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Kya Veer apni life behtar kar paega ya sab kuch kho baithega?

  • Veer Baadshah banega

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Werewolf

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Bhai kya hi likh dala hai ye!!!
Hr update ko padhne ke bad ek question aata hai mn me ki ab isse badhiya kya hi hoga pr phir agle update me hi answer mil jata hai ki ye hoga
Haha! Story jaise jaise progress karegi utna hi hairan karti jayegi dost. :five:
Without any doubt this is the greatest fight scene I have ever read...And for writing such updates a massive :respekt:for you...Last part ko padh ke to literally goosebumps aa gye pura
Thanks a lot man. ✨
But, ye greatest nahi. Bahut kuch abhi baaki hai. Apne shabd tab ke liye bhi thode bacha ke rakhna. :D
Jb suru me aapne bola tha ki ye fight scene 4 updates lega to mn me ye bat aayi thi ki 4 updates kewal fight ke liye to boring ho jaiega...lekin sayad tb mai bhul gya tha ki kiski story padh rha tha😂
Aisa isliye kyuki fights me various sequences the. Veer vs Jaw Long, Renshu vs unknown system holder, Ava vs Jaw Long, Erica vs Jaw Long, and again Veer vs Jaw Long.Mein samajh gaya tha ki at least ise 4 updates toh Dena hi padega. Ya yu kahe ki ye fights 4 updates lengi hi lengi. Bas, usi estimate se maine pehle hi bata diya tha. Fight boring tab hoti hai jab fight keval 2 hi characters ke upar ho. Aur, updates ek hafte ke baad aa rahe ho. Toh zaahir hai wo fight bore maar sakti hai. But meri situation aisi hai ki mein updates ki fix timing set nahi kar sakta. Niji jeevan bahut vyast hai mera. Par, maine apni poori koshish ki thi iss fight ko zyada se zyada romanchak rakhne me. Mujhe khushi hui ki ju ko pasand aayi. :five:
Literally itne sare twist n turns aur jabardast scene aaye inn 3 updates me ki ek word ke liye bhi boriyat feel nhi hui...Aur aapka unique and best style of writing to hai char chand lgane ke liye updates me...Sare scene kisi movie ke tarah samne chalne lgte hai aake update padhne ke bad...Aur itna tagda fight scene likh kaise lete ho aap?? mtlb itni imagination kha se late ho aise scene likhne ke liye , koi bhi scene aisa nhi lgta ki repeat ho rha ho sare scene ekdum fresh aur jadardast lgte hai
Imagination strong honi chahiye bhai. Jab aap action likh rahe ho toh imagination ka hi khel hota hai poora. Jitni vivid imagination utne behtar scenes. Parantu, iske baad ek step aur hota hai. Aur, woh hai unn scenes ka shabdo me portrayal.
To Ava ko Veer ka location death flag ke through pta chalta tha...Last update padhne ke bad mere dimag me bhi thore der ke liye ye Death flag wala point aaya tha ki Ava ko Veer ka pta isi ke through lga hoga pr fir usi time lga ki nhi ye nhi ho skta hai kyuki agar death flag location btata to Ava ko Veer ko location tb kyu nhi pta chala jb Renshu ne Veer ko france me bacha liya tha aur Ava ko lga tha ki Veer mr chuka hai...Ab mujhe kya pta tha ki Death Flag update hone bad range badhane ke sath sath location bhi btane lgega:):idk1:
Ava ke Death Flag ki range poora planet hai. :D Farq nahi padta Veer dharti ke kis kone me hai. Jab tak wo earth par hai, Ava ko uski location pata rahegi. :DUsne itne points bhi toh lagaaye the akhir. 15k points. Koi chhota mota amount nahi. :cold:
I'm feeling a bit sad for Ava after this update....Bechari puri tarah se akeli hai abhi apne life me....Bap ko crimson ne bhut phle hi chin liya , Uski Maa jo uske jine ka ek matr sahara hua krti thi unko bhi usse chin liya gya , ek dost ko bhi chin liya gya usse ( jisko house of killer ke time mara gya tha wo jahrili sarab pila kr , ab nam nhi yaad aa rha)
Ava ki dost ka naam Charlotte tha. :declare:
Full character's guide banayi hi kis liye hai bhai maine? :laugh: Upar link bhi Diya hua hai. Jab bhi koi character yaad na aaye. Turant dekh lene ka. Usi purpose ke liye Maine wo banayi hai. :approve:a
Bachpan ke do khas dost Sonia aur Kaera se bhi koi connection nhi hai , aur Veer jiske sath rhna Ava ko pasand hai ya jisse wo pyar bhi kr baithi hai wo usse buri tarah se naraz hai..Itni bdi Singer aur system holder hone ke bawjud she has nothing with her right now
Ek point yaha clear karna chahta hu. Ava abhi completely Veer ke pyaar me nahi hai. :naa:Agar itna asaan hota hai pyaar me girna toh na jaane kitni ladkiya Veer ke pyaar me gir gayi hoti. Ava ke mann me Veer ke prati feelings hai. Lekin, readers use galat samajh lete hai. Ki arey... Ye Veer ko bachaane aayi hai. Matlab pyaar karti hai.Pyaar bahut bada shabd hota hai bhai. Ise casually iss story me toh katayi istemal nahi kiya jayega. :noo: Ava ke dil me kuch feelings zaroor hai Veer ko leke magar usne 100% wo accept nahi Kari hai. Aur, na hi wo abhi samjhi hai ki use waqai poori tarah se prem ho gaya hai.'Go and protect your loved one now.' Ye bol Veer ke bhalayi usne maane. Par, yaha loved one ka matlab thoda deeply hume samajhna hoga. Ava ke paas abhi iss waqt koi bhi nahi hai. Veer ekmaatr wo person tha jiske prati Ava ne apne aap ko zinda paaya. Khush paaya. Apni maa ke dehant ke baad wahi iklauta tha jis se wo attached feel kar paayi thi unn chand lamho me. (Jab wo uske khilaf plot kar rahi thi uske saath ghumte hue)Uske paas koi thikana nahi tha. Aur, ek guilt ka bhaar jo uske upar tab se pada hai jab se Veer uss se rooth ke gaya tha. Toh Veer ke prati wo guilt, wo betrayal, wo narazgi... Ye sab factors hai jo use Veer ko protect karne ke liye ek mechanism ki tarah act kar rahe hai. Aur, inhi me kahi uske dil ki wo kuch anjaan feelings chhipi hui hai.Agar dhyaan diya hoga abhi pichle update me...! Toh Lily uss se kehti hai ~ 'Are you smitten by him so much?'Jiske badle me Ava uttar nahi deti. :D Iska matlab usne abhi apne dil se 100% ye qubool nahi kiya hai. Wo khud confused hai bechari. Pehle Veer use maaf kar de... Iss pe focus kare ya fir unn anjaan feelings pe? Give her some time. :heartbeat:
I think she deserves a second chance....Ha manta hu ki usne Veer ko dokha deke usko marne ka plan bnaya pr uss time uske pas aur koi option bhi to nhi tha , I mean jb ye plan usne bnaya tha uss Veer was nothing for her whereas her mother whose life was on stack was everything for her
Aur fir aaj jo Veer jinda bach paya wo bhi kewal Ava ke karan hi sambhav ho paya...
Bilkul! Ava ke waha aane se hi sthiti badli hai. Otherwise it was the end for Veer. (As well as Erica.)Aur, Veer ki favorability bhi uske prati badhi hai. 10% se 20% hui hai. Baaki dekhte hai hum. Veer kya nirnay leta hai.
Aaj ke update ke sare fight scene hi jabardast aur well written the
Ava ka 4 banduko ke sath ladna bhi ek kamal ka scene tha...Ye scene mujhe bhut hdd tk ek circus ke scene ko resemble krte lge...Ava as a circus ringmaster balls ke jagah gun ka juggling kr rhi thi aur iss circus ringmaster(Ava) ne Jaw Long jaise sher ko bhi apne isare pe nacha diya joki actually ek circus me hota hai😂🤣
Ab yaha ju ki imagination ko thoda aur vivid karte hai. :DAva ne jab apni handguns hawa me ucchaali toh wo handguns utni upar nahi gayi thi jitni circus me juggling ke waqt wo balls ya rings juggle karte hai.Circus waale to kaafi upar ucchaalte hai. They don't have any time issue. :D Par, Ava jab unhe juggle kar rahi thi toh distance bahut Kam tha. 15cm ka scale dekha hi hoga. Wese 4-5 scales ikhhatte laga lo. Bas...! Utna hi distance tha uske haath se upar gun ke hawa me jaane ka. Ab imagine kar lo ki kitni tez usne juggle kiya hoga. Kyuki... Jitna Kam distance...! Utni hi zyada speed ki requirement. :smartm: Isliye uske haath after images bana rahe the. Theh were too fast to catch with normal human eyes. Aur, na sirf wo juggle kar rahi thi. Balki...! Unhe pakad ke fire bhi karti jaa rahi thi. :ayano:
Iss update me fight ke alawa kafi sari information bhi dekhne ko mili such as Jaw Long and Ava's system stats card and information about different skill and cards
Jaw Long one more interesting and powerfull card Berserk... Ye card ek do dhari talwar ke tarah hai jo opponent and host dono ko nuksan pahuca skti hai...Intelligence zero hone ka bharphur faida opponents bhi utha skte hai pr iske chalte power me jo massive increase hota hai wo kafi hai kisi ko bhi pel ke rakh dene ke liye
Ye card tab hi accha hai jab aapke saamne sirf aur sirf aapka opponent ho. Kyuki card friend or foe ke beech distinguish karne nahi deta. Aise me koi aapka apna waha aa jaaye toh aap uss par bhi hamla kar doge.
Ab to iss kahani me itni sari information ho gyi hai (such as all the information about different different cards , skills , stats , etc. etc.) Ki lgta hai ek copy pe notes bnana pdega iss kahani ke liye 😂...Idk aap kaise yad rakh pate hoge itni sari information akele...
Idea! :idea: Cards ke liye bhi ek alag se bana du kya jagah? Taaki access kar sako easily? Saare cards aur full status wahi daal dunga. :think:
Of course, jaise jaise full status update hoga mein use updates me bhi daalta jaunga. Par... Ek jagah ho to waha se cards wagarah aur status dekh sakte hai. Fuckkk! Ye idea mere ko pehle kyu nahi aaya? :Jerry:
Update ke first half ko to puri tarah se dono beauties ne hi control kiya jb Veer behosh tha...Aur jis tarah ki condition Veer ki update ke starting me dikhai gai thi usko dekh ke to ye bhi lga tha ki sayad usse jldi hosh na aaye aur uska role iss update me na ho , pr pari ke rhte jyada der tk kaise kuch ho skta hai Veer ko:cool:
Finally Veer hosh me aaya aur hosh me aate hi kya dhamake dar information di Jaw Long ke khilaf:bow:...Aise hi thore na sb ladkiya mrti hai Veer pr:cool:
His battle IQ is just... 🔥
Aur ye humne kayi baar dekh liya hai.
Erica ko to Jaw Long ne majak me hi liya...Usse ladne khud na jakar apne paltu chil ko bhejta hai , 2 mukko me mar ke behosh kr deta hai...Pr Erica ne bhi har nhi mani aur hrr bar uska samna krne gyi....Usse ab Veer ki khi gyi bat badhiya se samaj aa gyi hogi ki - 'You can't even imagine the chaos when 2 system holders fight each other without any restraint.'...
Erica toh ab poori 'change of thoughts' waali journey se hokar guzarne waali hai. :laugh:
Dekhne laayak hoga uska behaviour Veer ke prati iss fight ke baad.
Iss update ke end ke bare me to kya hi bolu , kya hi ending ki hai:shocked2:🤯
Hrr bar jb kabhi koi update kisi suspense ke sath khatam hota hai to dimag me ek hint aa jaya krta hai ki ye reason ho skta hai iss suspense ke piche , pr aaj ka update padhne ke bad to bss dimag me yhi aaya ki agla update kb aaiega:eek1:...I hvae literally no clue about what happened at the end of the update:idk1:
Explain Kiya jayega. So, don't worry. :D:
Aur, uss baare me abhi na hi socho toh behtar hai. Agle do updates bahut important hai. Ek iss fight ko khatam karega aur dusra iss poore arc ko.
Pichle update ke review me maine likha tha ki Jaw Long kuch jyada hi serious lg rha hai iss fight ko leke...Ab smajh me aaya ki kyu wo itna serious hai , Mine to sayad se kabhi uske liye utna important tha hi nhi...Uska vision to mine se khi jyada bda tha...Use system holders cahiye the jinhe wo apne kale jadu se marke uske sare powers chin na cahta tha...Aur agar wo aaj isme kamyab ho jata to fir to uski power unimaginable ho jati...Ek to phle se hi itna takatwar hai aur upr se 3-3 system holders ke cards skill lene ke bad to literally uske pas sare type ke skill aur card ho jate...
Yup! Sirf mine ke peeche hi thodi ye sab kiya jayega. Par ju ne jo reason diya...! Wo abhi bhi like... 20%? I guess...! Bas itna hi sahi hai. Iske alawa bhi aur kayi reasons hai. Jo aage khulne waale hai. :D :smartm:
Pr jb tk Pari hai Veer ko koi itni aasani se kaise mar skta hai...Uske pas always plan B ready rhta hai...Pr aaj wala plan B kuch jyada dark nhi ho gya??:omg1:
Mtlb Veer ke pure body pe hi control le liya?? Veer to behosh hai , usko to pta bhi nhi hoga ki kya kregi Pari ab Jaw Long ke sath
Jis tarah se Pari bat kr rhi thi uss hisab se to wo koi completely different Pari lg rhi hai....Veer to wapas aa jaiega ...hai nn??:sweat:
Tabhi toh maine shuru me hi bata diya tha. This pari is entirely different. Wo muh se bolti kuch aur hai aur intentions uske kuch aur hote hai. She helped Veer... But right after that... She's consuming his points... Majboori ka fayda uthate hue usne apne intentions baahar nikaal diye hai.
Ek aur chiz hai jo aksar mere dimag me aati hai ki kya System ek acchi chiz hai??...Mtlb kya system sach me logo ke bhalai ke liye hai ya wo apne host ke through koi aur hi maksad pana cahte hai??...I don't know why , pr kabhi kabhi mujhe inn sb system se negative feeling aati hai....jo bhi ho itna to confirm hai ki system ke raaz bhut gahre hai aur sayad hme iss arc me kuch kuch dekhne ko bhi mile system ke bare me , jiski neev issi update me rakh bhi di gyi hai
Iss baare me koi comment nahi. :D :nocomment:
Warna spoiler ho jayega. Iss baare me jitna sochna hai socho. :D Koi dikkat nahi.
Btw , feeling sad for Pari:cry2:...Jaw Long ko to hara degi pr sigma Veer se mommy nhi hi bulwa pai ant me bhi😂
Alpha aur Sigma traits Veer ke balanced hai. Mommy uske muh se uska baap bhi nahi nikalwa sakta. :laugh: Fir Pari kya hai...
AS ALWAYS A GREAT UPDATE ONCE AGAIN:bow::applause:
KEEP WRITING...
WAITING FOR NEXT...
Thanks a ton for this massive detailed revo man. :claps: Maza aa gaya ise padhne me. Poora frustration chala gaya aaj ka. 😌
Aise hi revos to padhne ka Mann karta hai. Job se aao aur bas aisa kuch padhne mil jaaye. Toh din ka saara tension dur ho jaata hai. Aur, inhi ke liye to aata hu mein. Kuch chand hi readers hai ju ki tarah jo apna samay nikal ke hum writers ke liye itna kuch likhte hai badle me. Warna sab padhe aur do shabd likh ke nikal liye. Aise revos jab dekhta hu toh Dil khush ko jaata hai.

Kherr...! Maine bhi kuch zyada hi likh Diya flow flow me...! Anyways. Thanks and keep supporting man. :five:
Agla update jald se jald dene ki koshish hai.
 

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bohat he bhayanak zabadast gazab update tha sir ye update to soch sy pary tha ek taraf ava ne khud itne time bohat tayar kia hy ta ke kabi veer pr koi musibat aaye to usse madad kr sake vahi jaw long bhi bohat bhayank kisam ka banda nikla 3 system holder ko akely maat dedi or doosri taraf ab pari ka ek alag roop dekhne ko mil raha pata nhi pari kon kon se or raaz chupaye huye hy eagerly waiting for next update
 
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Ek point yaha clear karna chahta hu. Ava abhi completely Veer ke pyaar me nahi hai. :naa:Agar itna asaan hota hai pyaar me girna toh na jaane kitni ladkiya Veer ke pyaar me gir gayi hoti. Ava ke mann me Veer ke prati feelings hai. Lekin, readers use galat samajh lete hai. Ki arey... Ye Veer ko bachaane aayi hai. Matlab pyaar karti hai.Pyaar bahut bada shabd hota hai bhai. Ise casually iss story me toh katayi istemal nahi kiya jayega. :noo: Ava ke dil me kuch feelings zaroor hai Veer ko leke magar usne 100% wo accept nahi Kari hai. Aur, na hi wo abhi samjhi hai ki use waqai poori tarah se prem ho gaya hai.'Go and protect your loved one now.' Ye bol Veer ke bhalayi usne maane. Par, yaha loved one ka matlab thoda deeply hume samajhna hoga. Ava ke paas abhi iss waqt koi bhi nahi hai. Veer ekmaatr wo person tha jiske prati Ava ne apne aap ko zinda paaya. Khush paaya. Apni maa ke dehant ke baad wahi iklauta tha jis se wo attached feel kar paayi thi unn chand lamho me. (Jab wo uske khilaf plot kar rahi thi uske saath ghumte hue)Uske paas koi thikana nahi tha. Aur, ek guilt ka bhaar jo uske upar tab se pada hai jab se Veer uss se rooth ke gaya tha. Toh Veer ke prati wo guilt, wo betrayal, wo narazgi... Ye sab factors hai jo use Veer ko protect karne ke liye ek mechanism ki tarah act kar rahe hai. Aur, inhi me kahi uske dil ki wo kuch anjaan feelings chhipi hui hai.Agar dhyaan diya hoga abhi pichle update me...! Toh Lily uss se kehti hai ~ 'Are you smitten by him so much?'Jiske badle me Ava uttar nahi deti. :D Iska matlab usne abhi apne dil se 100% ye qubool nahi kiya hai. Wo khud confused hai bechari. Pehle Veer use maaf kar de... Iss pe focus kare ya fir unn anjaan feelings pe? Give her some time. :heartbeat:
I agree, very well said. I will also include Erica in this category, she also feels for Veer because of Veer's unselfish commitment to help Renshu and her clan followers, even if it is due to returning of a favor.
 
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Ek baat samajh me nahi aayi, Pari ne Veer se points kyon liye. Does she want to show her dominance over him and ensure that Veer has willingly surrendered to him before she can help him. Or was it necessary from the system side before a system can help this way his/her host. Waise bhi shuru me bataya tha ki system kisi aur planet wale chala rahe hain. Kahin weh log Star Wars ki tarah earth se best ''Jedi" ki tarah best fighter to nahi dhund rahe ....
 
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