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Waah bhai jawab nhi aapka
Ye satyam saala kitna harami hai apni chachi ko ek hi din me randi bna liya 🤣🤣🤣👌👌👌👌
Ab aage dekhte hai apni maal maalti rani kya kya aur kiske sath gul खिलाती hai
 

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Yeh hoi na bat monu bhai ab story me twist aya hai last kuch uodates ka maza nai araha tha chotay updates thay .... Malti bhi randi ban gai hai ab or savita khudi randi hai is liye dosri randiyon ke ehsas krti hai... Last update me gand ke sb scenes sun ke maza agya
 

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"Kiya hua Rand.. ghar nahi chalna ab toh Barish bhi band ho gayi hai

Warna bol toh phir se ek baar aur...."

Satyam Muskurate hue jaise hi ye bolta hai main tapak se apni aankhon ko khol k dekhti hui toh barish ab lagbhag ruk chuki thi aur use apne uper se hatate hue
"Kamina aaj duraba toh sochna bhi nahi.. ek hi din me 3 baar chudai kari hai meri, kamine apni Chachi ko Rand bana dala"

Main ye bolti hui toh khud hi has padti hu, jispe Satyam bhi haste hue uth k apne kapde pehnna suru kar deta hai

Par jab main apni penty pehnne k liye dhundhti hui toh dekhti hu ki wo bistar k dusri taraf khet ki khichad bhari mitti main padi hui thi

Satyam meri Penty ki halat dekh k has padta hai
"Pehle Bra aur ab Penty... Waaahhh

Main toh kehta hu aap nangi hi ghar chalo"

Maalti- (Muskurate hue apni badi badi aankhen dikhate hue) Chup kar kamine

Ab mere paas aur koi rasta toh tha nahi, esliye mujhe bina penty k hi peticot aur blouse pehen k uspe saree pehenni padti hai aur phir jaldi hi hum dono ek dusre ko dekh k kabhi muskurate toh kabhi main sharma k dusri taraf dekhte hue apne ghar ki chal padte hai

Waise main ye bhi bata du ki es safar k dauran mujhe beech mein kai baar ajeeb se gandi ubkai bhi aayi maano jaise ulti ho jayegi.. sayad eski wajah meri wo tatti thi jise Satyam ne apni ungli pe laga k mujhe hi khila di thi

Satyam ne aaj sahi mayne mein mujhe ek Rand bana diya tha.. aur ye Rand aaj bahut khus thi, aur alag baat hai ki es samay mere sarir ka ek ek hissa tut raha hai
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Dono jaise hi ghar pahuchte hai mujhe sabhi log Chappar k neeche hi baithe nazar aa jate hai

Main buri tarah dar jaati hu ki kahi kisi ko kuch saq na ho jaye.. esliye jaldi se ek bada sa ghunghat kar leti hu aur apne pallu ka baki kapda apni badi badi Chuchiyon k uper le aati hu taki kisi ko meri bina bra waali Chuchiyon ka pata na chale, aur Penty ka pata chalne ka toh sawal hi nahi tha qki uske liye kisi ko meri saree uthani hogi

Main itni jaldi se ghar k andar jaati hu maano dar ho ki kahi koi rok k mujhse sawal jawab na karne lage

Main ghar k andar aate hi jaldi se apna ghunghat hatati hu aur apna pallu sahi karti hui chain ki saans leti hu, par mujhe kuch pal aur rukna chahiye tha.. qki jaise hi main rahat ki saans leti hu mujhe mere kaano mein aawaz sunai padti hai

"Kaha reh gaye thay dono itni dair.. hum log pareshan ho rahe thay ?"

Maalti ye aawaz sunte hi buri tarah kaanp si padti hai qki sach wo bata nahi sakti thi aur jhooth wo Savita se bolna nahi cha rahi thi.. par es samay toh jhoot hi eklauta vikalp tha

Aur aap sab bhi ab jaan hi chuke honge ki ye aawaz Savita ki thi jiske bete ne aaj Monu ki Maa ko ek hi din mein 3 baar choda tha.. aur Pahalwan k khet mein hui Chudai k baad toh jada dair waha wo dono ruke bhi nahi thay

Maalti himmat karke apni estithi ko sambhalte hue jaise hi Savita ki taraf mud k kuch bolne ko hoti hai.. usse pehle hi Savita bol padti hai
"Are teri gardan pe ye nishan.... aur tere nichle honth ko kiya hua, kisi cheez ne kaat liya tha kiya.. sujan jaisi hai"

Par phir Savita bhi aage nahi bolti bus muskura padti hai aur Maalti ko uper se neeche tak dekhne lagti hai, Maalti ka haal toh aisa tha ki wo prathana karne lagti hai ki kash dharti phat jaye aur wo usme sama jaye.. qki maare sharam k wo apni Jethani se aankhein bhi nahi mila pa rahi thi

Maalti- (Neeche apne pairon k anguthe ko dekhte hue, dhire se kaanpte hue) wo.. main wo... aate hue raste mein gir pad.. gir padi thi

Es pal tak Savita ki parki nazren Maalti k pure sarir ka bhugol naap chuki thi aur uski nazren Maalti k bina bra k nazar aate mote mote nipples pe atak chuki thi

Savita- (Muskurate hue) Sahi kah rahi hai.. jarur giri hogi, par kaha

Phir dhire se Maalti k kaan k pass aage apni garam garam saansen uspe chorte hue
"Lund pe...."

Maalti ko kaato toh khoon nahi, use samajh hi nahi aata ki wo bole toh kiya bole

Par aage bolne ka kaam bhi Savita hi karti hai.. wo bhi muskurahat k sath
"Ja pehle ache se naha le.. qki teri halat bata rahi hai ki aaj tu 1 baar se jada baar giri hai.. ummid hai jada dard nahi hoga, q nahi hai na"

Maalti bus sharam se laal aur buri tarah jhaipte hue bas 'ha' mein apna sar hila k reh jaati hai

Savita- Ja Pehle naha le.. tere kapde bhijwati hu, aur ha chalte hue apni chaal pe thoda dhiyan rakha.. teri chaal es baat ki chugli kar rahi hai ki tu kaha giri hai

Aur ye kehte hue dhire se aankh maar deti hai.. bechari Maalti toh paani paani hu chuki thi wo jaldi se waha se bhaag jana chahti thi aur moka milte hi lagbhag daudhti hui waha se seedha ghar k peeche wale snanghar ki taraf chal padti hai

Edhar uski halat aur uski lazza dekh k Savita khil-khila k has padti hai, phir khud se kehti hai
"Lagta hai ache se ragdi gayi hai bechari"
Phir apni saree k uper se hi apne chutad wale hisse pe apna hath firate hue aur apne pichle ched mein uthte us meethe meethe dard ka ehsaas lete hue khud se kehti hai
"Waise ragda toh usne mujhe bhi jam k hai.. uffff kamine ne ched bada kar diya.. haiiiiii"

Savita phir haste hue kamre me jane lagti hai taki Maalti k kapde nikal k use de sake, par tabhi uske chehre pe ek shararat bhari muskaan khil padti hai aur wo kamre se jake sirf ek towel uthati hai aur kareeb 10 min baad darwaje pe aake apni devrani Harshita k bete Sonu ko bulati hai aur use towel dete hue
"Ja Maalti peeche wale snanghar mein hai"

Sonu ye sunte hi khil uthta hai aur lagbhag bhaagte hue Snanghar ki aur chal padta hai.. wahi use jaata hua dekh k Savita wahi khadi khadi muskurati rehti hai
"Jara main bhi toh janu.. bada ho gaya hai ya abhi bhi bacha hai"


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Aasha karta hu Update 19 k dono scene ek sath padke aap sabhi ko anand aaya hoga.. main aap sabhi k vichar aur aage k liye sujhav janne ko utsukt rahunga

Esi k sath ek jaruri baat ye bhi ki Navratri aur phir Diwali k karan main kuch dino tak kuch likh nahi paunga.. qki es samay Dukan ka kaam kai guna bad jaata hai, aur abhi k liye pura samay kaam pe hi dena jaruri hai

Par es beech ek Short Story jarur leke aaunga, jiska pura Idea 💡 mujhe 'Shalini Mam' Pornstar Bhabhi ji ne diya hai.. balki puri kahani unhi ki hai, main bas use apne sabd dunga

Esi k sath Update #19 purn hota hai

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Wow monu bhai esa update de diya aap nai ki land hilay bina raha nhi jayega
Satyam ne to aaj apni Chachi ki esi jam kr chudai ki h ki kha hi kahu sabd hi nhi h mere pass itna kamuk update diya ki pad kr agle part ki tiwrata bad gayi

Or fir savita ka malti ko pehchan Jana ki wo kha or kiske land mai giri h ye bhi bht utejit krne wala sean tha
Or ab savita nai sonu ko bhi bhej diya h towel le kr malti k liye dekhte h ki ab sonu kya krta apne bade hone ka sabot deta h ki nhi savita badi maa ko ki nhi
Yaa savita hi sonu ko training degi apni badi badi Gand or chuchi ke jalwe dikha kr ki wo bhi savita or malti harsita or sheela k liye diwana ho jaye
 

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Kya baat hai monu Bhai kya update diya hai... Ekdam lazawab maza aa gaya... maalti aur satyam ke beech ye natkhat kamuk chherkhaani dekh ke meri iccha Puri kar di monu bhai aapne... Jo maza maalti aur satyam ke beech kamuk baatchit ka aata hai wo to chudai se upar hai... Sabse jyada maza tab aaya jab satyam ne maalti ki gaand me saaree ke upar se ungali daal ke kaha bahut maal bhara hai aapki gaand me maalti chachi aur maalti ne bhi jo jawab diya sunn ke maza aa gya upar se monu bhai ne saath me kya jabardast photo daali uske related... Satyam aur maalti ke beech maalti ki gaand ke related jo baatchit Hui haay dil khush kar diya mere dill ke mutabik puri update diya hai bhai ne...satyam aur maalti ke iss natkhat chherkhani me agar maalti ka ek peshab karne wala scene ho jaata to aur maza aa jaata...ya chudai ke baad ghar jaane ke samay satyam Maalti maa ko khade khade mutne ko keh deta aur apne kichad lage gande haath ko maalti ke peshab se dhone lagta haay kya scene hota bhai...Ek scene aur hai jisme savita apni saree k uper se hi apne chutad wale hisse pe apna hath firate hue aur apne pichle ched mein uthte us meethe meethe dard ka ehsaas lete hue khud se kehti hai
"Waise ragda toh usne mujhe bhi jam k hai.. uffff kamine ne ched bada kar diya.. haiiiiii"
iska matlab lagta hai jab maalti mandir gyi thi usi beech kya Monu ne Apni badi maa savita ki gaand maarli hai kya...agar aisa hai to Monu ne savita ko gaand marwane ke liye kaise manaya ya bola hoga kya kamuk scene hoga Savita ke badi gaand me Monu ka tel se maalish kiya hua lund upar se subha agar Savita tatti karne nahi gyi hogi to gaand me se monu ne tatti nikal diya hoga apni badi maa savita ki... Mujhe khaas kar iss update me sabse jyada maza satyam aur maalti ki beech kamuk chherkhani ki baate jo hui wo bahut achha laga... Aur satyam ne jo maalti ke gaand me ungli daal ke maalti ko chuswa diya agar satyam bhi dobara maalti ke gaand me ungli daal ke maalti ko dikha ke khud ekbaar chus leta to aur maza aa jaata... Jisse maalti ko bhi pata lag jaata ki satyam uski gaand ka kitna bada diwana hai aur uski gaand lene ke liye kuchh bhi kar sakta hai aur maalti ko kitna pyar karta hai... Monu bhai meri bas ek ichha hai aapse Maalti jo satyam ke saath itna khul kar besharam ki taraha khud ko satyam ki raand bolne lagi hai wo bas chudai tak hi simit rakhyega... future me Chudai ke baad phir se maalti ko satyam ke saamne sharmili sushil aur sanskari ki trah rehne dijiyega... Mujhe khaas kar jab maalti sharmati hai to jyada maza aata...itni jabardast chudai aur kamukta me aake satyam ke saamne ekdam randi ki tarah behave karke maalti ab hosh me Satyam ke saamne kaise behave karegi wo dekhna hai..Ab aage dekhte hai kya hota hai kya Sonu maalti ke saath kuch kamuk harkate karta hai kya aur maalti ka kya reaction hoga wo bhi dekhna hai... Aur to aur monu ke Delhi jaane ke baad Maalti maa ka Birthday 🎂 bhi aane wala birthday ko leke bahut excited hu... 🙏🙏🙏
 
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Maalti ke kamuk sansaar iss kahani me waise chudai to bahut character ke beech hui hai.. sabhi lazawab sex scene hai... But Mera personal favourite koi hai to wo hai Satyam aur Maalti maa ki... Iss kahani ke pehle part me hi jab Monu ghar aata hai aur khet me maalti aur satyam ka wo lund chuswane wala scene dekhta hai tabse hi mujhe maalti aur satyam ki jodi best lagne lagi thi...uske baad maalti ka satyam ke liye kheer banana tubewell wali adhuri kamuk scene... Uske baad jitne bhi update maalti aur satyam ke beech Wale aaye sabhi ek se badhkar ek hote gye... Kisi bhi kahani me jab kisi character ke beech ek se do baar chudai ho jaati hai to unke beech romanch khatam ho jaata hai. Unke beech phir se wahi boring chudai... But iss kahani me aisa nahi sab Monu Bhai ki writing ka kamal hai... Iss kahani me Abhi bhi Satyam aur Maalti ke beech chudai ke sath sath romanch aur badhta jaa raha hai aur utsukta bani hui hai ki aage kya hoga... Mujhe to best jodi lagti hai satyam aur maalti ki... Aage bhi iss kahani me satyam aur maalti ke beech kamuk update dekhna chahunga... Sabse best part mujhe dono ki beech kamuk gandi baatchit ka lagta hai... Aage bhi kahani me Satyam ka maalti ko chherkhani hoti rehne chahiye jaise ab to Satyam ne maalti ko achhi tarah se chudai kar liya hai to ab chherkhani bhi aur achhi tarah se hona chahiye... Jaise maalti kitchen me khana bana rahi ho aur satyam chupke se jaake maalti ke gaand me ungli kar de... Jab kitchen me koi na ho to masti karte hue achanak se maalti ki saaree puri gaand tak utha de aur galti se maalti chaddi pe na pehni ho... Maalti thoda bahut gussa bhi kare aur nakhra bhi sath me sharmaye bhi... Jab aas paas koi na ho to satyam maalti se pyar se jidd kar maalti se gaand dekhane ke liye aur maalti bhi idhar udhar dekh ke apni saaree utha ke gaand dikha de aur turant saaree se dhak de... Satyam maalti se jidd kare ghar pe bhi Saaree ekdam naabhi se neeche pehene ko itna neeche ki maalti ki jhaat ke baal bhi dikh jaaye aur maalti bhi pehen ke dikha de... Satyam maalti se apni sabhi gandi ichha puri karwaye... Ghar ke peeche le jaake Maalti se khade khade peshab karwaye apne saamne... Khet me le jaake apne saamne tatti karne ko bole... Dheere chherkhani badhti jaaye... Abhi aur bahut kuchh dekhna hai Satyam aur maalti ke beech... Monu bhai se main request karunga maine abhi tak jeetne bhi post karke aapko suggestions diya agar achha lage to apne hisab kamuk rachna karke iss kahani me add kijyega...🙏🙏🙏 Jaise last update me apne satyam aur maalti ke beech natkhat cherkhani bilkul meri ichha anusaar likha hai.. Dill Kush kar diya hai aapne aage bhi aapse aise hi maha maalti ka maha mega kamukta ka ummid hai🙏🙏🙏 Thank you Bhai...
 

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Ek Scene bhavishya ke liye mera suggestion hai aapke liye... Kabhi mauka mile to use kijiyega monu bhai... Ek raat jab maalti ke ghar pe koi na ho aur satyam maalti ki jamkar damdaar chudai kar raha ho... Koi aisa scene ho ki Sonu waha Achanak pahuch jaaye... Ghar ke andar se aa rahi damdar chudai ki awaaz sun le aur aur gate pe awaaz lagaye andar kaun hai ye sunn kar maalti bahut darr jaaye ki sonu kaise yaha pahunch gya... Lekin sonu ko pata na ho ki andar kaun hai phir... Phir satyam sab kuch sambhalte hue kahe daro mat chachi kuchh nahi hoga... Ghar ke andar light band karke gate khol kar gate ke bahar hi Sonu se baat kare ... Aur sonu se puchhe tu yaha kya kar raha hai... Sonu bole tujhe apne ghar pe khojte khojte yaha aa gya... Lekin Satyam bhaiya aap yaha kya kar rahe aur andar kiski chudai kar rahe ho... Ye saari baate ghar ke andar baithi maalti sunn kar aur Darr jaaye ... Satyam baat ko sambhalte hue bole gaon ki ek mast ladki pataya hai usi ki chudayi kar raha hu... Ye sunn kar Sonu bhi satyam se kahe mujhe bhi chudai karni hai... Satyam mana kare ki wo nahi maanegi... Lekin Sonu jidd par ada rahe... Satyam sonu ko nahi batana chah raha ho ki sonu jaane ki andar main maalti ki chudai kar raha hu.. phir satyam ke mann ke andar ek kaminapan ka idea aaye... Aur wo bole tu bahar ruk main usse baat karke aata hu.. ye sab baate andar maalti sunn rahi hoti hai aur mann me sochti hai ye Sonu bhi kitna kamina hai main to ise bacha samajhti thi... Tabhi satyam maalti se andar baat karne aa jaaye aur maalti se kahe Sonu bhi chudai karna chahta hai aur wo maan nahi raha hai... Lekin maalti nahi maanti hai iss baat ke liye.. lekin satyam maalti ko samjhata ki sonu ko pata nahi chalega ki wo aapki chudai kar raha hai... Ghar ke andar light band rahega aur aap apna muh saaree se chhupa lena aur ghodi banke apna chehra dusri taraf rakhna wo peeche se karke chala jaayega use pata hi nahi chalega.. maalti ko ye sahi lagta hai aur wo darte hue Maan jaati hai... Satyam bahar aake sonu se kehta hai wo maan gyi hai lekin apna chehra nahi dekhayegi aur ek baar hi karne degi.. waise karna hai to bol Sonu bhi Maan jaata hai...aur phir sonu andar jaata hai maalti pehle se hi puri nangi rehti hai apna chehra saaree se chhupa ghodi bani rehti hai.. maalti ko is samay bahut saram aata hai wo kaise sonu se chudwayagi... Sonu maalti ki gaand dekh kar kehta hai kaha se pataya aisa maal kya lagti hai kya gaand hai iska.. Sonu satyam se kehta hai apne kaha tha gaon ki ladki hai ye to ekdam mast 35 ya 38 saal ki aurat hai ekdam maalti chachi ki tarah lagti hai.. ye sunn kar maalti ghabra jaati hai lekin kuchh kehti nahi hai... Satyam kehta tumne maalti chachi ki gaand kab aisa dekh liya jo ye bol raha hai... Sonu kehta hai ek baar jab maalti chachi Mandir se aate waqt kichad me gir gyi thi thi aur wo nahane gyi thi main tauliye dene gya tha tab dekha tha.. kya gaand tha bilkul aisa hi gaand tha tabhi mann kiya tha seedha apna lund maalti chachi ki gaand me daal du.. lekin kya karta bahut Darr laga tha tab... Lekin ye gaand dekh ke maalti chachi ki gaand yaad aa gyi... Satyam bhaiya bahut bahut dhanyabad aapki wajah se mera sapna pura ho raha maalti Chachi jaisi aurat ki chudayi karne ka.. ye sab baate maalti sunn kar sharam ke maare dube jaa rahi thi... Aur Sonu kitna bada kamina hai uski najar mere upar itna kharab hai wo pata chal raha hai... Uske baad Sonu chudai start kar deta hai aur satyam bhi sath dene lagta hai maalti na chahte hue bhi ek sath dono lund le leti hai ek chut me aur ek gaand me Sonu gaand maarne ki bhi tamanna puri kar leta hai... Monu bhai ye mera suggestion hai aapki liye achha lage to kabhi use kijiyega wo bhi apni bhasa me ekdam kamuk tarike se mujhe pata hai aap iss scene apni tarike se rachna karke likhoge to bahut kamuk bana dijiyega 🙏🙏🙏
 

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Esi din Sundarpur Gaon mein subha k kareeb 8.30 pe

“Subha subha kaha chal diye.. Mausam ka haal toh dekh lijiye kahi jane se pehle”
Apne Pati ko subha subha ghar se bahar jane ki tayyari karte hue dekh, uski bhare jism waali Patni use tokte hue
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“Kitni baar kaha hai, jab kahi bahar jane wala rahu toh toka mat karo, pata hai na kitna bada apshagun hota hai”
Aadmi jo bahar jane ko puri tarah tayyar ho chuka tha, wo apni Patni ki baat sunkar buri tarah khiskiya sa gaya tha.. Aur apne daat pesste hue apni baat kehta hai

Uski Patni bura sa munh banate hue
“Are main toh bas ye keh rahi thi ki aise mausam mein bahar jane ki kiya hi jarurat hai ?”

Aadmi aangan mein ek aur pade apne jute pehente hue, jinhe dekh hi lag raha tha ki wo kaafi achi keemat deke liye gaye honge aur aise jute Sundarpur gaon mein har kisi k pass hona itna asan nahi tha
“Mandir ja raha hu.. phir soch raha hu waha se kheton ki aur nazar saudha lunga

Suna hai wo kaamchor buddha pura din daru k theke pe pada rehta hai, aise toh wo tharki buddha sare khet barbad kar dega.. aaj Jake saale ki Maa chodta hu"

Apne Pati ki baat pe uski Dharampatni aise has padti hai maano khud apne Pati ki baat pe kataska sa kar rahi ho

Par uska Pati uski aur dhiyan diye bina aage bolta jaata hai.. par aise jaise koi badi rahasya ki baat bolne ja raha ho
"Uske baad hume Thakur Sahab k jungle waale adde par bhi chalna hai.. tayyar rehna”

Aurat apne Pati ki baat sunkar ha mein sar hilati hai par tabhi use Mandir waali baat yaad aa jati hai jispe use maano abhi tak yakeen nahi ho pa raha tha
“Waise.. Aap aur Mandir.. ?”

“Duniya ko dikhana bhi hota hai, warna tum toh mujhe janti hi ho..”
Aadmi apni baat kehte hue has padta hai aur jaldi hi wo ghar se bahar nikal chuka tha, wahi uski patni aangan mein hi padi ek charpai ki aur badti hai aur agle hi pal uspe puri tarah pasar si jaati hai aur uper aasman ki aur dekhte hue
“Hmm.. aaj phir Thakur Sahab ka wahi khel hoga..”


Wo aurat laite laite uper aasman ki aur dekhti hai jaha badalon ka rang badalna suru ho chuka tha, aur aisa lag raha tha jaise kaali chaya chaati ja rahi ho.. Charpai pe laiti hui wo aurat ek lambi saans chorte hue
“Na jane aaj kaunsa tufan aane wala hai’

Phir kuch sochte hue wo man hi man muskura padti hai aur apni dhili dhali maxi.. Jo gaon mein sayad hi koi dusri stree pehenti hogi, uske uper se hi apni yoni k stan pe apni ungliyon ko ragadte hue
“Baal bahut bade ho gaye hai.. Saaf karne honge”


Edhar uska pati Gaon k usi mandir ki aur chal padta hai, jaha Maalti aage bad rahi thi aur gauriya waha se wapas laut rahi thi..

Es rahasmay aadmi ko yahi chor k hum wapas Maalti aur Satyam k pass laut chalte hai..



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Ye vahi aurat hai jiske pati ke samne Panna ne usko hachak hachak kar pela tha. Naam bhul gaya hu magar Thakur ke jungle wale adde ke bahar ped ki chhav me Heera aur Panna ne apni khumari utari thi.

Bahut shandar scene likha hai Monu bhai apne. Kahani ko kaise present kiya jaay kis kirdar ko kahan set kiya jay aur fir thodi der bad dusre scene par pathko ko lejakar baitha dena aur usko bandhe rakhna ye ek unche writer ki khasiyat hoti hai. Pahle ek scene me thoda sa ek suspense paida karke pathako ko uljha diya aur fir ek aur chirparichit suspense ki aur badha kar pathko ko romanchit, jigyasu aur utsuk karke bandh dena apki kala ka namuna hai. Thank you Monu bhai keep Writing.
 

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Is wale update me Monu bhai ne jaan lada di hai. Apne hunar ka jadu kuchh aur jyda nikhar kar bikhera hai. Kuchh naye rang bikhare hai jinki pathko par gahari chhap chhodi hai. Ye kahani padhte samay aisa lagta hai ki jaise hum khud kirdar ke sath sath yatra kar rahe hai. Is bat ka praman yah hai ki pathak khul kar apne vichar vyakti kar rahe hai. Sath hi bahut sare sujhav bhi de rahe hai aur demand bhi bahut adhik hai.
Is bar ke update me Satyam ka kameena pan khul kar samne aya hai vo Malti ki chudai ke baad apni asli aukat dikha raha hai. Vahin Malti ko ehsas bhi ho raha hai ki vo itni kamuk kaise ho gai hai. Jahan ka mukta havi hone se phale vo Randi shabd se itni chidhti hai ki Satyam ka muh todne ki dhamki deti hai vahin kamukta uspar is kadar havi hoti hai ki vo Satyam ki Randi ban jati hai.
Randi shabd se chidhne se lekar Randi banne tak kr safar ko aapne itna romanchak banaya hai ki uske bare me kuchh likhna Suraj ko Diya dikhane jaisa hai. Ek sadhe hue sudipt writer ki tapasya ka prinam hai ye.
Mujhe Malti ke sath BDSM bilkul pasand nahi hai. Gand par thappad marne chuchiyan masalne kamar ragadane tak thik hai magar Malti ke hontho ko buri tarah chaba kar khun nikalna, uske gale ko danto se chahana bar bar chahana aur gahre nishan karna katai pasand nahi aaya sabse bura to Malti ke gaal par Satyam dwara thappad marne wala laga. Kyoki apni maa saman chachi ko thappad marte hue dikhana ye sabit karta hai ki Satyam usko chachi nahi apni rakhail sur randi samjh raha hai. Satyam Malti ko poori tarah dominant kar chuka hai. Iska asar kahani ke aage ke parts par bhi padne wala hai. Isse kahani ki aatma mar jayegi. Ek bold aur mukhay nayika bas ek 18 sal ke ladke ki hath ka khilona ban kar rah jayegi. Mere hisab se apko Malti ke gaal par thappad marne wali line hatani chahiye.
Last ke scene me Malti ke ghar aate hi Savita dwara uski uske muh par pole kholna kafi romanchak tha. Magar isse kuchh sawal bhi uthate hai ki Kahin Malti ki Satyam dwara chudai aur dominant karna dono Maa bete ki sajish to nahi hai. Kyoki Banke Lal ko apna bhai bana kar uska land chus kar kamuk jadi bunti se yukt laddu banwa kar Monu ke ghar Savita hi gai thi dene ke liye.

Isbar ke update me pathko ke sujhav par kuchh amal kiya hai. Jaise Satyam aur Malti ke beech kamuk chedkhani badhai hai. Usse aage badhte hue Satyam dwara khul kar Malti ke sath sharirik chedkhani dikhana kahani me char chand laga diye hai.

Mai apni bat yahi samapt karunga. Aur Chalte chalte apse ek gujarish hai ki kahani ke update me jyda dino ka gap kahani ke prati nairashya {nirasha} paida karta hai. To thoda jaldi update dene ki koshish kijiye.

Thanks a lot.

Keep writing.
 
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Is wale update me Monu bhai ne jaan lada di hai. Apne hunar ka jadu kuchh aur jyda nikhar kar bikhera hai. Kuchh naye rang bikhare hai jinki pathko par gahari chhap chhodi hai. Ye kahani padhte samay aisa lagta hai ki jaise hum khud kirdar ke sath sath yatra kar rahe hai. Is bat ka praman yah hai ki pathak khul kar apne vichar vyakti kar rahe hai. Sath hi bahut sare sujhav bhi de rahe hai aur demand bhi bahut adhik hai.
Is bar ke update me Satyam ka kameena pan khul kar samne aya hai vo Malti ki chudai ke baad apni asli aukat dikha raha hai. Vahin Malti ko ehsas bhi ho raha hai ki vo itni kamuk kaise ho gai hai. Jahan ka mukta havi hone se phale vo Randi shabd se itni chidhti hai ki Satyam ka muh todne ki dhamki deti hai vahin kamukta uspar is kadar havi hoti hai ki vo Satyam ki Randi ban jati hai.
Randi shabd se chidhne se lekar Randi banne tak kr safar ko aapne itna romanchak banaya hai ki uske bare me kuchh likhna Suraj ko Diya dikhane jaisa hai. Ek sadhe hue sudipt writer ki tapasya ka prinam hai ye.
Mujhe Malti ke sath BDSM bilkul pasand nahi hai. Gand par thappad marne chuchiyan masalne kamar ragadane tak thik hai magar Malti ke hontho ko buri tarah chaba kar khun nikalna, uske gale ko danto se chahana bar bar chahana aur gahre nishan karna katai pasand nahi aaya sabse bura to Malti ke gaal par Satyam dwara thappad marne wala laga. Kyoki apni maa saman chachi ko thappad marte hue dikhana ye sabit karta hai ki Satyam usko chachi nahi apni rakhail sur randi samjh raha hai. Satyam Malti ko poori tarah dominant kar chuka hai. Iska asar kahani ke aage ke parts par bhi padne wala hai. Isse kahani ki aatma mar jayegi. Ek bold aur mukhay nayika bas ek 18 sal ke ladke ki hath ka khilona ban kar rah jayegi. Mere hisab se apko Malti ke gaal par thappad marne wali line hatani chahiye.
Last ke scene me Malti ke ghar aate hi Savita dwara uski uske muh par pole kholna kafi romanchak tha. Magar isse kuchh sawal bhi uthate hai ki Kahin Malti ki Satyam dwara chudai aur dominant karna dono Maa bete ki sajish to nahi hai. Kyoki Banke Lal ko apna bhai bana kar uska land chus kar kamuk jadi bunti se yukt laddu banwa kar Monu ke ghar Savita hi gai thi dene ke liye.

Isbar ke update me pathko ke sujhav par kuchh amal kiya hai. Jaise Satyam aur Malti ke beech kamuk chedkhani badhai hai. Usse aage badhte hue Satyam dwara khul kar Malti ke sath sharirik chedkhani dikhana kahani me char chand laga diye hai.

Mai apni bat yahi samapt karunga. Aur Chalte chalte apse ek gujarish hai ki kahani ke update me jyda dino ka gap kahani ke prati nairashya {nirasha} paida karta hai. To thoda jaldi update dene ki koshish kijiye.

Thanks a lot.

Keep writing.
Sarvpratham toh aapke anmol comment k liye Dil se Dhanyawad 🙏

Aapka likha ek ek sabd mere liye kisi moti saman hai jo meri lekhni ko aur sundar banane ka karya karega

Ab baat aapki sikhayat ki karu ki Maalti ka ek 18 saal k ladke k hathon dominate hona kahani ki aatma ko maar dega toh uske liye yahi kahunga ki koi bhi nayak ya nayika suru se Taqatwar nahi hota.. ye waisa hi hai jaise daudhne se pehle kai baar girna padta hai

Aur ek jaruri baat ye bhi hai ki yaha koi bhi aisa nahi hai jo puri tarah doodh ka dhula ho, yu samajhyie jise jitna sareef samjhenge wo ant mein utna hi bada mukhota odhe milega

Aur Dusri baat ki es Kahani ka jo ant socha hai aur jaise socha hai main use kabhi nahi badlunga

Aap aur baki har dosto k sath Kahani mein jo bhi likhunga wo us Kahani k Safar ka hissa hoga par ye Kahani waise hi khatam hogi jaise Maine likhne se pehle soch liya tha

Qki mujhe lagta hai mera ye tay karna jaruri hai ki mujhe kahani ko kaise purn karna hai, warna main bas behta rahunga jismein kamukta k karan maza toh aayega par wo kahani k sath nyay nahi hoga

Baki main itna hi kahunga ki aap sath bane rahe, par main aapse es baat ko leke jhoot bhi nahi bolunga ki abhi Dominate karne aur hone waale bahut se drisya aayenge

Par wo tabhi honge jab unki jarurat hogi.. aur sabse badi Baat ye kahani meri Fantasy hai meri Maa ko leke toh aap samajh sakte hai main wo har cheez ko add karna chahunga jiski main Kalpana karta hu 🙏🙏


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