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Incest Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery

Kya Veer apni life behtar kar paega ya sab kuch kho baithega?

  • Veer Baadshah banega

    Votes: 1,195 83.0%
  • Sab kuch kho baithega

    Votes: 24 1.7%
  • Kuch paega toh kuch khoega

    Votes: 188 13.1%
  • Kuch nahi bann paega

    Votes: 33 2.3%

  • Total voters
    1,440

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Update - 99 ~ A Night at the Mansion (1)

Ab tak...

Divya : The second criminal...!!!!!

Veer : Huh???

Suhana : !!????

Aur agle hi pal... Usne table par ek paper patalte hue rakha. Ye wahi printout tha...

Usse dekhte hi Suhana ka badan kaanp utha.

Saamne printout me jo tha, wo tha...

Ek wanted paper!!!!

Divya : And his name is...

Veer : ?????

"THE NIGHTWALKER!!!!"


Ab aage...

[Is this the one? Master! Please! Be extra careful. Isse dekh ke mujhe bilkul bhi sahi nahi lag raha hai.]

'Tum akeli nahi ho Pari! I'm getting the same vibes. Yaha kuch boht hi bhayanak humse chhupa hua hai. Kuch aisa, jiske liye shayad hum taiyaar nahi.'

[Mein uss Nik ko kabhi maaf nahi karungi. I will never. Sab kuch uske hi kaaran hua hai. I hate that couple.]

'Nahi Pari! Ye toh hona hi tha. I guess maybe mujhe yaha next mission mil jaaye? Tum jaanti hi ho hume points ki kitni zaroorat hai.'

[Maaasttterrr~ Aap sirf points ke liye apni jaan daav pe nahi laga sakte. Missions ka kya hai? Woh toh milte rahenge. I cannot lose you like this okay? Aap sunn rahe ho na?]

'I'm listening Pari! Par, Aisa kaun sa waqt tha meri zindagi me jidhar mene risks nahi liye? Mera jeevan khatro se hi bhara tha Pari. Abhi bhi bhara hai. Aur aage bhi bhara rahega. Ye baat toh mein tab hi jaan gaya tha jab tum mere andar aayi thi."

[I-I'm so sorry. :verysad: ]

'Pagli! Mein tumhe dosh nahi de raha. Tumhare aane se hi toh mein firse zinda hua hu. I can never blame you. No matter what! You are my soul, Pari.'

[M-Maaaasssttteeerrr! (╥﹏╥)]

Pari aur Veer ke beech bhavnaatmak baate chal hi rahi thi jab,

"I'm dropping you both here. You better survive. I won't come here to pick your dead meat."

Saamne se pilot ne Veer se kaha. Helicopter me woh savaar tha. Aur uske bagal se baitha hua tha, Mike. Jo investigation department se hi tha.

Neeche unke ek hi drishya tha. Ek khubsoorat island!!!

Helicopter thoda neeche hua aur utarne ke liye airstairs ko hawa me neeche gira diya gaya.

'Fuck! Meri phat rahi hai utarne me. Mene kabhi kiya nahi ye.'

[Masterrrr! Don't worry! Bas pakad mazboot rakhna apni. Stay strong maaasterr~]

'Yeahhh!'

Mike ki dekha dekhi kar Veer stairs se utarna shuru kiya aur...

*Plop*

Dono ne zameen par girte hue apne qadam rakhe.

"I'm fucking leaving!! Good luck!!!"

Upar se pilot ne zorr se chillaaya, par helicopter ki ghoomti hui blades ki awaaz ke aage uski awaaz theek se sunaayi na de saki Veer aur Mike ko. Aur copter waha se nikal gaya.

Ek lambi aah chorr Veer ne apne saamne dekha. Uske saamne ye khaufnaak sa island maujood tha. Dur dur tak ped paudho ke alawa kuch nahi dikh raha tha usse.

Sooraj dhal chuka tha, andhera barkaraar tha. Chaand par ghane kaale baadalo ki chaadar bichhi hui thi. Aur mand mand chalti thandi hawaein, jo Veer ke badan me ruye khade kar rahi thi.

Yaha se aage ka raasta usse aur Mike ko akele hi tay karna tha. Wo dono iss island ke chorr par akele khade hue the.

Investigation department ki taraf se copter unhe yaha chorr ke nikal chuka tha. Kuch khaas shabd toh nahi kahe the pilot ne uss se kuch derr pehle. Private detectives se jude logo ko waqai kuch zyaada hi hate de rahe the ye investigation waale.

Kherr! Veer aur Mike aage badhe. Unke paas kaafi samaan tha utility ka. Chaahe emergency torch ho, knife ho, ya kuch bhi. Taiyaari ke saath woh yaha aaye the. Yaha aane se pehle kaafi bawaal bhi hua tha. Jesa ki Pari ne Nik ka zikr kiya.

Ek prakaar se Veer uske hi kaaran yaha tha. Investigation department ke Head Nolan ne saaf saaf Nik ko chetaavni de dii thi ki unke department se ab iss case ko lekar koi bhi apni taang nahi adayega. Unhone ye bhi keh daala tha ki ab tum log hi apni taraf se bhejo kisi ko. Bada shauk hai na private detectives hone ke baad public cases solve karna ka?

Toh lo fir. Diya case! Jao! Risk uthao! Aur saabit karo.

Nateeja? Nik ne Veer ko aage kar diya. Woh bewakoof nahi tha jo khud aisi khatarnak jagah jaake apni hi gaand marwaaye. Aur woh Divya ko bhi nahi bhejne waala tha. Suhana ko bhi nahi bhejta woh. Toh bacha kaun?

Of course! None other than Veer!!!

Aur Veer se toh uski koi pehchaan bhi nahi thi. Divya bhi bada hi flirt kar rahi thi Veer se. Isliye Veer ko khatre me daalne se pehle ek baar bhi usne Veer ke baare me nahi socha. Jalan sach me kutti cheez hoti hai.

Par Mike aisa nahi tha. Jab usne dekha ki kese Veer ko akele maut ke kuye me dhakela jaa raha hai. Toh uss se raha nahi gaya. Veer ka toh koi lena dena hi nahi tha iss case se. Usse faaltu me bali ka bakra banaya jaa raha tha. Isliye usne apna naam bhi aage kar diya. Beshaq, uske iss faisle se kaafi vivaad khada hua par ant me uski baat unhe maan'ni hi padi. Akhir uski marzi thi ye.

Woh Veer ko aise akele nahi jaane de sakta tha. Veer andar hi andar Mike ke prati abhaari tha. Kuch log insaaniyat ke aur dil ke boht hi acche the yaha. Jese Mike...

[I fucking hate that man soooo much!! Humne kya bigaada hai uska?]

"Shhhhh! Mene kaha na Pari! It's inevitable! Ye hona hi tha."

[But still...]

"Shhh!!! Let's get going."

Veer ne Pari ko shaant kiya.

Bagal me chal raha Mike tabhi uss se bola,

Mike (smiles) : Don't worry bro! We'll handle this.

Wo Veer ka confidence badhaane ki koshish kar raha tha.

Veer (smiles) : Sure!

Kuch bhi ho jaaye, Veer Mike ko marrne nahi de sakta tha. Apne mann me hi usne ek commitment baandha.

Yaha aane se pehle Suhana ne bhi kaafi virodh kiya tha. Suhana Veer ko yaha help ke liye laayi thi. Usse marwaane nahi. Jese tese Veer ne usse shaant kar diya tha. Par woh jaanta tha Suhana abhi kitni bechain ho rahi hogi. Jab woh copter me baith ke nikal raha tha tabhi uska chehra dekhne laayak tha. Sach kaha jaaye toh pehli baar Veer ne Suhana ke chehre par apne prati woh bhaav dekhe the.

She never showed but she really cares for him. Yaha tak ki Divya bhi kuch chinta me thi. Shayad uska ravaiyya badal raha tha.

Mike aur Veer aage badhe, haatho me torch thi unke. Ghane ped paudho ke patte hataate hue wo Island me aur bheetar ghuse. Aur jese hi ialand ke beecho beech aaye. Saamne ka nazara dekh unke hosh udd gaye.

Island ke beecho beech unke saamne tha...



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Ek khubsoorat par utna hi daraawna sa Mansion.

Badi hi ajeeb sii anubhooti karwa raha tha ye Mansion. Sundar tha, bada bhi tha, par uss mansion me kuch aisi baat thi jo Veer ko aage qadam badhaane se pehle chetaavni de rahi thi.

Ajeeb baat ye thi ki mansion ki lights jal rahi thi. Island me electricity ka koi source nahi tha. Matlab basement me generators pakke se maujood the.

Veer : What do you think?

Mike : Well! I never imagined there would be such a huge mansion hiding in here. And guess what? Lights are on.

Veer : Then that means...

Mike : Yeah! Someone else is inside.

Veer : Other participants?

Mike : Maybe! Or maybe not!

Mansion ki jalti hui lights yahi ishaara kar rahi thi ki koi na koi andar maujood tha.

Mike : We must find whoever it is. We will definitely catch Senior Connor's murderer.

Veer : Hope so...

Mike : Shall we head inside?

Veer : Alright!

Entrance ki orr woh badhe. Entrance par ek bhi guard maujood nahi tha. Koi security nahi thi. Lohe ka bada sa gate tha jisse khol woh andar aaye.

Mansion ke saamne chota sa lawn tha jaha ghaas lagi hui thi, bagal me ek chariot rakha tha safed rang ka par koi ghoda nahi bandha tha uss se.

Andhere me poora Mansion vishaal pedo se ghira hua tha aur woh dono main gate pe pohuch gaye.

Mike ne apne jeb se ek card nikaala aur Veer ko dekha.

Veer (nods) : Do it!

Aur darwaaze ke hi side me ek patla sa slit gap maujood tha. Mike ne jese hi card andar slit me daala toh...

*Click*

Darwaaze se awaaz aayi. Aur woh unlock ho gaya.

Mike : It actually worked.

Veer : The info was true then...

Jankari sach thi matlab. Connor ke akhiri video se unhe iss jagah ka pata chala tha. Ab sawaal ye tha ki Mike ko woh card kese aur kaha se mila? Iski jankaari bhi usne video me hi dii thi.

Slot machines ki street me hi ek aadmi tha jo ye cards bechta tha. Wahi lottery waali slot machines. Yaha sab kuch khufiya tareeqe se hota tha. Uss bechaare ko ye bhi nahi pata tha ki ye cards kis liye hai. Usse bas bechne diye gaye the aur cards bik rahe the, iss baat se hi khush tha woh.

Police usse yu hi giraftaar nahi kar sakti thi. Uss bechaare ko toh ye bhi nahi pata tha ki ye cards kaun bhijwata hai usse. Kyuki delivery wala toh deliver kar ke chala jaata tha.

Inn cards ka istemal island me maujood iss darwaaze ko kholne ke liye hi tha. Koi soch bhi sakta tha aisa? Kuch boht hi badi planning chal rahi thi peeth peeche.

Darwaaza khol jese hi woh andar aaye, andar ka nazaara kuch aisa tha.



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Upar ceiling se chandelier latak raha tha. Andhera tha par jagah jagah candles jal rahi thi. Kahi kuch lights bhi jal rahi thi.

Aur ye main hall bhi nahi tha. Ye toh sub hall ki tarah tha. Neeche bada sa carpet biccha hua tha jo saamne darwaaze ki orr jaake khatam ho raha tha.

Shayad wahi main hall ka entrance tha.

Mike : Let's go!

Veer : Yeah!!!

Mike aur Veer apne dil ki tezz dhadkano ko thaam aage badhe. Hall ka gate bhi khula hua tha.

Jese hi unhone gate khola, unhe ek hallway nazar aaya.



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Jagah jagah paintings lagi hui thi deewaaro par, jo kisi ke ateet ko baya kar rahi thi. Neeche biccha khubsoorat sa kaaleen. Iss area me lighting sub hall ke muqaable zyada thi.

Wo andar ki orr gaye aur jese hi wo enter kiye,

Veer : Huhh???

Unhe waha 6 log aur dikhaayi diye. Jinme se 4 ladke the aur 2 ladkiya.

"What the hell? More people are coming? But that's actually good."

Sofe pe baitha ek ladka unme se bola.

Veer : These guys...

Tabhi ek ladki jo kareeb 27-28 saal ki lag rahi thi woh uth ke aayi aur Veer aur Mike ke ird gird ghoomne lagi. Fir boli,

Ladki : You guys! Are you here for the bars too??

Veer : Y-Yeaahhh!!!

Uss ladki ne sawaal kiya. Kya Veer log bhi idhar bars ke liye aaye the? Veer ne jawaab haan me diya.

Bars!!! Samjhe? Golden bars!!! Bole toh sone ke biscuits.

Mansion me 10 million dollars worth ke golden bars maujood the. Alag alag jagaho par. 10 million bole toh kareeb kareeb 79 crores, 84 lakh, 55 hazaar ke aas paas ka rokda.

Aur shayad yaha maujood baaki log bhi issi ki talaash me the.

Ladki : Ohhh! I'm Emma by the way. A nurse by profession.

Mike : Nice to meet you! I'm Mike. Just a graduate. And he's Veer, my friend.

Mike ne apni identity jaan boojh ke chhupa lii.

Emma : Veer? Strange name! But you are hot though. I will give you that. *wink*

Emma khubsoorat thi. Par Veer ko usme koi interest nahi tha. Uski nazre jiski taraf gayi woh koi aur hi thi.



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Black denim jacket daale woh bookshelf ke paas khadi hui thi. Aur unhe hi dekh rahi thi. Khaaskar Veer ko. Ek sundar vyakti dusre sundar vyakti ki taraf aakarshit hota hai. Ye baat sach thi.

Khubsoorti ka uska koi jawaab nahi tha. Sonia aur Kaera ki takkar ki thi woh yadi chehre ki khubsoorti ki baat ki jaaye toh.

Usse dekhte hi...

*Ding*

[Name : Zoey Clarkson

Age : 27
Bio : Zoey ek model hai. Par paiso ki tangi ki wajah se woh apni life me aage nahi badh paa rahi hai. Khubsoorat hone ke bawajood usse Model contracts zyaada mil nahi paa rahe kyuki woh nudity ya intimate photoshoots pe nahi utarna chahti. Financial condition kaafi gir chuki hai. Kisi se gupt jankari usse mili hai ki island ke iss Mansion me khazana chhupa hai. Woh apna luck azmaane aayi hai yaha. Ghar me uska koi nahi hai. Toh apni jaan ki parvaah kiye bina woh ek akhiri baar apni kismat azmaana chaahti hai.

Favourability : 4
Relationship : Strangers.]

'I see!!!'

Emma dekh rahi thi ki Veer Zoey ko nihaar raha tha aur Zoey bhi usse dekh rahi thi. Ye dekhte hi andar hi andar woh jal bhun gayi.

Woh bhi yaha maujood thi. Fir uski sundarta par koi kyu dhyaan nahi de raha tha? Aisa nahi tha ki Emma sundar nahi thi. Bas, Zoey ke saamne woh thodi feeki lag rahi thi. Zoey kuch zyada hi aakarshak thi.

Mike : And who are they?

Emma : The girl over there. She's Zoey! A model. And these guys are, Jacob, Tommy, Chester, and Ronnie.

Ek ek karke Emma ne unka parichay diya.

Emma : We got familiar just few minutes ago.

[Dekha master!!!! Ye bilkul wesa hi hai jesa Connor ne bataya tha. Alag alag log yaha aate hai. Aur raat guzaarte hai. Golden bars ko dhundne ke liye jo yaha kahi na kahi chhupe hue hai. Par raat me hi...]

'Yeahhh!!! The NIGHTWALKER!!!'

[Yes Master~ Abhi 7:30 hua hai time. Connor ne bataya tha raat 9 baje se shuru hota hai sab.]

'Hmm~ Hamaare paas dedh ghante hai yaha ki territory ko dimaag me baithaane ke liye. Pari!!!'

[Don't worry Master! Path Tracker on hi hai. Mansion boht bada hai. Mene off nahi kiya hai usse.]

'Good job!!!'

Connor ne jab video banaya tha, tab uska connection department se cut ho chuka tha. Mansion me network nahi milta hai. Dusri bhaasha me, phone calls nahi lagaaye jaa sakte aur na hi receive kiye jaa sakte hai.

Iska matlab, Divya aur Nik ko jo video mili woh NIGHTWALKER ne khud hi bheji thi unhe shayad.

Veer aur Mike ko ye raat apne hi bal bute par guzaarni thi. Veer ne harr ek ke naam dimaag me baitha liye the.

Emma jo nurse thi, Zoey ek model. Jacob ek fashion designer ka assistant tha. Tommy aur Chester ka group band tha aur Ronnie ek choti si company ka employee. Sabhi paiso ki tangi ki wajah se hi yaha the.

Mann me dherr saare sawaal aa rahe honge. Ki yadi ye crime yaha ho raha hai, toh police seedha dhaava kyu nahi bol deti yaha? Par jitna asaan ye dikhta tha utna tha nahi.

Ye Mansion band rehta tha. Keval chuni gayi dates par hi khulta tha ye. Aur aaj woh chuni gayi dates me se ek date thi.

Mike ne jo Card use kiya tha kuch derr pehle usme date mentioned thi. Aaj ki date.

Aur toh aur... Govt. police ki madad karne se katra rahi thi. Police department me restrictions thi kuch. Yaani ye jo kaam ho raha tha woh tha toh illegal. Par legally iss par koi rok nahi lagayi Jaa rahi thi.

Ye ek boht badi baat thi.

Emma : So? What are we gonna do?

Jacob : The NIGHTWALKER is real right? I heard rumours about him.

Emma : What do you mean?

Ronnie : The NIGHTWALKER!! He's a protector of the treasure. I have heard about him. He kills those people who try to steal the treasure.

Emma : Wh-Whaaattttt??!

Emma ko iss baare me koi jankari nahi thi ki yaha koi Nightwalker naam jesa bhi kuch tha. Woh toh yaha paisa kamane aayi thi. Kya matlab Nightwalker unhe maar deta hai jo khazana lene aate hai? Emma ki ab phat rahi thi.

Tommy : Of course! What were you expecting? Will someone allow you to steal his treasure just like that? We have to survive this night. A killer will be roaming here freely to kill the one amongst us who tries to steal the treasure.

Chester : Yeah!!! It's just like that. Do or die.

Emma : Whaaatttttt??? N-No waayyy! I-I'm fucking leaving. I don't wanna die.

Emma ne jab ye baat suni toh darr ke maare uske perr kaapne lage. Tommy ne kaha tha ki raat me ek killer mansion me ghoomta hai. Aur unn logo ko maut ke ghaat utaar deta hai jo bhi raat me uski nazro ke saamne aate hai.

Emma bhaagte hue baahar nikalne ko hui par jese hi woh main hall ke gate par pohuchi aur usse kholi...

Uski ghabraahat aur bhi badh gayi. Main hall ka gate band ho chuka tha.

Emma (screams) : Fucking open the goddamn door.... Aaaarrghhhhh!!! Open it!!!! I DON'T WANNA DIE HERE! I WANT TO LEAVE!!!

Par darwaaza nahi khula. Tabhi ek awaaz aayi aur unn sab ko sunaayi dii. Awaaz buland thi par usme ek kharaash thi, Daraavni thi woh awaaz.


"Welcome to the Nightwalker mansion!
You chose to come here. You purchased the card. Now you cannot leave the mansion until tomorrow morning."

"Rules are pretty simple!!! Survive the night! 10 million worth of gold bars are hidden in this mansion. If any of you can find them, you can take them away."

"Game will begin sharp @ 9 PM"

"Remember! You can only search the Mansion for half an hour during intervals. In other words, 9-9:30 will be your search time. After 9:30 Nightwalker will walk through the mansion. If he finds anyone of you roaming. YOU WILL BE KILLED."

"He will walk till 12 AM. Then, again you can search the Mansion for half an hour. After 12:30 he will walk till 3 AM. Again a half hour will be alloted. And last time will be Nightwalker walking from 3:30 AM till 6 AM"

"There are many rooms on both the floors. You can choose whichever you want."

"It's 8:00 PM now. You have 1 hour. You can do whatever you want to do. Remember the time. Sharp 9 PM."

"Good luck!"


Aur awaaz band ho gayi. Awaaz aayi toh intercom se hi thi par Veer ko kahi koi intercom nazar nahi aaya.

[Maaasterrrr~]

Pari ki ek chinta janak awaaz Veer ke mann me goonji,

'Don't worry Pari!! Mein apna dhyaan acche se rakhunga.'

[Yes please!!! Mujhse jitna hoga mein aapki madad karungi.]

Uss awaaz ke band hote hi sabhi ek dusre ko dekhne me lage hue the.

Emma (screams) : WHAT THE HELL IS THIS? YOU ARE TELLING ME A KILLER IS THERE IN THIS MANSION WITH US????

Ronnie : Seems like it.

Emma : This is bullshit... How the fuck can I search the bars if someone is roaming outside to kill me?

Rules simple the. Theek 9 baje maut ka ye khel shuru hona tha. Teen interval diye gaye the. 9 se 9:30, 12 se 12:30, aur 3 se 3:30 tak ka samay. Yaani kul milaake dedh ghante.

Iss dedh ghante ke samay me aapko bars dhundne the. Yadi aap dhundh sakte ho toh dhundho. Par baaki ke samay me, Nightwalker poore mansion me ghoomega. Yadi koi bhi usse nazar aaya toh...

Maut!!!

Veer thoda chintit tha. Emma ki toh phat ke hi chaar ho chuki thi. Par baaki sabhi kaafi relaxed lag rahe the.

Chester : Huhh? That's it??? Man!! This is so easy. We can search for half an hour and when that time ends. We can head back to our room. Simple right?

Zoey : Is that Nightwalker even real?

Zoey ne pehli baar kuch kaha. Veer aur uski nazre ek baar fir takra gayi.

Mike : Hmm! Yes! I can say for sure that the Nightwalker is real. It's not a myth or legend. He's here.

Tommy : Wait!!! What if he's one of us???

Zoey confirm kar rahi thi ki ye Nightwalker sach me hai bhi ya nahi? Kahi ye koi afvaah toh nahi hai? Mike ne bhi Connor ki video dekhi thi. Beshaq, Nightwalker ka mask bhi dekha tha usne uss video me. Isme koi shaq nahi tha ki woh hai. Aur issi Mansion me hai. Shayad woh awaaz bhi ussi ki thi? Kisse pata? Par itna zaroor pata tha ki woh hai yaha par.

Par Tommy ki baat ne ek baar fir unhe chinta me daal diya. Kahi unhi me se ek Nightwalker toh nahi tha?

Mike : I don't think it's plausible. Nightwalker is someone else. Maybe the one who told us about the details? Or maybe someone else? And if he's among us, then we can easily identify him. Whoever will be absent during our group meeting. Only he/she can be one.

Mike ne samjhaate hue kaha. Uska kehna tha ki yadi aapas me se koi Nightwalker nikalta bhi hai toh bhi usse asaani se pakda jaa sakta hai. Group meeting ke dauraan jo bhi unke beech gaayab rahega. Uske upar hi shaq jaega.

Jacob : We should select a room first. We can keep our bags there. And then how about taking a stroll in the Mansion? That way we can get familiar with our surroundings.

Chester : Definitely! Sounds good!!!

Jacob ki raay sabhi maan gaye. Uska kehna tha ki jo ye ek ghante ka samay mila tha. Kyu na hum uss ghante me apne apne room select kar usme samaan rakh de aur baahar nikal ke Mansion ka ek chakkar lagaaye taaki hume pata chal sake kaun sii jagah kidhar par hai.

Idea bura nahi tha. Aur yadi Jacob ye baat nahi bhi rakhta toh bhi Veer ek chakkar mansion ka maarta hi.

Zoey : Alright!

Tommy : Yes!!! That's it guys. Let's meet here after 15 minutes.

Ronnie : Okay!

Emma : J-Jacob, Can I stay in the room beside yours?

Jacob : Ohh sure!!!
Ronnie, Jacob, Tommy, Emma, Chester ye sabhi upar chadhe aur baayi orr mud ke baayi taraf hallway me chale gaye.

Toh wahi Veer aur Mike aage badhe, unke peeche Zoey thi.

Jese hi woh waha pohuche unke saamne do corridor ke liye raste the. Ek baayi orr jaa raha tha jaha woh sabhi abhi gaye hue the. Aur ek daayi orr.



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Veer : Which one?

Mike (smiles) : I always do my things right!

Veer (smiles) : Let's go then!!!

Mike ke kehne par dono aage badhe aur daayi orr mud gaye. Khaas baat ye thi ki Zoey bhi unke peeche thi.

Veer ne peeche palat usse dekha toh ek baar fir unn dono ki aankhein ek dusre se mili. Par dono ne hi kuch kaha nahi. Veer ki pride aur attitude usse conversation strike karne se rok rahi thi. Alpha male instincts active the uske. Ab woh unn ladko me se nahi tha jo laundiyo ke peeche bhaag ke unki chaate.

Ladkiya khud-ba-khud uske paas aati thi. Uski pehchaan hi ab aisi thi.

Mike toh friendly tha hi. Usne hi baat shuru kii,

Mike : You are not going with them?

Mike ne pucha. Zaahir hai ki Zoey unke saath khadi hui thi. Par fir bhi woh abhi veer aur uske saath aa rahi thi.

Zoey : I trust you guys more than them.

Veer : !!!???

Mike : Hahaha~ I see! So that's how it is. Veer! I'm choosing this one.

Mike ne ek room ke darwaaze ke baahar rukte hue kaha.

Veer : Alright! I'll choose the one next to you.

Woh aage badha aur jese hi room ke baahar ruka woh toh uska dhyaan darwaazo aur room numbers pe gaya.

Veer : Hmm?

Darwaaze ki banawat alag kism ki thi. Rectangular Bars bane hue the darwaaze me.

'Iss Nightwalker ko golden bars ka itna shauk hai ki darwaaze par bhi bars banwa diye!? Haha~'

[Yeah!!!]

Jis prakaar se rectangular bars ek chocolate me hote hai. Kuch ussi prakaar darwaaze ka structure tha. Veer ne jese hi darwaaza khola usse aashcharya hua.

'Ohhhh~'

Darwaaza kaafi bhaari tha.

'Hmm? That's weird!'

[Room number?]

'Yeahhh!!! Pari!!! Mike ka room number mere se ek kam ya zyada hona chahiye. Uska room mere bagal se hi hai. Par uska room number toh kuch aur hi tha. Yaha ki numbering lagta badi hi ajeeb hai.'

[I agree master! Yaha ki kaun sii cheez ajeeb nahi hai? Fucking everything!]

'Hahahaha~ Ye baat bhi sahi hai.'

Zoey Veer ke peeche se nikalte hue aage gayi aur Veer ke bagal waale room me ghus gayi. Ghusne se pehle ek baar usne Veer ko zaroor dekha.

[Hehehe~ She's interested in you.]

'Ohhh shut up! Favourability tumne dekhi nahi kya? 4 thi.'

[Toh fir woh aapke saath kyu aayi? Woh bhi aapke bagal waale room me? *sniff *sniff* I smell curiosity here.]

'Hahaha~ Tum overthink kar rahi ho Pari. Usne kaha toh. Woh humpe zyada bharosa kar rahi hai. Aur dusri baat, mene pehle Mike ke bagal wala room le liya. Toh woh zaahir hai ki mere next wala hi room choose karegi. Bhala akele hoke woh humse dur waala room kyu lena chaahegi?'

[Hmm... But still! I can tell... I'm a girl too.]

'Naah!!!'

Veer ne apna bag andar room me rakha. Room accha tha. Par uske bawajood scary vibes de raha tha.

Bag rakh sabhi ussi hall me ikhatta hue. 15 minute baad milne ka decide kiya tha unhone.

Sabhi ekatr hue aur sabhi ne mansion me ghoomna shuru kiya ek saath. Mansion itna bada tha ki sabhi stabdh the ye jaanke.

Aur ghoomte ghoomte unki asli gaand tab phati jab unhe pata chala ki washroom ek hi tha poore Mansion me.

Woh bhi ground floor par. Woh sabhi toh upar wali floor par the. Upar se kitchen bhi ekdum end me tha. Pani ki supply toh yahi thi. Ye toh dikkat waali baat thi.

Ghoomte ghoomte woh ek aise hisse par pohuche jaha ajeebo gareeb paintings latki hui thi.



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Veer unn paintings ke nazdeek pohucha...

'These are weird!! Check!!!'



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*Ding*

[One of the paintings collected by Noah.]

'Noah?? Ye Noah kaun hai? Yaha ka maalik? Ya past me jo yaha tha?'

[I don't know master! Par aap bas apna dhyaan rakho. Don't care for Money or anything else. I want you to be safe. That's it.]

'Tum toh meri maa bann rahi ho Pari! Haha~'

[Because I love you. You know that. Aur aap jaante hi ho mera kya haal hota hai. Why don't you understand?]

'Wese...'

[Hmm?]

'Kya meri maa waqai meri chinta karti hai? Asli maa...'

[Don't get emotional. She definitely loves you.]

'Unki taraf se abhi tak koi response nahi aaya hai Pari. Unhe Pendant dikhane ke baad bhi.'

[Thoda intezaar kijiye. Woh zaroor aapko dhundhne aaengi.]

'Kaash....!'

Poora mansion ghoomne ke baad.

Neeche rakhi badi sii ghadi ka ghanta baj chuka tha.

*Ding Dong*

Ghadi se chidiya nikal kuku kuku kar rahi thi. 9 baj chuke the. Intercom se iss baar koi awaaz sunaayi nahi dii thi.

Aadhe ghante tak unlogo ne dhundha par kahi koi khazana nahi mila.

Zoey : We didn't try harder. What if money is hidden in the basement? Or maybe behind the paintings? You know what I mean?

Tommy : Definitely! We will do that in our next shift.

Aur yahi soch sabhi apne apne kamre me chale gaye.

Kyuki Nightwalker ke ghoomne ka samay shuru ho chuka tha.

Sab ne andar se apne room ko lock kar liya. Raat me woh ghoomta tha, tabhi uska naam pada tha. Nightwalker!!!

Khauf ke maare sab andar dubak gaye. Veer bistar par lete kuch soch raha tha jab achanak hi...

"Eeeeaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrgggggghhhhhhhh"

Ek raungte khade kar dene waali cheenkh poore mansion me goonj gayi.
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Exciting and mind blowing update....
 

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Werewolf bhaya apki baat ekdum sahi hai aur mai aapke emotion aur baat ko smjh raha hu jo aap kahna chahte ho:sadwavey:, aur mai unn readers ko bata du yaar khud socho bhailog yaar matlab tum har story pe ek hi chis cnp krte jao aur ek hi story ke har updates me wahi matlab yaar tumlog socho jara kaisa lagta hoga writter ko padhne ke baad kitna bura lagta hoga,ki wo tumse kuch aur hi ummid kr rahe honge aur tum uss ek hi chis ko baar baar krte jao to udaas aur irritate hona lajmi hai.......

Issliye jo bhailog aisa krte hai wo ye baat smjhe ki ye story ke update koi likh ke dena asaan kaam nhi hai,ye update jo aap log padhte ho usse likhne me imagination ki bhi jarurat hoti aur jo saath hi saath applog jo apne writter mahoday Werewolf bhai ke itni marvellous writing skill ke saath jo update padhte ho wo Kabhi socha hai kitni mehnat lagti hai nope never agar aisa socha hota to jo readers review dene se khafa khate hai wo aaj apne anusaar review de rahe hote naaki ek hi words har jagah pel rahe hote lekin still bhailog jara socho ju log ki apne writter bhaya yaha story likh rahe hai wo asal me apne liye nhi likhte wo aap readers bhailogo ke liye likhte hai bhailog,haa apne khushi ke liye bhi writter likhta hai lekin still I am saying that Werewolf bhai aaplogo ke liye story ko likhte hai uss story ke har ek update me aaj tak aapko galti milli nope never ever, sirf aaplogo ke liye guys ki applog uss story ko read kro aur apne review do aur unn mile hue reviews aur revos ko padh kr jo muskurahat aur khushi unke chehre pe aayegi n wo unhe chahiye, aur aaplog ko bhi ye khushi unhe reviews ke jariye apkke man me uss update ko lekr kyaa ubhar ke aata hai apke dimag me wo likho apne reply me

Aur tab dekhna jo khushi aur response tumhe milega n writter se wo ek alag hi khushi ka ahsas krata hai jo kabhi-kabhi to tumhe uss writter ke jaise story likhne pr utsahit krega, agar ekbar bhailog aap sab ekbar review dekar dekho, aapsab ke man me jo ubhar ke aaye matlab ki uss update me aapne kaisa mahsoos kiya, kyaa scene apko ek alag hi imagination me le gayi wo likho unn update ko lekr,

writing ek emotion me rah kr likha jata bhailog jo aapko story se lekr har ek chis ko emotions me rah kr likhne ko motivate krte rahti hai n ki bina emotions ke jo uss likhi chiso ko koi kasti n deti hai

To asha krata hu ki bhailog app sab iss baat ko smjhenge aur ek baar review de kr jarur dekhenge aur biswas kro apko ek alag hi khushi milegi.......



Take care bhailog......

 

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Update - 99 ~ A Night at the Mansion (1)

Ab tak...

Divya : The second criminal...!!!!!

Veer : Huh???

Suhana : !!????

Aur agle hi pal... Usne table par ek paper patalte hue rakha. Ye wahi printout tha...

Usse dekhte hi Suhana ka badan kaanp utha.

Saamne printout me jo tha, wo tha...

Ek wanted paper!!!!

Divya : And his name is...

Veer : ?????

"THE NIGHTWALKER!!!!"


Ab aage...

[Is this the one? Master! Please! Be extra careful. Isse dekh ke mujhe bilkul bhi sahi nahi lag raha hai.]

'Tum akeli nahi ho Pari! I'm getting the same vibes. Yaha kuch boht hi bhayanak humse chhupa hua hai. Kuch aisa, jiske liye shayad hum taiyaar nahi.'

[Mein uss Nik ko kabhi maaf nahi karungi. I will never. Sab kuch uske hi kaaran hua hai. I hate that couple.]

'Nahi Pari! Ye toh hona hi tha. I guess maybe mujhe yaha next mission mil jaaye? Tum jaanti hi ho hume points ki kitni zaroorat hai.'

[Maaasttterrr~ Aap sirf points ke liye apni jaan daav pe nahi laga sakte. Missions ka kya hai? Woh toh milte rahenge. I cannot lose you like this okay? Aap sunn rahe ho na?]

'I'm listening Pari! Par, Aisa kaun sa waqt tha meri zindagi me jidhar mene risks nahi liye? Mera jeevan khatro se hi bhara tha Pari. Abhi bhi bhara hai. Aur aage bhi bhara rahega. Ye baat toh mein tab hi jaan gaya tha jab tum mere andar aayi thi."

[I-I'm so sorry. :verysad: ]

'Pagli! Mein tumhe dosh nahi de raha. Tumhare aane se hi toh mein firse zinda hua hu. I can never blame you. No matter what! You are my soul, Pari.'

[M-Maaaasssttteeerrr! (╥﹏╥)]

Pari aur Veer ke beech bhavnaatmak baate chal hi rahi thi jab,

"I'm dropping you both here. You better survive. I won't come here to pick your dead meat."

Saamne se pilot ne Veer se kaha. Helicopter me woh savaar tha. Aur uske bagal se baitha hua tha, Mike. Jo investigation department se hi tha.

Neeche unke ek hi drishya tha. Ek khubsoorat island!!!

Helicopter thoda neeche hua aur utarne ke liye airstairs ko hawa me neeche gira diya gaya.

'Fuck! Meri phat rahi hai utarne me. Mene kabhi kiya nahi ye.'

[Masterrrr! Don't worry! Bas pakad mazboot rakhna apni. Stay strong maaasterr~]

'Yeahhh!'

Mike ki dekha dekhi kar Veer stairs se utarna shuru kiya aur...

*Plop*

Dono ne zameen par girte hue apne qadam rakhe.

"I'm fucking leaving!! Good luck!!!"

Upar se pilot ne zorr se chillaaya, par helicopter ki ghoomti hui blades ki awaaz ke aage uski awaaz theek se sunaayi na de saki Veer aur Mike ko. Aur copter waha se nikal gaya.

Ek lambi aah chorr Veer ne apne saamne dekha. Uske saamne ye khaufnaak sa island maujood tha. Dur dur tak ped paudho ke alawa kuch nahi dikh raha tha usse.

Sooraj dhal chuka tha, andhera barkaraar tha. Chaand par ghane kaale baadalo ki chaadar bichhi hui thi. Aur mand mand chalti thandi hawaein, jo Veer ke badan me ruye khade kar rahi thi.

Yaha se aage ka raasta usse aur Mike ko akele hi tay karna tha. Wo dono iss island ke chorr par akele khade hue the.

Investigation department ki taraf se copter unhe yaha chorr ke nikal chuka tha. Kuch khaas shabd toh nahi kahe the pilot ne uss se kuch derr pehle. Private detectives se jude logo ko waqai kuch zyaada hi hate de rahe the ye investigation waale.

Kherr! Veer aur Mike aage badhe. Unke paas kaafi samaan tha utility ka. Chaahe emergency torch ho, knife ho, ya kuch bhi. Taiyaari ke saath woh yaha aaye the. Yaha aane se pehle kaafi bawaal bhi hua tha. Jesa ki Pari ne Nik ka zikr kiya.

Ek prakaar se Veer uske hi kaaran yaha tha. Investigation department ke Head Nolan ne saaf saaf Nik ko chetaavni de dii thi ki unke department se ab iss case ko lekar koi bhi apni taang nahi adayega. Unhone ye bhi keh daala tha ki ab tum log hi apni taraf se bhejo kisi ko. Bada shauk hai na private detectives hone ke baad public cases solve karna ka?

Toh lo fir. Diya case! Jao! Risk uthao! Aur saabit karo.

Nateeja? Nik ne Veer ko aage kar diya. Woh bewakoof nahi tha jo khud aisi khatarnak jagah jaake apni hi gaand marwaaye. Aur woh Divya ko bhi nahi bhejne waala tha. Suhana ko bhi nahi bhejta woh. Toh bacha kaun?

Of course! None other than Veer!!!

Aur Veer se toh uski koi pehchaan bhi nahi thi. Divya bhi bada hi flirt kar rahi thi Veer se. Isliye Veer ko khatre me daalne se pehle ek baar bhi usne Veer ke baare me nahi socha. Jalan sach me kutti cheez hoti hai.

Par Mike aisa nahi tha. Jab usne dekha ki kese Veer ko akele maut ke kuye me dhakela jaa raha hai. Toh uss se raha nahi gaya. Veer ka toh koi lena dena hi nahi tha iss case se. Usse faaltu me bali ka bakra banaya jaa raha tha. Isliye usne apna naam bhi aage kar diya. Beshaq, uske iss faisle se kaafi vivaad khada hua par ant me uski baat unhe maan'ni hi padi. Akhir uski marzi thi ye.

Woh Veer ko aise akele nahi jaane de sakta tha. Veer andar hi andar Mike ke prati abhaari tha. Kuch log insaaniyat ke aur dil ke boht hi acche the yaha. Jese Mike...

[I fucking hate that man soooo much!! Humne kya bigaada hai uska?]

"Shhhhh! Mene kaha na Pari! It's inevitable! Ye hona hi tha."

[But still...]

"Shhh!!! Let's get going."

Veer ne Pari ko shaant kiya.

Bagal me chal raha Mike tabhi uss se bola,

Mike (smiles) : Don't worry bro! We'll handle this.

Wo Veer ka confidence badhaane ki koshish kar raha tha.

Veer (smiles) : Sure!

Kuch bhi ho jaaye, Veer Mike ko marrne nahi de sakta tha. Apne mann me hi usne ek commitment baandha.

Yaha aane se pehle Suhana ne bhi kaafi virodh kiya tha. Suhana Veer ko yaha help ke liye laayi thi. Usse marwaane nahi. Jese tese Veer ne usse shaant kar diya tha. Par woh jaanta tha Suhana abhi kitni bechain ho rahi hogi. Jab woh copter me baith ke nikal raha tha tabhi uska chehra dekhne laayak tha. Sach kaha jaaye toh pehli baar Veer ne Suhana ke chehre par apne prati woh bhaav dekhe the.

She never showed but she really cares for him. Yaha tak ki Divya bhi kuch chinta me thi. Shayad uska ravaiyya badal raha tha.

Mike aur Veer aage badhe, haatho me torch thi unke. Ghane ped paudho ke patte hataate hue wo Island me aur bheetar ghuse. Aur jese hi ialand ke beecho beech aaye. Saamne ka nazara dekh unke hosh udd gaye.

Island ke beecho beech unke saamne tha...



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Ek khubsoorat par utna hi daraawna sa Mansion.

Badi hi ajeeb sii anubhooti karwa raha tha ye Mansion. Sundar tha, bada bhi tha, par uss mansion me kuch aisi baat thi jo Veer ko aage qadam badhaane se pehle chetaavni de rahi thi.

Ajeeb baat ye thi ki mansion ki lights jal rahi thi. Island me electricity ka koi source nahi tha. Matlab basement me generators pakke se maujood the.

Veer : What do you think?

Mike : Well! I never imagined there would be such a huge mansion hiding in here. And guess what? Lights are on.

Veer : Then that means...

Mike : Yeah! Someone else is inside.

Veer : Other participants?

Mike : Maybe! Or maybe not!

Mansion ki jalti hui lights yahi ishaara kar rahi thi ki koi na koi andar maujood tha.

Mike : We must find whoever it is. We will definitely catch Senior Connor's murderer.

Veer : Hope so...

Mike : Shall we head inside?

Veer : Alright!

Entrance ki orr woh badhe. Entrance par ek bhi guard maujood nahi tha. Koi security nahi thi. Lohe ka bada sa gate tha jisse khol woh andar aaye.

Mansion ke saamne chota sa lawn tha jaha ghaas lagi hui thi, bagal me ek chariot rakha tha safed rang ka par koi ghoda nahi bandha tha uss se.

Andhere me poora Mansion vishaal pedo se ghira hua tha aur woh dono main gate pe pohuch gaye.

Mike ne apne jeb se ek card nikaala aur Veer ko dekha.

Veer (nods) : Do it!

Aur darwaaze ke hi side me ek patla sa slit gap maujood tha. Mike ne jese hi card andar slit me daala toh...

*Click*

Darwaaze se awaaz aayi. Aur woh unlock ho gaya.

Mike : It actually worked.

Veer : The info was true then...

Jankari sach thi matlab. Connor ke akhiri video se unhe iss jagah ka pata chala tha. Ab sawaal ye tha ki Mike ko woh card kese aur kaha se mila? Iski jankaari bhi usne video me hi dii thi.

Slot machines ki street me hi ek aadmi tha jo ye cards bechta tha. Wahi lottery waali slot machines. Yaha sab kuch khufiya tareeqe se hota tha. Uss bechaare ko ye bhi nahi pata tha ki ye cards kis liye hai. Usse bas bechne diye gaye the aur cards bik rahe the, iss baat se hi khush tha woh.

Police usse yu hi giraftaar nahi kar sakti thi. Uss bechaare ko toh ye bhi nahi pata tha ki ye cards kaun bhijwata hai usse. Kyuki delivery wala toh deliver kar ke chala jaata tha.

Inn cards ka istemal island me maujood iss darwaaze ko kholne ke liye hi tha. Koi soch bhi sakta tha aisa? Kuch boht hi badi planning chal rahi thi peeth peeche.

Darwaaza khol jese hi woh andar aaye, andar ka nazaara kuch aisa tha.



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Upar ceiling se chandelier latak raha tha. Andhera tha par jagah jagah candles jal rahi thi. Kahi kuch lights bhi jal rahi thi.

Aur ye main hall bhi nahi tha. Ye toh sub hall ki tarah tha. Neeche bada sa carpet biccha hua tha jo saamne darwaaze ki orr jaake khatam ho raha tha.

Shayad wahi main hall ka entrance tha.

Mike : Let's go!

Veer : Yeah!!!

Mike aur Veer apne dil ki tezz dhadkano ko thaam aage badhe. Hall ka gate bhi khula hua tha.

Jese hi unhone gate khola, unhe ek hallway nazar aaya.



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Jagah jagah paintings lagi hui thi deewaaro par, jo kisi ke ateet ko baya kar rahi thi. Neeche biccha khubsoorat sa kaaleen. Iss area me lighting sub hall ke muqaable zyada thi.

Wo andar ki orr gaye aur jese hi wo enter kiye,

Veer : Huhh???

Unhe waha 6 log aur dikhaayi diye. Jinme se 4 ladke the aur 2 ladkiya.

"What the hell? More people are coming? But that's actually good."

Sofe pe baitha ek ladka unme se bola.

Veer : These guys...

Tabhi ek ladki jo kareeb 27-28 saal ki lag rahi thi woh uth ke aayi aur Veer aur Mike ke ird gird ghoomne lagi. Fir boli,

Ladki : You guys! Are you here for the bars too??

Veer : Y-Yeaahhh!!!

Uss ladki ne sawaal kiya. Kya Veer log bhi idhar bars ke liye aaye the? Veer ne jawaab haan me diya.

Bars!!! Samjhe? Golden bars!!! Bole toh sone ke biscuits.

Mansion me 10 million dollars worth ke golden bars maujood the. Alag alag jagaho par. 10 million bole toh kareeb kareeb 79 crores, 84 lakh, 55 hazaar ke aas paas ka rokda.

Aur shayad yaha maujood baaki log bhi issi ki talaash me the.

Ladki : Ohhh! I'm Emma by the way. A nurse by profession.

Mike : Nice to meet you! I'm Mike. Just a graduate. And he's Veer, my friend.

Mike ne apni identity jaan boojh ke chhupa lii.

Emma : Veer? Strange name! But you are hot though. I will give you that. *wink*

Emma khubsoorat thi. Par Veer ko usme koi interest nahi tha. Uski nazre jiski taraf gayi woh koi aur hi thi.



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Black denim jacket daale woh bookshelf ke paas khadi hui thi. Aur unhe hi dekh rahi thi. Khaaskar Veer ko. Ek sundar vyakti dusre sundar vyakti ki taraf aakarshit hota hai. Ye baat sach thi.

Khubsoorti ka uska koi jawaab nahi tha. Sonia aur Kaera ki takkar ki thi woh yadi chehre ki khubsoorti ki baat ki jaaye toh.

Usse dekhte hi...

*Ding*

[Name : Zoey Clarkson

Age : 27
Bio : Zoey ek model hai. Par paiso ki tangi ki wajah se woh apni life me aage nahi badh paa rahi hai. Khubsoorat hone ke bawajood usse Model contracts zyaada mil nahi paa rahe kyuki woh nudity ya intimate photoshoots pe nahi utarna chahti. Financial condition kaafi gir chuki hai. Kisi se gupt jankari usse mili hai ki island ke iss Mansion me khazana chhupa hai. Woh apna luck azmaane aayi hai yaha. Ghar me uska koi nahi hai. Toh apni jaan ki parvaah kiye bina woh ek akhiri baar apni kismat azmaana chaahti hai.

Favourability : 4
Relationship : Strangers.]

'I see!!!'

Emma dekh rahi thi ki Veer Zoey ko nihaar raha tha aur Zoey bhi usse dekh rahi thi. Ye dekhte hi andar hi andar woh jal bhun gayi.

Woh bhi yaha maujood thi. Fir uski sundarta par koi kyu dhyaan nahi de raha tha? Aisa nahi tha ki Emma sundar nahi thi. Bas, Zoey ke saamne woh thodi feeki lag rahi thi. Zoey kuch zyada hi aakarshak thi.

Mike : And who are they?

Emma : The girl over there. She's Zoey! A model. And these guys are, Jacob, Tommy, Chester, and Ronnie.

Ek ek karke Emma ne unka parichay diya.

Emma : We got familiar just few minutes ago.

[Dekha master!!!! Ye bilkul wesa hi hai jesa Connor ne bataya tha. Alag alag log yaha aate hai. Aur raat guzaarte hai. Golden bars ko dhundne ke liye jo yaha kahi na kahi chhupe hue hai. Par raat me hi...]

'Yeahhh!!! The NIGHTWALKER!!!'

[Yes Master~ Abhi 7:30 hua hai time. Connor ne bataya tha raat 9 baje se shuru hota hai sab.]

'Hmm~ Hamaare paas dedh ghante hai yaha ki territory ko dimaag me baithaane ke liye. Pari!!!'

[Don't worry Master! Path Tracker on hi hai. Mansion boht bada hai. Mene off nahi kiya hai usse.]

'Good job!!!'

Connor ne jab video banaya tha, tab uska connection department se cut ho chuka tha. Mansion me network nahi milta hai. Dusri bhaasha me, phone calls nahi lagaaye jaa sakte aur na hi receive kiye jaa sakte hai.

Iska matlab, Divya aur Nik ko jo video mili woh NIGHTWALKER ne khud hi bheji thi unhe shayad.

Veer aur Mike ko ye raat apne hi bal bute par guzaarni thi. Veer ne harr ek ke naam dimaag me baitha liye the.

Emma jo nurse thi, Zoey ek model. Jacob ek fashion designer ka assistant tha. Tommy aur Chester ka group band tha aur Ronnie ek choti si company ka employee. Sabhi paiso ki tangi ki wajah se hi yaha the.

Mann me dherr saare sawaal aa rahe honge. Ki yadi ye crime yaha ho raha hai, toh police seedha dhaava kyu nahi bol deti yaha? Par jitna asaan ye dikhta tha utna tha nahi.

Ye Mansion band rehta tha. Keval chuni gayi dates par hi khulta tha ye. Aur aaj woh chuni gayi dates me se ek date thi.

Mike ne jo Card use kiya tha kuch derr pehle usme date mentioned thi. Aaj ki date.

Aur toh aur... Govt. police ki madad karne se katra rahi thi. Police department me restrictions thi kuch. Yaani ye jo kaam ho raha tha woh tha toh illegal. Par legally iss par koi rok nahi lagayi Jaa rahi thi.

Ye ek boht badi baat thi.

Emma : So? What are we gonna do?

Jacob : The NIGHTWALKER is real right? I heard rumours about him.

Emma : What do you mean?

Ronnie : The NIGHTWALKER!! He's a protector of the treasure. I have heard about him. He kills those people who try to steal the treasure.

Emma : Wh-Whaaattttt??!

Emma ko iss baare me koi jankari nahi thi ki yaha koi Nightwalker naam jesa bhi kuch tha. Woh toh yaha paisa kamane aayi thi. Kya matlab Nightwalker unhe maar deta hai jo khazana lene aate hai? Emma ki ab phat rahi thi.

Tommy : Of course! What were you expecting? Will someone allow you to steal his treasure just like that? We have to survive this night. A killer will be roaming here freely to kill the one amongst us who tries to steal the treasure.

Chester : Yeah!!! It's just like that. Do or die.

Emma : Whaaatttttt??? N-No waayyy! I-I'm fucking leaving. I don't wanna die.

Emma ne jab ye baat suni toh darr ke maare uske perr kaapne lage. Tommy ne kaha tha ki raat me ek killer mansion me ghoomta hai. Aur unn logo ko maut ke ghaat utaar deta hai jo bhi raat me uski nazro ke saamne aate hai.

Emma bhaagte hue baahar nikalne ko hui par jese hi woh main hall ke gate par pohuchi aur usse kholi...

Uski ghabraahat aur bhi badh gayi. Main hall ka gate band ho chuka tha.

Emma (screams) : Fucking open the goddamn door.... Aaaarrghhhhh!!! Open it!!!! I DON'T WANNA DIE HERE! I WANT TO LEAVE!!!

Par darwaaza nahi khula. Tabhi ek awaaz aayi aur unn sab ko sunaayi dii. Awaaz buland thi par usme ek kharaash thi, Daraavni thi woh awaaz.


"Welcome to the Nightwalker mansion!
You chose to come here. You purchased the card. Now you cannot leave the mansion until tomorrow morning."

"Rules are pretty simple!!! Survive the night! 10 million worth of gold bars are hidden in this mansion. If any of you can find them, you can take them away."

"Game will begin sharp @ 9 PM"

"Remember! You can only search the Mansion for half an hour during intervals. In other words, 9-9:30 will be your search time. After 9:30 Nightwalker will walk through the mansion. If he finds anyone of you roaming. YOU WILL BE KILLED."

"He will walk till 12 AM. Then, again you can search the Mansion for half an hour. After 12:30 he will walk till 3 AM. Again a half hour will be alloted. And last time will be Nightwalker walking from 3:30 AM till 6 AM"

"There are many rooms on both the floors. You can choose whichever you want."

"It's 8:00 PM now. You have 1 hour. You can do whatever you want to do. Remember the time. Sharp 9 PM."

"Good luck!"


Aur awaaz band ho gayi. Awaaz aayi toh intercom se hi thi par Veer ko kahi koi intercom nazar nahi aaya.

[Maaasterrrr~]

Pari ki ek chinta janak awaaz Veer ke mann me goonji,

'Don't worry Pari!! Mein apna dhyaan acche se rakhunga.'

[Yes please!!! Mujhse jitna hoga mein aapki madad karungi.]

Uss awaaz ke band hote hi sabhi ek dusre ko dekhne me lage hue the.

Emma (screams) : WHAT THE HELL IS THIS? YOU ARE TELLING ME A KILLER IS THERE IN THIS MANSION WITH US????

Ronnie : Seems like it.

Emma : This is bullshit... How the fuck can I search the bars if someone is roaming outside to kill me?

Rules simple the. Theek 9 baje maut ka ye khel shuru hona tha. Teen interval diye gaye the. 9 se 9:30, 12 se 12:30, aur 3 se 3:30 tak ka samay. Yaani kul milaake dedh ghante.

Iss dedh ghante ke samay me aapko bars dhundne the. Yadi aap dhundh sakte ho toh dhundho. Par baaki ke samay me, Nightwalker poore mansion me ghoomega. Yadi koi bhi usse nazar aaya toh...

Maut!!!

Veer thoda chintit tha. Emma ki toh phat ke hi chaar ho chuki thi. Par baaki sabhi kaafi relaxed lag rahe the.

Chester : Huhh? That's it??? Man!! This is so easy. We can search for half an hour and when that time ends. We can head back to our room. Simple right?

Zoey : Is that Nightwalker even real?

Zoey ne pehli baar kuch kaha. Veer aur uski nazre ek baar fir takra gayi.

Mike : Hmm! Yes! I can say for sure that the Nightwalker is real. It's not a myth or legend. He's here.

Tommy : Wait!!! What if he's one of us???

Zoey confirm kar rahi thi ki ye Nightwalker sach me hai bhi ya nahi? Kahi ye koi afvaah toh nahi hai? Mike ne bhi Connor ki video dekhi thi. Beshaq, Nightwalker ka mask bhi dekha tha usne uss video me. Isme koi shaq nahi tha ki woh hai. Aur issi Mansion me hai. Shayad woh awaaz bhi ussi ki thi? Kisse pata? Par itna zaroor pata tha ki woh hai yaha par.

Par Tommy ki baat ne ek baar fir unhe chinta me daal diya. Kahi unhi me se ek Nightwalker toh nahi tha?

Mike : I don't think it's plausible. Nightwalker is someone else. Maybe the one who told us about the details? Or maybe someone else? And if he's among us, then we can easily identify him. Whoever will be absent during our group meeting. Only he/she can be one.

Mike ne samjhaate hue kaha. Uska kehna tha ki yadi aapas me se koi Nightwalker nikalta bhi hai toh bhi usse asaani se pakda jaa sakta hai. Group meeting ke dauraan jo bhi unke beech gaayab rahega. Uske upar hi shaq jaega.

Jacob : We should select a room first. We can keep our bags there. And then how about taking a stroll in the Mansion? That way we can get familiar with our surroundings.

Chester : Definitely! Sounds good!!!

Jacob ki raay sabhi maan gaye. Uska kehna tha ki jo ye ek ghante ka samay mila tha. Kyu na hum uss ghante me apne apne room select kar usme samaan rakh de aur baahar nikal ke Mansion ka ek chakkar lagaaye taaki hume pata chal sake kaun sii jagah kidhar par hai.

Idea bura nahi tha. Aur yadi Jacob ye baat nahi bhi rakhta toh bhi Veer ek chakkar mansion ka maarta hi.

Zoey : Alright!

Tommy : Yes!!! That's it guys. Let's meet here after 15 minutes.

Ronnie : Okay!

Emma : J-Jacob, Can I stay in the room beside yours?

Jacob : Ohh sure!!!
Ronnie, Jacob, Tommy, Emma, Chester ye sabhi upar chadhe aur baayi orr mud ke baayi taraf hallway me chale gaye.

Toh wahi Veer aur Mike aage badhe, unke peeche Zoey thi.

Jese hi woh waha pohuche unke saamne do corridor ke liye raste the. Ek baayi orr jaa raha tha jaha woh sabhi abhi gaye hue the. Aur ek daayi orr.



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Veer : Which one?

Mike (smiles) : I always do my things right!

Veer (smiles) : Let's go then!!!

Mike ke kehne par dono aage badhe aur daayi orr mud gaye. Khaas baat ye thi ki Zoey bhi unke peeche thi.

Veer ne peeche palat usse dekha toh ek baar fir unn dono ki aankhein ek dusre se mili. Par dono ne hi kuch kaha nahi. Veer ki pride aur attitude usse conversation strike karne se rok rahi thi. Alpha male instincts active the uske. Ab woh unn ladko me se nahi tha jo laundiyo ke peeche bhaag ke unki chaate.

Ladkiya khud-ba-khud uske paas aati thi. Uski pehchaan hi ab aisi thi.

Mike toh friendly tha hi. Usne hi baat shuru kii,

Mike : You are not going with them?

Mike ne pucha. Zaahir hai ki Zoey unke saath khadi hui thi. Par fir bhi woh abhi veer aur uske saath aa rahi thi.

Zoey : I trust you guys more than them.

Veer : !!!???

Mike : Hahaha~ I see! So that's how it is. Veer! I'm choosing this one.

Mike ne ek room ke darwaaze ke baahar rukte hue kaha.

Veer : Alright! I'll choose the one next to you.

Woh aage badha aur jese hi room ke baahar ruka woh toh uska dhyaan darwaazo aur room numbers pe gaya.

Veer : Hmm?

Darwaaze ki banawat alag kism ki thi. Rectangular Bars bane hue the darwaaze me.

'Iss Nightwalker ko golden bars ka itna shauk hai ki darwaaze par bhi bars banwa diye!? Haha~'

[Yeah!!!]

Jis prakaar se rectangular bars ek chocolate me hote hai. Kuch ussi prakaar darwaaze ka structure tha. Veer ne jese hi darwaaza khola usse aashcharya hua.

'Ohhhh~'

Darwaaza kaafi bhaari tha.

'Hmm? That's weird!'

[Room number?]

'Yeahhh!!! Pari!!! Mike ka room number mere se ek kam ya zyada hona chahiye. Uska room mere bagal se hi hai. Par uska room number toh kuch aur hi tha. Yaha ki numbering lagta badi hi ajeeb hai.'

[I agree master! Yaha ki kaun sii cheez ajeeb nahi hai? Fucking everything!]

'Hahahaha~ Ye baat bhi sahi hai.'

Zoey Veer ke peeche se nikalte hue aage gayi aur Veer ke bagal waale room me ghus gayi. Ghusne se pehle ek baar usne Veer ko zaroor dekha.

[Hehehe~ She's interested in you.]

'Ohhh shut up! Favourability tumne dekhi nahi kya? 4 thi.'

[Toh fir woh aapke saath kyu aayi? Woh bhi aapke bagal waale room me? *sniff *sniff* I smell curiosity here.]

'Hahaha~ Tum overthink kar rahi ho Pari. Usne kaha toh. Woh humpe zyada bharosa kar rahi hai. Aur dusri baat, mene pehle Mike ke bagal wala room le liya. Toh woh zaahir hai ki mere next wala hi room choose karegi. Bhala akele hoke woh humse dur waala room kyu lena chaahegi?'

[Hmm... But still! I can tell... I'm a girl too.]

'Naah!!!'

Veer ne apna bag andar room me rakha. Room accha tha. Par uske bawajood scary vibes de raha tha.

Bag rakh sabhi ussi hall me ikhatta hue. 15 minute baad milne ka decide kiya tha unhone.

Sabhi ekatr hue aur sabhi ne mansion me ghoomna shuru kiya ek saath. Mansion itna bada tha ki sabhi stabdh the ye jaanke.

Aur ghoomte ghoomte unki asli gaand tab phati jab unhe pata chala ki washroom ek hi tha poore Mansion me.

Woh bhi ground floor par. Woh sabhi toh upar wali floor par the. Upar se kitchen bhi ekdum end me tha. Pani ki supply toh yahi thi. Ye toh dikkat waali baat thi.

Ghoomte ghoomte woh ek aise hisse par pohuche jaha ajeebo gareeb paintings latki hui thi.



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Veer unn paintings ke nazdeek pohucha...

'These are weird!! Check!!!'



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*Ding*

[One of the paintings collected by Noah.]

'Noah?? Ye Noah kaun hai? Yaha ka maalik? Ya past me jo yaha tha?'

[I don't know master! Par aap bas apna dhyaan rakho. Don't care for Money or anything else. I want you to be safe. That's it.]

'Tum toh meri maa bann rahi ho Pari! Haha~'

[Because I love you. You know that. Aur aap jaante hi ho mera kya haal hota hai. Why don't you understand?]

'Wese...'

[Hmm?]

'Kya meri maa waqai meri chinta karti hai? Asli maa...'

[Don't get emotional. She definitely loves you.]

'Unki taraf se abhi tak koi response nahi aaya hai Pari. Unhe Pendant dikhane ke baad bhi.'

[Thoda intezaar kijiye. Woh zaroor aapko dhundhne aaengi.]

'Kaash....!'

Poora mansion ghoomne ke baad.

Neeche rakhi badi sii ghadi ka ghanta baj chuka tha.

*Ding Dong*

Ghadi se chidiya nikal kuku kuku kar rahi thi. 9 baj chuke the. Intercom se iss baar koi awaaz sunaayi nahi dii thi.

Aadhe ghante tak unlogo ne dhundha par kahi koi khazana nahi mila.

Zoey : We didn't try harder. What if money is hidden in the basement? Or maybe behind the paintings? You know what I mean?

Tommy : Definitely! We will do that in our next shift.

Aur yahi soch sabhi apne apne kamre me chale gaye.

Kyuki Nightwalker ke ghoomne ka samay shuru ho chuka tha.

Sab ne andar se apne room ko lock kar liya. Raat me woh ghoomta tha, tabhi uska naam pada tha. Nightwalker!!!

Khauf ke maare sab andar dubak gaye. Veer bistar par lete kuch soch raha tha jab achanak hi...

"Eeeeaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrgggggghhhhhhhh"

Ek raungte khade kar dene waali cheenkh poore mansion me goonj gayi.
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Dhanyavaad! Like thokne ka aur comments karne ka. Matlab revos chhaapne ka. 😁
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Wonderful update no.99.
Update 98 was full of action.
Update 99 is lacking action, but full of suspense and seems to be prequel to next action wala update no.100.
Very good writing skill.
All the best for update #100.

 

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So, the dance of death has started in Vegas & Veer is going to have a good time out there, I guess :D ... Jim the Slippery naamak us criminal ko pakadne se Veer ko points aur actual fame ke maamle mein faayeda to beshaq hua hai but jo cheez yahaan dekhne laayak thi, wo ye ki Jim was the weakest of all... He was at the lowest level of all those criminals out there...
Indeed! :D Jesa mene kaha. Shatranj ke khel me jim sabse pehle chala jaane waala pyaada tha.
Aisa hone ke bawajood bhi wo kayi baar Police aur Department ke haathon se nikal chuka tha, yahaan to Veer aur Beowulf's Blessings ke kaaran wo pakda gaya, anyatha Divya ne is baar bhi bewakoofi to kar hi thi... It simply shows that it's gonna be really tough for Veer to survive here in Vegas :eyes2: ... But one thing, that I'm sure about is that, jab Veer Vegas se baahar niklega, tab hum ek naye hi insaan se ru – baroo honge, obviously yahaan missions solve karne ke liye Veer kuchh skills khareedega, stats improve karega aur shayad kuchh cards bhi use praapt hon, but in sabse alag use jo milega wo hoga experience of surviving in such crisis... Aise haalat se nikalne ke baad, people like Pranjal, Rajat & Karunesh won't pose to be the same threat for Veer, as they are right now... :declare:
Exactly! He will be much more confident, much more savage in doing things. He'll be really straightforward from here on. Aur thoda... Ahem ek naya roop dekhne ko milega hume Veer ka. :hint:
(Meanwhile, I just want to mention the way you're building up the character of Veer... Starting from Pari's words when he entered in Veer's body, “Maine aaj tak itne kharaab stats kisi ke nahin dekhe", to this point, Veer's character has grown in a way, which I've really loved... He's stronger, more intelligent, more witty & obviously he's more matured... One of the finest build – ups I've ever read on this forum of the main protagonist, not only talking about Incest genre here, but about all the stories I've read... :applause:)
This is such a huge compliment bro! Aur mein inwardly iska wait kar raha tha ki kaash koi notice kare iss baat ko. Jab story apni initial phase me thi. Tab na jaane kitne... Na jaane kitne logo ne mujhse ye kaha tha ki story ka pace slow. Veer chutiya hai. Grow nahi kar raha. Harr baar pitt raha hai. Usse thoda upar uthao. Character build karo. Par they don't understand ki character build achanak se nahi hota. Samay lagta hai.

Aur mene unki ek baat na suni. I sticked to my original plot aur ab 99 update ke baad dekho Veer ko. Kitna mature hua hai woh. Like mein pages bharta sakta hu isse define karne me. Aur ye abhi end nahi hai. Wo abhi grow karna shuru kiya hai. Kuch seedhiya hi chadhi hai usne abhi. So that means a lot to me man! Thanks a lot! :thanx:
Coming back to the Update, Jim ko pakadne ka sabse bada laabh Divya ki favourability ke roop mein mila hai Veer ko... Fixed at 50, ab yahaan se ye favourability kewal oopar ki hi taraf jaa sakti hai, neeche nahin aane waali... And the kind of interest Divya is showing in Veer, I'm actually expecting this 50 to be around 90–95 when Veer will be leaving Vegas... Iske atirikt 3,000 points aur saath hi fame points bhi mile hain Veer ko, is samay Points to wholesale mein pade hain Veer ke paas, aur in donon updates se jitna main “House Of Killers" ko samajh paaya hoon, Veer ko bohot zarurat padne waali hai in points ki...
Bilkul! Tabhi wo stock pehle se bana ke chal raha hai. Points hi matter karte hai at the end. Bin points ke veer ek stoppage pe aa jaega.
Let's just combine what Divya understood about the lines of Daniel & what Connor mentioned in the video message... House of Killers, mere khyal mein ek aisa khel jise hum maut ka khel bhi keh sakte hain... Shayad koyi psycho hai jo sabhi mukhya criminals (of Vegas) ko kisi tarah ke tasks de raha hai... Tasks to kill some people? :think: Connor ne aur Daniel ne, donon ne ek baat similar kahi thi, ki yahaan kewal ek nahi hai balki ek se bohot zyada hain... Shikaar ki baat kar rahe the wo donon ya fir shikaari ki? Shayad us ghar, jise Connor ne House Of Killers kaha, wahaan apne manoranjan ke liye koyi shakhs, kayi saare Connor jaise bandon ko laata hai (ya wo log khud jaate hain), aur uske baad shayad ek game ki tarah unhe wahaan survive karna hota hai..?
Man! House of killers arc is really dope. Personally I really like it. Aur Daniel ne kaha tha woh ek nahi hai. That means there are several. Jim was the first. Second is the Nightwalker. Try to guess more what it's all about. :D I mean why suddenly killings are happening? Who can be behind this? And even if he's behind this. What's his purpose? What he's getting by doing all this? Is it connected to some other thing? :D
Ya fir iska ulta, wahaan gaye sabhi logon ko maarne ka task un criminals ko diya jaata hai, and they might get something as a reward after completing the task... Pehli baat, Divya – Nik ne kaha ki Connor ko wahaan bheja gaya tha, means they knew the location..? Ya fir Connor ne khud us sthaan ko khoja tha? Divya aur Suhana donon hi kuchh jaanti hain jo Veer se chhupa hai... Nightwalker ki photo dekh kar Suhana ka reaction, mujhe to yahi lagta hai ki Suhana ko jaankari hai is shakhs ke baare mein... I hope Veer jaldi hi donon ke bheetar chhupi un baaton ko baahar nikaal lega...
Basically, Jim gave the details about Nightwalker. And where the cards were getting sold. Then connor was sent to check that out. But ultimately, at the end he died. Now Veer and Mike are there to solve all the mysteries. :D
Divya ne shayad Nightwalker ko hi dekha hoga Video mein, jiske kaaran wo itna dar gayi thi, shayad wo Connor ki hatya kar raha hoga us waqt... Beharhal, Daniel ka jo message Divya ne decode kiya tha, us se mujhe aisa sandeh ho raha hai ki Daniel ho ya Connor, donon hi apni marzi se is jaal mein fanse... He was talking about being greedy, and the bad thoughts, shayad kisi laalach ke chalte wo donon is trap mein ghuse aur fir nikal nahin paaye..? :dazed:
Remember Divya went inside for some time before taking Veer and Suhana inside? She was printing out Nightwalker's masked face on a paper. I mean it was in png format. Background removed. She printed that on a wanted paper to show that to Veer and Suhana. That means... :D Of course in the video they clearly saw the Nightwalker's masked face.
Ab Nolan ne saaf kar diya hai ki Department ki taraf se kisi ko bhi nahin bheja jaane waala, arthat ab Divya – Nik ki agency se koyi shakhs wahaan jaayega... I guess, Veer... Khair, Nik ka nazariya bhi shayad Veer ke prati ab kuchh badalne laga hoga... Jaisa maine pehle bhi kaha hai, ki Nik mere sandeh ke daayre mein hai, to shayad wo Veer ke liye aage chalkar dangerous bhi saabit ho sakta hai... Khair, Divya uske saamne hi Veer se flirt kar rahi thi, aur ek baar nahin kayi baar, I think use maaloom hai Divya ki aadaton ke baare mein... Waise bhi Suhana ke prati Nik ka ravaiya kuchh bhinn nahin tha..? :dontknow:
Nik knows Divya flirts with young guys. But... Divya does in a playful manner. She toys with them. She makes fun of younger guys. She will try to trap them in her honey coated sweet words, showing her cleavage and all but when those guys do try to make out with her, she ditches them. That's what she likes doing. And Nik only restricts her a little for this. Because at the end Divya is still loyal to Nik. She ain't getting laid by anyone else. She tried to do the same with Veer. But... :D Veer ne uss bechaari ko hawa nahi dii. Also, woh uski tricks bhi samajh gaya. Remember the scene where Veer finally says to her on her face? :D Searching Jim in the alleys... That scene...
Divya... Veer mein use ek aisa shakhs dikhayi de raha hai jiske sang khelne mein wo asamarth rahi hai... Apni aadaton se majboor Divya ke liye ye shayad aisa pehla mauka hai jab uski tricks kisi launde ko todne mein nakaamyab rahin hain... Secondly, Veer ki history, Slogan – Aatish ke saath, third, Jim waala maamla... Sab kuchh add on hokar Divya ka interest Veer mein badhane waala hain... I think ab Veer ek challenge ban jaayega Divya ke liye, jise fansate – fansate, wo kahin khud hi na fans jaaye... Waise bhi, she seems to be caught in the charm of Veer, especially after that effect of 20 points in appearance... Ang pradarshan ka wo karyakaram to at least yahi darshata hai :lol:
That is true... :approve:
Idhar Bhavana ki behen jaisi saheli Purvi ka bhi aagman ho gaya hai kahani mein... Ye doodh ka rishta :whistle:... Purvi ki baaton se yahi laga ki wo bhi Tej aur Veer se kaafi attached hai, shayad wo in donon ko apne hi bachon ki tarah pyaar karti hai aur yahi lagta hai ki uski dosti Bhavana ke saath kaafi gehri hai... Bhavana, I think abhi tak shayad wo faisle lene mein maahir nahin huyi hai... Veer ko khud se door karna, ispar yadi charcha ki jaaye to... Firstly, koyi bhi reason raha ho, uska Veer se door hone ko, Mere khyal mein wo kabhi bhi apne us reason ko justify nahin kar paayegi... Yahin par ye sawaal bhi khada hota hai ki jab wo itne saal apne bete se door rahi, uski khoj khabar lene ki koshish tak usne nahin ki (She could've done it with the help of someone like Purvi), ab Bhavana se zyada kaun jaanta hoga Brijesh ko, iske bawajood bhi usne Veer ki existence ko jaan ne ka kabhi koyi prayas nahin kiya... Fir ab aisi kya aafat aan padi ki wo Mumbai chali aayi..? Veer Egypt gaya aur usne wo locket dekh liya, sirf isiliye wo yahaan Mumbai aa gayi... Jaane kise moorkh banane ka prayas kar rahi hai ye mahila, she literally seems to be confused af...
No bro! She ain't confused at all. :D She have her reasons. Aur rahi baat Veer ko dhundne ki toh... Uske liye hi toh woh aayi hai. Sawal ye hai ki woh ab kyu aayi? Because she saw the pendant. Next sawal ~ Toh pehle kya kar rahi thi? Answer ~ She had her reasons. :D Pendant dekhne ke baad she couldn't control herself and she came in search for him. Majboori ab bhi qaayam hai. But she's risking it. You know... :D that's her love for him. Next sawaal ~ Toh pehle kyu nahi risk kiya? Answer ~ Did I ever mention she didn't try to search for Veer earlier? :smartm: You can get it. I know.
Tej ko bhi usne kabhi uske bhai ke baare mein nahin bataya... Aur jo reason usne Purvi ke saamne rakha wo baseless hai, kyonki Tej pehle hi Veer ke baare mein jaanti hai, par usne koyi bhi waisa kadam nahi uthaya hai jiski aashanka Bhavana jata rahi thi...
Bhavna ye nahi jaanti ki tej ko ye pata hai ki uska bhai hai. But... Ju itni badi detail kese bhool gaye? Dedu kya hint mein? :?: Chalo ek de deta hu.

Jab Bhavna Purvi ko bataati hai ki uske bete ka naam shayad Vikram hai. Toh Purvi ka kya reaction tha? :D
She says... Ohhh! Toh mere bacche ka naam Vikram hai?

Meaning? She didn't knew anything about Veer. Not even his name. Where does Purvi lives? Mumbai! Where does Veer lives? Mumbai! :D Then why she don't know anything about him? :smartm: You can brainstorm.
Khair, ab wo Veer ke baare mein jaan ne ki koshish karegi, I think College jaakar wo pata kare shayad, Nidhi... :think: Kaera sang Veer ki photo bhi chhapi thi na akhbaar mein, jab wo Delhi gaya tha..?
Different cities have different newspapers. :D Or sometimes the headline on front page in my newspaper won't be the same for your newspaper. You might see that headline at the last in your newspaper. Since Veer with Kaera is a news related to glamour and business. It won't be at the front page. Even if Bhavna and Tej were reading the newspaper. They won't look after all the sections. Aur tab toh shayad wo dono baahar hi thi.
Ye doodh ka rishta :whistle:.
I see what you did there. :heh:
Wo bhi ek zariya ban sakti hai... Idhar, shayad Tej bhi apne level par Veer ke baare mein jaan ne ka prayas zaroor kare, aur ho na ho, mujhe yahi lagta hai ki Tej, Bhavana se pehle hi Veer ke baare mein jaan jaayegi... Purvi aur Bhavana ki baatein uske liye bhi ek jhatka hi rahi hongi par main jitna abhi tak samjha hoon, she's really intelligent, and I think she'll handle everything nicely...
Tej ka IQ above average hai. She's not like Kaera. But she's insane in her own league. :hint:
Idhar, Ragini ka dil hai ki maanta nahin :haha:... After what she did with Veer before he left for Vegas, uska intezar aur bhi kathin ho gaya hai... I think, jab Veer Vegas se lautega to turant halaal ho jaayega... Suman ki smile ka reason yahi lagta hai ki wo jaan chuki hai ki Ragini aur Veer ka relation kahaan pahunch gaya hai aur jis doosre shakhs ki baat usne ki, jo Veer ke intezaar mein hai, I think wo Shweta hai, par ek baat zaroor jaan na chahunga ki Suman ki favourability nearly 150 hai, aise mein uske andar ek jealousy factor bhi expect kar raha tha main, kya wo jealous ho rahi hai Ragini aur Veer ki gatividhiyon se ya apne Maalik ko ek naya maal multe dekh kar wo khush hai :evillaugh:..
Jealousy kis baat se? Wo ek daaai hai. Yadi patni hoti toh jealousy maan sakte hai. Abhi tak toh jealousy factor uska saamna nahi aaya hai. She doesn't have any competitor right now. Par kya wo same rahegi yadi Niharika as a slave Veer ke side rehne lage toh? What will happen? :heh:
:rip: Niharika... Iska bhi intezam Veer hi karega lautne par... Waise Veer nahin to Veer ke dwara ki gayi iski thukayi ki yaad mein baawli to hi chuki hai ye, par abhi bhi Niharika ke andar uska ghamand aur ego bhara hua hai, she's still forcing Ayushi and that other girl to serve her... Veer ke phone mein kuchh install kiya hai usne, I guess Veer ko bhi pata hoga is baare mein, yadi nahin to bas yahi umeed hai ki us video ki aur koyi copy bana rakhi ho Veer ne, jo uske phone mein na hokar kahin aur ho...
Niharika ke baare me aage dekhoge sahi se...
Nidhi is missing Veer too, Juhi ki baat bhale hi usne beech mein kaat di ho, par jo sudden rise uski favourability mein aaya hai wahi kaafi hai bataane ke liye ki shayad wo saara time ab Veer ke hi vishya mein sochti rehti hai... Juhi, again, she's just amazing... Her words, her cuteness, her antics, everything makes her the most loveable character of this story... :love3:
I can agree to this. Juhi is the cutest...
Khair, ab Mumbai mein bhi garmi badhne waali hai... Bhavana aur Tej, donon hi Veer ko dhoondne niklengi, uske baare mein jaan ne ke liye niklengi... To shayad kahin na kahin Bhavana, Brijesh ke parivar se bhi takra jaaye, waise to adhik logon ko uska chehra shayad pata bhi na ho, par jinhe maaloom hai,unka kya reaction hoga Bhavana ko Mumbai mein paakar... Niharika ki planning aur jo kuchh Pranjal plan kar raha hoga, uska kya impact padega, Veer ki absence mein... Nidhi aur Shreya par khatra badh sakta hai...

Most importantly, Vegas, wahaan Veer ki kismat kya kya dikhayegi use... Kya wo is Nightwalker naam ke aadmi ko maat de paayega, ya fir haar ke roop mein ek sabak milega Veer ko, Divya aur Veer ke beech panap rahi cheezen, kya rang dikhayengi aage, ye jaan na bhi interesting rehne waala hai..
It all depends on instincts. Only Veer's actions can save him from the dangerous situations.
Donon hi updates bohot hi khubsurat the bhai... You're nicely introducing more suspense & thrill in the story, the concept of this House Of Killers, is really outstanding, and the way you're executing it, that's appreciable... The closeness of this stort to reality & logic, despite a thing like Pari existing in the story, makes this story more special... So, I hope that you'll continue the way you're going on, and definitely this House Of Killers is going to be insane... :good:

Outstanding Updates Bhai & Waiting For Next...
Thanks a lot man! ✨ Iss baat par mein boht dhyaan deta hu. Mein yadi chaahu toh story ko ekdum full on alag level pe le jau. Veer ko insane powers dedu. Poora universe hi change kar du. Space se launde le aau, kahani me powers hi powers bhar du. Maar dhaad ekdum. But nahi... Universe yahi hai. Aur mein isse realistic rakhna chaahta hu. Pari hi ek illogical cheez hai jiska abhi koi sense samajh nahi aa raha. But uske peeche bhi ek logic hai.

Yaha tak ki Veer ki skills ke peeche bhi logic hai. Kuch bhi faaltu nahi hai. Ek scene tha jidhar Veer kehta hai ki mein apni agility poori max kar leta hu. Toh aise me mein sabse fast ban jaunga. Wo sabse pehla uska enemy... Jidhar veer pehle badla leta hai. Toh Pari ka jawaab rehta hai ki Aisa nahi ho sakta. Yadi agility full kar loge toh fir bhaagne ke baad jo maaspeshiyo me dard uthega usse kese jheloge? Kyuki endurance toh kam hai. So you see? Kese internal system work kar raha hai? :smartm: Bina logic ke nahi jaa raha kuch.

Baaki boht boht dhanyavaad bhai dil se. Mein shayad pichle aadhe ghante ke upar ho gaya ye sab type karte hue. :laughing: ju ke revos toh sabhi jaante hai alag level ke hote hai. Aise hi bane rehna man!!! Keep supporting as usual! ✨
 

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Werewolf bhaya apki baat ekdum sahi hai aur mai aapke emotion aur baat ko smjh raha hu jo aap kahna chahte ho:sadwavey:, aur mai unn readers ko bata du yaar khud socho bhailog yaar matlab tum har story pe ek hi chis cnp krte jao aur ek hi story ke har updates me wahi matlab yaar tumlog socho jara kaisa lagta hoga writter ko padhne ke baad kitna bura lagta hoga,ki wo tumse kuch aur hi ummid kr rahe honge aur tum uss ek hi chis ko baar baar krte jao to udaas aur irritate hona lajmi hai.......

Issliye jo bhailog aisa krte hai wo ye baat smjhe ki ye story ke update koi likh ke dena asaan kaam nhi hai,ye update jo aap log padhte ho usse likhne me imagination ki bhi jarurat hoti aur jo saath hi saath applog jo apne writter mahoday Werewolf bhai ke itni marvellous writing skill ke saath jo update padhte ho wo Kabhi socha hai kitni mehnat lagti hai nope never agar aisa socha hota to jo readers review dene se khafa khate hai wo aaj apne anusaar review de rahe hote naaki ek hi words har jagah pel rahe hote lekin still bhailog jara socho ju log ki apne writter bhaya yaha story likh rahe hai wo asal me apne liye nhi likhte wo aap readers bhailogo ke liye likhte hai bhailog,haa apne khushi ke liye bhi writter likhta hai lekin still I am saying that Werewolf bhai aaplogo ke liye story ko likhte hai uss story ke har ek update me aaj tak aapko galti milli nope never ever, sirf aaplogo ke liye guys ki applog uss story ko read kro aur apne review do aur unn mile hue reviews aur revos ko padh kr jo muskurahat aur khushi unke chehre pe aayegi n wo unhe chahiye, aur aaplog ko bhi ye khushi unhe reviews ke jariye apkke man me uss update ko lekr kyaa ubhar ke aata hai apke dimag me wo likho apne reply me

Aur tab dekhna jo khushi aur response tumhe milega n writter se wo ek alag hi khushi ka ahsas krata hai jo kabhi-kabhi to tumhe uss writter ke jaise story likhne pr utsahit krega, agar ekbar bhailog aap sab ekbar review dekar dekho, aapsab ke man me jo ubhar ke aaye matlab ki uss update me aapne kaisa mahsoos kiya, kyaa scene apko ek alag hi imagination me le gayi wo likho unn update ko lekr,

writing ek emotion me rah kr likha jata bhailog jo aapko story se lekr har ek chis ko emotions me rah kr likhne ko motivate krte rahti hai n ki bina emotions ke jo uss likhi chiso ko koi kasti n deti hai

To asha krata hu ki bhailog app sab iss baat ko smjhenge aur ek baar review de kr jarur dekhenge aur biswas kro apko ek alag hi khushi milegi.......



Take care bhailog......
Ekdum satya vachan! Aur mein toh 1700 pages se upar se ye dekhte aa raha hu. :laughing: Thodi hataasha toh hoti hi hai. Mein ye nahi keh raha story par lambe revos chhaapo. Ek line bhi likh rahe ho toh chalo wahi likho. Par kam se kam usme toh kuch alag likho guys. Harr baar wahi ek line. :sigh2: Yadi koi writer harr baar wahi same update de toh aap logo ko kesa lagega? Sabhi itne padhe likhe toh zaroor hai yaar ki kisi cheez ko padh ke uske baare me 2-4 shabd likh sake. Mein sirf keh hi sakta hu. Uss par implement karna toh aapka hi kaam. And thanks man! Ju ne kaafi acche se points rakhe.

Ye kahani likhna matlab harr update me brainstorming karna. Back and forth move karna padta hai mujhe updates me cheezo ko mind me baithaane ke liye. :D Ki mene iss update me yaha ye kiya tha. Yaha par Veer ke paas points itne the. Baad me usse itne mile. Uska poora hisaab kitaab bana ke chalo. Uske baad unn pics me inko edit karo. Saath hi kiski favourability kitni thi, kis update me kitni badhi kitni ghati... Ye sirf mein upar upar ka bata raha hu. :D

Anyways! Thanks a lot for pointing it out. ✨
 
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