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[Sanki Rajput]

Story: Bikhade hai Sach ya Sabut ?

Writer: Sanki Rajput


Story line: again based on a psycological thriller this is another attempt by you to create some suspence, but this time it has been a failure.


treatment: स्टार्टिंग में अच्छा सस्पेंस क्रिएट किया आपने, लेकिन आगे जा कर वो पूरा गड़बड़ झाला बन गया। कहानी कहां जा रही वो ही नही पता चल रहा था, और मारा किस लिए गया वो भी समझ नही आया कभी भी।


positive points: स्टार्ट अच्छा था बस।


negative Points: streamlined नही लगी कहानी, और बहुत कन्फ्यूजन भी था, मोटिव क्लियर नही था।


sugesation: ज्यादा कहानी डालने से अच्छा है की किसी प्लॉट पर अभी से काम करिए next USC के लिए।

Thankyou apan ka jo man jab karta wo likh daalta khair shukriya.

 

[manu@84]

Story: पेटीकोट वाले लड़के
Writer: manu@84

Story Line: एंजल प्रिया वाली नस्ल पर आधारित ये हास्य कृति एक ऐसे लड़के की कहानी है जो आभासी दुनिया में में लड़की बन कर लडको के इमोशन से खेल कर पैसे कमाती है, लेकिन एक बार उसकी ये कहानी उसी पर उल्टी पड़ जाती है, और फिर क्या क्या हुआ उसके साथ।

Treatment: बहुत ही अच्छी तरीके से इस हास्य रचना को संवेदनशील तरीके से लिखा है। एक ओर जहां आप ऐसे लड़कों की स्तिथि पर हंसते हैं, वहीं एक स्त्री द्वारा भुगतने वाली स्थितियों पर भी विचार करते हैं।

Poaitive Points: फ्लो बढ़िया है, भाषा शुद्ध है, एंगेजिंग है और संवेदनशील भी।

Negative points: लेखक इसकी विधा को लेकर कन्फ्यूज हैं, हास्य लिखते लिखते एक बहुत ही संवेदनशील कहानी ले कर आ गए हैं।

Sugesstion: कहानी की विधा का ध्यान रखिए।

Rating: 8/10

बहुत बहुत शुक्रिया मित्र, ये आप सभी के साथ चैट करते हुए idea आया था और उसको शब्दो से लिखने का प्रयास किया हास्य और व्यंग के चक्कर में संवेदन घुस गयी बांकी आप तो खुद ही शब्दो के जादूगर हो... समझ ही गए । थैंक्स...

 

[Vega Star]

Bahut hi sandar kahani hai bhaiji
Bhagyashree ka bhagya to hamesa hi chamakta rahega

Thank you

 

[Vega Star]

Story : Bhagyashree ka bhagya.
Writer: vega star

Lovely story , insaan ka naseeb ( bhagya) kab badlega ye koi nahin kah sakta.
Sab kuch waqt par nirbhar hai......

Thank you

 

[Eternallover012]

Story name - Dohra Fayda
Writer name - Rajizexy
Review - bahut hi dohra fayeda hua hai ji

 

[halfbloodprince]

Dohra fayda.

Spoiler

Hum parivaar mein 3 log hain jo ke Bharat ke ek metro city mein rehte hain.

Mera naam Savita hai 21 varsh age, bahut beautiful hu, fair color,figure 36 32 36.


Meri mummy Radhika 40 yr old hai.
Veh bhi extra beautiful hai. Fair color, figure 38 32 38.


Dekhne mein meri badi behn hi lagti hai Radhika mummy.
Hum dono ki khubsurati ki hamaare sath aas pass rehne wale logon mein bahut charcha hoti rehti hai.
Me college mein Btech ke final year mein padh rahi hun.
Hamaara bahut bada business house hai jo "Radhika enterprises" ke naam se chalta hai.
Matlab meri mummy ek bahut badi business tycoon hai.
Hamaara business bahut acha chal raha hai, bahut employees rakhe huye hain humne.
Mummy papa dono hi office jakar business ko chalate hain vese company ki M. D.meri mummy hai.

Meri mummy vese bahut kamuk hai.
Mujhse aksar sexy batein karti rehti hai.
Puchhti rehti hai koi bf banaya hai ya nhi.
Kehti rehti hai, agar banao to mujhe pehle hi bata dena.
Mazak mein kehti rehti hai,jab me usko test karke green signal dungi,tabhi agge badhna tum apne bf ke sath.

Unki baton se me bhi kabhi kabhi thodi wet ho jati hun.
College mein mujh pr mere bahut classmates line marte hain lekin mene abhi tak kisi ko ghas nhi dali .
Hamara ek class mate hai Arjun.
Bahut achi personality hai uski,21 year age, gora rang, chaudi chhati, lamba kad, muscular body.
Dekhne mein kuch aisa lagta hai


Veh har samay meri taraf dekhta rehta hai.
Pehle to mene koi dhyan nhi diya tha uski taraf
lekin jab se meri mummy Radhika mujhse kuch erotic batein karne lagi hai tab se mera bhi man karne laga hai Arjun se kuch sexy baat karne ka.
Ek din Arjun ne mujhse class mein baat ki aur mujhe college canteen mein chai pine ke liye invite kiya.
Mene kaha yaar mujhe kuch ajeeb lagega tumare sath canteen mein chai pina, baki students bhi hame dekhenge sath mein bethe hue.
Ha agar tum mujhe kahin aur chai pilana chahte ho to me a jaungi tumare sath.

Arjun ne khush ho kar mere boobies ko thoda chhu kr kaha, ye to aur bhi achha hoga baby.
Kya tum vacant period mein college ke samne wale restaurant mein aana pasand krogi mere sath chai pine ke liye.

Mene bhi usko thoda chhu kr kaha, raje ajj nhi, ajj shuruaat mein itni hi baat bahut hai hum dono ke beech.
Me kal ko milungi tumse restaurant mein, ekdm milna mujhe kuch ajeeb sa lgta hai.
Ander se to vese me milna chahti thi us se lekin vese hi thoda nakhra karte huye mene usko aisa bol diya.

Usne kaha baby me bahut besabri se intzaar karunga tumare sath hone wali kal ki meeting ka.

Arjun se baat karke aur college attend karne ke baad me ghar a gyi.
Lekin ajj mujhe ghar mein kuch ajeeb lag rha tha.
Vese mene pehle kabhi itna dhyan nhi diya tha jab mere papa sham ko ghar a kar mummy se pyar se milte the.
Lekin ajj horny hone ke karn me un dono ko milte hue achi tarah dekhna chahti thi.
Mene dekha jab mummy ne papa ke liye gate khola to papa ne andar a kar mummy ko baho mein leke chumma aur ek packet pakada diya mummy ko.
Mummy ne bhi papa ke chumban ka bharpoor jawaab dekar unse packet pakad liya.
Fir dining table par mene mummy ko gazra pehnne hue aur baar baar papa ko pyar se chhute hue dekha.
Dinner ke baad mummy papa neeche apne bedroom mein chale gye aur me upar apne kamre mein.
Yahan me bata du ke hamare bunglow mein niche 2 bade bedroom hain jinke beech mein ek common bathroom hai.
Niche wala ek bedroom humne guestroom banaya bua hai aur dusra mummy papa ka hai. Mera bedroom upar hai.
Me sone ke liye upar apne kamre mein a to gyi lekin ajj mujhe neend nhi aa rhi thi, meri chut se bahut taral padaarth nikal raha tha.
Lihaja mene ajj apne mummy papa ka sexy milan dekhne ka irada bana liya.
Late night ko me neeche a gyi aur common bathroom se mummy papa ke bedroom mein jhankkar unka sexy milan dekhne lagi.
Mene dekha papa mummy ko baho mein le ke unka gazra suungh rahe the.

Mummy ne papa se kaha, ji tum ne aaj mujhe Savita ke samne hi chum liya aur gazre ka packet bhi mujhe uske samne hi pakada diya, aisa kyu.

Papa ne mummy ke boobies dabate hue kaha yaar tume vese hi lagta hai, me to har roj hi aisa karta hu.

Mummy ne papa ke lund ko daba kar kaha, pata nhi kyu, ajj mujhe laga ki Savita hame milte hue bahut dhyan se dekh rhi thi.

Papa ne mummy ki bra utar kr unke mummay chuste hue kaha, yar ab Savita bhi jawan ho gyi hai, usko bhi kuch kuch hota hoga, uski chut bhi pani chhod ne lagi hogi.
Kya fark padta hai agar usne hame dekh liya hoga to.
Ajj kal ki ladkiya to ye sab kuch net par hi dekh leti hain.
Kya pata usne apne kisi bf se apni chut bhi marva rakhi ho.

Mummy ne papa ka under wear utar kar unka 9" Ka bada lund hilate hue kaha ,nhi yaar hamari Savita aisi nhi lagti.
Mujhe nhi lagta ke usne apni bur ki seal tudwa li hogi kisi boy se.
Me to usko kehti rehti hu ki kisi bf se kuch karne se pehle veh mujhe apne bf se milva de
ta ki veh kisi galat boy se na fadva le apni chut.
Agar uska koi bf banega to veh jarur bata degi mujhe
aise hi nhi dalvayegi veh kisi boy ka loda apni fuddi mein.

Papa ne mummy ki tange utha kar apna loda unke fudde mein daal te hue kaha, acha hai agar veh aisa hi kre to.
Par kya pta usne tumare kehne se pehle hi le liya ho kisi boy ka lund apni virgin chut mein.

Mummy ne kaha ajj tum bahut zor se chod rahe ho mujhe, kahin apni beti ko imagine karke to nhi mar rahe meri chut.

Papa ne kaha yaar vese hamaari beti hai to bahut khubsurat tumari tarah, dil to bahut karta hai mera uski chut marne ko.
Lekin aisa to sambhav nhi hai par usko imagine karke tume to thok hi sakta hu me .

Mummy ne kaha vese swad to mujhe bhi bahut a rha hai Savita beti banke tujhse thukaai karvane mein. Hhhhhhhhhhiiiiiiiiiii ccccccccccccc ufffffff jiiiiiiiiii rajeeeeee chod lo apni beti Savita ko zorrrrr se dhakke laga kar.

Uske baad papa ne tabadtod chudai ki mummy ki aur dono jhad kar shant hokar so gye.

Vo dono to shant hokar so gye, lekin unhone meri chut mein aag laga di jisko mene apne kamre mein jakar masterbate karke shant kiya.

Next day jesa mene Arjun se promise kiya tha, me uske sath restaurant mein chai pine ke liye chali gai.
Hum dono ek cabin mein beth gye.
Arjun ne mere chuttadon par hath fer dia jab me uske sath bethne lagi.
Me kuch react karti, us se pehle hi waiter cabin mein aya aur chai ki tray table par rakh kr chala gya.
Mene kaha yar mene tujhe chai pine ke liye yes ki thi aur tum mere chuttadon ko hi dabane lage.

Arjun ne mera hath pakad kar apne lund par rakhte hue kaha boys aise hi chai pilate hain girls ko.

Me bhi upar upar se hi nakhre kar rahi thi, andar se to me bhi pakadna chahti thi uska loda.
Mene kaha yaar kuch baat karni chahiye thi tujhe mere sath itna agge badhne se pehle. Mene yeh bol bhi dia aur apna hath bhi nhi hataya uske lund se.

Yeh dekh kr veh thoda bold ho gya aur mere boobs ko dabate hue bola.
Kesa laga baby tujhe mera loda, pasand aya.

Uska lund kafi bada aur hard tha , takriban 9" ka hoga.
Mujhe bahut acha lag raha tha uska loda pakad kar.
Mene kaha yaar tum ne seedha mujhe apna lund hi pakada dia, pehle thodi meri marzi to jan leni thi.

Unhone kaha jab tum mere sath cabin mein a hi gyi to aur kuch jan ne ki jarurat hi kya hai. Me to bahut samay se tumare sath intimate hona chahta tha lekin ajj mauka dia hai tum ne.

Mene uske lund ko pyar se dabate hue kaha, tum mere sath sirf intimate hona chahte ho ya tumhara kuch aur irada bhi hai.

Usne kaha me to tujhe apna life partner bana na chahta hu lekin us se pehle thodi intimacy ki jarurat bhi hoti hai.

Mene kaha thik hai yaar abhi ke liye itni intimacy bahut hai aur mujhe tumari proposal ke vare mein sochne ke liye thoda samay chahiye.

Usne kaha, thik hai baby, me besabri se intzaar karunga tumari yes ka.
Aur fir hum dono ne ek good bye kiss ke sath meeting sampat kar di.

Unse baat karke me ghar a gyi aur mene sab baat apni Radhika mummy ko bata di.

Mummy ne mujhe chum kar kaha, thik hai agar Arjun tujhe thik lagta hai to bula lena usko ghar, fir hum dono decide kar lengi ke uske sath agge badhna hai ya nhi.
Uske ghar mein kaun kaun hai.

Mene kaha uske ghar mein bas uski ek badi behan Sandhya hai aur usne bataya tha ki uski behen shadi nhi karna chahti.

Mummy ne kaha thik hai fir kal bula lena usko ghar par.
Agar ladka thik laga to uski behn se bhi mil lengi hum.

Aise mummy se batein karne ke baad me Arjun ke sath cabin mein hui baton ke vare mein sochti rhi sari raat aur usko imagine karke hi mene apni chut se 2 tin baar lava nikala.

Agle din me khushi khushi college gyi aur Arjun se milke usko ghar invite karne ka soch kr wet hoti rhi.
Lekin kismat ko kuch aur hi manzoor tha, college mein mujhe mummy ne fauran ghar aane ko kaha chunki mere papa ki ek car accident mein maut ho gyi thi.
Ab kismat ke agge kisi ka kya zor hai.
Papa ke chale jane ke baad, mummy par kaam ka bojh jyada badh gya.
Mummy bahut upset rehne lagi chunki meri mummy bahut kamuk hai.
Pehle to papa unki pyas bujha dete the lekin ab veh apni kaam trishna puri na kar pane ke karn bahut chid chidi ho gyi thi.

Aise hi samay guzar rha tha ki ek din Arjun ki behan Sandhya


hamaare ghar ayi ,mene uski intro karva di apni Radhika mummy se.
Sandhya meri mummy se bahut intimate hokar mili apne boobs mummy ke mummo ke sath daba kar.
Mummy bhi bahut der baad aise mili thi kisi se bhi
toh mummy ne bhi zor se jakad lia Sandhya ko apni baho mein
aur mummy ne aise Sandhya se alingan karte samay kuch hardness feel ki apni chut par.Yeh baat mujhe baad mein pta chali.
Kafi der se pyasi hone ke karn mummy Sandhya se kuch jyada hi intimate ho gyi
aur dono ne apne mobile number bhi exchange kar liye dhire dhire .
Fir un dono ki chatting shuru ho gyi, vo dono ghanto ek dusre se chat karne lage.

Mummy : jab mene tujhe apni bahon mein liya tha to mene kuch hardness feel ki thi apni chut par, aisa kyu, usne Sandhya se pucha.

Sandhya:kyu darling tujhe achi nhi lagi hardness apne fudde par.

Mummy:yar mujhe to bahut acha laga tha tujhe baho mein le kr
tabhi to tumare sath intimate hui hun lekin kuch batao to sahi hardness ke vare mein.

Sandhya : darling tum hardness dekhna chahti ho ya sirf uske vare mein puchna chahti ho.

Radhika;jese tujhe thik lage, agar dikha ne layak kuch hai to dikha hi do yaar.

Sandhya:Ab Radhika meri sajni tujhse kya chhipa na, me ek shemale hun
aur jo hardness tumne feel ki thi apni chut par vo mere lund ki thi.
Ye lo tum mera loda dekh hi lo


Agar tujhe mera loda pasand hai aur mera pyar sweekaar hai to me tumari pyas zindagi bhar bujha sakti hun
aur kisi ko kano kaan khabar bhi nhi hogi hamaare affair ke vare mein.
Tum agar apni Savita beti ki shadi mere Arjun bhya se kar dogi aur Arjun ko ghar jamai bana kar rakh logi
to me bhi dahej ke roop mein mil jaungi tujhe
matlab hum dono families ka dohra fayda ho jayega.
Tumari beti ko Arjun ka aur tujhe mera lund available ho jayega.
Fir hum charon zindagi bhar mauj karenge.
Vese koi jaldbaaji karne ki jarurat nhi tum aram se soch lo meri proposal ke vare mein.

Radhika:yar itna bada decision lene ke liye, kuch samay to chahiye hi.
Vese mujhe apne fudde par tumare lund ki thokar bahut achi lagi thi.
Darling ek baar tum mujhe mere ghar a ke milna kal jab meri beti Savita college gyi hogi.
Aur me Savita ko bhi bol dungi ki veh thoda intimate hokar dekhle tumare Arjun bhya ke sath.

Sandhya: thik hai babyyy me milti hu kal a kar tumare ghar par.

Uske baad mummy ne mujhse Arjun ke vare mein pucha ki kya me us se milti hu ajj kal.

Mene kaha ji mummy hum milte rehte hain dono aur hum dono ko bahut acha lagta hai milna.
Agar tum sehmat ho to me us se shadi karna chahti hu.

Radhika:yar lekin meri ek shart hai agar Arjun ne tumse shadi karni hai to usko ghar jamai ban kar rehna hoga hamaare sath.

Mene kaha lekin vo apni Sandhya behn ko akele chhod kr kese ban payega ghar jamai.

Mummy ne kaha agar tujhe koi itraz nhi hoga toh hum Sandhya ji ko bhi sath mein hi rakh lenge apne bunglow mein .
Sandhya ke sath mera bhi man laga raha karega chunki mujhe bhi ab tumare papa ke na hone se loneliness mahsus hoti hai.Mujhe vese Sandhya ki company bahut charming lagti hai.

Mene kaha ye to fir un dono se baat karke hi pata lagega.
Tum Sandhya didi se hi kyu nhi baat kr leti is vare mein, ajj kal to tum bahut batein karti rehti ho meri perhaps would be nanad se.

Mummy thik hai tum college mein Arjun se baat karke dekh lena aur me Sandhya ko ghar bula kr us se baat karti hu ajj.

Mene kaha yaar mummy faisla to Sandhya ne hi karna hai, tumara would be jamai to vesa hi karega jese meri nanad rani kahegi.

Mummy ne kaha thik hai me kar lungi Sandhya se baat aur vese bhi mujhe uski nature bahut achi lagti hai.
Last but not the last tujhe koi itraz to nhi agar Sandhya mere sath intimate hokar rahe hamaare ghar par.

Mene kaha yaar mummy mujhe kya itraz ho sakta hai mujhe bhi to apni nanad rani ki achi company mil hi jayegi fir.

Radhika: to thik hai agar sab thik rha to hum Arjun ko ghar jamai bana lenge aur uski pyari behn Sandhya bhi uske sath sath hamaare sath hi rahegi.

Mene mummy ko chum kr apni sehmati de di.
Vese mujhe pata tha ki mummy kafi intimate hai Sandhya didi se aur mujhe un dono ki intimacy se koi samasya nhi thi.

Radhika; Savita ke college jane ke baad Sandhya ne ghar par a ke bell bajai aur mene gate khola.
Sandhya ne andar a kar,khud hi darwaja band karke mujhe baho mein le liya aur apni godh mein le kar beth gyi.


Mene kaha babyyy itni jaldi kyu kr rahi ho, pehle me tujhe chai pilati hu.

Usne mere bade boobies daba kr kaha, mene ajj tumhara dudh pina hai darling, chai to me roj hi piti hu.

Mene kaha yaar itni jaldi kyu karti ho , pehle batao tujhe mujh mein aisa kya acha laga jo tum pehli mulakaat par hi mar mitti thi mujh pr.
Tum ne pehli mulakaat mein hi apna lund ragad dia tha meri chut par.

Sandhya ne kaha yaar Radhika tum bahut beautiful ho.
Mujhe tumhari body bahut achi lagi.
Mera bahut dil karne laga tha tumare bade boobies aur gand se pyar karne ka
jab mene tujhe pehli baar aalingan mein liya tha.

Mene kaha yaar muje thoda soch ne ka mauka to do tumne to seedha hi mujhe pakad kar apni godh mein apne lund par hi bitha lia.
Mene apni gand Sandhya ke lund par ghiskar kaha,
abhi to Arjun aur Savita ne bhi decide nhi kiya hai apni shadi ke vare mein.

Sandhya ne apna lund mere fudde par ragadkar kaha, jo bhi faisla karna hai, hum dono ne karna hai.
Arjun aur Savita toh vese hi karenge jesa hum dono chahenge.
Me to chahti hu ki hum fauran shadi kar dete hai Arjun aur Savita ki.
Fir ek bedroom mein Arjun aur Savita suhaagraat manayenge aur dusre mein hum dono.
Me janti hu tum bahut kamuk aurat ho par mai tum ko completely satisfy karne ki kshamta rakhti hu.
Me tumari chudai tumare divangat pati se bhi behtar karungi.
Agar yakin nhi hai to me tujhe abhi chod kr sabit kr sakti hu apni baat.
Vese agar tum ma beti dono sath sath suhaagraat manao mere aur mere bhya Arjun ke sath to bahut jyada swad ayega hum charon ko.

Mene Sandhya ko chum kr kaha, baby chahti to me bhi yahi hu ke ek bedroom mein Arjun daal de apna loda meri Savita beti ki virgin chut mein
aur dusre bedroom mein tum daal do apna lund mere fudde mein.
Bas mujhe 2 baton ka dar lagta hai
ek to ki Savita kya sochegi jab kabhi bhi us ko hamare affair ke vare mein pta lagega
dusri ki kahin mujhe chod te samay tumhara lund jaldi hathiyaar na daal dia kre meri pyas bujha ne se pehle hi.

Sandhya: tum Savita ki fikar na kro usko to balki khushi hi hogi jab usko pta lagega ki uski mummy ab pyasi nhi rehti
chunki uski nanad uski mummy ki pyas bujha deti hai.
Dusra agar tujhe meri chodne ki kshamta par shaq hai to me abhi tujhe chod kr apni kshamta sabit kr deti hu shadi se pehle hi.

Mene kaha vese me chahti hu ki suhagraat to hum ma beti simultaneously hi manaye tumare aur tumare bhya ke sath .
Ajj me tumare lund ko chut mein liye bagair hi test kar leti hun iski shakti.
Aise bolke mene besharm hokar Sandhya ki penty niche karke uska bada lund bahar nikal kr pakad liya apne hatho mein
aur uske lund ko vibhinn tarah se pyar karne lagi.
Uske lode ke supare ko chatne lagi.
Uska pura lund muh mein le kr chusne lagi.
Mujhe bahut swad aane laga lund se pyar karke chunki mujhe kafi der baad lund ke darshan hue the.
Maze se meri siskian niklne lagi hhhhhhhhhhiiiiiiiiiii ccccccccccccc ufffffff jiiiiiiiiii Sandyyyyyyy mere sajannnnnnn.
Sandhya bhi garm hokar zor zor se apna loda mere muh mein andar bahar karne lagi.
Mujhe bahut acha lag raha tha Sandhya ke sath oral sex karna.
Uska lund mere divingat pati ke lode se jyada bada aur swaadisht lag raha tha mujhe. Sandhya takriban adha ghanta oral sex karti rahi mere sath apne bade lode se mere muh mein dhakke laga kar.
. Adhe ghante baad uske lund ne hathiyaar daal kar apne dher sare taral padaarth se bhar diya mera mouth.
Aise Sandhya ne mujhe oral sex ka asim sukh pradaan kar diya.
Uske sath santusht hokar mene usko apni beti aur uske bhya ki shadi ke liye ha kardi.

Sandhya bahut khush ho gyi aur kehne lagi logon ke liye to yeh sirf Arjun aur Savita ki shadi hogi
lekin hamaare liye yeh hum dono ki bhi shadi hogi unki shadi ke sath sath
matlab dohra fayda hoga hum charon ko.

Mene Sandhya ke sath sehmat hokar ek baar fir uske lund aur hontho ko chum lia.

Dusri taraf ajj Arjun apni gf Savita ko picture dikha ne ke liye cinema hall mein le gya
aur dono hall mein kone wali seats par beth gye.
Jese hi hall mein lights off hui Arjun ne apna hath Savita ki jangh par rakh liya.
Savita ko bahut achi lagi apne bf ki touch aur uski siski nikl gyi hhhhhiiiiii cccccccc sssiiiiiiiiiii.
Arjun ne jab dekha ki uski gf ne koi khas itraz nhi kia
to usne apna hath upar karke Savita ki chut par rakh liya.

Chut par hath padte hi Savita thodi uchal padi aur zor se siskiyan lete hue Arjun ka hath apni virgin fuddi par daba diya.

Arjun ne gf ki response se utsahit hokar uska hath pakad kar apne khade lund per rakh liya.

Savita ne bhi ab sharam chhod kar aur bold hokar apne bf ki pent ki zip khol kar uska loda bahar nikal kar pakad liya aur lund ko pyar se hilane lagi .

Ab Arjun ka ek hath Savita ki chut par tha aur dusra hath uske boobs par.

Dono bahut kamuk hokar ek duje ke saman se khelne lage.

Siskiyan lete hue Savita ne kaha yar tum mere sath itna agge badh toh rahe ho lekin agar meri mummy aur tumari didi hamari shadi ke liye na mani to fir kya karenge hum.

Arjun ne kaha aisa ho hi nhi sakta, mujhe to lagta hai meri didi bhi tumari mummy se bahut pyar karne lagi hai.
Mene note kiya hai meri didi ko tumari mummy se ghanto pyr se chat karte huye.

Savita ne kaha ye to mujhe bhi lagta hai ki meri mummy bhi tumhari didi ko chahne lagi hai.
Lekin mujhe samjh nhi a rha ki ihn dono mein achanak itna pyar kese ho gya.

Arjun ne kaha me iska karn janta hu
lekin tum ko sahi samay par hi bataunga.

Savita :vo to thik hai raje lekin tum shayad jante nhi meri mummy bahut kamuk hai.
Usko to lund chahiye hi chahiye apni kamukta ko shant karne ke liye, tumari didi ke pyar se bhala usko kya milega.

Arjun: jab me tujhe asli baat bataunga tab tujhe pata lag jayega
ki jo tumhari mummy ko chahiye vo usko meri didi se mil jayega.

Savita : fir thik hai, agar yeh baat hai
to tum chahe mujhe abhi isi waqt chod do.

Arjun ne zor se uski chut mein fingering karte huye aur mummay dabate hue kaha, nhi mene ajj to sirf tumare sath intro hi karni hai tumari chut to me suhagrat par hi marunga.

Savita ne khush hokar uska lund hilate hue aur siskiyan lete hue kaha tumari yahi baat mujhe the best lagti hai.

Arjun ne kaha mujhe to tumhari har bat hi the best lagti hai sajni.
Aisa bolte hue usne apna lund Savita ke muh par laga dia aur khud uski fuddi chatne laga.
Savita bhi pyar se chatne aur chusne lagi apne bf ke lund ko.
Thodi der baad dono ka pani chhut gya aur dono ek dusre ka pani pikar santust ho gye.

Picture dekh ne ke baad dono mein shadi karna teh ho gya aur dono apne ghr walo ki sehmati ka intezar karne lage.
Arjun ne Ghar ja kar apni didi ko aur Savita ne apni mummy ko
apni ichha se avgat kra diya.

Radhika aur Sandhya to pehle hi sehmat the is shadi ke liye apni kamukta ke chalte.
Lihaja dono ne fauran unki shadi karva di.

Shadi ke baad Arjun aur Sandhya jese teh hua tha, Radhika ke bunglow mein hi a gye, permanently unke sath rehne ke liye.

Arjun ne apni dulhan ko bahon mein le kar chumna shuru kia
to Savita ne kaha mujhe pakad ne se pahle mujhe batao please
ki aisa kya hai meri nanad ke pass jo meri Radhika mummy ki kamukta ko shant kar payega.

Arjun ne Savita ka hath apne lund par rakhte huye kaha,ye hai meri didi ke pass.

Savita ne kaha me samjhi nhi.

Arjun: yar meri didi shemale hai aur uske paas mere jesa hi bada loda hai.
Matlab logo ke liye tumari aur meri shadi hui hai lekin ghar ke andar ki baat ye hai ke hum charon ko dohra fayda hua hai is shadi se.
Matlab meri didi logo ki nazar mein tumari nanad hai
par asal mein veh tumhara papa hai.
Tujhe aur tumari mummy ko bilkul bhi pyasa nhi rehna padega.
Matlab hum charon mein se koi bhi pyasa nhi rahega.
Meri didi ko chut aur tumari mummy ko lund chahiye tha
to dono ki pyas ka intzam ho gya is shadi se.
Ab hum dono couples simultaneously suhagrat mana sakte hain ajj raat.

Aisa sunke Savita ne khushi se jhum kar chum liya apne sajan Arjun ko
aur kaha ye bata kar tumne mere dil se bahut bada bojh hata diya hai.
Meri pyari aur kamuk mummy ki pyas bujhna meri sab se badi samasya thi jiska ilaaj ho gya hai ab hamari shadi se.
Ab me khushi khusi tumare sath suhagrat mana ne ki tyari karti hu.

Arjun:Sirf tumne hi tyari nhi karni sajni , tumne meri saasu maa ko bhi tyar karna hai Sandhya ke sath suhagrat mana ne ke liye.

Savita:Jese tum chaho dear hubby.

Radhika ne bahut pyar se apni beti Savita ko uski suhagrat ke liye tyar kiya
aur samjhane lagi ke bedroom mein dudh leke jaana aur jab jamai raja andar ayen to unko dudh ka gilas offer karke unke per chhuna.

Tabhi Savita ne kaha mummy tumare jamai raja chahte hai ki tujhe bhi dulhan ki tarah sajna sanvarna hai.

Radhika ne kaha lekin aisa kyu chahta hai Arjun beta.
Me kya karungi saj sanvar kar.
Savita ne kaha tum vahi kuch meri nanad Sandhya ke sath karogi
jo me tumhare jamai raje ke sath karungi.

Radhika samjh gyi ki Savita sab janti hai aur apni beti ke muh se ye sunkar uske dil se bahut bada bojh utar gya.
Khush ho kar usne apni Savita beti ko chum liya aur puchne lagi tujhe kab aur kese pata laga.

Savita ne kaha mujhe abhi tumare jamai raje ne bataya hai.
Ab me bhi bahut khush hu ki meri mummy ab pyasi nhi rahegi matlab Sandhya aur Arjun hum dono ma beti ki pyas bujha dia karenge aur hum charon ko dohra fayda ho jayega.

Uske baad dono ma beti saj sanwar gyi simultaneously apni apni suhagrat mana ne ke liye.
Aur Savita badam milk ka gilas lekar apne bedroom mein jaa kr bethkar apne dulhe Arjun ka intezar karne lagi.

Radhika bhi saj sanwar kr Sandhya ke pass chali gai aur usko dudh ka gilas offer karke uske per chhu liye.

Sandhya ne apni ajj ki dulhan ko pakad kar apni bahon mein bhar lia
aur kaha baby chalo ajj hum sath wale bedroom mein jhank kr Savita aur Arjun ki suhagrat dekhte hue apni suhagrat mana te hain.

Mujhe kya itraz hona tha asal mein mujhe bhi apni beti ki suhagrat dekhne ki curiosity thi. Mene kaha ji sajan chalo aise hi kar lete hai.
Lekin pehle me apni beti ko mil kr
aur jamai raje ko uske kamre mein bhej kr aati hu tumare pass.

Ab kahani Radhika ki zubaani:
aise bol kr me apni beti jo saj sanwar kr suhag sez pr bethi thi


uske pass gyi to usne kaha mujhe kuch dar lagta hai mummy.

Mene kaha darne ki koi baat nhi, me tujhe dekh ti rahungi common bathroom ke darwaje se
aur agar tujhe jyada taklif hogi to a kr tujhe sambhaal lungi.
Fir bahr a kr mene Arjun ko suhag sez pr jane ka aagrah kiya.
Arjun mujhe halka sa chum kr suhag sez ki taraf badhne laga.
Me common bathroom ke door se apni beti ki suhagrat dekhne lagi
aur Sandhya bhi mujhe apni baho mein le kr aur apna loda mere chuttadon ke sath laga kr andr jhaankne lagi.

Jese hi Arjun andar aya Savita ne usko dudh ka gilas dekr uske per chhu liye.
Arjun ne uska ghunghat utha ke usko bahut pyar se apne alingan mein le liya.

Idhar mere hubby ne bhi mujhe vese hi chum lia.

Arjun ne uske baad Savita ko niche lita liya aur khud uske upr let gya.
Dono bahut softly ek dusre ko chumne lage. Arjun ne bahut besabri se apni dulhan ko nanga kr liya aur uske jism ke sabhi ango ko bahut pyar se chumne laga.
Uske boobs masalne, chatne aur chusne laga.
Savita ki siskiyan nikalne lagi aaaaahhhhhh cccccc ssssiiiiii hhhhhiiiiii uuuuuuuffff.
Arjun bhi bahut garm ho gya aur usne Savita ki nabhi aur pet ko chatne ke baad apna muh meri beti ki virgin chikni chut pr laga liya aur zor se chatne laga uski fuddi.

Idhar mera ajj ka pati bhi bahut garm ho gya aur usne bhi mujhe nanga karke mera jism chatna shuru kr diya
aur boobies se pyar karne laga, mera fudda chatne laga.
Mujhe bhi utsukta hui aur mene Sandhya ka loda pakad liya
aur uske lund se pyar karne lagi, chumne chatne lagi apne pati ka loda.

Dusri taraf meri beti ne bhi mere damad ko nanga karke uska lund pakad liya aur uska lund muh mein leke chusne lagi.
Garm hokar Savita ne apne pati ko chut mein loda dalne ka ishara kr diya.
Arjun to kab se intzaar kr raha tha apni dulhan ke green signal ka
aur veh fauran apna lund Savita ki chut pr pyar se ghisne laga.
Savita ne chut ki garmi ke hatho majboor hokar usko jaldi lund chut mein daal ne ka aagrah kiya.
Arjun ne apna loda meri beti ki chut ke chhed par rakha aur halka sa dhakka laga kr apne lund ka supara daal diya chut mein.
Savita ki chikh nikal gyi to mera damad ruk gya aur usne apne honth jod liye Savita ke hontho se.
Thodi der baad jab Savita hili to Arjun ne zor se dhakka mar kar apna pura lund daal diya meri beti ki chut mein.
Savita ki chikh uske hontho mein dab kr reh gyi lekin mera jamai ruk gya vahin pr.

Par Sandhya nhi ruki aur usne mujhe ghodi bana kar apna bada loda daal diya mere fudde mein.
Vese meri chut khuli hui thi lekin kafi dino se mere fudde ne lund nhi liya tha apne andar isliye meri bhi halki sir cheekh nikl gyi.
Meri chikh sunkar Sandhya bhi apna pura loda mere fudde mein daal kr ruk gyi.

Ab Savita ke dard less ho gya tha aur veh apni gand hila hila kr Arjun ko zor se chodne ke liye uksaane lagi.
Arjun bahut zor se dhakke laga kr chodne laga meri beti ko aur Savita bhi apni gand hila hila kr dhuaan dhar chudai karvane lagi apne dulhe se.

Idhar Sandhya bhi zor se dhakke laga kr chodne lagi mujhe aur me bhi apni gand hila hila kr sweekaar karne lagi uska lund apne fudde mein apni beti ki tarah.
Mujhe asim anand ki prapti hone lagi apni aur apni beti ki simultaneous chudai se.

Savita zor zor se siskiyan lene lagi hhhhhiiiiii uuuuuuuffff ccccccccccccccccc jiiiiiiiii uffffffffffff siiiiiiiiiiii babyyyyyyyy Arjunnnnnnnnn aise hi chodo apni dulhan ko. Aise siskiyan lete hue Savita ki chut ne dher sara liquid nikal diya apni fati hui chut se aur thodi der baad Arjun bhi zor se dhakke lagane laga aur uske lode ne bhi apne white taral padaarth ki pichkari mar di meri beti ki chut mein.
Jab Arjun ne apni dulhan ko chod kr apna loda uski fati hui chut se bahar nikala to Savita ki chut se khun tapkane laga.


Dono dulha dulhan tabadtod chudai ke baad santusht hokar ek dusre ko baho mein leke chumne lage.

Idhar mere yaar ne bhi ab zor se dhakke laga kr chodna shuru kr diya mujhe.
Me bhi apni gand hila hila kr zor se chudne lagi apne yaar cum pati se.
Aur kafi der baad hum dono takriban ikattha hi jhad gye.
Mujhe bahut swad aya apni aur apni beti ki simultaneous suhagrat enjoy karke.

Iske baad ye silsila aise hi kafi der chalta rha. Kabhi me apne yaar ke sath mil kr apni beti ki chudai dekhti aur kabhi meri beti apne hubby ke sath milkar meri chudai dekhti.
Hum charon ki zindagi mein is shadi se dohra fayda ho gya ya yun kahein ki bahar a gyi.
Sandhya ne meri zindagi mein mere pati ki kami puri kar di.
Hum dono ma beti ki pyas ko bahut ache se bujhate rahe Sandhya aur Arjun.
Mujhe aur meri beti ko bahut acha laga Sandhya aur Arjun ka pyar.

Darshako ab tum batana ki aap ko kesa laga Raji ka ye prayaas. Dhanyavaad

Bahut hi achhi story likhi hai rajizexy ji aapne... Loved it

 

[Rajizexy]

Story name - Dohra Fayda
Writer name - Rajizexy
Review - bahut hi dohra fayeda hua hai ji

Thanks a lot❤❤❤ dear lover. So lovely of u

 

[Rajizexy]

Bahut hi achhi story likhi hai rajizexy ji aapne... Loved it

Thanks a lot dear prince for like. So lovely❤ of u

 

[Eternallover012]

Thanks a lot❤❤❤ dear lover. So lovely of u

welcome

 

[SANJU ( V. R. )]

Story - Dead but alive.
Writer- Mak

You have mentioned three possible outcomes in the climax of this story, but it would have been better if you had done "the end" of this story with one result, one conclusion.

Well, according to my thinking, the main character or rather the main villain of this story was Dr. Hemant Saheb. Who cheated his wife Priya and took advantage of her serious illness. And inspired him to commit suicide.
Priya was suffering from a rare neuro-psychiatric disease called Cotard's Syndrome in which a person can go to any extent of delusion. The victim becomes like a walking corpse from one side. That means Dead but alive.

Hemant Sahab along with writer Aniket's wife Sudha made a full proof plan. The motive was wealth and their extra marital affairs.
An attempt was made to bring Priya and Aniket closer. Priya's serious illness and Aniket's drunken state became the reason for sex for both. And then both of them were repeatedly indirectly motivated to commit suicide.

The story was very, very good. Worth reading in a readable book.
But as it usually happens at the end of every story or every film - 'The truth prevails and the evil faces black.' ' - was not visible.

But Well, this story is one of the best stories of this contest and probably deserves to win.