★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[-:AARAV143:-]

Story :- ek aadhuri kahani

writer :- QUASAR

link :-

★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Entry Thread ★☆★

खोया हुआ प्यार

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bahut hi shandar story thi bhai..
sab bahut hi sahi tarike se likha
ek perfect story mein jo hona chahiye wo aapne likh ke dikhyaa hai
perfect story thi aur end bhi dikha diya to bahut acha laga

mujhe bas ek scene hi acha na laga jab raj ne aarush ko goli mari
gopal ko marna koi option na tha lekin story ki demand mein wo bilkul sahi tha
isliye story mein koi kami najar na aayi..

trisha aur aarush ko mila to dete to ek bahut hi achi story ho sakti thi....
koi na aapne story ke end dikhaya wahi bahut acha laga

well aapki writting skills bahut achi hai..

best of luck for contest

Rating :- 4.7/5 stars​

 

[-:AARAV143:-]

Story :- UNFAITHFUL AND ALCOHOLIC Writer :- The blue prince link :- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1543873 story to aap ache likhte hai story line ko crime petrol & savdhan india dekh ke uski stories yaha to copy na karo likhna hai to khud ki story line banao aur likho.. aapne mehnat ki hai likhne ko lekin ye bhi galat hai kisi murder ke scene ko copy karke yaha chap diyo ho ​

 

[-:AARAV143:-]

Story :- भूख

Writer :- PARADOX

Link:-

https://xforum.live/threads/%E2%98%85%E2%98%86%E2%98%85-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-%E2%98%85%E2%98%86%E2%98%85.16291/post-1590624

PARADOX bhai story babut hi achi likhte ho..
story section mein ek story chalu kar do ab..

sach hi to kaha aapne ye sab bhuk ke karan aajkal log kya halato se guzar rahe hai..
ye to batane ki jarurat na hai..
abhi ki situation hi dekh lo lockdown mein kitne hi gareeb pariwarlon ko 1 waqt roti bhi naseeb nahi ho rahi hai..
gareeb paise se to gareeb rehta hai..lekin kisi paise wale se bahut acha dil aur izzat uski achi rehti hai..
gareeb pyaar apni izzat se hi karta hai..lekin kuch lala se log unhe apni hawas ka sikhar bana dete hai

pehle ke jamane mein bhi yahi hota hai aur ab bhi yahi hota hai
bas fark itna hai ki gareeb ke sath ab ache log bhi unke sath hote hai aawaj uthane mein
pehle to sab jaminadro aur thakuro ke dar se kisi ko support nahi karte the..ab aisa na hai

hariya ne itne salon tak munni ko lala se bachake rakha lekin munni ne apne pita ke moh mein galti kar di
jiski saza hariya , malhu aur chinu ki ab munni se dur reh kar gujarni padengi

mujhe ek baat puchni hai..
munni ne jab jidh ki hariya ke pass jane ki to malhu ne use kyu nahi bataya ki hariya kya chahta hai ?
kyu ki agar ye baat bata deta to shayad aaj munni ke sath aisa na hua hota

story line aur aapki writting skills bahut hi jabardast hai..
aisi hi stories likha kare

best of luck for contest

Rating :- 4.8/5 stars ​

 

[The Blue Prince]

Story - UNFAITHFUL AND ALCOHOLIC



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1543873



Writer- The Blue Prince



About story-

Jandar shandar jaberdast…

Ek achchi story with a twist , end tak padhne par hi samjh aati hai aur story bandh ke rakhne me bhi kamiyab hoti hai ..

Story batana yahi story ko spoiler kar dena hoga ..

Is story se ek bat to samjh me aati hai ki sharab ki aadat kitani buri hoti hai , ise shouk ke liye piyo , masti ke liye piyo , gam bhulane aur sone ke liye piyo lekin sale ki aadat mat lagao ..

Warana ye sab kuchh le ke chale jati hai , health bhi aur sath hi wo sukh bhi jiski kamna log karte hai

Note for writer –

Prince bhai bahut hi sunder aur sadhi hui story thi aapki ..

Padhkar dil khus ho gaya ..

Aise hi likhte rahiye

Best of luck for contest ?

Thank you so much bhai for reading my story and writing a precious review.

I feel glad ki aapko meri story pasand aayi and aapne itna accha review kiya. Bahut accha kiya bhai jo plot nahi bataya nahin to spoiler ho jaata

Sahi baat bhai ..sharaab aur bewafayi one of the main factors hain jo relationships ki tabah kar dete hain. Thanks bhai

Regards
The Blue Prince

 

[The Blue Prince]

Story:- unfaithful And alcoholic

Writer:- The Blue Prince


Review:- Ek short aur simple story jis ko bohat ache se narrate kia gaya hai aur flow bhi bohat acha tha Puri story me koi fazool dailouge nahi the Na story ko zada lamba kheencha gaya kuch cheeze Readers ke upar chor deni chahiye Ek biwi jo apne pati ko dokha de rahi thi Aur bohat chalaki se ek din us ne Apne pati ka kaam tamam ker dia apne boyfriend ke saath mil ker lekin kehte hai na Gunah chupaye nahi chupta Ek na ek din bahir aa he jata Bohat dafa waqt lagta hai kuch baar jaldi khul jata hai lekin gunah kabhi chupa nahi reh sakta Mujhe ap ki story achi lagi umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

Thank you so much damha bhai for sparing your time and reading my story and writing a beautiful review.

Gunah kabhi chup nahin sakta. Ek na ek din toh jaroor bhed khull jaata hain. Jaisa karoge vaise bharoge .

Thanks for your wishes damha bhai

Regards
The Blue Prince

 

[Damha]

Story:- हीरो


Writer:- Dead_man


Review:- Aman Sach me ek hero tha Hero sirf wo nahi hota jo Gundo ko peet de aur hero ban jaye hero dil se banta hai Aur Aman me ye khoobi thi us ke paas Ek bara dil tha Jahan insaan kisi aam situation me kisi ki help nahi marta wanhi Aman ne ek aisi situation jis me us ko pata tha ke us ki jaan ko bhi khatra ho sakta hai us situation me wo help karne ke liye gaya lekin bare dil ke saath Aman ke paas ek aur cheez thi wo tha dimagh jis ke chalte Aman ne apni security bhi rakhi Signal na ata daikh Aman khud us ko Hospital le ker gaya aur pura kharch bhi de ker wapis aya Ek baar phir Aman ne khud ko hero sabit karte huwe dikhaya Jab us ko pata chala ke Doctor Ek dawa bana raha hai jis se insaniyat ka bhala ho ga to Aman ne Doctor ko na sirf chupne ki jagha di balke us ko ek underground lab bhi bana ker di Lekin iss ki bhanak dushmano ko lag gayi jis ke chalte us ne Aman aur Doctor ko pakarne ke liye Gunde bhej diye Wahan bhi Aman ne Apne dimagh ka istimal kia aur bari chalaki se Doctor aur dawa ko le ker nikal gaya lekin gundo ne unhe daikh lia Aman ne phir se dimagh ka istimal kia aur Apna balidan dete huwe dawa ko khud per istimal kia aur baki dawa jala ker Doctor ko wahan se bhej diya kiu ke agar Doctor un ke haath lag jata to Wo Doctor se galat kaam karwa sakte the jis ke chalte Doctor ne khudkhusi ker li Aur Us dawa ke experiment ko apne saath he khatam ker diya dawa ke istimal se aman ne Ashok jaise galat insaan ko us ke karmo ki saza de di Iss kahani se hume ye seekh milti hai hero banne ke liye Taqatwar hona ya kisi superpower ki Zarorat nahi hai Bus ek Khubsoorat dil hona chahiye Mujhe ap ki kahani pasand ayi best of luck for contest

 

[The Blue Prince]

Story :- UNFAITHFUL AND ALCOHOLIC Writer :- The blue prince link :- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1543873 story to aap ache likhte hai story line ko crime petrol & savdhan india dekh ke uski stories yaha to copy na karo likhna hai to khud ki story line banao aur likho.. aapne mehnat ki hai likhne ko lekin ye bhi galat hai kisi murder ke scene ko copy karke yaha chap diyo ho ​

Thanks bhai for reading my story and writing a review.

But bhai aapke yeh ilzaam bebuniyaad hain.

Ek toh yeh ki main crime patrol aur savdhaan India dekhta nahin. Last time 2016 main dekha hoga shayad .

Doosri baat ki yeh meri apni banayi hui storyline hain bhai. Kisi se bhi copy nahin kiya hua hain.

Teesri baat agar aapko lagta hai Maine copy kiya hain toh mujhe woh episode ya story batayiye. Aise ilzaam mat lagaoo bhai.

Story sochne pe mehnat lagti hain. Story likhne par mehnat lagti hain. Story ki presentation set karne pe bhi mehnat lagti hain. Aur main un writers main se nahin Hun jo copy paste ki storylines pe mehnat karke likhen. Main khud ki hi likhta hunn bhai.

Aapka review read karke toot gaya bhai.

Regards
The Blue Prince

 

[Damha]

Story:- Pyaar Karti Ho Mujhse



Writer:- Adirshi



Review:- Narration aur flow acha tha Sab kuch ache se adjust kia ap ne Pyar dharm daikh ker nahi hota pyat bus ho jata hai bohat achi love story thi happy ending ke saath lekin ap ne beech me jin logo ka zikr kia hai un me se ek main bhi hu Main ye nahi kehta dusro ka dharm galat hai main respect karta hu lekin iss shadi se main agree nahi karta otherwise Acha likha ap ne best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- खोया हुआ प्यार



Writer:- Dead_man


Review:- Ye story Sneha Aur rohan ke pyar ki hai jo rishte me cousins the lekin Rohan Sneha ko cousin se zada dost se zada apna pyar manta tha pehle to sneha ka Amit ke pyar ki wajha se Rohan us se dur hi gya lekin Dobara jab us ko moka mila to us ne us moke ka faida uthaya Aur sneha ke saamne shadi ka proposal rakha Sneha Rohan ke pyar ko Samajh gayi Ke us ka pyar Amit jaisa nahi hai jo mosam ki tarha badal jaye Rohan ka pyar sacha tha chahat sachi thi jis wajha se us ko us ka pyar mil gaya aur sneha ne han ker di Ek achi storie thi lekin iss ko aur acha banaya ja sakta hai otherwise good story Best of luck for contest

 

[Niharika]

Story - निकिता ...... डर का एहसास



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1563220



Writer- Niharika



About story-

Story ka plot to achcha tha , ek purani story jisme ek Rajkumari hoti hai aur uska ek kaam bacha hai jo ki wo ab is janm me pura kar rahi hai

Lekin narration thoda weak laga mujhe .

Ise achche se likha jata to achchi story ban sakti thi..

Note for writer –

Niharika ji aapka prayas bahut hi sarahniya hai aapne bahut mehnat karke ye story likhi hai , iske liye aapka dhanywad

Aise hi likhte rahiye aur hame achchi achchi story dete rahiye

Best of luck for contest ?

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