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Introduction -


  • Ammi: Rafat (42) – Sundar, curvy (38-28-40), shareef ammi. Bahar dupatta pehenti hai, ghar mein attractive aur modestly dressed rehti hai. Shuru mein bahut conservative aur reluctant hai lekin story me dhere dhere zina ki rah pe jayegi.




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  • Husband: Parvez (48) – Kamzor, passive, beta male. Shuru mein bilkul oblivious, baad mein ek broken namard cuck ban jaata hai.


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  • Beta: Abdul (18) – Kamzor, shy, wimpy school student, total mama’s boy.


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  • Sana - Abdul's GF and Cousin (Khala ki Beti) Supporting Role Only


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  • Main Bully: Rudra – Strong, extremely dominant, gym-built, well-hung, intelligent mastermind, BSS cult ka leader.


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  • Supporting Bullies: Ravi (Rudra ka sabse close), Kundan, Umesh aur Raghav.


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(AGAR FULL MAZA CHAHIYE STORY PADHNE KA TOH UPER JO AMMI KI PHOTO HAI USE SAVE KARKE OPEN KARLO AUR STORY KO NOTEPAD PE COPY PASTE KARKE SIDE BY SIDE PADHO SPLIT-WINDOW ME BAHUT MAZA AYEGA)
 
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आपकी पहले से ही कई कहानियाँ जारी हैं, और अब उनके बीच आपने यह नई कहानी भी शुरू कर दी! :innocent:

ऐसे में कई बार किरदारों के बीच उलझन पैदा हो जाती है। एक कहानी के पात्र दूसरी कहानी में और दूसरी कहानी के पात्र पहली कहानी में दिखाई देने लगते हैं, जिससे कथानक का प्रभाव थोड़ा कम हो जाता है। :dontknow:
bhai aap ek ek karke padho...yeh story abhi start hone me time hai mai isko ultra slow burn likhunga....isme.wo sari galtiyaan theek ki jayegi jo baki stories me ho chuki hai...
 
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bhai aap ek ek karke padho...yeh story abhi start hone me time hai mai isko ultra slow burn likhunga....isme.wo sari galtiyaan theek ki jayegi jo baki stories me ho chuki hai...
एक लेखक होने के नाते मैंने अपने विचार व्यक्त किए। अब जब आपने स्पष्ट कर दिया है कि इसे लिखने में आपको समय लगेगा, तो यह बिल्कुल उचित लग रहा है!
 
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Prologue
Arc 1 - Scene 1


Barish ki boondein Mumbai ki galiyon mein tez raftaar se gir rahi thi. Raat ke dus baje the. Abdul apne kamre mein bed par leta hua tha, phone haath mein pakde hue. Uski ungliyan kaanp rahi thi jab usne WhatsApp par aayi hui video ko download kiya.
Video khulte hi uska dil zor se dhadakne laga.
Sana… uski cousin… uski pehle wali girlfriend… ab kisi aur ke saath thi. Aur woh koi aur nahi tha — Rudra. College ka sabse bada bully, wohi jisne Abdul ko roz chhedta tha.
Screen par Sana ki moan goonj rahi thi. Rudra uske peeche se zor-zor se dhakel raha tha. Sana ka chehra pleasure se latpat tha, aankhein band, muh khula hua. “Aur zor se… haan… aur zor se…” uski awaaz aa rahi thi.
Abdul ka gala sukha gaya. Usne apna chhota lund bahar nikaala aur haath se ragadne laga, aankhon mein aansu aur sharam ka mila-jula ehsaas. Yeh uski Sana thi… jo usko chhod kar ab is mard ke saath maze le rahi thi.
Video khatam hone ke baad ek message aaya Rudra ki taraf se.
“Ab dekha? Jo tera hai, woh mera ho jata hai."

Abdul ka haath ruk gaya. Dil mein ek ajeeb si dard aur excitement ka mixture ubal aaya. Usne phone side par rakh diya aur seedha ho kar baith gaya. Bahar barish aur tez ho gayi thi.
Ghar mein uski Ammi Rafat abhi bhi kitchen mein thi. 42 saal ki woh aurat, jo ab bhi apni shareef izzat aur haya ko bahut sambhal ke rakhti thi. Curvy jism — 38 ke bhari-bhari chooche, 28 ki kamar aur 40 ki moti gaand — ghar ke andar bhi salwar-kameez mein dhaki rehti thi. H***b bahar nikalte hi sar par, ghar mein bhi dupatta kabhi nahi hatati.

Lekin Abdul ko ab ek aisa khayal aa raha tha jo usko khud se bhi sharminda kar raha tha.
Kya sach mein Rudra uski Ammi tak pahunch sakta hai?

Us raat Abdul ne pehli baar apni Ammi ke kamre ki taraf dekha… roshandaan ki taraf… jahan se woh kabhi-kabhi jhaak liya karta tha.

Yeh sirf shuruaat thi.
 
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Chapter 1
Arc 1 – Scene 2: Gang Planning Meeting


Barish ab bhi Mumbai ke chhote-chhote mohallon mein tez ho rahi thi. Raat ke lagbhag ek baje the. Rudra apne rented room ke purane sofa par baitha tha. Room mein cigarette ka dhuaan ghuma hua tha. Uske saath Ravi, Kundan, Umesh aur Raghav baithe the — sabhi college ke hi, sabhi Abdul ke classmates.

Rudra ek purani chair par pair chadhaye baitha tha. Uske haath mein phone tha jismein woh abhi-abhi Sana ki video band ki thi. Uske chehre par ek muskurahat thi jo khatarnaak thi.
“BC… yeh Abdul naam ka gandu bilkul toot chuka hai,” Rudra dheere se bola, awaaz mein mazaa tha. “Sana ko chod diya maine. Ab uski aankhon mein aansu dekh kar bhi maza nahi aa raha. Kuch aur chahiye… kuch bada.”

Ravi, jo sabse kareeb baitha tha, ek sip beer pi kar muskuraya.
“Abey toh seedha uski Ammi pe attack kar. Maine dekha hai na… teri Rafat Aunty. Moti gaand, bhari choochiyan… libaas mein bhi lagti hai jaise koi maal ho.”
Kundan hasne laga.
“Haan yaar…shareef ghar ki auratein sabse mazedaar hoti hain. Uski Ammi 42 ki hai lekin abhi bhi itni tight dikhti hai. Parvez Uncle toh bilkul bekaar hai… office ke chakkar mein din bhar ghaas charne jaata hai.”

Umesh ne cigarette sulgaate hue kaha,
“Plan simple rakh. Pehle Abdul ko protect kar… uska dost ban ja. Ghar mein entry le. Phir dheere-dheere Aunty ko patate ja. Yeh logon ki auratein izzat ke chakkar mein sabse jaldi toot ti hain.”

Rudra ki aankhein chhoti ho gayi. Usne phone mein ek photo khola — Rafat ka, jo Abdul ne college function mein liya tha. Rafat salwar suit mein thi, dupatta sar par, lekin uski ada aur jism ki chamak chhup nahi pa rahi thi.
“Rafat…” Rudra dheere se bola, naam ko jaise chaat raha ho. “Yeh naam hi alag hai. shareef, haya wali, izzat wali… aur main ise poori tarah besharam banaunga. Pehle usko apna banaunga… phir uske pati aur bete ke saamne chodunga.”

Sab log hasne lage. Room mein ek bechain si hawa fail gayi.
Raghav ne poocha,
“Lekin bhai… agar Aunty ne mana kar diya toh?”
Rudra muskuraya, ek khatarnaak muskurahat.
“Toh evidence banayenge. Fake chats, fake photos… sab kuch. Aur jab woh tootegi… tab Abdul khud dekh lega ki uski Ammi kaise meri randi ban gayi hai.”

Sab logon ne glass uthaye.
“Abdul ki Ammi ka shikaar!”
Bahari barish tez ho gayi. Jaise woh bhi is plan ko sun rahi ho.

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Chapter 2
Arc 1 – Scene 3: Rudra’s Sudden Protection

College ka corridor us din bhi bheed bhara hua tha. Abdul apna bag kandhe par latkaye, sar jhukaye chal raha tha. Uske dil mein ab bhi Sana wali video ghum rahi thi. Raat bhar neend nahi aayi thi. Har taraf se awaazein aa rahi thi — ladkon ki hansi, ladkiyon ki baatein, cycle ki ghantiyan — lekin Abdul sab kuch door se sun raha tha.
Tabhi aage se teeno senior ladke aaye — Vicky, Sameer aur unka leader Rohan. Yeh log hamesha Abdul ko target karte the. Chhote qad, kamzor jism aur mama’s boy hone ki wajah se woh unke liye perfect scapegoat tha.
“Abe Abdul… aaj phir se mummy ka tiffin laya hai kya?” Rohan ne uske bag par haath maara aur hans pada.
Vicky ne uske collar pakad liya. “Tera chhota lund bhi mummy ke saath hi soya hoga na? Bata… abhi bhi doodh peeta hai?”
Abdul kuch bol nahi paaya. Uske haath kaanp rahe the. Log dekh rahe the. Uske muh se sirf halki si awaaz nikli, “Chhod do bhai…”
Tabhi ek tez awaaz aayi peeche se.
“Oi… chhod usko.”
Sabne mudkar dekha. Rudra tha. Haath mein cigarette, school bag ek taraf latka hua, chehra bilkul thanda. Uske peeche Ravi aur Kundan bhi the.
Rohan ne muskurate hue kaha, “Arre Rudra bhai… yeh toh hamara time pass hai. Tu kyun beech mein…”
Rudra ne ek kadam aage badhkar Rohan ke saamne khade ho gaye. Uski awaaz dheemi lekin sakht thi.
“Maine kaha na… chhod usko. Abdul mera dost hai. Ab se isko koi haath nahi lagayega. Samjha?”
Rohan thoda peeche hat gaya. College mein Rudra ka naam already dangerous tha. Ladai mein tez, body strong, aur doston ka network bada. Vicky ne haath chhod diya.
Rudra ne Abdul ki taraf dekha aur halke se muskuraya.
“Chal bhai… mere saath chal. Aaj se koi tujhe chhedega toh mujhe bata dena.”
Abdul hairaan tha. Yeh wohi Rudra tha jiske baare mein usne itni sari burai suni thi. Lekin aaj usne uski taraf se khade hokar baat ki thi. Usne sirf sar hilaya aur Rudra ke saath chal diya.

Peechhe se Ravi ne dheere se kaha, “Bhai… plan start ho gaya.”
Rudra ne sirf muskurakar jawab diya.
Us din college ke baad Rudra ne Abdul ko bike par baithaya aur ghar tak chhodne chala gaya. Raste mein woh normal baatein karta raha — studies, cricket, movies. Abdul ko pehli baar laga ki koi uski sun raha hai.
Ghar ke paas pahunchkar Rudra ne bike roki.
“Kal milte hain dost. Aur haan… agar ghar mein koi problem ho toh bata dena. Main help kar dunga.”
Abdul ne sirf “Thank you” kaha aur andar chala gaya.
Andar ghar mein Rafat kitchen mein thi. Dupatta sar par sahi se lapeta hua, salwar suit ka kameez thoda tight tha uske bhari jism par. Woh chai bana rahi thi. Abdul ko dekhkar muskurayi.
“Beta… aaj der ho gayi? Thak gaya hoga na? Baith, garam chai pilati hoon.”
Abdul ne Ammi ki taraf dekha. Uske dil mein ek ajeeb si hulchul hui. Kal raat wali video, Rudra ka message, aur aaj Rudra ka yeh sudden support… sab kuch ghum raha tha.
Rafat ne beta ko chai dete hue pyaar se uske sar par haath phera.
“Kya hua beta? Chehra utra hua kyun hai?”
Abdul ne sirf muskurakar kaha, “Kuch nahi Ammi.”
Bahari barish phir se shuru ho gayi thi.
Rudra bahar bike par baitha tha, cigarette sulgaye. Usne upar Rafat ke ghar ki taraf dekha aur dheere se muskuraya.
“Ab asli khel shuru hota hai…”

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Chapter 3
Arc 1 – Scene 4: First Home Entry


Shaam ke chaar baje the. Aasman ka rang gehra grey ho chuka tha. Bijli ki ek tez chamak ke saath zor ki garaj hui aur poora area andhere mein doob gaya. Power cut.
Ghar mein Rafat kitchen ke counter par khadi thi. Haath mein chaku tha, sabzi kaat rahi thi. Usne turant dupatta theek kiya aur halki si sas li. “Yeh bijli bhi na…”

Bahari barish tez ho gayi thi. Abdul college se lauta tha. Uske kapde geele ho rahe the. Woh darwaze par khada tha jab usne dekha — Rudra bike par baitha hua tha, pura bhiga hua, lekin muskurate hue.
“Arre dost, andar aa jaun. Bijli chali gayi hai na? Main bhi thoda ruk jaun kya?” Rudra ne pucha, awaaz mein dostana lehja.
Abdul ka dil dhadka. Usne andar ki taraf dekha. Ammi kitchen mein thi. Parvez Abbu office se abhi tak nahi laute the. Usne dheere se kaha, “Aa ja bhai… andar aa.”
Rudra bike lock karke andar aaya. Uske kapde body se chipak rahe the, powerful shoulders aur chest saaf dikhai de rahe the. Jab woh drawing room mein ghusne laga toh Rafat kitchen se bahar aayi.
“Kaun hai beta?” Rafat ne poocha, dupatta sahi se lapet te hue.
Abdul ne jaldi se jawab diya, “Ammi… yeh Rudra hai… mera college friend. Bijli chali gayi toh bahar bhig raha tha. Thoda ruk jaaye?”
Rafat ne Rudra ko dekha. Woh ek pal ke liye ruk gayi. Ladka jawan tha, confident, aur uski aankhon mein kuch aisa tha jo usko thoda uncomfortable feel karwa raha tha. Phir bhi usne apni shareef haya ko sambhala aur halke se muskurayi.
“Ji… andar aao beta. Bhig gaye ho. Baitho. Main garam chai bana deti hoon.”
Rudra ne namaste kiya, “Namaste Aunty. Sorry takleef ho rahi hai.”
Rafat ne sirf sar hilaya aur kitchen ki taraf chali gayi. Uske salwar suit ka kameez uske bhari jism par sahi se baitha hua tha. Gaand ki halki si hilti hui chaal Abdul ko bhi dikhai de rahi thi, aur Rudra ko toh bilkul.

Drawing room mein baithkar Rudra ne dheere se Abdul se kaha, “Teri Ammi bahut achhi hai yaar. Respectful.”
Abdul ne sirf muskuraya, lekin uske dil mein kuch aur hi chal raha tha.
Kitchen se chai ki khushboo aane lagi. Rafat tray lekar aayi. Usne chai serve ki — pehle Rudra ko, phir Abdul ko. Jab woh jhuki toh uske dupatte ka pallu thoda sarka aur uski bhari choochiyon ki halki si jhalak dikhai di. Rudra ne dekha. Nazar jaldi se hatayi lekin uske honthon par ek halki si smile thi.
“Bahut acchi chai banati ho Aunty,” Rudra ne kaha, awaaz mein sachcha sa praise tha.
Rafat ne sharmate hue kaha, “Bas… ghar ka bana hua. Aap log baat karo, main khana dekh leti hoon.”
Woh wapas kitchen chali gayi. Rudra ne Abdul ki taraf dekha aur dheere se bola, “Teri Ammi sach mein bahut simple aur achhi hai. Tu lucky hai dost.”
Abdul ne sirf sar hilaya. Uske dimag mein kal raat wali video ghum raha tha.

Bijli wapas nahi aayi. Barish aur tez hoti gayi. Rudra almost ek ghante tak baitha raha. Usne family ke baare mein normal baatein ki — Abbu ka office, Abdul ki studies, ghar ka mahoul. Rafat kabhi-kabhi aati thi, kuch baat karti thi, phir wapas kitchen chali jaati thi.
Jab Rudra jaane laga toh usne Rafat se kaha, “Aunty, aap bahut acchi ho. Kal phir aa jaunga kabhi, agar koi problem ho toh bata dena.”
Rafat ne sirf muskurakar jawab diya, “Theek hai beta. Dhyaan rakhna.”
Darwaze par Rudra ne Abdul ke kaan mein dheere se kaha, “Kal milte hain… aur haan… teri Ammi ko mera salam.”

Abdul andar aaya. Rafat kitchen mein khadi thi, soch mein doobi hui. Usne beta ko dekha aur pyaar se bola, “Beta… yeh ladka accha lag raha hai. College mein doston ka sahara rakhna.”
Abdul ne sirf “Haan Ammi” kaha.
Lekin raat ko jab sab so gaye, Abdul apne kamre mein roshandaan ke paas baitha tha. Usne pehli baar Ammi ke bedroom ki taraf dekha… jahan Rafat abhi bhi dupatta sambhal rahi thi aur soch rahi thi ki aaj ghar mein ek naye ladke ka aana kitna strange tha.
Bahari barish ab bhi tez thi.

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Chapter 4
Arc 1 – Scene 5: Small Helpful Gestures & First Family Dinner


Agli teen-chaar din mein Rudra ka aana-jaana ghar mein normal hone laga. Kabhi college ke notes laata, kabhi Abdul ke saath bike par ghar tak chhodne aata, kabhi bijli ka bill dene ke bahane andar aa jaata. Har baar woh Rafat se milta aur ek chhoti si muskurahat ke saath baat karta.
Ek din subah Rudra bike par aaya aur Abdul ke saath college jaane ke bajaye ghar ke bahar khada ho gaya. Rafat darwaze par thi, dupatta sar par lapete hue sabzi ki tokri haath mein liye.
“Aunty, aaj market ja rahi ho?” Rudra ne poocha, awaaz mein sachchi si care thi.
Rafat ne thoda sharmate hue kaha, “Haan beta… sabzi lene ja rahi thi. Parvez toh office chale gaye hain.”
Rudra turant bike se utra.
“Main chhod deta hoon Aunty. Abdul bhi ready hai, teeno chalte hain.”
Rafat ne pehle mana kiya, “Nahi beta, takleef mat lo…” lekin Rudra ne itna pyaar se insist kiya ki woh maan gayi. Teeno bike par baith kar local market gaye. Rudra ne sabzi uthayi, bhari tokri khud sambhali, aur wapas ghar tak chhod diya. Rafat ne usko thanks kaha, lekin uski aankhon mein ek halki si bechaini thi. Yeh ladka itna helpful kyun ho raha tha?

Uske baad Rudra roz chhoti-chhoti cheezein karne laga. Kabhi light ka bulb change kar deta, kabhi Abdul ke saath mil kar ghar ke bahar parked car ko dhakel deta, kabhi Rafat ke liye heavy gas cylinder upar chadhane mein madad karta. Har baar woh “Aunty” kehte hue baat karta, lekin uski nazar Rafat ke bhari jism par thodi der ruk jaati.
Ek shaam power cut phir se hua. Parvez Abbu office se late the. Rafat kitchen mein khadi thi, haath mein torch liye roti bana rahi thi. Rudra us din Abdul ke saath ghar aaya tha notes dene ke bahane.

“Aunty, main madad karun?” Rudra ne poocha aur kitchen mein ghus aaya.
Rafat ne thoda peeche hat kar kaha, “Nahi beta… tum baitho drawing room mein. Main bana leti hoon.”
Lekin Rudra ne suni nahi. Usne haath dhoye aur roti belne laga. Rafat ke saath side-by-side khade hokar woh kaam kar raha tha. Rafat ka dupatta thoda sarka hua tha. Uske bhari chooche har saans ke saath hil rahe the. Rudra ke haath kabhi-kabhi uske haath se touch ho jaate the. Rafat ka chehra garam ho raha tha. Woh apni haya sambhalne ki koshish kar rahi thi.
“Beta… tum bahut accha ladka ho,” Rafat ne dheere se kaha, nazrein neeche kiye hue.
Rudra muskuraya. “Aunty, aap jaise logon ke liye toh yeh sab chhoti baat hai.”
Us raat pehli baar family dinner mein Rudra ko bhi bitha diya gaya. Parvez thoda late aaya tha, lekin usne bhi Rudra ko dekh kar khushi se baat ki. “Beta, tu Abdul ka accha dost hai. Ghar aate rehna.”

Table par chaar log baithe the. Rafat ne khud haath se rotiyan banayi aur sabko serve kiya. Jab woh Rudra ke paas jhuki toh uska pallu thoda sarka aur uske bhari choochiyon ki gehraai dikhai di. Rudra ne dekha. Abdul ne bhi dekha. Parvez ne kuch nahi dekha.
Dinner ke dauran baatein hoti rahi — college, weather, Parvez ka office. Rafat kam bol rahi thi, lekin jab bhi Rudra usse kuch poochta, woh sharmate hue jawab deti.
Dinner khatam hone ke baad Rudra jaane laga. Darwaze par usne Rafat se kaha, “Aunty, khana bahut accha tha. Aap sach mein bahut acchi ho.”
Rafat ne sirf muskurakar kaha, “Uperwala aapko khush rakhe beta.”

Rudra chala gaya. Ghar mein lights aa chuki thi. Rafat kitchen saaf kar rahi thi. Uske dil mein ek ajeeb si bechaini thi. Yeh ladka itna helpful kyun tha? Usne apne aap ko samjhaya — “Bas Abdul ka dost hai… koi bura nahi sochna chahiye.”
Lekin raat ko jab sab so gaye, Abdul apne kamre mein tha. Usne roshandaan se Ammi ke bedroom ki taraf dekha. Rafat bed par baithi thi, dupatta utaar kar rakhi hui thi. Uske chehre par soch thi.
Abdul ka dil zor se dhadak raha tha.
Yeh sirf shuruaat thi.

Chapter 4 Complete.
 
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