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Mai koi writer nhi fir bhi mujhe yaha pe ek story likhane ka man kiya to mai yaha pe ek story likh raha hu isliye mujhe ye story likhne me koi galti ho jay to aaplog mujhe mat karna
Fantasy The War Of Magical World
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Ye story ek kalpnik story hai is story se kisi bhi jiwit mrityu byakti ya koi sathan se kuchh bhi sambandh nahi hai agar sanyog ye aisa hoga bhi to wo ek mahaj sanyog hi hoga
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Ye story ek aise byakti ki hai jo kisi tarah se hamare earth se magical world me chala jata hai Aur waha jakar wo kya kya karta ye janne ke liye padhiye hamari ye story THE WAR OF MAGICAL WORLD
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Ek ladka ek jangal me bhage ja raha tha jo dikhne me karib 5 feet 11 inch ka hoga uske gale me ek locket (pendant) latak raha tha aur uske sath me ek ladki bhi thi wo ladka us ladki ke hath pakade huye bhag raha tha un dono ke pichhe bahut se gunde type ladke pade huye the jo unke pichhe kuchh hi duri par unka pichha kar rhe the wo dono bhag hi rahe the ki tabhi piche se ek mota lakdi aakar un dono ke pair par laga aur wo dono wahi gir gaye fir kisi tarah wo dono uth kar bhagne hi wale the ki tabhi ek awaj sunayi di.
-Are ab bas bhi karo Adarsh kitna bhagoge aaj tum dono ko bhagwan bhi nahi bacha sakta fir kyu faltu me mera samay barbad kar rahe ho
(Wo ladka jo bhag raha tha wo hai hamare story ka hero Adarsh)
Wo gunde Adarsh ko charo taraf se gher liye to Adarsh ne jab dekha ki ab aur bhagna byarth hai to wo chupchap khada ho gya aur apne muh se khoon thukte huye bola.
Adarsh- Tumne sahi bola Ranjeet ab bhagne se koi fayda nahi hai ab ya to aar ya par aa jao sab aaj dekhte hai kon bachta hai aur kon marta hai (Fir Adarsh ne us ladki ko dekhte huye bola) Supriya tum ek taraf ho jao aaj ya to mai nahi rahunga ya fir ye log.
Supriya- Nahi Adarsh tum ye log se mat lado chalo ye log bahut sare hai chalo yaha se bhag jate hai.
Adarsh- Nhi ab aur nahi bhag sakte bahut bhag liye aur ye log ka atyachar bhi bahut sah liya ab aur nahi sahenge Aa jao ranjeet khud aaoge ya fir apne chamcho ko bhejoge aaj yaha se koi bhi bach kar nahu jayega.
Itna bol kar adarsh ranjeet ke taraf isara kar ke apne taraf bulane laga ranjeet to pahle se hi guse me tha ab wo adarsh ka ishara dekh kar aur aag babula ho gaya aur guse se apne sathiyo ko bola.
Ranjeet- Jao re aaj isko maja chakha do jo usko pahle marega usko 1 lakh rupya dunga.
Ranjeet ke bat sun kar uska sare chamche khus ho gaye aur Adarsh ko marne ke liye apne hatho me hathiyar leke uske taraf bhagne lage sabse aage jo gunda tha uske hath me ek hammer wo apne hammer wale hath ko lahrate huye Adarsh par ek war kiya jisse adarsh ne niche jukte huye bach gaya aur apne hath ko muka banate huye uske jabde me ek gusa mara jisse wo wahi ke wahi dher ho gaya fir adarsh ne us gunde ke hath se hammer ko apne hath me leta hai aur sare gundo ke taraf bhagne lagta hai aur fir hota hai ek ghamasan ladayi jisme adarsh ne sare gundo ko mar mar kar bharta bana diya itne sare gundo se nipatane ke bad adarsh bhi thoda thak sa gaya tha lekin fir bhi apne sanso ko durust karte huye wo ranjeet ke taraf badha ranjeet ko to pahle hi halat khara ho gaya tha jab usne dekha ki uske sare gunde jamin par dher ho gaye hai aur jab usne dekha ki ab Adarsh uske taraf badh raha hai to uska halat aur kharab ho gaya lekin kute ka dum kabhi sidha nahi hota aisa hi iske sath bhi tha itna sab kuchh hone ke bad bhi wo apne hath me ek chaku lekar adarsh ke badhne laga Adarsh ne jab dekha ki ranjeet bhi chaku lekar uske taraf hi aa raha hai to Adarsh ne apne hath me pakde huye hammer ko aur tightly pakad liya aur uske taraf bad gaya abhi wo ranjeet ke kareeb pauchne hi wala tha ki tabhi kisi ne pichhe se uske pith me chaku mar diya jisse Adarsh dard me chilate huye jamin par gir gaya aur apne sar ko pichhe kar ke jab usne dekha ki use piche se kisne mara hai to uska hos ud gaya aur uske aankho se aansu girne laga kyuki chaku marne wala nahi wali thi aur wo aur koi nahi balki Supriya thi jo piche khadi hokar muskura rahi thi fir wo muskurate huye aage jakar ranjeet ke gale lag gayi aur uske hoth par kiss karne lagi.
Adarsh- (dard me kaharte huye) Kyu akhir tumne aisa kyu kiya mai to yaha tumhe bachane aaya tha lekin tumne mere sath aisa kyu kiya.
Supriya- Hahahahhh tumhe kya laga mai tumhe phone kar ke yaha mujhe bachane k liye bulayi thi chu... Chu...chu..chu.. tu kitna na samajh hai re mai tumhe yaha mujhe bachane ke liye nahi balki tumhe marne ke liye bulayi thi
Jab Adarsh ne ye suna to uska sar guse se phatane laga aur wo kisi tarah bal lagakar apne pair par khada huya aur apne hath me pakde huye hammer ko Supriya ke sar par de mara jisse uske sar ka kachumar nikal gaya aur wo wahi dher ho gayi jab ranjeet ne ye dekha to wo guse me paglo ki tarah chilane laga.
Ranjeet- Supriya nahi ye kya ho gaya nhi ye tumne thik nahi kiya adarsh ab tumhe iska phal bhogna hoga tume meri Supriya ko mar dala mai tumhe jinda nahi chhodunga.
Itne bolne ke bad ranjeet Adarsh ke taraf paglo ki tarah bhagte huye gaya aur adarsh ke pet me apna chaku mar diya lekin is bar dard me chilane ki awaj ek nahi do aayi thi ek to Adarsh ki thi aur dusri ranjeet ki kyoki ranjeet ke chhati me jis side me dil rahta hai waha ek chaku gusa huya tha lekin ye kab huya to aaiye jante hai jab ranjeet paglo ke tarah apne hath me chaku liye Adarsh ki taraf bhagte huye jaa raha tha tabhi adarsh ne jo chaku Supriya ne use mari thi wo nikal liya tha aur jaise hi ranjeet ne apne chaku adarsh ke pet me gusaya waise hi adarsh ne bhi apna chaku ranjeet ke dil me utar diya jisse ranjeet wahi gir kar apna dam tod diya fir adarsh bhi gir gaya aur upar asman ke taraf dekhte huye bola.
Adarsh- Kyu bhagwan akhir kyu apne mere sath aisa kyu kiya apne na mujhe maa bap ka pyar diya mujhe bachpan se anath banaya aur na hi kabhi koi sacha dost diya akhir meri galti kya thi mai to is ladki ko apna sacha dost mana tha aur yaha ise bachane aaya tha lekin kya huya isne hi mujhe chaku mar kar meri jan lene ki kosish ki akhir kyu mere hi sath aisa kyu hota hai.
itna bol kar adarsh Rone lagata hai aur apne jiwan me bite abhi tak ke samay ko yad karne lagta hai....
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Ek ladka ek jangal me bhage ja raha tha jo dikhne me karib 5 feet 11 inch ka hoga uske gale me ek locket (pendant) latak raha tha aur uske sath me ek ladki bhi thi wo ladka us ladki ke hath pakade huye bhag raha tha un dono ke pichhe bahut se gunde type ladke pade huye the jo unke pichhe kuchh hi duri par unka pichha kar rhe the wo dono bhag hi rahe the ki tabhi piche se ek mota lakdi aakar un dono ke pair par laga aur wo dono wahi gir gaye fir kisi tarah wo dono uth kar bhagne hi wale the ki tabhi ek awaj sunayi di.
-Are ab bas bhi karo Adarsh kitna bhagoge aaj tum dono ko bhagwan bhi nahi bacha sakta fir kyu faltu me mera samay barbad kar rahe ho
(Wo ladka jo bhag raha tha wo hai hamare story ka hero Adarsh)
Wo gunde Adarsh ko charo taraf se gher liye to Adarsh ne jab dekha ki ab aur bhagna byarth hai to wo chupchap khada ho gya aur apne muh se khoon thukte huye bola.
Adarsh- Tumne sahi bola Ranjeet ab bhagne se koi fayda nahi hai ab ya to aar ya par aa jao sab aaj dekhte hai kon bachta hai aur kon marta hai (Fir Adarsh ne us ladki ko dekhte huye bola) Supriya tum ek taraf ho jao aaj ya to mai nahi rahunga ya fir ye log.
Supriya- Nahi Adarsh tum ye log se mat lado chalo ye log bahut sare hai chalo yaha se bhag jate hai.
Adarsh- Nhi ab aur nahi bhag sakte bahut bhag liye aur ye log ka atyachar bhi bahut sah liya ab aur nahi sahenge Aa jao ranjeet khud aaoge ya fir apne chamcho ko bhejoge aaj yaha se koi bhi bach kar nahu jayega.
Itna bol kar adarsh ranjeet ke taraf isara kar ke apne taraf bulane laga ranjeet to pahle se hi guse me tha ab wo adarsh ka ishara dekh kar aur aag babula ho gaya aur guse se apne sathiyo ko bola.
Ranjeet- Jao re aaj isko maja chakha do jo usko pahle marega usko 1 lakh rupya dunga.
Ranjeet ke bat sun kar uska sare chamche khus ho gaye aur Adarsh ko marne ke liye apne hatho me hathiyar leke uske taraf bhagne lage sabse aage jo gunda tha uske hath me ek hammer wo apne hammer wale hath ko lahrate huye Adarsh par ek war kiya jisse adarsh ne niche jukte huye bach gaya aur apne hath ko muka banate huye uske jabde me ek gusa mara jisse wo wahi ke wahi dher ho gaya fir adarsh ne us gunde ke hath se hammer ko apne hath me leta hai aur sare gundo ke taraf bhagne lagta hai aur fir hota hai ek ghamasan ladayi jisme adarsh ne sare gundo ko mar mar kar bharta bana diya itne sare gundo se nipatane ke bad adarsh bhi thoda thak sa gaya tha lekin fir bhi apne sanso ko durust karte huye wo ranjeet ke taraf badha ranjeet ko to pahle hi halat khara ho gaya tha jab usne dekha ki uske sare gunde jamin par dher ho gaye hai aur jab usne dekha ki ab Adarsh uske taraf badh raha hai to uska halat aur kharab ho gaya lekin kute ka dum kabhi sidha nahi hota aisa hi iske sath bhi tha itna sab kuchh hone ke bad bhi wo apne hath me ek chaku lekar adarsh ke badhne laga Adarsh ne jab dekha ki ranjeet bhi chaku lekar uske taraf hi aa raha hai to Adarsh ne apne hath me pakde huye hammer ko aur tightly pakad liya aur uske taraf bad gaya abhi wo ranjeet ke kareeb pauchne hi wala tha ki tabhi kisi ne pichhe se uske pith me chaku mar diya jisse Adarsh dard me chilate huye jamin par gir gaya aur apne sar ko pichhe kar ke jab usne dekha ki use piche se kisne mara hai to uska hos ud gaya aur uske aankho se aansu girne laga kyuki chaku marne wala nahi wali thi aur wo aur koi nahi balki Supriya thi jo piche khadi hokar muskura rahi thi fir wo muskurate huye aage jakar ranjeet ke gale lag gayi aur uske hoth par kiss karne lagi.
Adarsh- (dard me kaharte huye) Kyu akhir tumne aisa kyu kiya mai to yaha tumhe bachane aaya tha lekin tumne mere sath aisa kyu kiya.
Supriya- Hahahahhh tumhe kya laga mai tumhe phone kar ke yaha mujhe bachane k liye bulayi thi chu... Chu...chu..chu.. tu kitna na samajh hai re mai tumhe yaha mujhe bachane ke liye nahi balki tumhe marne ke liye bulayi thi
Jab Adarsh ne ye suna to uska sar guse se phatane laga aur wo kisi tarah bal lagakar apne pair par khada huya aur apne hath me pakde huye hammer ko Supriya ke sar par de mara jisse uske sar ka kachumar nikal gaya aur wo wahi dher ho gayi jab ranjeet ne ye dekha to wo guse me paglo ki tarah chilane laga.
Ranjeet- Supriya nahi ye kya ho gaya nhi ye tumne thik nahi kiya adarsh ab tumhe iska phal bhogna hoga tume meri Supriya ko mar dala mai tumhe jinda nahi chhodunga.
Itne bolne ke bad ranjeet Adarsh ke taraf paglo ki tarah bhagte huye gaya aur adarsh ke pet me apna chaku mar diya lekin is bar dard me chilane ki awaj ek nahi do aayi thi ek to Adarsh ki thi aur dusri ranjeet ki kyoki ranjeet ke chhati me jis side me dil rahta hai waha ek chaku gusa huya tha lekin ye kab huya to aaiye jante hai jab ranjeet paglo ke tarah apne hath me chaku liye Adarsh ki taraf bhagte huye jaa raha tha tabhi adarsh ne jo chaku Supriya ne use mari thi wo nikal liya tha aur jaise hi ranjeet ne apne chaku adarsh ke pet me gusaya waise hi adarsh ne bhi apna chaku ranjeet ke dil me utar diya jisse ranjeet wahi gir kar apna dam tod diya fir adarsh bhi gir gaya aur upar asman ke taraf dekhte huye bola.
Adarsh- Kyu bhagwan akhir kyu apne mere sath aisa kyu kiya apne na mujhe maa bap ka pyar diya mujhe bachpan se anath banaya aur na hi kabhi koi sacha dost diya akhir meri galti kya thi mai to is ladki ko apna sacha dost mana tha aur yaha ise bachane aaya tha lekin kya huya isne hi mujhe chaku mar kar meri jan lene ki kosish ki akhir kyu mere hi sath aisa kyu hota hai.
itna bol kar adarsh Rone lagata hai aur apne jiwan me bite abhi tak ke samay ko yad karne lagta hai....
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Sandar Kosis Aapki dekhte hai kya or kaise Aap Ise aage bdhate ho... Nice update bhai
congratulations for new story
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Nice story bhai
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...Fabulous Amazing Fantastic Update thaa bhaiiii
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for new story..Nayi kahani.... naye mod, naye pehlu.... ek freshness...
bahot hi behtareen suruwat huyi hai kahani ki... shaandar update, shaandar lekhni shaandar shabdon ka chayan....har shabd ek alag kahani bayaan kar raha tha..pyar, dhokha, ranjeesein, saazisein, chaal, dusmani, Action ke sath suruwat huyi..
Aise hi likhte rahiye aur hum pathako ka manoranjan karte rahiye..
Let's see what happens next
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