ऐसा एक भी दृश्य नहीं जो readers के लिए कुछ नयापन या उन्हें थोड़ा उत्साहित करें... सब कुछ predictable था...
Ek Shadishuda Aurat (Adultery)
Written by- labia
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Ek Shadishuda Aurat... ek bold aur intense story hai jo shuru se hi apko hook kar leti hai. Ye ek aisi kahani hai jo adultery ke theme ko explore karti hai aur Sania ke character ke through ek newly married aurat ki zindagi aur uske inner conflicts ko dikhati hai.... Story ka setting ek typical Indian colony ka hai, jahan garmi, daily struggles aur chhote-chhote details jaise kachra gaadi wale tak ki najar gandi hona...ek realistic vibe create karte hain... Pros: Finally aisi story aayi jo vastav me uttejana badhati ho.. Naa ki sirf sex ke naam pe dull sex... Writer ki sexual scene likhne ki kshamta bahut badhiya jo apni lekhni se erotic aur intense scene create kar sakte hai.. Aur yahi art.. Incest or adultery prefix stories ki jaan hota hai.. Sania ka ghar, uski nighty, cooler ki hawa, aur rented duplex ka description itna detailed hai ki aap scene ko feel kar sakte hain. Ye chhote details story ko relatable banate hain. Sania ek aisi aurat hai jo shadi ke baad physical aur emotional changes se guzar rahi hai. Uska conservative se bold hone ka transition natural lagta hai jo ketu ke saamne uski vulnerability ko thoda logical prove karte hai...Climax mein Sania ka guilt aur confusion, jab wo apne actions pe sawal uthati hai, ek human touch deta hai. Ye dikhata hai ki story sirf physical attraction ke baare mein nahi, balki inner turmoil ke baare mein bhi hai.... Aur aage janne ki ichcha bhi readers ke man me paida hoti hai. Cons: Sabse pahle to ye title me part-1 likhne ka kya auchitya..?? Jabki yaha writer ki koshish hee hona chahiye ki story puri tarah complete hai.. Bhale naa ho :D fir aise me khud ke pair me kulhadi maarne waali baat samajh nahi aayi... Ketu ka character thoda stereotypical villain lagta hai, jo har mauke pe lustful nazar daal raha hai.... Jo aksar porn movies me hota hai.. Character ko thoda aur develop karna tha.. Sania ka itni jaldi surrender kar dena thoda unrealistic laga, thoda naa nukur toh karna chahiye tha.
A Day As A Moderator (Adultery)
Written by- _Abhay
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: XF me honewali nok-jhok aur xf ke members ko lekar story likhne ki shandar pahal, abhay dwara.. Aise content aur aane chahiye.. Ye kahani, ek wild, chaotic aur full-on entertaining story hai jo shuru se lekar end tak aapko ek ride pe le jati hai. Ye kahani Abhay ke ek din ke adventure ki hai, jo Delhi mein ek sex story site ke moderator banne ka anokha experience sambhalta hai, aur fir uski zindagi kaise ulat-pulat ho jati hai.... Hinglish ka flavor, adult humor aur unexpected twists is story ko masaledar banate hain Pros: Abhay ka naive aur thoda bevakoof wala character story ko funny banata hai. Uska Priyanka ke saath encounter se lekar police ke haathon arrest hona.. Story ko naye naye aaymo me le jata hai.. Dialogues aur situations, jaise Aayush ka PUBG khelna, Rocky bhai ka Russian chakkar, ya LSB section ke behuda sawal, xf members ke liye relatable hai. Ye story ek typical online forum ki duniya ko perfectly capture karti hai. Story mein ek ke baad ek twist aata hai...Priyanka ka pati, XForum ka office, LSB section ke shocking queries aur fir rape attempt ka case..ye sab aapko story se baandhe rakhte hai..LSB section ke through story online adult forums ke wild side ko dikhati hai, jo ek satire ke roop mein kaam karta hai.. Cons: Writer ne achi khasi mehnat ki hogi ise likhne me aur story ki length bhi bahut hai.. Acha khasa samay bhi diya hai to.. Thoda aur aaram se, thoda aur samay dekar ise thoda aur funny banana chahiye tha.. Story me funny vibe to hai.. Par comedy kayi jagah niras lagti hai.. Matlab story funny hote hue bhi funny nahi hai.. Yadi ispe dhyan diya jata to kya pata story top 3 me shumar ho jaati...?? Afterall its a game of points.. Jyada points pao, winner bano..:dazed: Kuch scenes, jaise Priyanka ka dildo wala moment ya Abhay ka itni aasani se police case mein fasna, thoda filmi aur exaggerated lagte hain. Thodi realism isko aur grounded kar sakti thi. Shuru ka Priyanka wala part aur LSB section ke queries ka portion thoda lamba lagta hai. Editing pe thoda aur work karna tha.. Jisse typos bhi kam hote.. Jo ki is story me bhar bhar ke hai..
Maa Aur Mausaji Ke Karibi Rishte (Adultery)
Written by- LONELYCHAHAK
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: Yeh story ek bold aur controversial narrative hai jo family dynamics aur forbidden relationships ko explore karti hai....Hinglish mein likhi gayi yeh kahani desi audience ke liye engaging hai... Jisme ek beta.. Apni maa ko kisi aur mard ke sath sambandh banate hue dekhta hai.. Jaha uski maakisi chakli ki tarah apne bahen ke husband se chud rahi hoti hai... Full 2 erotic setting.Story ka plot fast-paced hai aur ek young narrator ke perspective se bataya gaya hai, jo apni maa aur mausaji ke beech chhupa rishta dekhta hai. Hinglish ka use natural lagta hai, jaise koi dost baat kar raha ho. Dialogues aur descriptions mein koyi jhijhak nahi hai, jo desi readers ko instantly connect karta hai Pros: Mausaji aur mummy ke beech baatein aur unka chemistry erotic feel deta hai, especially unke flirty aur bold exchanges... sanskari perspective ek ironic twist add karta hai, jo story ko aur intriguing banata hai.Image ke through visual elements add karne ka idea acha hai, jo reader ke imagination ko boost karta hai... Image bhi kaafi erotic hai. Cons: Bhai... Sabse pahle toh bold font me likhna band karo.. Warna world ki best erotic story bhi likhoge to wo winner nahi ban paayegi.. Just too disturbing for any reader... :sigh: aur jab aise story likho to pooja-path ko usse kahi door rakho.. Kyunki ye controversy create kar sakta hai. Characters, especially mummy aur mausaji, ke motivations ya backstory ke baare mein zyada nahi pata. Yeh thoda adhura feel deta hai... Matlab story shuru ki aur chudayi chaalu.. Thoda setup wagerah karna tha...Climax thoda rushed lagta hai, aur ending mein closure ki kami hai.
Buddhy ne Dr Mummy ko Pata kar Choda (Adultery)
Written by- mayaviki
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: Yeh story ek bold aur adult themed based hai jo ek sensitive topic ko Hinglish mein present karti hai. Desi setting aur characters ke through yeh kahani local audience ke liye kafi relatable feel karti hai, fantasies ko pura karti hai... Story ka plot ek young narrator ke perspective se hai, jo apni mummy(Nasreen), ek physiotherapist aur unke husband ke boss Rajiv ke beech developing rishte ko dekhta hai. Hinglish ka use bohot natural hai aur dialogues daily life ke conversations jaisa feel dete hain. Story ka flow thoda predictable hai, par detailed descriptions aur slow buildup isse engaging banata hai Pros:Jon profession, clinic aur family dynamics ka setting story ko authentic desi feel dene ki koshish karte bai... Rajiv aur Nasreen ke interactions mein cultural limitation bohot achhe se capture kiye gaye hain... Aise me gair mard se sambhog karna is kahani ko masaledar banata hai.. Rajiv ka manipulative aur confident nature aur Nasreen ka initially shy but gradually bold attitude ek interesting contrast create karta hai... Jo is story ke liye perfect hai..Story me dono characters ke beech chemistry buildup karne ka acha prayas kiya gaya hai.. Cons: Burkhe jaise shabd ka prayog baar baar karna.... Yeh cultural boundaries ko cross karta hai, jo controversy ka reason ban sakta hai. Characters ke motivations ya emotional depth ke baare mein zyada insight nahi milta. Rajiv aur Nasreen ke rishte ka progression thoda rushed lagta hai.Aur kahani ka title bhi kuch khas interesting nahi hai.. Ending bhi had se jyada sadharan hai jaha dono ke bich chudayi khatm to story khatm...
कामवासना क्या है क्यू है
Written by- sk story's
Rating – null
Story Review: Disqualified as this is Not a story, only Osho's lectures
लागी छूटे न (Romance)
Written by- Niks77kill
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: लागी छूटे न... दिल को छू लेनी वाली कहानी है जो प्रेम, बलिदान और सामाजिक दबावों के बीच फंसे दो व्यक्तियों, नितिन और पूजा की भावनात्मक यात्रा को दिखाती है... यह कहानी उनके अनचाहे विवाह के इर्द-गिर्द घूमती है, जहां दोनों अपने पिछले प्रेम को खोने के दर्द से जूझ रहे हैं...लेखक ने प्रेम की जटिलताओं, सामाजिक बंधनों और व्यक्तिगत मजबूरियों को संवेदनशीलता के साथ उकेरा है... कहानी का अंत आशावादी है, जहां नितिन और पूजा एक-दूसरे के प्रति अपने प्रेम को स्वीकार करते हैं, जो पाठको को एक भावनात्मक संतुष्टि प्रदान करता है.... यह कहानी सामाजिक मुद्दों पर भी प्रकाश डालती है... नितिन और पूजा की कहानी पाठक को यह सोचने पर मजबूर करती है कि प्रेम सिर्फ मिलन में नहीं, बल्कि त्याग और समझ में भी होता है... यह कहानी हर उस व्यक्ति को पढ़नी चाहिए जो प्रेम की गहराई और सामाजिक बंधनों के बीच के द्वंद्व को समझना चाहता है.... Pros: कहानी पात्रों की आंतरिक उथल-पुथल और उनके दर्द को बहुत ही प्रभावी ढंग से प्रस्तुत करती है... नितिन और पूजा के किरदार आम पाठक गणों से सम्बंधित और विश्वसनीय हैं... क्यूंकि अक्सर ऐसे विवाह की घटनाये सामने आती ही रहती है... नितिन और पूजा की भावनाएं और निर्णय सामाज के एक सच को दर्शाते हैं, जिससे पाठक उनसे आसानी से जुड़ पाता है... साथ ही साथ...कहानी धर्म, जाति और पारिवारिक दबाव जैसे संवेदनशील मुद्दों को उठाती है, यह प्रेम और सामाजिक रूढ़ियों के बीच के बीच विरोध को भी बखूबी दर्शाता है. लेखक की हिन्दी भाषा सरल लेकिन प्रभावशाली है... कहानी का अंत मे... जब नितिन और पूजा अपने प्रेम को पा लेते हैं, यह पाठक को उम्मीद और खुशी का एहसास कराता है नहीं तो आजकल हैप्पी एंडिंग कम ही देखने को मिलती है 😁 Cons: स्टोरी उतनी लम्बी भी नहीं थी.. कि वर्ड लिमिट का issue आये फिर भी राइटर ने पूरी स्टोरी ऐसी लिखी जैसे वो किसी जल्दबाजी मे हो.. मतलब तुरंत तुरंत.. सबकुछ करा दिया.. पहले दिल तोड़ा फिर.. फिर शादी.. फिर माँ की कैंसर से मौत.. फिर तलाक.. फिर नेहा वाला किस्सा.. फिर दोनों के बीच प्यार.. मतलब कही भी पाठक को इतना समय या फील करने नहीं दिया कि वो करैक्टर के फीलिंग्स के साथ खुद को जोड़ सके... यहाँ वहां कुछ typos भी थे. कहानी के जल्दबाजी समापन मे नेहा के तलाक और गर्भावस्था का हिस्सा अचानक और कम विस्तृत लगता है, जो कहानी के प्रवाह को थोड़ा प्रभावित करता है....
आखिरी ख्वाहिश (Incest)
Written by- Laadla
Rating – 5.5/10
Story Review: आखरी ख्वाहिश.... एक ऐसी कहानी है जो एक 28 वर्षीय युवक की जिंदगी के अंतिम दिनों को चित्रित करती है, जो ब्रेन ट्यूमर की अंतिम अवस्था से जूझ रहा है... कहानी में युवक का अपनी मां के साथ भावनात्मक और विवादास्पद रिश्ता केंद्र में है, जो उसकी मृत्यु से पहले उसकी आखिरी इच्छाओं को पूरा करने की कोशिश करता है... यह कहानी मृत्यु, पारिवारिक रिश्तों और व्यक्तिगत इच्छाओं जैसे विषयों को छूती है, लेकिन प्रस्तुति कई मायनों में असहज करने वाली है... Pros: कहानी में मुख्य पात्र की मृत्यु के करीब आने की भावना को कुछ हद तक प्रभावी ढंग से दर्शाया गया है...उसका अपने सीमित समय में परिवार के साथ समय बिताने का प्रयास उचित है.. मां और पिता का अपने बेटे के लिए चिंता और प्यार कहानी का एकमात्र सकारात्मक पहलू है.... मां का अपने बेटे के साथ अंतिम दिनों में करीब रहने का प्रयास कुछ हद तक मार्मिक है... अच्छा हूँ कि कहानी छोटी और तेज गति वाली है, जो पाठक का समय बर्बाद नहीं करती... Cons: क्या ख़ाकर लेखक ने ऐसा प्लाट सोचा था..?? माँ बेटा sexual रिलेशनशिप xf पर सबसे पसंदीदा टॉपिक है.. पर ऐसा प्लाट.. जहाँ बेटा मर रहा है.. माँ रो रही है, वही बेटा चूची चूसने और माँ कि चूत मारने के फिराक मे है..?? इससे बुरा प्लाट मैंने आजतक नहीं देखा... मैंने इस स्टोरी पर अन्य readers के रिव्युज नहीं देखे.. पर उम्मीद है कि उन्होंने भी लेखक को भर भर के पेला होगा.. कतई घटिया सोच.. और घृणा को भी घृणा हो जाए वैसी कहानी... पॉइंट्स तो इसको माइनस मे देना चाहिए.. पर क्यूंकि मै जज के तौर पर अभी हूँ तो उस पद की गरिमा का ख्याल रखना पड़ेगा...
Insaaf Mukammal Hua (Thriller)
Written by- Mr.Magnificent
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Insaaf Mukammal Hua.... aisi kahani hai jo Dilli ke dil mein chhupi ek dark aur thrilling mystery ko bayan karti hai... Ye story ek serial killer jise..The Puzzle Killer naam diya gaya.. Uske aatank ke around ghumti hai, jo na sirf laashein chhodta hai balki har murder ke saath ek paheli bhi.... Delhi police ki nakmyabi ke baad Is case ko solve karne ke liye aata hai Armaan Malhotra, ek sharp private detective..aur Nishtha Sharma, ek bold journalist. Dono milkar ek 15 saal purane fake police encounter ke sach ko uncover karte hain, jo is killing spree ka motive nikalta hai. Kahani suspense, drama aur emotional depth ka ek mix hai... Pros: Kahani ka plot bohot engaging hai. Har murder aur paheli ek naya twist laati hai, jo readers ka utsah banaye rakhne ki koshish karta hai.. Armaan aur Nishtha dono well developed hain... Armaan ka calm aur calculative nature aur Nishtha ka fearless journalism ek perfect contrast banata hai.... Unka character apne aap me purn lagta hau.. Unka teamwork kahani ka highlight hai.Story mein 15 saal purana fake encounter aur police corruption ka angle bohot powerful hai. Ye real life issues jaise injustice aur coverups ko highlight karta hai, jo aaj bhi relevant hain... Katil ka pakda na jana aur insaaf ka adhoora rehna ek special ending deta hai... Jo ki hr kahani menahi hota.... Ye reader ko sochne pe majboor karta hai ki insaaf kya hota hai aur kya badla justify ho sakta hai... Writer ki lekhan shaili achhi hai aur presentation bhi shandar hai.. Jisse story complex hote hue bhi readers ko sahajta se samajh aati hai. Cons: Kahne ko to story ka theme suspence+ thriller hai.. Par thrill wali feeling story ko padhte waqt kahi nahi aati.. Yaha tak ki laash milne ke bawjood... Kuch jyada hee sahajta se sab kuch bayaan kar diya writer ne.. Thriller story ki setting thodi alag tarah se hoti hai.. Presentation bhi asia tha ki same chij kayi baar repeat pe repeat hui... Conversations bhi saadharan the.. Kahi bhi suspence wala feel hee nahi aa raha tha... Aur police itni bekhabar kaise thi kya.. Jo police se jude logo ki hatya ho rahi hai.. Aur unhe armaan aur nishta batate h ki ye ek badla hai..Casefile bahut saadharan tha.. Ek normal aadmi ko bhi yadi access de diya jaye to wo 15 saal pahle wala connection dhoondh ke saamne rakh dega.. Charo mrit logo ka.. Isme armaan aur nishta ka kuch khas role tha nahi...
Ek Bhayanak Mazzaq (Horror)
Written by- Lionheart007
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Review: Ye kahani ek aise jhoot ke baare mein hai jo apne sath ek toofan leke aayi Hira ki jindagi mein aur uss toofan ne naa sirf usko balki bahut saare logo ko pareshan kar diya. Faizan Sahab jo Hira ki madad karne aaye the unki to jaan hi leke chala gaya. Ek jhoot jisne barso se soye hue jinn ko jaga diya aur uss jinn ne jaane ke badle ek jindagi maangi. Faizan sahab ne Hira ko bachane ke liye uss jinn ki iccha puri kar di aur Hira ko bacha gaye par sath hi chod gaye usko ek aise mansik haalat mein jaha wo khud ko inn sab ke liye koshti rahti hai. Pros: Mukhya kirdaro ko acche se dikhane ki kamyaab koshish kari gayi hai. Hira aur Faizan Sahab dono ko hi acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani mein twists aur turns ki koi kami nahi hai. Kuch mysterious elements to aise hai jo kahani khatam hone ke baad bhi hamare dimag mein kahi sawal chod dete hai. Kuch minor characters aise bhi the jinka role jyada nahi tha par wo sawal khade karke chale jaate hai.Story ka flow bhi kaabil-e-tareef hai jisase kahaani ko padhne mein orr romanch aata hai. Overall ek ummda kahaani. Cons: Kahani khatam hone ke baad bhi khatam nahi hoti hai. Chote sawal jo kahani padh ke dimag mein aate hai unko agar ignore bhi karde tab bhi kuch sawal aise hai jo kahani ko incomplete banate hai. Hina aur uske dost ke bich jo kuch bhi hua uss baare mein acche se explain nahi kiya gaya hai. Aisa lagta hai wo ek bahana tha. Story mein kahi kahi pe college ko school bata diya gaya hai aise thode bahut minor mistakes aur hai writing mein. Story ka narration thoda slow pace jo story k plot ki speed k sath match nahi karta jiss wajah se story bich bich mein patri se uttarti hai.
मेरी भार्या की कामांगप्रदर्शन प्रवृत्ति (Adultery)
Written by- Cchor
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: Ye kahani ek incident pe hai bas. Uss incident ke dwara lekhak hume ye darsana chah rahe hai ki kaise Suman jo ki kahani ki main character hai wo apne khule vicharo aur sex mein naye naye experiments ko lekar kitni aatur hai ye dikha rahe hai. Wo bold dresses pahenti hai taaki logo ko apni oor aakarshit kar sake. Iss kahani mein Sex life mein experiments ke baare mein hi bataya gaya hai bas. Pros: Kahani ke main character ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai Suman ko. Usko kya pasand hai wo kya karti hai inn sab ko ek chote se incident se batane ki koshish kari gayi hai. Story ka flow bhi theek tha jisase story padhne mein maja aaya. Cons: Iss kahani mein mainly bas Suman aur uske sexual desires ko hi dikhaya gaya hai. Writer ne kuch aur dikhane ki koshish nahi kari hai. Writer isko aur behtar bana sakte the.Sexual scenes ne sabse jyaada disappoint kiya jiss hisaab ka buildup tha and plot tha story ka uske according hum better sex scenes expect kar rahe they jahaan writer ne humein disappoint kiya.
अनदेखा,अनसुना एक किस्सा (Thriller)
Written by- Devil Maximum
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Ye kahani ek murder mystery hai. Kaise ek Masoom se bacche ne bina koi sabot chode Vivek ko maar diya. Masoom iss wajah se kyunki wo bacha Vivek ko uss karan ke roop mein dekh raha tha jiske wajah se uske Maa Baap mein ladai hone lagi thi. Antt mein kyunki murder case pahle hi close ho gayi thi aur Kabir bhi sayad nahi chahta tha uss bache ko jail bhejna to wo bacha bach gaya. Pros- Kahani ko bahut hi behtarin tarike se likha gaya hai. Kahani ka plot ek or plus point tha story ka jo behtareen tha. Kahani mein har ek character ko acche se explain kiya gaya hai incidents ko dikhaya gaya hai. Yaani harr cheej ko properly explain kiya hai .Narration bahut hi kammal ka tha. Cons- Kahani ke annt mein aate aate ye predictable sa ban jaati hai. Story ka plot jitana unique tha utana he pechida bhi jisko humare saamne laane k liye writer ko bahot mehnat karni thi but yahaan writer uss umeed par khare nahi uttar paaye jiss wajah se story thodi unfinished lagi or issi wajah se end takk aatey aatey story ka flow bhi tutt gaya or readers story se ubb gaye..
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PART - II
Unlucky husband and lover get caring Mom and daughter (Incest)
Story Review: Kahani Sameer ki hai jisne apni pahle wife ko talaq de diya kyunki wo apne bhaiyon ke sath incest relationship mein thi. Phir Kiran uski life mein aati hai aur wo bhi usko dhokha deke chali jaati hai sath mein viagra pills de diye the kyunki uska khada nahi hop aa raha tha. Wo ghar jaate waqt Whiskey pi leta hai aur sath mein wo dawai bhi kha leta hai. Jab wo ghar pahuchta hai to usko apne ghar pe apni Maa transparent kapdo mein dikhti hai aur unke bich sex hota hai phir uski beti bhi uske paas aati hai aur same. Pros : Writer ne English mein likhne ki koshish kari hai. Ye bade himmat ki baat hai ki unhone bina hichkichaye jaisi English unko sahi lagi uss tarah se likh diya. Agar iss kahani ke sabdo pe naa jaakar matlab ko samajhne ki koshish kare to ye ek acchi kahani hai jisme Sameer ki sath kis tarah ki chizzen ho rahi thi wo acche se batane ki koshish kari gayi hai. Cons: Tutti futti English ki wajah se kahani padhne mein pareshani ho rahi thi. Jis chizz se Sameer ko nafrat thi antt mein wo ussi chizz mein chala gaya. Usne Incest relation ke liye hi apni wife ko talaq diya tha aur ab wo apni Maa aur Beti ke sath incest relation mein aa gaya tha. Story ka Narration bahot jyaada weak tha jiss wajah se story bus ek sex scene banke reh gayi..
Nanad ki ichha purti (Adultery)
Story Review: Kahani Preet ki hai jo apne bhai ke yaha aayi hai. Wo apni Bhabhi se bahut frank hai to unse apne pyas ki baat karti hai aur Harpreet bhi uski madad karti hai Amar ke baare mein bata kar. Amar aata hai use milne ko aur phir bas sab kuch hota chala jaata hai aur uski pyas ek baar ke liye to bujh hi jaati hai. Pros: Kahani mein double meaning chizzon ka bahut hi khubsurati se use kiya gaya hai jiss wajah se story ka sexual side mein buildup bada he ummda hota hai or ye ek proper adult story ki tarah humare saamne aati hai. Narration bahut hi accha hai. Harpreet aur Preet dono ke bich frankness ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Cons: kahani thodi straight forward si hai. Koi bhi hurdle nahi mili iss kahani mein characters ko. Kahani mazedaar hai par hurdle hone pe ye aur romanchak ban sakti thi. Plot bahot he common tha or usko uncommon banaaney k liye writer ne koi jyaada koshish nahi ki.
Real Game (Thriller)
Story Review: Ye kahani ek game se shuru hoti hai. Kaise ye game logo ko thrill aur adventure dene ke naam pe unse tarah tarah ke tasks karwa rahi hoti hai aur log iss game ko khelte bhi rahte hai. Phir shuru hota hai maut ka Silsila. Ye case Aryan ko milta hai aur usko isme Karan ke baare mein pata chalta hai. Karan jo ki uska dost tha jiske khilaf Aryan ne khud gawahi di thi aur Karan ko jail ho gayi thi. Aryan Karan tak pahuchne ke liye ye game khelna shuru karta hai aur annt mein pahuch bhi jaata hai. Aryan ne insab ke baare mein apni team ko bata diya tha jiske baad Karan ke saamne aate hi usko maar diya jaata hai. Par wo game wapas se aa jaata hai. Pros: Ek bahut hi acche concept ke sath iss kahani ko shuru kiya gaya. Narration bahut hi accha hai readers ko pakad ke rakhta hai. Kaise thrill aur adventure kabhi kabhi jaanlewa ho sakta hai iss baat ko bakhubi bataya gaya hai.Story ka plot iss USC k top 5 plots mein se hai kaafi unique or interesting plot jai.. Cons: Kahani kahi kahi pe thodi fast lagti hai. Kuch portions mein writer ki jaldbaaji saaf najar aarahi hai,Kuch sawal aise rah jaate hai jinka jawab hume kahani mein nahi mil paata. Kuch scenes aise hai jinpe thoda aur explanation hone pe kahani aur bhi romanchak ho sakti thi. Story k fast paced hone ki wajah se story ka flow bhi dagmagata rehta hai throughout the story.. Overall ek badhiya kahani
Ram Aur Laila ka Pyar (Adultery/Romance)
Story Review: Kahani samaaj ke do aise logo ke bich pyaar ko dikhata hai jinme koi sammanta nahi hai. Sab kuch alag hai. Laila ek shadi shuda aurat hai jo apne pati se dur rah rahi hai. Ram ek gareeb aadmi hai jo kuch paise kamane ke liye Laila key aha kaam karta hai. Dono hi alag alag hai par Laila ander se itni akeli thi ki usne inn sab ko naa dekhte hue bas roohani aur jismani pyaar ke liye Ram ki taraf apna hath badhaya. Ram ne bhi isme uska sath bakhubi diya. Annt mein Ram ki maut ho jaati hai aur Laila iss baat se bahut dukhi hoti hai ye dukh iss baat ko darsa raha hai ki Laila ke liye Ram ka kitna mahatva tha. Pros: Kahani ka narration accha hai. Logo ko kahani se jode rakhta hai. Story ka plot kaafi old tha lekin writer ne end twists k sath usko unique banane ki puri koshish ki .. Story sexual expectations se aage nikal ke ek proper story k roop mein saamne aati hai. Cons: Kahani bahut choti aur seedhi saadhi si lagti hai. Lekhak ne Adultery pe hi apna pura dhyaan diya hai. Annt mein Ram ki mrityu ho jaana ye kahani ko thoda dukh ka tone de jaati hai lekin wahaan bhi explanation jo readers dhund rahe they woh unhe nahi milli.. Jo disappointing tha.
Mere zindagi ki sabse hasin raat (Incest)
Story Review: Kahani Kunal aur uski Badi Maa ki hai. Dono ke bich ek incest relation banata hai aur kahani khatam ho jaati hai. Kaafi kuch or needed tha story mein jo readers ko nahi milta hai. Pros: Sex scene ko acche se likha gaya hai. Readers ko kahani se jodde rakhne ke liye. Story ka only plus point sex scenes he they jinhe ache se likha gaya tha.. Cons: Likhne ka tarika thoda kamzoor nazar aata hai. Spelling mistakes ki wajah se kahani padhte waqt dhyaan bhatak jaata hai jo. Story mein proper narration missing hai jiss wajah se story kaa flow bhi gayab tha or story humein apne hisaab se read karni padti hai.
अहसास- ए -जिंदगी (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Ye kahani ek safar ki hai. Dil tutne se lekar khud ko pahchanne ke safar tak ki kahani. Isme unn sab pahluwo ke baare mein bataya gaya hai kaise wo ladka apna dil tutne ki wajah se kho gaya aur phir kaise usko waha se bahar nikal kar khud ko dhundhne mein uske pariwar aur dosto ne madad kari. Kahani mein meditation, Vipassana inn sab chizzon ko bhi chuwa gaya hai. Pros: Kammal ki kahani kammal ke narration ke sath. Likhne ka tarika bahut saral hai par asardaar hai bahut se log iss kahani se khud ko jod sakte hai yahi iss kahani ki khubsurati hai. Story ka plot one of the best tha iss usc k liye and uske uppar utani he mehnat writer ne ki hai jo story mein 4 chand lagaati hai. Writer ka experience throughout the story saaf najar aata hai . Cons: Kuch kuch hisson ko aur detail mein bataya jaa sakta tha. Kahani thodi fast pace mein chal rahi hai lekin puri tarah nahi bus kuch parts mein jinhe padhke lagta hai writer ne unhe final edit mein daala ho yaani bina proper thinking k jiss wajah se story ka flow jo throughout the story behtareen tha woh bich bich mein in situations ki wajah se dagmaga jaata hai. Overall a brilliant story..
વસંતના ચધામણા
Story Review: Bhasha samajh nahi aayi Pros: Cons: Kahani Gujrati bhasa mein likhi gayi hai
दहशत (Horror)
Story Review: Iss kahani mein mystery, romantic tragedy aur taantrik vidya ke baare mein bataya gaya hai. Kahani shuru kahi se hoti hai aur jaise jaise aage badhti rahti hai sab kuch badalta rahta hai. Prabhas ko apne jeevan ke bahut saare rahasyon ke baare mein pata chalta rahta hai. Prabhas ki Maa ke character ke aane se kahani mein aur bhi bahut chizzen aa jaati hai aur ye kahani ko accha banati hai. Pros : Kahani bahut hi shandar hai. Narration bahut hi sahi hai readers ko bandh ke rakhti hai. Ye jis topic pe hai wo 2-3 topics ko mila kar ekdum se naya topic banaya gaya hai. Characters ko bahut acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai.Story apne aap mein he kaafi unique hai jisse padhke readers ko kuch naya experience karne ko milta hai iss field mein. Cons: Kahani mein kuch characters ko aur bhi acche se bataya jaa sakta tha. Kahani ki ending ko thoda jaldbazzi mein khatam kiya gaya hai jiss wajah se pehle ki mehnat bekaar gayi. Kahi kahi pe kahani kuch dramatic ho jaati hai par uska story ke plot pe koi khass asar nahi hota. Kaafi Spelling mistakes bhi throughout the story humein dekhne ko milti hai jiski wajah se story padhne mein thodi muskill hoti hai..
Ek Adhuri Kahani (Sci-Fi)
Story Review: Sci-fi ki ek bahut hi behtareen kahani. Iss kahani ne bahut se chizzon ko dikhaya hai science aur punarjanam aisi chizzen jo ek sath nahi ho sakti aam logo ke hisab se par iss kahani mein ye sab hua hai. Pros: Kahani ka narration bahut accha hai. Kahani mein aise aise chizzon ke baare mein bataya gaya hai jo kaafi interesting hai aur yahi chizzen readers ko kahani se jodde rakhti hai. Plot behtareen tha story ka sabse plus point plot he tha jo unique hone k sath sath interesting bhi tha. Cons: Neuro-Decoder jaisi kuch chizzen jo iss kahani ko sabse alag bana rahi hai wahi readers ko thoda complicated bhi lag rahi hai. Yahi mukhya wajah hai ki kahi kahi pe kahani thodi slow lag sakti hai. Kahani mein kuch kuch chizen spast nahi hai. Writer ko apni narration par thoda kaam karne ki jarurat hai jo kahin kahin story ko weird banata hai . Overall a must read.
वो खिड़की जो.... (Sci-fi)
Story Review: Ek sci-fi kahani. Iss kahani mein worm hole jaise chizzon ko aasan bhasa mein explain kiya gaya hai aur kaise uski madad se Manuv past mein chala jaata hai. Past mein uski mulakat Suchita se hoti hai. Suchita ki bhi ek alag kahani chal rahi hoti hai uski sauteli Maa uski shadi apne bhai se karwana chah rahi thi. Bahot he pechida kahaani hai or sathmein romaanchak bhi.. Pros: Ek sci-fi kahani. Iss kahani mein worm hole jaise chizzon ko aasan bhasa mein explain kiya gaya hai aur kaise uski madad se Manuv past mein chala jaata hai. Past mein uski mulakat Suchita se hoti hai. Suchita ki bhi ek alag kahani chal rahi hoti hai uski sauteli Maa uski shadi apne bhai se karwana chah rahi thi. Bahot he pechida kahaani hai or sathmein romaanchak bhi.. Cons: Kahani mein technical terms hone ki wajah se kahani thodi kathin ho jaati hai readers ke liye yaani jo positive points tha kuch readers k liye baaki readers k liye wahi negative point bhi hai.Kahani mein kuch chizzen aur acche se explain kare jaa sakte the jiss wajah se story thodi predictable hai aur iski ending aisa lagta hai jaise jaldi khatam kar diya hai yaani story k end mein woh spark missing tha jo readers throughout the story feel kar paa rahe they jo buildup tha woh end mein deliver nahi hua.
बाप का फ़र्ज़ (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Kahani ek Pita ki hai jo apne bacche ko bachane ke liye kisi bhi hadd tak jaane ko taiyaar tha. Pahle usne apna sab kuch bech diya par phir bhi baat nahi bani Aman ki body dark web se kharide gaye kidney ko accept hi nahi kar paa rahi thi. Tab Dheeraj ne Aman ke liye ek khoon tak kar diya. Dheeraj ko jail ho gayi par uske pahle Doctor ne usko aisi sachai batayi ki uske liye ab sab kuch hi bekar tha. Jis bete ke liye wo itna sab kar raha tha apna sab kuch bech diya, kanoon toda, wo ladka uska apna beta tha hi nahi. Pros: Kahani mein Pita ka apne bete ke liye atoot pyaar ko dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani ka narration bahut hi behtarin hai. Readers ko apne sath jode rakhti hai. Kahani mein twist and turns ki koi kami nahi hai kahi se bhi kahani predictable nahi lagti. Plot selection ummda tha jo story ko or behatar banaata hai. Cons: Kahi kahi pe technical chizzon ke baare mein thoda explain kiya jaa sakta tha. Ek normal sa dukandaar dark web pe kidney kharidne lag jaata hai. Wo murder karke kidney khud se nikal kar doctor ko de deta hai. Thoda unrealistic sa lagta hai par workable hai. Story k dialogues bahot jyaada weak they plot and characters k muqabale ..
The Mindlink Experiment (Sci-fi)
Story Review: Ek Sci-fi kahani. Mindlink jo 2087 mein ek jagah pe kaabu kiye hue hai. Kuch log iske against hai aur wo jaante hai ye Insano ke independence pe khatra hai. Zara iss chizz ko khatam karne ki koshish mein hoti hai. Fictional storytelling ki ek ummda misaal hai ye story. Pros: Kahani mein future ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Suspence aur thrill banaye rakha gaya hai kahani mein. Public commentary ne kahani ko aur bhi accha bana diya hai. Zara ke character ko acche tarah se nikhara gaya hai jiss wajah se uski jagah story mein kaafi strong hoti hai yaani character work behtareen tha . Story ka plot one of the best tha and utana he unique bhi. Kaafi hard plot tha or isko choose karke isko itane ache se portray karna ek bahot bada positive point tha iss story k liye. Cons: Kahani mein technical chizzen kahani ko thoda complex banati hai. Kahi kahi pe iske wajah se hi kahani thodi slow mehsus hoti hai jahaan readers writer's se explanation maangte hain lekin unhe khudki imagination se kaam chalana padta hai jisase story ka flow gadabada jaata hai or story apni patri se niche uttarti rehti hai bich bich mein.. Yahi ek major issue tha jo itani ummda story ko weak dikhata hai..
Innocent wife Reena (Adultery)
Story Review: Kahani ek couple ki hai. Husband ko shuru mein apni wife Reena bilkul maasoom lagti hai par jab wo uski insta id check karta hai to usko shock lagta hai. Reena Jallad Singh ke sath sex chats aur video sex mein lagi hoti hai. Pros: Kahani ko adultery ko dikhane ke liye likha hai. Kahani ye darsati hai ki jo chizz jaisi dikhti hai jaruri nahi wo waisi hi ho.Charachters limited they toh story confusing nahi hoti readers k liye Cons: Kahani mein kuch turns and twists ho sakte the. Ye sirf ek normal si kahani banker rah gayi hai jisme ek biwi ko ek paraye mard ke sath sex karna hota hai.Plot bahot he jyaada Repeatitive tha or writer ne usko interesting banaaney k liye koi mehnat nahi ki or story ko chalne diya.
Who Tricked Whom? (Thriller)
Story Review: Kahani Aarav ki hai jo kismat jaisi chizzo pe yakin nahi karta hai par accident ke baad uski halat aisi ho jaati hai ki wo ab kuch kar hi nahi paata. Wo apni biwi Naina ke rahmo karam pe jinda hota hai. Phir jab usko Naina ke bewafai ka pata chalta hai to usko jhatka lagta hai par uski halat aisi hoti hai ki wo iske baare mein kuch nahi kar sakta. Annt mein chizzen kuch iss tarah se badalti hai ki Aarav ke gusse ke karan wo wapas se khada ho jaata hai. Kuch lines hai jo iss kahani ko intense banati hai. “you are mine, mine to love, and mine to hate” One of the best dialogue tha iss usc ka. Pros: Ye ek intense kahani hai. Characters ko iss tarah se dikhana bahut hi acha hai. Aarav ke emotions ko jis tarah se writer ne use kiya hai wo kammal ka hai. Naina ka character bhi kuch kam nahi hai. Iss kahani mein suspense hai thrill hai aur ek darkness bhi hai jo isko bahut hi alag aur mazzedaar banati hai readers iss kahani ko bich mein chod nahi paate inn kaarano se. Charachters k bich k dialogues sabse bada plus point they iss story ka waqai mein story mein 4 chand lagaa diya aapne dialogues k through.. Cons: Story ka narration overall acha tha but kuch parts mein aisa lagta hai maano story kissi dusare wrier ne likhi ho kyunki wahaan story ka flow or narration baaki story se match nahi khaata Or story atpatti lagti hai. Kahi kahi pe characters ke actions readers ko ekdum se confuse kar dete hai. Thodi bahut repetitions maujood hai kahani mein jisse kahani ka flow thoda bigad jaata hai. Overall a must read..
Born Again For The Cup (Fantasy)
Story Review: Fantasy ki ek anokhi kahani. Aveer ne ye sab sapne mein dekha aur kya hi sapna tha. Shubhman Gill ke jagah wo India ki team se khelta hai aur jeet jaata hai. Cricket se related iss kahani mein cricket ke baare mein bahut kuch bataya hai aur ache tarah se bataya hai. Bhagwan ke sath Aveer ki baatein wo comedy se bhare hue lines ye sab iss kahani ko ek alag sa roop de rahe hai. Pros : Kahani mein character ko incidents ko bahut hi acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Comedy ka chaska lage hone se kahani ko ek nayi rangat milti hai. Cricket ko jis tarah se kahani mein dikhaya gaya hai wo ekdum asal cricket dekhne jaisa hai. Sab kuch bahut hi acche se aur saral bhasa mein bataya gaya hai. Cons: Kahani kahi kahi pe thodi lambi nazar aati hai pace bhi thodi slow ho jaati hai. Aveer ke character ke baare mein agar thoda aur dikhaya jaata to ye chizz readers ko kahani se connect karne mein aur madad karti. Story imagination k according chalti hai jiss wajah se readers story k plot ko ignore kartey hain. Narration overall kaafi weak tha . Overall an entertaining story..
विश्वास और इंतज़ार (Romance)
Story Review: Kahani Shekhar aur Shikha ke prem ki hai. College ke dino mein dono ek dusre se prem karte the par Shekhar usko chod ke chala jaata hai. Phir kahani kuch saal ka gap leti hai jab Shekhar Sikha ke baare mein pata kar raha hota hai aur usko Sikha ke baare mein pata chalta hai. Shekhar Shikha ke pass pahuchta hai aur usko pata chalta hai Sikha ke 2 betiyon ke baare mein aur sath hi uske cancer ke baare mein. Shekhar uska ilaz karwata hai. Phir wo ye jaanta hai ki Shikha ki betiya usne goad li hui thi. Pros: Kahani ka narration bahut accha hai. Characters ko acche se develop kiya gaya hai aur sath hi dono ke bich ki ghatnaon ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Prem, Tyaag, Pachtava inn saare emotions ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Story ka plot unique nahi tha but writer ne uspe mehnat karke usko nikhara hai jo sabse bada positive point hai story ka. Cons: Shikha ki betiyon ke character ko aur acche se dikhaya jaa sakta tha. Kahani kahi kahi pe slow lagti hai aur sath hi kahi kahi pe purani lagti hai. Waqt ke sath sath jo changes hone chahiye the unko puri tarah se dikhaya nahi jaa saka hai jiss wajah se readers ko aisa lagta hai maano 2 alag alg kahani ek sath padh rahe hain..
A Chance (Romance)
Story Review: Kahani Naitik aur Ruhi ki hai. Naitik jisne abhi abhi IIT JEE ki pariksha pass kari hai wo apne pariwar, samaj aur dosto ke dabaw mein aakar Ruhi ke proposal ko thukra deta hai. Phir aage jaakar usko samajh aata hai ki usne kya kya galtiyan ki hai. Kahani mein unn dono ke safar ko dikhaya gaya hai. Ek acchi romantic story hai ye.. Pros: Kahani mein emotions bhar bhar ke hai aur ye kahani se readers ko jodti hai. Characters ko bahut hi acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Jo dabaw Naitik mehsus kar raha tha unn sab ko bhi ache tarah se dikhaya gaya hai . Narration kammal ka hai kul mila kar jisase kahani ko padhne mein or ashaani hoti hai or readers connect kar paate hain kahani se. Kahani mein ek emotional depth hai jo readers ko baandhe rahti hai. Cons: Waise to kahani ka naam hi “A Chance” hai par phir bhi Ruhi ne Naitik ko maaf kar diya ye baat acche se jamti nahi hai, kahani ko bahut had tak predictable bana deti hai. Uske character ko thoda aur explore kiya jaa sakta tha. Kahani mein waise to samajik aur pariwarik dabaw ko dikhaya gaya hai par isko aur detail mein dikhaya jaa sakta tha. Charachters limited they or unke dialogues orr bhi jyaada limited jisase story mein awkwardness bani rehti hai.
AAP KITNE ACHCHHE HAIN PAPA (Non- Erotic)
Story Review: Kahani Baap aur bete ke bich pyaar ka hai. Isme Arjun ka apne bete ke prati pyaar ko dikhaya gaya hai sath hi Shudha ke baare mein bataya gaya hai aur Ankit ke baare mein. Sudha jo ek garib aurat thi jiska ek beta tha usko Arjun ne apnaya aur phir dono ko samman aur prem se apne pass rakha. Aman ka gussa uski narazgi ye sari chizze kahani mein alag sa rang deti hai. Pros: Arjun ke character ko bahut hi acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani mein emotions ka utar chadhav bahut hi khub hai isse readers kahani se judde rahte hai. Aman aur Ankit ke bich ending mein jo baatein hui wo sab kuch emotional kar deti hai.Plot kaafi emotional tha jisase readers apne aap ko story mein involved dekhte hain. Cons:Kahani mein kahi kahi pe kuch dramtic chizze dikhayi gayi hai. Aman ka shadi karke apne bacche ke sath wapas aana aur uske baad ki baatein ye kuch jyada hi dramtic lagti hai. Uss character ko aur acche se dikhaya jaa sakta tha. Kahani ka flow characters ke emotions ko dikhane ke chakkar mein kahi kahi pe slow nazar aata hai jiss wajah se story apne line par rukk nahi paati. Kahani mein kuch characters ke bich mein aur depth dikhai jaa sakti thi jisase readers dialogues ko feel kar paatey..
Mind Game (Fantasy)
Story Review: Suspence aur Rahasya se bhari hui kahani hai ye Blackwood Manor ki jaha pe 5 guests jaate hai. Unse ek game khelne ko kaha jaata hai jisme unhe iss manor se bahar nikalne ko kaha jaata hai. Waha pe har darwaje ka kuch alag hi roop tha. Kisi bhi darwaje ko kholne se pahle chunautiya aati hai mansik chunautiya jo logo ko jhanjor kar rakh deti hai. Annt mein wo manor ek kurbani bhi maangti hai jiske bina uske bahar nahi jaaya jaa sakta hai. Pros: Narration kamal ka hai. Mystery element ke karan readers kahani ko aage padhe bina rah nahi paate. Har ek character ki apni alag kahani hai. Kahani mein sharal bhasha ka prayog kiya gaya hai jo kaafi prabhavshali bhi hai. Ye kahani dimag ko jhanjhor kar rakh deti hai.plot selection kaabil-e -tareef tha. Props to the writer. Cons: Kahani ki ending sahi nahi lagti aisa lagta hai ki abhi sawalo ke jawab nahi mile hai. Kahi kahi pe aisa lagta hai ki writer ek nahi balki do alag alag stithiyon mein likh raha ho. Sabdo ke Chayan alag ho jaate hai likhne ka tarika thoda badal jaata hai. Ye chizz kahani ko thoda disturb kar deti hai. Aisa mehsus hota hai ki kahani ab kahi aur pahuch gayi hai.
Haunted Underwear Ki Kahani (Fantasy)
Story Review: Kahani ek lady underwear ki hai jo ab ek aadmi pehen ke ghumta hai. Uss underwear mein ek bhootni hoti hai jiska naam Kamini hai. Uss aadmi ko underwear wali bhootni Kamini se pyar ho jaata hai. Pros: Imagination ki koi hadd nahi ho sakti iss baat ko darshati hai ye kahani. Kaise ek feminist bhootni ek lady underwear pahenne wale aadmi se pyaar karne lag jaati hai. Ye ek funny horror story hai. Cons: Story ko aur funny banaya jaa sakta tha isme aur bhi horror elements diye ja sakte the. Kahani mein explanation ki bahut kami hai.
Kumudini (Erotica)
Story Review: Ye kahani Paankpara ki, ek gaaon jaha pe kuch alag se riti riwaj hai. Kumudini jo saher se uss gaaon mein jaati hai aur waha ke riti riwajon ke anusar use wo sab karne ko kaha jaata hai jo waha ki maanyata hai. Wo waha pe apne sharir ki sundarta ko mehsus karti hai. Neelima usko sab kuch batata hai aur Dheere Dheere usko waha ke saare raaj samajh aate hai. Pros: Kahani ko bahut hi sundar tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Characters ko aur sath hi gaaon ke rituals ko dheere dheere saamne laaya jaata hai. Isse kahani se log juddaw mehsush kar sakte hai. Story ka plot kaafi unique tha or story ka background bhi plot k hisaab se fabulous tha. Writer ne apni research karke kahaani likhi hai jo readers ko passand aata hai.. Cons: Kahi kahi pe repetition ki wajah se kahani thodi atpati si ho jaati hai. Kahani ka koi annt samajh nahi aata jisse thodi nirasha hoti hai. Story ka narration kuch jagah par story ka sath chhod deta hai jisse dhundne k liye readers ko story se hattna padta hai..
MUMMY KA KAAMUK RISHTA (Adultery)
Story Review: Maa aur Mausa ke bich panap rahe sharirik sambandho pe aadharit hai ye kahani. Arjun jo ki Veena ka beta hai ye kahani ussi ke dwara batai jaa rahi hai kaise veena aur Ashok ke bich sharirik sambhandh bane aur kya kya hua. Pros : Kahani ka narration sex story ke hisab se theek hai. Readers ko kahani se jode rakhti hai kahani mein use kari gayi desi boli. Incest sex story ke hisab se ye kahani acchi hai. Cons: Kahani lambi hai jiske picche ka kaaran repetition hai. Kuch chizzon ko kuch jyada hi detail mein bataya gaya hai or baaki important portions par wahi details missing hain yaani writer ne unnecessary parts ko importance di hai ,Isse kahani padhte waqt mann bhatak jaata hai.
The Curse of the Mountain (Incest)
Story Review: An ambitious story that spans centuries weaving a tale of incest love and reincarnation. Story follows Rudra and Rudrani and their forbidden love from ancient time leading to the oppose from villagers and their parents and then their tragic end. Reincarnated as Rohan and Ritu in present Delhi, they rediscover their past and grapple with their rekindled love, only to face the revelation that they are siblings in this life too. The story blends romance, erotica, tragedy, and hope, exploring themes of destiny, love, and resistance against a cyclical curse. While the story’s bold exploration of incest themes captivates, its pacing, repetitive elements, and occasional melodrama slightly dilute its impact. The open ended resolution leaves readers hopeful yet yearning for closure. Pros: New and engaging plot line and rich world building. See there is not much to explore in incest theme but the writer here does a good job crafting a new idea of reincarnation blending it with incest love of Rudra and Rudrani. The world building of ancient time is rich and the end twist where it reveals that Rohan and Ritu are siblings in this life too makes an impact. Cons: While the world building is good the narration felt weaker at some moments which results to uneven pacing at times. Apart from it the story is solely focused on main characters and their love but some supporting characters are underdeveloped. Characters like pandit Govind and parents lack depth which weakens stories complexity. What was the actual curse is not mentioned making the lack of a definitive resolution for Rohan and Ritu’s relationship or the curse leaves the story feeling incomplete, potentially frustrating readers seeking closure. Overall it is a good read for those who likes to read sibling incest with a new and fresh take but could have been better.
एक नुक्ता (.) (Erotica/Adultery)
Story Review: Kabhi kabhi choti choti chize bahut bada impact daal deti hai waise hi kayi baar bahut choti galtiyo ki bahut badi kimat chukani padti hai aur yahi is story ka central plot hai. Story kamya ki hai jo ek housewife hai aur uski life change hoti hai uske pati ki ek gambling mistake se jo bas ek decimal ka lagane ki wajah se bahut bade debt me aa jata hai and then what follows is kamya’s attempt to make her husband free from this trap. story explores themes of sacrifice, betrayal, and empowerment through the lens of a desperate situation and writer has done commendable job crafting this narrative. Pros: Strong Protagonist, Kamya is a well-crafted character which navigates a harrowing journey of moral conflict, seduction and self-discovery. Kahani ka sabse majbut paksh ki Kamya kakirdar hai unka apne pati ko bachane ka struggle and then towards the end apne andar aaye badlav ko mehsus karna is written well, writing is good and descriptive and I liked the way how the metaphor of 'न ा' shown as pivotal mistake that alters the lives is clearly woven into the narrative justifying the title of this story. The sensual elements used are good it but they are a hit n miss. Cons: underdeveloped antagonist and predictable plot elements. See husband ka debt me Jana fir us boss ka offer ye kuch bhi naya nahi hai, is genre me this is predictable which make the story weaker. Also the creditor despite his menacing presence lacks depth making him a generic villain jo bas story ko puch forward karne aur kamya ke sath raat bitane aaya tha, the internal conflict of Kamya making this decision is missing it could have added more depth to the narrative. Also the biggest flaw I found is the language. Whole story is written in present tense which is fine but the language feels translated not natural, isse connect nahi ho pata hai aur narration gets weaker. Apart from these overall the story was good and entertaining and is worth a read.
Adla Badli - A murder Mystery (Erotic/Thriller)
Story Review: A twist filled tale that perfectly blends adultery and crime with two couples at centre. Story begins with playful banter and sexual tension escalated to a calculated plot line where hidden motives and past relationships unravel leading to Shruti and sajal's murder with revelation of betrayal. @manikmittleme07 ne yaha ek behtarin fast paced story craft ki hai jo apne badhiya climax aur behtarin dialogue ke liye yaad rahegi. Although the narrative occassionally hampered by inconsistent characterization and convenient plot device the story stands out. Pros: Kahani ka premise kafi engaging hai jo reader ko apne sath bandhe rakhta hai. Badhiya dialogue aur twists kahani ki gati ko dhima na karte huye ise bore nahi hone dete hai. Aisi kahaniyo me aksar isi ki gunjaish hoti hai aur writer isme safal huye hai. Plot line bahut badhiya tarike execute ki gayi hai sath hi sensual scenes ne kahani me jaan daal di hai. Adultery ka murder mystery ke sath blend akarshak hai the partner-swapping concept serving as a fresh catalyst for the crime The revelation of Sajal and Shruti’s past as lovers, followed by Rajat and Sneha’s countermove to orchestrate the murder, delivers satisfying twists that reframe the narrative’s stakes. The erotic scenes, particularly during the dance and bedroom sequences are well written. Cons:Inconsistent chractrization and rushed resolution. Shruti’s playful, open-minded persona clashes with her later depiction as a scheming ex-lover, while Sajal’s motivations shift abruptly from lustful to murderous, lacking sufficient buildup. The final act, particularly the hill station epilogue, feels abrupt, with the inspector’s passive acceptance of Rajat and Sneha’s confession leaving ethical and legal questions unresolved. Apart from these the story was a good and engaging read but could have been better. Ending aur characters par thoda aur work ise aur behtar bana deta
कत्ल की रात Thriller)
Story Review: A classic murder mystery set in chilling and enigmatic ambience of Kashmir. Story ek rahasyamayi accident se jo shuru se hi reader ko apne suspense aur thrill ke sath bandh leti hai aur jaise jaise kahani aage badhti hai naye characters chipa hua sach, purane raaz ek ke baad ek samne aane lagte hai. The narrative masterfully blends twists, motivations, emotional conflicts, and police investigation, keeping readers intrigued until the very end. The climax is impactful, highlighting the struggle between justice and law while attempting to explore the depths of humanity. Pros: Well-crafted suspense, great narration, perfect title, highly engaging story line and good use of language with very less spelling errors making it a good read. Story shuruwat se hi mystery banaye rakhti hai andi it keeps readers on a point ke aage kya hoga. The suspense is skillfully maintained, with relationships, lies, love, and revenge intricately woven into the plot. What I felt great about this is kahani ka har kirdar grey hai har koi shak ke ghere mehai aap kisi par bhi trust nahi kar sakte, language aur dialogues bhi engaging hai so well done on that and climax too is well crafted adding depth to the narrative. Cons: Story feels way too lengthy at points reducing its pace some dialogues could have been shorter. Secondary characters like Shankar or Rani and their subplots could have been developed further to enhance their relevance. Near the end, the sudden unraveling of all mysteries at once slightly dilutes the impact. Apart from these, story is good and a well written thriller.
Mom's Payal (Incest)
Story Review: A well written incest story that explores taboo relationship between a single mother sapna and her 18 year old son Raj. Set during a summer holiday It begins with a seemingly innocent conversation about Sapna’s payal and gradually unfolds into an exploration of desire, blurring the line between maternal affection and sexual tension. Told in a conversational style, the story relies heavily on dialogue to shape the characters and move the plot forward. However, the story falters in pacing, emotional depth, and sensitivity. Its bold narrative and vivid imagery stand out, but the overreliance on sensationalism and lack of nuanced character development ultimately diminish its impact. Pros: Engaging dialogues, well written sensory detailes, and the emotional context, good flowing narration and a perfect title and it is mom’s payal that leads to the situation between sapna and raj. The give and take between Sapna and Raj is lively and reveals their personalities effectively. The dialogue is natural, with moments of humor and flirtation that add layers to their relationship, particularly in the early stages. The story excels in describing physical details, such as the payal, Sapna’s attire, and the tactile sensations during intimate moments. These elements create a strong visual and sensory experience for the reader. And sapna’s short backstory adds a emotional context and justification for actions. Cons: Lack of depth, uneven pacing and characterization gaps. Story his solely focused on howthe act will happen between sapna and raj overshadowing opportunity to explore further, the rapid escalation from casual conversation to overt sexual encounters feels rushed and undermines the potential for a more nuanced portrayal of the characters’ motivations. The narrative moves too quickly from light-hearted banter to intense intimacy, leaving little room for tension to build naturally. This abrupt shift makes the story feel more like a sequence of events than a cohesive arc. Overall it was a great read heavily resiling on dialogues
अपशगुनी (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: kuch kahaniya kuch is tarah likhi gayi hoti hai ki aap padhte huye unme ho jate ho, ye kahani bhi kuch waisi hi hai jise padhte huye aisa laga jaise main khud us pariwar ka hissa ban gaya hu, us amrud ke saye me baitha kirdaro ki jindagi ke utar chadhav dekh raha hu, jis khubsurti se aapne ped ko kahani ka kendra banaya hai wo kabile tarif hai, ek pure pariwar ki kahani, rishto ki, badalte mulyo ki andhavishwas se jujhne ki kahani aur sabse sundar baat ye ki kahani ki bhasha itni saral hai ke aap kirdaro se judav mehsus kar sakte ho Pros: Unique plotline, simple yet effective creating a whole new world with a suitable title for the story. Narration bhi on point tha, simple language jisme kahi bhi koi vartani ki galti nahi hai, sehaj bhasha hai jisse padhne me bhi asani hoti hai aur kahani ka flow bhi bana rehta hai jo Pathak ko bore nahi hone deta, kahani ka tana bana itne saral shabdo me buna gaya hai jo ped ke madhyamseekmadhyampariwar ki jatiltao ko samaksh rakh deta hai Cons: kuch kuch jagah par kahani thodi khichi huyi si pratit hoti hai vishetah pariwarik samvadi me jise aur kasa ja sakta hai sath hi kahani ka ant kuch jaldbaji me hua pratit hoti hai jo ki hum samajh sakte hai shabd maryada ke kaaran ho sakta hai. Overall ye ek behad prabhavshali aur yaadgar kahani hai jo manoranjan ke sath sath badalte rishto ke parivesh ke bare me sochne ka avsar bhi pradan karti hai
Ritual (Thriller)
Story Review: Ek Intense psychological crime thriller jo shuru se hi apne suspense ke sath bandhe rakhti hai. ek tukdon mein bati hui laash, ek symbolic ritual, aur ek officer jise pehle bhi kuch aisa hi dekhne ko mila tha. Everyting is written with perfection. The story follows Vikrant, a sharp yet tormented investigator, as he's pulled into a chilling case of two victims, both brutally murdered with identical symbols carved near their bodies. At the center of it all lies a book titled अनुष्ठान and as Vikrant digs deeper, the investigation leads him to Kavi Kishore, a reclusive writer whose book mirrors the crime scenes in disturbing detail. With each clue, Vikrant finds himself trapped in a web of ancient rituals, psychological terror, and a darkness that refuses to stay buried. What begins as a murder case soon turns into a haunting journey where logic fails, and the ritual begins. Pros : Unique plot, engaging story line, stong central character with unique blend of crime and mystery with perfect title. Character of Vikram is layered, compelling, and emotionally engaging, keeping readers invested in his journey. The mix of investigative thriller with ancient rituals adds intrigue and freshness to the plot. The recurring symbols and the eerie book ‘Anushthaan’ give the story a chilling, almost mythical depth. The plot progresses quickly with escalating tension, maintaining suspense throughout. Cons: Confusing at times as a plotline is very complex with some predictable plot twists and occasional overexplanation. At the middle story might feel a bit of confusing requiring reader to revisit it for better understanding. A few plot reveals may feel slightly expected for seasoned thriller readers. Some ritualistic or symbolic elements could be shown subtly rather than explained outright. Kuch kuch jagah spelling mistakes bhi hai but can be overlooked. Apart from these overall it is a well written story.
परिंदा(Drama) (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Current situation ke hisab se ye kahani do dhri talwar jaisi hai as kuch lo pasand aane layak jo shanti ka Sandesh deti hai aur kuch shayad Pakistani se dosti se ahat ho jaye. Parinda tells the story of Veeru, an Indian Air Force pilot whose malfunctioning MiG 21 leads him into Pakistani airspace. He's captured, only to find his intercepting Pakistani pilot, Sarfaraz, is an old friend. While dealing with captivity and flashbacks to their shared past, Veeru also grapples with his strained marriage to Kavita, following a personal tragedy. Sarfaraz's wife, Hina (also an old acquaintance of Veeru), devises a plan: she gets a famous Pakistani singer to broadcast a song with lyrics penned by Veeru, intended as a plea to Kavita. The song successfully bridges the gap, leading to Veeru's reconciliation with Kavita upon his release and return to India, highlighting themes of enduring friendship across borders and the healing power of hope. Pros: Strong Emotional Core, well narrated, relatable characters and dialogues, positive messages and interesting plot twists. The friendship between Veeru and Sarfaraz is the story's backbone and is portrayed convincingly, especially through the London flashbacks. Their reunion under duress is a compelling premise. The story strongly advocates for peace, understanding, and the idea that human relationships can transcend national enmities. The ending, with the birth of "Aman," reinforces this. Cons: Uneven pacing at places and vartani ki galtiya jo kahi kahi kahani padhne ke flow ko bigad deta hai. Sath hi plot line thodi si predictable bhi hai, ha kahani ka wo twist ke Pakistani officer ka Indian officer ka dost nikalna sahi kaam karta hai but after that kahani kayi jagah predictable ho jati hai aur realism se pare hat jati hai. Apart from these overall kahani kafi badhiya hai, it was an entertaining read.
The Eclipse Empire (Romance/Thriller)
Story Review: Some stories are not just read, but felt and this is one such story. It introduces readers to a new futuristic world rules by seven families where there is tremendous blend of politics, power, deception and emotions. Story centres on Mahira Sharma the daughter of the head family and her journey to keep the empire in hands and uncovering the conspiracy against her family teaming up with Kabir, a bounty hunter. While reading this it felt like watching the whole city from the balcony of eclipse prime, well done on crafting such vast plot in a short story. Pros: The Central plot of the story is very strong, power struggle of the seven families and the relationship dynamics between Mahira and Kabir is very engaging. The clash of two worlds of Mahira and Kabir adds necessary depth to the storyline. World building was done very well showing the efforts of the writer, it is not easy to compell this vast story in shorter narrative but writer succeeded in that. Story's flow and narration was point leaving no loose end. We keeps you hooked in the journey of Mahira and Kabir. The end felt satisfied by the new distribution of power and emotions make it a memorable read. Cons: the story sometimes becomes lengthy, especially in middle parts the flow becomes a bit slow with twists after twists, if there was a bit more tightness here the impact would have been better. Some emotional moments and Rajbir's quickly formed change appear rushed towards end. And some of the important heads of seven families remains bit flat. Apart from these, overall this was a great read, a good blend of Sci-fi, politics, family dynamics, and emotional romance with simple language and powerful characters
Lady Doctors (erotica/Adultery)
Story Review: A bold and intense erotic drama that dives headfirst into a world of forbidden desires, family dysfunction, and moral ambiguit. kahani mahi aur uski bhabhi payal ke bare me hai ki kaise dono ladkiya apni family me aayi musibato ke baad ek homeopathy sexology clinic chalane lagti hai aur yahi se asal kahani shuru hoti hai, jis clinic ko bas ghar chalane ka jariya banna tha wo mahi aur payal ke liye apni chipi huyi chahate, yaun akarshan, aur vaasna ko pura karne ka jariya banta hai, Kahani asal me is baat par tiki hai ke kaise do masumdikhne wali ladkiya dhire dhire bindas azad khayalo wali aurte ban jati hai, Story ko sensual scenes is kahani ki jaan hai aur lekhika ne unhe bakhubi likha hai, mahi aur payal ka apne patients ke private parts ko lekar akarshan aur eventually apne patients ke sath hi sharirik sambandh banana kafi sahi se explore kiya gaya hai. Pros: Kahani ki sabse badi takat iske well written sexual scenes hi hai fir wo payal ya mahi ka pehni baar clinic me penis check karna ho ya end me hone wala group sex, its totally worth reading, narration on point hai jo kahani ki pace ko maintain rakhta hai siway kuch jagho par, language bhi jo use huyi hai easy to understand hai jisse padhne me dikkat nahi hoti hai, kahani ka end twist jabardast hai jab reveal hota hai amar singh ab mahi aur payalka sasur hai wo thoda chauka deta hai sath hi story me ek naya touch bhi add karta hai, pure sex story lovers ke liye this is a great read. Cons:kahani ka sabse bada drawback iske start me dikhaya gaya gay scene hai. XF par GAY content ALLOWED NAHI HAIstill uska use kahani ko bahut jyada down kar deta hai, aap payal ke pati ko kuch aur tarah portray karti to kahani aur behtar ho sakti thi. kahani bich me repetative hone lagti hai aur dialogues monotonus se ho jate hai jiska sidha asar kahani ke pace par hota hai ise sudhara ja sakta tha, kayi jagah spelling ki galtiya hai jo spasht dikhayi deti hai. Overall it was a good read.
ये कैसा पछतावा (Adultery)
Story Review: Mumbai ke corporate world ke background me set ek unique sex story. kahani arti mehra ke ird gird ghumti hai jo ek safal business women hai lekin andar hi andar apne pachtawe se jujh rahi hai, uske college ke premi ki atmahatya ka use gehra dukh hai aur fir kahani me tab mod aata hai jab wo ek budhe kaka ko chaprasi ki naukri par rakhti hai aur yaha se kahani sexual mod leti hai yaha kaka arti ske sath sharirik sambandh banata hai use torcher karta hai which leads to end twist ke kaka koi aur nahi arti ke boyfriend ka pita hai aur arti ko sexually torcher kar wo apne bete ki maut ka badla le raha hai aur arti bhi apne pachtawe ke chalte apne aap ko apne desires ke aage submit kar deti hai Pros: Erotic adultery theme ki story ke liye kahani ya plot thoda alag hai aur kafi badhiya tarike se execute kiya gaya hai, aarti ka guilt, kaka ka intro, situation which leads to the main act badhiya tarike se likhe gaye hai, narration sahi hai aur jo language use huyi hai easy hai jisse padhne me maja aata hai, arti ka emotional state uska kaka ke samne ka submissive nature writer ne bahut badhiya tarike se likha hai, sexsual scenes bhi sahi tarike se likhe gaye the, bhale wo rough aur forced lage lekin non concencual feel nahi aane dete hai as arti is torcher ko enjoy karti hai apne pachtawe ki aad me which is good. Cons: Kahani me kuch kuch jagah bahut si spelling mistakes hai jo spasht dikhti hai wo padhne ka experience down karti hai sath hi kahani ka pace bahut high hai jo chize ko develop na hone dete huye ekdum se sab kuch hone deta hai for example arti ka ek pal kaka ko virodh karke agle hi bas uske sex karne lag jana maan jana ye sudden shift abrupt lagta hai, kaka ka amit ka pita hone ka twist acha hai lekin us back story ko aur explore kiya ja sakta tha, thoda seduction part kahani ko aur behtar bana deta. Overall it was a good read but could have been better
दोस्त कि माँ कि मदद :- सँडी (Adultery)
Story Review: A well written story of a sexual encounter between sandy and his friend's momsurekha, kahani sandy aur uske badi umra ki aurto ke prati yaun akarshan ko explore karti hai jo apne dost ki maa ke sath sex sambandh banana chahta hai aur kismat se use wo mauka milta bhi hai jise us kahani me writer ne bakhubi likha hai. The narrative unfolds as a steamy, taboo-driven encounter, blending raw sensuality with forbidden age-gap dynamics. The story’s explicit progression from Sandy’s calculated seduction to Surekha’s enthusiastic participation culminates in a mutually satisfying arrangement, sealed by Surekha’s decision to stay back with Sandy. It’s a provocative tale that thrives on its unapologetic exploration of lust. Pros: Writer ne story ko saral aur bolchal ki bhasha me likha hai jisse padhne wale story se jaldi connect ho jate hai, fact paced narration kahani ko bore nahi hone deta aur sabse badhiya baat story me kuch bhi achanak nahi ho raha hai, writer has provided motivations for the sexual act, sandy ka badi umra ki mahilao ka akarshan, surekha ka unsatisfied housewife hona gives a reason ke kyu surekha ne sandy ke sath sambandh banaye, well written characters aur easy to understand dialogues story ko padhne layak banaye rakhte hai. Cons: Kahani me bahut jyada, matlab had se jyada spelling mistakes hai, matlab har line me do teen mistakes aap notice kar sakte hai aur ye ek major drawback hai as isse kahani padhne ka flow tut jata hai sath hi kayi baar kahani ke kuch hisse repetative lagte hai jise sudhara ja sakta tha, sath hi kuch moments me kahani thodu khichti huyi mehsus hoti hai jaise kuch details na bhi hote to kuch fark nahi padta. overall it was a good read but could have been better
Khushiyon ki chahat (Non Erotic)
Story Review: Kuch stories aisi hoti hai jo aapke dil ko chhu jati hai aur ye kuch waise hi story hai saadgi se bhari huyi jo aam jindagi ke sukh dukh ko, kuch behtarin palo ko bahut khubsurati ke sath bayan karti hai. Geet aur Rohan ke bich ka bond, unka gehra rishta Dil chhu jata hai, ek taraf bhai behan ke rishte ka pyar aur dusri taraf asal jindagi ka struggle writer ne bahut badhiya tarike se kahani ke jariye dikhaya hai. A well written story of slice of life Pros: kahani ki plotline aam jindagi wali hai aur yahi iski sabse badi khubi hai, chhoti chhoti baato se buni huyi lekin ek satisfying end ki or jati huyi. Geet aur Rohan dono ke ki characters kafi badhiya tarike se likhe gaye hai ki reader unke beet ki chemestry ko unke bond ko mehsus karta hai samajhta hai, dialogues aur narration ka flow sahi tarah se maintain Kiya gaya hai aur sabse satisfying hai story ka climax jisme Rohan geet ki baat ko yaad rakhte huye uske sapne ko pura karta hai jo reader ko bhi satisfying feel pradan karta hai. Language simple hai natural hai jisse padhte huye dikkat nahi hoti. Cons: kayi jagho par kahani apni grip chhodti huyi mehsus Hoti hai lekin boring jati jiska reason hai kahani me kuch element ka repeat hona, geet Rohan ke daily routine ka baar baar jikra kahani ko jabardasti lamba khichta sa lagta hai in unnecessary details ko hataya ja sakta tha. Secondary characters ko bhi thoda explore Kiya ja sakta tha jisse kahani ki depth aur gehri ho sakti thi, sath ki kahani me kayi jagah grammatical aur spelling mistakes hai jo padhne ka flow bigadti hai. Is sab ke bavjud ye ek shandar aur pyari story hai, it was a great read.
PART - II
Unlucky husband and lover get caring Mom and daughter (Incest)
Written by- kirantariq
Rating – 5.5/10
Story Review: Kahani Sameer ki hai jisne apni pahle wife ko talaq de diya kyunki wo apne bhaiyon ke sath incest relationship mein thi. Phir Kiran uski life mein aati hai aur wo bhi usko dhokha deke chali jaati hai sath mein viagra pills de diye the kyunki uska khada nahi hop aa raha tha. Wo ghar jaate waqt Whiskey pi leta hai aur sath mein wo dawai bhi kha leta hai. Jab wo ghar pahuchta hai to usko apne ghar pe apni Maa transparent kapdo mein dikhti hai aur unke bich sex hota hai phir uski beti bhi uske paas aati hai aur same. Pros : Writer ne English mein likhne ki koshish kari hai. Ye bade himmat ki baat hai ki unhone bina hichkichaye jaisi English unko sahi lagi uss tarah se likh diya. Agar iss kahani ke sabdo pe naa jaakar matlab ko samajhne ki koshish kare to ye ek acchi kahani hai jisme Sameer ki sath kis tarah ki chizzen ho rahi thi wo acche se batane ki koshish kari gayi hai. Cons: Tutti futti English ki wajah se kahani padhne mein pareshani ho rahi thi. Jis chizz se Sameer ko nafrat thi antt mein wo ussi chizz mein chala gaya. Usne Incest relation ke liye hi apni wife ko talaq diya tha aur ab wo apni Maa aur Beti ke sath incest relation mein aa gaya tha. Story ka Narration bahot jyaada weak tha jiss wajah se story bus ek sex scene banke reh gayi..
Nanad ki ichha purti (Adultery)
Written by- Rajizexy
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Kahani Preet ki hai jo apne bhai ke yaha aayi hai. Wo apni Bhabhi se bahut frank hai to unse apne pyas ki baat karti hai aur Harpreet bhi uski madad karti hai Amar ke baare mein bata kar. Amar aata hai use milne ko aur phir bas sab kuch hota chala jaata hai aur uski pyas ek baar ke liye to bujh hi jaati hai. Pros: Kahani mein double meaning chizzon ka bahut hi khubsurati se use kiya gaya hai jiss wajah se story ka sexual side mein buildup bada he ummda hota hai or ye ek proper adult story ki tarah humare saamne aati hai. Narration bahut hi accha hai. Harpreet aur Preet dono ke bich frankness ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Cons: kahani thodi straight forward si hai. Koi bhi hurdle nahi mili iss kahani mein characters ko. Kahani mazedaar hai par hurdle hone pe ye aur romanchak ban sakti thi. Plot bahot he common tha or usko uncommon banaaney k liye writer ne koi jyaada koshish nahi ki.
Real Game (Thriller)
Written by- Aether
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: Ye kahani ek game se shuru hoti hai. Kaise ye game logo ko thrill aur adventure dene ke naam pe unse tarah tarah ke tasks karwa rahi hoti hai aur log iss game ko khelte bhi rahte hai. Phir shuru hota hai maut ka Silsila. Ye case Aryan ko milta hai aur usko isme Karan ke baare mein pata chalta hai. Karan jo ki uska dost tha jiske khilaf Aryan ne khud gawahi di thi aur Karan ko jail ho gayi thi. Aryan Karan tak pahuchne ke liye ye game khelna shuru karta hai aur annt mein pahuch bhi jaata hai. Aryan ne insab ke baare mein apni team ko bata diya tha jiske baad Karan ke saamne aate hi usko maar diya jaata hai. Par wo game wapas se aa jaata hai. Pros: Ek bahut hi acche concept ke sath iss kahani ko shuru kiya gaya. Narration bahut hi accha hai readers ko pakad ke rakhta hai. Kaise thrill aur adventure kabhi kabhi jaanlewa ho sakta hai iss baat ko bakhubi bataya gaya hai.Story ka plot iss USC k top 5 plots mein se hai kaafi unique or interesting plot jai.. Cons: Kahani kahi kahi pe thodi fast lagti hai. Kuch portions mein writer ki jaldbaaji saaf najar aarahi hai,Kuch sawal aise rah jaate hai jinka jawab hume kahani mein nahi mil paata. Kuch scenes aise hai jinpe thoda aur explanation hone pe kahani aur bhi romanchak ho sakti thi. Story k fast paced hone ki wajah se story ka flow bhi dagmagata rehta hai throughout the story.. Overall ek badhiya kahani
Ram Aur Laila ka Pyar (Adultery/Romance)
Written by- Laila Ali Khan
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Kahani samaaj ke do aise logo ke bich pyaar ko dikhata hai jinme koi sammanta nahi hai. Sab kuch alag hai. Laila ek shadi shuda aurat hai jo apne pati se dur rah rahi hai. Ram ek gareeb aadmi hai jo kuch paise kamane ke liye Laila key aha kaam karta hai. Dono hi alag alag hai par Laila ander se itni akeli thi ki usne inn sab ko naa dekhte hue bas roohani aur jismani pyaar ke liye Ram ki taraf apna hath badhaya. Ram ne bhi isme uska sath bakhubi diya. Annt mein Ram ki maut ho jaati hai aur Laila iss baat se bahut dukhi hoti hai ye dukh iss baat ko darsa raha hai ki Laila ke liye Ram ka kitna mahatva tha. Pros: Kahani ka narration accha hai. Logo ko kahani se jode rakhta hai. Story ka plot kaafi old tha lekin writer ne end twists k sath usko unique banane ki puri koshish ki .. Story sexual expectations se aage nikal ke ek proper story k roop mein saamne aati hai. Cons: Kahani bahut choti aur seedhi saadhi si lagti hai. Lekhak ne Adultery pe hi apna pura dhyaan diya hai. Annt mein Ram ki mrityu ho jaana ye kahani ko thoda dukh ka tone de jaati hai lekin wahaan bhi explanation jo readers dhund rahe they woh unhe nahi milli.. Jo disappointing tha.
Mere zindagi ki sabse hasin raat (Incest)
Written by- Arib
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: Kahani Kunal aur uski Badi Maa ki hai. Dono ke bich ek incest relation banata hai aur kahani khatam ho jaati hai. Kaafi kuch or needed tha story mein jo readers ko nahi milta hai. Pros: Sex scene ko acche se likha gaya hai. Readers ko kahani se jodde rakhne ke liye. Story ka only plus point sex scenes he they jinhe ache se likha gaya tha.. Cons: Likhne ka tarika thoda kamzoor nazar aata hai. Spelling mistakes ki wajah se kahani padhte waqt dhyaan bhatak jaata hai jo. Story mein proper narration missing hai jiss wajah se story kaa flow bhi gayab tha or story humein apne hisaab se read karni padti hai.
अहसास- ए -जिंदगी (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Chutiyadr
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: Ye kahani ek safar ki hai. Dil tutne se lekar khud ko pahchanne ke safar tak ki kahani. Isme unn sab pahluwo ke baare mein bataya gaya hai kaise wo ladka apna dil tutne ki wajah se kho gaya aur phir kaise usko waha se bahar nikal kar khud ko dhundhne mein uske pariwar aur dosto ne madad kari. Kahani mein meditation, Vipassana inn sab chizzon ko bhi chuwa gaya hai. Pros: Kammal ki kahani kammal ke narration ke sath. Likhne ka tarika bahut saral hai par asardaar hai bahut se log iss kahani se khud ko jod sakte hai yahi iss kahani ki khubsurati hai. Story ka plot one of the best tha iss usc k liye and uske uppar utani he mehnat writer ne ki hai jo story mein 4 chand lagaati hai. Writer ka experience throughout the story saaf najar aata hai . Cons: Kuch kuch hisson ko aur detail mein bataya jaa sakta tha. Kahani thodi fast pace mein chal rahi hai lekin puri tarah nahi bus kuch parts mein jinhe padhke lagta hai writer ne unhe final edit mein daala ho yaani bina proper thinking k jiss wajah se story ka flow jo throughout the story behtareen tha woh bich bich mein in situations ki wajah se dagmaga jaata hai. Overall a brilliant story..
વસંતના ચધામણા
Written by- gujaratitty
Rating – Null
Story Review: Bhasha samajh nahi aayi Pros: Cons: Kahani Gujrati bhasa mein likhi gayi hai
दहशत (Horror)
Written by- Raj_Sharma
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Iss kahani mein mystery, romantic tragedy aur taantrik vidya ke baare mein bataya gaya hai. Kahani shuru kahi se hoti hai aur jaise jaise aage badhti rahti hai sab kuch badalta rahta hai. Prabhas ko apne jeevan ke bahut saare rahasyon ke baare mein pata chalta rahta hai. Prabhas ki Maa ke character ke aane se kahani mein aur bhi bahut chizzen aa jaati hai aur ye kahani ko accha banati hai. Pros : Kahani bahut hi shandar hai. Narration bahut hi sahi hai readers ko bandh ke rakhti hai. Ye jis topic pe hai wo 2-3 topics ko mila kar ekdum se naya topic banaya gaya hai. Characters ko bahut acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai.Story apne aap mein he kaafi unique hai jisse padhke readers ko kuch naya experience karne ko milta hai iss field mein. Cons: Kahani mein kuch characters ko aur bhi acche se bataya jaa sakta tha. Kahani ki ending ko thoda jaldbazzi mein khatam kiya gaya hai jiss wajah se pehle ki mehnat bekaar gayi. Kahi kahi pe kahani kuch dramatic ho jaati hai par uska story ke plot pe koi khass asar nahi hota. Kaafi Spelling mistakes bhi throughout the story humein dekhne ko milti hai jiski wajah se story padhne mein thodi muskill hoti hai..
Ek Adhuri Kahani (Sci-Fi)
Written by- Mr.Magnificent
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: Sci-fi ki ek bahut hi behtareen kahani. Iss kahani ne bahut se chizzon ko dikhaya hai science aur punarjanam aisi chizzen jo ek sath nahi ho sakti aam logo ke hisab se par iss kahani mein ye sab hua hai. Pros: Kahani ka narration bahut accha hai. Kahani mein aise aise chizzon ke baare mein bataya gaya hai jo kaafi interesting hai aur yahi chizzen readers ko kahani se jodde rakhti hai. Plot behtareen tha story ka sabse plus point plot he tha jo unique hone k sath sath interesting bhi tha. Cons: Neuro-Decoder jaisi kuch chizzen jo iss kahani ko sabse alag bana rahi hai wahi readers ko thoda complicated bhi lag rahi hai. Yahi mukhya wajah hai ki kahi kahi pe kahani thodi slow lag sakti hai. Kahani mein kuch kuch chizen spast nahi hai. Writer ko apni narration par thoda kaam karne ki jarurat hai jo kahin kahin story ko weird banata hai . Overall a must read.
वो खिड़की जो.... (Sci-fi)
Written by- Riky007
Rating – 9/10
Story Review: Ek sci-fi kahani. Iss kahani mein worm hole jaise chizzon ko aasan bhasa mein explain kiya gaya hai aur kaise uski madad se Manuv past mein chala jaata hai. Past mein uski mulakat Suchita se hoti hai. Suchita ki bhi ek alag kahani chal rahi hoti hai uski sauteli Maa uski shadi apne bhai se karwana chah rahi thi. Bahot he pechida kahaani hai or sathmein romaanchak bhi.. Pros: Ek sci-fi kahani. Iss kahani mein worm hole jaise chizzon ko aasan bhasa mein explain kiya gaya hai aur kaise uski madad se Manuv past mein chala jaata hai. Past mein uski mulakat Suchita se hoti hai. Suchita ki bhi ek alag kahani chal rahi hoti hai uski sauteli Maa uski shadi apne bhai se karwana chah rahi thi. Bahot he pechida kahaani hai or sathmein romaanchak bhi.. Cons: Kahani mein technical terms hone ki wajah se kahani thodi kathin ho jaati hai readers ke liye yaani jo positive points tha kuch readers k liye baaki readers k liye wahi negative point bhi hai.Kahani mein kuch chizzen aur acche se explain kare jaa sakte the jiss wajah se story thodi predictable hai aur iski ending aisa lagta hai jaise jaldi khatam kar diya hai yaani story k end mein woh spark missing tha jo readers throughout the story feel kar paa rahe they jo buildup tha woh end mein deliver nahi hua.
बाप का फ़र्ज़ (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Niks77kill
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: Kahani ek Pita ki hai jo apne bacche ko bachane ke liye kisi bhi hadd tak jaane ko taiyaar tha. Pahle usne apna sab kuch bech diya par phir bhi baat nahi bani Aman ki body dark web se kharide gaye kidney ko accept hi nahi kar paa rahi thi. Tab Dheeraj ne Aman ke liye ek khoon tak kar diya. Dheeraj ko jail ho gayi par uske pahle Doctor ne usko aisi sachai batayi ki uske liye ab sab kuch hi bekar tha. Jis bete ke liye wo itna sab kar raha tha apna sab kuch bech diya, kanoon toda, wo ladka uska apna beta tha hi nahi. Pros: Kahani mein Pita ka apne bete ke liye atoot pyaar ko dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani ka narration bahut hi behtarin hai. Readers ko apne sath jode rakhti hai. Kahani mein twist and turns ki koi kami nahi hai kahi se bhi kahani predictable nahi lagti. Plot selection ummda tha jo story ko or behatar banaata hai. Cons: Kahi kahi pe technical chizzon ke baare mein thoda explain kiya jaa sakta tha. Ek normal sa dukandaar dark web pe kidney kharidne lag jaata hai. Wo murder karke kidney khud se nikal kar doctor ko de deta hai. Thoda unrealistic sa lagta hai par workable hai. Story k dialogues bahot jyaada weak they plot and characters k muqabale ..
The Mindlink Experiment (Sci-fi)
Written by- Sanju Bhaiya
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: Ek Sci-fi kahani. Mindlink jo 2087 mein ek jagah pe kaabu kiye hue hai. Kuch log iske against hai aur wo jaante hai ye Insano ke independence pe khatra hai. Zara iss chizz ko khatam karne ki koshish mein hoti hai. Fictional storytelling ki ek ummda misaal hai ye story. Pros: Kahani mein future ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Suspence aur thrill banaye rakha gaya hai kahani mein. Public commentary ne kahani ko aur bhi accha bana diya hai. Zara ke character ko acche tarah se nikhara gaya hai jiss wajah se uski jagah story mein kaafi strong hoti hai yaani character work behtareen tha . Story ka plot one of the best tha and utana he unique bhi. Kaafi hard plot tha or isko choose karke isko itane ache se portray karna ek bahot bada positive point tha iss story k liye. Cons: Kahani mein technical chizzen kahani ko thoda complex banati hai. Kahi kahi pe iske wajah se hi kahani thodi slow mehsus hoti hai jahaan readers writer's se explanation maangte hain lekin unhe khudki imagination se kaam chalana padta hai jisase story ka flow gadabada jaata hai or story apni patri se niche uttarti rehti hai bich bich mein.. Yahi ek major issue tha jo itani ummda story ko weak dikhata hai..
Innocent wife Reena (Adultery)
Written by- Lustyreenaroy
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: Kahani ek couple ki hai. Husband ko shuru mein apni wife Reena bilkul maasoom lagti hai par jab wo uski insta id check karta hai to usko shock lagta hai. Reena Jallad Singh ke sath sex chats aur video sex mein lagi hoti hai. Pros: Kahani ko adultery ko dikhane ke liye likha hai. Kahani ye darsati hai ki jo chizz jaisi dikhti hai jaruri nahi wo waisi hi ho.Charachters limited they toh story confusing nahi hoti readers k liye Cons: Kahani mein kuch turns and twists ho sakte the. Ye sirf ek normal si kahani banker rah gayi hai jisme ek biwi ko ek paraye mard ke sath sex karna hota hai.Plot bahot he jyaada Repeatitive tha or writer ne usko interesting banaaney k liye koi mehnat nahi ki or story ko chalne diya.
Who Tricked Whom? (Thriller)
Written by- Kinystuff
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: Kahani Aarav ki hai jo kismat jaisi chizzo pe yakin nahi karta hai par accident ke baad uski halat aisi ho jaati hai ki wo ab kuch kar hi nahi paata. Wo apni biwi Naina ke rahmo karam pe jinda hota hai. Phir jab usko Naina ke bewafai ka pata chalta hai to usko jhatka lagta hai par uski halat aisi hoti hai ki wo iske baare mein kuch nahi kar sakta. Annt mein chizzen kuch iss tarah se badalti hai ki Aarav ke gusse ke karan wo wapas se khada ho jaata hai. Kuch lines hai jo iss kahani ko intense banati hai. “you are mine, mine to love, and mine to hate” One of the best dialogue tha iss usc ka. Pros: Ye ek intense kahani hai. Characters ko iss tarah se dikhana bahut hi acha hai. Aarav ke emotions ko jis tarah se writer ne use kiya hai wo kammal ka hai. Naina ka character bhi kuch kam nahi hai. Iss kahani mein suspense hai thrill hai aur ek darkness bhi hai jo isko bahut hi alag aur mazzedaar banati hai readers iss kahani ko bich mein chod nahi paate inn kaarano se. Charachters k bich k dialogues sabse bada plus point they iss story ka waqai mein story mein 4 chand lagaa diya aapne dialogues k through.. Cons: Story ka narration overall acha tha but kuch parts mein aisa lagta hai maano story kissi dusare wrier ne likhi ho kyunki wahaan story ka flow or narration baaki story se match nahi khaata Or story atpatti lagti hai. Kahi kahi pe characters ke actions readers ko ekdum se confuse kar dete hai. Thodi bahut repetitions maujood hai kahani mein jisse kahani ka flow thoda bigad jaata hai. Overall a must read..
Born Again For The Cup (Fantasy)
Written by- THE ETERNITY ARCEUS
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Fantasy ki ek anokhi kahani. Aveer ne ye sab sapne mein dekha aur kya hi sapna tha. Shubhman Gill ke jagah wo India ki team se khelta hai aur jeet jaata hai. Cricket se related iss kahani mein cricket ke baare mein bahut kuch bataya hai aur ache tarah se bataya hai. Bhagwan ke sath Aveer ki baatein wo comedy se bhare hue lines ye sab iss kahani ko ek alag sa roop de rahe hai. Pros : Kahani mein character ko incidents ko bahut hi acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Comedy ka chaska lage hone se kahani ko ek nayi rangat milti hai. Cricket ko jis tarah se kahani mein dikhaya gaya hai wo ekdum asal cricket dekhne jaisa hai. Sab kuch bahut hi acche se aur saral bhasa mein bataya gaya hai. Cons: Kahani kahi kahi pe thodi lambi nazar aati hai pace bhi thodi slow ho jaati hai. Aveer ke character ke baare mein agar thoda aur dikhaya jaata to ye chizz readers ko kahani se connect karne mein aur madad karti. Story imagination k according chalti hai jiss wajah se readers story k plot ko ignore kartey hain. Narration overall kaafi weak tha . Overall an entertaining story..
विश्वास और इंतज़ार (Romance)
Written by- Raj_Sharma
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: Kahani Shekhar aur Shikha ke prem ki hai. College ke dino mein dono ek dusre se prem karte the par Shekhar usko chod ke chala jaata hai. Phir kahani kuch saal ka gap leti hai jab Shekhar Sikha ke baare mein pata kar raha hota hai aur usko Sikha ke baare mein pata chalta hai. Shekhar Shikha ke pass pahuchta hai aur usko pata chalta hai Sikha ke 2 betiyon ke baare mein aur sath hi uske cancer ke baare mein. Shekhar uska ilaz karwata hai. Phir wo ye jaanta hai ki Shikha ki betiya usne goad li hui thi. Pros: Kahani ka narration bahut accha hai. Characters ko acche se develop kiya gaya hai aur sath hi dono ke bich ki ghatnaon ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Prem, Tyaag, Pachtava inn saare emotions ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai. Story ka plot unique nahi tha but writer ne uspe mehnat karke usko nikhara hai jo sabse bada positive point hai story ka. Cons: Shikha ki betiyon ke character ko aur acche se dikhaya jaa sakta tha. Kahani kahi kahi pe slow lagti hai aur sath hi kahi kahi pe purani lagti hai. Waqt ke sath sath jo changes hone chahiye the unko puri tarah se dikhaya nahi jaa saka hai jiss wajah se readers ko aisa lagta hai maano 2 alag alg kahani ek sath padh rahe hain..
A Chance (Romance)
Written by- Shoto
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Kahani Naitik aur Ruhi ki hai. Naitik jisne abhi abhi IIT JEE ki pariksha pass kari hai wo apne pariwar, samaj aur dosto ke dabaw mein aakar Ruhi ke proposal ko thukra deta hai. Phir aage jaakar usko samajh aata hai ki usne kya kya galtiyan ki hai. Kahani mein unn dono ke safar ko dikhaya gaya hai. Ek acchi romantic story hai ye.. Pros: Kahani mein emotions bhar bhar ke hai aur ye kahani se readers ko jodti hai. Characters ko bahut hi acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Jo dabaw Naitik mehsus kar raha tha unn sab ko bhi ache tarah se dikhaya gaya hai . Narration kammal ka hai kul mila kar jisase kahani ko padhne mein or ashaani hoti hai or readers connect kar paate hain kahani se. Kahani mein ek emotional depth hai jo readers ko baandhe rahti hai. Cons: Waise to kahani ka naam hi “A Chance” hai par phir bhi Ruhi ne Naitik ko maaf kar diya ye baat acche se jamti nahi hai, kahani ko bahut had tak predictable bana deti hai. Uske character ko thoda aur explore kiya jaa sakta tha. Kahani mein waise to samajik aur pariwarik dabaw ko dikhaya gaya hai par isko aur detail mein dikhaya jaa sakta tha. Charachters limited they or unke dialogues orr bhi jyaada limited jisase story mein awkwardness bani rehti hai.
AAP KITNE ACHCHHE HAIN PAPA (Non- Erotic)
Written by- Black
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: Kahani Baap aur bete ke bich pyaar ka hai. Isme Arjun ka apne bete ke prati pyaar ko dikhaya gaya hai sath hi Shudha ke baare mein bataya gaya hai aur Ankit ke baare mein. Sudha jo ek garib aurat thi jiska ek beta tha usko Arjun ne apnaya aur phir dono ko samman aur prem se apne pass rakha. Aman ka gussa uski narazgi ye sari chizze kahani mein alag sa rang deti hai. Pros: Arjun ke character ko bahut hi acche tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani mein emotions ka utar chadhav bahut hi khub hai isse readers kahani se judde rahte hai. Aman aur Ankit ke bich ending mein jo baatein hui wo sab kuch emotional kar deti hai.Plot kaafi emotional tha jisase readers apne aap ko story mein involved dekhte hain. Cons:Kahani mein kahi kahi pe kuch dramtic chizze dikhayi gayi hai. Aman ka shadi karke apne bacche ke sath wapas aana aur uske baad ki baatein ye kuch jyada hi dramtic lagti hai. Uss character ko aur acche se dikhaya jaa sakta tha. Kahani ka flow characters ke emotions ko dikhane ke chakkar mein kahi kahi pe slow nazar aata hai jiss wajah se story apne line par rukk nahi paati. Kahani mein kuch characters ke bich mein aur depth dikhai jaa sakti thi jisase readers dialogues ko feel kar paatey..
Mind Game (Fantasy)
Written by- Red Ashoka
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Suspence aur Rahasya se bhari hui kahani hai ye Blackwood Manor ki jaha pe 5 guests jaate hai. Unse ek game khelne ko kaha jaata hai jisme unhe iss manor se bahar nikalne ko kaha jaata hai. Waha pe har darwaje ka kuch alag hi roop tha. Kisi bhi darwaje ko kholne se pahle chunautiya aati hai mansik chunautiya jo logo ko jhanjor kar rakh deti hai. Annt mein wo manor ek kurbani bhi maangti hai jiske bina uske bahar nahi jaaya jaa sakta hai. Pros: Narration kamal ka hai. Mystery element ke karan readers kahani ko aage padhe bina rah nahi paate. Har ek character ki apni alag kahani hai. Kahani mein sharal bhasha ka prayog kiya gaya hai jo kaafi prabhavshali bhi hai. Ye kahani dimag ko jhanjhor kar rakh deti hai.plot selection kaabil-e -tareef tha. Props to the writer. Cons: Kahani ki ending sahi nahi lagti aisa lagta hai ki abhi sawalo ke jawab nahi mile hai. Kahi kahi pe aisa lagta hai ki writer ek nahi balki do alag alag stithiyon mein likh raha ho. Sabdo ke Chayan alag ho jaate hai likhne ka tarika thoda badal jaata hai. Ye chizz kahani ko thoda disturb kar deti hai. Aisa mehsus hota hai ki kahani ab kahi aur pahuch gayi hai.
Haunted Underwear Ki Kahani (Fantasy)
Written by- Ashish120
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: Kahani ek lady underwear ki hai jo ab ek aadmi pehen ke ghumta hai. Uss underwear mein ek bhootni hoti hai jiska naam Kamini hai. Uss aadmi ko underwear wali bhootni Kamini se pyar ho jaata hai. Pros: Imagination ki koi hadd nahi ho sakti iss baat ko darshati hai ye kahani. Kaise ek feminist bhootni ek lady underwear pahenne wale aadmi se pyaar karne lag jaati hai. Ye ek funny horror story hai. Cons: Story ko aur funny banaya jaa sakta tha isme aur bhi horror elements diye ja sakte the. Kahani mein explanation ki bahut kami hai.
Kumudini (Erotica)
Written by- naag.champa
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: Ye kahani Paankpara ki, ek gaaon jaha pe kuch alag se riti riwaj hai. Kumudini jo saher se uss gaaon mein jaati hai aur waha ke riti riwajon ke anusar use wo sab karne ko kaha jaata hai jo waha ki maanyata hai. Wo waha pe apne sharir ki sundarta ko mehsus karti hai. Neelima usko sab kuch batata hai aur Dheere Dheere usko waha ke saare raaj samajh aate hai. Pros: Kahani ko bahut hi sundar tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Characters ko aur sath hi gaaon ke rituals ko dheere dheere saamne laaya jaata hai. Isse kahani se log juddaw mehsush kar sakte hai. Story ka plot kaafi unique tha or story ka background bhi plot k hisaab se fabulous tha. Writer ne apni research karke kahaani likhi hai jo readers ko passand aata hai.. Cons: Kahi kahi pe repetition ki wajah se kahani thodi atpati si ho jaati hai. Kahani ka koi annt samajh nahi aata jisse thodi nirasha hoti hai. Story ka narration kuch jagah par story ka sath chhod deta hai jisse dhundne k liye readers ko story se hattna padta hai..
MUMMY KA KAAMUK RISHTA (Adultery)
Written by- LONELYCHAHAK
Rating – 6.75/10
Story Review: Maa aur Mausa ke bich panap rahe sharirik sambandho pe aadharit hai ye kahani. Arjun jo ki Veena ka beta hai ye kahani ussi ke dwara batai jaa rahi hai kaise veena aur Ashok ke bich sharirik sambhandh bane aur kya kya hua. Pros : Kahani ka narration sex story ke hisab se theek hai. Readers ko kahani se jode rakhti hai kahani mein use kari gayi desi boli. Incest sex story ke hisab se ye kahani acchi hai. Cons: Kahani lambi hai jiske picche ka kaaran repetition hai. Kuch chizzon ko kuch jyada hi detail mein bataya gaya hai or baaki important portions par wahi details missing hain yaani writer ne unnecessary parts ko importance di hai ,Isse kahani padhte waqt mann bhatak jaata hai.
The Curse of the Mountain (Incest)
Written by- Mr moon knight x
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: An ambitious story that spans centuries weaving a tale of incest love and reincarnation. Story follows Rudra and Rudrani and their forbidden love from ancient time leading to the oppose from villagers and their parents and then their tragic end. Reincarnated as Rohan and Ritu in present Delhi, they rediscover their past and grapple with their rekindled love, only to face the revelation that they are siblings in this life too. The story blends romance, erotica, tragedy, and hope, exploring themes of destiny, love, and resistance against a cyclical curse. While the story’s bold exploration of incest themes captivates, its pacing, repetitive elements, and occasional melodrama slightly dilute its impact. The open ended resolution leaves readers hopeful yet yearning for closure. Pros: New and engaging plot line and rich world building. See there is not much to explore in incest theme but the writer here does a good job crafting a new idea of reincarnation blending it with incest love of Rudra and Rudrani. The world building of ancient time is rich and the end twist where it reveals that Rohan and Ritu are siblings in this life too makes an impact. Cons: While the world building is good the narration felt weaker at some moments which results to uneven pacing at times. Apart from it the story is solely focused on main characters and their love but some supporting characters are underdeveloped. Characters like pandit Govind and parents lack depth which weakens stories complexity. What was the actual curse is not mentioned making the lack of a definitive resolution for Rohan and Ritu’s relationship or the curse leaves the story feeling incomplete, potentially frustrating readers seeking closure. Overall it is a good read for those who likes to read sibling incest with a new and fresh take but could have been better.
एक नुक्ता (.) (Erotica/Adultery)
Written by- Naag.champa
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Kabhi kabhi choti choti chize bahut bada impact daal deti hai waise hi kayi baar bahut choti galtiyo ki bahut badi kimat chukani padti hai aur yahi is story ka central plot hai. Story kamya ki hai jo ek housewife hai aur uski life change hoti hai uske pati ki ek gambling mistake se jo bas ek decimal ka lagane ki wajah se bahut bade debt me aa jata hai and then what follows is kamya’s attempt to make her husband free from this trap. story explores themes of sacrifice, betrayal, and empowerment through the lens of a desperate situation and writer has done commendable job crafting this narrative. Pros: Strong Protagonist, Kamya is a well-crafted character which navigates a harrowing journey of moral conflict, seduction and self-discovery. Kahani ka sabse majbut paksh ki Kamya kakirdar hai unka apne pati ko bachane ka struggle and then towards the end apne andar aaye badlav ko mehsus karna is written well, writing is good and descriptive and I liked the way how the metaphor of 'न ा' shown as pivotal mistake that alters the lives is clearly woven into the narrative justifying the title of this story. The sensual elements used are good it but they are a hit n miss. Cons: underdeveloped antagonist and predictable plot elements. See husband ka debt me Jana fir us boss ka offer ye kuch bhi naya nahi hai, is genre me this is predictable which make the story weaker. Also the creditor despite his menacing presence lacks depth making him a generic villain jo bas story ko puch forward karne aur kamya ke sath raat bitane aaya tha, the internal conflict of Kamya making this decision is missing it could have added more depth to the narrative. Also the biggest flaw I found is the language. Whole story is written in present tense which is fine but the language feels translated not natural, isse connect nahi ho pata hai aur narration gets weaker. Apart from these overall the story was good and entertaining and is worth a read.
Adla Badli - A murder Mystery (Erotic/Thriller)
Written by- manikmittleme07
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: A twist filled tale that perfectly blends adultery and crime with two couples at centre. Story begins with playful banter and sexual tension escalated to a calculated plot line where hidden motives and past relationships unravel leading to Shruti and sajal's murder with revelation of betrayal. @manikmittleme07 ne yaha ek behtarin fast paced story craft ki hai jo apne badhiya climax aur behtarin dialogue ke liye yaad rahegi. Although the narrative occassionally hampered by inconsistent characterization and convenient plot device the story stands out. Pros: Kahani ka premise kafi engaging hai jo reader ko apne sath bandhe rakhta hai. Badhiya dialogue aur twists kahani ki gati ko dhima na karte huye ise bore nahi hone dete hai. Aisi kahaniyo me aksar isi ki gunjaish hoti hai aur writer isme safal huye hai. Plot line bahut badhiya tarike execute ki gayi hai sath hi sensual scenes ne kahani me jaan daal di hai. Adultery ka murder mystery ke sath blend akarshak hai the partner-swapping concept serving as a fresh catalyst for the crime The revelation of Sajal and Shruti’s past as lovers, followed by Rajat and Sneha’s countermove to orchestrate the murder, delivers satisfying twists that reframe the narrative’s stakes. The erotic scenes, particularly during the dance and bedroom sequences are well written. Cons:Inconsistent chractrization and rushed resolution. Shruti’s playful, open-minded persona clashes with her later depiction as a scheming ex-lover, while Sajal’s motivations shift abruptly from lustful to murderous, lacking sufficient buildup. The final act, particularly the hill station epilogue, feels abrupt, with the inspector’s passive acceptance of Rajat and Sneha’s confession leaving ethical and legal questions unresolved. Apart from these the story was a good and engaging read but could have been better. Ending aur characters par thoda aur work ise aur behtar bana deta
कत्ल की रात Thriller)
Written by- Devil maximum
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: A classic murder mystery set in chilling and enigmatic ambience of Kashmir. Story ek rahasyamayi accident se jo shuru se hi reader ko apne suspense aur thrill ke sath bandh leti hai aur jaise jaise kahani aage badhti hai naye characters chipa hua sach, purane raaz ek ke baad ek samne aane lagte hai. The narrative masterfully blends twists, motivations, emotional conflicts, and police investigation, keeping readers intrigued until the very end. The climax is impactful, highlighting the struggle between justice and law while attempting to explore the depths of humanity. Pros: Well-crafted suspense, great narration, perfect title, highly engaging story line and good use of language with very less spelling errors making it a good read. Story shuruwat se hi mystery banaye rakhti hai andi it keeps readers on a point ke aage kya hoga. The suspense is skillfully maintained, with relationships, lies, love, and revenge intricately woven into the plot. What I felt great about this is kahani ka har kirdar grey hai har koi shak ke ghere mehai aap kisi par bhi trust nahi kar sakte, language aur dialogues bhi engaging hai so well done on that and climax too is well crafted adding depth to the narrative. Cons: Story feels way too lengthy at points reducing its pace some dialogues could have been shorter. Secondary characters like Shankar or Rani and their subplots could have been developed further to enhance their relevance. Near the end, the sudden unraveling of all mysteries at once slightly dilutes the impact. Apart from these, story is good and a well written thriller.
Mom's Payal (Incest)
Written by- Powergirl
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: A well written incest story that explores taboo relationship between a single mother sapna and her 18 year old son Raj. Set during a summer holiday It begins with a seemingly innocent conversation about Sapna’s payal and gradually unfolds into an exploration of desire, blurring the line between maternal affection and sexual tension. Told in a conversational style, the story relies heavily on dialogue to shape the characters and move the plot forward. However, the story falters in pacing, emotional depth, and sensitivity. Its bold narrative and vivid imagery stand out, but the overreliance on sensationalism and lack of nuanced character development ultimately diminish its impact. Pros: Engaging dialogues, well written sensory detailes, and the emotional context, good flowing narration and a perfect title and it is mom’s payal that leads to the situation between sapna and raj. The give and take between Sapna and Raj is lively and reveals their personalities effectively. The dialogue is natural, with moments of humor and flirtation that add layers to their relationship, particularly in the early stages. The story excels in describing physical details, such as the payal, Sapna’s attire, and the tactile sensations during intimate moments. These elements create a strong visual and sensory experience for the reader. And sapna’s short backstory adds a emotional context and justification for actions. Cons: Lack of depth, uneven pacing and characterization gaps. Story his solely focused on howthe act will happen between sapna and raj overshadowing opportunity to explore further, the rapid escalation from casual conversation to overt sexual encounters feels rushed and undermines the potential for a more nuanced portrayal of the characters’ motivations. The narrative moves too quickly from light-hearted banter to intense intimacy, leaving little room for tension to build naturally. This abrupt shift makes the story feel more like a sequence of events than a cohesive arc. Overall it was a great read heavily resiling on dialogues
अपशगुनी (Non-Erotic)
Written by- avsji
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: kuch kahaniya kuch is tarah likhi gayi hoti hai ki aap padhte huye unme ho jate ho, ye kahani bhi kuch waisi hi hai jise padhte huye aisa laga jaise main khud us pariwar ka hissa ban gaya hu, us amrud ke saye me baitha kirdaro ki jindagi ke utar chadhav dekh raha hu, jis khubsurti se aapne ped ko kahani ka kendra banaya hai wo kabile tarif hai, ek pure pariwar ki kahani, rishto ki, badalte mulyo ki andhavishwas se jujhne ki kahani aur sabse sundar baat ye ki kahani ki bhasha itni saral hai ke aap kirdaro se judav mehsus kar sakte ho Pros: Unique plotline, simple yet effective creating a whole new world with a suitable title for the story. Narration bhi on point tha, simple language jisme kahi bhi koi vartani ki galti nahi hai, sehaj bhasha hai jisse padhne me bhi asani hoti hai aur kahani ka flow bhi bana rehta hai jo Pathak ko bore nahi hone deta, kahani ka tana bana itne saral shabdo me buna gaya hai jo ped ke madhyamseekmadhyampariwar ki jatiltao ko samaksh rakh deta hai Cons: kuch kuch jagah par kahani thodi khichi huyi si pratit hoti hai vishetah pariwarik samvadi me jise aur kasa ja sakta hai sath hi kahani ka ant kuch jaldbaji me hua pratit hoti hai jo ki hum samajh sakte hai shabd maryada ke kaaran ho sakta hai. Overall ye ek behad prabhavshali aur yaadgar kahani hai jo manoranjan ke sath sath badalte rishto ke parivesh ke bare me sochne ka avsar bhi pradan karti hai
Ritual (Thriller)
Written by- harshit1890
Rating – 9.5/10
Story Review: Ek Intense psychological crime thriller jo shuru se hi apne suspense ke sath bandhe rakhti hai. ek tukdon mein bati hui laash, ek symbolic ritual, aur ek officer jise pehle bhi kuch aisa hi dekhne ko mila tha. Everyting is written with perfection. The story follows Vikrant, a sharp yet tormented investigator, as he's pulled into a chilling case of two victims, both brutally murdered with identical symbols carved near their bodies. At the center of it all lies a book titled अनुष्ठान and as Vikrant digs deeper, the investigation leads him to Kavi Kishore, a reclusive writer whose book mirrors the crime scenes in disturbing detail. With each clue, Vikrant finds himself trapped in a web of ancient rituals, psychological terror, and a darkness that refuses to stay buried. What begins as a murder case soon turns into a haunting journey where logic fails, and the ritual begins. Pros : Unique plot, engaging story line, stong central character with unique blend of crime and mystery with perfect title. Character of Vikram is layered, compelling, and emotionally engaging, keeping readers invested in his journey. The mix of investigative thriller with ancient rituals adds intrigue and freshness to the plot. The recurring symbols and the eerie book ‘Anushthaan’ give the story a chilling, almost mythical depth. The plot progresses quickly with escalating tension, maintaining suspense throughout. Cons: Confusing at times as a plotline is very complex with some predictable plot twists and occasional overexplanation. At the middle story might feel a bit of confusing requiring reader to revisit it for better understanding. A few plot reveals may feel slightly expected for seasoned thriller readers. Some ritualistic or symbolic elements could be shown subtly rather than explained outright. Kuch kuch jagah spelling mistakes bhi hai but can be overlooked. Apart from these overall it is a well written story.
परिंदा(Drama) (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Shetan
Rating – 8.25/10
Story Review: Current situation ke hisab se ye kahani do dhri talwar jaisi hai as kuch lo pasand aane layak jo shanti ka Sandesh deti hai aur kuch shayad Pakistani se dosti se ahat ho jaye. Parinda tells the story of Veeru, an Indian Air Force pilot whose malfunctioning MiG 21 leads him into Pakistani airspace. He's captured, only to find his intercepting Pakistani pilot, Sarfaraz, is an old friend. While dealing with captivity and flashbacks to their shared past, Veeru also grapples with his strained marriage to Kavita, following a personal tragedy. Sarfaraz's wife, Hina (also an old acquaintance of Veeru), devises a plan: she gets a famous Pakistani singer to broadcast a song with lyrics penned by Veeru, intended as a plea to Kavita. The song successfully bridges the gap, leading to Veeru's reconciliation with Kavita upon his release and return to India, highlighting themes of enduring friendship across borders and the healing power of hope. Pros: Strong Emotional Core, well narrated, relatable characters and dialogues, positive messages and interesting plot twists. The friendship between Veeru and Sarfaraz is the story's backbone and is portrayed convincingly, especially through the London flashbacks. Their reunion under duress is a compelling premise. The story strongly advocates for peace, understanding, and the idea that human relationships can transcend national enmities. The ending, with the birth of "Aman," reinforces this. Cons: Uneven pacing at places and vartani ki galtiya jo kahi kahi kahani padhne ke flow ko bigad deta hai. Sath hi plot line thodi si predictable bhi hai, ha kahani ka wo twist ke Pakistani officer ka Indian officer ka dost nikalna sahi kaam karta hai but after that kahani kayi jagah predictable ho jati hai aur realism se pare hat jati hai. Apart from these overall kahani kafi badhiya hai, it was an entertaining read.
The Eclipse Empire (Romance/Thriller)
Written by- Kdry9
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: Some stories are not just read, but felt and this is one such story. It introduces readers to a new futuristic world rules by seven families where there is tremendous blend of politics, power, deception and emotions. Story centres on Mahira Sharma the daughter of the head family and her journey to keep the empire in hands and uncovering the conspiracy against her family teaming up with Kabir, a bounty hunter. While reading this it felt like watching the whole city from the balcony of eclipse prime, well done on crafting such vast plot in a short story. Pros: The Central plot of the story is very strong, power struggle of the seven families and the relationship dynamics between Mahira and Kabir is very engaging. The clash of two worlds of Mahira and Kabir adds necessary depth to the storyline. World building was done very well showing the efforts of the writer, it is not easy to compell this vast story in shorter narrative but writer succeeded in that. Story's flow and narration was point leaving no loose end. We keeps you hooked in the journey of Mahira and Kabir. The end felt satisfied by the new distribution of power and emotions make it a memorable read. Cons: the story sometimes becomes lengthy, especially in middle parts the flow becomes a bit slow with twists after twists, if there was a bit more tightness here the impact would have been better. Some emotional moments and Rajbir's quickly formed change appear rushed towards end. And some of the important heads of seven families remains bit flat. Apart from these, overall this was a great read, a good blend of Sci-fi, politics, family dynamics, and emotional romance with simple language and powerful characters
Lady Doctors (erotica/Adultery)
Written by- Riya singh
Rating – 6.75/10
Story Review: A bold and intense erotic drama that dives headfirst into a world of forbidden desires, family dysfunction, and moral ambiguit. kahani mahi aur uski bhabhi payal ke bare me hai ki kaise dono ladkiya apni family me aayi musibato ke baad ek homeopathy sexology clinic chalane lagti hai aur yahi se asal kahani shuru hoti hai, jis clinic ko bas ghar chalane ka jariya banna tha wo mahi aur payal ke liye apni chipi huyi chahate, yaun akarshan, aur vaasna ko pura karne ka jariya banta hai, Kahani asal me is baat par tiki hai ke kaise do masumdikhne wali ladkiya dhire dhire bindas azad khayalo wali aurte ban jati hai, Story ko sensual scenes is kahani ki jaan hai aur lekhika ne unhe bakhubi likha hai, mahi aur payal ka apne patients ke private parts ko lekar akarshan aur eventually apne patients ke sath hi sharirik sambandh banana kafi sahi se explore kiya gaya hai. Pros: Kahani ki sabse badi takat iske well written sexual scenes hi hai fir wo payal ya mahi ka pehni baar clinic me penis check karna ho ya end me hone wala group sex, its totally worth reading, narration on point hai jo kahani ki pace ko maintain rakhta hai siway kuch jagho par, language bhi jo use huyi hai easy to understand hai jisse padhne me dikkat nahi hoti hai, kahani ka end twist jabardast hai jab reveal hota hai amar singh ab mahi aur payalka sasur hai wo thoda chauka deta hai sath hi story me ek naya touch bhi add karta hai, pure sex story lovers ke liye this is a great read. Cons:kahani ka sabse bada drawback iske start me dikhaya gaya gay scene hai. XF par GAY content ALLOWED NAHI HAIstill uska use kahani ko bahut jyada down kar deta hai, aap payal ke pati ko kuch aur tarah portray karti to kahani aur behtar ho sakti thi. kahani bich me repetative hone lagti hai aur dialogues monotonus se ho jate hai jiska sidha asar kahani ke pace par hota hai ise sudhara ja sakta tha, kayi jagah spelling ki galtiya hai jo spasht dikhayi deti hai. Overall it was a good read.
ये कैसा पछतावा (Adultery)
Written by- lord haram
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: Mumbai ke corporate world ke background me set ek unique sex story. kahani arti mehra ke ird gird ghumti hai jo ek safal business women hai lekin andar hi andar apne pachtawe se jujh rahi hai, uske college ke premi ki atmahatya ka use gehra dukh hai aur fir kahani me tab mod aata hai jab wo ek budhe kaka ko chaprasi ki naukri par rakhti hai aur yaha se kahani sexual mod leti hai yaha kaka arti ske sath sharirik sambandh banata hai use torcher karta hai which leads to end twist ke kaka koi aur nahi arti ke boyfriend ka pita hai aur arti ko sexually torcher kar wo apne bete ki maut ka badla le raha hai aur arti bhi apne pachtawe ke chalte apne aap ko apne desires ke aage submit kar deti hai Pros: Erotic adultery theme ki story ke liye kahani ya plot thoda alag hai aur kafi badhiya tarike se execute kiya gaya hai, aarti ka guilt, kaka ka intro, situation which leads to the main act badhiya tarike se likhe gaye hai, narration sahi hai aur jo language use huyi hai easy hai jisse padhne me maja aata hai, arti ka emotional state uska kaka ke samne ka submissive nature writer ne bahut badhiya tarike se likha hai, sexsual scenes bhi sahi tarike se likhe gaye the, bhale wo rough aur forced lage lekin non concencual feel nahi aane dete hai as arti is torcher ko enjoy karti hai apne pachtawe ki aad me which is good. Cons: Kahani me kuch kuch jagah bahut si spelling mistakes hai jo spasht dikhti hai wo padhne ka experience down karti hai sath hi kahani ka pace bahut high hai jo chize ko develop na hone dete huye ekdum se sab kuch hone deta hai for example arti ka ek pal kaka ko virodh karke agle hi bas uske sex karne lag jana maan jana ye sudden shift abrupt lagta hai, kaka ka amit ka pita hone ka twist acha hai lekin us back story ko aur explore kiya ja sakta tha, thoda seduction part kahani ko aur behtar bana deta. Overall it was a good read but could have been better
दोस्त कि माँ कि मदद :- सँडी (Adultery)
Written by- Lovetooldlady
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: A well written story of a sexual encounter between sandy and his friend's momsurekha, kahani sandy aur uske badi umra ki aurto ke prati yaun akarshan ko explore karti hai jo apne dost ki maa ke sath sex sambandh banana chahta hai aur kismat se use wo mauka milta bhi hai jise us kahani me writer ne bakhubi likha hai. The narrative unfolds as a steamy, taboo-driven encounter, blending raw sensuality with forbidden age-gap dynamics. The story’s explicit progression from Sandy’s calculated seduction to Surekha’s enthusiastic participation culminates in a mutually satisfying arrangement, sealed by Surekha’s decision to stay back with Sandy. It’s a provocative tale that thrives on its unapologetic exploration of lust. Pros: Writer ne story ko saral aur bolchal ki bhasha me likha hai jisse padhne wale story se jaldi connect ho jate hai, fact paced narration kahani ko bore nahi hone deta aur sabse badhiya baat story me kuch bhi achanak nahi ho raha hai, writer has provided motivations for the sexual act, sandy ka badi umra ki mahilao ka akarshan, surekha ka unsatisfied housewife hona gives a reason ke kyu surekha ne sandy ke sath sambandh banaye, well written characters aur easy to understand dialogues story ko padhne layak banaye rakhte hai. Cons: Kahani me bahut jyada, matlab had se jyada spelling mistakes hai, matlab har line me do teen mistakes aap notice kar sakte hai aur ye ek major drawback hai as isse kahani padhne ka flow tut jata hai sath hi kayi baar kahani ke kuch hisse repetative lagte hai jise sudhara ja sakta tha, sath hi kuch moments me kahani thodu khichti huyi mehsus hoti hai jaise kuch details na bhi hote to kuch fark nahi padta. overall it was a good read but could have been better
Khushiyon ki chahat (Non Erotic)
Written by- Mrxr
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Kuch stories aisi hoti hai jo aapke dil ko chhu jati hai aur ye kuch waise hi story hai saadgi se bhari huyi jo aam jindagi ke sukh dukh ko, kuch behtarin palo ko bahut khubsurati ke sath bayan karti hai. Geet aur Rohan ke bich ka bond, unka gehra rishta Dil chhu jata hai, ek taraf bhai behan ke rishte ka pyar aur dusri taraf asal jindagi ka struggle writer ne bahut badhiya tarike se kahani ke jariye dikhaya hai. A well written story of slice of life Pros: kahani ki plotline aam jindagi wali hai aur yahi iski sabse badi khubi hai, chhoti chhoti baato se buni huyi lekin ek satisfying end ki or jati huyi. Geet aur Rohan dono ke ki characters kafi badhiya tarike se likhe gaye hai ki reader unke beet ki chemestry ko unke bond ko mehsus karta hai samajhta hai, dialogues aur narration ka flow sahi tarah se maintain Kiya gaya hai aur sabse satisfying hai story ka climax jisme Rohan geet ki baat ko yaad rakhte huye uske sapne ko pura karta hai jo reader ko bhi satisfying feel pradan karta hai. Language simple hai natural hai jisse padhte huye dikkat nahi hoti. Cons: kayi jagho par kahani apni grip chhodti huyi mehsus Hoti hai lekin boring jati jiska reason hai kahani me kuch element ka repeat hona, geet Rohan ke daily routine ka baar baar jikra kahani ko jabardasti lamba khichta sa lagta hai in unnecessary details ko hataya ja sakta tha. Secondary characters ko bhi thoda explore Kiya ja sakta tha jisse kahani ki depth aur gehri ho sakti thi, sath ki kahani me kayi jagah grammatical aur spelling mistakes hai jo padhne ka flow bigadti hai. Is sab ke bavjud ye ek shandar aur pyari story hai, it was a great read.
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REVIEWS BY JUDGE
PART - III
ये मुरदों का गाँव (Satire/Non Erotic)
Story Review: Kahani aaj ke samaj ki kadwi.sachchai ko batati huyi ek teekha vyang hai jo hamare samajh ki girti stithi aur paryavaran se jude sawalo par ek gehri chubhan chhod jata hai. Ye story hame batati hai ke kaise hamari hi hypocrisy aur hamare bich panap rahe bhrashtachar ne Desh ki harit dharti ko ek digital utopia bana Diya hai, har character har scene har dialogue ek aaine ki tarah hai jo aaj ki sachchai se aap ko avgat karati hai. Dattatray Babu ka sangharsh aur samaj ka paryavaran ke prati durlakshit rehna bahut bakhubi dikhaya gaya hai. Pros : Storyline brilliantly sarcastic hai, jis tarah se ye story apni baat rakhti hai wo wakayi lajwab hai. Dattatray Babu ka sangharsh, unka umda character aur ant me unki hoti haar personal feel hoti hai, kahani ka vyang iska Satire teekha hai lekin realistic hai. Language is simple yet hitting, narration was too on point, story start to end ek lay me chalti hai aur reader se jud jati hai Cons: story me kayi jagah kuch elements hai jo repetitive se lagte hai jo bas kahani ki lambai badhane ka kaam karte hai, kuch dialogues bhi jinhe aur crisp kiya ja sakta tha. Characters other than dattatray Babu feels one dimensional, jo jyada kuch impact nahi daal pate hai, they lack purpose and depth as well, Overall it was a good read and close to today's reality.
"पट" (horror/thriller)
Story Review: A spine chilling horror/thriller story set in a landscape of amjhara valley. Story follows Rajat jo ek archeological expert hai and his journey to research ancient temples and ruins in different scheduled areas. What begins as a scientific curiosity truns into a supernatural experience for rajat, blending old stories and suspense. Discovering tragic tale of king and rup kanwar and closed doors, writer skillfully combines supernatural elements and thrill in the story. Pros: Atmospheric settings and great descriptions. Kahani shuru se hi mahol banane me kamiyab rahi hai, jagho aur vatavaran ke vivid description aise batate hai jaise sab kuch aankho ke samne ghatit ho raha ho, kahani ka tone ekdum sahi se set Kiya gaya hai. Climax tak kahani kabhi bhi aisi nahi lagti ke uski pakad dhili pad Rahi ho. Narration on point hai ek flow maintain karne chalta hai, story likhne me Jo poetic aur lyrical language writer ne use ki hai wo kahani ka ek aur plus point hai Cons: kahani jaha ek or detailed hai wahi iska pace bahut slow hai, specially start aur middle section me kuch description chote kiye ja sakte the jisse kahani aur aur gati milti , sath hi kahani me kayi unnecessary chizo ko overly describe Kiya gaya hai jisse main chizo par se focus hat jata hai aise me rajat ya genda Singh jaise characters ko fully explore karne ka mauka hi nahi mila, sath ji sabse bada weak point story ka uska end hai jo ekdum hi abrupt hai aur totally unsatisfied hai. Rup kunwar ke past ko us storyline ko aap start aur middle ke kuch section cut kar explore karte to kahani aur badhiya banti and end satisfied hota kyuki ending me work required tha, also ye har jagah 'ji' ko shayad 'ju' likha hai or I might be wrong kyuki Raja ju thoda different sound karta hai. Overall it was a great read but could have been better. It has the potential but just missed the mark.
Bak-bakchodi (Comedy/Erotica)
Story Review: The story is raucous and over the top sexual comedy with the twist of action and redemption. Kahani Mumbai me set hai jo do ladkiyo par mainly focus karti hai jinki life thodi chaotic hai aur isi chakkar me ye ek misadventure me fas jati hai and then what follows is a road trip, accident, visit to shady night club and then get caught into human trafficking ring jisme se inhe do bhai bachate hai, story ka end comedic hai but satisfying hai jaha dono ladkiyo ko dono bhaiyo ke sath stability mil jati hai. Writer ne slapstick comedy ka bahut badhiya tarike se story me upyog Kiya hai. Pros: kahani ko sabse badi strength iska humour hi hai, comedy is a serious business and write has done a commendable job in this aspect. Story ka tone vibrant hai aur flawed protagonists story me jaan daal dete hai aur ek near to real wala feel dete hai. Story ki language uske tone se hisab se ekdum sahi fit hoti hai and narration was good too. Itne jyada characters hote huye bhi sabse badhiya baat ye hai ke padhte huye kahi bhi koi confusion nahi hoti. Cons: Jaha story me itna kuch ho raha ho waha kuch chize chhut bhi jati hai jaise is kahani se emotional connect totally gayab hai. All characters are explored on surface level, unne kahi koi depth hi najar nahi aati hai isse story one dimensional ban jati hai, story ka narrative inconsistent hai jo slapstick comedy, action aur romance ke bich jhulta rehta hai jisse koi bhi element sahi se integrate nahi ho pata. Apart from these overall story badhiya hai as it was a wild ride and refreshing to read a sexual comedy story.
लवचुंबक (Adultery)
Story Review: Kahani sonali ki hai jo apni garmiyo ko chhuttiyo me apni saheli ke sath uske mamakegaonjati hai aur waha use milta hai indrajit jo ki ek shadi shuda insan aur sonali uski or attract hoti hai and then one event leads to another and what follows is a sexual encounter between sonali and indrajit. Story explores the themes of lust, guilt and moral conflict and writer has done a good job crafting this narrative. Pros: Great language and well narrated. Sex stories me jyada kuch bolne hota nahi hai siway iske ke use likha kaise gaya hai aur yaha aapne sensual scenes ko, waha tak le jane wale scenes ko events ko bahut badhiya tarike se likha hai. Language is simple and easy to understand. Sonali me emotional turmoil ko uski physical longing ko bahut badhiya tarise se capture kiya gaya hai. Sonali ka character arc bhi bahut impressive hai sath hi indrajit ka character story me charm bhar deta hai, descriptive sensual scenes story ke charm aur aur badha dete hai. Cons:Inconsistent narrative flow and pacing is a major flow, the story alternates between detailed descriptions and rushed sequences leading to uneven pacing at some places. While jana sonali ka character theek tarah se developed hai baki characters like indrajit and juhi feels surface level lacking depth. Sath hi kayi jagah grammatical aur spelling errors bhi hai. Overall story has a engaging premise and was a good read
सीता फिर अग्नि में (Thriller)
Story Review: Kahani treta yug ki Sita aur aaj ki siya ke madhyam se stree ke atmasamman, sangharsh aur nyay ki ladai ko prastut karti hai. Kahani ek imandar IAS Arav aur uski social worker wife siya par kendrit hai jise ramayan kaal se pratikaatmak drishyo se joda gaya hai. Jab arav gov ke ek curroption ko expose karne ki koshish karta hai tab uska transfer ho jata hai wahi siya apne leval par isse ladti rehti hai tab tak jab tak use ranvir malik dwara kidnap nahi Kiya jata jiske baad arav apne mitra ki madad se use bachata hai aur ant hota hai siya ki agnipariksha se jab arav uspar sandeh karta hai, story ramayan ki ghatnao ko aaj ke yug ke sath bahut badhiya tarike se jodti hai aur sochne par majbur kar deti hai. Pros: Kahani ka parallel structure kafi adhbhut hai aur ye ek bahut hi innovative approach hai aur writer ise likhne me bakhubi kamiyab huye hai. Ramayan ke samay ki aur aaj ke samay ki samantaye bahut badhiya tarike se buni huyi hai. Characters bhi sahi se develop kiye Gaye hai khas taur par siya ka kirdar, story have a thematic depth and good pacing and suspense. Kahani ki gati badhiya hai khas kar kaliyug le ghatnakramo me. I liked the open end which hints towards a new start which is somewhat a satisfactory ending leaving readers to think further Cons: sabse bada yahi hai ke bhai aapne Ramayan jaise mahakavya ki Puri ghatnaye utha kar hi story me daal di, we are Xforum do not encourage that. Kahani ke liye bhale hi wo sahi Lage lekin ye baat batane ka approach thoda alag ho sakta tha, sath hi kahani ka narration kafi weak hai. Uneven pacing ke chalte kahani kayi jagho par boring si ya predictable lagti hai. Bhasha sahi hai lekin kahani me kayi jagah wo natural na lagte huye translated lagti hai jo kahani padhne ka maja kharab kar deta hai sath hi villain ka character bhi one dimensional hai use aur explore Kiya ja sakta tha. Overall it was a great read
Moonvale (Horror/Thriller)
Story Review: A dark and chilling horror story set in town drowning in fear under the shadow of black hollow forest. Story follows Iris lowe and her children trying to survive but everything falls apart when children in moonvale starts vanishing on full moon nights. As the fear and suspicion grow the town turns up against iris blaming her for disappearances. And then what follows is a serious of tragic events and when it seems it can't get worse Iris estranged husband returns uncovering terrifying secrets rituals and a curse. The story builds a brutal shocking climax where there truth finally comes out and the children are at centre. It is haunting tale about broken families, brilliantly crafted. Pros: The story excells in creating a dark and immersive atmosphere with great sensory discriptions that establish the tone and setting. The pacing steadily builds the tension and the use of foreshadowing specially regarding Billy sets up plot twists perfectly. The story shows thematic depth exploring fear parania aur generational trauma. Horror elements are memorable. The plotline is well structured maintaining suspense. And sense of momentum as events escalates while the language is consistent enhancing the mood and readability throughout the narrative. Cons: The story have a heavy resilience on late exposition particularly through Matt's monologue which somewhat disrupts pacing. The question about how matt and Billy acquired their powers and performed rituals left under explained. Character shift like Matt turning into antagonist lacks buildup. Apart from the it was a superb story and worth read
Cuckquening (Adultery)
Story Review: The story explores a complex narrative centred around pravara Amira and naima delving into the theme of morden relationship and personal desires in the context of urban tech driven environment. It portrays a descent into unconventional relationship dynamics specially cuckquening against the backdrop of Bengaluru it culture the narrative is character driven with a focus on psychological transformations. It's raw intensity makes it a bold and entertaining read. Pros: The story tackles modern relationship dynamics very well pravara's transformation from a loyal husband to a taboo driven man is well crafted adding psychological depth to his character, the authentic dialogues enhances interactions, the plot line narration maintains gripping momentum. the language is evocative especially in sensual scenes which is written is very detailed manner and are well crafted capturing raw desires of characters. Cons: The story struggles with inconsistent pacing issues as lenghthy exposition slow down the plot while some key scenes from story feels rushed. The characters of Amira and Naima lacks certain depth serving only as a reactive figures for Pravara's arc. There are some grammatical errors which disrupts readability. Apart from these overall it was an entertaining read
एक रात, एक हत्या, और एक राज़ (Thriller)
Story Review: Story ek classic murder mystery hai jo new year party ke background me ghatit hoti hai, chanakyapuri ki ek alishan kothi me Arpita Malhotra ki hatya ho jati hai aur inspector Ishan par is gutthi ko suljhane ka jimma aata hai, kahani ka lagbhag kar kirdar shak ke ghere me hai aur jaise jaise investigation aage badhti hai, dhokha jalan badla blackmail ki parte khulne lagti hai, story ekdum twist filled hai aur ant tak reader ko badhe rakhne ki kshamta rakhti hai. Plotline dumdar hai but story was a hit n miss. Pros : Kahani ka pace impressive hai, shuru me huyi hatya aur fir usse jude surago ka dhire dhire ujagar hoga reader ko badhe rakhne me saksham hai. Plot twists kahani ko aur rochak bana dete hai aur readers ko alag alag disha me sochne majbur karte hai jisse jab end me asal katil ka pata chalta hai to uska impact badh jata hai, iske alawa kahani ka mahol aur. Bhasha saral hai lekin... Cons: jaha Bhasha saral hai wahi narration kafi weak hai, is kahani ki raftar jaha ek or iski strength hai wahi iski sabse badi weakness bhi hai, 11.48 pm pe khun hua aur 5.15 am pe katil pakda bhi Gaya sense hi nahi banata as isme sab ke bich me 5 ghante me jo kuch hua hai wo 5din wala masala hai. Arav aur Vivek jaise characters me depth ka abhav hai. Overall it was a good story but had a potential to be a lot better.
Waqt Ke Us Paar (Romance/Thriller)
Story Review: Ek emotional aur thrill se bharpur story jo border paar ki sachchai, war, wafadari, vishwasghat aur Prem ko darshati hai. Story ka background Kashmir aur mainly LOCaur uspar Bane tanav par adharit hai, story Caption Abeer aur ISI general ki beti ki mulakat se shuru hoti hai jo dushman ke Ghar se bhagkar Bharat aati hai, kahani me bahut kuch hai jo aapko sochne par majbur karta hai, sajish hai balidan hai, writer ne is kahani ko bahut sundar tarike se Racha hai Pros: kahani ka mahol iski setting kafi prabhavshali hai aur ekdum real lagti hai, main characters ko kafi achi tarah se gadha gaya hai, unki bhavnaye uska emotional state bahut khubi ke sath explore Kiya gaya hai. Story me suspense aur twists ki layering bhi kafi badhiya hai sath hi dialogues bhi swabhavik aur prabhavshali lagte hai. Iske alawa war jaise subject ko story me bahut sahi integrate kiya gaya hai iski plotline narration aur language ki baat kare to language cinematic aur kuch kuch jagho par emotional hai jisse story padhte huye film dekhne ka feel aata hai. Cons: story ka heavy focus main characters par hai lekin secondary characters bhi utne hi important hote hai jo yaha overshadow ho jate hai aur one dimensional sa feel dete hai sath hi story ki pace kayi jagah par dhimi pad jati hai khaskar emotional scenes me wahi action aur mission scenes me technical detailing ki Kami mehsus Hoti hai. Khan aur rathore ki bonding ko thoda aur expansive frame diya ja sakta tha jisse unke sath aur gehra connect Banta Overall ye ek behtarin romance thriller hai or let's day military drama hai jo padhne Wale ko and tak bandhe rakhta hai, a great read
MERI MALKIN KI KHILONA (BDSM/Erotica)
Story Review: A provocative narrative centred around Monica, a college girl drawn into the world of BDSM and submission by her interactions with her senior muskan. Story is set in a college exploring themes of sexual awakening tackling sexual themes very well . Pros: Kahani BDSM ke theme ko bahut badhiya tarike se explore karti hai aur Monica ka character arc writer ne bahut badhiya tarike se detail manner me likha hai, uska transformation detailed hai jisse reader use sahi se samajh pata hai. Plot chosen was good but execution... Cons: why you have to write only in capitals. It hurts while reading. As I said plot badhiya choose Kiya hai lekin execution me maat kha gaye, language me kafi inconsistency hai sath hi bahut jyada grammatical errors hai jo story ko sahi se explore hi nahi karne dete hai, story clearly lacks good narration and pace. Story had potential it could have been better
Wife (Sci-fi/thriller)
Story Review: Man what a brilliant story. Fucking Marvelous. A bold audacious genre bending narrative that merges psychology drama with science fiction with an erotic touch. Story follows vikrant, a man with traumatic marriage and childhood which promotes him to create a technology for multiversal travel allowing him to seek a perfect wife across parallel earths. What begins with a normal story about a abusive and toxic relationship unfolds into a multidimensional psychological thriller which ek absolutely amezing. Pros: The story demonstrates and innovative narrative structure by utilising parallel timelines and recurring motives to create a cyclical and thought provoking experience effectively blending psychological drama therapy session realism and speculative science fiction, the protagonist is presented as a complex and multi layer character whose emotional and psychological unravelling are decected with careful details adding depth to the story. The repeated use of mirror dialogue across universal are clear plotting reveals strong structural awareness why the submarine of familiar troops transforming the story from apparent Rama into a high considered multi-vours in thriller exam bending and consistently keeps The reader engaged and surprised. Cons: there are some pacing issues in the middle of the story and some grammatical and spelling mistakes at some places apart from these everything seems fine.
Taboo (Incest)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for Rape Content.
A white Ship with Red sail (Romance)
Story Review: A brilliantly written romantic tragedy centred around a wealthy merchant Anurag and an empathetic soul Aarshi, a Lighthouse operators daughter. Set in a port town the story cronicals love at first sight encounter, Anurag's determination to fulfil Aarshi's dying wish for a toy or for to see a white ship with red sail. The story explores the theme of love, hope against despair and the inevitably of loss. The climax leaves you saddened which I think is biggest strength of this narrative as not every story is meant for a happy ending. Great approach. Pros: The story excells in creating a rich atmosphere and elicits very rich emotions, particularly in the relationship between Anurag and Aarshi, Anurag is a well developed protagonist and the language used was superb, the lyrical poetic prose is beautiful and effective and the central symbolism of the sea and ship is very strong. Cons: The story leans on familiar romantic tropes which makes it predictable at points, the plotline though brilliant but predictable which lessens the overall impact of the story. Aarshi's characterization while it's sympathetic and you feel connected to it feels somewhat idealized and nuanced compared to anurag and some scenes are overly descriptive they could have been shorter. Overall it was a great read.
वेवफा बुलबुल (Adultery with no sex scene)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP content.
किसकी गलती, दोषी कौन (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Kashi nagri me ghatit hoti ek khubsurat kahani jo Prem, Daya aur seva ke bhavo ko bahut khubi ke sath darshati hai, kahani Sumer aur unke jivan ke ird gird ghumti hai aur uske jivan me ghati ek dukhad ghatna ke bare me hai. Kahani bhavnatmak rup se kafi samruddh hai aur padhne walo ko bhagya aur kismat ke maayne samjhati hai. Pros : Kahani me writer ne kafi saaf hindi ka prayog kiya hai jisme kahi bhi koi vartani ki galti nahi hai, narration bhi ekdum seamless hai jisse readers Sumer ki duniya se apne aap ko connect kar pate hai. Sumer ka character bhi kafi behtar tarike se develop kiya gaya hai jo ekdum relatable lagta hai. Cons: Kahani engaging hai but predictable hai, iske title se hi isme kya hoga iska andaja lag jata hai, kahani apne settings ke discription pe jyada focus karti hai apart from story aur kahani me bahut kuch ho sakta tha lekin bahut jyada speed me nipta diya gaya aisa laga. Overall it was a good read but could have been better
Ek cyber katha (Sci-fi thriller)
Story Review: An engaging fast paced thriller story of a talented hacker Aditya who stumbles upon a dangerous hiest plan of an international crime syndicate lead by the villain and then what follows is Aditya's attempt to neutralize it. A satisfying fast paced read on cyber crime theme. Pros: The language is easy, accessible and relatable especially for younger readers. The plot line is intriguing, A young hacker taking on powerful criminal organisation. Story also follows a clear linear structure without much twists and turns that makes it easy to follow. Cons: Story is way too fast, the plot had a lot of potential to develop it into a banger but goes in vain. Though engaging, plotline is predictable as we can anticipate what will be the end of it. And then one of the biggest con is very less dialogues just paragraphs of what is happening, it does not help story's depth but rather makes it dull and boring. Characters are too at surface level, lacking sufficient depth to understand them. While narration is clear it is just telling rather than showing. Which lessens the impact. Overall it was a good read but could have been better.
Chanakya: Akhand Bharat (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: A retelling of a classic story of Chanakya and how he shaped the future of Bharat. Story shuru hoti hai chanakya ke bachpan se early days se jaha wo ek apman aur anyay ko dekhte hai aur ek naye Bharat ko banane ka pran lete hai aur apne pran ko purn karte hai Pros: Language and narration is simple and easy to understand. The plot follows a classic compelling arc, anyay par nyay ki Vijay. Characters are well written and established. The story is structured well with clear start and end. Cons: Predictable and somewhat known story which has nothing much to offer apart from things already known to a majority due to TV shows and books. Story is way to fast as events happening too quickly before you understand them. It is just an another adaptation of Chanakya's story nothing much. Overall a good read
Ek Nayi Shuruaat (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: What the hell this man. Ye story hai ya yu kahu ye kissa kya hai aur kyu hai iske liye to pros aur cons me bhi nahi utra jayega kyuki kuch hai hi nahi, ek shadi huyi nav dampati ko goli lagi aur jab unki aankh khuli unke paas ek bachcha tha. Kya hua kyu hua kuch bhi nahi hai story me, na clear beginning na clear end. This is your 4th entry in the contest which makes this a non-competing story but that doesn't mean you post garbage. Wetake this contest very seriously sir. The 3 points are for your efforts to write this much otherwise the story had nothing to offer.
जीवो का करुण कद्रन (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
Ek Alien (comedy/Non Erotic)
Story Review: story offers a unique narrative of intergalactic marriage jaha ek ladke ki shadi ek alien se hoti hai and everything centres around it. Pros: the plotline is unique and this is the only positive in this story. Cons: Story had a lot of things to offer but aisa laga writer ko bas contest me majak karna tha. Na clear shuruwat hai na ant bas Alien se shadi ho gayi kyu huyi kaise huyi alien kaise aayi kitna kuch ho sakta tha isme but alas. Dialogues language everything was offbeat. Just another timepass story by author which had potential
Andheri Dehleej (Horror)
Story Review: A chilling horror story which perfectly serves its purpose. Set into a classic haunted haveli scenario with terrifying twists. Story Rohan hi hai jo kho jata hai aur apne aap ko ek purani haveli ki dehleej par pata hai jaha wo haveli use hamesha hamesha ke liye bandhak bana leti hai, trap kar leti hai. Pros: the language used is very simple and easy to understand which is a good point, narration was good, story maintain its flow thoroughly. The chilling atmosphere of the haveli is described very well that you can visualise the setting. The story maintains a brisk pace as soon as Rohan enters the haveli. Suspense building, plotline as also positive. Cons: while story moves at a brisk pace it is too fast to provide proper time to develop the characters in it. Story lacks character and narrative depth. It had unique concept and if given proper time it should have been a splendid story but just misses the mark. Overall it was a great short horror story
पुनर्मिलन (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Ek behtarin old style heartwarming story. Kahani Anu ki hai ek padhi likhi ladki jiski shadi jindadil raju se hoti hai aur jab use naukri lagti hai ghamand kicks in, aur fir wahi hota hai to aksar kahaniyo me hota hai ek partner ke ego ke chalte man mutao fir algao aur end me donokawapis se mil jana, kahani purana trope follow karti hai fir bhi refreshing lagti hai aur dil chhu jati hai jo saadgi, majbut rishton ki Jeet aur achhai ke guno ko darshati hai. Pros : Language and narration is too good and easy to understand and the story maintains a good flow throughout the narrative. Anu ka character jis hisab se likha gaya hai wo kahani ko jaruri gehrai pradan karta hai aur ye story readers ke emotions jagane me puri tarah se kamiyab hoti hai aap Raju aur Anu ke rishte ko feel karte ho wo sath ho is bare me sochne lagte ho. Cons: Kahani ka sabse bada negative point iska predictable hona hi hai kyuki plotline unique aur nayi nahi nahi aisi kahaniya humne kayi baar padhi hai aur padhte huye end ka andaja lagana aasaan ho jata hai. Dusri baat ye ki kahani kuch jagah inconsistent ho jati hai aur bahut fast ho jati hai, kahani kehne ka andaz kayi jagah aisa hai jaise bas kya hua bata diya gaya ho na ki ghatnao ko dikhaya gaya ho, aapke paas word limit thi kahani ko aap aur behtar tarike se explore kar sakte the. Overall it was a good read.
पीपल की चुडैल (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP content.
मुक्ति (Non-Erotic)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP content.
जिस्म की गंध (Drama)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
Inamlrato (Non-Erotic/Romance/Drama)
Story Review: A contemporary social drama that plunges into life of teddy tokas blending a emotional world of family rupture, love, self doubt and healing set with backdrop of legal battles and personal trauma. Story explores aftermath of failed marriage and isolation of teddy very well. Inamorato crafts a rich experiential arc spanning family estrangement and romantic miscommunication. Pros: Great plot choice. The plot chosen is very good having a lot to tell and too much to explore. It tackles the complexity of divorce, gender relations family hierarchy very well. The conversations in the story are believable and realistic capturing how people really talk. Characters are well written and crafted especially of teddy's. Cons: Though the plot choice is good it is too vast making it hard to capture in a short story, there are way too much things happening in the story which makes it fast and a bit confusing too. The narrative loses its grip due to this and sudden shifts in locations, scenes does not help to understand the story clearly. Language used is good but narration is flawed and you can feel it while reading and teddy is mentioned as tobby sometimes. Overall it was a good read
फ्लैट नंबर 126 (Romance)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
Baba Golu (non erotic/comedy)
Story Review: one more story from writer which does not make any sense. It was meant to be a light hearted satirical comedy but fails as not able to generate any humour. Story follows golu an unemployed guy and his journey to become a viral baba giving gyan online. Pros: The plot was unique and a little bit of effort could have made it a good comedy story. Cons: underdeveloped plot. Non sense dialogues. Weak narration. No clear start or end. The list goes on and on. Writing comedy is a serious business buddy. We'll tried. Good plot but wasted
Dreams (Thriller)
Story Review: A compelling psychological thriller that have elements such as murder mystery, betrayel and what not. Kahani Vikram Rathod ke ird gird ghumti hai jo hai to ek IT developer lekin uski life turn leti hai jab use ek murder ke liye frame kiya jata hai, Vikram ko sapne aate hai 'Dreams' jisme wo police officer hota hai aur usi crime ko investigate karta hai jisme wo fasa hua hota hai. It is revealed as memories from parallel world. Story craftfully builds necessary suspense and intersting twists and turns. Pros : unique plotline is a major plus for this story kahani kuch hatke hai isiliye padhne me maja aata hai, sath hi aap reality aur dream me difference bata pate ho thanks to color and fonts. Main character strong hai hai well written hai sath hi narration ka flow bhi bahut badhiya tarike se maintain kiya gaya hai. Sath hi end bhi jordar hai jaha parallel world ki theory reveal hoti hai. Cons: End jaha jordar hai wahi wo ek abrupt feel bhi deta hai, most of the things remain unanswered. Dreams kyu aa rahe hai, kya ho raha hai kyu ho raha hai, iska kahi bhi kisi bhi tarah ka koi explanation nahi hai aur ye kahani ko clueless bana deta hai jaha main motive hi clear nahi ho pata, antagonist fully developed nahi hai, thoda aur gehrai se plot par kaam karte to it could have been better. Overall a good read.
सौतेला (Non Erotic)
Story Review: Ek emotional hriday vidarak kahani jo sautele rishton ke jatil aur aksar jo dukhad hote hai in ayamo ko darshati hai. Kafi bhavnatmak aur emotional story hai, Vikram ka hospital pahuchna, Radha ke liye uske man me bhaav jaagna, purane atit ke panne, aur kahani ka ant jaha atit ke taar vartaman se judte hai sab kuch behad badhiya dhang se prastut kiya gaya hai. Pros: kahani ki sanrachna kafi prabhavi hai, vartaman ki ghatnaye fir atit ke panne khulna kafi prabhavi hai aur aage kya hoga ye padhne par majbur karta hai. Writer story me emotional depth banane me purn rup se safal huye hai, aap kirdaro ke man me umad rahi bhavnao ko mehsus kar sakte hai, characters bhi well developed hai aur language aur narration easy hai aur maintained flow ke sath kahani ki gati banaye rakhte hai aur iski pakad dhimi nahi padne dete. Sath hi kahani ka ant bhi prabhavshali hai. Cons: kahani kuch kuch jagah par thodi si khichi huyi lagti hai sath hi kuch plot elements predictable hai jaise end prabhavshali hai lekin uska purvanuman lagaya ja sakta hai, Radha ke life se related kuch bhavnatmak pehlu repetition ka ehsas dete hai jaise ek hi tarah ki ghatnao ki Radha kayi baar shikar huyi ho. Overall it was a great read.
Laung Daana (Horror/Thriller/Romance)
Story Review: A supernatural love story set in the town of Orchha perfectly blending history, folklore and modern day relationship. Story follows aarav and diya as they become entangled with the spirit of a bundeli princess making diya a medium. This is both a ghost story and a story of love that transcends beyond time. Pros: Great world building, the descriptions of Orchha set the tone perfect for the story, the combination of romance supernatural elements and mystery add a perfect touch making it an unique plotline. The language and narration was good throughout the story with no spelling mistakes at all. Story maintains its pace thoroughly. Cons: the story has a very limited backstory making the impact lessen. The characters were good but they lacked depth and readers can't connect with them. There are very less dialogues only big paragraphs, see conversations, dialogues help story move forward and makes you connect with reader which this one clearly lacks. Overall it was great read
चौबे जी का लास्ट वोट (Non Erotic)
Story Review: Ek behad hi marmik, rochak aur prernadayak kahani jo bharat ke loktantra ko aur swatantrata senaniyo ke yogdan ko behad bhavnatmak andaj me prastut karti hai. Kahani Viran hote gaon chandupur aur uske aakhri bashinde Kamta Prasad chaube ji ki hai jinki antim saas loktantra ka pratik ban jati hai. Kahani sirf ek vote ki ahmiyat ko bahut badhiya tarike se bayan karti hai aur batati hai ke kaise ek budhe senani ka vote unka jivan pure desh aur yuva pidhi ke liye prerna ban jata hai Pros: Kahani ki language bahut saral hai aur samajhne me aasaan hai sath hi kahi bhi vartani ki koi truti nahi dikhai deti. Narration bhi sahi hai jo ek flow ko barabar maintain kare rakhta hai. Plotline badhiya hai aur kahani ka har kirdar apna kaam bahut badhiya dhang se karta hai. Sath hi chaubey ji ki dincharya aur gaon ka chitran bahut sahi kiya gaya hai Cons: ye un chuninda kahaniyo me se ek hai jisme kuch kami dhundhna mushkil kaam hai. Bas itna hai ke kahani me kuch kuch jagho par samvaado ki kami mehsus hoti hai, kuch chize bas bata di gayi hai dikhai nahi gayi hai. Always show, don't tell. Ye to kahani likhne ke basic hai. Sath hi ant ki or jaate huye kahani predictable ho jati hai Overall it was a great read
एक कप बदलाव (Non Erotic)
Story Review: Ek behtarin aur prernadayak Kahani Jo samaj ke aam nagrik ke sangharsh asantosh aur samajik jagrukta ko bariki se ukerti hai. Jabalpur ke ek chaurahe ki chai ki dukaan ko kendra banakar writer ne berojgari bhrashtachar aur rajniti ke khokhlepan jaise mudde ko kahani mein bahut acchi tarah se piroya hai. Kahani local level ki politics ko bahut badhiya dhang se pesh karti hai Pros: Plotline unique hai kuch hatke hai aur likha bhi usi dhang se gaya hai sath hi kahani kayi logo ke liye khas kar berojgar yuvao ke liye kafi relatable hai aur jin samasyao ko ya ghatnao ko kahani me dikhaya gaya hai wo ekdum vastavik lagte hai. Bhasha aur samvaad shaili sahaj hai jo kahani ke parivesh ko puri tarah jivant banate hai sath hi kahani ka flow bhi natural hai jo reader ko end tak engage rakhta hai. Cons: aisi kahaniyo ka ant kya hota ye predict karna mushkil nahi hota hai aur yahi kahani ke impact ko kam kar deta hai. Kahani ka pura focus Biraj par hai aise me kafi kirdaro ko khulne ka maukanahi milta hai jo kahani ko aur rochak bana sakta tha sath hi antagonist kafi asani se pakad meaajate hai jabki asal system me aisa nahi hota hai. Ise better karte to kahani aur relatable aur vastavik lagti. Overall it was a good read
Ek gufa ka raaz (Thriller/Adventure)
Story Review: A story that skillfully blends science fiction and psychological adventure into an atmospheric tale set in the hill of pachmarhi. The story follows five geology students on an academic expedition that takes a supernatural turn when a rockslide reveals a hidden cave. Inside, they find glowing, cave paintings, a strange fossil of unknown origin, and experience visceral, time-bending visions of the land’s tumultuous past. The tension escalates with the mysterious disappearance (and return) of Tanya, raising questions about time, memory, and the boundaries of the natural world. The plot ties together archaeological intrigue, character-driven emotion, and unsettling, open-ended mystery with an immersive style. Pros: great world building. The descriptions of pachmarhi and the ambience of cave is described beautifully. The narration is smooth and story moves forward with fine pacing making it an interesting read. The integration of geology history and scientific elements is good. Cons: some readers might find the ending of this unsatisfyingly open. A lot of questions remains unanswered which leads to reader frustration. The weak and abrupt ending is the weakest point. Also story loses its grip in the middle which lessens the overall impact Overall it was a good read but could have been better
बाँस के जंगल में (Thriller)
Story Review: Ek bahut hi prerak kahani jo ek documentary maker Kavya ke najriye se baster ke aadivasi, jungle aur vaha ki lokkatha aur paryavaran jaise muddo ko gahrai ke sath sunati hai. Kahani rahasya aur lok katha ke roop se shuru hokar ant mein samajik jatiltao se takrakti hai. Isme modern technique andhvishwas manviya pida aur naitik dvandv ka anutha mishran ham padh sakte hai. Kahani ka ant bhi powerful aur prerak hai Pros: writer ne kahani ka atmosphere bahut badhiya tarike se nirman kiya hai bans ka jungle baster ka mahaul uska rahasya, chuppa darr vahan ki sanskriti ko bahut acchi tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani ka theme unique hai aur bhasha ekadam natural hai jo aapko kahin bhi bore nahin hone deti hai. Kahani Ko padhte hue lagta hai ki writer ne plot ko bahut acchi tarah se justify Kiya hai. Cons: Kahani padhte huye aap aisa feel karte hai ki kahani ke kai hisso me thoda aur detailing ki jarurat thi kuch kuch hisse is vajah se ahani ke fike ho jaate hai aur usse kahani ka empact jo hai vo kam ho jata hai. Kahani ki shuruaat damdaar hai lekin end ki or badhate badhate kahani thoda sa predictable mod le leti hai aur aage kya hoga pata chal jata hai sath hi kahani mein romanch ki, takraav ki kami si mahsus hoti hai aisa lagta hai ki climax bahut hi easy hai aur sab kuch ekadam smoothly ho raha hai Overall it was a good read.
हनुमानगढ़ हवेली (horror/thriller)
Story Review: well written mystery story jo Ujjain ki ek purani haveli ke ird gird ghumti hai. Virasat, atit ke shrap, parivar ki ekta, sahas aur ant mein mukti jaise vishayo ko kahani apne readers ko bayan karti hai kahani me lok kathao ka paramparao ka bhavnaon ka bahut behtarin mishran hai jisse ye na sirf jigyasa jagati hai balki kk sukhd bhavnatmak santosh bhi deti hai. Writer has done a good job writing this one. Pros : Kahani ka narration ekdum on point hai aur kahani ke rythm bahut badhiya tarike se barkrar rakhta hai aur readers ko kahani ke vatavaran me kho jaane per majbur kar deta hai plot line unique hai plot ki sanrachna, shuruaat middle aur end ekadam perfect fit hota hai story ka parat dar parat khulate rahana readers ke man me utsukta banaye rakhta hai jo ki ek bahut badhiya point hai. Kahani ke characters bhi sahi se developed hai jinse aap connected feel karte ho. Cons: Jahan kahani ka narration satik hai vahi kahani kuch hisso me khinchi hui si pratit hoti hai wahi aap kahani mein aage hone wali ghatnayen easily predict kar sakte hai sath hi ek baat jo maine notice ki hai ki kahani ke samvado me na gahrai ki emotional touch ki ek hakiisi Kami feel hoti hai jo iske overall impact ko kam kar deti hai Baki it was good read
चांदनी चौक चले चन्नू भैया (comedy/non erotic)
Story Review: A good and entertaining light hearted story jo dilchasp bhi hai aur manoranjak bhi. Kahani chhote shahro se nikalkar bade shahro me jaane wale logon ki chunautiyo per prakash dalti hai sath hi channu bhaiya ke madhyam se saral bhojan aur dil se bane swad ke mahatva ko bhi darshati hai iske sath sath branding aur social networking aaj ki date me kisi bhi business ko success karne ke liye kitna jaruri hai ye bhi batati hai story entertaining hai aur dialogues real feel dete hai. Pros: story ki language saral hai aur easy to understand hai sath hi jo premise develop kiya hai writer ne wo ise interesting banata hai. Channu bhaiya and team ka character development sahi hai and you can feel connected to them. Narration was on point too. Cons: sometimes it feel over melodramatic :D sath hi ending aisa feel hota hai jaise bahut rush hua hai iske sath ki kuch kuch jagah kai dialogues thoda gadbadaye se lagte hai.. what I feel is ke is kahani ke topic ko aur behtar andaz me chhua ja sakta tha aur pesh kiya ja sakta tha. Overall it was an entertaining read.
मुलाक़ात (Romance)
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
..Cubicle : A Sky Within.. (Non erotic)
Story Review: An introspective story that captures the emotional struggle of a young professional trapped in monotonous routine of corporate life. Story takes you through the themes of unfulfilled dreams, office politics, middle class aspirations and the courage to break free in search of true passion. Though it's first person narration but it reflects on the universal dilemma of balancing societal expectations with inner desires. A well written and heartfelt story. Pros: the story is written in evocative Hindi language blending poetic lines with conversational tone which is very good. The narration was steady, starting from early excitement to being tired of monotonous routine you can see whole journey of protagonist. The plot is realistic and connects with readers emotionally as it shows life of almost every guy trapped in corporate world. Cons: The story has pacing issues, kahi ekdum rajdhani ki speed to kahi passenger train si lagti hai. Casual story telling and certain shifts to poetic prose narrative ki consistency break karta hai. Characters bas surface level tak hi simit reh jate hai writer ne story itni jaldi finish kar di ke depth me Jane ka mauka hi nahi diya. But overall it was a good read.
..Raftaar Jaanlewa h.. (Non Erotic/Thriller)
Story Review: A haunting and poetic short story that explore the fragile boundary between life and death through the metaphor of high speed travel on lonely highway. The story uses real and symbolic elements which is a speeding biker a wounded butterfly and mysterious spectral women to reflect on themes of mortality, fate and acceptance. The story creates and atmospheric and contemplative mood, it leaves readers pondering the consequences of reckless speed and ethereal nature of existenc. Pros: as writer's previous one this story too have a poetic prose that enhances the story telling in a way. The first person narration is good as you dwell into the eyes of protagonist. Plot is short and consise and almost cinematic in structure. Cons: limited to no backstory and context. Bas ek message dene ke liye likhi gayi story lagi ye. Jisme bas raftar jaanleva hai is line ko justify kiya gaya hai aur kuch nahi. Character development ka to mauka hi nahi aaya isme kyuki jyada kuch explore hi nahi hua hai. Plot badhiya tha isko emotionally aur behtar likha ja sakta tha Overall good read.
UNIVERSAL JAIL (Fantasy)
Story Review: A good parody kind of story written by having XF members as main character and is about an Alien attack, an overworldly jail and what not. Kafi chaotic atmosphere banaya hai aapne story me yet it was entertaining. Pros: story ka language sahi hai entertaining hai sath hi narration bhi mast hai.characters diverse hai and dialogues were funny. Kahani throughout the narrative fast paced hai aur high energy maintain karti hai jisse padhte time reader bore nahi hota hai, breaking the forth wall and self aware story telling is appealing. Cons: kahani me itne sare, ya yu kahu lagbhag sabhi active members ko add kiya gaya hai aur har kisi ke hisse me koi na koi line hai, kuch kaam ki kuch bekaam ki aur is sab me kahani unnecessarily lambi ho gayi, khichi si lagne lagi aur main kahani aur uska plot hi kho gaya, it just ended up as an fictional banter between xf members who were given specific roles in this narrative.Kam character aur relatable xf situation ke sath kahani aur entertaining ho sakti thi, overall good read.
PART - III
ये मुरदों का गाँव (Satire/Non Erotic)
Written by- Chutiyadr
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: Kahani aaj ke samaj ki kadwi.sachchai ko batati huyi ek teekha vyang hai jo hamare samajh ki girti stithi aur paryavaran se jude sawalo par ek gehri chubhan chhod jata hai. Ye story hame batati hai ke kaise hamari hi hypocrisy aur hamare bich panap rahe bhrashtachar ne Desh ki harit dharti ko ek digital utopia bana Diya hai, har character har scene har dialogue ek aaine ki tarah hai jo aaj ki sachchai se aap ko avgat karati hai. Dattatray Babu ka sangharsh aur samaj ka paryavaran ke prati durlakshit rehna bahut bakhubi dikhaya gaya hai. Pros : Storyline brilliantly sarcastic hai, jis tarah se ye story apni baat rakhti hai wo wakayi lajwab hai. Dattatray Babu ka sangharsh, unka umda character aur ant me unki hoti haar personal feel hoti hai, kahani ka vyang iska Satire teekha hai lekin realistic hai. Language is simple yet hitting, narration was too on point, story start to end ek lay me chalti hai aur reader se jud jati hai Cons: story me kayi jagah kuch elements hai jo repetitive se lagte hai jo bas kahani ki lambai badhane ka kaam karte hai, kuch dialogues bhi jinhe aur crisp kiya ja sakta tha. Characters other than dattatray Babu feels one dimensional, jo jyada kuch impact nahi daal pate hai, they lack purpose and depth as well, Overall it was a good read and close to today's reality.
"पट" (horror/thriller)
Written by- Raj_Sharma
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: A spine chilling horror/thriller story set in a landscape of amjhara valley. Story follows Rajat jo ek archeological expert hai and his journey to research ancient temples and ruins in different scheduled areas. What begins as a scientific curiosity truns into a supernatural experience for rajat, blending old stories and suspense. Discovering tragic tale of king and rup kanwar and closed doors, writer skillfully combines supernatural elements and thrill in the story. Pros: Atmospheric settings and great descriptions. Kahani shuru se hi mahol banane me kamiyab rahi hai, jagho aur vatavaran ke vivid description aise batate hai jaise sab kuch aankho ke samne ghatit ho raha ho, kahani ka tone ekdum sahi se set Kiya gaya hai. Climax tak kahani kabhi bhi aisi nahi lagti ke uski pakad dhili pad Rahi ho. Narration on point hai ek flow maintain karne chalta hai, story likhne me Jo poetic aur lyrical language writer ne use ki hai wo kahani ka ek aur plus point hai Cons: kahani jaha ek or detailed hai wahi iska pace bahut slow hai, specially start aur middle section me kuch description chote kiye ja sakte the jisse kahani aur aur gati milti , sath hi kahani me kayi unnecessary chizo ko overly describe Kiya gaya hai jisse main chizo par se focus hat jata hai aise me rajat ya genda Singh jaise characters ko fully explore karne ka mauka hi nahi mila, sath ji sabse bada weak point story ka uska end hai jo ekdum hi abrupt hai aur totally unsatisfied hai. Rup kunwar ke past ko us storyline ko aap start aur middle ke kuch section cut kar explore karte to kahani aur badhiya banti and end satisfied hota kyuki ending me work required tha, also ye har jagah 'ji' ko shayad 'ju' likha hai or I might be wrong kyuki Raja ju thoda different sound karta hai. Overall it was a great read but could have been better. It has the potential but just missed the mark.
Bak-bakchodi (Comedy/Erotica)
Written by- manikmittleme07
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: The story is raucous and over the top sexual comedy with the twist of action and redemption. Kahani Mumbai me set hai jo do ladkiyo par mainly focus karti hai jinki life thodi chaotic hai aur isi chakkar me ye ek misadventure me fas jati hai and then what follows is a road trip, accident, visit to shady night club and then get caught into human trafficking ring jisme se inhe do bhai bachate hai, story ka end comedic hai but satisfying hai jaha dono ladkiyo ko dono bhaiyo ke sath stability mil jati hai. Writer ne slapstick comedy ka bahut badhiya tarike se story me upyog Kiya hai. Pros: kahani ko sabse badi strength iska humour hi hai, comedy is a serious business and write has done a commendable job in this aspect. Story ka tone vibrant hai aur flawed protagonists story me jaan daal dete hai aur ek near to real wala feel dete hai. Story ki language uske tone se hisab se ekdum sahi fit hoti hai and narration was good too. Itne jyada characters hote huye bhi sabse badhiya baat ye hai ke padhte huye kahi bhi koi confusion nahi hoti. Cons: Jaha story me itna kuch ho raha ho waha kuch chize chhut bhi jati hai jaise is kahani se emotional connect totally gayab hai. All characters are explored on surface level, unne kahi koi depth hi najar nahi aati hai isse story one dimensional ban jati hai, story ka narrative inconsistent hai jo slapstick comedy, action aur romance ke bich jhulta rehta hai jisse koi bhi element sahi se integrate nahi ho pata. Apart from these overall story badhiya hai as it was a wild ride and refreshing to read a sexual comedy story.
लवचुंबक (Adultery)
Written by- Rathodka8inch
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Kahani sonali ki hai jo apni garmiyo ko chhuttiyo me apni saheli ke sath uske mamakegaonjati hai aur waha use milta hai indrajit jo ki ek shadi shuda insan aur sonali uski or attract hoti hai and then one event leads to another and what follows is a sexual encounter between sonali and indrajit. Story explores the themes of lust, guilt and moral conflict and writer has done a good job crafting this narrative. Pros: Great language and well narrated. Sex stories me jyada kuch bolne hota nahi hai siway iske ke use likha kaise gaya hai aur yaha aapne sensual scenes ko, waha tak le jane wale scenes ko events ko bahut badhiya tarike se likha hai. Language is simple and easy to understand. Sonali me emotional turmoil ko uski physical longing ko bahut badhiya tarise se capture kiya gaya hai. Sonali ka character arc bhi bahut impressive hai sath hi indrajit ka character story me charm bhar deta hai, descriptive sensual scenes story ke charm aur aur badha dete hai. Cons:Inconsistent narrative flow and pacing is a major flow, the story alternates between detailed descriptions and rushed sequences leading to uneven pacing at some places. While jana sonali ka character theek tarah se developed hai baki characters like indrajit and juhi feels surface level lacking depth. Sath hi kayi jagah grammatical aur spelling errors bhi hai. Overall story has a engaging premise and was a good read
सीता फिर अग्नि में (Thriller)
Written by- Vakharia
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: Kahani treta yug ki Sita aur aaj ki siya ke madhyam se stree ke atmasamman, sangharsh aur nyay ki ladai ko prastut karti hai. Kahani ek imandar IAS Arav aur uski social worker wife siya par kendrit hai jise ramayan kaal se pratikaatmak drishyo se joda gaya hai. Jab arav gov ke ek curroption ko expose karne ki koshish karta hai tab uska transfer ho jata hai wahi siya apne leval par isse ladti rehti hai tab tak jab tak use ranvir malik dwara kidnap nahi Kiya jata jiske baad arav apne mitra ki madad se use bachata hai aur ant hota hai siya ki agnipariksha se jab arav uspar sandeh karta hai, story ramayan ki ghatnao ko aaj ke yug ke sath bahut badhiya tarike se jodti hai aur sochne par majbur kar deti hai. Pros: Kahani ka parallel structure kafi adhbhut hai aur ye ek bahut hi innovative approach hai aur writer ise likhne me bakhubi kamiyab huye hai. Ramayan ke samay ki aur aaj ke samay ki samantaye bahut badhiya tarike se buni huyi hai. Characters bhi sahi se develop kiye Gaye hai khas taur par siya ka kirdar, story have a thematic depth and good pacing and suspense. Kahani ki gati badhiya hai khas kar kaliyug le ghatnakramo me. I liked the open end which hints towards a new start which is somewhat a satisfactory ending leaving readers to think further Cons: sabse bada yahi hai ke bhai aapne Ramayan jaise mahakavya ki Puri ghatnaye utha kar hi story me daal di, we are Xforum do not encourage that. Kahani ke liye bhale hi wo sahi Lage lekin ye baat batane ka approach thoda alag ho sakta tha, sath hi kahani ka narration kafi weak hai. Uneven pacing ke chalte kahani kayi jagho par boring si ya predictable lagti hai. Bhasha sahi hai lekin kahani me kayi jagah wo natural na lagte huye translated lagti hai jo kahani padhne ka maja kharab kar deta hai sath hi villain ka character bhi one dimensional hai use aur explore Kiya ja sakta tha. Overall it was a great read
Moonvale (Horror/Thriller)
Written by- Death Kiñg
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: A dark and chilling horror story set in town drowning in fear under the shadow of black hollow forest. Story follows Iris lowe and her children trying to survive but everything falls apart when children in moonvale starts vanishing on full moon nights. As the fear and suspicion grow the town turns up against iris blaming her for disappearances. And then what follows is a serious of tragic events and when it seems it can't get worse Iris estranged husband returns uncovering terrifying secrets rituals and a curse. The story builds a brutal shocking climax where there truth finally comes out and the children are at centre. It is haunting tale about broken families, brilliantly crafted. Pros: The story excells in creating a dark and immersive atmosphere with great sensory discriptions that establish the tone and setting. The pacing steadily builds the tension and the use of foreshadowing specially regarding Billy sets up plot twists perfectly. The story shows thematic depth exploring fear parania aur generational trauma. Horror elements are memorable. The plotline is well structured maintaining suspense. And sense of momentum as events escalates while the language is consistent enhancing the mood and readability throughout the narrative. Cons: The story have a heavy resilience on late exposition particularly through Matt's monologue which somewhat disrupts pacing. The question about how matt and Billy acquired their powers and performed rituals left under explained. Character shift like Matt turning into antagonist lacks buildup. Apart from the it was a superb story and worth read
Cuckquening (Adultery)
Written by- Labia
Rating – 7.25/10
Story Review: The story explores a complex narrative centred around pravara Amira and naima delving into the theme of morden relationship and personal desires in the context of urban tech driven environment. It portrays a descent into unconventional relationship dynamics specially cuckquening against the backdrop of Bengaluru it culture the narrative is character driven with a focus on psychological transformations. It's raw intensity makes it a bold and entertaining read. Pros: The story tackles modern relationship dynamics very well pravara's transformation from a loyal husband to a taboo driven man is well crafted adding psychological depth to his character, the authentic dialogues enhances interactions, the plot line narration maintains gripping momentum. the language is evocative especially in sensual scenes which is written is very detailed manner and are well crafted capturing raw desires of characters. Cons: The story struggles with inconsistent pacing issues as lenghthy exposition slow down the plot while some key scenes from story feels rushed. The characters of Amira and Naima lacks certain depth serving only as a reactive figures for Pravara's arc. There are some grammatical errors which disrupts readability. Apart from these overall it was an entertaining read
एक रात, एक हत्या, और एक राज़ (Thriller)
Written by- Daredevil420
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Story ek classic murder mystery hai jo new year party ke background me ghatit hoti hai, chanakyapuri ki ek alishan kothi me Arpita Malhotra ki hatya ho jati hai aur inspector Ishan par is gutthi ko suljhane ka jimma aata hai, kahani ka lagbhag kar kirdar shak ke ghere me hai aur jaise jaise investigation aage badhti hai, dhokha jalan badla blackmail ki parte khulne lagti hai, story ekdum twist filled hai aur ant tak reader ko badhe rakhne ki kshamta rakhti hai. Plotline dumdar hai but story was a hit n miss. Pros : Kahani ka pace impressive hai, shuru me huyi hatya aur fir usse jude surago ka dhire dhire ujagar hoga reader ko badhe rakhne me saksham hai. Plot twists kahani ko aur rochak bana dete hai aur readers ko alag alag disha me sochne majbur karte hai jisse jab end me asal katil ka pata chalta hai to uska impact badh jata hai, iske alawa kahani ka mahol aur. Bhasha saral hai lekin... Cons: jaha Bhasha saral hai wahi narration kafi weak hai, is kahani ki raftar jaha ek or iski strength hai wahi iski sabse badi weakness bhi hai, 11.48 pm pe khun hua aur 5.15 am pe katil pakda bhi Gaya sense hi nahi banata as isme sab ke bich me 5 ghante me jo kuch hua hai wo 5din wala masala hai. Arav aur Vivek jaise characters me depth ka abhav hai. Overall it was a good story but had a potential to be a lot better.
Waqt Ke Us Paar (Romance/Thriller)
Written by- Daredevil420
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: Ek emotional aur thrill se bharpur story jo border paar ki sachchai, war, wafadari, vishwasghat aur Prem ko darshati hai. Story ka background Kashmir aur mainly LOCaur uspar Bane tanav par adharit hai, story Caption Abeer aur ISI general ki beti ki mulakat se shuru hoti hai jo dushman ke Ghar se bhagkar Bharat aati hai, kahani me bahut kuch hai jo aapko sochne par majbur karta hai, sajish hai balidan hai, writer ne is kahani ko bahut sundar tarike se Racha hai Pros: kahani ka mahol iski setting kafi prabhavshali hai aur ekdum real lagti hai, main characters ko kafi achi tarah se gadha gaya hai, unki bhavnaye uska emotional state bahut khubi ke sath explore Kiya gaya hai. Story me suspense aur twists ki layering bhi kafi badhiya hai sath hi dialogues bhi swabhavik aur prabhavshali lagte hai. Iske alawa war jaise subject ko story me bahut sahi integrate kiya gaya hai iski plotline narration aur language ki baat kare to language cinematic aur kuch kuch jagho par emotional hai jisse story padhte huye film dekhne ka feel aata hai. Cons: story ka heavy focus main characters par hai lekin secondary characters bhi utne hi important hote hai jo yaha overshadow ho jate hai aur one dimensional sa feel dete hai sath hi story ki pace kayi jagah par dhimi pad jati hai khaskar emotional scenes me wahi action aur mission scenes me technical detailing ki Kami mehsus Hoti hai. Khan aur rathore ki bonding ko thoda aur expansive frame diya ja sakta tha jisse unke sath aur gehra connect Banta Overall ye ek behtarin romance thriller hai or let's day military drama hai jo padhne Wale ko and tak bandhe rakhta hai, a great read
MERI MALKIN KI KHILONA (BDSM/Erotica)
Written by- Hot_Monica
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: A provocative narrative centred around Monica, a college girl drawn into the world of BDSM and submission by her interactions with her senior muskan. Story is set in a college exploring themes of sexual awakening tackling sexual themes very well . Pros: Kahani BDSM ke theme ko bahut badhiya tarike se explore karti hai aur Monica ka character arc writer ne bahut badhiya tarike se detail manner me likha hai, uska transformation detailed hai jisse reader use sahi se samajh pata hai. Plot chosen was good but execution... Cons: why you have to write only in capitals. It hurts while reading. As I said plot badhiya choose Kiya hai lekin execution me maat kha gaye, language me kafi inconsistency hai sath hi bahut jyada grammatical errors hai jo story ko sahi se explore hi nahi karne dete hai, story clearly lacks good narration and pace. Story had potential it could have been better
Wife (Sci-fi/thriller)
Written by- Harshit1890
Rating – 8.5/10
Story Review: Man what a brilliant story. Fucking Marvelous. A bold audacious genre bending narrative that merges psychology drama with science fiction with an erotic touch. Story follows vikrant, a man with traumatic marriage and childhood which promotes him to create a technology for multiversal travel allowing him to seek a perfect wife across parallel earths. What begins with a normal story about a abusive and toxic relationship unfolds into a multidimensional psychological thriller which ek absolutely amezing. Pros: The story demonstrates and innovative narrative structure by utilising parallel timelines and recurring motives to create a cyclical and thought provoking experience effectively blending psychological drama therapy session realism and speculative science fiction, the protagonist is presented as a complex and multi layer character whose emotional and psychological unravelling are decected with careful details adding depth to the story. The repeated use of mirror dialogue across universal are clear plotting reveals strong structural awareness why the submarine of familiar troops transforming the story from apparent Rama into a high considered multi-vours in thriller exam bending and consistently keeps The reader engaged and surprised. Cons: there are some pacing issues in the middle of the story and some grammatical and spelling mistakes at some places apart from these everything seems fine.
Taboo (Incest)
Written by- Vinci
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for Rape Content.
A white Ship with Red sail (Romance)
Written by- Vinci
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: A brilliantly written romantic tragedy centred around a wealthy merchant Anurag and an empathetic soul Aarshi, a Lighthouse operators daughter. Set in a port town the story cronicals love at first sight encounter, Anurag's determination to fulfil Aarshi's dying wish for a toy or for to see a white ship with red sail. The story explores the theme of love, hope against despair and the inevitably of loss. The climax leaves you saddened which I think is biggest strength of this narrative as not every story is meant for a happy ending. Great approach. Pros: The story excells in creating a rich atmosphere and elicits very rich emotions, particularly in the relationship between Anurag and Aarshi, Anurag is a well developed protagonist and the language used was superb, the lyrical poetic prose is beautiful and effective and the central symbolism of the sea and ship is very strong. Cons: The story leans on familiar romantic tropes which makes it predictable at points, the plotline though brilliant but predictable which lessens the overall impact of the story. Aarshi's characterization while it's sympathetic and you feel connected to it feels somewhat idealized and nuanced compared to anurag and some scenes are overly descriptive they could have been shorter. Overall it was a great read.
वेवफा बुलबुल (Adultery with no sex scene)
Written by- Bulbul_Rani
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP content.
किसकी गलती, दोषी कौन (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Carry0
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: Kashi nagri me ghatit hoti ek khubsurat kahani jo Prem, Daya aur seva ke bhavo ko bahut khubi ke sath darshati hai, kahani Sumer aur unke jivan ke ird gird ghumti hai aur uske jivan me ghati ek dukhad ghatna ke bare me hai. Kahani bhavnatmak rup se kafi samruddh hai aur padhne walo ko bhagya aur kismat ke maayne samjhati hai. Pros : Kahani me writer ne kafi saaf hindi ka prayog kiya hai jisme kahi bhi koi vartani ki galti nahi hai, narration bhi ekdum seamless hai jisse readers Sumer ki duniya se apne aap ko connect kar pate hai. Sumer ka character bhi kafi behtar tarike se develop kiya gaya hai jo ekdum relatable lagta hai. Cons: Kahani engaging hai but predictable hai, iske title se hi isme kya hoga iska andaja lag jata hai, kahani apne settings ke discription pe jyada focus karti hai apart from story aur kahani me bahut kuch ho sakta tha lekin bahut jyada speed me nipta diya gaya aisa laga. Overall it was a good read but could have been better
Ek cyber katha (Sci-fi thriller)
Written by- Red ashoka
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: An engaging fast paced thriller story of a talented hacker Aditya who stumbles upon a dangerous hiest plan of an international crime syndicate lead by the villain and then what follows is Aditya's attempt to neutralize it. A satisfying fast paced read on cyber crime theme. Pros: The language is easy, accessible and relatable especially for younger readers. The plot line is intriguing, A young hacker taking on powerful criminal organisation. Story also follows a clear linear structure without much twists and turns that makes it easy to follow. Cons: Story is way too fast, the plot had a lot of potential to develop it into a banger but goes in vain. Though engaging, plotline is predictable as we can anticipate what will be the end of it. And then one of the biggest con is very less dialogues just paragraphs of what is happening, it does not help story's depth but rather makes it dull and boring. Characters are too at surface level, lacking sufficient depth to understand them. While narration is clear it is just telling rather than showing. Which lessens the impact. Overall it was a good read but could have been better.
Chanakya: Akhand Bharat (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Red ashoka
Rating – 6.5/10
Story Review: A retelling of a classic story of Chanakya and how he shaped the future of Bharat. Story shuru hoti hai chanakya ke bachpan se early days se jaha wo ek apman aur anyay ko dekhte hai aur ek naye Bharat ko banane ka pran lete hai aur apne pran ko purn karte hai Pros: Language and narration is simple and easy to understand. The plot follows a classic compelling arc, anyay par nyay ki Vijay. Characters are well written and established. The story is structured well with clear start and end. Cons: Predictable and somewhat known story which has nothing much to offer apart from things already known to a majority due to TV shows and books. Story is way to fast as events happening too quickly before you understand them. It is just an another adaptation of Chanakya's story nothing much. Overall a good read
Ek Nayi Shuruaat (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Red ashoka
Rating – 5/10
Story Review: What the hell this man. Ye story hai ya yu kahu ye kissa kya hai aur kyu hai iske liye to pros aur cons me bhi nahi utra jayega kyuki kuch hai hi nahi, ek shadi huyi nav dampati ko goli lagi aur jab unki aankh khuli unke paas ek bachcha tha. Kya hua kyu hua kuch bhi nahi hai story me, na clear beginning na clear end. This is your 4th entry in the contest which makes this a non-competing story but that doesn't mean you post garbage. Wetake this contest very seriously sir. The 3 points are for your efforts to write this much otherwise the story had nothing to offer.
जीवो का करुण कद्रन (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Satrangi muniya
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
Ek Alien (comedy/Non Erotic)
Written by- Red Ashoka
Rating – 6/10
Story Review: story offers a unique narrative of intergalactic marriage jaha ek ladke ki shadi ek alien se hoti hai and everything centres around it. Pros: the plotline is unique and this is the only positive in this story. Cons: Story had a lot of things to offer but aisa laga writer ko bas contest me majak karna tha. Na clear shuruwat hai na ant bas Alien se shadi ho gayi kyu huyi kaise huyi alien kaise aayi kitna kuch ho sakta tha isme but alas. Dialogues language everything was offbeat. Just another timepass story by author which had potential
Andheri Dehleej (Horror)
Written by- Red Ashoka
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: A chilling horror story which perfectly serves its purpose. Set into a classic haunted haveli scenario with terrifying twists. Story Rohan hi hai jo kho jata hai aur apne aap ko ek purani haveli ki dehleej par pata hai jaha wo haveli use hamesha hamesha ke liye bandhak bana leti hai, trap kar leti hai. Pros: the language used is very simple and easy to understand which is a good point, narration was good, story maintain its flow thoroughly. The chilling atmosphere of the haveli is described very well that you can visualise the setting. The story maintains a brisk pace as soon as Rohan enters the haveli. Suspense building, plotline as also positive. Cons: while story moves at a brisk pace it is too fast to provide proper time to develop the characters in it. Story lacks character and narrative depth. It had unique concept and if given proper time it should have been a splendid story but just misses the mark. Overall it was a great short horror story
पुनर्मिलन (Non-Erotic)
Written by- satrangi muniya
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Ek behtarin old style heartwarming story. Kahani Anu ki hai ek padhi likhi ladki jiski shadi jindadil raju se hoti hai aur jab use naukri lagti hai ghamand kicks in, aur fir wahi hota hai to aksar kahaniyo me hota hai ek partner ke ego ke chalte man mutao fir algao aur end me donokawapis se mil jana, kahani purana trope follow karti hai fir bhi refreshing lagti hai aur dil chhu jati hai jo saadgi, majbut rishton ki Jeet aur achhai ke guno ko darshati hai. Pros : Language and narration is too good and easy to understand and the story maintains a good flow throughout the narrative. Anu ka character jis hisab se likha gaya hai wo kahani ko jaruri gehrai pradan karta hai aur ye story readers ke emotions jagane me puri tarah se kamiyab hoti hai aap Raju aur Anu ke rishte ko feel karte ho wo sath ho is bare me sochne lagte ho. Cons: Kahani ka sabse bada negative point iska predictable hona hi hai kyuki plotline unique aur nayi nahi nahi aisi kahaniya humne kayi baar padhi hai aur padhte huye end ka andaja lagana aasaan ho jata hai. Dusri baat ye ki kahani kuch jagah inconsistent ho jati hai aur bahut fast ho jati hai, kahani kehne ka andaz kayi jagah aisa hai jaise bas kya hua bata diya gaya ho na ki ghatnao ko dikhaya gaya ho, aapke paas word limit thi kahani ko aap aur behtar tarike se explore kar sakte the. Overall it was a good read.
पीपल की चुडैल (Non-Erotic)
Written by- Dil_he_dil_main
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP content.
मुक्ति (Non-Erotic)
Written by- manu@84
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP content.
जिस्म की गंध (Drama)
Written by- manu@84
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
Inamlrato (Non-Erotic/Romance/Drama)
Written by- Fountain_pen
Rating – 7.75/10
Story Review: A contemporary social drama that plunges into life of teddy tokas blending a emotional world of family rupture, love, self doubt and healing set with backdrop of legal battles and personal trauma. Story explores aftermath of failed marriage and isolation of teddy very well. Inamorato crafts a rich experiential arc spanning family estrangement and romantic miscommunication. Pros: Great plot choice. The plot chosen is very good having a lot to tell and too much to explore. It tackles the complexity of divorce, gender relations family hierarchy very well. The conversations in the story are believable and realistic capturing how people really talk. Characters are well written and crafted especially of teddy's. Cons: Though the plot choice is good it is too vast making it hard to capture in a short story, there are way too much things happening in the story which makes it fast and a bit confusing too. The narrative loses its grip due to this and sudden shifts in locations, scenes does not help to understand the story clearly. Language used is good but narration is flawed and you can feel it while reading and teddy is mentioned as tobby sometimes. Overall it was a good read
फ्लैट नंबर 126 (Romance)
Written by- Dil_he_dil_main
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
Baba Golu (non erotic/comedy)
Written by- Red ashoka
Rating – 5/10
Story Review: one more story from writer which does not make any sense. It was meant to be a light hearted satirical comedy but fails as not able to generate any humour. Story follows golu an unemployed guy and his journey to become a viral baba giving gyan online. Pros: The plot was unique and a little bit of effort could have made it a good comedy story. Cons: underdeveloped plot. Non sense dialogues. Weak narration. No clear start or end. The list goes on and on. Writing comedy is a serious business buddy. We'll tried. Good plot but wasted
Dreams (Thriller)
Written by- mrDevi
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: A compelling psychological thriller that have elements such as murder mystery, betrayel and what not. Kahani Vikram Rathod ke ird gird ghumti hai jo hai to ek IT developer lekin uski life turn leti hai jab use ek murder ke liye frame kiya jata hai, Vikram ko sapne aate hai 'Dreams' jisme wo police officer hota hai aur usi crime ko investigate karta hai jisme wo fasa hua hota hai. It is revealed as memories from parallel world. Story craftfully builds necessary suspense and intersting twists and turns. Pros : unique plotline is a major plus for this story kahani kuch hatke hai isiliye padhne me maja aata hai, sath hi aap reality aur dream me difference bata pate ho thanks to color and fonts. Main character strong hai hai well written hai sath hi narration ka flow bhi bahut badhiya tarike se maintain kiya gaya hai. Sath hi end bhi jordar hai jaha parallel world ki theory reveal hoti hai. Cons: End jaha jordar hai wahi wo ek abrupt feel bhi deta hai, most of the things remain unanswered. Dreams kyu aa rahe hai, kya ho raha hai kyu ho raha hai, iska kahi bhi kisi bhi tarah ka koi explanation nahi hai aur ye kahani ko clueless bana deta hai jaha main motive hi clear nahi ho pata, antagonist fully developed nahi hai, thoda aur gehrai se plot par kaam karte to it could have been better. Overall a good read.
सौतेला (Non Erotic)
Written by- Sanju (V.R.)
Rating – 9.25/10
Story Review: Ek emotional hriday vidarak kahani jo sautele rishton ke jatil aur aksar jo dukhad hote hai in ayamo ko darshati hai. Kafi bhavnatmak aur emotional story hai, Vikram ka hospital pahuchna, Radha ke liye uske man me bhaav jaagna, purane atit ke panne, aur kahani ka ant jaha atit ke taar vartaman se judte hai sab kuch behad badhiya dhang se prastut kiya gaya hai. Pros: kahani ki sanrachna kafi prabhavi hai, vartaman ki ghatnaye fir atit ke panne khulna kafi prabhavi hai aur aage kya hoga ye padhne par majbur karta hai. Writer story me emotional depth banane me purn rup se safal huye hai, aap kirdaro ke man me umad rahi bhavnao ko mehsus kar sakte hai, characters bhi well developed hai aur language aur narration easy hai aur maintained flow ke sath kahani ki gati banaye rakhte hai aur iski pakad dhimi nahi padne dete. Sath hi kahani ka ant bhi prabhavshali hai. Cons: kahani kuch kuch jagah par thodi si khichi huyi lagti hai sath hi kuch plot elements predictable hai jaise end prabhavshali hai lekin uska purvanuman lagaya ja sakta hai, Radha ke life se related kuch bhavnatmak pehlu repetition ka ehsas dete hai jaise ek hi tarah ki ghatnao ki Radha kayi baar shikar huyi ho. Overall it was a great read.
Laung Daana (Horror/Thriller/Romance)
Written by- Tom Hardy
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: A supernatural love story set in the town of Orchha perfectly blending history, folklore and modern day relationship. Story follows aarav and diya as they become entangled with the spirit of a bundeli princess making diya a medium. This is both a ghost story and a story of love that transcends beyond time. Pros: Great world building, the descriptions of Orchha set the tone perfect for the story, the combination of romance supernatural elements and mystery add a perfect touch making it an unique plotline. The language and narration was good throughout the story with no spelling mistakes at all. Story maintains its pace thoroughly. Cons: the story has a very limited backstory making the impact lessen. The characters were good but they lacked depth and readers can't connect with them. There are very less dialogues only big paragraphs, see conversations, dialogues help story move forward and makes you connect with reader which this one clearly lacks. Overall it was great read
चौबे जी का लास्ट वोट (Non Erotic)
Written by- Moushmi
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Ek behad hi marmik, rochak aur prernadayak kahani jo bharat ke loktantra ko aur swatantrata senaniyo ke yogdan ko behad bhavnatmak andaj me prastut karti hai. Kahani Viran hote gaon chandupur aur uske aakhri bashinde Kamta Prasad chaube ji ki hai jinki antim saas loktantra ka pratik ban jati hai. Kahani sirf ek vote ki ahmiyat ko bahut badhiya tarike se bayan karti hai aur batati hai ke kaise ek budhe senani ka vote unka jivan pure desh aur yuva pidhi ke liye prerna ban jata hai Pros: Kahani ki language bahut saral hai aur samajhne me aasaan hai sath hi kahi bhi vartani ki koi truti nahi dikhai deti. Narration bhi sahi hai jo ek flow ko barabar maintain kare rakhta hai. Plotline badhiya hai aur kahani ka har kirdar apna kaam bahut badhiya dhang se karta hai. Sath hi chaubey ji ki dincharya aur gaon ka chitran bahut sahi kiya gaya hai Cons: ye un chuninda kahaniyo me se ek hai jisme kuch kami dhundhna mushkil kaam hai. Bas itna hai ke kahani me kuch kuch jagho par samvaado ki kami mehsus hoti hai, kuch chize bas bata di gayi hai dikhai nahi gayi hai. Always show, don't tell. Ye to kahani likhne ke basic hai. Sath hi ant ki or jaate huye kahani predictable ho jati hai Overall it was a great read
एक कप बदलाव (Non Erotic)
Written by- Noir
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: Ek behtarin aur prernadayak Kahani Jo samaj ke aam nagrik ke sangharsh asantosh aur samajik jagrukta ko bariki se ukerti hai. Jabalpur ke ek chaurahe ki chai ki dukaan ko kendra banakar writer ne berojgari bhrashtachar aur rajniti ke khokhlepan jaise mudde ko kahani mein bahut acchi tarah se piroya hai. Kahani local level ki politics ko bahut badhiya dhang se pesh karti hai Pros: Plotline unique hai kuch hatke hai aur likha bhi usi dhang se gaya hai sath hi kahani kayi logo ke liye khas kar berojgar yuvao ke liye kafi relatable hai aur jin samasyao ko ya ghatnao ko kahani me dikhaya gaya hai wo ekdum vastavik lagte hai. Bhasha aur samvaad shaili sahaj hai jo kahani ke parivesh ko puri tarah jivant banate hai sath hi kahani ka flow bhi natural hai jo reader ko end tak engage rakhta hai. Cons: aisi kahaniyo ka ant kya hota ye predict karna mushkil nahi hota hai aur yahi kahani ke impact ko kam kar deta hai. Kahani ka pura focus Biraj par hai aise me kafi kirdaro ko khulne ka maukanahi milta hai jo kahani ko aur rochak bana sakta tha sath hi antagonist kafi asani se pakad meaajate hai jabki asal system me aisa nahi hota hai. Ise better karte to kahani aur relatable aur vastavik lagti. Overall it was a good read
Ek gufa ka raaz (Thriller/Adventure)
Written by- Tom Hardy
Rating – 7/10
Story Review: A story that skillfully blends science fiction and psychological adventure into an atmospheric tale set in the hill of pachmarhi. The story follows five geology students on an academic expedition that takes a supernatural turn when a rockslide reveals a hidden cave. Inside, they find glowing, cave paintings, a strange fossil of unknown origin, and experience visceral, time-bending visions of the land’s tumultuous past. The tension escalates with the mysterious disappearance (and return) of Tanya, raising questions about time, memory, and the boundaries of the natural world. The plot ties together archaeological intrigue, character-driven emotion, and unsettling, open-ended mystery with an immersive style. Pros: great world building. The descriptions of pachmarhi and the ambience of cave is described beautifully. The narration is smooth and story moves forward with fine pacing making it an interesting read. The integration of geology history and scientific elements is good. Cons: some readers might find the ending of this unsatisfyingly open. A lot of questions remains unanswered which leads to reader frustration. The weak and abrupt ending is the weakest point. Also story loses its grip in the middle which lessens the overall impact Overall it was a good read but could have been better
बाँस के जंगल में (Thriller)
Written by- Blues Bane
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: Ek bahut hi prerak kahani jo ek documentary maker Kavya ke najriye se baster ke aadivasi, jungle aur vaha ki lokkatha aur paryavaran jaise muddo ko gahrai ke sath sunati hai. Kahani rahasya aur lok katha ke roop se shuru hokar ant mein samajik jatiltao se takrakti hai. Isme modern technique andhvishwas manviya pida aur naitik dvandv ka anutha mishran ham padh sakte hai. Kahani ka ant bhi powerful aur prerak hai Pros: writer ne kahani ka atmosphere bahut badhiya tarike se nirman kiya hai bans ka jungle baster ka mahaul uska rahasya, chuppa darr vahan ki sanskriti ko bahut acchi tarah se dikhaya gaya hai. Kahani ka theme unique hai aur bhasha ekadam natural hai jo aapko kahin bhi bore nahin hone deti hai. Kahani Ko padhte hue lagta hai ki writer ne plot ko bahut acchi tarah se justify Kiya hai. Cons: Kahani padhte huye aap aisa feel karte hai ki kahani ke kai hisso me thoda aur detailing ki jarurat thi kuch kuch hisse is vajah se ahani ke fike ho jaate hai aur usse kahani ka empact jo hai vo kam ho jata hai. Kahani ki shuruaat damdaar hai lekin end ki or badhate badhate kahani thoda sa predictable mod le leti hai aur aage kya hoga pata chal jata hai sath hi kahani mein romanch ki, takraav ki kami si mahsus hoti hai aisa lagta hai ki climax bahut hi easy hai aur sab kuch ekadam smoothly ho raha hai Overall it was a good read.
हनुमानगढ़ हवेली (horror/thriller)
Written by- Blues Bane
Rating – 7.5/10
Story Review: well written mystery story jo Ujjain ki ek purani haveli ke ird gird ghumti hai. Virasat, atit ke shrap, parivar ki ekta, sahas aur ant mein mukti jaise vishayo ko kahani apne readers ko bayan karti hai kahani me lok kathao ka paramparao ka bhavnaon ka bahut behtarin mishran hai jisse ye na sirf jigyasa jagati hai balki kk sukhd bhavnatmak santosh bhi deti hai. Writer has done a good job writing this one. Pros : Kahani ka narration ekdum on point hai aur kahani ke rythm bahut badhiya tarike se barkrar rakhta hai aur readers ko kahani ke vatavaran me kho jaane per majbur kar deta hai plot line unique hai plot ki sanrachna, shuruaat middle aur end ekadam perfect fit hota hai story ka parat dar parat khulate rahana readers ke man me utsukta banaye rakhta hai jo ki ek bahut badhiya point hai. Kahani ke characters bhi sahi se developed hai jinse aap connected feel karte ho. Cons: Jahan kahani ka narration satik hai vahi kahani kuch hisso me khinchi hui si pratit hoti hai wahi aap kahani mein aage hone wali ghatnayen easily predict kar sakte hai sath hi ek baat jo maine notice ki hai ki kahani ke samvado me na gahrai ki emotional touch ki ek hakiisi Kami feel hoti hai jo iske overall impact ko kam kar deti hai Baki it was good read
चांदनी चौक चले चन्नू भैया (comedy/non erotic)
Written by- Saleem Pheku
Rating – 7.25/10
Story Review: A good and entertaining light hearted story jo dilchasp bhi hai aur manoranjak bhi. Kahani chhote shahro se nikalkar bade shahro me jaane wale logon ki chunautiyo per prakash dalti hai sath hi channu bhaiya ke madhyam se saral bhojan aur dil se bane swad ke mahatva ko bhi darshati hai iske sath sath branding aur social networking aaj ki date me kisi bhi business ko success karne ke liye kitna jaruri hai ye bhi batati hai story entertaining hai aur dialogues real feel dete hai. Pros: story ki language saral hai aur easy to understand hai sath hi jo premise develop kiya hai writer ne wo ise interesting banata hai. Channu bhaiya and team ka character development sahi hai and you can feel connected to them. Narration was on point too. Cons: sometimes it feel over melodramatic :D sath hi ending aisa feel hota hai jaise bahut rush hua hai iske sath ki kuch kuch jagah kai dialogues thoda gadbadaye se lagte hai.. what I feel is ke is kahani ke topic ko aur behtar andaz me chhua ja sakta tha aur pesh kiya ja sakta tha. Overall it was an entertaining read.
मुलाक़ात (Romance)
Written by- Dil_he_dil_main
Rating – null
Story Review: Story Disqualified for CnP Content.
..Cubicle : A Sky Within.. (Non erotic)
Written by- Mephisto
Rating – 6.75/10
Story Review: An introspective story that captures the emotional struggle of a young professional trapped in monotonous routine of corporate life. Story takes you through the themes of unfulfilled dreams, office politics, middle class aspirations and the courage to break free in search of true passion. Though it's first person narration but it reflects on the universal dilemma of balancing societal expectations with inner desires. A well written and heartfelt story. Pros: the story is written in evocative Hindi language blending poetic lines with conversational tone which is very good. The narration was steady, starting from early excitement to being tired of monotonous routine you can see whole journey of protagonist. The plot is realistic and connects with readers emotionally as it shows life of almost every guy trapped in corporate world. Cons: The story has pacing issues, kahi ekdum rajdhani ki speed to kahi passenger train si lagti hai. Casual story telling and certain shifts to poetic prose narrative ki consistency break karta hai. Characters bas surface level tak hi simit reh jate hai writer ne story itni jaldi finish kar di ke depth me Jane ka mauka hi nahi diya. But overall it was a good read.
..Raftaar Jaanlewa h.. (Non Erotic/Thriller)
Written by- Mephisto
Rating – 7.25/10
Story Review: A haunting and poetic short story that explore the fragile boundary between life and death through the metaphor of high speed travel on lonely highway. The story uses real and symbolic elements which is a speeding biker a wounded butterfly and mysterious spectral women to reflect on themes of mortality, fate and acceptance. The story creates and atmospheric and contemplative mood, it leaves readers pondering the consequences of reckless speed and ethereal nature of existenc. Pros: as writer's previous one this story too have a poetic prose that enhances the story telling in a way. The first person narration is good as you dwell into the eyes of protagonist. Plot is short and consise and almost cinematic in structure. Cons: limited to no backstory and context. Bas ek message dene ke liye likhi gayi story lagi ye. Jisme bas raftar jaanleva hai is line ko justify kiya gaya hai aur kuch nahi. Character development ka to mauka hi nahi aaya isme kyuki jyada kuch explore hi nahi hua hai. Plot badhiya tha isko emotionally aur behtar likha ja sakta tha Overall good read.
UNIVERSAL JAIL (Fantasy)
Written by- Black
Rating – 8/10
Story Review: A good parody kind of story written by having XF members as main character and is about an Alien attack, an overworldly jail and what not. Kafi chaotic atmosphere banaya hai aapne story me yet it was entertaining. Pros: story ka language sahi hai entertaining hai sath hi narration bhi mast hai.characters diverse hai and dialogues were funny. Kahani throughout the narrative fast paced hai aur high energy maintain karti hai jisse padhte time reader bore nahi hota hai, breaking the forth wall and self aware story telling is appealing. Cons: kahani me itne sare, ya yu kahu lagbhag sabhi active members ko add kiya gaya hai aur har kisi ke hisse me koi na koi line hai, kuch kaam ki kuch bekaam ki aur is sab me kahani unnecessarily lambi ho gayi, khichi si lagne lagi aur main kahani aur uska plot hi kho gaya, it just ended up as an fictional banter between xf members who were given specific roles in this narrative.Kam character aur relatable xf situation ke sath kahani aur entertaining ho sakti thi, overall good read.
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# | Story Name | Written by | Points (out of 10) |
1 | 9.5 | ||
2 | 9.25 | ||
3 | 9 | ||
4 | 8.75 | ||
5 | Aakash. | 8.5 | |
6 | 8.5 | ||
7 | 8.5 | ||
8 | 8.5 | ||
9 | 8.5 | ||
10 | 8.5 | ||
11 | 8.5 | ||
12 | 8.5 | ||
13 | 8.5 | ||
14 | 8.25 | ||
15 | 8 | ||
16 | 8 | ||
17 | 8 | ||
18 | 8 | ||
19 | 8 | ||
20 | 8 | ||
21 | 8 | ||
22 | 8 | ||
23 | 8 | ||
24 | 8 | ||
25 | 8 | ||
26 | 8 | ||
27 | 7.75 | ||
28 | 7.75 | ||
29 | 7.75 | ||
30 | 7.75 | ||
31 | 7.75 | ||
32 | 7.75 | ||
33 | 7.75 | ||
34 | 7.75 | ||
35 | 7.5 | ||
36 | 7.5 | ||
37 | 7.5 | ||
38 | 7.5 | ||
39 | 7.5 | ||
40 | 7.5 | ||
41 | 7.5 | ||
42 | 7.5 | ||
43 | दहशत | 7.5 | |
44 | 7.5 | ||
45 | 7.5 | ||
46 | 7.5 | ||
47 | 7.5 | ||
48 | Mrxr | 7.5 | |
49 | "पट" | 7.5 | |
50 | 7.5 | ||
51 | 7.5 | ||
52 | 7.5 | ||
53 | 7.5 | ||
54 | 7.5 | ||
55 | 7.5 | ||
56 | 7.25 | ||
57 | 7.25 | ||
58 | 7.25 | ||
59 | 7 | ||
60 | Mrxr | 7 | |
61 | 7 | ||
62 | 7 | ||
63 | 7 | ||
64 | 7 | ||
65 | 7 | ||
66 | 7 | ||
67 | 7 | ||
68 | 7 | ||
69 | 7 | ||
70 | 7 | ||
71 | Noir | 7 | |
72 | 7 | ||
73 | 6.75 | ||
74 | 6.75 | ||
75 | 6.75 | ||
76 | arib | 6.5 | |
77 | 6.5 | ||
78 | 6.5 | ||
79 | 6.5 | ||
80 | 6.5 | ||
81 | 6.5 | ||
82 | 6.5 | ||
83 | 6 | ||
84 | 6 | ||
85 | 6 | ||
86 | 6 | ||
87 | 6 | ||
88 | 6 | ||
89 | 6 | ||
90 | 6 | ||
91 | 5.5 | ||
92 | 5.5 | ||
93 | 5 | ||
94 | 5 | ||
95 | 0 | ||
96 | DQ | ||
97 | DQ | ||
98 | DQ | ||
99 | DQ | ||
100 | DQ | ||
101 | DQ | ||
102 | DQ | ||
103 | DQ | ||
104 | DQ |
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JUDGE'S NOTE
First of all a very big thank you to everyone who took the time, heart to share their stories with us for the Ultimate Story Contest 2025. As judges, we’ve had the privilege of reading each entry and we must say, what a rollercoaster of emotions it has been! From laughter to heartbreak, from the unexpected twists to the quiet simplicity of raw emotions. Every story brought something unique to the table this year.
Every year USC gives everyone a free canvas, and many of you truly made the most of it. One thing we especially looked for while reading your stories was creativity, not just in the plot or setting, but in the way you made us feel, think, and pause. Stories that carried a personal touch, an original voice, or a spark of something bold and different, left a lasting impact.
A small note to address something we came across this year, a few entries appeared to be AI-generated or heavily AI-assisted. While we accepted those stories in good faith (and some were genuinely well-written), we want to gently encourage writers to bring more of themselves into their work. AI might help with structure or ideas, but your experiences, your emotions, your imperfections, your own words, that's the real magic no AI can replicate.
We’re not against using tools. But the stories that truly stood out were the ones where we could feel the writer behind the words.
To every participant, thank you. Whether you made it to the winners list or not, just remember this, the act of writing and sharing your voice already makes you a storyteller. Keep going, keep exploring, and keep writing.
Cheers!
The USC Judge.
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Top Stories in Respective genre..(winners excluded)
1. Romance: विधिलिखित by Adirshi (8.5/10)
2. Non- Erotic: Kalank by Aakash. | चंदगी राम पहलवान by Shetan | अहसास-ए-ज़िंदगी by Chutiyadr | अपशगुनी by avsji (8.5/10))
3. Fantasy: Universal Jail Black (8.0/10)
4. Incest: घोर पाप : एक वर्जित प्रेम कथा vakharia (7.5/10)
5. Sci Fi: Ek Adhuri kahani by Mr. Magnificent (8.5/10)
6. Horror: Moonvale by Death Kiñg (7.75/10)
7. Adultery: Ek Shadishuda Aurat uspe gairon ki nazar. by labia (7.5/10)
8. Thriller: Real Game by Aether | Who Tricked Whom by kinkystuff (8.0/10)
9. Erotica: Kumudini naag.champa (7.75/10)
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CEC's Note
So ladies and gents this is the end for USC25 and all thanks to you guys it was an blockbuster event . Usc broke all its previous records in terms of stories , ChitChat and reviews which is awesome. We had some mishaps during the final process as result got delayed but it was our fault as the forum was struggling recently so that's why we delayed the results . XF just went through some hard times with back to back DDOS strikes dismantling the forum , but we faught through it and here we are better than ever. I thank all XF members for being loyal during this tough time and supporting us through this ,we appreciate this so much , your loyalty gave us courage to pass through that period so thanks again..
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