Chapter 34
Dawn/Dusk
Shravas ki hansne ki awaaz oasis ke charon taraf goonji. Vaani ne ek kadam peeche liya, uske chehre par ajeeb si ghabrahat aa gayi. Yeh aadmi... use kaise jaanta tha?
"Tum... mujhe kaise jaante ho?" Vaani ne pucha, uski awaaz mein shaq aur darr dono the.
Shravas ne apni hansi roki aur Vaani ki taraf dekha. Uski aankhen ab bhi chamak rahi thi par usne apne aap ko sambhala.
"Main maafi chahta hoon," Shravas halka sa jhukkar bola. "Main... bas bahut khush ho gaya tha. Dekho main bahut jagahon se guzra hoon pichle kuch mahinon mein. Aur jab maine kuch din pehle suna ke Thanasala par hamla hua hai... mujhe laga sab kuch khatam ho gaya. Par ab... tumhe dekhkar... ek Thansala ke Rajkumari ko dekhkar... mujhe pata chal gaya ke Thanasala abhi bhi zinda hai."
Vaani ne usko gaur se dekha. Uske shabd sachche lag rahe the par... par woh abhi bhi chintit thi. Uski nazar achanak peeche ki taraf gayi us tooti hui deewar par jahan woh kaankal bandha hua tha.
"Woh.. kaun hai?" Vaani ne apni ungli se us kaankal ki taraf ishara kara. "Woh... kaankal... woh yahan kyun bandha hua hai?"
Shravas ne peeche mudke dekha jahan Ajay deewar se zanjeer mein jakda hua tha. Dhoop mein woh haddiyan chamak rahi thi.
"Woh," Shravas ne sukhe awaaz mein kaha "Woh bas... ek paltu janwar hai. Zyada kuch nahi."
"Paltu Janwar?" Vaani ki aankhen chaudi ho gayi. "Ek... kaankal?"
"Haan. Kabhi kabhi... safar mein akele ubb jata hoon. Toh saath dene ke liye hai woh."
Shravas abhi apne asli pehchan batana nhi chata tha kyuki shyad abhi Vaani ko smjh mein hi nhi aaye kuch. Pehli woh wahan ke sthithi shi se smjh lena chata tha.
Tabhi achanak... us kaankal ke jabde mein halki si harkat hui.
"Uuuuuuggghhhhh..."
Ek bahut hi halki dard bhari awaaz aayi. Jaise kisi ko bahut mushkil se bolne ki koshish kar raha ho.
Vaani ke pure baal khade ho gaye. Usne apne dono haath apne muh par rakh liye aur ek kadam peeche hataye.
"Yeh... bol raha hai!" Vaani ne chauke hue awaaz mein kaha.
"Ssshhhrraaavaaasss..." Ajay ki awaaz door se aa rahi thi ab itne ke baad woh dhang se bolne layak bhi nhi bacha tha.
"Chup raho," Shravas ne usko ek tikhi nazar se dekha.
Ajay ka skull halki sa hilne laga.
"Teeennn... diiinnnโ"
"Woh kya bol rha hai" Vani ne jigyasa bhari awaaz mein pucha.
"Kuch nhi bas woh yeh bol rha hai woh teen dinnn se ek ladki ko roz yahan paani bharne aate dekh raha hai. Hum log yahan teen din se ruke hue hai. Mein yahan se aage ka rasta dhoondne jata hoon roz.".
Ajay ki awaaz achanak band ho gayi. Sirf hawa ki seetkar reh gayi.
Shravas ne gehri saans li aur apne haath se apne baalon ko peeche kiya.
"Waise, tumne kaha tumhara ek saathi hai? Vidut? Woh... yahan se kitni door hai?"
Vaani ne apni matka ko apne haath mein adjust kiya.
"Woh... kuch door par hi hai," Vaani ne bina kisi taraf ishara karte hue kaha. "Main... mujhe ab wapas jaana chahiye. Woh chinta karega ab."
"Main tumhare saath chal sakta hoon?" Shravas ne pucha. "Matlab... agar tumhe koi dikkat nahi hai toh. Yeh ilakaa khatarnaak hai. Aur tumne dekha wo kekda..."
Vaani ne ek pal socha. Yeh aadmi ajeeb zaroor tha... par usne uski jaan bachayi thi.
"T-theek hai" Vaani ne hichkichate hue kaha.
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Vanrajya ka Shahi Mahal
Waqt Subah
Vinashika neeche baithi thi, uski aankhen... woh aankhen jisme koi bhav nahi tha... woh kamre ke har kone ko dekh rahi thi. Uske lambe baal kandhe par fail gaye the aur kaale vastra unhe aur bhi darawna bana rahe the.
Ravisha saamne ek chhoti si kursi par apna sir neeche jhukaye baithi thi. Uske haath apne godh mein jakde hue the aur unke chehre par pasina tha.
Ravisha ne apna gala saaf kiya. "K-Kaalraani... V-Vanrajya ki... Vanrajya ki sachhi Maharani... Nandani... woh wapas aa gayi hai."
Vinashika ki ungliyan ruk gayi. "Hmmm. Nandani. Woh jo kafi samay pehle bhaag gayi thi?"
"H-haan," Ravisha ne jawab diya. "Aur... uska beta bhi. Karan. Woh... "
Vianshaka ne uske taraf ghoorte hue dekha "Mujhe sirf ek cheez ki fikar hai. Kaaljayi ki."
Vinashika dheere se khadi hui. Woh Ravisha ki taraf badhne lagi har kadam par ek ajeeb si awaaz kar rahi thi.
Ravisha ki saans tez ho gayi. Kuch bharosa nhi kab kya kar de woh.
Tabhi zor se darwaza se khula. Ek siphai bhaagta hua andar aaya.
Woh andar aaya aur Ravisha ko dekhte hi rukne wala tha par fir... fir uski nazar Vinashika par padi. Woh wahi jam gaya.
"Bol," Ravisha ne pucha. "Kya baat hai?"
Usne dad bhari nazron se ek baar Vinashika ke taraf dekha.
"Bol!" Ravisha chillaye.
Woh kaanpte hue bola, "H-hamare sena jo... jo nadi ke kinare the... woh...-"
"Woh kya?" Ravisha ab khud ghabrane lage the.
"Woh... khatam ho gaye," siphai ne apna sir neeche jhukate hue kaha, "unhone..... ek jaal bichaya. Bandh banaya. Aur jab hamare sipahi uspar se guzre... toh... toh sabko paani mein gira diya. S-sab... khatam ho gaye."
Kamre mein ek bhayanak chuppi chha gayi.
Ravisha ka chehre aur bhi zyada peela pad gaya. "N-nahi... yeh... kaise"
Par uski awaaz beech mein hi ruk gayi.
Vinashika ne siphai ki taraf dekha. Uske aas paas ki hawa thandi hone lagi
"Tumhare sena," Vinashika ne dheere se kaha, "Tumhare... Woh sena... bekar...sena... woh haar gaye?"
Siphai ne aur apna sir aur neeche jhuka liya
Vinashika ne do kadam aage badhaaye.
"M-maaf kijiye Kaalraani... w woh-" Ravisha ne uska gussa kam karne ke koshish ke.
"Chup," Vinashika ne uske taraf bina mude aadesh diya.
Aur fir usne apna haath aage badhaya aur siphai ke gale ko pakad liya.
".. Kaalghhh..." Siphai kuch bolne ki koshish kar raha tha par nahi bol paa raha tha.
Aur siphai ka sharir... woh sukhne laga. Jaise koi saari urja kheech raha ho.
"Tum... tum sab... bekar ho," Vinashika gussa ugalte hue bole.
Siphai ki haddiyan tootne ki awaaz kar rahi thi. Aur fir... woh dhool ban gaya. Sirf raakh. Jo Vinashika ke haath se neeche gir gayi.
Ravisha ne yeh sab dekha aur apne haathon se apna muh dhak liya. Unki aankhen darr se badi ho gayi thi.
Vinashika ne apna haath dekha jo ab raakh se dhaka hua tha. Usne use aaram se apne vastra se saaf kiya jaise kuch hua hi nahi.
Fir woh Ravisha ki taraf mudi.
"Ravisha," Vinashika bole, ab uski awaaz mein gussa saaf sunaayi de raha tha, "Kya... yahi hai tumhari sena ki takat? Kya yahi hai tumhare yojna? In bekar kankaalon ko bhejte rehna jo ek chote se jaal mein bhi fas jaate hai?"
Ravisha kaanpte hue khadi hui, "M-main... soch rahi thi ke... ke yeh kaam kar jayega...aur woh Nandani ko-"
"Tumne socha?" Vinashika ne gusse se kaha, Ravisha ke bilkul paas aa kar. "Tumne socha? Tumhari soch... tumhari yojna mera itne din se samay kharab kar rhe hai..."
Vinashika ki awaaz ab chillane jaise ho gayi thi.
"Maine tumhe ek... sirf ek kaam diya tha," Vinashika apni ungli Ravisha ke chehre ke paas laaye "Kaaljayi ko dhoondhna. Bas itna sa. Aur tum... tum woh bhi nahi kar paayi. Aur upar se... upar se tumhari sena bhi haar rahi hai!"
"M-maaf kijiye... main-"
"Maafi?" Vinashika ne ek darawni has ke saath kaha. "Maafi se kya hoga Ravisha?... tumhare paas kuch nahi hai. Itne din se mein yeh soch ke baithe the ke yahan aake mujhe Kaljayi mil jayege."
Vinashika ne Ravisha ka gala pakad liya. Ravisha ki saans rukne lagi.
"Agar... tum mujhe kuch nahi de sakti," Vinashika ne apne haath kase "Toh tumhara kya fayda?"
Ravisha ki aankhe darr se puri tarah fail gayi. "N-nahi... Kripa Kaalrani... m-main... main kaam aa sakti hoon...... main jaanti hoon iss... yeh mahal... main... main-"
Vinashika ne kuch pal Ravisha ko dekha. Fir... usne apna haath dhela kar diya.
Ravisha haafte haafte zameen par gir gayi. Uske gale par Vinashika ke ungliyon ke nishaan the.
"Sahi kaha," Vinashika ne Ravisha ko neeche dekha "... tumhara abhi bhi kuch fayda hai. Tum is mahal ko jaanti ho. Isliye... main tumhe abhi zinda chhod rahi hoon."
Ravisha ne apna sir upar kiya, uske aankhon mein aansu the.
Vinashika ne apna sir hilaya aur darwaze ki taraf badhi. Woh darwaze tak pahunchi aur bahar baageche mein dekhne lage.
Fir usne apne muh se ek tez, chubhti hui awaaz nikaali. Ek aisi awaaz jo insaan ke nahi thi.
Kuch pal baad... bahar se bhari kadmon ki awaaz aane lagi aur zameen kaanpne lagi.
Agrak andar aaya uska vishaal Wendigo kavach wala sharir darwaze mein mushkil se ghus paa raha tha.
"Kaalraani," Agrak ne apni gehri awaaz mein pucha, "Aapne bulaya?"
Vinashika ne Agrak ki taraf dekha.
"Haan Agrak. Maine tumhe isliye bulaya kyunki ab... waqt aa gaya hai."
"Waqt?" Agrak ne pucha.
"Haan," Vinashika kamre mein chalne lage "Main bahut lamba samay se intezaar kar rahi thi.."
Usne Ravisha ki taraf dekha jo abhi bhi zameen par baithi thi aur darr se kaanp rahi thi.
"Yeh choti moti yojnaye... yeh kaankal siphahi.. yeh sab... yeh sab kaam nahi kar rahe," Vinashika ne kaha.
Usne Agrak ki taraf dekha. "Tumhe yaad hai Thanasala mein kya kiya tha tumne?"
Agrak ne apna sir hilaya. "Haan.. bilkul yaad hai. Kaalrani. Maine... pura mahal..sena.... sab kuch..."
"Haan," Vinashika ne ek daravani muskhurat ke saath kaha. "Sab kuch tabah kar diya tha. Bilkul."
Woh aage badh kar Agrak ke paas khadi ho gayi.
"Ab tumhe wahi karna hai Agrak,"
"Kya karna hai?" Agrak ne pucha, par uski awaaz mein josh aa gaya tha. Tabahai... yeh uska pasandeeda kaam tha.
"Jo bhi... jo bhi humein Kaaljayi tak pahunchne se rok raha hai," Vinashika ne uske aankhon mein dekha, "Use... tabah kardo. Puri tarah se. Agar koi imarat hai... toh gira do. Agar koi sena hai... toh khatam kar do. Agar koi log hai... toh...Mita do usko."
Woh ruke fir bole, "Kuch mat chodhna. Samjhe?"
Agrak ke darawne chehre par - agar use chehra bhi bolte toh - ek badi muskurahat aaye.
"Samajh gaya Kaalraani," Agrak jhuka. "Main... sab kuch tabah kar dunga. Hahaha."
Vinashika kamre se bahar chali gayi, Agrak uske peeche tha. Sirf Ravisha reh gayi kamre mein, mashaalon ki roshni mein, darr se kanpti hue. Usne varson pehle jo kiya tha kya woh shi tha?
"Kya... kya maine sahi kiya?" Ravisha ne khud se pucha. "Yeh sab... yeh sab maine apne logon ke liye kiya... par ab..."
Par koi jawab nahi aaya. Bas andhera tha. Gehra darawna andhera.
***
Pure din ka safar khatam hone ko tha. Suraj aasmaan mein upar chadh chuka tha aur garmi mehsoos ho rahi thi. Karan apne ghode par baitha hua tha, uska sharir abhi bhi dard kar raha tha par woh dikha nahi raha tha. Uske chehre par dradta thi bas thoda aur....
Uske peeche pachaas makdi sipahi chal rahe the bina koi awaaz kiye. Vrishank aur Kalindi dono Karan ke ghode ke bagal mein the.
"Massster," Meher ki awaaz Karan ke dimaag mein aayi. "Lagta hai hum paas aa gaye hai. Mujhe... mujhe kuch mehsoos ho raha hai."
"Haan," Karan ne jawab diya. "Yeh jagah... yeh jaani pehchaani lag rahi hai." Whi Vanrjaya ke ped aur uske aas paas ke haryali.
Karan ne aage dekha. Haan... yeh jungle... yeh ped... yeh sab use yaad aa raha tha.
"Vanrajya ka border," Karan ne apne man mein dheere se kaha.
Uske dil ki dhakan tez ho gayi. Ghar... Woh aakhirkaar... ghar aa gaya tha. .
Vrishank ne aage aake kaha, "Kalraaj aage ka jungle bahut ghana hai. Ghodo ke saath mushkil hogi. Shayad hume paidal chalna chaiye"
"Haan," Karan ne ghode se utaarne ki taiyaari karte hue jawab diya. "Sab ghodo se utar jao. Isse aage paidal chalenge."
Agle kuch pal mein sab ghodo se utar gaye. Karan ne apne ghode ke maathe par shukriya ada karte hue haath phera.
Karan aage badha. "Savdhaan rehna sab."
Woh sab jungle mein ghusne lage. Ped itne ghane the ke chand ki roshni mushkil se aa pa rahi thi.
Charon taraf patton ki sarsarahat thi raat ke andhere mein.
***
Jungle ke dusre hisse mein ek unchi chattan par Aditya khada tha. Uske haath mein uska bhaala tha aur aankhen charon taraf dekh rahi thi.
Yeh uska kaam tha aaj. Har din do teen ghante woh khada rehta aur dushman par nazar rkhta. Ab tak kuch nahi hua tha... par woh jaanta tha ke hoshiyar rehna zaroori tha.
Achanak... usne kuch dekha. Door... bahut door... kuch halchal ke awaaz aa rhe thi. Pedon ke beech se... kuch saaye chal rhe the.
Aditya ne apni aankhe sankri ki. Kya tha woh? Jaanwar? ya kuch aur?
Woh aur dhyan se dekhne laga. Aur... fir use saaf dikha. Log. Bahut saare log. Aur woh is taraf aa rahe the.
Aditya ka dil tez dhadakne laga. Dushman? Kya yeh ek hamla tha?
"Harish!" Aditya ne neeche ki taraf chillaya jahan Harish ek ped ke neeche khada tha.
Harish ne upar dekha aur Aditya ki awaaz mein chauknepan ko sunke turant bhaag kar upar aaya
.
"Kya hua?" Harish ne pucha.
Aditya ne dur ki taraf ishara kiya. "... wahan kuch log aa rahe hai. Bahut saare. Mujhe... mujhe lagta hai yeh koi hamla hai."
Harish ne bhi dekha. Haan... halchal jaise toh kuch dikh rhe thi. Aur jo bhi woh the... woh kaafi tadaad mein the.
"Kitne?" Harish ne pucha.
"Pata nahi... karib tees toh honge hi?" Aditya ne jawab diya
Harish ka chehre jakad gaya. "Theek hai. Suno... tum jao vapas. Sabko chaukna kar do. Rajkumari Payal ko, Maharani Nandani ko sabko batao ke dushman aa rahe hai. Main... main yahan unhe rokne ki koshish karta hoon."
"Par akele?" Aditya ne fikar se kaha.
"Main sambhal lunga," Harish ne drad awaz mein jawab diya. "Bas tum jaldi jao!"
Aditya ne sir hilaya aur neeche kood kar unke sharanaarth ki taraf bhaagne laga.
Harish ne apna dhyan wapas jungle ki taraf kiya. Woh saaye ab aur paas aa rahe the. Ab thoda saaf dikh rahe the.
"Joh bhi ho," Harish ne khud se kaha, "Main tumhe hamare thikane tak nahi pahunchne dunga."
Usne apne dono haath zameen par rakhe aur apni aankhe band ki. Zameen se bhuri roshni nikalne lagi jo uske haathon mein samaa rahi thi.
***
Karan aur uske saathi ab jungle ke beech mein the. Charon taraf sirf gahne ped the.
"Bas thoda aur," Karan ne aage badhte hue kaha, . "Shayad kuch hi door aur hum nadi ke kinare pahuch jayenge."
Achanak zameen kaanpne lagi. Halke se pehle... fir tez.
"Kya-" Vrishank ne, apna balance sambhaalte hue kaha
Aur fir saamne se - karib das kadam door - zameen phatne lagi. Mitti aur pattharon ka ek chota sa toofan utha jo hawa mein ghoom raha tha.
"Koi hamla kar raha hai!" Kalindi chillaye.
Makdi sipahi apne positions mein aa gaye, weapons taiyaar karke.
Karan ne Meher ko apne haath mein liya.
Mitti ka toofan ab shape lene laga. Ek bada sa... bahut bada sa patthar. Karib das foot ka. Aur woh... seedha unki taraf aa raha tha.
"Peeche hato!" Karan chillaya.
Par woh chattan itni tezi se aa raha tha ke peeche hatna mushkil tha.
Karan ne faisla liya. Usne Meher ko dono haathon mein pakda aur puri taqat lagake phenka seedha chattan ki taraf.
Meher hawa mein laal aag ki poonch chodte hue ghoomi, Aur jaise hi woh chattan se takrayi...
"BOOOM!!!"
Ek vishal dhamka hua. Chattan ke chote chote tukdon mein toot gaya. Pattharon ke tukde charon taraf barse.
Dhuaan fail gaya.
Karan haafte haafte apna haath aage kiye khada raha aur Meher wapas uske haath mein aa gayi.
Dhuaan dheere chatne hone laga. Aur saamne... ek aadmi dikha. Bhure rang ka sharir jo mitti jaise dikh raha tha.
Karan dhuan hatte hi usse pehchan gaya.
Harish kaka.
Par abhi Harish ko dhuaan ki wajah se dikh nahi raha tha ke saamne kaun tha.
"Kaun ho tum?" Harish apne haath fir se taiyaar karke chillaya, "Yeh Vanrajya ki zameen hai! Tum-"
Par uski awaaz beech mein ruk gayi.
Dhuaan ab poora chat gaya tha. Aur usne dekha.
Saamne... ek ladka khada tha. Uske haath mein ek talwar thi. Uske chehre par... uske chehre par woh bhav tha jo... jo Harish jaanta tha.
"Y-yeh.. toh..." Harish ne apne aankhen badi kare.
Karan ne bhi Harish ko pehchana. "Harish kaka?"
Ek pal ki khamoshi. Dono ek dusre ko dekh rahe the.
Aur fir... fir Harish ke chehre par ek badi muskurahat aayi.
"KARAN!" Harish khushi se chillaya, "Rajkumar Karan! TUM... TUM AA GAYE!"
Usne apne haath neeche kar diye.
Karan bhi muskurane laga. "Haan... Kaka main aa gaya."
Harish ne Karan ko upar se neeche tak dekha Karan ka naya armor, uska chere ke bhav ko, aur uske peeche.. itne saare log.
"Yeh... sab kaun hai?" Harish ne makdi sipahiyon ko dekhte hue pucha. "Aur... yeh log... yeh toh makdi-"
. "Yeh meri... meri sena hai. Kaka. Jo pehle Mesaka ke thi."
Harish ki muh khula ka khula reh gaya. "... tumhari sena?"
Harish ka dimaag ab smjha nhi paa tha tha aakhri Makdi siphai uska aadesh kyu maan rhe the.... Karan ek poori sena ke saath wapas aaya tha? Yeh... toh-
"Chalo Kaka.," Karan ne kaha. "Hume pehle vapas pahunchna hai baaki sab baad mein smjhanunaga. Maa... Payal Di .. sabse milna hai...itne din ho gye."
Harish ne joshile awaaz mein sir hilaya. "Haan! Haan chalo! Sabko... sabko pata bhi nahi hai ke tum aagye ho!!"
Woh sab camp ki taraf badhne lage. Harish aage aage ja raha tha.
"Tumhe pata hai Karan," Harish kah raha tha, "Rajkumari Payal... woh bahut pareshaan thi tumhare liye. Har din puchti thi ke tumhari koi khabar aayi ya nahi. Aur Maharani bhi... woh bhi-"
Karan muskurate hue sun raha tha.
Aur ab.. asli kaam shuru hoga. Vanrajya ko bachana tha. Apne logon ko bachana tha.
"Kitna khoobsurat hai yeh jungle," Kalindi ne peeche se kaha "Maine aisa jungle kabhi nahi dekha."
Karan ne muskurate hue jawab diya, "waqai... Vanrajya ka jungle... yeh sab bahut khaas hai. Yahan... yahan sab kuch alag hai."
Woh pedon ke beech se, pattharon par chalte gye. Thodi der baad unka thikana dikhayi dena shuru ho gaya woh badi saamne ek kutiya thi. Jahan log reh sakte the. Aur... saamne ek aag jal rahi thi.
Aur us aag ke paas... log baithe the.
Karan ne unhe dekha. ... Prachi... aur... Payal.
"Rajkumar Karan!" Aaditya sabse pehle uthkar bhaaga. "Tum aa gaye!"
Karan ne Aditya ko gale laga liya.
Prachi bhi halki muskurate hue aage aayi "Karan...umm Mera matlab hai Rajkumar... shukar hai tum theek ho."
Karan ne Prachi ko dekha aur muskuraya. "Haan... main theek hoon Prachi."
Aur fir... Payal aayi jiska haath ped par tha. Uske chehre par khushi aur raahat dono thi.
"Karan," Payal ke aankhen mein halka sa paani tha. "Tum... wapas aa gaye."
"Haan Di," Karan ne doharya. "Main wapas aa gaya."
Aditya ne Vrishank aur Kalidini aur unke sipahiyon ki taraf dekha. Ab Tak Harish ne unko sab kuch smjha diya tha. "Aap log yahan peeche ke jagah hai hamare saathiyon ke wahan baitho. Thak gaye honge. Main kuch khane ka intezam karvata hoon."
Sipahi kutiya ke peeche jaane lage.
Karan ne charon taraf dekha. "... Maa kahan hai?"
"Woh andar hai," Payal ne kutiya ki taraf ishara karte hue kaha. "Woh... thodi thaki hui lag rahi thi toh andar chali gayi."
"Main... main andar jaata hoon Di," Karan bola.
Par Payal ne Karan ka haath pakda. "Karan... pehle tum bhi thoda aaram kar lo. Khana kha lo. Fir maa se milna."
"Nahi Di," Karan ne kaha. "Pehle Maa se milna zaroori hai. Baaki sab baad mein."
Payal ne Karan ke aankhen mein dekha, fir haar maan kar sar hilaya. "Theek hai."
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Karan kutiya ke darwaze ke paas pahuncha. Andar se halki, madhur roshni tapak rahi thi shayad ek chhota sa diya jal raha tha, jiski lau dheemi-dheemi hil rahi thi jaise kisi ke saans ke saath saath saans le rahi ho.
Usne ek gehri saans li. Dil zor zor se dhadak raha tha na sirf safar ki thakan se, balki us ehsaas se jo andar se ubal raha tha apne mom ko itne din baad dekhne ke. Fir woh andar ghusa.
Kutiya chhoti thi, par andar ek ajeeb si garmi thi. Charon taraf kachche deewaren. Ek kone mein kuch bartan rakhe the Aur bilkul beech mein diya ke saamne Nandani baithi thi.
Uski saari shakhsiyat diya ki sunehri roshni mein aur bhi chamak rahi thi. Uske baal khule the, gehre, ghane, kandhon se thoda neeche tak laharate hue. Uska chehra shaant tha, jaise saari duniya ki chinta usne bahar chhod di ho. Par jaise hi uski nazar Karan par padi uski aankhen chamak uthi.
"Karanโฆ?!?"
"Momโฆ" Karan ki awaaz bhi toot gayi. Woh tezi se aage badha jaise koi rukawat uske aur uske beech mein nahi reh sakti.
Nandani ne haath badhaya. "Basโฆ mere paas aa jao. Idhar baitho."
Karan uske bilkul bagal mein baith gaya itna kareeb ki unke ghutne ek doosre ko chhoo rahe the. Dono ke beech sirf diya ki roshni thi, aur woh halki si garmi jo unke sharir se nikal rahi thi.
"Tum theek ho na?" Nandani ne uske chehre ko dono haathon se pakad kar, uske aankhon se aankhen milate hue poocha "Kahin chot toh nahi lagi? Batao mujhe sach."
"Main bilkul theek hoon, Mom,"
Nandani muskurai, aankhon mein aansu chamak rahe the. Usne Karan ko zor se gale laga liya. "Haanโฆ mom hi bolo na mujhe. Bas wahi sunna acha lagta hai."
Karan ne bhi use wapas gale lagaya iss baar aur gehre se. Uska sar Nandani ke kandhe par tik gaya. Usne aankhen band kar li aur andar tak uski khushboo soongha woh halki si gulabjal wali khushboo, thodi si mitti ki, thodi si garmi ki, jo hamesha uski maa se judi rahi thi. Par aaj yeh khushboo kuch aur bhi thi.
Kuch pal baad dono alag hue, par haath ab bhi ek doosre ke haathon mein the.
Nandani ne uski aankhon mein dekha. Fir uske chehre par halka sa gussa aaya woh pyaara sa gussa jo sirf maa hi dikha sakti hai.
"Par Karanโฆ iss baar tumne mujhe bilkul andhere mein chhod diya. Bina bataye chale gaye. Mujhe raat bhar neend nahi aayi. Pichhli baar toh tumne kitna sunaya tha mujhe."
Karan ne nazar jhuka li. "Momโฆ main jaanta tha agar main bataunga toh aap rok dengi. Aur mainโฆ main ruk nahi sakta tha."
"Haan main rokti," Nandani ke awaaz mein halki si siski thi. "Kyunki wahan khatra tha Karan. Agar tumhe kuch ho jataโฆ mainโฆ main jee nahi paati."
"Par mujhe kuch nahi hua," Karan ne uski taraf dekha.. Usne Nandani ka haath pakda jo abhi bhi uske gaal par tha. Fir dheere se us haath ko apne honthon tak le gaya aur usse chuma.
Nandani ki saans ek pal ke liye ruk gayi.
"Momโฆ mujhe maaf kar do," Karan ne dheeme se kaha. "Agli baar main zaroor bata kar jaunga. Vaada rha."
Nandani ne muskurate hue sar hilaya. "Basโฆ yahi kafi hai mere liye."
Karan aur paas aaya. Ab unke chehre sirf kuch inch door the. Diya ki roshni un dono ke chehron par ek sunehra aanchal odh rahi thi. Karan ne apna haath uske gaal par rakha uski ungliyan thodi thandi thi, par jaldi hi garam ho gayi.
"Maaโฆ" usne dheeme se kaha. "Main bahut thak gaya hoonโฆ par abโฆ ab sab theek lag raha hai."
Nandani ne uske baalon mein ungliyan pheri. "Toh aaram karo na. Mere paas hi raho."
Karan ne aankhen band kar li. Par uska dil ab tez dhadak raha tha. Nandani ki saans uske kaan ke paas thi. Usne dheere se apna sar uthaya aur uski aankhon mein dekha.
Unki nazrein mili aur is baar woh nazarein sirf maa-beta wali nahi thi. Usmein kuch aur tha ek chhupa hue aag, jo saalon se daba hue thale, par ab bahar nikalne ko beqaraar the.
"Karanโฆ" Nandani ki awaaz kamp rahi thi.
Usne kuch nahi kaha. Bas dheere se apna chehra aage badhaya. Nandani ki aankhen badi ho gayi, par woh piche nahi hati.
Aur firโฆ Karan ne apne honth uske honthon par rakh diye.
Pehla chumban naram tha sirf ek sparsh, jaise poochh raha ho kya yeh theek hai? Nandani ki saans ruk gayi. Usne aankhen band kar li.
Fir Karan ne apne honth thoda aur dabaye. Iss baar gehre zyada bhookh ke saath. Usne apne honthon se uske honthon ko sehlaaya, dheere se kheencha, fir wapas dabaya. Nandani ne ek halki si siski bhari na dard ki, na virodh ki balki ek aisi siski jo keh rahi thi aur.
Karan ka haath uske gaal se sarak kar uski gardan ke peeche chala gaya. Usne use aur kareeb khinch liya. Ab unke honth ek doosre mein ghul rahe the. Karan ne apni jeebh se uske honthon ko chua. Nandani ne bhi jawab diya aur dono ke jeeb aapas mein mil gye.
Karan ke haath uski nangi peeth par sarak rahe the, uski kamar ko ek haath se sehlaya. .
Diye ki roshni ab bhi jal rahi thi, par ab woh roshni unke chehron par nahi unke sharir ki garmi mein kho gayi thi.
" Karanโฆ" Nandani ne apna sir alag kiya. "Yeh sab karne ko kisne bola tumhe?"
Karan muskuraya aur uska shareer fir peeche gir gaya bistar par gir gaya.
Woh aakhirkaar Ghar pahuch hi gaya tha.
Aaj ke liye itna hi guys. Next Parson. Do like.
Chapter 34 kaisa hai, post-mortem karte hain...
- Sharvas ki khusi aur vani ki jhijhak,dar, aur aatmavishwas scene ko strong banata hai, aur aage ke liye ek mystery bhi create karta hai.
- Vinasika aur ravisha ka scene chapter ka core hai. Ravisha ka dar, ghabrahat aur pareshani, vinashak ka charecter bayan karta hai. Aur vinashak ka gussa,khauf,dar, takat aur agrak ko diya aadesh, scene ko kafi strong banata hain.
- Karan ki ghar wapsi, harish, payal, nandani, Aditya aur Prachi in sab milkar scene ko kafi strong banate hain, jo chapter me readers ke liye emotional hook ka kaam karta hai.
Needs improvements
Spelling+grammar
Chapter me spelling mistakes hai jo har baar hoti hain, isse sahi karne ki jarurat hai tumhe.
Ex. โ woh โ wo , rhe โ rahe...
Maine pahle bhi ye bola hai, ki sentences theek Karo, isse flow aur pacing par effect padta hai.
Ex. โ
Is chapter ki pacing thodi slow lagi mujhe, Sharvas aur vani ka scene balanced tha, par vinashak wala scene thoda lamba lagta hai. Usme tighten kiya ja sakta tha. Isse pacing & flow bhi accha hota aur scene balanced bhi hota.
3 mistake pahle hi bata di hain maine, par kuch aur bhi hain....
Overall chapter theek tha, emotions, suspense, mystery aur erotica ka mix accha balence banata hai. Agar Rating dun toh.....
Rating ; 7.2/10
Potential Rating ; 9/10 ( not this time)
( Ek kaam tumne accha kiya hai, ye ki scene change karne par tag laga diya)
"Vanrajya ka shahi mahal"
"Waqt subah"
( Ye sahi hai par thoda awkward lagta hai padhne me, isko aise bhi likh sakte hain )
(Subah ka waqt โ shahi mahel, Vanrajya)
Same but different
( Ek chiz rahe gayi batane ko ya kah lo jatane ko ,jo kal bataunga. Ab so lun thoda)
still I'll manage somehow.
