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Unfortunately We are facing a server issue which limits most users from posting long posts which is very necessary for USC entries as all of them are above 5-7K words ,we are fixing this issue as I post this but it'll take few days so keeping this in mind the last date of entry thread is increased once again,Entry thread will be closed on 7th May 11:59 PM. And you can still post reviews for best reader's award till 13th May 11:59 PM. Sorry for the inconvenience caused.

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Note to writers :- Don't try to post long updates instead post it in 2 Or more posts. Thanks. Regards :- Luci
 
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Bhai sayad mere naturki wajah se mujhe hansi nahi aai story me... Aur story acchi likhi hai aapne... 👍
bhai mujhe is baat ka bura nahi laga ke aapko hansi aayi ke nahi. par ek baat ka dhyan rakhiye ke aapke reviews kisi rachna ki safalta aur asaflta tay karte hain aur kisi insaan ki mehnat ka fal aapke hath mein hota hai to review aapki nature par nahi a neutral base par diya jana chahiye. anyways chalta hai bhai. koi baat nahi. ek aur baat main koi professional story writer nahi hun. ek lekhakar hun...A CA. to shayad ye field utna bas ka nahi hai mere
 
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bhai mujhe is baat ka bura nahi laga ke aapko hansi aayi ke nahi. par ek baat ka dhyan rakhiye ke aapke reviews kisi rachna ki safalta aur asaflta tay karte hain aur kisi insaan ki mehnat ka fal aapke hath mein hota hai to review aapki nature par nahi a neutral base par diya jana chahiye. anyways chalta hai bhai. koi baat nahi. ek aur baat main koi professional story writer nahi hun. ek lekhakar hun...A CA. to shayad ye field utna bas ka nahi hai mere
Naturel base pe hi diya hai bhai aur main bhi janta hun ek writer hona aasan nahi hota hi...
 
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MUMMY KA KAAMUK RISHTA
Writer - LONELYCHAHAK

genre- adultery
Story summary -
Kahani ek chote ladke, Arjun, ke baare mein hai. Woh apni maa, Veena, aur uske mausa ji, Ashok, ke beech mein chal rahe affair ko dekhta hai. Jab uske papa kaam ke liye Delhi shift ho jaate hain, tab mausa ji unke ghar rehne aate hain. Maa, jo pehle ek sanskari aurat lagti thi, dheere dheere mausa ji ke saath najayaz rishta bana leti hai. Arjun chupke se unhe intimate hote hue aur baatein karte hue dekhta hai. Poori kahani Arjun ke nazariye se batai gayi hai.

Positive point-
* Systematic Update : system sahi hai. Chapter jaisa. Rukne pe yaad rehta hai kahaan the. Easy padhne mein."

* Passion- "Sex scenes maa aur mausa ji ke beech mein jo passion hai, usko dikhaate hain. Unse pata chalta hai ki unke beech mein kitni strong feelings hain."

Negative Point
* describtion - update change ke baad next seen over describe kiye jaate hai jisase story ka flow break hota

*Predictablity and uniqueness- story kuch jyada hi predictible hai aur story mein koi uniqueness nahi hai

* Morality - "Arjun ke liye, yeh sab galat hai. Woh chota hai aur use yeh sab nahi dekhna chahiye tha."

* * Overly Sexual : Sex scenes bahut hain aur zyada hain. Kahani ussi baare mein lagti hai, aur kuch nahi."



Overall its an average
Rating 4/10
 

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Bhai mujhse review dete to nahi aata but itna jarur kahunga ki is kahani ka plot bhale hi predictable ho lekin bahut mast tha.

Aur aapne likha bhi bahut pyara hai jaise ki sekhar ki bechaini ko bahut hi ache se darsaya hai.

Bas mujhe ek baat se mayusi huyi ki is kahani ko aapne jyada detail me nhi likha jaise ki jab sekhar sikha se milta hai to wo emotions jo feel hone chahiye wo nhi hua.

Aap me emotions add karne ki kabiliyat hai wo to kahani ke pahle part me sekhar ki bechaini se pata lag gya tha fir bhi pata nhi kyu aap ne sekhar aur sikha ka dubara milna sab jaldi jaldi me kar diya.

Fir bhi kahani padhne me maja aa gya.... Agar thoda aur detail me likhe hote to ise jeetne se koyi nhi rok sakta tha.

Maine kewal bas isi kahani ka review isliye diya kyuki ye kahani competition jeet jati .... Lekin a missed opportunity.
 
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Bhai mujhse review dete to nahi aata but itna jarur kahunga ki is kahani ka plot bhale hi predictable ho lekin bahut mast tha.

Aur aapne likha bhi bahut pyara hai jaise ki sekhar ki bechaini ko bahut hi ache se darsaya hai.

Bas mujhe ek baat se mayusi huyi ki is kahani ko aapne jyada detail me nhi likha jaise ki jab sekhar sikha se milta hai to wo emotions jo feel hone chahiye wo nhi hua.

Aap me emotions add karne ki kabiliyat hai wo to kahani ke pahle part me sekhar ki bechaini se pata lag gya tha fir bhi pata nhi kyu aap ne sekhar aur sikha ka dubara milna sab jaldi jaldi me kar diya.

Fir bhi kahani padhne me maja aa gya.... Agar thoda aur detail me likhe hote to ise jeetne se koyi nhi rok sakta tha.

Maine kewal bas isi kahani ka review isliye diya kyuki ye kahani competition jeet jati .... Lekin a missed opportunity.
Kon kahta hai ki hum jeete nahi bhzi, agar kahani ki rooh, paathak ke dil tak pahuch jaaye to writer wahi jeet jaata hai,:declare: Rahi baat qur emotions add karne ki to wo main kar sakta tha, aur sayad karunga baad me per tab story kaafi badi hogi, abhi ke liye, limited words me likhna hota hai bhai👍
Thank you very much for your wonderful review and support bhai :hug:
 

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Adla Badli - A murder Mystery
Title :- Adla Badli - A murder Mystery
Genre :- Adultery, Crime
Writer :- Manik Mittal

Ek nicker pehni ladki ki or dekh rahe rajat ko dekhkar shruti bade hi arthpoorn dhang se muskura rahi thi. Uski nazar rajat ki nazron ka bakhubi pichha kar rahi thi aur use bahut maza aa raha tha apne pati ko ek ladki ko aise vasnatmak dhang se dekhte hue.

Wo apne muh ko uske uske kaan ke paas lejakar boli….tota hai na poora rajat.

Rajat ko jaise current laga ho. Wo chaunk gaya ekdam aur uske chehre par poore sharmindgi ke bhaav the. Wo ghabrakar bola….nahi to main to wo ice-cream parlor ko dekh raha tha.

Ice-cream parlor se pehle tumhari nigah jute ke show room ki or thi aur usse pehle us cosmetics ke show room ki or, Nahi naa, tum us patole ko hi dekh rahe the rajat. Kya tange hain na uski aur uski jawani kya kehar barsa rahi hai…..apni kamingi bhari baton se shruti apne pati ko zalil kar rahi thi ya fir uttejit, kehna mushkil tha.

Ab rajat thoda hosh mein akar bola….sorry shruti. Nigah chali gayi. Par kasam se meri koi galat intention nahi thi. Uska sar jhuka hua tha apni is harkat ki wajah se.

Nahi nahi, kasam se rajat main tumhe bilkul bhi dosh nahi de rahi hun. Wo ladki wakai mein sex bomb hai. Tange dekho jaise kele ke chikne tane hon…..muskurati hui shruti boli to is baar rajat thoda gusse mein bola.

Rajat…yaar shruti ab chhod bhi do is topic ko. Ham tumhare liye anniversary ki shopping karne aye hain. Ab ho gayi galti, maan li na maine. Aur tum jo us eating court mein ek ladke ko taad rahi thi, maine taunt kasa kya?...rajat ab khud ko justify karne ki koshish kar raha tha.

Shruti is baar gehri muskaan ke sath boli…haan dekh rahi thi, ye ham ladkiyon ka hak hai jaise tum ladko ka ladkiyon ko dekhna hai. Waise tum mera yakin nahi kar rahe mujhe bilkul bhi bura nahi laga tumhe us ladki ko dekhte hue. Tum jab chahe ladkiyan taad sakte ho yaar.

Rajat naa mein gardan hilaate hue bola…tumhara kuchh nahi ho sakta shruti. Achha chalen ab? Shruti ishara karke muskurate hue boli…chaliye huzur.
DO DIN BAAD:-

Rajat aur shruti ne akele hi apni shadi ki pehli anniversary manane ka decide kiya. Ye shruti ki planning thi. Wo nahi chahti thi ke unki celebration ke beech koi aur aaye. Ek chhota sa cake table ke beecho-beech mein pada tha jis par ek mombatti rakhi hui thi.

Dono ne ek sath us mombatti ko bujhakar ek doosre ko happy anniversary bola. Door ek dusre table par baitha ek aur young couple in dono ko dekh raha tha. Dono ke chehre par smile thi in dono ko dekhkar. Kaise akele hi celebrate kar rahe the ye dono aur dekhne mein hi pata lag raha tha ke ek doosre se kitna pyar karte the.

Doosri or baitha couple bhi in dono ki tarah hi sweet sa couple tha. Ladke ka naam sajal aur ladki sneha tha. Aaj inki shadi ko teen mahine poore hue the. Sneha ko utna shauk nahi tha celebration ka par sajal ke kehne par ye uski khushi ke liye aa gayi thi.

Waise samajhdar bahut thi sneha. Restaurant ke bahar ek kanch ke box mein couple dance wala musical gift pada tha. Wo sajal se boli…chalo wo musical gift lekar aate hain is couple ke liye.

Sajal bola…par yaar ham to un dono ko jante hi nahi. To sneha boli…to kya hua. Kisi ke chehre par khushi to aa jayegi na hamari is chhoti si koshish se.

Sajal uljhan mein tha bola…yaar wo akele aye hain celebrate karne. Unhe disturb nahi karte hain.

Sneha zid karne lagi. Ham bas unhe wo pakda kar aa jayenge. Sajal ko uski zid ke aage jhukna pada aur wo bahar jakar wo gift pack karwa kar le aya. Dono us table par gaye jahan rajat aur shruti ek doosre mein khoye baithe the. Sajal ko kafi sharm aa rahi thi par wo apni patni ki baat mod nahi paya.

Wo dono in dono ko dekhkar ekdam se chaunk gaye. Sajal jabardasti chehre par muskan lakar bola….happy anniversary. Sneha ke chehre par to pehle se muskan thi. Un dono ko bhi jabardasti muskurana pad jata hai. Fir rajat bola…sorry bro. Maine aapko pehchana nahi.

Sajal bola…arey ham dono ek doosre ko nahi jante. Wo to ham dono bhi aap logon ki hi tarah celebrate karne aaye the to sneha ne socha ke aap dono ko gift diya jaye.

Shruti muskura kar boli…arey pehle aap log baithiye baten waten to hoti rahengi.

Rajat muskura kar bola…to kya aap dono ki shadi ko bhi…..

Sneha uski baat ko beech mein kaatkar boli…nahi sir, hamari shadi ko teen mahine hue hain aur ye aaj ke hi din hui thi.

Rajat…aap mujhe rajat kehkar bula sakti ho aur ye hain meri wife shruti. Charon ek doosre se hath milate hain aur sajal apna aur sneha ka naam un dono ko batata hai.

Sajal ke lakh mana karne par bhi sajal unke liye bhi khana order kar deta hai. Thodi hi der mein charon mein hansi mazak shuru ho gaya tha. Lakiyon ne na na karte hue bhi do do peg maar hi liye the. Arey ye to batana main bhul hi gaya ke iske baad unhone ek ek peg khud se bhi order kiya to dono ladke hansne lage.

Sajal…hanste hue…dekhna sneha kahin sharabi na ho jana.

Rajat…arey unhe bhi enjoy karne do sajal. Charon hansne lage. Aur fir program ye bana ke ye charon rajat ke flat mein jakar baki ki celebration karenge kyunki rajat ne abhi drink nahi kiya tha driving ki wajah se aur sajal aur sneha to aaye hi cab mein the.

To ye charon rajat ki car mein uske flat par chal padte hain. Raste mein rajat ne sajal ki pasandida wine le li thi. Charon ki hi achhi kamai thi to kharche ki koi parwah nahi thi.

Ghar aakar shruti notice kar rahi thi ke rajat sneha ki nangi tango ko taad raha hai. Shayad nangi tange rajat ki kamjori hongi. Shruti muskurane lagi ye dekhkar. Wo bhi to tirchhi nazron se sajal ko dekh rahi thi aur sajal use. Ek bechari sneha hi sharif thi in charon mein shayad.

Sofe par baithkar charon ne wine ka anand lena shuru kar diya. Thodi der baad rajat sabko rokte hue bolta hai yaar isse pehle ke charon ludak jayen hame dance kar lena chahiye. Sabhi ne shor machate hue haan bol diya. Ye ye karte hue ye sab dance karne lagte hain.

Dono couples apas mein. Rajat ki nazar sneha ki tango par hi thi jaise wo uske sath dance karna chah raha ho ya fir aur kuchh bhi. Abhi clear nahi tha uska man.

Sajal ki ek kamjori thi, nashe ki halat mein sex us par havy ho jata tha. Wo sneha ko chusne lagta hai. Sneha ko halanki sharm aa rahi thi par use pata tha ke samne wala bhi young couple hai to usne use karne diya.

Rajat ne mauka dekhkar uncomfortable si sneha ko ankh maar di. Sneha ko bada ajib sa laga. Shruti ne ye dekh liya aur wo uske kaan mein boli…sneha ki chut chahiye tumhe?

Rajat use ankhen dikhate hue bola…kya bak rahi ho tum?

Shruti…chahiye ya nahi, jaldi bolo.

Rajat…par kaise..matlab ab wo clear tha ke use sneha ki chut chahiye. Par sawal ye tha ke kaise.

Shruti …hanste hue…bade harami ho tum. Wo mujh par chhod do. Par haan fir sajal meri lega.

Rajat confused ho gaya to shurti boli…yaar main chahti hun ham couple swap karen. Kya irada hai. Rajat ko ye sauda bura nahi laga kyunki sneha ka sharir mansal tha. Aur wo rajat ko kafi lubha raha tha.

Rajat fir se wahi sawal karta hai….par ye hoga kaise janeman.

Shruti smile karti hui bolti hai…wo sab tum mujh par chhod do. Aaj ham log bahut badhiya tarike se anniversary manayenge. Aur hansne lagti hai. Rajat bhi hanste hue bolta hai…tum bhi kutti chij ho. Shruti hanste hue….haan wo to main hun.

Shruti ne gown sa pehna tha jiske niche ek choli aur skirt type kuchh tha. Udhar sneha ne to mini skert ke upar shirt pehni hui thi aur usne shirt ko niche se ganth bandh rakhi thi. Is tarah se dono ki nabhi (navel) nangi thi aur ye ladko ko bahut lubha rahi thi.

Shruti un dono ke paas jaati hai aur sajal ko pakadkar bolti hai…arey arey kya kar rahe ho yaar. Yahin kand kar daloge kya? Fir wo sneha ke kaan mein bolti hai…ise jyada chadh gayi hai. Aisa karo tum thodi der rajat ke sath dance karo aur main sajal ke sath dance karti hun. Mujhe to wo tumhari tarah seduce nahi karega na. Sneha ko bhi sharm si aa rahi thi to usne haan mein gardan hilai aur wo jhijhakti hui si rajat paas chali gayi.

Rajat to isi mauke ki talash mein tha aur usne mauka na ganvate hue apna ek hath sneha ki nangi kamar par aur doosra hath uske kandhe par rakh diya. Sneha ne apne dono hath uske kandhe par rakhe aur dono dhire dhire dance karne lage.

Rajat dance karte hue uski nangi kamar par hath fira raha tha, waise to sneha ko ye achha nahi lag raha tha par thoda sharab ka surur tha aur kuchh mauke ki nazakat ke wo bol nahi paayi.

Udhar sajal shruti ke sath kafi bolda dance kar raha tha. Dono ek doosre se buri tarah ek doosr se chipke hue the. Halanki rajat ko gussa ana chahiye tha apni patni ko gair mard ke sath yun chipke dekhkar par uske chehre par muskaan thi. Ye kaisa rishta tha in dono ka.

Sneha ko bhi achha to nahi lag raha tha ke uska pati kisi doosri ladki ke sath chipka hua hai. Par wo ab bolti bhi kya. Wo to khud dusre ke sath dance kar rahi thi. Ek aur baat ye sab jaane anjane couple swap ki or nahi badh rahe the.

Sajal aur shruti to khub enjoy kar rahe the dance ka. Ab to sajal ke hath shruti ke chutdon par the. Aur wo baar baar daba raha tha inhe. Ye dono to ekdam madmast ho chuke the.

In sabme sneha ek aisi shakhs thi jo duvidha mein thi aur soch rahi thi ke ye ho kya raha hai. Rajat ko uska chehra dekhkar uske man ka haal samajh mein aa jata hai. Wo use apni mini bar ki or le jata hai aur dono ke liye ek ek peg glasses mein pour kar deta hai. Wo to pine ke liye bhi duvidha mein thi par rajat uske honthon par laga deta hai.

Sneha pine lagti hai aur rajat uske kandhe par hath rakhkar use haan mein ishara karta hai. Wo muskura raha tha to sneha bhi muskurane lagti hai. Dono ek ek peg pi lete hain to rajat ek ek aur peg glasses mein dalta hai. Sneha ko pata tha ke ye jyada ho jayega par wo pehle se surur mein thi aur use wine pikar maza aa raha tha to usne khinch diya ek ek aur peg.

Wo log wapis wahan aate hain jahan dance chal raha tha to dekhte hain ke shruti aur sajal kahan gaye. Sneha rajat se puchhti bhi hai…ye dono kahangaye.

Rajat use ankh marte hue kehta hai…chhodo na unhe apne hisab se enjoy karne do ham dono apne hisab se enjoy karte hain. Kya kehti ho. Uska andaaz shararti tha aur uske chehre mein bhi shararat nazar aa rahi thi aur chehre par muskaan to thi hi shararti.

Uske is shararti andaaz par pata nahi kyun sneha ke chehre par bhi muskaan tair jaati hai. Ye ek katil muskaan thi aur rajat dance karte karte jor se use seene se laga leta hai. Aur dance karte karte use ek bed room mein le jaane lagta hai to sneha use kehti hai….wahan wo dono honge. Jaise ke kehna chahti ho ke wo un dono ke samne usse kuchh nahi kar sakti.

Rajat use ankh maarkar bolta hai….janeman yahan bahut sare bedroom hain. Tum uski fikar mat karo, bas is lamhe ka lutf uthao. Sneha bas bhavnao mein behti hi chali gayi. Use samajh nahi raha tha ke ho kya raha hai. Sajal se uski arranged marriage thi aur rajat use is wakt kisi premi ki tarah lag raha tha.

Sneha ko is wakt ye mehsus ho raha tha ke wo ek bahut hi kam umra ki alhad mutiyar hai aur use abhi abhi pyar hua ho jaise. Wo uske mayajaal mein poori tarah se khud ko kho chuki thi. Rajat room mein jakar bhi uske sath dance karne lagta hai aur dance karte karte uske hath sneha ke sharir par idhar udhar chalne lagte hain. Sneha ke chehre par sawaliya nishan dekhkar rajat ne muh par ungli rakhkar use chup rehne ka nirdesh diya.

Sneha jaise uski gulam ban gayi thi. Rajat ne use bahon mein bhara aur uski pith par hath ferte hue wo use kiss karne laga. Dono ke honth aise mile jaise ek sunder se milan par do panchhi chonch ladate hain. Jaise lehlahati faslon mein do phool apas mein takra jaate hain. Dono ek doosre ke honthon ka ras chusne lage. Sneha madhosh ho rahi thi.

Usne pehle hi din sajal ko apna sharir saump diya tha. Par wo jaise ek jimmedari thi par yahan ise jo prem ki anubhuti ho rahi thi wo usme nahi thi. Isliye sneha bhi khud ko rajat ko samarpit kar diya tha. Rajat uske chehre ko betahasha chumne laga sneha uske is prahar ke liye shayad pehle se taiyar thi isliye wo iska anand lene lagi.

Wo niche aaya aur uski gardan aur fir kapdon mein hi uski chhatiyon aur fir pet par pahunch gaya. Uske nange pet par uske chumban sneha ke poore sharir mein kampan paida kar rahe the. Fir rajat ekdam se utha aur sneha ko pakad kar uthaya aur use bed par leta diya. Sneha ko khud hairani ho rahi thi ke wo ek gulam ki tarah uski har harkat par uska sath de rahi thi. Usne fir se sneha ke poore sharir par chumban jadna shuru kar diya aur jab wo uske kapde utarne laga to bas sneha ne ek baar itna bola….kya ye sahi hai? Rajat hansta hua bola….tumhara pati aur meri biwi to shayad ek baar karke farig bhi ho gaye honge.

Sneha fir kuchh na boli aur fir se rajat ki kathputli ban gayi jo kuchh palon mein hi us navyauvna ke kase hue angon ka darshan kar raha tha. Usne khud ke kapde bhi utare par sneha ye drishya dekh nahi payi aur usne apni ankhen band kar li.

Fir iske baad asli khel shuru hua. Rajat ne bahut hi achhe se uske poore badan ko chusna shuru kiya uske chehre ke baad uski dono chuchiyan jiske nipple uttejna ke maare ekdam khade hue the. Unhe chusne ka anand rajat hi janta hai.

Wahan maza lene ke baad rajat niche utra aur thodi der uski nabhi par lagane ke baad ekdam saaf chut par aakar thehar gaya. Phooli hui si yuva chut, jise dekhte hi rajat ka lund tankar lohe ki rod ban chuka tha. Usne kuchh der wahan bhi anand liya, use chusa uske dane ke sath khela aur aisa maza sneha ke liye bilkul naya tha.

Fir wo khud let gaya aur usne sneha se bade pyar se bola ke tum bhi chumo to sneha ne sharmate hue uska muh chuma aur niche jaane se use badi sharm aa rahi thi par rajat ne uska muh pakad kar use niche ki or dhakel hi diya. Sneha ne uski mansha jaante hue ankhen band kiye hi uske lund ko chusna shuru kar diya. Apne pati ke ilawa rajat dusra insaan tha jiske sath sneha sex kar rahi thi.

Rajat ko bhi ek alag hi anand mil raha tha par wo uske sath asli kaam ke liye itna excited tha ke usne sneha ko niche leta kar uski chut ke dwar par apne lund ke supade ko tikakar dhire dhire dhakka marna shuru kiya to sneha ke muh se aahhh aahhh ki awazen aani shuru ho gayi.

Dono is perfect rhythm mein chal rahi chudai ka anand lene lage. Sath hi sath rajat uske chehre aur boobs ko chus bhi raha tha. Wakai sneha ko abki baar sajal se jyada maza aa raha tha. Wo poore man se uska sath dene lagi aur koi panch minute beetne par wo apni kamar ko uchhalkar apni taraf se bhi is chudai mein yogdan dene lagi.

Par wo bahut jyada uttejit thi to jaldi hi jhad gayi par rajat to jhadne ka naam hi nahi le raha tha. Usne aur jor lagakar dabadab chudai shuru ki aur khud bhi charam sukh par pahunch hi gaya.

Dono ek doosre ko dekhkar muskura rahe the. Sex ke baad rajat ne sneha ka matha chuma aur use jaffi dalkar uski tango par apni tang rakhkar let gaya. Sneha smile karti hui boli…aapne beech mein chhod diya sara.

Rajat uski gaal par kiss karte hue bola….kyun mera bacha nahi chahiye. Sneha bas msukura di.

Udhar dusri or to sajal aur shruti dusri jhannatedar chudai kar rahe the aur shruti kisi randi ki tarah chikhen maar rahi thi aur ab to uski chikhen rajat aur sneha tak bhi pahunch rahi thi aur wo dono muskura rahe the. Ye dono shayad un dono se bhi jyada lutf utha rahe the is swapping sex ka.

Sex ke baad bhi sajal aur shruti khub athkheliyan kar rahe the maano bahut samay se ek doosre ko jaante hon. Shruti to khud hi use baar baar sex karne ko bol rahi thi. 4 ghante mein inka char baar sex ho chuka tha.

Aur rajat aur sneha mein teesri shift chal rahi thi. Sneha khud se to nahi kehti thi par haan mana bhi nahi karti thi. Dono poora lutf utha rahe the chudai ka.

Charon thak kar aise soye ke hosh hi nahi raha.kyunki ek to sharab ka surur aur upar se jordar thukai to gehri neend aana swabhavik hi tha.

Rajat aur sneha ki ankh khulti hai ek chikh se. Aur rajat ko samajhte ek pal bhi nahi lagta ke ye chikh shruti ki thi. Dono ne fafat jo mila pehan hi rahe the ke unhe dusri chikh sajal ki suni. Wo dono jaldi se us bedroom ki or bhage jisme sajal aur shruti the.

Unhone jor jor se darwaja khatkhataya to sajal ne darwaja khola jo ekdam nagn awastha mein tha. Uske sharir par ek bhi kapda nahi tha. Aur hairani ki baat uske hath mein ek bada sa chaku tha.

Wo aise shocked lag raha tha ke usse kuchh bola hi nahi ja raha tha. Wo bas bed ki or ishara kar raha tha. Jab in dono ki nazar bed par gayi to dekhte hain ke bad par shruti thi jo ab ek lash mein tabdil ho chuki thi aur uski chhati se bahut teji se lahu beh raha tha jo cheekh cheekh kar bol raha tha ke kisi ne uski chhati mein koi tej hathyar se waar kiya hai.

Sajal ke hath mein khun se ranga chaku aur uske khun se sane kapde is baat ki gavahi de rahe the ke ye isi ka kaam hai. Rajat to ek baar ke liye jaise but (statue) hi ban gaya ho. Usse to kuchh bola hi nahi ja raha tha. Ek baar ko patniyon ki adla badli karna thik hai par wo is tarah se apni pyari patni ko thode ganvana chahega.

Sneha use hausla deti hai aur sajal ki or badi ghrina ki drishti se dekhti hai. Fir jaise rajat ko hosh aati hai to wo gusse mein sajal par hamla kar deta hai. Sneha use rokne ki koshish karte hue bolti hai…hame police ko bulana chahiye rajat, tum apne aap kuchh nahi karoge.

Rajat khud jaise but bana hua tha. Ab use hosh aati hai aur wo mauka dekhkar un dono se chhutkar wahan se bhaag jata hai aur bhagte bhagte bolta hai…tum dono ko kya lagta hai maine iska katl kiya hai. Main bhala iska katl kyun karunga. Main to…. Wo apni baat poori nahi karta aur wahan se bhaag jaane mein hi apni bhalai samajhta hai.

Akhir kitne din police ki nazron se bachta. Shahar se 25 kilometer door apne ek dost monty ke yahan se usko griftaar kar liya gaya. Jab apni beti ke katil ko dekhne shruti ke papa rajesh mehta aye to wo sajal ko apni beti ke katil ke roop mein dekhkar bahut buri tarah se chaunk gaye aur bole….inspector sahib, ye insaan meri beti ka katil kaise ho sakta hai. Ye to uska poorv premi hai.

Ab to inspector ke liye bhi ye badi shocking news thi aur unhe ye guthi kuchh kuchh sulajhti hui nazar aa rahi thi. Par unhone jaise rajat aur sneha ka bayan liya tha to usse saaf zahir hai ke ye dono couples to restaurant mein khana khane gaye the apni apni khushi celebrate karne ke liye. Ghar jaane ka program to mehaz ittefaq tha.

Inspector sochta hai…to kya ye ittefaq nahi balke sajal aur shruti ki planning ka hissa tha. Aur ek aur baat clear ho chuki thi ke idhar shruti ne aur udhar sajal ne is restaurant mein aane ke liye bola tha. To ek baat to clear ho chuki thi ke in dono couples ka apas mein adla badli karna sajal aur shruti ki planning ka hissa tha.

Par jab ye dono premi the to bhala sajal ko kya jarurat thi apni hi premika ka katl karne ki. Inspector sajal ko special room mein le jata hai aur usse un dono ke baare mein poochhtachh shuru karta hai. Par sajal inkaar kar deta hai. Lekin jab wo usse police wali pyar mohabbat dikhata hai to sajal tote ki tarah ratna shuru kar deta hai.

Par wo inspector ko ye kehta hai ke ham dono ne patniyon ki adla badli ka plan ek doosre ke sath time spend karne ke liye banaya tha. Kyunki in dono ke hi partners bade strict the, jis wajah se sajal aur shruti mil nahi paate the. Aur by chance in dono ka plan kamyab bhi raha. Aur wife swapping ho gayi.

Fir wo khud hi inspector se puchhta hai…inspector sahib, jab sab kuchh hamare man mutafik ho raha tha to bhala mujhe kya jarurat thi apni shruti ka katl karne ki?

Is baat ke liye to inspector bhi soch mein pad jata hai. Aur use wapis uske barek mein bhejkar apne office mein akar sochne lagta hai.

Use apne office mein aaye mushkil se 20 minute hue honge ke rajat aur sneha uske office mein akar inspector ko sajal aur shruti ke mobile dikhate hain. Inspector un dono se puchhta hai…kuchh case se related hai kya in dono ke mobiles mein.

Rajat kehta hai….aap khud hi dekh lijiye inspector sahib.

Inspector un dono ki ek din pehle hui insta par chat padhta hai to sab kuchh clear ho jata hai. Wo sajal ko court mein pesh karta hai. Case ab sulajh chuka tha. Ek din pehle ki us insta chat se clear ho chuka tha ke rajat hi katil hai.

Insta chat kuchh is prakar thi.

Sajal….yaar kitne dino se bol raha hun milne ke liye. Milti kyun nahi ho.

Shruti….yaar main kya nahi chahti. Par tumhe rajat ka pata hai na. Kitna shakki hai wo.

Sajal…hai to sneha bhi shakki, main bhi risk le raha hun na.

Shruti…main risk nahi le sakti sajal.

Sajal…to fir keh do ke tumne pyar hi nahi kiya….sath mein gusse wali emoji thi.

Shruti…pagal ho gaye ho tum? Achha suno. Mere dimag mein ek plan aya hai. Ham log xxx restaurant mein apni first anniversary manane ayenge. Tum dono bhi wahan aa jana. Fir main partners ki adla badli ke liye rajat ko mana lungi mujhe pata hai wo chahta hai kisi dusri ladki se sex kare. Adla badli ke baad tum kar lena maze jitne karne hain.

sajal….mujhe ek baar mein nahi chahiye. Iske aage ka plan main tumhe batata hun. Hame rajat naam ke is kante ko nikalna hoga.

Shruti…pagal ho gaye ho sajal? Tum murder ki baat kar rahe ho.

Sajal…haan, kyunki mujhe tum chahiye kisi bhi haal mein. Iske liye chahe mujhe rajat ka murder bhi kyun na karna pade.

Shruti….ruko main karti hun kuchh.

Sajal…gusse wali emoji…tum kuchh nahi karogi. Agar tumne rajat ko raste se nahi hataya to main tumhe hi maar dalunga.

Shruti…calm down sajal. Sochti hun main kuchh.

Sajal…dekh lena shruti. Mujhe is wakt kuchh nahi sujh raha tumhe kuchh bhi karke rajat ko jahar dena hi hoga. Nahi to apna dekh lena fir.

Shruti kuchh nahi bolti uske baad. Fir uske baad agle din ye log restaurant mein milte hain. Aur ghar aakar adla badli ke baad shruti ka murder ho jata hai.

Sajal court mein bahut bol raha tha ke ye chat uski nahi hai. Sab jhuth hai. Par sab kuchh uske khilaf tha. Murder weapon, us par uski ungliyon ke nishan. Khun se range uske kapde, mauke par uske ilawa kisi aur ka naa hona. Sajal ko umra qaid ki saza sunai jaati hai.

After six months ➖

Rajat aur sneha ek hill station par ek open restaurant mein dinner ka lutf utha rahe the. Tabhi wahan wo inspector aya jo shruti wale case ko dekh raha tha. Wo aate hi unse bola….ab to shadi kar hi lo tum dono. 6 mahine ho chuke hain. Koi shak nahi karega tum dono par.

Sneha use dekhkar ghabra jati hai. Par rajat muskurate hue bolta hai…aaiye inspector sahib. Baithiye. Kya lenge.

Inspector…muskurate hue….lena kuchh nahi bas story janni hai ke shruti ka katl kyun karwaya. Tum dono ko pehle se pata tha na ke ye dono premi hain.

Sneha udas chehre ke sath…..adla badli ka plan unhi ka tha inspector sahib.

Inspector….par qatl ka plan to unka nahi tha na.

Sneha…hamne to ek qatl bacha liya. Agar shruti ka qatl na hota to do qatl hote. Mera aur rajat ka.


Inspector haan mein sar hila deta hai…..

Inspector…..mujhe lagta hai jis wakt sajal bhaga us wakt us kamre mein qatil maujood tha.

Rajat….ji haan. Wahi jise maine shruti ke murder ke liye supari di thi, Murder karne ke baad wo isse pehle ke sajal uthta kamre mein andhre ka fayda uthakar sath mein bane ek store room mein chhip gaya tha. Sajal ke bhagte hi use bhi hamne bhaga diya. Dekhiye inspector hamne aapse jhuth nahi bola. Ye dono milkar ham dono ka qatl karne wale the. In dono ki phone par hui baatchit ham dono ne hi suni thi. Aur by chance dono ne hi inke partners yani ke ham dono se milne ka plan banaya.

Sneha ne pata laga liya tha mere bare mein aur isne mera mobile number bhi nikal liya tha. Uske baad ham mile aur apas mein in dono ke baare mein discussion kiya aur ek ek baat ek doosre se discuss karne ke baad ham is natije par pahunche ke agar inme se ek ko thikane nahi lagaya gaya to ye log hame khatm kar denge. Hamne ye plan banaya ke hame sab kuchh inke plan ke hisab se hi chalne dena hai.

In dono ki yojna hame zahar dekar maarne ki thi. Inhone hamari wine ki bottle mein zahar daala bhi. Par kyunki ham pehle se sachet the to hamne wo wali wine nahi pi.

Hamme khud murder karne ka dam nahi tha to hamne ye kaam kisi ko paise dekar karwaya. Aur inspector sahib ham dono hi aise nahi hain ke kisi ki jaan len. Majburi ne hamse aisa karwaya.

Inspector….to ab tum dono shadi kar rahe ho.

Rajat…sneha aur sajal ka talaq ka case chal raha hai. Jald hi inka divorce ho jayega aur ham shadi kar lenge.

Inspector….kuchh bhi ho. Hua ye galat hai. Par khair ab ho bhi kya sakta hai. Keh kar inspector wahan se chala gaya.

Sneha uske baad ghabrate hue rajat se puchhti hai….agar isne fir se case khol diya aur hamari kahani ko base banakar hamare khilaf case file kar diya to?

Rajat…..muskurate hue….ye aisa nahi karega. Ise to ham dono par pehle se shak tha. Agar isne aisa kuchh karna hota to usi wakt karta. In police walon ko to bas kisi bhi tarah se case niptana hota hai. Wo nipat chuka hai. Ab ye apni jaan afat mein kyun dalega bhala.

Sneha ko thodi tasalli hui rajat ki baat sunkar……."
Wah kya to Solid suspense story likhi hai Boss maja aagya waise agar aap is story ko long me likhte to kya he bat thi
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Shot me bhi Superb hai aapki story
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Bak-bakchodi

Title :- Bak-bakchodi
Genre :- Sexual Comedy
Writer :- Manik Mittal

Kahani shuru karenge do pyari pyari laundiyon se jinme se ek ka naam hai chuski chameli aur dusri hai iski room mate munni mastani. Dono aisa maal hain ke inhe dekh kar kisi dhillad se dhillad ka aate(dough) jaisa lothda bhi tankar lohe ki rod ban jaye. Ye dono bharat ki commercial capital yani mumbai mein rehti hain.

Chuski chameli halanki ek school mein padhati hai par iska favorite pastime chut marwana hai aur ye school mein bhi kapde aise pehnati hai ke khula jyada aur dhaka kam mehsus hota hai. Iske to students hi is par line maarte hain kyunki unhe pata hai ke ye number ki chudakkad hai.

Waise to iske pagal premi kamal kakdi ko is baat ka poora vishvas hai ke uski chhammak chhallo chuski chameli usi ke lund ko apni chut mein leti hai aur use is baat ka maan bhi hai par aisa bilkul bhi nahi hai kyunki jawani ki aag ki maari is fuljhadi ne iske ilawa teen aur logon ke samne apni salwar kholi thi….haan haan baki kapde bhi khole the yaar. Wo kya alag se batana padega.

Saali ko sex ki itni tharak chadhti thi ke kayi baar to senior class ke ladkon ko hi seduce karne lag jaati. Ek din aise hi ek ladka jo sala barahvi mein 3 baar fail ho chuka tha, khopche mein ek ladki se kiss karne ki koshish kar raha tha ke chuski use dekh leti hai aur ladke ko bolti hai ke sale tujhe kiss karne ka bhi nahi pata. Wo use pakad kar kehti hai…main tujhe batati hun kiss kaise karte hain. Wo us ladke ko pakadkar uske honthon ko chusne lagti hai. Uski girlfriend jo khud do baar fail hui thi use is baat se gussa aata hai aur wo ja ke principal se shikayat karti hai. Principal use dekhkar bahut gussa hota hai aur kehta hai mere office mein milo.

Chuski chali jaati hai to wo pehle se apni pant aur kachha nikal apna dhai inch ki lulli nikalkar bina arm wali chair par baitha tha aur chuski chameli ko dekh kar bola. Iski savari karo nahi to tujhe is school se nikalwa dunga. Waise to Chuski ko uski lulli dekhkar hansi aa rahi thi par fir wo sochti hai ke kahin ye sach much use school se na nikalwa de isliye wo apni salwar kholkar uski lulli ki sawari karne lagti hai jo adha minute bhi nahi tik paati aur satwen dhakke par hi dher ho jati hai.

Ab to chuski ki hansi chhut jaati hai aur wo principal se bolti hai….ye kya tha be. Tu to ekdam chhakka hai. Principal ko us par gussa aa jata hai aur wo use wahan se nikal jaane ko bolta hai. Halanki chuski ki fatkar hath mein aa jati hai par fir bhi wo wahan se nikal kar sidhe ghar pahunchti hai. Uski tharak jaag chuki thi isliye wo apne boy friend kamal kakdi ko phone karti hai jo use batata hai ke wo ek meeting mein hai, jisse ise gussa bhi aata hai aur iski tharak bhi badh jaati hai aur ye apni setting number two bablu bawasir ko bola leti hai aur uske aate hi apne kapde utarkar ghodi ban jaati hai. Idhar sale bablu bawasir ko bhi bahut dino se bawasir ho rakhi thi isliye usne ek muddat se chut ke darshan nahi kiye the to wo bhi ghapagap karne lag jaata hai. Badi dhuandhar chudai ho rahi thi jab koi ekdam se darwaja kholkar apni maa chudwa leta hai.

Ye sala bhadwa koi aur nahi chuski chameli ka boy friend kamal kakdi hi hota hai. Wo apni setting ko kisi aur ke lund ki sawari karte dekh pagal ho jata hai aur dher sari galiyan bak kar uske sath breakup karke wahan se chala jata hai. Ab jakar chuski ki tharak thandi hoti hai aur use apni galti ka ehsaas hota hai…abe is galti ka nahi ke wo dusre se marwa rahi thi balke iska ke usne chudai karte wakt darwaja lock kyun nahi kiya tha. Usne apni is galti ke pichhe ek maldar chhokre ko ganwa diya tha.

Wo tension mein thi aur bablu bawasir use fir se ghodi banne ko kehta hai to ye gusse mein bol deti hai, bhaag ja sale. To bablu bolta hai lekin ye khada hai iska kya karun. To wo laparwahi se kehti hai…ja bathroom mein jakar muth maar le ya ise modkar apni gand mein le le. Bablu bechara apna sa lund lekar bathroom mein jakar hathgadi chalata hai. Uske baad chuski use bhaga deti hai aur randi rona karne lagti hai.







Doosri pyari aur sexy ladki hai munni mastani. Ye ek hotel mein waitress ka kaam karti hai, jisme tangen nangi rakhna padti hain. Ise kabhi koi dhang ka ladka mila hi nahi ya isne kabhi interest nahi liya nahi pata, lekin yaar sex akhir kaun nahi chahta.

Waise to munni ki waitress wali life kafi achhi chal rahi thi par uski jiwan mein ranginiyan nahi thi. Ek maal hone ki wajah se use salary ke sath sath achhi khasi tip bhi mil jaati thi.

Ek sala bhain ka lund customer, jise munni se pata nahi kya chidh thi ke wo uske laaye order mein hamesha koi na koi nuks jarur nikalta tha, use tip dena to door ki baat use gali dekar hi jata tha. Ek din uske vyvhaar se munni ki bhi gand jal gayi aur wo uske khane mein thuk kar wahan se chal deti hai. Halanki manager bahut minnat karta hai munnu ki par wo ye bolkar…maa chuda gayi aisi naukri jisme izzat nahi….wahan se nikal jaati hai.

Use aaj bada gussa chadha tha. Gussa to chuski chameli ko bhi khub chadha tha apne bf kamal kakdi par halanki uski khud ki galti thi. Ye jaise hi ghar ke ander dakhil hoti hai to iske muh se nikalta hai…bhain ki lund uski.

Thik usi samay chuski chameli ke muh se bhi nikal jata hai….bhain ki lund uski. Halanki dono bahut dukhi thi aur gusse mein thi par dono ek sath ek hi baat bolti hain to hansne lagti hai. Fir munni mastani chuski chameli ke hath par taali maarte hue bolti….dono ek sath bole, lagta hai koi khas mehman ayega.

Chuski gusse mein bolti hai…kaun bhain ka lund ayega, wo jise jab ana tha nahi aya aur jab nahi ana tha tab aa gaya.

Munni….kaun?

Chuski…wahi sala, kamal kakdi, sali kakdi ko poora uski gand mein na ghusa dun.

Munni….arey relax relax banno rani. Aisa kya ho gaya?

Chuski chameli use a to z sab kuchh bata deti hai to munni ko pehle to us par daya aati hai fir khub hansi aati hai. Wo bolti…tere sath ek din ye hona hi tha. Saali cheater kahin ki.

Chuski…to kya hua. Ye ladke bhi to massage parlor jate hain na aur extra service lete hain. To kya ham ladkiyon ko extra service ka adhikar nahi hai. Nari ka koi adhikar nahi kya?

Itne mein bell bajti hai to munni mastani bolti hai…oye nari adhikari chal darwaja khol, dekh koi hai bahar.

Chuski ye bolti hui darwaja kholti hai…ab kaun bhain ka lund aa gaya. Wo jaise hi darwaja kholti hai to dekhti hai ye unke makan malik kundan kanjus ka beta nunnu nunniwala tha. Mote mote chashme ankhon par lagaye, ekdam patla badan, jaise ladkiyon ki zero figure hoti hai. Purane kapde purane jute pehne crodon ke malik ka beta do mahine ke kiraye 5000/-*2=10000/- ke liye takaza karne bheja tha uske baap ne.

20 varsh ki umra mein kanya sukh se vanchit nunnu ko waise to chuski badi attractive lagti thi, waise bhi chuski uske aage jaan bujhkar apni adayen dikhati aur agar use pata hota ke wo aane wala hai to thode bahut babbe bhi dikha deti. In dono ladkiyon ko kundan kanjus se pata nahi kya elergy thi ke ye dono hi uska kiraya dena hi nahi chahti thi.

Do teen mahine latka kar hi deti thi kiraya. Chuski nunnu ko adayen dikha kar bhagane ki koshish karti, halanki nunnu ka behkana swabhavik tha kyunki chuski thi hi ek number ka tota, yahan tak ke nunnu ki nunni mein bhi halchal ho jaati par use khas hidayat thi ke kisi chakkar mein na padkar sirf paise tak matlab rakhna hai. Isliye wo is baar ad gaya ke wo unse 10000/- lekar hi jayega.

Chuske ne uski gaal par kiss karte hue bola ke abhi uske paas hai nahi. Agli baar teen mahine ka ikattha de degi. Nunnu fir bhi na mana to dusri gaal par bhi kiss kar diya. Itne mein munni uske liye ek chocolate le aai jo usne apne restaurant se churai thi aur use dete hue boli…nunnu baba abhi isse kaam chala lo. Agli baar kiraya na diya na to chuski tumhe……

Uski baat poori bhi nahi hui thi ke chuski apni chut ko dono hathon se dhakkar darne ka natak karte hue boli…na baba main nahi. Nunnu bechara sa chehra lekar use dekhne laga.

Par unke samjhane se wo wahan se chala gaya. Pata nahi makan malik ko kiraya dene mein inki kya gand fatti thi, halanki in dono ke paas bahut paisa tha kyunki ye dono hi anath thi aur jitni kamai in dono ne aaj tak ki thi wo sab inke paas hi thi. Inhone to kabhi khud ka ghar kharidne ka bhi nahi socha.

Khair ab aate hain kahani ke us mod par jahan se chhuti thi. Dono bahut udas ho jati hain aur ek doosre ko apni apni aap biti suna deti hain. Fir dono decide karti hain ke ek car kiraye par lekar lambi yatra ki jaye. Aur inka ye yatra karne ka maksad apne liye ladke dhundhna tha taki inki zindagi mein sala kahin to thehraav aaye.

Ye sochkar ye dono ladkiyan apne apne suitcase pack karke chal padti hain. Chuski boli north chalo, munni boli nahi south. Stearing chuski ke hath mein tha to chalni bhi uski hi thi wo gadi ko north ki or le chalti hai, munni use bahut gussa hoti hai, uske purse bhi de marti hai par chuski chameli jo ke apni dhun ki pakki thi chal padti hai north ki or.

In dono ne jo route chuna tha wo wasai wale area ki taraf se chuna tha to gadi surat wale route par chal deti hai. Raste bhar khati piti logon ko galiyan deti ye dono apni hi dhun mein chali jaa rahi thi. Tabhi ek jagah light par koi inki gadi ko thonk deta hai aur utar kar unhi se behas karne lagta hai. Uske sath ek aur ladka tha. Dikhne mein dono ek jaise hi lag rahe the.

Ek ka naam tha panku patel aur dusre ka naam tha chanku patel. Kyunki panku baar baar bol raha tha…kyun bhai chanku. Chanku jawab deta,...haan bhai panku.

Chuski aur munni bhi utark kar bahen upar chadhane lagti hain to dono ko yaad aata hai ke unhone to sleeveless top pehne hue hain. Unki to tange tak poori nangi thi.

Chuski panku ke upar chadhne ko hoti hai aur use bolti hai..kyun be chutiye, gadi kyun thonki. Pata bhi hai bhade ki hai.

Panku to ladki ko gali dete dekh hi hil gaya tha fir wo bhi sambhalkar us par chadhte hue bola…tune break kyun lagai, abhi to yellow light shuru hui thi. Gadi nikal sakti thi. Aur haan teri shakal hi bata rahi hai ke ye gadi teri khud ki nahi ho sakti. Aur he he karke chanku ko bolta hai kyun bhai chanu…chanku bhi hanste hue bolta hai…haan bhai panku.

Chuski uska gala pakadne ko hoti hai to munni use rokti hai, udhar panku chadh chadh jata hai to chanku use rokta hai. Akhir munni aur chanku in dono ko samjha hi dete hain. Fir chuski ko dhyan aata hai ke iski to full insurance ho rakhi hai aur gadi insurance mein hi repair ho jayegi.

Munni car toe wale ka number online nikalkar phone karti hai to das minute mein hi toe wali gadi aa jati hai aur wo log use lekar repair wale ke paas chal dete hain. Ye dono jabardasti chanku panku ki gadi mein baith jaate hain jo pile rang ki open car thi. Aur chuski panku ko order dete hue bolti hai….oye hame us repair wale ke paas le chal nahi to teri game baja denge.

Panku bola…chal chal. Ham jahan ja rahe hain wahan tak chhodenge bas. Chuski uth kar use marne ko jati hai to munni use rok kar bolti hai…mat kar meri maa. Fir wo panku ko request karke bolti hai….bhai sahib, do masoom ladkiyon ko kya majhdhar mein chhod doge?

Chanku bhi bolta hai…bhai masoom bachiyon ko aise hi to nahi chhod sakte raste mein.

Panku uski or hath karke kehta hai…kya baat karta hai chanku. Ye dono aur masoom. Dekha nahi kaise mera murder karne aa rahi thi. Chuski ek baar fir uthne ko hoti hai to munni use pakad kar bitha deti hai. Panku in dono ko repair wale ke yahan chhod deta hai.

Wo jane hi lagta hai ke chuski use fir se lad jhagad kar rok hi leti hai. Mechanic use 5000/- ka bill batata hai par wo kehta hai sirf 500/- deposit karwane honge file charges ke baki insurance se ho jayega. Chuski 500/- bhi panku se dilwati hai. Wo bahut khijha hua tha. Mechanic unhe kal aane ko bolta hai.

Chanku panku ko bhi apni gadi dikhane ko bolta hai. Par panku use dikhata hai ke unka jyada kuchh nahi bigda. Gadi purani thi aur bumper lohe ka tha. Usko kuchh nahi hua tha.

Ab fir se chuski panku ke gird ho jaati hai ke unhe kahin shahar mein chhod de. Waise bhi unhe surat mein thehrana tha aaj raat. Chanku bolta hai…ye surat hi to hai. Dono khush ho jati hain. Par panku chidha hua tha in dono se khaskar chuski se.

Panku ko majburan unhe sath lena padta hai. Abki baar chuski pehle hi panku ke sath aage baith chuki thi. Chanku pichhe munni mastani ke sath baith jata hai. Panku ne bura sa muh banaya hua tha. Chuski ab maze lene ke liye bolti hai…kyun be, khane mein karela khaya tha kya?

Panku….khane mein to achha hi khaya tha par raste mein kisi chudail ne rasta kaat diya to ye muh bana hai.

Chuski use ankhen dikhati hui boli…mujhe chudail bola tumne.

Ab panku maze lete hue bola…nahi ye to chudail ki bhi beizzati hogi. Panku khud hi hans deta hai aur pichhe bhi dono hansne lagte hain.

Chuski chameli chidhkar munni mastani se bolti hai…arey tu to na hans mujh par kambakht.

Munni…hanste hue….arey baat hi itni mazedar thi.

Panku bolta hai…rehne do ise mat chhedo mujhe pata hai isne kuchh jehrila khaya hai aaj jisse ye jehrili ho gayi hai.

Sab log hansne lagte hain aur chuski hansne lagti hai. Gadi ghumate ghumate panku puchhta hai…chanku jana kahan hai?

Chanku arthpoorn muskaan ke sath bolta hai….bhai boom boom club chalte hain na.

Panku…par kya ye log hamare sath udhar chalengi.

Chanku ankh markar bolta hai….yahi dono to hamari free entry ki chabi hain.

Munni chanku ki harkaten dekhkar bolti hai…koi hame bhi batayega kahan jaane ki baat ho rahi hai.

Chanku…muskurakar…night club. Aur use bhi ankh maar deta hai.

Chuski chameli drama karte hue bolti hai….ham wahan bilkul bhi nahi jayenge. Agar tum dono ham dono ki jawani ke maze lootne lag gaye to…chuski apne dono hathon se apne babbe dhakti hui boli.

Panku patel bhi kaun sa isse kam tha….oye sasti jawani, ham tumhari jawani se kyun khelenge wahan. Dekhna wahan kitni khubsurat ladkiyan hongi.

Ab ye baat chuski ke dil ko lag gayi boli…tumhara kehne ka matlab ham dono khubsurat nahi hain?

Munni apne mathe par hath rakhkar boli….chup….chuski chup ho jao..ekdam chup, samjhi. Abhi hamare paas koi option nahi ke ham bata saken ke hame kahan jana hai.

Chuski chup ho gayi aur ye dono in dono ko boom boom disk le jate hain jahan par in logon ko ladkiyan sath hone se free entry mil jati hai. Ye charon ek table par baith jaate hain aur drinks ka lutf uthane lagte hain.

Munni pehle nakhre kar rahi thi peene ke liye lekin sabke kehne par maan jaati hai. Panku chuski ko bhi paise nikalne ko bol raha tha par use to abhi tak panku par uski car thokne ka gussa tha to usne kaha ham dono paise nahi nikalne wali.

Majburi mein panku ko hi kharcha karna padta hai aur wo iske liye un dono ko galiyan nikalne lagta hai. Drinks lene ke baad ye dono jamure wahan maujud dusri ladkiyon se dance karne lagte hain to ye dono bhi jhumte hue nach gana kare logon mein ghus jaati hain aur apni gand matka kar dance karne lagti hain.

Sabhi log alag alag dance kar rahe the. Chuski chameli ki itne sare handsome ladke dekhkar tharak jaag jaati hai aur uski chut mein khujli hone lagti hai. Fir uske sath ek bhadda sa banda dance karne lagta hai jo apna naam pappu pancher batata hai aur bolta hai ke wo uske sath chale to wo use malamaal kar sakta hai. Khub paisa dilwa sakta hai.Chuski uski baton par gaur nahi karti.

Aise hi munni mastani ko bhi ek launda type ladka milta hai jiska naam rani rupmati hota hai jo ek chhakka hota hai aur wo bhi uske aage kuchh aisi hi offer rakhta hai to munni to uske goton par ek laat jama deti hai jisse wo unko pakad kar baith jata hai.

Dono ko jab ajib ajib se log milte hain to ye dono preshan ho jaati hain aur munni chameli ko bolti hai ke chal bathroom chalte hain. Dono bathroom jaate hain to unhe wahan bhi koi milta hai. Ek aisi ladki jisne do kilo se bhi jyada makeup apne chehre par laga rakha tha aur ek bahut hi bhadkili si dress pehni hui thi aur usne khud ka naam bhosdi bikwali bataya.

Chuski pehle to uska naam sunkar hansne lagti hai par bhosdi bikwali uski baat ka bura nahi manti aur use bolti hai ke main tum dono ko surat mein top class job dilwa sakti hun jisme tum dono mahine ka kam se kam do lakh kama sakti ho.

Munni puchhti hai…dono ko do do lakh to bhosdi jawab deti hai haan dono ko do do lakh. Ye dono ladkiyan to khush ho jati hain.

Par chuski chameli dimag lagate hue puchhti hai…par kaam kya hoga?

Is par bhosdi idhar udhar takne lagti hai aur kuchh sochkar bolti hai…kaam koi khas nahi hoga. Bas samajh lo tum dono manager hongi. Is par munni khush ho jati hai ke bina koi mehnat kiye un dono ko itni achhi naukri mil gayi. Par chuski abhi bhi soch rahi thi.

Bhosdi bikwali boli…agar tum log ready ho to abhi bahar ek gadi khadi hai. Main tum dono ko aaj ki raat ek five star hotel mein thehrane ka intzam karti hun. Kal subah tumhe wahin se kaam par jana hoga aur fir uske baad tum dono ke rehne ka intzam ek badhiya flat mein kar diya jayega.

Munni to uchhal uchhal kar apni khushi jahir kar rahi thi par chuski chameli ko kuchh to gadbad lag rahi thi boli….hame aaj ki raat sochne ka time do. Kaam par subah ham dono apne aap pahunch jayengi.

Bhosdi bikwali ko uski baat to achhi nahi lagti par uski haan mein haan milane ke ilawa uske paas aur koi chara nahi tha. Par wo boli…achha yahin paas mein maine room liya hai. Ek baar mere sath dono drink to le lo. Munni to khushi khushi chal di par chuski bhari kadmo se chal rahi thi jaise ye sab uski ichha ke virudh ho raha ho. Par wo apni saheli munni mastani ki khushi dekh bhosdi bikwali ke sath chal deti hai.

Wo un dono ko ek ek drink deti hai jise pikar un dono ko chakkar aane lagta hai aur wo dono gehri neend ki aagosh mein chale jaate hain. Pehle hosh chuski chameli ko hi aata hai aur wo apni halat dekhkar pagal ho jati hai.

Wo ek bade se room mein bed par leti hui thi aur uske kapde lagbhag nikle hue the aur ek gende jaisa admi us par chadha hua tha. Chuski uski chhati par laat maar kar usko gira deti hai aur us bade se kamre mein idhar udhar dekhti hai to use uske joint mein ek kamre mein munni mastani bhi nazar aati hai jis par dusra adhed umar ka admi chadha hua nazar aata hai jo use nochne ja raha tha.

Wo use bhi ek mukka maar kar gira deti hai aur munni ko uthane lagti hai. Bahut mushkil se munni uthti hai aur khud ko nangi si halat mein dekhkar ekdam se uth jati hai aur fir dono apne apne kapde pehnanne lagti hain. Itne mein wo genda aa jata hai jisko chuski ne laat maari thi.

Wo garajkar bola…johny janwar naam hai mera. Kisi se bhi poochh lena. Meri fasai hui kabutri kahin nahi ud sakti. Tum dono ko kya lagta hai bhag jaogi. Ye mera dost billu bekar hai. Naam bekar hai par hai bade kaam ka. Abhi to ham dono ko poori raat tum dono se maze chakhne hain fir ek pani wala jahaj taiyar hai jo tum dono ko dubai le jayega aur fir uske baad hamesha hamesha ke liye wahan ke shekhon ki jageer banne wali ho tum dono.

Ek baar ko to in dono ki chut mein jhurjhuri si mach jaati hai par fir chuski thodi himmat karke bolti hai…tune kya ham dono ko kulfi samajh rakha hai ke muh mein dala aur nigal gaye. Ham aag hain aag. Kheloge to jal jaoge samjhe.

Johny janwar rawan wala thahaka laga kar bolta hai…agar tum aag ho tabhi to tumhara ham maza lene wale hain baby. Taki tumhari aag se hamari aag bhadak jaye. Wo uske chehre par hath firata firata uski chuchi tak le jata hai to chuski use jhatak deti hai.

Par wo genda johny janwar aur uska dost bablu bekar in dono ko kabu mein karne ki koshish karte hain to ye dono idhar udhar bhaag jati hain. Itne mein chuski ko samajh aa jaati hai ke ye kisi five star hotel ka luxury suite hai. Iska matlab sali us bhosdi wali bhosdi bikwali ne inhe in dono ke hathon bech diya tha. Ye sochkar chuski ko gussa aa jata hai.

Par is wakt pehla kaam inhe yahan se nikalna tha. Isliye wo sochne lagti hai. Use is baat ka bhi andaza tha ke wo in salon se thodi der ke liye bach to sakti hai par inse bhag nikalna un dono ke liye bahut mushkil tha.

Bahar kuchh aur chal raha tha. Panku aur chanku in dono ke pichhe hi the. Bhosdi bikwali ne in dono ke drinks mein kuchh milwaya tha jisse ye dono behosh ho gayi thi. Bhosdi ne in dono ko johny janwar ko bech diya tha aur uske gunde (jo ke pappu pancher aur rani rupmati hi the) in dono ladkiyon ko aise le ja rahe the jaise wo do nasha kiye hue ladkiyon ko le ja rahe hon. Wo unhe parking ki or lekar jaate hain.

Chanku ko apni special cigrette ki chul mach jaati hai to wo panku se gadi ki chabi lekar usme se cigrette nikalne chala jata hai. Tabhi uski nazar un do gunde type logon par padti hai jo un do fuljhadiyon ko behoshi ki halat mein le ja rahe the. Chanku jitne mein bhag kar panku ko bula kar lata hai, itne mein wo dono un dono ladkiyon ko car mein bithakar bhag chuke the.

Panku aur chanku fatafat car mein baithkar in dono ka pichha karne lagte hain. Par jald hi wo car in dono ki pahunch se bahar jati hai aur ye dono bhatak jaate hain.

Idhar ladkiyan bhi idhar udhar bhaag kar preshan ho gayi thi. Par unhe kisi tarah un do gundon se bachna bhi to tha. Chuski chameli apna purse dhundh rahi thi jisme usne aise logon se bachne ke liye chilly spray rakh rakha tha par use na to apna purse mil raha tha aur na hi apna mobile jisse wo log police ko phone kar saken. Munni ko bhi apni koi chij nahi mil rahi thi.

Panku aur chanku dono in dono ladkiyon ko dhundhte dhundhte preshan ho gaye the. Fir chanku achanak bolta hai. Hame us club ke aas paas wale five star hotels mein unhe dhundhna padega. Kyunki ye log aise maal ko bade hotels mein hi lekar jaate hain. Chanku ke un dono ko maal kehne par panku uski or ankhen nikal kar dekhta hai.

Par use uski baat sahi lagti hai aur wo dono sabse paas wale hotel mein jaate hain. Jahan ki parking mein unhe un dono laundon ki gadi nazar nahi aati. Wo dono reception par bhi puchhte hain ke do ladke yahan koi do drunk ladkiyon ko lekar aye hain. Par receptionist unhe kuchh bhi batane se inkaar kar deti hai. Kyunki ye hotel ke rules ke against tha.

Dono nirash ho jate hain aur police mein jaane ka sochte hain. Fir panku ko kuchh yaad aata hai to wo apne chaddi dost jagga jasoos ko phone karta hai jo ke ek inspector tha. Wo use sari baat batata hai. Jagga use jald hi wahan pahunchne ka bolkar phone rakh deta hai.

Abhi wo dono bahar nikal hi rahe the ke unhe pappu pancher aur rani rupmati nazar aa jate hain. Wo dono bhagkar un tak pahunchte wo dono unhe dekhkar hotel ke ander bhag jaate hain.

Ye dono unke pichhe pichhe ander chale jate hain. Receptionist in dono ko rokne ki koshish karti hai par ye dono nahi rukte aur unka pichha karte rehte hain. Wo ladki in dono ke pichhe security wale laga deti hai. Ye dono unko bahut bolte hain ke ye dono ladke do ladkiyon ki kidnap karke yahan laaye hain par security wale inki ek nahi sunte aur pichhe lag jate hain.

Ye log kisi tarah unko chakma dekar bhag jaate hain aur jahan rooms hote hain check karne lagte hain ke kahin unhe wo do ladkiyan mil jayen. Par wo unhe nahi dikhti.

Munni koshish kar rahi thi ke darwaja khul jaye. Par wo khulne ka naam hi nahi le raha tha. Udhar wo bada genda chuski ko utha kar fir se bed par patak deta hai aur uske kapde nikalne lagta hai. Chuski chameli bechari hath pair marne lagti hai.

Ye dono bhi bhagte bhagte usi floor par pahunch jaate hain. Jahan un gundon ne suite le rakha tha. Aur idhar udhar dekhne lagte hain. Halanki inhe pata tha ke aise wo ladkiyan inhe nahi milne wali par fir bhi in dono ne himmat nahi haari thi.

Aur ghum ghum kar dekh rahe the un dono ko. Jaise hi ye log unke room ke samne se gujarte hain by chance munni se door khul jata hai. Darasal door ka handle hi toot gaya tha. Ye dono bhai panku chanku aur doosri taraf munni teeno ek doosre ko dekh kar khush ho jaate hain par munni jaldi se in dono ko bolti hai…jaldi se chuski ko bachao nahi to wo genda johny janwar uski izzat lut lega.

Billu bekar jaise hi panku ke mukka marne lagta hai usse pehle hi chanku usko ek jordar mukka markar wahin par chit kar deta hai. Dono ander jakar fatafat gende ko uske upar se uthate hain aur chuski par chadar fenk ke uske sharir ko dhak dete hain. Johny uthkar dono ko marne lagta hai.

Itne mein billu bekar bhi aa jata hai aur kabhi chanku ko marne ki koshish kare to kabhi panku ko, wo jaise hi kisi ko marne lagta wo apni jagah se hat jata aur uska mukka bekar ho jata. Par johny janwar ladne mein bahut tej tha. Wo in dono ko marne lagta hai. Jald hi ye dono janwar chanku panku par havy hone lagte hain.

Itne mein chuski ne bhi kapde pehan liye the aur wo aur munni bhi milkar in dono ko marne lagti hain. Par johny janwar koi aam gunda nahi tha. Wo human trafficking ka king tha. Isliye uski maar kutai ki training bhi kafi achhi thi. Wo in charon ke liye akela hi kafi tha. Waise billu bekar to apne naam ki hi tarah bekar tha.

Wo chanku panku ko maar maar kar jakhmi kar deta hai. Udhar in dono ke gunde pappu pancher aur rani rupmati bhi aa jate hain. Chuski aur munni ko bhi choten lagi thi isliye wo dono kuchh bebas ho gayi thi.

Johny apne gundo ko bolta hai ke le chalo in dono ko. Wo dono unhe khinchkar lift ki or le jate hain. Udhar ye dono unhe lekar lift se niche jaa rahe the to dusri lift se police wale jinhe jagga jasoos le ja raha tha wo dekh leta hai kyunki dono lift kanch se bani thi aur transparent thi. Jagga jasoos aur baki police wale agle male par utar kar niche jaane wali lift mein chadh jata hai.

Udhar johny janwar aur billu bekar bhi kisi aur lift se niche jaate hain. Chanku panku bhi dhire dhire chalte lift ki or jaate hain. Wo dono bhi niche wali lift mein chadh jaate hain.

Pappu pancher aur rani rupmati un dono ladkiyon ko lekar car se nikal gaye the. Jagga jasoos bhi teen char police walon ko lekar unke pichhe ho leta hai. Fir unke pichhe johny aur billu aur sabse end mein chanku aur panku apni pili gadi mein. Is tarah bhagam bhaag shuru ho jaati hai.

Ye dono gunde in dono ladkiyon ko lekar dumas beech se thodi doori par ek purane beech par le jaate hain. Wahan par ek sawari jahaj pehle se khada tha aur ye dono un ladkiyon ko khinch kar us jahaj ki or le jaane lagte hain. Inke pichhe police wali jeep aa jaati hai aur wo bhag kar wahan pahunch jaate hain. Par jahaj se police walon par goliyan chalne lagti hain.

Kuchh der baad johny janwar aur billu bekar bhi pahunch gaye the. Aur wo bhi apni pocket se revolver nikal lete hain. Pichhe pichhe dono chanku aur panku bhi pahunch jaate hain aur dono pichhe se billu bekar ko pakadkar uske hath se pistaul chhin lete hain. Aur use wahin gira diya aur sar par pathar lagne se wo behosh ho jata hai.

Dono gunde ladkiyon ko jahaj mein bithane hi lagte hain ke panku ne pistaul se goli chala di jo pappu pancher ko lagi. Ab wo dono ladkiyan khud ko chhuda ke bhagi. Chanku unhe ek side le gaya. Police aur jahaj wale gundon mein khub goli baari hui. Police ki aur bhi gadiyan aa gayi thi. Johny ek pathar ke pichhe chhupa hua tha. Wo mauke ki taak mein tha.

Ab aisa mehsus hone laga ke jahaj wale gundon ka asla khatam ho gaya hai kyunki wo log jahaj lekar bhaag gaye. Idhar police ne area ko charon taraf se gher liya. Pappu pancher ke hath par goli lagi thi to use pakad liya gaya. Rani rupmati ne bhi goliyan chalane ki koshish ki par wo bhi pakda gaya.

Itne mein johny janwar nikla aur sidhe jagga jasoos ke paas jakar uske sar par pistaul tankar bola…ladkiyon ko hamare hawale kar do nahi to ise maar dunga. Wo log ek khali area mein the to bahut mushkil paida ho gayi thi. Ek baar ko to lag raha tha ke baji palat gayi hai.

Par panku ne mauka dekhkar johny par goli chala di. Halanki risk tha ke ye jagga ko bhi lag sakti thi kyunki kaun sa panku ko koi tajurba tha goli chalane ka. Par sanyogvash goli johny ko lagti hai aur pistaul uske hath se chhut jati hai. Jagga ne mauka dekhkar wo pistaul utha li aur johny ko kabu kar liya gaya.

Ab sabhi gunde police ke kabu mein the aur ladkiyan bach gayi thi. Jagga jasoos aur uski team ko badi safalta hath lagi thi aur human trafficking ka bada case solve ho gaya tha. Johny janwar aur uske sathi lambe samay ke liye ander jaane wale the.

In dono bhaiyon ne bahut bahaduri dikhai thi in ladkiyon ko bachane ke liye. So inhe inaam to milna tha. Isliye….

Agla scene…

Ye dono ladkiyan chanku panku ke flat par thi. Chuski chameli panku ke room mein thi aur munni mastani chanku patel ke room mein. Ye dono hi ladkiyon ne inhe inaam ke roop mein apni apni gulabi chut dene ka faisla liya tha.

Chuski chameli ne panku ko pehle hi apne past ke baare mein sab kuchh bata diya tha. Panku ne bhi use apni jawani ke kisse bataye to chuski muskura uthi. Munni ka to koi sex related past tha hi nahi isliye use is baare mein kuchh batana hi nahi tha. Aise hi chanku ki bhi koi kahani nahi thi.

To ek taraf do khoob khele hue khiladi the to doosri or is khel ke anadi. Kuchh der baad chuski ke kamre se jab jor jor ki awazen aane lagi to munni ke muh se nikla…dekho to saali kaise drame kar rahi hai. Jaise bahut dard ho raha ho. Chanku muskura kar khud bhi program shuru kar deta tha.

Use to seal tod samaroh karna tha. Munni bhi taiyar thi apni bulbul ko chanku ke baaj se milwane ke liye. To jab idhar bhi gapagap mela shuru hua to chikhen idhar bhi nikli par ye asli wali chikhen thi. Bahut hi shandar chudai hui dono or.

Agle din dono ladkon ne in dono ladkiyon ko propose kiya aur bataya ke ye dono ladke diamond merchant hain. Jise sunkar ladiyan bahut khush ho jaati hain. Ye dono unka proposal accept kar leti hain isliye nahi ke ye dono bahut amir hain balke isliye ke inme itni insaniyat hai ke anjaan ladkiyon ke liye apni jaan tak daanv par laga di inhone.

Halanki in dono ke maa baap isi shahar mein the par ye dono unse alag is 4bhk flat mein rehte the. Maa baap bhi dono ladkiyon ko accept kar lete hain aur in dono ki shadi ke baad dono ladkiyon ki request par maa baap bhi in logon ke sath rehne lagte hain.

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