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Fantasy THE INHERITOR(A PATH TO DESTINY)

What do you think about the story?

  • Story needs a change

    Votes: 2 5.0%
  • I should stop writing

    Votes: 2 5.0%
  • Story is good. Should be written like this

    Votes: 37 92.5%

  • Total voters
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Kratos

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Hello my dear friends...jaisa ki ye story maine kafi time pahle likhi thi. aur iska naam pahle (successor of satan) tha. meri ye first story thi. but iska plot clear nahi tha. and title me bhi wo baat nahi thi. fir kuch time baad main US chala gaya apne treatment ke liye. par ab main apni ye story restart kar raha hoon..iske previous update me kuch changes bhi honge..to jinhone pahle padhe the wo dubara padh le..aur jo naye hai..unka to kuch kahna hi nahi. ( comment jarur karna aur batana ki kaise hai.)
 
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Kratos

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Introduction

Rudra Malik - (48) Person with billions of worth. husband of a samara malik.

Samara Malik - (44) wife of a rudra malik.

Kayra Malik (24) - 1st daughter of rudra and samara.

Rubal Malik - twins of kayra.

Nitigya Malik - (22) 2nd daughter of rudra and samara.

Amayra Malik - (20) 3rd daughter of rudra and samara.

Armaan Malik - (**) last son of samara..last kyon wo aage pata chalega.

inka nature, figure, size ye sab jab - jab inke upar focus hoga tab pata chalega. hero kaun hai ye bhi aage he pata chalega. and heroine aur uske family ka intro entry ke sath..baki jaise - jaise characters aate jaayenge inro hota jayega.
 
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Casinar

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Hello My dear friends...I have wanted to write a story for a long time. But I could not understand what to write and how to write.So after much thought I decided to write something. And honestly i don't know, how to write a story..so my friends read the story and give your comment, feedback, suggestion honestly..

With kind regards
Kratos

Are wah kratos bhai tum bhi agaaye writers club mein,
welcome yaara.... abhi nahin raat ko padhke reply karta hon
:congrats: for your new story my friend.
wish you all success :superb:
 

Baap Ji

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Update - 1(The Dream)

Ek Aalishan haweli numa ghar me, ek kamre me ek ladka aaraam se sukoon ki neend soya hua tha masoom sa bhola bhala par chehre par ek alag hi tej liye hue..saari chintao se door ek mast meethi neend me wo so raha tha. raat ke is waqt kamre ki deewar me lagi ghadi 3 baj ka samay dikha rahi the.
Poore kamre me nahi balki is poore haweli numa ghar me shanti thi a 'pin drop silence' poori haweli hi andhere me doobi thi andhera bhi aisa ek kaali syahi sa..par tabhi dekhte hai ki bahar jor - jor se hawaye chalne lagi..hawa bhi aise chal rahi thi jaise kuch kahna chah rahi ho, kuch batana chah rahi ho..bahar sharad Purnima ka chand aasman me apne jalwe bikher raha tha..us chand ki chandni me wo haweli hi nahi balki aas paas ka ilaaka bhi jagmaga raha tha. chand ki roshni jab haweli sie judi jheel par pad rahi thi to us jheel ki khubsurati me chaar chand lag gaye itna manmohak najara tha..par tabhi wo ladka apne bistar me karwate badalne laga..uska poora shareer paseene me nahaya hua tha..halki gulabi sardi me bhi...ladke ko itna paseena aa rha hai ki jaise abhi - abhi naha ke aa raha ho..aur wo jor se nahiiiii....!!! Chilla ke utha gaya.. Uski badi hui saanse is baat ki gawahi de rahi thi..ki wo kitna dara hua hai..dara hua nahi balki pareshaan hai. Sir ek sapne ki wajah se..kya hai ye sapna.bhaut hi jyada pareshan ek yahi wo sapna hai jisne uska chain cheena hua hai, usko uske hi logo se uske hi pariwar se alag kar rakkha hai..is sapne ke wajah se koi uske paas nahi aata..
Aaiye dekhte hai aakhir kya hai wo sapna..sapne me wo ladka dekhta hai..ki ek jagah pe ek ladka apne ghutno ke bal baitha hua hai..uske chaaro taraf kaale kapdo me kuch laog khade hai..us ladke ke saamne kayi feet unchi kaale patthar ki ek murti thi..aur wo log us murti ke saame kahde hoke kuch pad rahe the. aur jaise - jaise us prayer ke shabd tej hote jaa rahe the..waise - waise us ladke sar me dard bad raha tha..dard irna jyada bad gaya ki wo ladka cheekhne laga..jaise - jaise wo prayer aage badti ja rahi thi..waise - waise ladka cheekhta jaa raha tha fir kuch samay baad us ladke ke shareer par kaale kapde aa gaye..uski aankhe bhi poori kaali aur un kaali aankho par gahri laal putli..fir jab wo ladka kahada hua tab un kaale kapde pahno hue logo ne us ladke ka swagat kiya..par ye kya wo ladka unse kahta hai..ki main tum logo jaisa nahi hoon. Main wapas nahi aaunga. Jis par wo log kahte hai ki tum satan ke waaris ho tumhe aana hi hoga...bas yahi wo sapna tha..ab present me...ladka ab apne bed se uthta hai..ghadi ki taraf ek nigaah dekhka hai to 3:30 ka samay ho raha tha. fir wo neeche aata hai aur haweli ki rasoi me jaake apne liye ek coffee banata hai..aur coffee peete hue apne ateet ke panno me kho jaata hai..aur khud se bolta hai ki aakhir kya hai is sapne ka raaj, kyon main apne ghar se door hoon. Bachpan se hi mujhe kyon ye sapna har ro ek hi samay pe aata hai..kaun hai wo log aur wo ajeeb si murti aakhir kya raaz hai..un sabhi baato ka...fir wo ladka coffee ka cup hath me uthate hue haweli ka main gate kholta hai..aur bahar apne bageeche me aata hai. aur dekhta hai bahar sharad Purnima ka itna Manmohak najara..aasman me phaili hui chandni, jagmagata hua jheel ka kal - kal karta hua paani. aur us najare ko dekh ke wo ladka us haseen najare me kho sa jaata hai. Bahar chalne waali wo thandi hawaye..kadamb, rajnigandha, raat ki rani aur kai tarah ke pedo par lage hue sugandhit phoolo ki khusbu
us maahol ko aur bhi khushnuma bana rahi thi...un najaro me khote hie wo wahi fir se ek meethi neend me kho sa gaya.

Congratulations 4 new thread

Update is very nice

Naam kya hai is ladke ka or ye hai kon
I think ye shaitano ka warish hai
Jo insan duniya me kisi karan k Aa Gaya jisme kuch achai hsi lekin shaitan use apne jaisa banana chahte hai
Dekhte hai ki insano ka pyar pa k wo insan hi rahega ya shaitan bn jayega
Keep writing.
 
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Baap Ji

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Hello My dear friends...I have wanted to write a story for a long time. But I could not understand what to write and how to write.So after much thought I decided to write something. And honestly i don't know, how to write a story..so my friends read the story and give your comment, feedback, suggestion honestly..

With kind regards
Kratos

Bas likhte jao
 
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