One among the best updates of this thread. There are too many amongst the BEST and this one.
Casi bro I also have the habit of going through the comments of other readers,
and I did the same here also and can say that this update got many replies and almost all have loved this update and talked a lot about it.
coming to the update itself I loved it very much too.
What made this update especial is no doubt your narrative description which always adds spice to the update.
the way you mention each character's reaction, the way he/she behaves, the way he/she responds, the way he/she acts
and above all the way you describe the situation, the way you describe the atmosphere, the way you describe the people involved in the updates all this add great intensity to an update.
And Casi bro you are expert in doing that.
Let's take for example in this update, it could have started when Vihaan approached the bus when the girls alighted, but you did not start it there, you started it by showing the girls talking about him still while going to college, and that conversation expressed more about the girls and their way of communicating showed that they are like any other girl of this planet. you very well know when to write and what to write, this shows how far talented you are.
You also know how to switch from one scene to another.
You know how to talk about Ashita then be back to Vihaan and then go back to the girls then come back to all three of them without losing the flow. all this makes the read very interesting and readers keep glued to the update and it becomes so interesting.
And the way you explain the facial expression of a character also plays an important role to make readers get more interested to read your scripts. For example in this update when you wrote How the frown on Ruchi's forehead made Vihaan understand that she is very worried and afraid, makes the read easy and pleased us that Vihaan found that and understood her to accept to stop walking behind her. That was so beautiful and interesting.
Now you could very well have told us the name of the girls when they were talking about themselves in the bus, but you did not tell us their names, you reserved that to be asked by Vihaan to let us know about their names, otherwise, they were known as saanvli and gori. So cleverly told all that in this update. Such small things make the update so beautiful and interesting to read.
Another thing is that you did not mention at the start that the grandfather was watching Vihaan, but you mentioned it at the last moment when he was back at to sit under the shade of the tree.
And about Ashita you wrote small but very interesting part, just see the difference from each side, Vihaan was the one who always wanted to see Ashita changing her uniform and loved to record, today you showed u that it was Ashita who wanted to show him but the mister had no time for that! only a small part of Ashita in this update yet a very important part!
All the stuff I mentioned makes this update special and lovely which made everyone love it more than the others.
Thanks very much for this great, wonderful and beautiful update Which I loved thoroughly dear Casi bro.
hats off bro and keep it going this way.
