First of all yeh mera pehla comment hai
Ab ate rebu pe mera rebu padh ke esa mat sochna ki main dgrade kar raha hu ya kuch aur
Main bs jo maine mehsus kiya woh bol raha hu
Pehla point hero apni behno ke age zero hai bilkul jo esa nai hota
Dusri baat jab hero ko malum hai ki uske dosto ki niyat kesi hai to kyu bar bar unse g marwane jata hai eso se dosti khatam kare
Teesri baat natasha ka character totally bekar raha hai uska character ab tak sirf hawas tak simit raha hai Pyar name ki chiz nahi ab tak usmein aur hero mein
4th baat ab tak hero apni kisi baat pe pakka nahi reh saka na apni behno ko age se koi jabab diya
lakh shikayat kare behne but do char reply to bante hai
5th baat thoda to character ko change karna chahiye hero ka like thoda life ko serious le
baki u ki kahani hai u ache se jano
Aapke kuchh point sahi hain main use manti hoon.
Ye meri pahli kahani hai aur main koi profesional writer nahi hoon.
Lekin ye kahani lambi chalegi to isliye bhai ka character aisa rakhna bada.
Aur jahan tak natasha ka character hai
Uska itna hi rol tha story me. Ye incest story hai to isase jyada uski jaroorat bhi nahi thi.
Baki aapka bahut bahut dhanywaad ki apne story ko achhe se read ki aur jo bhi kami nazar aayi usase mujhe avgat karaya.
Aapke sujhav ka aage se dhyan rakhunga.
Sath bane rahega.