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★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2021 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

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ye baat koi nahi samjhta ki kisi ko hosla do uski shuruwaat per taki vo agli baar tahalka macha de nahi ye to ye bolte hai ki purane wale achi khichai karte are bhai sab ko pta hai yaha bolne se kuch nahi hone wala sab chupe rustom hai to itni garmi kis baat ki or waise bhi ye neeli patti 500 rs ki hai per mujhe patta pasand nahi
:bow: Nilli patti ki baat acchi thi...
 
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HalfbludPrince

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aapki baton se ghamand jhalak raha hai bhai..aap is forum ki shaan, bahut bade writer ho aap. jaise aap kahani likhte wakt ek ek shabd ko tol kar likhte ho waisa hi aapko review dete wakt bhi karna chahiye..aapko review dete wakt is baat ka bhi dhyan rakhna chahiye tha ke writer naya hai. aur prabhavshali logon ki tippanni ka logon par gehra prabhav padta hai bhai. aur prabhavshali logon ko apni baat rakhte wakt apni garima ka dhyan bhi rakhna padta hai. ham sab log yahan anand lene aate hain bhai. kisi bhi insaan ko nirutsahit karna koi achhi baat nahi hai.

har koi yahan aapki tarah apni lekhni ka prabhav dikhane nahi aata, kuchh meri tarah bhi hain jo apne busy schedule mein se thoda sa time nikal ke apne man mein dabe hue shauk ko poora ka prayas karte hain. pyar baton bhai pyar hi milega. is dunia se kuchh nahi le jana. sirf pyar hi saath jaana hai. chahe main vasnatmak kahaniyan likhta hun par mere pyar ka matlab aap vasna katayi na lagana mere bhai.

aur ant mein kshama prarthi hun bhai. kyunki maine shayad apni haisiyat se kuchh jyada hi bol diya hai.


दरअसल ऐसी तो कोई मंशा नहीं थी मित्र, जिस पोस्ट को कोट किया है आपने उसकी लेखिका से इस विषय मे बात हो चुकी थी और ये बिल्कुल नॉर्मल चर्चा थी तो घमंड का कोई प्रश्न ही नहीं उत्पन्न होता
एक मेंटर होने के नाते मैं इसे अपनी जिम्मेदारी समझता हूं कि जो लोग मन से कहानिया लिखते है उन्हें मैं थोड़ी मदद करू की किस प्रकार वो अपनी लेखनी से ज्यादा लोगों को जोड़ सके
इसी प्रयास मे मैं कुछ पॉइंट नोटिस करके लेखकों को बताता हूं यदि आपको ये बात ठीक नहीं लगी तो मुझे खेद है

मेरी मंशा बस यही है कि जो भी कहानिया लिखते है उनको इस फोरम पर उचित स्थान मिले
बस इतना ही कहूँगा
 
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Aapki is behtarin samiksha ke liye shukriya bhai
आप अच्छा लिखते हैं मित्र, उम्मीद है आपकी तरफ से और कहानिया भी पढ़ने को मिलेंगी
 
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Hahaha... Agar aapko lagta hai ki uss cimment ke jawab me likha hai to main maan leta hun kyonki Manik bhai duniya me ek hi kaam nahi ho sakta yakin dilana.... Aap bhi badla le sakte hain maine apne post dale hain contest me..

Nahi main bariki ki baat nahi kar raha tha... Aap ne thoda alag liya comment ko.... Khiar maine baat sahi se nahi samjya so that's my fault.... Aur aap ne sahi kaha ki itni bariki kahani me nahi dekhte... and I highly regarded the CA .. kyonki isse pass karna hi apne aap me adbhut hai..

Main bus ye point kahna chahta tha ki fasane ke kram me log jo aasani se topi pahna dete hain... Jahan mamla 1cr se upar jata hai... Kafi complicated hota hai manage karna... Wo bhi jab aapke sath koi corrupt officirre na ho...

Second main bollywood ke myth par bahut reserch karta hun ... So my point was that ... Ek talented girl ... Jab badla legi to wo chor kyon banegi..... Kyon na wo kuch itna high kare jo uska pita naak ragadta uski maa ke kadmon me aata... That's my point...

Bank bhi 5 sal ke liye karj deti hai aur finecer ko bhi jhukna parta hai jab koi bankcrroupt hota hai... To loan par liya gaya paisa jab gayab hoga to ek business man kaise barbaad ho sakta hai... Ye kafi simple tha... Aur mera point bhi yahi tha...

Mai jyada bariki ko nahi balki way ko deta hun... Kyonki badla lene ke liye chor ban'na koi auchitya nahi... Padhe likhe log organised aur collective result de jyada achha lagta hai..

Waise mujhe yaad to nahi aap kis comment ki baat kar rahe.. lekin yadi aapko laga ho ki badle ki bhavna thi to main kshma chahunga... Yahan aapne jo bhi likha hai usme mehnat lagta hai.. aur koi pay nahi karta use likhne ka... Uss par bhi koi international ho to bura lagna Lazmi hai...

Main aaj raat ek baar fir aapki kahani padhunga aur wapas se revoo karunga... Isse ignore mare aur accept my sorry too
Bhai sorry bolne ki jarurat nahi hai even I say sorry ke maine itna sakht reply kiya. But story ke ilawa aap khud apna review dubara padho. Tab aapko pata chalega kya likha hai aapne. Kisi ko hausla nahi de sakte to kam se kam digao mat bhai.

Koi bhi story ekdam trutivihin ho yeh possible hi nahi hai aur conspiracy stories mein poori tarah fool proof ho main maan hi nahi sakti, ek aur baat. Mujhe khud pata hai ke main koi writer nahi hun. Par fir bhi main daily 4 hours xforum mein story writing ko deta hun kyunki yeh mera passion hai.

Log billiins kharch karke movies banate hain aur log first show ke baad se hi errors par video dalne lag jaate hain arey movie dekho chill maro na. Itni gehrai mein kyun jaane ka bhai.

Hamari CAs ki association hai. Bahut rajniti chalti hai usme. 2 saal pehle main president tha. Mera to jeena hi haram kar diya in logon ne. Do mahine baad hi resign kar diya us post se tab jakar chain aaya bhai.

To yeh ek entertainment ka platform hai. Entertainment karo na bhai. Chain se khud bhi jiyo aur auron ko bhi jeene do. Jeet haar ke liye kisne likhi story. Maze ke likha tha bhai taki khud ko bhi maza aaye aur auron ko bhi maza aye. Par aapko maza nahi aaya uske liye sorry.

Aur aapne contract ke liye jaruri jin baaton ka jikr kiya unke baare mein main achhi tarah se jaanta hun because it's the part of our job sir, bank ke loan se related formalities sabhi mujhe hi to poori karni padti hain bhai. Chahe cma data ho ya project report ya fir koi bhi financial data sab ham log taiyar karte hain.

Real life kuchh aur chij hai reel life kuchh aur. So please chill bro. Sorry bro for being harsh but I needed to give response to such review
 

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Bhai sorry bolne ki jarurat nahi hai even I say sorry ke maine itna sakht reply kiya. But story ke ilawa aap khud apna review dubara padho. Tab aapko pata chalega kya likha hai aapne. Kisi ko hausla nahi de sakte to kam se kam digao mat bhai.

Koi bhi story ekdam trutivihin ho yeh possible hi nahi hai aur conspiracy stories mein poori tarah fool proof ho main maan hi nahi sakti, ek aur baat. Mujhe khud pata hai ke main koi writer nahi hun. Par fir bhi main daily 4 hours xforum mein story writing ko deta hun kyunki yeh mera passion hai.

Log billiins kharch karke movies banate hain aur log first show ke baad se hi errors par video dalne lag jaate hain arey movie dekho chill maro na. Itni gehrai mein kyun jaane ka bhai.

Hamari CAs ki association hai. Bahut rajniti chalti hai usme. 2 saal pehle main president tha. Mera to jeena hi haram kar diya in logon ne. Do mahine baad hi resign kar diya us post se tab jakar chain aaya bhai.

To yeh ek entertainment ka platform hai. Entertainment karo na bhai. Chain se khud bhi jiyo aur auron ko bhi jeene do. Jeet haar ke liye kisne likhi story. Maze ke likha tha bhai taki khud ko bhi maza aaye aur auron ko bhi maza aye. Par aapko maza nahi aaya uske liye sorry.

Aur aapne contract ke liye jaruri jin baaton ka jikr kiya unke baare mein main achhi tarah se jaanta hun because it's the part of our job sir, bank ke loan se related formalities sabhi mujhe hi to poori karni padti hain bhai. Chahe cma data ho ya project report ya fir koi bhi financial data sab ham log taiyar karte hain.

Real life kuchh aur chij hai reel life kuchh aur. So please chill bro. Sorry bro for being harsh but I needed to give response to such review
jhuko waha jaha galti ho tum apni jagah sahi ho or behtreen ho so dont lose your confidence
 
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Bhai sorry bolne ki jarurat nahi hai even I say sorry ke maine itna sakht reply kiya. But story ke ilawa aap khud apna review dubara padho. Tab aapko pata chalega kya likha hai aapne. Kisi ko hausla nahi de sakte to kam se kam digao mat bhai.

Koi bhi story ekdam trutivihin ho yeh possible hi nahi hai aur conspiracy stories mein poori tarah fool proof ho main maan hi nahi sakti, ek aur baat. Mujhe khud pata hai ke main koi writer nahi hun. Par fir bhi main daily 4 hours xforum mein story writing ko deta hun kyunki yeh mera passion hai.

Log billiins kharch karke movies banate hain aur log first show ke baad se hi errors par video dalne lag jaate hain arey movie dekho chill maro na. Itni gehrai mein kyun jaane ka bhai.

Hamari CAs ki association hai. Bahut rajniti chalti hai usme. 2 saal pehle main president tha. Mera to jeena hi haram kar diya in logon ne. Do mahine baad hi resign kar diya us post se tab jakar chain aaya bhai.

To yeh ek entertainment ka platform hai. Entertainment karo na bhai. Chain se khud bhi jiyo aur auron ko bhi jeene do. Jeet haar ke liye kisne likhi story. Maze ke likha tha bhai taki khud ko bhi maza aaye aur auron ko bhi maza aye. Par aapko maza nahi aaya uske liye sorry.

Aur aapne contract ke liye jaruri jin baaton ka jikr kiya unke baare mein main achhi tarah se jaanta hun because it's the part of our job sir, bank ke loan se related formalities sabhi mujhe hi to poori karni padti hain bhai. Chahe cma data ho ya project report ya fir koi bhi financial data sab ham log taiyar karte hain.

Real life kuchh aur chij hai reel life kuchh aur. So please chill bro. Sorry bro for being harsh but I needed to give response to such review
मानिक भाई ! फौजी भाई का मंशा नहीं था कि किसी का दिल दुखे । वो बहुत ही अच्छे राइटर है और उन्होंने अपनी कहानियों में कभी भी किसी रीडर्स से बदतमीजी से बातें नहीं की है । सभी से प्रेम से बातें करते हैं । यदि कोई उन्हें अपशब्द भी कह देता है तो भी वो चुप ही रहते हैं ।
कभी कभी हम अपने भावनाओं में बह जाते हैं और फिर कुछ ऐसा कर जाते हैं जिसका अफसोस हमें बाद में होता ही होता है ।

वो सब छोड़िए और सभी के साथ प्यार करते रहिए और सभी को प्यार बांटते रहिए ।
 
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bhai agarbatti or thali nahi leke aaya tha verna hawan karta agar uska baap waahiyaat hai to aap es site per kya karne aate ho thoda soch samjh kar comment kiya karo vo bhi rules padh kar apko pasand nahi to mat padho ye mention hai rules me
Mujhe ummid nahi thi bhai ki aapko mere comment se bura lag jayega. Fir bhi agar bura lag hi gaya hai to uske liye maafi chaahta hu. Mera irada aapko hurt karne ka zara bhi nahi tha. Maine waahiyaat shabd ka prayog na to aapke liye kiya tha aur na hi aapki writing ke liye, balki us shabd ka prayog kahani ke character ke liye kiya tha,,,:dazed:

Yaha par har koi apni soojh boojh aur samajh ke anusaar kuch na kuch likh raha hai aur itna to main bhi jaanta hu ki likhna koi asaan baat nahi hoti balki usme mehnat lagti hai. Main har us shakhs ko salaam karta hu jo ham sabke manoranjan ke liye itni mehnat se kahani likhte hain. :bow:

Ant me itna hi kahuga bhai ki jaise logo ki sakaraatmak pratikriya se ham khush ho jate hain waise hi logo ki nakaraatmak pratikriya ko bhi hame jazb karna chahiye kyo ki nakaraatmak pratikriya aisi hoti hai jiske dwara ham khud ke saahas aur dhairya ke bare me jaan pate hain. Har tarah ki pratikriya se hame kuch na kuch seekhne ko milta hai. Khair, meri pratikriya se aapko bura laga hai to uske liye fir se maafi chaahta hu dost,,,,:?:
 

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"वापसी की कीमत"
Actually it's not a story, it's a situation which faced by many people. A relation between a father and son nothing can be unique than this bond. And ofcourse its very difficult to see the last time rituals of father for any son.
Between the basic concept, some thing is flowing that can touch hearts and that was emotion, guilty and unexpressed love.
While comparing this story to real life many people can relate this to their respective life, like for me, my father was very close to me and I can feel the pain very deeply to lost some one. My father was died cause of heart attack and that time i was there,holding his hand to mine in that hospital room. Seeing my mother chanting prayers with tears in her eye. Within few minutes our family broke out, that was very difficult time for us. But as i said earlier, it's life. It's situation and that's it the story.
I always like to read stories in devnagri it gives a pleasure, I'm thankful writer do it. Wishes for contest
Bahut bahut shukriya HalfbludPrince bhai,,,,:hug:
 
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Mujhe ummid nahi thi bhai ki aapko mere comment se bura lag jayega. Fir bhi agar bura lag hi gaya hai to uske liye maafi chaahta hu. Mera irada aapko hurt karne ka zara bhi nahi tha. Maine waahiyaat shabd ka prayog na to aapke liye kiya tha aur na hi aapki writing ke liye, balki us shabd ka prayog kahani ke character ke liye kiya tha,,,:dazed:

Yaha par har koi apni soojh boojh aur samajh ke anusaar kuch na kuch likh raha hai aur itna to main bhi jaanta hu ki likhna koi asaan baat nahi hoti balki usme mehnat lagti hai. Main har us shakhs ko salaam karta hu jo ham sabke manoranjan ke liye itni mehnat se kahani likhte hain. :bow:

Ant me itna hi kahuga bhai ki jaise logo ki sakaraatmak pratikriya se ham khush ho jate hain waise hi logo ki nakaraatmak pratikriya ko bhi hame jazb karna chahiye kyo ki nakaraatmak pratikriya aisi hoti hai jiske dwara ham khud ke saahas aur dhairya ke bare me jaan pate hain. Har tarah ki pratikriya se hame kuch na kuch seekhne ko milta hai. Khair, meri pratikriya se aapko bura laga hai to uske liye fir se maafi chaahta hu dost,,,,:?:
आप ने अपनी स्टोरी क्यों बंद करके रखा है शुभम भाई ? जल्दी से अपडेट्स देना शुरू कीजिए ।
 
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