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Fantasy Bechara Dil Kya kre (Completed)

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aaj ka update 12 bje tak aa jaega
 
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update-3
"jennifer" us videshi ladki ne pratap ki taraf hath badhate hue kaha. Pratap apne khyalo me khoya hua tha isliye thoda chauk gaya fir sara maajra samajhte hue usne bhi hath badha diya "pratap".
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Iske baad dono me koi baat nahi hui. Pratap parvato ke piche chhupte hue suraj ke shaandar drasya (scene) ko dekh raha tha. Suraj dhal raha tha aur panchi apne ghoslo ki taraf laut rahe the. Pratap in khubsurat najaro me khoya hua tha. Delhi ki bhaag-daud wali jindagi jeene wale pratap ko ye sab swarg jaisa lag raha tha. Pratap is baat se puri tarah anjaan tha ke agle 15 din uski puri zindagi badalne wale hai.
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Pratap lagataar bahar dekh raha tha lekin 'jennifer' ki 2 neeli aankhe lagataar usi par tiki hui thi. Jennifer baar baar uske taraf dekhti aur dhire se muskura deti. Pratap is sab baato se anjaan abhi bhi parvato ke piche chhupte suraj ko dekh raha tha.
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Shaam ke 6 baj chuke the. Taashipur pahuchne me abhi 2 ghante aur baaki the. Pratap ko safar karne ki adat nahi thi. Bus me safar karne ki to bilkul bhi nahi. Isliye pratap ko thakawat (tiredness) mahsus ho rahi thi. Pratap ne thodi der sone ka socha aur aankhe mund li.
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Bus parichalak ki karkash awaaz se jab pratap ki aankh khuli to "taashipur" aa chuka tha. Pratap ke bagal wali seat khali thi matlab jennifer utar chuki thi. Pratap ne apna bag uthaya aur wo bhi utar gaya.
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Raat ke 8:30 baj rahe the. Pratap ko bhukh lag rahi thi. Pratap kuch khane ki soch kar ek dhaabe ki taraf badha. "hey pratap" kisi ki awaaj sun pratap palta to saamne ek 50-55 saal ke aadmi ko khada paya. "i m major ram singh" us aadmi ne apna parichay diya. Iske baad major ram singh ne apne driver pappu ko pratap ka bag utha kar gaadi me rakhne ko kaha. "uncle aapne mujhe pahchana kaise?" pratap abhi bhi thoda hairat me tha. "mere dost veer singh yani ke aapke papa ne tumhari photo PM kar di thi" major ram singh ne jawab diya. Raaste bhar major ram singh, pratap se kuch na kuch baat karte rahe. Kabhi wo apne army ke dino ke kisso sunaate to kabhi apne farming karne ke shaauk ke baare me batate rahe. 30 minute ke safar baad gaadi major raam singh ke ghar pahuch gayi thi.

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Read that story before
It could be a nice story
But ending did not happened according to title
And of course a painful ending
Keep it up if you can change the ending then it will be a good one
 
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(update-4)
Major ram singh ne ghar pahuch kar ek servant se pratap ka samaan guest room me rakhne ko kah diya. Pratap ko drawing room me baitha kar major ram singh andar kisi room me chale gaye. Major ke jaate hi servant chaay-naashta rakh gaya.
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Major ram singh ka ghar ek bade area me bana tha, is baat ka andaaja pratap ne gate se ghuste hi laga liya tha.
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Drawing room ki saaj sajja bahut hi kalaatmak thi. Kisi ke hath se bani sundar pantings, jinme jyadatar rajastaani striyo (mahilao) ke chehre the. Saanwala rang , lambotar chehre, kajal bhari aankhe aur tikhi naake waale. Pratap ki najre Pure hall par ghumti hui ek jagah aa tiki. Saamne darwaaje par lage neele rang ke phulo ke print waale parde se ek khubsurat chehra pratap ke taraf dekh raha tha.
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"hey naughty girl" kahte hue major ram singh ne drawing room me pravesh kiya. Major ke saath ek 22-23 saal ka ladka bhi tha. Major aur wo ladka pratap ke paas sofe par baith gaye. Iske baad wo khubsurat chehre waali ladki bhi parde ke piche se nikal kar baaki sab logo ke saath sofe par baith gayi.
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"HE is my son 'MAYANK' and she she is my younger daughter CHETNA" major ne apne bachho ka parichay pratap se karwaya aur phir pratap ka parichay apne bachho se
 

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UPDATE-5 :)
Chaay khatam hone ke baad mayank , pratap ko 1st flore par bane guest room me chhod aaya. Pratap ke rahne ki vyavastha (arrangement) isi room me ki gayi thi.
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Kamre me aate hi pratap ne pure kamre me najar daali. Kamra bahut hi saleeke se saja hua tha. Bed ke upar ek badi si panting lagi hui thi jisme baarish me bheegti hui ladki ki panting thi.
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Pratap ne ladki ke chehre ko gaur se dekha to use ye chehra dekha hua laga.
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Din bhar ke safar ke baad pratap thoda thaka hua mahsus kar raha tha. Pratap ne shower lene ki sochi aur towel utha kar kamre se attached bathroom me ghus gaya.
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Nahane ke baad pratap ko kaafi acha mahsus ho raha tha. Pratap ne ghadi par najar daali to 9:30 ho rahe the, matlab dinner ko abhi adha ghanta tha.
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Chalte hue pratap kamre me bani khidki ke karib aa gaya. Khidki khuli hui thi. Pratap ne bahar jhaanka. Neeche ka lawn pura us khidki se dikhta tha. Pure lawn me lights lagi hui thi. Kaafi der tak pratap aise hi us lawn ko dekhta raha. Phir use kuch yaad aaya to pratap vaapas bed ke taraf muda.
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Bed me pade hue apne pant ki jeb se usne mobile nikala. Vo taashipur pahuch gaya hai ye bataane ke pratap ne papa ko call ki. Call end karne ke baad jab pratap ne time dekha to dinner ko waqt ho chuka tha.
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Pratap ne apne kapde pahne aur dinner ke liye neeche chal diya.
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Dinner table par major ram singh pahle se hi baithe hue the. Pratap bhi unke paas jakar baith gaya.
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Thodi hi der me mayank aur chetna bhi aa gaye. Lekin un dono ke sath 30-32 saal ki ek ladki bhi thi.
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"pratap, ye meri badi beti ranuka hai." sabhi ke baithne ke baad major raam singh ne kaha.
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"RENUKA" to yahi hai wo ladki jiske liye uske mata-pita ne use yaha bheja tha.
 

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:applause:wow Bahut hi Shandar aur lajawab Brilliant update bhai ekdum jhakaas dhamakedaar mind blowing,
Aapne sari baton ko bade hi behtareen dhang se dikhaya hai.
Ek ek baat Itni detail Mein likhi Gayi Hai Jaise Kahani na hokar sab kuch asliyat mein ghatit ho raha ho,
Aap ki mehnat aur imagination ne is Kahani Mein Char Chand laga diye hai,

Keep going

We will wait for next update
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