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Tbi sardar ki najar Prem par gayi to wo prem ki taraf dheere dheere aane laga , uske turant baad hi chotu bhi maa se alag hokar Prem ke paas aakar khada ho gaya to Prem bi wahin baith kar chotu ke sar pe hath firane laga..


Yeh dekh kar sardar ruk gae aur phir ek bhari robdar awaaz sunai di Prem ko



Prem n awaaz suni to aaspaas dekhne laga par wahan koi insan ni tha tabi phir s awaaz Hui..


Awaaz- Bache main tumhare samne hi hu.


Prem ye sunkar shocked hua ki bhediye bolte bi h kyuki usne kisi b janwar ko bolte hue ni dekha tha aaj tk...


Prem - Kya ye Sach m aapki awaaz h par Maine to kisi janwar ko bolte ni dekha to aap kaise ??


Sardaar - kyuki main koi sadharan bhediya ni hu . Main ek viksit (evolved) prajati Direwolf hu . Aur main jisse chahe usse baat Kar sakta hu..




(Wolf leader k sir p Star ka marks h Baki sare wolf par Ni .. ye star evolved wolf k sir p hota tha . Baki sare normal rehte the )


Prem - oh achaa.. aisi baat h .


Sardar - Kon ho tum, is jungle m Kya Kar rahe ho aur Mera beta tumhare paas kaise aaya ??


Prem- Mera naam Prem h . Maine isse 2 din pehle Nadi k kinare dekha tha , tab ye kafi jhakhmi tha isliye main isse apne Ghar leke Gaya tha . Wahan Meri maa n isse thek kardia par ye apne pariwar k na hone s dukhi tha isliye main isko yahan apne pariwar k pass leke ayya hu..


Sardar- kyaaa… tumne hamare bete ki jaan bachai h.. ( apna sir thoda jhuka Kar aur respect s ) apka bahut bahut shukriya Jo apne mere bete ko bachaya h...


Prem- aree isme shukriya jaisi Kya baat h. Hame to sabki madad karni chahiye na . Aur ab to apka beta Mera dost bi ban gaya h . ( Chotu ko dekh Kar ) kyu h na ??.


To chothu bade pyar s apni poonch(tail) hila Kar khush hone ka ishara karta h ..


Prem - par mujhe ye samajh ni aaya ki aap sabke hote ye akela kaise Nadi k us taraf pahuch gaya ..?


Sardar- 2 din pehle ye sab bache jungle m khel rahe the phir najane kaise ye unsab s alag hogaya . Hamne har jagah dhundha jungle m par ni Mila … hamne to socha b ni tha ki Nadi k dusri taraf b ja sakta h kyuki wahan Jane s Maine sabko Mana kia hua h..


Phir sardar chotu s apni bhasa m puchte h. Chuki chotu abhi chotha tha isliye bol ni sakta tha ..Chotu n sari baat apne baba ko Bata di.

Phir sardar n mujhe sari baat batai ki kaise wo khelte khelte sabse alag hogaya tha phir pyas lagne pr jab wo Nadi k paas Gaya to wo galti s Nadi m gir Gaya . Uske baad wo Nadi k tez bahao m behta Chala ja Raha tha ki kisi n usko Nadi s nikal Kar dusre taraf Chod dia jahan kuch der baad Prem aagya aur Baki to sab prem ko pata hi tha..


Prem- ohh to ye baat h . dekha to Maine b tha us din Nadi kafi tez bah rahi thi phir kisne bachaya hoga ...


Sardar- wo to mere bete ko bi pata ni. Par Jo bi h agar aap na hote to hamara bacha ya to ghayal avastha m hi usse kuch hojata ya phir kisi jungli janwar ka…..


Prem - Chaliye Jane dijiye. Ab aap ache s khayal rakheiga .. ( phir chotu s ) agli baar akele mat Jana kahi thek h aur apna khayal bi rakhna .


Jab prem n ye baat boli to usne chothu ko pyar s gale laga Lia tha . Thoda emotional bi hogaya tha Prem.. jab sare wolf ye sab dekh rahe the to unhe yakeen ni ho Raha tha ki ek insan ka bacha itna nek aur saaf Dil ka ho sakta h. Unsab ko to insano s darr hi lagta tha kyuki insano k bare m sab yahi kente the ki wo bht jalim Hote h aur janwaro ka shikar karte h ya apna gulam bana k rakhte h . Par abhi sabke samne ek insani bacha aur ek bhediye k Bache ki dosti dikh rahi thi..



Prem n phhir alag hokar bola chotu s ,

Prem- ab tum apne pariwar k sath rehna thek h. Main tumse bad m Milne jarur aaunga ..


Chotu bi prem ki bhavnao ko samajh Raha tha aur usne jaisa prem n kaha waisa kia .


Sardar- Maine aaj tk bs insano k bare m bs nakaratmak baatein hi Suni thi par aaj apko dekh Kar aur apka mere bete k prati prem dekh Kar main apke liye kuch karna chahta hu..


Prem- aree Ni Ni , insab ki koi jarurat ni h mujhe kch ni chahiye . Ha main bs itna chahta hu ki main apne dost s jab chahe tab mil saku .. Kya aap mujhe iski izazat denge .. ?



Sardaar - aap Sach m ek punyaatma h. Apke andar na sirf Prem h balki nishswart bhavna bi h ……. Jaisa aap chahte h ki aap apne dost s mil sake , to aaj s main Sare bhediyo ka sardar apko ek upadi ( title ) deta hu.. Aaj s aap "FRIENDS OF THE WOLF" honge...


Aisa bolte hi Prem k Charo taraf kuch chamkili roshni ghumne lagi aur Prem m sama gai..


Sardar- aaj s aap hum Sab bhediyo k dost honge Jiski wajah s koi bi , kisi bi prajati ka bhediya aap par kabi hamla ni karega aur hum bi apke dost hone k naate jarurt padne par hamesa apki sahayata karenge ..

Aap hamare aur insano ki dosti ka pratik banege ..


Iske baad sabhi bhediye apni apni aawazo m jaise is baat ka elaan karte h. Sardar bi aur sare chothe bache , sab ek sath upar ki taraf dekhte hue chillate h..


Prem ye sunkar bht khush hota h ki Kahan uska bs ek dost tha par ab sari bheidyo ki prajati hi ab uski dost ban gai h..

Prem sardar k samne jhuk Kar unhe dhanyawaad bolta h aur phir chotu aur Baki chothe bacho s mil Kar wapas jane ka bolta h kyuki kafi waqt bi ho chuka tha Ghar s gae ho...Sab prem ko vida karte h aur Prem jungle s Bahar aane lagta h .....






Abhi wo Nadi k pass pahuchne hi Wala tha ki usse kuch feel hua .. Prem n aaspaas dekha to kuch ni Mila to Prem phir aage badh Gaya aur pahuch gaya bridge k pass par wahan Jake usse ek jhatka lagta h..


Jis bridge s wo aaya tha wo ab Puri tarah tut chuka tha . Pehle to bridge dono taraf s connected hi tha to Prem n magic s usse bel s bandh dia tha par ab wahan kuch bacha hi ni to Kya thek Kare aur magic s itna bada pull banana bi mushkil tha Bina aadhar (base) k


Ab Prem pareshan hogaya ki Ghar kaise jae kyuki late b ho Raha tha aur Nadi paar karna khatre s bhara tha .. kuch der soch Kar Prem Nadi k sath sath aage chalne laga kyuki aage hi uska Ghar bi tha bs Nadi k dusri taraf..


Prem aage chalta Gaya ye soch Kar ki aage chalkar Nadi ka bahao thoda dhema hoga ya Nadi Kam gheri Hui to wo paar krne ki koshish karega..



Kafi aage Jane k baad aisi jagah dikh gai jahan ka bahao thoda Kam lag Raha tha aur Nadi k beech patthar b the to Prem wahi s Jane ka soch Lia kyuki aur koi rasta bi ni tha ..



Prem nadi m utar Gaya aur dhere dhere aage badhne laga . Abhi aadha bi paar ni kia tha ki Prem ko mushkil hone lagi kyuki Nadi k upar k mukable niche pr bahao kafi tez tha .. Prem ko ab khade hone m bi pareshani par ab wapas Jane ka koi mtlb ni tha to Prem jaise taise aage badhne ki koshish karne laga par achanak s Prem k paer m kuch kaate jaisa kuch ghus Gaya jisse wo sambhal ni paya aur ab Nadi k bahao m aake behne laga ..



Ek to dard upar s Nadi ka bahao, in dono ki wajah s Prem khud ko samabhal ni pa Raha tha . Abhi wo kuch sochta ya karta ki tabi Prem ek patthar s takra jata h aur sir p chot lag jati h.


Aise hote hi 2 jagah iska reaction hua.




    • Raj Nandini Jo Ghar k bahar Prem ka intzar Kar rahe the unhe achanak s feel hua ki Prem musibat m h. Raj n turant prem ko SEARCH MAGIC s dhunda ar wo turant Ghar s nikl Nadi ki taraf Jane laga…



    • Dusra reaction chotu ko hua. Wo bht jor jor s chillane laga jisse dekh Kar sardar aur chotu ki maa sab pahuch gae to chotu n badi mushkil s bataya ki uska dost abhi musibat m h.
Feel sabko hi hua tha kuch kuch par chotu ko kuch jyada hi to sardar apne sath 3-4 wolfs chotu aur uski ma k sath nikal Gaya Prem ko dhudne..



Yahan Nadi m ..

Chot lagte hi abto Prem ko hosh hi ni Raha kuch , sir p lagne s uski aankhein band hone lagi aur hath pao b dhele pad gAe. Ab bs Prem Nadi k tez bahao m behta Chala ja Raha tha , kabi kisi pathar s takrata to kabi dusre patthar s jisse Prem ab kafi ghyal hogaya..



Jab Prem ka sharir bilkul hi dheela pad gaya tabi ….








Prem Jo hosh m ni tha usse laga ki wo Hawa m h par uski aankhein khul Ni pa rahi thi . Phir jab dobara uski aankhein khuli to usne dekha ki uske paas kuch bahut bada Janwar khada h jisse kafi roshni nikal rahi thi par prem ko saaf saaf ni dikha aur phir s uski aankhein band hogai..


Prem k sharir m jaan to thi ab par wo hip Ni pa Raha tha...achanak s Prem ko bht jyada dard hone laga jaise koi bht garam roshni uske sharir p pad rahi ho aur iske baad phir s Prem behosh hogaya .




Wahi Prem ko dhundhte hue dono party ab Prem k Karib aane lagi thi to Jo janwar abtk prem k paas khada tha wo ek chalang m hi Nadi ko cross kia ar dusri chalang laga Kar to direct Amazon k junglo m kahi Kho Gaya aur piche bs kuch chamakti roshni rah gai jaise koi dust ho..



Isi waqt Raj Nandini Jo Hawa ki speed m aage badh rahe the wo turant pahuch gae Prem k paas aur Prem ko Nadi k kinare behosh pade dekh Kar dono ka hi Dil bhaith Gaya .


Nandini n Jake turant prem k sir ki apni gaud m rakh Kar uthane lagi wahi Raj aaspaas faili us chamkili dust ko notice karne lage kyuki wo BHT ajeeb thi aur usme alag Urja shakti bi thi ..


Wahi dusri taraf sardar chotu ko liye hue tez bhagte hue Baki logo k sath prem ki smell sunghte hue Nadi k kinare kinare bhag rahe the aur phir wo bi wahan pahuch gae jahan dusri taraf Prem tha Nandini ki gaud m.


Prem ko dekh Kar chotu turant Nadi m aane ki koshsih karne laga to sardar n turant usse pakad Lia par chotu baarbaar chilla Raha tha . Chotu ki awaz Raj ko bi sunai di to wo bi dekhne lage dusri taraf.


Raj n jab chotu ko dusre bhediyo k sath dekha to wo samajh gae pura mamla ki Prem jungle m Kya Kar Raha tha...


Nandini ka to roo roo Kar bura haal tha wo bs Prem ko bulaye ja rahi thi , isliye Raj n aake usko sambhala

Raj- Nandini prem thek h. Tumko is waqt roone ki jagah usko check karne k bare m sochna chahiye. Tum dekho to ki Kya hua h prem ko ..


Nandini- turant apne aansu pochti h aur aankehin band karke Prem k upar hath rakhti h .. uske hatho s yellow color ki roshni Prem k pure sharir m behne lagti h.

Raj- Nandini , Prem thek to h na ?

Nandini apni aankhe khol Kar ,

Nandini- ha Prem to thek h par najane kyu phir b ye behosh h.( Nandini n Prem ko internally check kia tha like koi haddi wagrah ya kuch serious damage ) uske baad wo prem ko thek s dekhne lagti h par sab thek tha .. prem k sharir pr koi bi chot k nishan ni the ab..


Wahi dusri taraf jab chotu sambhal ni pa Raha tha to sardar n chotu ko apne upar bhitaya aur aankehin band krke kuch karne laga. Aisa karte hi unke pure sharir s kaala dhua jaise hone laga aur phir sardar n ek HIGH jump Lia aur wo Nadi k dusri taraf aake sidha utare..


Chotu to jaiss hi is taraf aaya to wo bhaag Kar Prem k paas aagya aur usko dekhne laga .Nandini n jab ye dekha to wo kuch bolne wali thi par Raj n rok dia aur baad m batane ka bola..


Phir Raj Nandini prem ko lekke Ghar ki taraf Jane lage to chotu bi piche piche aane laga par sardar wahi khade rahe .. Raj n jab dekha to unhone ishare s aane ko kaha to sab sath Ghar aagae..





After some time -
At home..



Sham ka waqt ho Chala tha ..

Prem apne kamre m soya tha ya kahe behosh pada tha aur chotu bi uske paas bhaitha tha . Intzar karte karte wo wahi sogaya tha Prem k paas ..



Wahi Bahar , is waqt Raj Nandini aur sardar apne Baki k sathio k sath wahi the . ( Baki k log bi same tarike s aaye the )


Raj Nandini ko Sardar n sab Bata dia tha ki Prem unke paas aaya tha unke bete ko leke aur Baki sab bi.....ab galti to isme kiisi ki bi ni thi . Jahan Nandini n chothu ko thek kia tha upar s wo Prem ki MAA thi wahi sardar n Prem ko title dia tha isliye dono hi party k logo k Mann m koi gile sikwe ni the..

Par sardar kuch soch Kar apne khayal m khoye the to Raj n Puch Lia ki Kya baat h..


Sardar- Raj ji , mujhe kch sandeh ho Raha h.
( Bcoz he is Leader of wolf isliye Raj , mujhe ar koi word ni Mila )

Raj- kaisa sandeh aur apka mtlb kisse h


Sardar- Raj ji , jaisa aaj Prem k sath hua h waisa hi mere bete k sath b hua tha. Dono m hi hum dono k bete itni badi musibat m fase the phir b najane kisi n aake sahi samay p bacha Lia dono ko..

( Is waqt dono log as a Father baat Kar rahe the)

Raj- apne sahi kaha. Maine b wahan ek rahasymayi Urja ko mehshush kia tha par wo Kya h ye main pata ni Kar saka . Par itna jarur h ki wo Jo b h wo Amazon k jungle m hi h. .


Sardar- apne sahi kaha h. Hamne bi jungle m mehshush kia h ki kch aisa h Jo ki bht shaktishali h. Par aaj tk kisi n na kabi dekha h aur na wo samne aaya h ..

(Main us janwar k bare m thoda change kia h )


phir Inki aisi hi baat chalti rahi aur jab raat hone lagi to sardar apne sathio k sath wapas chale gae Kal dobara aane ka kah kar kyuki chotu yahi tha Prem k paas..







In Night::

Prem is waqt apne kamre m tha soya hua ki tabi ek roshni hoti h pure kamre m aur achank s Prem k sharir s ek safeed roshni ka gola Bahar aata h aur gayab hojata h APneaap ….





In Amazon jungle:



Ye ek gufa thi Jo andar s kafi badi thi aur andhera b tha kafi.. Is waqt wahan koi tha jiski saanso ki awaaz s hi lag Raha tha ki koi babut bada janwar h.





Ye wahi rahasymayi janwar tha Jo asal m ek Wolf tha.. par ye koi normal wolf ni tha aur na sardar k jaise evolved . Ye sabse alag aur eklote tarike ka wolf tha Jo Dekhne m jitna khoobsurat d utna hi khatarnak bi...

Isne hi aaj Prem ko dubte waqt bachaya tha aur isne chotu ko bi dubne s bachaya tha pehle..



Tabi us andheri gufa m tez roshni Hui aur ek roshni ka gola prakat hua. Wo janwar n jaise hi ye dekha to wo uth k khada hogaya aur us roshni ko dekhne laga . Us wolf ki aankho m chamak aagai jab usne apne samne us gole s bani akriti ko dekha...


Asal m Uss roshni k gole n ek Roop lelia tha Jo dikhne m Prem hi tha par is waqt wo Puri safeed roshni s bana hua tha bs..


Prem is Roop m bs shant khada tha par chehre p ek muskan thi aur uske sharir s saffed roshni bi nikal rahi thi jaise koi spirit ho...


Prem ko dekh Kar wo wolf paas aaya aur Prem k samne sir jhukaya jaise Naman Kar rha ho. Aise karte hi Prem dhere s aage badha ar usne apna hath us wolf k sir p rakha ar aisa hote hi uska sharir pehle to ek Lal safeed roshni m badal Gaya aur uske baad us wolf ki jagah Hawa m ek aakriti ubhar k samne aayi…


Ye ek ladki thi Jo Dekhne m kafi khoobsurat lag rahi thi , uska pura sharir doodh ki tarah safeed par uske Baal , aankehin , lips sath m kapde pure Red colour k the .



Wo dhere dhere niche utari aur phir Prem k samne ghutno k Bal bhaith gai ..


Ladki - apka apka bahut bahut dhanyawaad Jo apne mujhe darshan diye h ar sath m mujhe is jeevan s mukti bi di h. Main kitne hi varsho s is sharir aur jungle m qaid thi par mujhe yakeen tha ki ek na ek din GOD mujhe mukti jarur dilaenge aur aaj unhone khud apko yahan bhej dia h...


Prem Jo bs sab sun Raha tha muskurte hue . Pehli baar kuch bola par abi uski awaaz bilkul badli Hui thi jaise koi bacha na hokar koi aur ho…


Prem- Angel Nina , apke shrap k khathm hone ka waqt aa chuka tha isliye hi God ki icha s main yahan aaya hu . Par ye mumkin ni hota agar apne aaj mere sharir ko apni Shaktiyo s bachaya na hota. Apki Shaktiyo ki wajah s hi anjane m hi apne mere is Roop ko Bahar aane m sahayata ki h..

Prem- Apne is janwar k Roop m bi apni achai ko Ni khoya . Apne shrapit hote hue b hamesa jaruratmand jeevo ki sahayata Kari h aur उपद्रव ( chaos) Aur Shakti m chur jeevo ka ant karke Shanti banaye rakhne m yogdan bi dia h isliye aap ko us parampita paramatma ki kripa to prapt honi hi thi ...


Nina - main aabhari hu Jo kisi tarah apke kaam aa saki . Maine apne Roop aur sundarta k ghamand m najane kitne hi galatiya Kari thi jiske chalte mujhe is janwar k roop m dharti k is jungle m sada sada k liye qaid hone ka shrap Mila tha..
Jab mujhe Meri galti ka ehshahs hua to Maine is shrap ko hi ishwar ka ashirwad samajh Kar apni shaktio ka istemal is jungle ki vivashta banaye rakhne k liye karne lagi. Aur aaj aakhirkar ishwar n mujhe kshama Kar hi dia ..


Prem- ishwar to apne bacho s hamesa hi Prem karte h isliye galti hone p saza bi dete h ar kshama bi kar dete h.
Ye sab niyati hi thi jiske chalte ye sab hua h . Apka aur Prem ka milna bi niyati hi h. Aur ab wo karya ho chuka h Jiske liye abtk apko yahan rukna tha . Ab aap wapas apne lok ja sakti h...


Nina - parantu , agar main yahan s chali gai to is jungle ka Kya hoga . Agar mere Jane k baad yahan Ashanti failne lagi to phir ...

Prem- iski chinta aap na Kare Angel Nina , apke Jane k baad b yahan Shanti bani rahegi aur Baki to Yahan k niwasio k upar hi nirbhar karta h. Ishwar sirf rah dikhate h , chalna to sabko apne soch samajh s hi padta h..


Nina - Meri ek aakhiri vinti h Kya aap usse pura karnege ..

Prem (muskurate hue ) - jarur ..


Iske baad angel Nina apne hath aage karti h to unke hatho m ek Urja Shakti aa jati h Jo ki kafi rang birangi thi aur dark bi .. Nina ki ye Shaktiya uske Wolf wale Roop ki thi par ab jab wo mukt hokar apne asli sharir m aa chuki thi isliye ab Nina ko inki jarurat ni thi .


Nina n wo Urja Shakti ko Prem ki taraf badha dia to wo Urja Shakti APneaap Hawa m upar uth Kar Prem k chamakte hue sharir m sama jati h jisse Jo Prem ka sharir abtk safeed roshni s bana tha , usme Nina ki Urja shakti jate hi colour change hone lage aur phir sab pehle jaisa hogaya..



Iske baad Nina ek baar Prem ko pranam karti h aur phir Nina ka sharir roshni ban Kar asmaan ki taraf Chala jata h aur gayab hojata h .



Wahi Nina k Jane k baad Prem ki spirit ko aankhein band hojati h aur wo phir s roshni k gole m badal Kar gayab hojata h aur pahuch jata h Prem k sharir k pass aur wahan Jake wapas sharir m sama jata h..




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Nice update bhai.
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Prem to bilkul god k messanger ki tarah lga nina k saamne.
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Prem ko nye powers mili lagta h.
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Sardar aur raj ko tab pta chla shakti k baare mai jab usska jungle se jaane ka time aagya tha.
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Good update ng bhai.
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Keep posting.
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vj4u

"Be The Wrong That Makes Everything Right"....
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Sat sat Naman .Vj Bhai apki story attitude2 start hone Mai time hai but apko dubara dekh KR apki comment padh kr Sach btau ek Dil Mai alag Khushi hoti hai..love u bha
Aapke pyar aur appreciation ke liye thanks chota shabd hoga brother...

Ye aap jaise readers ka pyar hi hai jiski wajah se mai apni story puri kar paaya..

Is story par bhi apna confidence banaye rakhen taaki ye kahani bhi behatareen modon ke saath apne anjaam tak pahunche...

Aur rahi baat ATTITUDE 2 ki toh haan,usme time hai actually kaafi time hai but mera waada hai aap sab se,jab bhi wo story aapke saamne aayegi toh uski story line aapko first part se bhi zyada pasand aayegi...

Jaanta hun aisa karna mushkil hoga but hoga zaroor....tab tak is kahani ke zariye saath bane rahiye....
 

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Bohot hi umda update brother..dekha jaaye toh mere liye ab tak ka sabse acha update...

"DIRE WOLF".....kafi acha aur unique naam socha aapne bhediyon ke head ko describe karne ke liye.....

Aur jis tarike se PREM ke future me kaam aane ke liye usse WOLVES ka friend banaya wo bhi ek clean shot tha....

All in all a very good update and an important one too regarding the future of this story...

Agar aapko bura naa lage toh ek suggestion hai mera....

Jab bhi aap kisi new character ko saamne laayen jaise is update me aaya "NINA" ...
toh uska ek base pehle se hi taiyar kijiye..

I mean kuch aisi ghatnaaye dikhayiye jisse us character ki qualities saamne aaye aur fir end me ek twist ke saath us character ko aap saamne laayiye...

Isse do chizen hongi...

Pehli....character ko build up karte waqt aapke man me us character ke zariye naye naye experiments karne ke ideas aayenge..

Dusri....story me kya hone waala hai isse predict karna readers ke liye mushkil ho jaayega aur mere experience se UNPREDICTABILITY fantasy stories ki neev hoti hai...

Ye bas meri soch se nikla suggestion hai...agar galat lage toh maafi chahunga.....
 

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Bohot hi umda update brother..dekha jaaye toh mere liye ab tak ka sabse acha update...

"DIRE WOLF".....kafi acha aur unique naam socha aapne bhediyon ke head ko describe karne ke liye.....

Aur jis tarike se PREM ke future me kaam aane ke liye usse WOLVES ka friend banaya wo bhi ek clean shot tha....

All in all a very good update and an important one too regarding the future of this story...

Agar aapko bura naa lage toh ek suggestion hai mera....

Jab bhi aap kisi new character ko saamne laayen jaise is update me aaya "NINA" ...
toh uska ek base pehle se hi taiyar kijiye..

I mean kuch aisi ghatnaaye dikhayiye jisse us character ki qualities saamne aaye aur fir end me ek twist ke saath us character ko aap saamne laayiye...

Isse do chizen hongi...

Pehli....character ko build up karte waqt aapke man me us character ke zariye naye naye experiments karne ke ideas aayenge..

Dusri....story me kya hone waala hai isse predict karna readers ke liye mushkil ho jaayega aur mere experience se UNPREDICTABILITY fantasy stories ki neev hoti hai...

Ye bas meri soch se nikla suggestion hai...agar galat lage toh maafi chahunga.....
Nina k case m Maine kafi jaldi Kari h I know , shayad yahi confusion kafi time s tha mere Mann m isliye jyada kuch ni dikha pae uske bare m .. ab Bina background k koi bi character jyada acha ni lagta but future m koshish karenge ki koi character hoga to uski bi koi story ho...

Mujhe bi Fantasy section uski unpredictability k liye hi pasand h. Fantasy stories m jitna free hand hota h writer k paas utna hi kabi kabi challenging b hojata h.. m facing that too..

But aise m suggestions aur bi jaruri hojate h .. kabi kabi likhte samay hum khud bhatak jate h . Us time apke jaise logo k suggestions hi kaam aate h..

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Lakshya singh

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Aapke pyar aur appreciation ke liye thanks chota shabd hoga brother...

Ye aap jaise readers ka pyar hi hai jiski wajah se mai apni story puri kar paaya..

Is story par bhi apna confidence banaye rakhen taaki ye kahani bhi behatareen modon ke saath apne anjaam tak pahunche...

Aur rahi baat ATTITUDE 2 ki toh haan,usme time hai actually kaafi time hai but mera waada hai aap sab se,jab bhi wo story aapke saamne aayegi toh uski story line aapko first part se bhi zyada pasand aayegi...

Jaanta hun aisa karna mushkil hoga but hoga zaroor....tab tak is kahani ke zariye saath bane rahiye....
Sir ji apka bhut bada wala fan hu mai Or apki story attitude ka to deewana hu.... Apko shyad jhut lge pr apki story 2 baar pad chuka hu.... Or 3 baar pad rha hu.... Apki writing skill hi esi h jisse kuch sikhne ko milta h
 

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Sir ji apka bhut bada wala fan hu mai Or apki story attitude ka to deewana hu.... Apko shyad jhut lge pr apki story 2 baar pad chuka hu.... Or 3 baar pad rha hu.... Apki writing skill hi esi h jisse kuch sikhne ko milta h
Likhte waqt ya fir kahani ke har pehlu ke baareme sochte waqt maine kabhi nahi socha tha ki story itni achi ban jaayegi jisse dobara bhi padhne ka man kare...

Thank u brother meri writing ko special feel karane ke liye....
 
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