Fantasy Hayaan - Ek Insaan Ya Shaitaan

[Hayaan]

Nice story bhai bus jaldi jaldi update diya karo

Sach mein Aap kya bol rahe hai..??
Daily 1 Update aata hai....kabhi kabhi to 1 sin mein 2 updates Aa ja rahe hai....
Isse jyada fast nahi de sakta...
Aur Aap kah rahe isse bhi jaldi Update du...
Agar ye majak tha to acha laga...m

Welcome krish1152 bhai !!
Thanks for reading and comment..
Bas aise hi sath bane rahe .....

 

[Reza]

Waiting

 

[Vickey1211]

Waiting

 

[Hayaan]

Bhai Log Aaj kal Aap logon ke Comment Kam Aa rahe hai...
Na koi Suggestion aur Na koi Tips...

Guys Thoda Help karo...
Point karo Taaki main aur behtar Aap tak pahuncha Saku...

Thanks Guys. !!!

 

[Last benchers]

Nice story bhai bus jaldi jaldi update diya karo

Paaji mjk acha KR lete ho .. I think aap ka fast comment hai ..

 

[Last benchers]

Bhai Log Aaj kal Aap logon ke Comment Kam Aa rahe hai...
Na koi Suggestion aur Na koi Tips...

Guys Thoda Help karo...
Point karo Taaki main aur behtar Aap tak pahuncha Saku...

Thanks Guys. !!!

Apke writing skills dekh KR lgta nhi aap fast story likh rhe ho...
Rahi BT sagetion ki to Bhai apko sagetion kiy du
Aap khud apni writing skill progress KR rhe ho... Update Jo aate hai use Dekh KR v bta nhi skte aane wale update Mai aap kiy twist de do...
Jahan aap kabeer or Mira ki itni achi love story dikhai.. mujhe lgta tha suru Mai apna kabeer hi hero hai but SB Ulta ho gya.
Wahi dusri tarf Elizabeth ke sath Geryon ka sath duskarm KR ke.apna Kaal ka khud janm likh diy..
Jahan apna hero or herohin kabeer or Mira ke Bache hai.utna hi Satya ye v hai Elizabeth or Geryon ke v Bache hai .aage AP story Mai kiy twist Doge I can't imagenation.. Bhai

All the best...

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[John Cena]

Apke writing skills dekh KR lgta nhi aap fast story likh rhe ho...
Rahi BT sagetion ki to Bhai apko sagetion kiy du
Aap khud apni writing skill progress KR rhe ho... Update Jo aate hai use Dekh KR v bta nhi skte aane wale update Mai aap kiy twist de do...
Jahan aap kabeer or Mira ki itni achi love story dikhai.. mujhe lgta tha suru Mai apna kabeer hi hero hai but SB Ulta ho gya.
Wahi dusri tarf Elizabeth ke sath Geryon ka sath duskarm KR ke.apna Kaal ka khud janm likh diy..
Jahan apna hero or herohin kabeer or Mira ke Bache hai.utna hi Satya ye v hai Elizabeth or Geryon ke v Bache hai .aage AP story Mai kiy twist Doge I can't imagenation.. Bhai

All the best...

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Same situation ha dost tumhari baat bilkul thek ha

 

[Vikram singh rana]

Hello bro.......
So finally I'm here....for the reviews.....
First of all thank you to gave us a beautiful story to read......
And i am very thankful to you because.......even after my negative reply.....you called me here again.....
If you didn't call me again...then I would be deprived......from such a nice story....so....
Thanks....

Now let's talk about plot and story.....
Plot waise to jyada taraf fantasy story ka lagbhag same hee hota hai.....wahi achchi or burayi ke bich jung.....
OR jaise aapne starting ki hai us hisaab se mujhe iss stoey par VJ ki story ka bahut Gahrayi se prabhav dikhaai diya....till update 11.....

Update 1 to 10 ki baat ham baad me karenge.....
Abhi start karte.....from update 11.....OR wo isliye....kyoki mere hisaab se....aapki story ki starting hee update 11 se hui thi.....OR uske baad se story day by day....better hoti gayi.....

Ha to ham plot ki baat kar rahe the....fantasy stories jo ki iss site par hai....maximum same hee hai....
Lekin jo aapne isme....jungle queen....Jean....mutation.....ye Joda hai....OR saath hee hero mai villain ko bhi.....(ak bar ghost rider bhi)dikhaya hai.....

Wo kaafi alag hai....OR aapki creativity ko dikhaya hai.....OR update 11 se lekar ab tak aapne apni us creativity ko kaafi achche se Darsham a hai....OR har scene ko kaafi achchi tarah describe kiya hai....

OR kyoki ye ak fantasy story hai to isme kisi character ke love alag se kahne ka koi matlab nahin.....kyoki fantasy stories mai pura khel.....
Writer ke description or imagination par tika hota hai.....agar writer chahega to ak second me kisi bhi good character ko bad bana dega or baad me dikha dega ki us par kisi or karya control tha....magic wagera....

Ha lekin hero pr uski bahan ka character kaafi strong banaya hai aapne....KHAS KAR wo 2 scene jab hero jin ke father ko injured karta hai or jab apne father ko or sister ko bachata hai....
Ab tak ke best the....apne aap mai....

To totally kaha jaaye to kaafi achcha plot hai....saath hee aapne ise or behtar banaane ke liye kaafi saare ingredients bhi daale hai or kaafi saare strong character bhi hai....OR saath hee ak achcha villain bhi....
Agar aap aise hee likhte rahe to ye story kaafi aage jaa sakti hai....


Ab baat ki jaaye kami ki.....to update 11 ke baad mujhe bas 3 hee chije thi ji ki laga ki thodi odd hai or agar koshish ki jaati to behtar ho sakte the.....

1...Elizabeth.....ke father ne kaha tha ki jab dono mil jayenge to ak hokar apni maa ko thik karne aa jaaye ge....
Lekin jab Hayaan paida hua tab usme good or bad dono shaktiya thi....ya phir sirf Devil....waali.....jise ki baba ne Dora baandh kar shaant kar diya....
Ab question ye hai ki agar usme sirf Devil waali powers hai...to dusra kanha hai....jisme ki achchi powers hai....
Kya wo abhi bhi Elizabeth ke andar hai....OR agar ander hai to jab wo thik hogi tab bhi to wo chhota hee rahega....
Dusra....agar dono ak hee hai....only Hayaan....to phir ye kyo kaha gaya ki dono jab ak honge..??...

2.....jaise ki aapne stoey me Jean zenom or baaki chijo ki baat ki hai....us hisaab se story current Era me chal rahi hai....
To current Era mai aisi konsi jagah hai janha 5 ya 6 laakh rupay mai....bada Bangla milta hai....
OR to or 6 laakh ke jewellery par max 5 ka hee loan mil sakta hai...usme aapne 3...4 gaadi ya kharidte dikha diya....ye scene thoda funny laga....

3.....OR most.....wo condom waali baat.....I mean really .....
11......12 saal ka Bachche....maa more condom ke liye chhida rahe hai.....really.....bahut logo ko scene funny laga hoga....lekin mujhe sabse kharaab laga....jitna ki mujhe starting ke 10 updates nahi lage the......
12 saal.ke bachche apni mom se condom ke baare mai baat karte hai....OR baat hee nahi use chidaate bhi hai....
OR unki mom bhi use mazaak me leti hai.....
Bhai mana ki zamane modern hai or is age se bhi chhote bachche ke haath me phone or laptop hai.....lekin maa ka bachche ke condom ke baare me bolne par mazaak me taalna.....not good....

Kuch logo ko ye normal lag sakta hai lekin mujhe bilkul thik nahi laga....

Ab baat karte hai starting ke 10 updates ki.......
To sabse pahle to mujhe ye batao ki update 1 kaha hai....mujhe to kanhi bhi nahi dikha.....
Aapne start hee update 2 se kiya hai.....
OR maine bhi...maine kya sabhi ne wanhi se padha hai....

Maine aapki story par jo negative reply kiya tha....wo starting ke unhi 9 updates ko dekh kar kiya tha.....kyoki mujhe wo itne jyada kharaab lage the ki mai aage nahi padh paya.....OR wo comment kiya...

Yanha tak ki aapne jab dobara bulaya tab bhi mera mann nahin tha padhne ka lekin aage ke updates me aapne unhe niraash nahi kiya....balki ummid se khada achcha kaam kiya....
starting same VJ ki story ki tarah thi......no changes.....yanha tak ki apne naam bhi same de diya....LORD OF ANGEL.....
Bas osmodius ki jagah elbis kar diya.....

uske baad achanak se uska rogue ho jana or apni ak alag duniya basa lena....plus uska ak beta same uski tarah bura....

Ye sab mujhe same copy laga.....saath hee update 5 or 6 me aapne jo likha wo to meri samajh hee nahi aaya.....ak bhi line dusri line se relate nahi kar rahi.....
Update 2 se 9 tak aapki writing mujhe aisi lagi jaise koi mazaak mai likh raha hai....

Lekin 10 update.....jisme ki aapne sex dikhaya usme har line bahut achchi tarah se likhi hui thi....saari ak dusre se relate bhi kar rahi thi or feelings bhi thi...tab mujhe laga aap baaki to pata nahi lekin sex achcha likh sakte hai....OR mai story me bas sex padhne nahi aata.....story main chij hai mere liye...

Ye bhi kaaran tha mera reply na karne ka.....

Anyways
Update 11 ke baad se aapne har update perfect likha hai....OR feelings......thrill or suspence kaafi achchi tarah dikhaya hai....

So just keep it up....
Entertain us....
Keep writing
Thanks....


OR ha ab se mai har update ke liye reviews dunga....
Once again
Thanks....

 

[Last benchers]

Hello bro.......
So finally I'm here....for the reviews.....
First of all thank you to gave us a beautiful story to read......
And i am very thankful to you because.......even after my negative reply.....you called me here again.....
If you didn't call me again...then I would be deprived......from such a nice story....so....
Thanks....

Now let's talk about plot and story.....
Plot waise to jyada taraf fantasy story ka lagbhag same hee hota hai.....wahi achchi or burayi ke bich jung.....
OR jaise aapne starting ki hai us hisaab se mujhe iss stoey par VJ ki story ka bahut Gahrayi se prabhav dikhaai diya....till update 11.....

Update 1 to 10 ki baat ham baad me karenge.....
Abhi start karte.....from update 11.....OR wo isliye....kyoki mere hisaab se....aapki story ki starting hee update 11 se hui thi.....OR uske baad se story day by day....better hoti gayi.....

Ha to ham plot ki baat kar rahe the....fantasy stories jo ki iss site par hai....maximum same hee hai....
Lekin jo aapne isme....jungle queen....Jean....mutation.....ye Joda hai....OR saath hee hero mai villain ko bhi.....(ak bar ghost rider bhi)dikhaya hai.....

Wo kaafi alag hai....OR aapki creativity ko dikhaya hai.....OR update 11 se lekar ab tak aapne apni us creativity ko kaafi achche se Darsham a hai....OR har scene ko kaafi achchi tarah describe kiya hai....

OR kyoki ye ak fantasy story hai to isme kisi character ke love alag se kahne ka koi matlab nahin.....kyoki fantasy stories mai pura khel.....
Writer ke description or imagination par tika hota hai.....agar writer chahega to ak second me kisi bhi good character ko bad bana dega or baad me dikha dega ki us par kisi or karya control tha....magic wagera....

Ha lekin hero pr uski bahan ka character kaafi strong banaya hai aapne....KHAS KAR wo 2 scene jab hero jin ke father ko injured karta hai or jab apne father ko or sister ko bachata hai....
Ab tak ke best the....apne aap mai....

To totally kaha jaaye to kaafi achcha plot hai....saath hee aapne ise or behtar banaane ke liye kaafi saare ingredients bhi daale hai or kaafi saare strong character bhi hai....OR saath hee ak achcha villain bhi....
Agar aap aise hee likhte rahe to ye story kaafi aage jaa sakti hai....


Ab baat ki jaaye kami ki.....to update 11 ke baad mujhe bas 3 hee chije thi ji ki laga ki thodi odd hai or agar koshish ki jaati to behtar ho sakte the.....

1...Elizabeth.....ke father ne kaha tha ki jab dono mil jayenge to ak hokar apni maa ko thik karne aa jaaye ge....
Lekin jab Hayaan paida hua tab usme good or bad dono shaktiya thi....ya phir sirf Devil....waali.....jise ki baba ne Dora baandh kar shaant kar diya....
Ab question ye hai ki agar usme sirf Devil waali powers hai...to dusra kanha hai....jisme ki achchi powers hai....
Kya wo abhi bhi Elizabeth ke andar hai....OR agar ander hai to jab wo thik hogi tab bhi to wo chhota hee rahega....
Dusra....agar dono ak hee hai....only Hayaan....to phir ye kyo kaha gaya ki dono jab ak honge..??...

2.....jaise ki aapne stoey me Jean zenom or baaki chijo ki baat ki hai....us hisaab se story current Era me chal rahi hai....
To current Era mai aisi konsi jagah hai janha 5 ya 6 laakh rupay mai....bada Bangla milta hai....
OR to or 6 laakh ke jewellery par max 5 ka hee loan mil sakta hai...usme aapne 3...4 gaadi ya kharidte dikha diya....ye scene thoda funny laga....

3.....OR most.....wo condom waali baat.....I mean really .....
11......12 saal ka Bachche....maa more condom ke liye chhida rahe hai.....really.....bahut logo ko scene funny laga hoga....lekin mujhe sabse kharaab laga....jitna ki mujhe starting ke 10 updates nahi lage the......
12 saal.ke bachche apni mom se condom ke baare mai baat karte hai....OR baat hee nahi use chidaate bhi hai....
OR unki mom bhi use mazaak me leti hai.....
Bhai mana ki zamane modern hai or is age se bhi chhote bachche ke haath me phone or laptop hai.....lekin maa ka bachche ke condom ke baare me bolne par mazaak me taalna.....not good....

Kuch logo ko ye normal lag sakta hai lekin mujhe bilkul thik nahi laga....

Ab baat karte hai starting ke 10 updates ki.......
To sabse pahle to mujhe ye batao ki update 1 kaha hai....mujhe to kanhi bhi nahi dikha.....
Aapne start hee update 2 se kiya hai.....
OR maine bhi...maine kya sabhi ne wanhi se padha hai....

Maine aapki story par jo negative reply kiya tha....wo starting ke unhi 9 updates ko dekh kar kiya tha.....kyoki mujhe wo itne jyada kharaab lage the ki mai aage nahi padh paya.....OR wo comment kiya...

Yanha tak ki aapne jab dobara bulaya tab bhi mera mann nahin tha padhne ka lekin aage ke updates me aapne unhe niraash nahi kiya....balki ummid se khada achcha kaam kiya....
starting same VJ ki story ki tarah thi......no changes.....yanha tak ki apne naam bhi same de diya....LORD OF ANGEL.....
Bas osmodius ki jagah elbis kar diya.....

uske baad achanak se uska rogue ho jana or apni ak alag duniya basa lena....plus uska ak beta same uski tarah bura....

Ye sab mujhe same copy laga.....saath hee update 5 or 6 me aapne jo likha wo to meri samajh hee nahi aaya.....ak bhi line dusri line se relate nahi kar rahi.....
Update 2 se 9 tak aapki writing mujhe aisi lagi jaise koi mazaak mai likh raha hai....

Lekin 10 update.....jisme ki aapne sex dikhaya usme har line bahut achchi tarah se likhi hui thi....saari ak dusre se relate bhi kar rahi thi or feelings bhi thi...tab mujhe laga aap baaki to pata nahi lekin sex achcha likh sakte hai....OR mai story me bas sex padhne nahi aata.....story main chij hai mere liye...

Ye bhi kaaran tha mera reply na karne ka.....

Anyways
Update 11 ke baad se aapne har update perfect likha hai....OR feelings......thrill or suspence kaafi achchi tarah dikhaya hai....

So just keep it up....
Entertain us....
Keep writing
Thanks....


OR ha ab se mai har update ke liye reviews dunga....
Once again
Thanks....

Ab tk ka best review ....hai ye story PR aisa mujhe lgta hai..apne story ki bad or good chiz dono btai.. ..I agree mujhe v starting Mai lga ye V.J Bhai ki story ki copy hai.but bad mai SB kuch badla..
Aate hi condam wali bate PR... I know AP apni jagh bilkul sahi hai..apne ek BT suna hoga..jrurat SE jayda hoshiyar acha nhi hota same apna hero v hai....jrurat SE jayda tej hai or uski soch Bache wali v nhi hai .
Guruji ne saf kah diy hai Hayaan ke liye .
Kabi is naraj or gussa or dukhi Mt krna..bc
Sayd ek reason ye ho...may be.
Aate hai Hayaan ki power wali BT PR bhai.hayaan ke undar dono power hai but jrurat SE jayda black power ..
Avi tk apne story Mai gor nhi kiye Elizabeth ke mom dad pari lok SE bahr the...or Geryon apni power SE parilok ko seal kiy ..usne bola tha .ab koi v parilok Mai na ja skta na bahr aaskta hai ..to dono kaise parilok Mai gye ..
Or Elizabeth ke sath Jo Geryon kiy uske bad achank uski body gyab kiw Hui or Kon kiy iska v reply sayd future update mil Jaye..
But ek BT mujhe sbse jayda acha lga..
Apparently review padh KR. Sach apki review aptk ki padhi mere liye best review hai

 

[Vikram singh rana]

Ab tk ka best review ....hai ye story PR aisa mujhe lgta hai..apne story ki bad or good chiz dono btai.. ..I agree mujhe v starting Mai lga ye V.J Bhai ki story ki copy hai.but bad mai SB kuch badla..
Aate hi condam wali bate PR... I know AP apni jagh bilkul sahi hai..apne ek BT suna hoga..jrurat SE jayda hoshiyar acha nhi hota same apna hero v hai....jrurat SE jayda tej hai or uski soch Bache wali v nhi hai .
Guruji ne saf kah diy hai Hayaan ke liye .
Kabi is naraj or gussa or dukhi Mt krna..bc
Sayd ek reason ye ho...may be.
Aate hai Hayaan ki power wali BT PR bhai.hayaan ke undar dono power hai but jrurat SE jayda black power ..
Avi tk apne story Mai gor nhi kiye Elizabeth ke mom dad pari lok SE bahr the...or Geryon apni power SE parilok ko seal kiy ..usne bola tha .ab koi v parilok Mai na ja skta na bahr aaskta hai ..to dono kaise parilok Mai gye ..
Or Elizabeth ke sath Jo Geryon kiy uske bad achank uski body gyab kiw Hui or Kon kiy iska v reply sayd future update mil Jaye..
But ek BT mujhe sbse jayda acha lga..
Apparently review padh KR. Sach apki review aptk ki padhi mere liye best review hai

Sabse pahle to thanks....
Ab baat kare aapne reply ki to....dhyaan to mujhe sab hai.....
Lekin maine bas wo chije bataayi hai jinme ki writer change nahi kar sakta....in future.....

OR aap jo kah rahe he....wo baat ak dum sahi hai....lekin ye thahri ak fantasy story....
Writer ise kaise bhi kisi bhi disha Me ghuma sakta hai....
OR aapke questions ka jawaab bhi wo aage tod- marod kar de sakta hai....

Thanks....