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Story: BATTLE FOR THE EARTH
Writer: Black

Marvel & DC ke characters and Justice league ki story pe based ye story hai. Pr Jasien ko kyu toda pr he bhi issi layak

Story achi hai par aapka likhne ka style thoda ajib hai. Sayad issi vajah se bar bar mera thyan bhatak ja rha tha. Sayad yahi dikkat ke chalte aapki pehli story puri nahi ho payi mujse..


Overall achi story thi, bs likhne ka style thoda acha hota to aur maza aata

Shukriya Priya jee aapne meri story padhi
Aur review kiya
Ham aapka aabhari hoon
Jasien ko tudwane ki aadat hai
Isi liye use toda
Dil ko.mazbut karke padhiyega
Suraj
Aur saajan ko patience ke sath
Tabhi padh paayengi
Likhne ka style Aisa hi hai mera
Use nahi change kar sakta
likh hi nahi paaunga
Aur koi writer perfect nahi hota
Main bhi nahi hoon
Ant mein ek baar phirse aapka aabhari hoon hum

 

[Black]

STORY ( Baat Ek Raat Ki )

WRITER. ( Samar_Singh )

DEAR SAMARWA
Ka story likhe ho maja aagaya padhke
PRiya ke sath jo hua
woh bahut galat hua
aur uska anjaam sabne bhugat bhi liya
YEh saala Kabir ko kis tarah ka pyar tha Priya se
usne kuchh din dhundha Priya ko
aur phir Priya ko bhool gaya
sheetal aur pritam ki maa ki
control

kitni neech thi sheetal
kaash ham likhta story
Control
AAp bahut achche writer hain
chaliye isi baat pe ek aur story likhne ka
WArna aapka story ham likh dunga
control
Ab aapko toh pata hoga
ki ham rating nahi deta hoon
geeli puchhi bhi dena band kar diya hai
isi liye aashirvaad le leyo
aur ant mein
hey Samar Maharaj aapne itni achchi story likhi hai
Ki ham padhke dhanya ho gaya
Hum aabhari hoon aapka
Ki aapne sambhog note jaisa kuchh nahi likha
control
cheekkua majak kar raha hoon
Dil pe mat lena

 

[Samar_Singh]

STORY ( Baat Ek Raat Ki )

WRITER. ( SAMAR_SINGH )

DEAR SAMARWA
Ka story likhe ho maja aagaya padhke
PRiya ke sath jo hua
woh bahut galat hua
aur uska anjaam sabne bhugat bhi liya
YEh saala Kabir ko kis tarah ka pyar tha Priya se
usne kuchh din dhundha Priya ko
aur phir Priya ko bhool gaya
sheetal aur pritam ki maa ki
control

kitni neech thi sheetal
kaash ham likhta story
Control
AAp bahut achche writer hain
chaliye isi baat pe ek aur story likhne ka
WArna aapka story ham likh dunga
control
Ab aapko toh pata hoga
ki ham rating nahi deta hoon
geeli puchhi bhi dena band kar diya hai
isi liye aashirvaad le leyo
aur ant mein
hey Samar Maharaj aapne itni achchi story likhi hai
Ki ham padhke dhanya ho gaya
Hum aabhari hoon aapka
Ki aapne sambhog note jaisa kuchh nahi likha
Control

Dhanyawad Bhai

Mujhe to laga ki kisi ko khas pasand nahi ayegi, kyoki jaisi main likhna chahta tha bilkul vaisi nahi likh paya.

Kabir ka pyar vaisa hi tha jaisa ki jyadatar ladke ladkiya aaj kal karte hai. Koi aatma ki gehrai vala pyar nahi tha unka.
Kabir ki side se to bilkul nahi tha.

Ek plot hai mind me abhi likhna shuru nahi kiya, aaj hi shuru karunga, iske bilkul ulat hogi vo kahani.

I hope 10 March se pehle upload kar dunga.

 

[Black]

Story ( "SALMAN KA JAADUI BRACELET" )

Writer Aslam 67

Yeh raha review

Chhee chhee
Aisa kya paap Kiya tha maine
Jo yeh padha
Woh bhi shuru ka hi
Abe contest mein bhi yahi sab likhte ho
Sharam naam ka cheez hai ki nahi

 

[cheekku]

Story: BATTLE FOR THE EARTH
Writer: Black

marvel dc kay character par baised story hay ye ... ,

aapki writing thora confused kar deti hay .. kuch aesi lines thi jinhey baar baar parhna para ... story kaafi speed sey aagey barhi ... har aik scene interesting tha .... aagey bhi bohot kuch hay bolney kay liye par nhi bolunga man nahi hay ..

rating 9/10 ;

isey aur bhi dhang sey likha jaa sakta tha

 

[Samar_Singh]

Review
Story - Salman ka jadui bracelet
Writer - Aslam 67


Ise padhne ke baad mujhe afsos ho rha hai ki kyu ye padhi... Itni sari stories padhne me kai buri se buri kahaniya samne aayi, lekin ab unn sab writer ke liye izzat badh gyi.

My just one reaction on this

 

[Rajizexy]

Yes correct komal sis Raji sis is very talented and gorgeous writer
Rajizexy

Thanks a lot dear lovely Ufaq sis for like. So nice of u dear beautiful saba sis
Ufaq saba

 

[Black]

Story: BATTLE FOR THE EARTH
Writer: Black

marvel dc kay character par baised story hay ye ... ,

aapki writing thora confused kar deti hay .. kuch aesi lines thi jinhey baar baar parhna para ... story kaafi speed sey aagey barhi ... har aik scene interesting tha .... aagey bhi bohot kuch hay bolney kay liye par nhi bolunga man nahi hay ..

rating 6/10 ;

isey aur bhi dhang sey likha jaa sakta tha

Achcha toh ab tam hamko roast karoge
Ruko tam tamhein ham batata hoon
Roast kaise kiya jaata hai
Abe Jaa na hariye
Majak kar raha hoon
Entertainment purpose ke liye likha tha re
Tam bhi aashna ke jaane ke baad
Baura gaye ho
Shukriya cheekku jee
Story padhne ke liye
Tam aao ab kathputli leke
Hum aapko dekh lunga...

 

[Samar_Singh]

Review
Story - गहरी साजिश
Writer - rohnny4545


Plot - एडल्टरी पर आधारित कहानी जहां दो लड़के इत्तेफाक से दोस्त बनते है और फिर एक दूसरे की मां के साथ संभोग के लिप्त होते हैं।

कहानी का नाम कहानी के लिए उत्सुकता पैदा करता है, नाम से तो यही लगता है की कोई रोमांचक रहस्य से भरी कहानी होगी, हालाकि कहानी उससे काफी अलग है।

शुरुआत में लगता है की एक और सामान्य सी एडल्टरी आधारित कहानी है जहां दो बेटे अपनी मां की अदला बदली करेंगे। लेकिन अंत का रहस्योद्घाटन कहानी को पढ़ने का परिप्रेक्ष्य बदल देता है।

सेक्स भी कहानी में बहुत कम है सिर्फ कहानी को आगे बढ़ाने के लिए, ये बहुत अच्छी बात है।

एडल्टरी पर आई एक अच्छी कहानी, लेखन की अशुद्धियां भी ज्यादा नहीं थी।
अच्छी कहानी थी और काफी रियलिस्टिक अप्रोच के
साथ लिखी गई।

 

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Story. ( खोटा सिक्का )

writer ( Shetan )

devi jee kahan se laati ho aap
aise concept
achchi story hai
Aur ho bhi kyun na aapne likhi hai
nawab sahab ka character bhi namune se kam nahi tha
ajeeb aadmi tha yaar
ab main rating nahi deta hoon
aap bhi jaanti hain
Ant mein
Ham aapka aabhari hoon
apne ek achchi kahani likhi..