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Abh Agge... [4rth day Continue]


Khushi ko behad pyass lagi thi , usne suhana ke mayavi jarne se behta pani piya , or apni pyas buja kar , uth kar muskrane lagi ,


par jaise hi khushi ne nazar ghuma kar piche dekha , voh jaise hi piche palti , tab uski akhon me dar ke badal mandrane lage ,


khushi ne dekha , yaha pehle hara-bhara jungle tha , abh vaha vahi kali andhkar se bhari jamen thi , sab kuch gyab ho gya tha , phir khushi ne jarne ki traf dekha , uff abh vaha koi jarna nai tha , sirf door tak phaili verian kali jamen thi , jis par kafi andhera chaya hua tha ,


khushi ne charo traf nazar doadai , par abh vaha suhana bhi nai thi , pata nai , palak japakte hi suhana kaha gyab ho gai thi , es bat se khushi or ghabra gai , kyu ki abh mayajaal gehra hota ja reha tha ,


"suhana , suhana , kaha ho tum , samne ayo , kaha ho..." khushi bahut tez tez awaz dete suhana ko pukarte hue chalne lagi ,


tabhi uske pair se kuch takra gya , khushi ne niche jamen ki traf nazar doada kar dekha , toh uski sanse thamne ko a gai , kyu ki jis cheez se uska pair abhi takraya tha , voh ik insani khopdi thi ,


"ohhh noo yeh kyaa..." abhi khushi etna hi boli thi , ke jamen par shaya andhera ik dam khatam ho gya , par jo nazara khushi ki akhon ke samne tha , voh behad daravna or byank partit ho reha tha ,


"naiiiiiiiiiiii..." khushi dar se chila uthi , kyu ki uski khubsurat , dari , sehmi , akhon ke samne , jamen par khopdyian bhikhri hui thi ,

wilfred owen short poems


yaha tak khushi ki nazar jati , vaha tak sirf insani khopdyian kisi bejan pathar ki trah jamen par padhi chamak rehi thi ,


"ahhhhhh raviiiii..." apna demon roop bhul chuki khushi behad jor se chekh uthi , uski chekh me behad dar tha , sharir par pasine ki boonde tapakne lagi thi ,


khushi vaha se bhagne lagi , par tabhi uske samne , ik deewar a gai , jise dekh khushi ke rongte khade ho gye ,





kyu ki voh pori deewar khopdyian se bani hui thi , jinki akhon ke sathan par , behad andhera sa dikh reha tha ,


"raviiiii bachaoooo plsss..." khushi vapis palat bhagne lagi , par tabhi voh yaha thi vahi ruk gai , uske pair vahi jam sa gye , hatho or pairo me ik kampan si hone lagi , honth thar thar kampne lage ,





uske darne ka karan sehbhavik tha , kyu ki voh khopdyian apas ki or khisakti hui , ik partab ka nirman kar rehi thi , voh bada sa khopdyion se bana partab abh khushi ki traf badhne laga tha ,


"hey bhagwan abh kya karu mee , maaaa..." khushi behad rote hue man hi man boli , kyu ki voh suhana ke mayajaal me dhas chuki thi ,


khushi ke piche khopdyion ki deewar thi , or uske samne khopdyian ik partab ki roop me uski traf dhere dhere badh rehi thi , achank khushi yaha khadi thi , vaha se dhayi traf bhagne lagi , par tabhi ,


"ahhhhhhh ..." par tabhi khushi dard se kahrahti hui jamen par gai , use aisa laga jaise kisi ne uska pair pakad kar gira diya ho ,


"ahhhhh meraa saarrr..." khushi niche giri kahrahte hue apna matha sehlane lagi , jo uske girne se jamen par padhi ik khopdi se takra gya tha ,


voh akhen band kar apna matha sehlati rehi , par tabhi voh chonk gai , kyu ki jaise hi khushi ne apni akhen kholi , voh dar ke antim shikar par pahunch gai , uske man se ik behad dardnak chekh utpan hui , jo uske gale ko fadti hui , ik awaz ka roop le gaiii ,


"aaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhnnnhhh...." khushi ne apni pori jaan laga , apne dar ko apni chekh se bahar nikalna chaha , par aisa hua kya tha ,


hua yeh tha ke jis cheez ne use giraya tha , voh ik kankal tha , jo khopdyian vaha bejan padhi hui thi , abh voh pora ka pora kankal ban chuki thi , unke hath or pair bhi the , bus ik jism hi nai tha unke pas ,





voh insani kankal niche giri khushi ki traf charo traf se jamen par rengte hue agge badne lage ,


khushi apne hath pair patakne lagi , uthne ki kossih karne lagi , par sab vyarth tha ,


"raviiii bachaooo plsse , me mar jaugiii bachaooo , maaa aaahhhhhh..." khushi dar se chekhte hue ravi ko pukarne lagi , par es jagah se uski awaz ravi tak nai pahunch pa rehi thi ,





dhere dhere voh kankal buri atmayion me badal gye , voh khushi par havi hone lagi , uske pore jism ko jakadne lagi , or khushi bebas or lachar jamen par padhi rehi , abh usse hila bhi nai ja reha tha ,


uski akhen band hone lagi , akhen band hote hi voh kisi sapne me kho gai ,


"prince , jung par ja rehe ho , me bhi sath chalugi , muze har mayajaal ka tod ata hai.." tamas behad gusse me boli ,


"tamas , har mayajaal ik jaisa nai hota , or ham kabhi pure nai ho sakte , kuch na kuch kami ham me hamesha reh jati hai.." devil apne singhasan par betha dahad kar bola , uski awaz behad bhari thi , or akhen or jism bilkul lal ,


"hehe , aisa koi mayajaal nai jo tamas kabhi tod na paye , har mayajaal ka tod janti hai tamas..." tamas behad muskrate hue boli ,


"yadion ka mayajaal , ik aisa mayajaal yaha me bhi kaid ho jau , toh sadyion tak bhatakta rahu..."


"yadion ka mayajaal , hmm , lekin aisa mayajaal mane kabhi nai suna , batao na uske bare me..." tamas utsukta vash boli ,


"yeh brehmand bahut vishal hai , es brehmand ki har cheez ik mayajaal hai , or es mayajaal ki rachna kisi behad shaktishali urza ne ki hai , ham sab uske samne khilone hain , voh khelta hai hamare sath , kisi mayajaal se bahar nikalna , mumkin toh hai par namumkin bhi nai , me tume yadion ke mayajaal ke bare me bata reha tha hai na..." prince devil muskrate hue bola ,


"han , vahi janne ke liye utsuk hu..."


"yadion ka mayajaal behad gehra or vishal hota hai , vaha se jitna bahar nikalna chaho , ham or ander dhaste jate hain , abh dunia ko dekh lo , har insan yadion se ghira hua hai , jo use acha lagta hai voh uski yadion ka hissa ban jata hai , achi yadian dukh nai deti , par buri yadian bahut dukh deti hain , voh havi hoti rehti hain , jab tak akhri sans na nikal jaye , insan yadion se bahar nai nikal sakte , lekin ham nikal sakte hain ..." prince devil behad sochte hue bola ,


"han , voh kaise..."


"yadion ke mayajaal se nikalne ka ik hi rasta hai , jiska mayajaal hai uski trah socho , or phir mehsus karo ki tum vahi ho , jiska yeh sara mayajaal hai , tum azad ho jaugi..." devil yeh bol uth khada hua ,


tabhi khushi ne apni akhen kholi , uski akhen safad roshni me chamak rehi thi ,


"me hu suhanaaaaaaaaahhh..." khushi jor se chekhti uth khadi hui , ik tez tufan sa utha , sari kankal ke roop me jo buri atmayian thi , voh jal kar rakh ho gai ,





khushi jamen se udd rehi thi , usne ik black dress pehan rakhi thi , par ajeeb bat yeh thi , uski akhen gulabi rang me chamak rehi thi , uske as-pas tez tufan uthne lage the ,





kuch wakht beeta tha , ke suhana ik chair par bethi hui thi , uske piche asman me vahi kale panchi udd rehe the , uske hontho par ik muskan thi , or prithvi par vansha jungle ke us kabile me , khushi apne bed par chain ki nend so rehi thi , lekin kuch toh ajeeb hua tha...


vahi dusri traf....


baby or kat hospital pahunch chuki thi , doctor nelam ne fari ko admit karva diya tha , uska elaaz chal reha tha , vahi kat or baby , room ke bahar bethi ro rehi thi ,


unki halat har koi nai samaz sakta , voh dono abh maa thi , beti par jara si bhi anch aye toh maa ka dil jal uthta hai , asnu khud ba khud behne lagte hain , or jo ander se , dil me taklef hoti hai , uska shabado me byan nai ho sakta ,


beti apne baap ki ladli hoti hai , par maa apna prem apne dil me chupaye rakhti hai , lekin uska prem baap se kam nai hota , lekin kuch ladkyian es bat ko jindgi bhar samaz nai pati , ke unki maa unko kitna pyar karti hai , voh roti hai , hasti hai , apni beti ko apni trah banana chahti hai , jo beti apni maa ke gehre prem ko samaz gai , samazo usne sab pa liya apni jindgi me ,


"kat chup ho jao , kuch nai hoga fari ko..." baby apne asnu apne ander hi samet kar , kat ko sambalte hue boli ,


"kaise , kaise , chup ho jau , meri beti behosh padhi hai , par , par , tum , tum yeh batao , tum rema ko janti ho pehle se , bolo na yeh sach hai , tume pata tha rema vaha rehti hai..." kat beintha rote hue boli , uska rona sehbhavik tha , kyu ki uska dil abh pani ki trah naram ho chuka tha , uske dil shunya (0) ki sathithi par pahunch chuka tha ,


"katt , mat socho uske bare me , voh batian tume dard dengi , bus fari ke bare me socho..." baby phir se rote hue boli ,


"mat socho , tum pagal ho , us shetian ko dekh , meri beti behosh ho gai , voh bematlab bat nai hai , bus etna batao tum janti thi rema ko ya naii..." kat es bar rote hue thoda gusse me boli ,


"voh , voh , rema , voh , rema , ravi ki behan hai , par voh shetian nai hai , voh achi hai..." baby bin matlab bation me ulazte hue ro kar boli ,


"hmm , tumne gunah kiya hai , apni beti ko us shetian ke saye me rakha , janti ho , eski kemet kitni badi hogi , me kyu ayi , me pagal thi , me vahi rehti shehar me , kam se kam meri beti toh mehfoz rehti , ik bat dhyan se sun lo , me kisi ko maf nai karugi , na tume , na ravi ko , na kisi or ko , me apni beti ko vapis us shetian ke saye me nai jane dungi , yeh mera akhri faisla hai , or agar koi mere or meri beti ke bech aya , toh eska anjam bahut bura hoga..." kat ik dam se tez tez rote hue apne gusse ki akhri seema tak pahunchte hue boli , uska gussa abh pori dunia ko dard de reha tha , khas kar baby ko , baby ke jism me dard uthne laga tha ,


"ahhhh plss gussa mat karoo , tum jo kahugi vaisa hi hoga , plss shant ho jaoo , kattt rona band karoo , tume meri kasam , hamare pyar ki kasam , plss kattt..." baby us lakadi ke bench se niche girte hue dard se kahrahte hue , beintha rote hue boli ,


"rasta chuno , koi ik rasta , mere sath rahugi , ya ravi ke sath , jaladi bolo..." kat or bhi rote hue , or bhi gussa karte hue boli ,


"rr...r..ravii...kk..kee...ss...ss...sathhhh..." baby apni ukhad rehi sanso ko sambalte hue boli , uska jism jalne laga tha , jism ka mass bhi fat reha tha ,


"tohhh jaooo yahaaa seee , door ho jaoo meri nazarion see , dhokebaj , jaoo..." kat beintha rote hue gusse me chikate hue boli , uska sharir fat gya , lekin uska asli roop baby ne dekh liya , baby se uske asli jism ka tez saha na gya , usne apni akhon par hath rakh liye , par jaise hi usne apni akhen kholi , voh ghar par thi , apne room me bed par leti hui , voh rone lagi , beintha rone lagi , par es ghatna se kat khud ko pehchan gai thi , lekin kya voh , kisi ko bhi abh , fari ke karib anne deti , yeh toh anne wale wakht ki bat thi....


to be counited.....

 

sorbobhuk

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update-102


Abh Agge... [4rth day Continue]


Khushi ko behad pyass lagi thi , usne suhana ke mayavi jarne se behta pani piya , or apni pyas buja kar , uth kar muskrane lagi ,


par jaise hi khushi ne nazar ghuma kar piche dekha , voh jaise hi piche palti , tab uski akhon me dar ke badal mandrane lage ,


khushi ne dekha , yaha pehle hara-bhara jungle tha , abh vaha vahi kali andhkar se bhari jamen thi , sab kuch gyab ho gya tha , phir khushi ne jarne ki traf dekha , uff abh vaha koi jarna nai tha , sirf door tak phaili verian kali jamen thi , jis par kafi andhera chaya hua tha ,


khushi ne charo traf nazar doadai , par abh vaha suhana bhi nai thi , pata nai , palak japakte hi suhana kaha gyab ho gai thi , es bat se khushi or ghabra gai , kyu ki abh mayajaal gehra hota ja reha tha ,


"suhana , suhana , kaha ho tum , samne ayo , kaha ho..." khushi bahut tez tez awaz dete suhana ko pukarte hue chalne lagi ,


tabhi uske pair se kuch takra gya , khushi ne niche jamen ki traf nazar doada kar dekha , toh uski sanse thamne ko a gai , kyu ki jis cheez se uska pair abhi takraya tha , voh ik insani khopdi thi ,


"ohhh noo yeh kyaa..." abhi khushi etna hi boli thi , ke jamen par shaya andhera ik dam khatam ho gya , par jo nazara khushi ki akhon ke samne tha , voh behad daravna or byank partit ho reha tha ,


"naiiiiiiiiiiii..." khushi dar se chila uthi , kyu ki uski khubsurat , dari , sehmi , akhon ke samne , jamen par khopdyian bhikhri hui thi ,

wilfred owen short poems


yaha tak khushi ki nazar jati , vaha tak sirf insani khopdyian kisi bejan pathar ki trah jamen par padhi chamak rehi thi ,


"ahhhhhh raviiiii..." apna demon roop bhul chuki khushi behad jor se chekh uthi , uski chekh me behad dar tha , sharir par pasine ki boonde tapakne lagi thi ,


khushi vaha se bhagne lagi , par tabhi uske samne , ik deewar a gai , jise dekh khushi ke rongte khade ho gye ,





kyu ki voh pori deewar khopdyian se bani hui thi , jinki akhon ke sathan par , behad andhera sa dikh reha tha ,


"raviiiii bachaoooo plsss..." khushi vapis palat bhagne lagi , par tabhi voh yaha thi vahi ruk gai , uske pair vahi jam sa gye , hatho or pairo me ik kampan si hone lagi , honth thar thar kampne lage ,





uske darne ka karan sehbhavik tha , kyu ki voh khopdyian apas ki or khisakti hui , ik partab ka nirman kar rehi thi , voh bada sa khopdyion se bana partab abh khushi ki traf badhne laga tha ,


"hey bhagwan abh kya karu mee , maaaa..." khushi behad rote hue man hi man boli , kyu ki voh suhana ke mayajaal me dhas chuki thi ,


khushi ke piche khopdyion ki deewar thi , or uske samne khopdyian ik partab ki roop me uski traf dhere dhere badh rehi thi , achank khushi yaha khadi thi , vaha se dhayi traf bhagne lagi , par tabhi ,


"ahhhhhhh ..." par tabhi khushi dard se kahrahti hui jamen par gai , use aisa laga jaise kisi ne uska pair pakad kar gira diya ho ,


"ahhhhh meraa saarrr..." khushi niche giri kahrahte hue apna matha sehlane lagi , jo uske girne se jamen par padhi ik khopdi se takra gya tha ,


voh akhen band kar apna matha sehlati rehi , par tabhi voh chonk gai , kyu ki jaise hi khushi ne apni akhen kholi , voh dar ke antim shikar par pahunch gai , uske man se ik behad dardnak chekh utpan hui , jo uske gale ko fadti hui , ik awaz ka roop le gaiii ,


"aaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhnnnhhh...." khushi ne apni pori jaan laga , apne dar ko apni chekh se bahar nikalna chaha , par aisa hua kya tha ,


hua yeh tha ke jis cheez ne use giraya tha , voh ik kankal tha , jo khopdyian vaha bejan padhi hui thi , abh voh pora ka pora kankal ban chuki thi , unke hath or pair bhi the , bus ik jism hi nai tha unke pas ,





voh insani kankal niche giri khushi ki traf charo traf se jamen par rengte hue agge badne lage ,


khushi apne hath pair patakne lagi , uthne ki kossih karne lagi , par sab vyarth tha ,


"raviiii bachaooo plsse , me mar jaugiii bachaooo , maaa aaahhhhhh..." khushi dar se chekhte hue ravi ko pukarne lagi , par es jagah se uski awaz ravi tak nai pahunch pa rehi thi ,





dhere dhere voh kankal buri atmayion me badal gye , voh khushi par havi hone lagi , uske pore jism ko jakadne lagi , or khushi bebas or lachar jamen par padhi rehi , abh usse hila bhi nai ja reha tha ,


uski akhen band hone lagi , akhen band hote hi voh kisi sapne me kho gai ,


"prince , jung par ja rehe ho , me bhi sath chalugi , muze har mayajaal ka tod ata hai.." tamas behad gusse me boli ,


"tamas , har mayajaal ik jaisa nai hota , or ham kabhi pure nai ho sakte , kuch na kuch kami ham me hamesha reh jati hai.." devil apne singhasan par betha dahad kar bola , uski awaz behad bhari thi , or akhen or jism bilkul lal ,


"hehe , aisa koi mayajaal nai jo tamas kabhi tod na paye , har mayajaal ka tod janti hai tamas..." tamas behad muskrate hue boli ,


"yadion ka mayajaal , ik aisa mayajaal yaha me bhi kaid ho jau , toh sadyion tak bhatakta rahu..."


"yadion ka mayajaal , hmm , lekin aisa mayajaal mane kabhi nai suna , batao na uske bare me..." tamas utsukta vash boli ,


"yeh brehmand bahut vishal hai , es brehmand ki har cheez ik mayajaal hai , or es mayajaal ki rachna kisi behad shaktishali urza ne ki hai , ham sab uske samne khilone hain , voh khelta hai hamare sath , kisi mayajaal se bahar nikalna , mumkin toh hai par namumkin bhi nai , me tume yadion ke mayajaal ke bare me bata reha tha hai na..." prince devil muskrate hue bola ,


"han , vahi janne ke liye utsuk hu..."


"yadion ka mayajaal behad gehra or vishal hota hai , vaha se jitna bahar nikalna chaho , ham or ander dhaste jate hain , abh dunia ko dekh lo , har insan yadion se ghira hua hai , jo use acha lagta hai voh uski yadion ka hissa ban jata hai , achi yadian dukh nai deti , par buri yadian bahut dukh deti hain , voh havi hoti rehti hain , jab tak akhri sans na nikal jaye , insan yadion se bahar nai nikal sakte , lekin ham nikal sakte hain ..." prince devil behad sochte hue bola ,


"han , voh kaise..."


"yadion ke mayajaal se nikalne ka ik hi rasta hai , jiska mayajaal hai uski trah socho , or phir mehsus karo ki tum vahi ho , jiska yeh sara mayajaal hai , tum azad ho jaugi..." devil yeh bol uth khada hua ,


tabhi khushi ne apni akhen kholi , uski akhen safad roshni me chamak rehi thi ,


"me hu suhanaaaaaaaaahhh..." khushi jor se chekhti uth khadi hui , ik tez tufan sa utha , sari kankal ke roop me jo buri atmayian thi , voh jal kar rakh ho gai ,





khushi jamen se udd rehi thi , usne ik black dress pehan rakhi thi , par ajeeb bat yeh thi , uski akhen gulabi rang me chamak rehi thi , uske as-pas tez tufan uthne lage the ,





kuch wakht beeta tha , ke suhana ik chair par bethi hui thi , uske piche asman me vahi kale panchi udd rehe the , uske hontho par ik muskan thi , or prithvi par vansha jungle ke us kabile me , khushi apne bed par chain ki nend so rehi thi , lekin kuch toh ajeeb hua tha...


vahi dusri traf....


baby or kat hospital pahunch chuki thi , doctor nelam ne fari ko admit karva diya tha , uska elaaz chal reha tha , vahi kat or baby , room ke bahar bethi ro rehi thi ,


unki halat har koi nai samaz sakta , voh dono abh maa thi , beti par jara si bhi anch aye toh maa ka dil jal uthta hai , asnu khud ba khud behne lagte hain , or jo ander se , dil me taklef hoti hai , uska shabado me byan nai ho sakta ,


beti apne baap ki ladli hoti hai , par maa apna prem apne dil me chupaye rakhti hai , lekin uska prem baap se kam nai hota , lekin kuch ladkyian es bat ko jindgi bhar samaz nai pati , ke unki maa unko kitna pyar karti hai , voh roti hai , hasti hai , apni beti ko apni trah banana chahti hai , jo beti apni maa ke gehre prem ko samaz gai , samazo usne sab pa liya apni jindgi me ,


"kat chup ho jao , kuch nai hoga fari ko..." baby apne asnu apne ander hi samet kar , kat ko sambalte hue boli ,


"kaise , kaise , chup ho jau , meri beti behosh padhi hai , par , par , tum , tum yeh batao , tum rema ko janti ho pehle se , bolo na yeh sach hai , tume pata tha rema vaha rehti hai..." kat beintha rote hue boli , uska rona sehbhavik tha , kyu ki uska dil abh pani ki trah naram ho chuka tha , uske dil shunya (0) ki sathithi par pahunch chuka tha ,


"katt , mat socho uske bare me , voh batian tume dard dengi , bus fari ke bare me socho..." baby phir se rote hue boli ,


"mat socho , tum pagal ho , us shetian ko dekh , meri beti behosh ho gai , voh bematlab bat nai hai , bus etna batao tum janti thi rema ko ya naii..." kat es bar rote hue thoda gusse me boli ,


"voh , voh , rema , voh , rema , ravi ki behan hai , par voh shetian nai hai , voh achi hai..." baby bin matlab bation me ulazte hue ro kar boli ,


"hmm , tumne gunah kiya hai , apni beti ko us shetian ke saye me rakha , janti ho , eski kemet kitni badi hogi , me kyu ayi , me pagal thi , me vahi rehti shehar me , kam se kam meri beti toh mehfoz rehti , ik bat dhyan se sun lo , me kisi ko maf nai karugi , na tume , na ravi ko , na kisi or ko , me apni beti ko vapis us shetian ke saye me nai jane dungi , yeh mera akhri faisla hai , or agar koi mere or meri beti ke bech aya , toh eska anjam bahut bura hoga..." kat ik dam se tez tez rote hue apne gusse ki akhri seema tak pahunchte hue boli , uska gussa abh pori dunia ko dard de reha tha , khas kar baby ko , baby ke jism me dard uthne laga tha ,


"ahhhh plss gussa mat karoo , tum jo kahugi vaisa hi hoga , plss shant ho jaoo , kattt rona band karoo , tume meri kasam , hamare pyar ki kasam , plss kattt..." baby us lakadi ke bench se niche girte hue dard se kahrahte hue , beintha rote hue boli ,


"rasta chuno , koi ik rasta , mere sath rahugi , ya ravi ke sath , jaladi bolo..." kat or bhi rote hue , or bhi gussa karte hue boli ,


"rr...r..ravii...kk..kee...ss...ss...sathhhh..." baby apni ukhad rehi sanso ko sambalte hue boli , uska jism jalne laga tha , jism ka mass bhi fat reha tha ,


"tohhh jaooo yahaaa seee , door ho jaoo meri nazarion see , dhokebaj , jaoo..." kat beintha rote hue gusse me chikate hue boli , uska sharir fat gya , lekin uska asli roop baby ne dekh liya , baby se uske asli jism ka tez saha na gya , usne apni akhon par hath rakh liye , par jaise hi usne apni akhen kholi , voh ghar par thi , apne room me bed par leti hui , voh rone lagi , beintha rone lagi , par es ghatna se kat khud ko pehchan gai thi , lekin kya voh , kisi ko bhi abh , fari ke karib anne deti , yeh toh anne wale wakht ki bat thi....


to be counited.....
bahut badhiya update..... akhir khushi suhana ke mayajal se azad ho geya..... or suhana kyu muskara rahi hai. apne kaha ko khushi ki chapter is update me clear hi jeyaga...liken khushi sirf suhana ke mayajal se azad huyi hai....seema or khushi ke body to ghar me to ye sab koun kar rahe hai....
or ko apni pehchan ho geyi hai....ab dekhte hai aage kya hota hai
waiting for next update
 
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sraab

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me apni beti ko vapis us shetian ke saye me nai jane dungi , yeh mera akhri faisla hai
Jis ceez ka dar tha wahi hua, kat nahi milne degi lekin fari to jaana cahegi ravi aur baby ke paas, ravi ke liye abhi sahi huya hai kyuki kat paas mai rehti to kisi se fight bhi nahi kar paate ye log:lol:
 
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superb update
khushi suhana ke majaal me fas kar apni takat bhul gayi thi.
lakin phir use ravi ke dwara yadon ka mayajaal ke todne ka tarika yaad aaya.
or usne suhana ka mahajaal tod diya.
lakin abhi khushi to ghar me so rahi hai.
kat apni takat pahchan gayi hai.
usne baby ko hospital se ghar direct teleport kar diya.
kat fari ke liye kissi ko maf nhi karegi.
or vo fari ko en saitano ke beech nhi. chod sakti.
or ravi bina fari ke rah nhi skta.
vo use lekar sahar jane wali hai.
 
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mast mast update Bhai :superb:

lekin bhai ek bat kahna chahunga aap bura na manna aapne ye story ko xp pe start ki thi wahan bhi ise kafi pyar mila wahan ki bhi bahut yaden hain achhi-buri jaise bhi ho xp gajab ka tha aapne is story pe apne readers ke liye bahut mehnat kiya h ye sabhi jante hain kahne ki jaroorat nahin aur phir readers ya phir ye kahna sahi rahega khas purane readers jo jinse ek judav sa ho gaya bhale hi ham kisi ko naam se na jane lekin apnapan ban gaya time ke sath un logo ki bhi mang se aapne yahan bhi ise continue kiya aur usi khoobsurati se yahan bhi aage badhaya aur thoda kam hi sahi magar logo ne ise pasand ki kyoki aapki lekhni achhi hi rahi wahi style aur badlaw main aapki lekhni main nikar aaya h
Aur maine ye bhi suna hai ki aapki sehat sahi nahin rahti aaye din aapko pateshani ho jati hai maine kabhi story to nahin likhi h lekin main ye mahsoosh jaroor karta hun aapko ise continue karna mushkil h aur wese bhi har cheese ka time hota hai sahi samay pe samapan ka aur ye sirf mera sujhav hai ki ye jo part 4 h ise last hi rakho aur jaroori nahin story main kai baten ya points rah jayen to unhe aap jaroor dikhaye life me hamesha kuch sawal rah hi jaten hain sab perfect ho yesa nahin hota aur isi ko last part main is kahani ka samapan khoobsurat tarike se kariye kyoki jyada kheechne se phir achha bhi nahin lagta koi bhi cheese ho
janta hun kai log aapse update mangege hi aur shayad kuch bhi bura kahen

main ye nahin kah raha aap story likhna band karde ya aapki lekhni pasand nahin bas kabhi sochta hun aapko bhi ab itna tension nahin lena chahiye aapko bhi rest lena chahiye aur aap aage dusri story bhi likh sakte hain aur agar short main likhe to aur bhi behtar likhoge jaroori to nahin ki is ek story se hi jane jao aap sab jante hain aap kushal writer hain bas aap sath rahen xf ke ,likh ke hi nahin wese bhi kai bar sunta hun aapko hospital bhi rahna padta hai yese main yahan pe story ka sochna khud se bura lagta hai achha nahin lagta

Shayad main jo kahna chahta tha uska arth aap samajh hi gayen honge aur agar aapke is chhote se reader bhai ke baton ka kahin bura laga ho to jhama kar dena . . . .
 
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