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दोनों के बीच सुलह भी हो चुकी हैं। और अब तो उनका रिश्ता और भी मज़बूत हो चुका हैं।हमेशा की तरह ही अद्भुत...
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आखिर वीर और तेज़ की बीच की दूरियाँ और उलझते बिगड़ते वो अंचाहे से पलों की डोर आखिर आज टूट ही गयी...
खैर ये ज़रूरी भी था, आखिर प्रेम और आकर्षण कब तक ढका रह सकता इक दूसरे के हांक तले ।
वीर को कब निधि को पेलने का टास्क मिल गया?साला एक साल तो होने बाला होगा यार वीर का "निधी" को पेलने का जो टास्क उसे सिस्टम के तरफ से मिला था उसका । और अभी तक निधी उसे घुमा ही रही है...
खैर जो विलंभ से बैठे लण्ड पर... उसे उछालने का मज़ा ही कुछ और होता है ।
ये तो वक्त ही बताएगा। वीर तो तेज को काफी स्पेस दे चुका हैं। वो वीर के कामों में अब दखल देने लगी हैं और वीर ने इसके लिए उसे अनुमति भी दे रखी हैं।तेज़, जो की अपनी मुहब्बत कहें या फिर महज़ एक आकर्षण... के खातिर अपनी वर्षो की मेहनत से कमाई आर्किलोजिस्ट की एक अच्छी खाशी पेशकश को ठुकरा बैठी है । क्या इस त्याग का उसे उचित परिणाम मिल पायेगा ? क्या वीर सच मे तेज़ को अपनी जिंदगी मे वो जगह दे पायेगा, जिस जगह के लिए पहले से ही कहानी के बहुत से महत्वपूर्ण किरदार को हम पहले से ही देख रहे हैं?
ये बात कही ना कही सही हैं। रागिनी क्रम में तो पीछे हैं। अब सबसे आगे कौन हैं क्रम ये तो मैं नहीं बताऊंगा। ये कहानी खुद बताएगी।उन किरदारों मे से " निधी " मुझे अभी भी वीर की संगिनी की दावेदारी मे सबसे आगे लगती है... और उसके बाद अगर किसी को देखें तो वो " काईरा " होगी जो " निधी " के बाद उस हक को पाने की उचित दावेदार है ।
उसके बाद... "नतालिया (एवा) " का क्रम आता है, तब कहीं जाकर रागिनी का....
(भले ही रागिनी मेरी अब तक की सबसे पसंदीदा पात्र है कहानी मे) .
ये मेरे लिए परीक्षा हैं। तेज के लिए नहीं। मैं कैसे तेज को प्रस्तुत करता हूं वही दर्शाएगा कि उनके बीच आगे क्या होगा। क्या तेज वो जगह प्राप्त कर पाएगी?बाकी जीतने भी है वे सभी क्रम मे इन सभी के बाद ही दिख रहे हैं मेरी नज़रों मे... तो आखिर तेज़ कैसे अपनी त्याग की उचित परिणाम पा सकेगी ये देखने बाली बात होगी ।
उधर तक पहुंचने के लिए उसने पापड़ भी तो बहुत बेले हैं।अब आते है अपने वीर पे... ये ज़नाब तो जैसे आज कल हलवाई के भंडारे मे ही बैठे है...
जहाँ देखो इन महाराज को कोई न कोई अपना रास्मालायी खिला रहा है । भैंचो... कभी कभी इस चुतिये से जलन भी होने लगती है..
हाहाएक मै जिसे सही से " शांती " नही दे रही... और एक ये है... साला सबकी " शांती " की पुरजोड़ कमर हिला कर ले रहा है । हद्द है यार...
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कहानी के इस अंश मे एक मोड आता है...
ये क्या था?ये जो BKL मिसेज तिवारी है न , ऐसे ही लोगों को बोलते है
"दो कुत्ते कुत्तियों की च*दायी है...
जहाँ चूत और लिंग की हो रही लड़ाई है...
वहाँ पे जाने कहाँ से ये बहन की लौड़ी आई है...
रंडवे बकरे की साली ने अपनी सींघ है बीच मे लाई है... "
इसे ही तैयार करने में बहुत समय लगता हैं। पढ़ने में बस कुछ मिनट।भाई अपडेट तो हमेशा की तरह ही बेहतरीन था । आज बहुत दिनों बद एक ही बार मे पूरा एक अपडेट पढ़ लिया, बहुत मज़ा आया..
हाहा। जू तो अपना मूड अपडेट पढ़ के सही कर सकते हो। पर मेरा क्या? मैं तो लेखक हूं। मेरे पास ऑप्शंस कम ही होते हैं।साला पिछले 4 से 5 अपडेट से मै हर एक को पढ़ने मे एक हफ्ता लगा दिया करता था ।
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टाइम ने ही हम जैसे होनहार युवाओं की गाँड़ मार रखी है... नही तो अब तक हम देश को माउंट एवरेस्ट से भी अधिक उचाई पर ले जा चुके होते....
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खैर... आज फ्री था... मूड की भी एकदम मैया चुदी पड़ी थी... तो सोचा की आज इस अपडेट को पूरा पढ़ कर मूड फ्रेश कर लूँ... और कसम है कामदेव की... साला मूड एकदम सही हो गया बे ।
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अभी तक जितने भी आए हैं क्या किसी ने निराश किया?.
बस Werewolf ...
एक अनुरोध है.. वीर का जो अगला प्रतिद्वंदी लाना वो मानशिक तौर पर एक मजबूत प्रतिद्वंदी हो ऐसा लाना... ताकी जब तक विलेन हीरो की दिमाग की माँ बहन एक नही कर देता । तब तक साला वो विलेन ही नही लगता ।
बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद। थोड़ा टेक्स्ट साइज़ बढ़ा के लिखने का। पढ़ने में आसानी होगी। बाकी ऐसे ही साथ बने रहने का और सपोर्ट करते रहने का।बाकी अपडेट के बारे मे जितना लिखे उतना ही कम ।
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भविष्य के लेखनी के लिए शुभकामनाएं... और हाँ...
अबकी बार..
कर लिए न तुम 4000 पार...
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... बहुत बहुत बधायी ...
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धन्यवाद्
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Ise sochne me hi ek se do din lagte hai ki kaise kya scenes ko set karna hai. Uske baad imagination ki kaise kuchh hoga sab kuchh. Fir best possible setup kisi ek particular scene ko dikhaane ka. Uska environment aur fir narration. Last me dialogues. Tab jaa ke update ready hota hai.Ek Aur behtren Aur shandar update
Ek behtren writer he Janta hai Ke readers ko kab Aur Kese Aur Kya Dena hai parhne Ke lye Aur yaa Baat Wolfy bhai har Baar proof Krte Hain Apna best deke
They are the same.Now come to point
Aadesh Ke Pass Jo shakhs aaya Wo Kon hai Jo veer Ke sub Khabar rakhta hai
Kahi ya Wohi to Nhi Jo Us Assisan Se Mila tha
Veer khud hi itna occupied hai ki woh Balhaar ki madad kar hi nahi sakta chaah ke bhi.Ab Dekhte Hain veer Balhàar Ke madad Kese krta hai us shakhs ko Dhodne Mai Jo Ke lagta hai easy Hoga
Uss se baat karna hoga.Yarnia Ek brand banega isme koi shak Nhi hai Aur agr kaiera Ne usky advertising krde to Phr to Kya he kehne dekhte Hain Wo Mante hai ya nhi is Ke lye
Jald hi pata lag jayega.Nidhi Aur Mrs agrwal Ke talking Mai Nidhi Ne Ya to saaf kr diya Ke uska veer Pe bharosa atot hai ab tak Aagy dekhte Hain ya pathr mom kb bante hai
She quit her job. And, now she will support Veer in his business.Tej Ke Sath dubara sub Sahi hua Aur last Mai Jo hua Wo unexpected tha but see what she can do in future but she is in line now
We'll see why Divya was sent here. Soon. Maybe in the next update.Divya ko rubbeca use kr Rahi hai veer ko phasane Ke lye lagta hai Baki to Wolfy bhai Jaane Ke Unky Dimag Mai Kya hai
Baki sub Ek Dum fàaadu tha boos
Keep writing
Mein apni taraf se koshish karunga.Nice update bhai Dil khush kar diya apne hum sab jante hai ki aap written ke sath job vhi karte hai isliye mujhe bolna to nhi chahiye but apke diye update read kar ne baad wait agle update ke liye karna mushkil ho jata hai mai force to nhi karu ga par request kar sakta hu toda jaldi update dene ke liye
Thanks a lot.Aap apni shaktiyo ka galat istemal kr rhe hai
Btw the updates you give are Just fabulous every single day i check 4 times whether any update or not keep writing bro really a fabulous and fantastic story the jealousy of tejal and how she quit her job shows how much she love him and the way veer thinks to sort the problem of balhaar and deal with hotel owner will be so much interesting all the best bhai![]()
We'll see. We'll see soon.It's a matter of degree, how much possessive one can be of other. As per the story till now, Tejal and Kaera I would put at the top. Although next should be Ragini, but I do not consider her as main heroin. The way Ava was trying to kill Divya by her gaze, I will put her at third place. However, character of Sonia and Arohi have still to grow.. And we can not forget the deadly green gaze of Garofano.
So my take, Tejal, Kaera and Ava.
EggjactlyVaise possesive to Ragani bhi bahut hai.
Milwaaye dete hai...Veer kaafi dino se purvi mausi se nahi mila![]()
Next update me naya quiz dunga ju logo koRagini ko bhul gya bhai,
aur suhana he aisi h jo reality jane baher bhi possessive nhi h veer k lie,, @ werewolf mere khayal se logon k lie special characters se related ek question session rkhna chahie hr week jese apne ye most possessive heroines wala rkha hua h
We'll see how things turn out. This arc is the longest arc. So be prepared for seeing some family drama, some jealousy and love quadrilaterals along with the intense serial murders' plot in parallel.For me the main heroines are Nidhi, Kaera, Sonia, Ava, Tejal, Arohi and Kavya. Partners are Ragini, Suhana, Divya, Shreya, Garofano, Erica, and to some extent, Sonali. Salves are Suman, Sudha, Mukta, Versha, Saili and Niharika. It is not necessary that Veer becomes intimate with everyone, some may remain as friends. I hope, I have not missed anyone.
As I have already indicated,, limiting the scope to heroines only, the most possessive looks to be Tejal, Kaera and Ava. But later on I am sure Ava will be replaced by Sonia. However Arohi remains an enigma, a mystery, how she will react once she becomes intimate with Veer can not be predicted, except by writer sahib.![]()
Next update me Suhana aur tej ki meeting hogi. Be patient.Hoga bhai aage to dekhte jao kyoki kaira ka emotion bhi dheere dheere increase ho rha hai
Veer aur kaira ke bech sulah to hone do
Baaki werewolf bhai hi jaante hai ki kis Patra ko kaise darshanaaur ab dekhte hai aage ke update me kya scene hota hai
Aur bhai suhana and tejal ka mitting ka kya hua wo bhi dikhaw
Aaenge sab abhiKoi ladka aaye in heroino ki zindagi me tab na...
Sab ki sab honeybee ki trh ek hi chhatte (Veer) se chipki hui hain...
But i think isme Nidhi will at first...baaki ka ju log dekh lo...![]()
Nidhi ne jaadu kar rakha hai.मेरे मत मे... " निधी " ही प्रेमिका के तर्ज़ पे पहली प्रार्थमिकता होगी " वीर " के लिए । पर अगर हम उससे परे देखें तब जाकर 'तेज़', 'आरोही', 'काइरा', 'एवा' एवं सोनिआ का नंबर आता है... बाकी तो बस भेड़िये की माया ।
Hero ko describe karne ka tareeka thoda cazual hai...Tumne story ka brahmasutra bta diya love story ko lekr,, kyuki starting me bhi dekha jaye tbb jb veer bikhari beghar chutiya sa ldka thaa,
I always plot bigFantastic update…i think you are plotting big for upcoming updates…![]()
Balanced.Bahut badhiya. Ek taraf Ragini se duriyan badhi hai wahin Ava se duriyan kuchh kum huyi hain.
Oh she will.Suman should be punished for the exposing of everything Infront of ragini without the permission of her master. Suman should face a cruel BDSM session.
Thanks a lot.DUDE BUILDING HYPE FOR SOMETHING I CAN SMELL IT...BTW LOVE THIS UPDATE MUJHE WAIT H RAAGINI OR NIDHI K CONFRONT KA.![]()
Lekin, har aurat iske liye raazi toh nahi ho sakti na.mast update
ragini ke dil ke haal ko samjhna hai veer ko aur khud ko bhi samjhna hai ki use kya karna hai
kyunki uski life me kayi ladies hai aur sabki zimeddari uspar hi hai
isliye wo kisi ko chodna nahi chahata hai kyunki sabhi uske dil ke kareeb hai
Jald hi samajh aa jayega ye bhi. Aur, fir decision Ragini ka hoga.ragini ko abhi samjh nahi aya hai ki veer bakiyo se alag kaise hai
koi bhi lakdi chahti hai jisse wo pyar karti hai wo sirf uska hi rahe par veer alag hai ye baat use abhi samjh nahi aayi hai
It's necessary.dekhte use kabtak samjh ayega aur kya ragini accept karegi ya veer se door ho jayegi
veer aur ava apni training me lage hue hai
aur dono khud ko train kar rahe hai
aur ek dusre ko samjhne aur bharosa karne ki kosis kar rahe hai
Dhananjay ne already bata diya hai ki woh kaun hai.kavya aur kritika ki bhi narazgi door ho gayi hai
rebbeca ne damian ko wapas bulaya hai australia jaane ke liye
lekin damian ne rajat ko kya kaha aur kaise badla lega rajat
aur ab ye naya character dhannjay aa gya hai kaun hai ye dekhte hai
keep writing
He loves other women too.What a fantastic dramatic update
So update ki shuruwat hi ek anxiety giving scene se hui. This time Ragini is not wrong at all. Uski icchaye uski khwahish jayaj bhi hai aur reasonable bhi. Apna sab kuch soupne ke baad vo to ye expect karegi ki Veer sab kuch clear kar de. But Veer is in more complicated situation, chahkar bhi vo sab kuch clear nahi kar sakta.
Well, he is dense. Not to mention he's just 22 years old. Ladkiyo ke maamle me uska hamesha se yahi haal raha hai. He's good on the bed but he cannot fathom the true emotions of the ladies quickly. It takes time for him to understand them. Ab usne jo kaha wo basically dekha jaaye toh sahi hi tha. Ragini already had sex with Vivek. She lost her virginity to him. And, now she's demanding Veer to not have sex with other women?Aur BC ye kya tha ki 'tumne bhi to Vivek ke sath sex kiya tha' ye excuse hai Veer ke pass. BC system holder ban gaya lekin Aurto se baat karni nahi aayi ise.
Ragini is possesive. Not every girl is possessive like her. We know Nidhi. She's more like sacrificial type. Kam se kam abhi ke liye toh wo aisi hi hai. Baad ka nahi pata.Ek Ragini jab isse handle nahi ho rahi, aage Tez, Nidhi, Trinity, Kavya aur baki sabko kaise handle karega. Asani se to koi nahi manne vali.
That's the apt description of Ragini in a dialogue form. She hates him for what he hid away from her, she hates him for not giving her clear answer and stalling the time. But even after all this... She still loves him. And, it hurts. That's Ragini for you.Scene dramatic tha phir sax Sux hua aur phir emotional ho gaya.
Aur vo scene ' I hate you Veer, I hate you...I love you...love you...even it's hurt me...even it's destroying me....still I love you...' Poor Ragini
Kamal ka scene tha aur quite emotionalI feel you Ragini....
She just chose a difficult route man.In this case Veer ka to kuch keh nahi sakta lekin Ragini kahi se bhi galat nahi hai. She is just asking what she deserves.
Yahi toh hona hai iss arc me.Arc ke end tak aate aate ye relations ka locha sar dard kar dega, agar aise hi scene sabke sath hue to.
No! Bhavna didn't see Ragini at all.Btw vo bhawna ka reference sirf aise hi tha bich me time show karne ke liye yaa kahi bhawna ne Ragini ko kambal me lipta Veer ke room se nikalte naa dekh liya ho.
Ju ko badi chinta ho rahi hai saari shadi shuda ladkiyo kiHope for the best for Ragini and Fuck you Veer.Sari cuties ko rulane ka theka le liya hai isne. Vahan Suhana pareshan, Nidhi pareshan aur ab Ragini.
Dekhna hoga. Ragini kya negative route apnayegi? Veer ko paane ke liye? Jis situation me woh abhi hai woh kuchh bhi kar sakti hai?Ragini ka teer nishane par laga hai ki vo mahila koi aur nahi balki Nidhi hi hogi. Ab dekhna ye hai ki usse kya baat karegi Ragini. Veer ne Ragini ko bataya ki vo lady bhi Veer se pyar karti hai, which is true lekin Nidhi ne kabhi ye accept nahi kiya. Aur kahi Ragini bhi Suman vala kaand naa kar de, matlab ye Veer ki sari debauchery ke kisse Nidhi ke samne naa khol de. Isse Nidhi ke samne kuch had tak mrs tiwari ka point sahi thehrega. I hope aisa naa ho.
I mean.. ab spar toh boring hi hoti hai. Use interesting to dikhana hi tha.Now talks about Ava the cutie... Jungle me mangal nahi kiya, sirf ladne hi gaye the
But Fight kafi details ke sath aur behtreen dhang se picturised ki hai. We clearly imagine it. Dono dheere dheere apne skills ko sharp kar rahe hai, jiski jarurat aage padne hi vali hai.
An apt choiceFight ki details me jyada nahi jaunga....
Who knows? We might come to learn about that later.This pari said ki evil pari ne Ryotsken illegally sikha aur usko bhi Ryotsken aata hai to kya isne bhi kisi illegal tarike se Ryotsken sikha?
I know where you're getting... Heh~Ava aur Veer ke bich jami barf kuch kuch pighal rahi hai, barf pighlegi tabhi to aag bhadkegi
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If you liked it, I can put focus on these side scenes for the future updates.Wow, Kavya aur Kritika ka scene was much much ahead then my expectations. A true beautiful friendship.
Asli khela to alag chal raha hai, So Mr X aur the person in Morocco is same. Planning kya hai, definitely something is around Nuclear
My readers after reading the word NPT in the update ~He has convinced Morocco king to do which he shouldn't do. NPT ka kya matlab? Is it Non Plorifiration Treaty which disallows any sighning country to make nuclear warheads. Aur Morocco ab iss treaty ko violet karne wala hai.
Rebecca didn't send anyone.Ek ek karke sare system holders ko target kiya jaa raha hai, now it's Australia and Europe.
Jo banda Renshu se lada tha uska naam bhi samne aa gaya Damien!. So he was the one. Jo Aadesh aur Dexter se mila tha aur jane se pehle Rajat ko bhi apne sath mila gaya. They know that much about Veer. He has gone to Australia and Rebecca sent someone else for India. A female system holder.
Use koi clue hi nahi mila hai.Kehte hai ki aap ateet ko bhul sakte hai lekin ateet kabhi aapko nahi bhulta vo ek na ek din aapke samne aakar khada ho jata hai. Yahi isbaar Veer ke sath hone vala hai, jin dushmano ko hara chuka hai, vo sab sath milkar isbar ayenge.
Aur Veer abhi is sabse anjan hai, Rajat, Dexter, Aadesh aur Gaon ke log, police jo Slogan aur Aatish ke bare me dhundh rahi hai aur Vo serial killer.
That is why I said...Aur khatra isbar Veer par sidhe nahi balki uske apno par bhi ho sakta hai. Jinse vo pyar karta hai.
Suhana aur Tej ka scene next update me hai. You'll see it.Suhana aur Tez ka scene kahi traffic jam me atak gaya hai![]()
aur Kaera to shayad kisi desert me kho gayi hai to vapas aane me time le rahi hai.
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Thanks a lot.Everything is going perfectly![]()
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and Insane. Buildup tagda chal raha hai.
Again outstanding writing and fantastic Update
Hope next update will come a little bit soon.
Baki jab do tab badhiya
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Totally disagree on this point.Ab usne jo kaha wo basically dekha jaaye toh sahi hi tha. Ragini already had sex with Vivek. She lost her virginity to him. And, now she's demanding Veer to not have sex with other women?
I mean... Veer band kar sakta hai but ye baat ujaagar bhi toh karna tha. Ki Ragini ne jab sab kuchh kiya uske baad bhi Veer ne uss baare me koi charcha nahi ki thi. He accepted Ragini as it is.
Lekin, uske kehne ka tareeka galat tha.![]()
No Bhauji loverJu ko badi chinta ho rahi hai saari shadi shuda ladkiyo ki
I see! You are a man of culture as well!
Bhauji lober huh? Bhauji lober!!?
You and I.. We are the same.![]()
Main to pahuch raha hu, ju hi nahi pahuch rahe vahan tak....ab tak tu sax sux ho jata Ava aur Veer kaI know where you're getting... Heh~
My readers after reading the word NPT in the update ~
Jaldi se Google kar leta hu...Kisi ko kya ho pata chalega?
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Mr X said her to send Damian to Australia and send someone else in India, so I guessed...Rebecca didn't send anyone.
She only sent Divya there.
You forgot...!
Different people... Different perspectives.Totally disagree on this point.
Uske kehne ka tarika nahi, baat hi galat thi. What he supposed to imply on Ragini. Ki ek shadishuda ladki hone ke baad bhi use apne husband ke sath physical nahi hona chahiye tha, jabki uss time uske aur Veer ke bich aisa kuch nahi tha aur naa hi hone ke sambhavna.
What Ragini is asking from Veer is different from that situation.
Veer ki baton ka to aisa matlab nikalta hai jaise Vivek ke sath physical hoke usne Veer ko cheat kiya hai.
In this scene he totally dense and chutiya to understand Ragini's situation.