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Incest Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery

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That was mind blowing update Bhai abhi Tak Aisa kuch kabhi pda hi ni tha itne twist aur turns specially that fight just wow didn't have words to explain brother kis level ka update tha bhai super se bhi upar update brother to gud luvd it Jo veer aur jaw long ki fight thi specially luvd each and every details u mention eagerly waiting for your next update brother pls do cont asap take care
 
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Update - 176 ~ Heavy Violence (2)

Ab tak...

PROBABILITY MANIPULATION!!!

Crimson dwara paapt kiya woh card pehli baar aaj activate hua. Veer ka perr apne aap andar ki namm mitti ke chalte fislan kha
gaya. Uska sarr peeche hua, aur saanp dusri orr jaake jaake zameen se jaa bhida. Probability manipulation ne Veer ke upar hamla hone ki probability badal di thi.

Mauka na gawaate hue usne turant hi wall run kar upar chadh haath felaate hue gaddhe ke baahar ki zameen ko jakda. Aur usme se baahar nikal aaya.

'That was close-!!!'

Saansein abhi theek se durust hi ki thi ek awaaz ne uske raungte ek baar fir khade kar diye. Koi tezi se uski orr aa raha tha.


Ab aage...

Mahaul tang tha. Do insaan jo ek dusre se anjaan the woh aamne saamne ek dusre ka adanga bann ke khade hue the. Dono ek dusre ki taaqat ki kshamta ka aaklan kar rahe the.

[Something's off about him!!!]

'Hmm!'

Lloyd ki gambheer awaaz Renshu ke mann me goonji jis se woh poori tarah sehmat tha. Saamne khada ye naujavan...! Kuch ajeeb si anubhuti de raha tha.

Achanak se ek system holder ka prakat hona aur unn par hamla karna. Kuch andhruni taur par pak raha tha, jis se Renshu anibhigya tha.

Uske maathe par paseene ki boonde chhayi hui thi. Aankhein gambheer taur par uss agyaan naujavan system holder par tiki thi.

Uski instinct 'Enlightenment' use aagah kar rahi thi. Har mushqil mod pe 'Enlightenment' use raasta dikha deti thi. Woh dekh paa raha tha ki uske liye koi jaal bicchaya gaya tha. Usne khamosh khade uss system holder ko dekh bola~

"Apne iraade toh tum batane se rahe ladke...! Lekin, ek baat yaad rakhna! Iss maamle me dakhal andazi deke tumne apne aap ko Order ka dushman bana liya hai."

Parantu, veh ladka abhi bhi shaant hi bana raha. Renshu ke agle hamle ke liye khud ko taiyar karne laga. Kahi na kahi ye baat Renshu ko aur bhi zyada gussa dila gayi ki anjaan system holder uski baato ka jawab tak nahi de raha tha. Jaise maano samay vyateet karna chaah raha ho ya fir woh uski nazro me kuch tha hi nahi.

"Mein sahi tha. Tum kuch bhi ugalne waale nahi-! Theek hai fir!!! Tumhare muh se ek ek shabd mein khud ugalwaunga!!!! LLOYD!!!' Woh garja!!!


[Ready!!!]

Agle hi pal uske haav bhaav badal gaye. Nazre kisi sher ke maafiq uss system holder par tik gayi, mutthi apne bhaale par usne jamm ke kassi. Aur, woh uss system holder par aage badh jhapatne hi waala tha jab uss ladke ne apne peeche tange tarkash se ek teer nikala aur-

*Swoooossshhhh*

Teer seedhe Renshu ki aankh ki orr poori gati se aaya magar, usne use ek jhatke me apne haath se jakad liya. Aur-

*Crack*

Use do tukdo me baant diya. Uski aankhein ab apne shikaar par poori tarah se sthir thi.

"Galti meri hi thi, jo maine 'Mayhem' ka istemal pehle nahi kiya. Lekin, koi baat nahi. Uska bhugtan tumse ho jayega!" Woh itna bol-

*Whooooooosshhhh*

Apni jagah se ek jhatke me aage dauda. Uss unknown system holder ki aankhein shan bhar ke liye bhay ke maare fel gayi aur badle me woh bhi sarpat andar gehre jangal ki orr bhaaga. Ghode ki tez chaal ke bhaanti daudate hue woh Renshu se duri banane me qamyab tha.


[Woh humse tez hai, Renshu. Sambhal ke peecha karo.]

'Ek agile system holder!? Kahi...? Assassination type? Samajh gaya!'

[Behtar hoga agar use Order se jod le toh...!]

'Ye ab sambhav nahi!'

Jangal ke ghane pedo ke beech se guzarte hue ghapp andhere me do system holder lagatar bhaagte jaa rahe the. Unke perro ke neeche aate sookhe patte kuchal rahe the aur dono ke beech ek paryapt duri bani hui thi. Jo ki zahir tha kyuki woh naujavan Renshu se 'Agility' me aage tha.

*Ding*


['Trap Master' is in use.]

Daudate daudate hi Renshu ki gardan kisi chidiya ki tarah idhar udhar hote hue traps ki talashi me jut gayi.

*Whissshhh*

Uska bhaala hawa me udta hua jaake seedhe ek gupt rassi ke baandh pe jaake laga. Rassi tooti aur patthar giraane ka jaal wahi nasht ho gaya. Toh wahi patto ki parat se dhake hue kuch gehre gaddho ko usne patthar fek unka uddeshya bhi wahi mita diya.

Jaise jaise woh aage badh raha tha, raaste me aane waale sabhi jaalo ko nasht karta jaa raha tha. Isi raaste se uske aadmiyon me se koi bhi aage aa sakta tha. Unke liye jaal se mukt raasta taiyar karna uski ek zimmedari thi.

Idhar bhaagte bhaagte punah Lloyd ne use sachet kiya.


[He's luring you deep inside the forest.]

'Jaanta hu, Lloyd!'

[Be prepared for the worst. Aage kuch bhi ho sakta hai. Par, andar jaana bhi humari majboori hai.]

'Hmm!'

Anjaan system holder Renshu ko jaise kisi prakar ke jaal me fasaane ki taiyaari me tha. Andhere jangal me woh use na jaane kaha liye jaa raha tha. Dono hi tez raftar se bhaag rahe the. Tabhi, woh ladka achanak hi uchhalte hue peeche ko ghoom gaya. Dhanush ki pratyancha par teer chadha. Aur, ladke ne teer ko kass ke kheench ek baar me Renshu ki orr chhor diya.

*Swiiiiiiisssshhhhhh*

Renshu, jo theek uske peeche bhaag raha tha, uske tez qadam shan bhar ke liye dheeme pad gaye. Teer uski orr hawa ko cheerte hue aaya toh zaroor magar, woh uska nishana nahi tha jaise-! Balki, teer uske bagal se neeche zameen me jaa gira.

'Huh!?'


[Shit! Renshuuuu-!!!]

Aur, Lloyd ko awaaz dene me halki si derr ho gayi.

*Booooooooommmmmm*

Ek Dhamaka! Dhua vatavaran me fel gaya aur usme se gussail Renshu hawa me udta hua bahar nikla. Chhota lekin ek ghaatak visfot jo use buri tarah se ghayal kar sakta tha agar woh na hoti.

Rapid Reaction!!! Uske paas maujood behatreen skills me se ek. Ye aaj na hoti toh shayad woh buri tarah zakhmi ho sakta tha. Hatasha aur krodh se uski bauhe fadakne lagi. Dhamake ke chalte uske badan par dhue ke kaale dhabbe bhi pad chuke the.

'Ye toh-! Explosive arrows!?'


[Hmm! Asal zindagi me ye nahi hote. Lekin, inhe banaya jaa sakta hai. Mujhe yakeen hai ki uske paas inhe banane ki koi skill hai. Mujhe toh ye jaan ke bhi taajub nahi hoga agar uska dhanush bhi uske haatho se banaya gaya ho.]

'Let me do it! Check!!!'

*Ding*


[A self made adjustable bow.]

[Dekha? Mein sahi tha.]


'Ab kya?'

[Unn explosive arrows se sambhal ke rehna hoga hume. Maine uski pehchan kar li hai. Uske agli baar vaar karte hi mein tumhe satark kar dunga.]

'Good!'

Ladka mauka dekh punah bhaaga. Peeche peeche Renshu bhi gusse me aaya. Krodh toh sawaar tha uspe magar uss krodh ko usne apne sochne, samajhne aur nirnay lene ki kshamta par haawi hone nahi diya. Aur, isme sabse zyada madadgar thi uski instinct ~ Enlightenment!

Kintu, jis baat ka darr tha akhir wahi hua. Jangal ki gehraiyo me uss anjaan system holder ka peecha karte karte woh aa toh gaya. Magar, aate hi use samajh aa gaya ki maajra kya tha. Woh ladka uss se ek seemit doori bana ke khada ho gaya. Chaand ki raushni me uski halki halki chhavi nazar aa rahi thi. Aur fir-

Ek raushni!

Aag ki lau andhkar me achanak Renshu ke saamne khade ladke ke peeche se jagmaga uthi.

Mashaal! Aur, fir ek aur-! Aur, ek aur...! Aur, ek ek karke uske ird gird mashaalo ka samooh banta chala gaya. Renshu ki aankhein hairangi me chaudi ho gayi. Woh jaise jaise apni daayi orr mudta gaya, ek ek karke mashaale andhere me jalti gayi. Woh ghir chuka tha. Yahi woh jaal tha!


[Isliye, woh tumhe yaha laa raha tha. Ye Unit 2 nahi lag raha. Ye alag se aadmi iske dwara laaye gaye hai shayad.]

'Lloyd---!'

[I got it.]

*Ding*

['Mayhem' has been equipped.]

*Ding*

['Mayhem' is now in use.]

Achanak hi uske mann me ek lamba sa virtual bar bann ke aa gaya. Usne Kung fu ka stance liya aur zorr se gurraaya-

"Come-!!!!"

Aur, tabhi-

"Haaaaaaaaaa-!!!!!"

"Haaarrrrgggghhhhh!!!"

"Hamlaaaaaaa-!!!!"

Neeche sthit aadmi uss par daudate hue toot pade. Toh, wahi upar pedo par baithe aadmi uss par teero ki varsha kar diye.

*Swish* *Swish* *Swish* *Swish*

Aadmi uss system holder ke peeche andhere me se agal bagal se nikalte hue aate jaa rahe the aur woh chup chaap wahi khade sab kuch dekh raha tha. Ek ke baad ek teero se apna bachaav kar Renshu seedhe aadmiyon se bhidne me ulajh gaya. Aur, 'Mayhem' apna jalwa dikhane ke liye taiyar tha.

Pehle aadmi ke aate hi Renshu ne bagal me hote hue khud ko uske hathyar se bachaya, uska ek haath seedha aadmi ki gardan par jaa ke pada.

*Chakkkkk*

Dusra haath seedha kamar par jaa ke laga.

*Whakkkk*

Aur, akhiri vaar seedhe thuddi ki orr gaya-

*Bokkkkk*

Jis se veh aadmi hawa me udte hue muh se thook aur khoon nikaal door jaa gira. Aur, isi ke saath Renshu ke virtual bar me ek point jud gaya. Kintu, yeh hua kaise? Aur, kya tha ye virtual bar?

Uske arsenal me sabse behatreen cards me se ek ~ 'Mayhem'



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Ye woh card tha jo aisi group fights ke liye hi banaya gaya tha. 'Wushu' ya saral shabdo me 'Kung fu' ke moves par hi ye card apni bhumika nibhata tha. Uske paas pehle se hi 'Wushu' skill thi jisme woh maahir tha.

Wushu ka istemal kar agar woh combo ender apne dushman pe land karta hai, toh dushman 1 second ke liye achet ho jayega. 1 second dekha jaaye toh vastavik roop me kam tha, lekin system holders ke liye wahi ek second poori ki poori ladaayi ka nateeja tay kar sakta tha. Par, shart yahi thi ki combo ender dushman ke shareer par utara jaaye.

Kintu, kya bas yahi tha? Hargiz nahi! 'Mayhem' system holder ko ek virtual bar provide karta tha. Harr ek dushman jo Renshu ke haatho dher hota jayega, uske badle me virtual bar me ek point chadhta jayega. Agar, bar 5 points tak pahucha toh agla hamla do guna lethal damage ka hoga.

Ye thi taqat 'Mayhem' ki. Renshu ne Unit 1 ko dher karne me iska istemal nahi kiya tha. Warna, uske paas ab tak na jaane kitne bars stack ho chuke hote. Yeh system holder uske liye koi khatra nahi hota fir. Magar, iss baar woh taiyaar tha. Woh khud bhi jaan ke hi andar jangal ki gehrayi me uska peechha karne aaya tha. Aur, unke iss ek aadmi ko dher karne ke baad use ek point mil chuka tha. Ab baari thi baakiyon ki.

Apne aadmi ko itni asaani se ghayal hota dekh baaki sabhi bhauchakke toh hue par unke qadam zara bhi nahi ruke.

"Aaarrrghhh!"

"Uummmphhhh-!!!"

"Urrrrghhh!!"

Fir bas, unki ghur ghurati awaazein uss ilaaqe me fel gayi. Ek ke baad ek sabhi Renshu ke kung fu moves ka shikar hote chale gaye aur use points par points bhi de gaye.

Parantu, woh system holder abhi bhi yuhi shaant khada hua tha. Renshu ko inn aam logo se khatra nahi tha. Woh yeh baat jaanta tha aur isliye ladte waqt uss ladke par bhi poori tarah se dhyaan rakhe hue tha.

*Klaaaang* *Claaaanggg*

Mashalo aur chaand ki raushni ke alawa hathyaro ki aapas me bhidne ki chingariyaan bhi ilaaqe me chamakne lagi. Renshu ka harr ek move itna sateek aur nishaane par tha ki tribe ke log keede makodo ki tarah dher hote jaa rahe the.

Uska bhaala chain ke saath aise ghum raha tha ki kuch aadmi bhaale ka shikaar hote toh kahi kuch chain ke lapete me aake dur fik jaate. Kuch ped se jaa bhidte toh kuch zameen par ghisatate hue lot jaate.

Unke perr ab kaapne lage the. Unhe apne Lord Jaw Long ki upar poora vishvas aur garv tha. Aur, aaj woh sab samajh paa rahe the ki Order ka Lord bhi koi aera gera nahi tha.

"D-Daanav! Y-Ye aadmi daanav hai!"

"H-Hamare hamle- hamare hamle uss tak pahuch hi nahi rahe!!!"

"Ye kaise ho sakta hai? *shivers* Hamara ek jhund pehle hi haar chuka hai. L-Lord-! Hume Lord tak khabar-"

Magar, uske shabd adhoore hi reh gaye. Renshu ke bhaale ki chain akasmat uski kamar par aake bandhi aur Renshu ne use ek jhatke me apni orr kheench liya. Woh aadmi udta hua uski orr aaya aur-

*Gwakh*

Apne gale ko uske bhaari bharkam haath me saunp diya. Ek haath se hi Renshu uss aadmi ko zameen se upar uthaaye hue tha. Yeh manzar dekh sabko khauf ke chalte saanp soongh gaya. Aur, fir Renshu ne bolna shuru kiya.

"Tum sab ko abhi bhi mauka diya jaa raha hai. Humne baahar kisi ko bhi jaan se nahi maara hai. Agar, tum apne logo ki chinta karte ho toh abhi bhi waqt hai. Jao...! Aur, unhe bacha lo. Kahi derr na ho jaaye."

Ye sunte hi tribe ke logo ko do jhatke lage. Pehla toh yeh ki Renshu unse unki hi tribal bhaasha me bol raha tha. Woh iss tathya se anibhigya the ki Renshu ek system holder tha aur use sabhi bhashaayein aati thi.

Toh wahi, dusri taraf unke taajub hone ka kaaran tha Renshu ke aadmiyon ke dwara unke aadmiyon ko bina jaan se maare chhor dena. Yaha unke Lord ne toh keh ke bheja tha ki yeh ladayi ab aar ya paar ki hai. Kya yahi baat Renshu ke logo par laagu nahi hoti? Bilkul hoti thi.

Fir, uske bawajood-!?

"Legion se kabhi bhi Order ki dushmani rahi hi nahi hai. Mein toh sirf sahi ke liye ladd raha hu. Mine ko apne qabze me karna... Yeh ek apradh hai. Mine rashtra ki sampatti hai. Uss par sirf kuch logo ka haq nahi ho sakta. Tum sab khud socho. Kya Order ne kabhi bina wajah Legion pe hamla kiya hai?"

Uski baatein jaise logo par prabhav daal rahi thi. Sab ke sab sankoch me nazar aane lage the.

"M-Mujhe lagta hai...! Shayad... W-Woh sahi hai!"

"Huh? Tum pagal ho gaye ho kya?"

"Nahi! Mujhe bhi lagta hai ki iss baat me sacchayi hai."

"M-Mera bhai-!! Mera bhai pehle jhund me tha. M-Mujhe jaana hoga. Use bachaane."

"Tum sab ab dagabazi karoge? Legion ko akela chorr kar bhaag rahe ho?"

"Bhaag nahi rahe hai. Par, ye baat sach hai ki hume apne logo ki chinta hai. Kya tumhe nahi hai?"

"Mujhe bhi hai par-"

"Toh mein jaa raha hu. Tumhe jo karna hai karo."

Unke jhund me se ek aadmi nikal ke Unit 1 ki orr bhaag gaya. Woh sirf akele nahi the yaha. Jagah jagah unki basti bani hui thi jangal me. Aur, unn gharo me unki patniya, bacche, budhe buzurg, unka parivar unka intezar kar raha tha.

Aaj agar woh sab yaha maare jaate hai toh kal ko unke parivar ki dekhbhal kaun karega? Sabhi ke mann me jaise yeh baat toh aayi magar ek sandeh bhi paida hua. Iske pehle ki baaki sab bhi uss aadmi ke peeche peeche jaate, unhi ke ek sadasya ne unhe rokte hue kaha.

Aadmi 1 : Zara ruko tum sab!!! Y-Ye ek chaal bhi toh ho sakti hai na?

Aadmi 2 : Sahi kaha. Kya pata ye hume fasaane ke liye ho? Kya pata hamare aadmiyon ko pehle hi inn logo ne maar diya ho aur iske aadmi hamara waha intezar kar rahe ho?

Aadmi 3 : Ekdum sahi kaha! Bhala hum kaise maan le ki tum jhooth nahi keh rahe?

Renshu ki bauhe pareshani me sikud gayi.

Renshu : Jhooth keh ke mera koi fayda nahi. Tum sab khud socho. Agar, mein chaahta toh tum sabhi ko abhi hi yahi maar sakta tha. Par, kya maine kisi ki bhi jaan li?

Uske itna kehte hi sabhi ko ek bada jhatka laga. Yeh baat satya thi. Jab se woh ladd rahe the tab se kisi bhi aadmi ne apni jaan nahi gawayi thi.

Renshu : Mein aur mera hathyar tum sabhi ko maarne me poori tarah se saksham hai. Kya tum sab iss baat se sehmati nahi rakhte?

Sab ke sab khamosh reh gaye. Kyuki, ek ek baat jo Renshu ugal raha tha usme poornta sacchayi thi. Ise nakara nahi jaa sakta tha.

Shuru se hi unhone kabhi yeh nahi socha tha ki uska saamna karna asaan hoga. Lekin, unhone yeh bhi nahi socha tha ki woh sthiti ko sambhal nahi payenge. Akhirkar, yaha har ek aatmvishvas se bhara hua yoddha tha. Magar, jis tarah Renshu ne unke aadmiyon ke saath khela, uske aage sandeh jaisa kuch reh hi nahi gaya tha. Ve sab haath khade karne par majboor the.

Aadmi 1 : Dekho! M-Mujhe nahi pata tum sach keh rahe ho ya jhooth. Par, agar waqai tumne hamare aadmiyon ki jaan nahi li hai toh... Ye baat hum sabhi yaad rakhenge.

Aadmi 2 (nods) : Hmm!

Aadmi 3 : Lekin, iska matlab ye nahi ki hum Order ke gulam ho gaye hai.

Renshu : Mera kaam sirf tumhare leader se hai. Khoon kharaba karna hota toh mein tumhe kab ka maar chuka hota. Order na kabhi inn siddhanto par chala hai aur na hi chalega.

Aadmi 2 : Aur, hum sabhi Legion ka hissa rahe hai. Hamara kartavya hai ki hum apne ghar ki rakhwali kare. Magar, ye baat bhi sach hai ki agar tum hume maarna chaahte toh sach me maar dete.

Aadmi 3 : Haan! Aur, isliye-

Kehte hue woh Renshu ke raaste se alag ho gaya. Woh akela nahi tha. Uske saath uske saathi jo pehle ladne ke liye taiyaar the woh bhi uske maarg se hat gaye.

Renshu : !!??

Unka ishara saaf tha. Veh sab Renshu ki madad toh nahi karne waale the magar apne haath khade karte hue unhone ek prakar se uski madad kar hi di. Renshu ne unhe dekh haami bhari. Aur, uske baad woh log ghayalo ko utha ke unke gharo ki orr chal diye.

Yeh jhund bhi jaise taise raaste se hatt gaya. Unke jaate hi Renshu ne wapas apni nazre jab saamne gadayi toh use ek bura abhaas hua. Woh ladka-! Woh waha nahi tha. Woh gayab tha!

'Shit!!!'

Aur, achanak-


[Renshu-!!!! Dodge!!!]

Lloyd ki awaaz sunn Renshu apni jagah se uchak gaya. Uske hatate hi sansanata hua ek teer zameen par aake gira aur-

*Booooooooommmmmm*

Ek aur dhamaka. Ye wahi explosive arrow tha. Iss baar Lloyd ne ek nazar me hi pehchan liya. Renshu abhi hawa me hi tha. Uske qadam zameen par utar hi rahe the jab uss ladke ke chehre par ek kutil muskan fel gayi.

Ek sihran Renshu ke badan me daud gayi. Hawa ko cheer ke kaatate hue aa rahi ek awaaz-

"-!!!!!"

*Swoosh* *Swoosh* *Swoosh*

Woh koodne ke baad jaha utar raha tha, usi disha me dhue ko cheerte hue ek aur teer uski orr aaya. Ek jaal!!! Apne aap uske haath ne harqat li aur apne bhaale ki chain ko jorr se kheencha. Chain kisi saanp ki tarah aake fauran hi uske haath me lipat gayi aur-

*Claaaaannngggg*

Teer chain se jaa bhid usme dhans gaya. Teer ko chain par se nikal usne use alag kiya.

'He's getting on my nerves.'


[Use the bar's power on him.]

'Hmm!'

Woh dauda. Lekin, iss baar ladka bhi uski orr dauda. Dono ek dusre ki taraf aane lage. Aur, jaise hi faasla kam hua ladka hawa me ucchalte hue ulta ho gaya. Renshu ko koi mauka hi na mila. Ladke ke uchhalte hi kuch chhoti chhoti nukeeli cheezein seedhe uski taraf aayi, jinse woh poori tarah se bach na saka.

*Khaccchhh* *Khaccchhh*

'Shit!!! Shurikens???'

Woh nukeele shuriken uske shareer me jagah jagah ghus gaye. Koodate waqt ladke ne ye pehle hi fek diye the. Koodate waqt??

'Ek minute!? Shitttt...!'

Iska matlab woh ladka ab... Uske kaano me tabhi peeche se ek awaaz padi,

"Never turn your back on your enemy."


[Renshuuuu-!!!!]

Lloyd cheenkha aur agle hi pal-

*Baaaaammmmmmm*

"Urgh!!"

Renshu dur hawa me udte hue jaa ke gira. Usne vaar ko apne dono haatho se chhek ke apne chehre ko toh bacha liya. Magar, haatho me jamm ke chot pahuch gayi. Ladke ke haath me lohe ki ek rod thi. Koi shaq nahi tha ki ise bhi usi ne banaya tha.

'This is getting troublesome!'

Haatho ko mal, Iss baar woh punah dauda. Ladka bhi uski orr aaya. Magar, iss baar Renshu hawa me chhalaang maara.

'Huh!?'

Ye dekhte hi ladke ke qadam beech raaste me tham gaye. Renshu ke ek haath me uska bhaala tha toh wahi dusre me uski chain. Usne ladke ki taraf hawa me hi apne bhaale ki nok se nishana lagaya aur bhar taqat se use ladke ki orr fek diya.

Ladka ghabraate hue turant hi back hand spring maarne ke liye peeche gulati maara... Aur, tabhi Renshu ke hontho par ek kapti muskan saj gayi.

Jo bhaala usne feka tha, ek jhatke me usne use apni orr wapas kheech liya. Aur, iss baar chain ko ghuma ke fek diya.

*Kha-ching*

Peeche gulati maar raha ladka saamne ke drishya se anibhigya tha. Uska chehra neeche ki orr jo tha. Usne jaise hi chain ki awaaz suni uski aankhein bhay ke maare chaudi ho gayi.

'A Feint Attack??? Sh-Shit!!!'

Use bachaav ka koi samay na mila. Chain tezi se aake uske perro par bandhi. Full force ke saath Renshu ne uss ladke ko chain se kass ke kheencha aur woh udta hua perro me chain se bandhe Renshu ki orr aaya aur-

*Pooooooooooooowwww*

Mayhem ka ek bar upyog ho gaya. 200% Lethal Damage. Ladke ke pait ki atadiya jaise baahar aane ko ho gayi, uske muh se dherr saara khoon nikla aur woh jaa ke seedha ek chhote ped se jaa bhida. Ped do tukdo me vibhajit ho gaya aur neeche gir gaya.

*Huff* *Huff*

Renshu apni saanso ko durust karte hue apne badan se shurikens ko nikalne laga. Ab iss ladayi me uska upper hand tha. Bhaale ko zameen par zorr se khoste hue usne apni nigaahein ladke par tikayi.

"Ab tum saari baatein ugloge!!"

***

Wahi idhar bahar ka mahaul bhi bigda hua tha. Erica jawano aur Order ke aadmiyon ko chorr ke jaa chuki thi. Aur, inn sabhi ko ab lead karne ki zimmedari uss jawaan pe thi jo Renshu aur Erica ke sang chal raha tha.

Jawaan 1 : Miss Erica na jaane aise andhere jangal me kaha akeli chali gayi hai.

Jawaan 2 : Kya hume unke peeche jaana chahiye?

Jawaan 1 : Hume pata hi nahi hai ki woh gayi kaha hai. Aise me unka peecha karna waqt ki barbadi hi hogi. Kahi hum anchaahe jaal ka shikaar na ho jaaye. Behtar hoga ki hum unke kahe anusar aage badhe aur Unit 2 se engage hoye. Aap sab kya kehte ho?

Jawaan 2 : Haan, mein sehmat hu.

Order ke log bhi uski baato se raazi the magar unhe Erica ki chinta bhi utni hi sata rahi thi.

Aadmi 1 : Mein kya kehta hu... Hum me se 2-4 log Miss Erica ko dhundhne ke liye chale jaate hai. Kya pata woh kahi kisi mushqil me fass jaaye? Aur, madad ka intezar kare? Aise me hamara ye farz banta hai ki hum unki madad ke liye pahuche.

Aadmi 2 : Tumne theek kaha. Suno! Jo bhi 3-4 log Miss Erica ko dhundhne jaane ke liye taiyaar hai woh aage aaye.

Uske kehte hi 15-20 aadmi ek saath aage aa gaye.

Aadmi 2 : Itne nahi. Sirf 4. Tum dono aur tum dono. Tum chaaro Miss Erica ko dhundhne jaoge. Jo bhi samaan abhi lena hai bag me rakh lo. Yaha se hum apne apne raaste ho jayenge.

Poorn taiyaari ke baad 4 log Erica ki khoj me uss disha me nikal gaye jis disha me woh bhaagi thi. Toh wahi, Jawaan samet baaki sabhi jangal ki aur bhi gehrayi me Unit 2 ka saamna karne ghus gaye.

Divya, uska escort Clark, security aur jawaan bhi sab saath me peeche chal rahe the. Pareshani agar kisi baat ki thi toh woh yahi thi ki Veer ke baare me ab tak use koi khabar pata nahi chali thi.

Divya : Mister Renshu kaha par hai?

Jawaan 3 : Mister Renshu aage unke kisi skilled fighter se fight me engaged hai. Unhone ye mauka hamare liye banaya hai. Yaha se Unit 2 ke saath bhidant hogi. Aap sab mere peeche hi rahiyega. Hume ladayi me nahi rehna hai. Unki nazro se dur rehna hai.

Divya (nods) : Hmm!

Usne haami bhari. Magar, chinta thi jo khaaye jaa rahi thi. Jaise jaise samay beet raha tha wese wese Divya aur bhi zyada bechain hoti jaa rahi thi. Kaaran sirf ek hi tha - Veer ki safety.

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"Damn it! Damn it-!!! Kaha ho tum??"

Erica tez raftar se bhaag rahi thi. Gati ke chalte uske baal hawa me zorro se lehra rahe the. 'Nocturnal Shade' aur 'Dead Silence' dono hi activated the, jiske chalte use andhere me dekhne ki na hi koi taqleef ho rahi thi aur na hi uske qadmo ki awaaz sunayi pad rahi thi. Woh aise bhaag rahi thi jaise ek billi raaste par bhaagti ho. Koi awaaz nahi.


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East side ke entrance se pravesh woh pehle hi kar chuki thi. Aur, Veer ki talashi me juti thi. Magar, abhi tak Veer ka koi bhi naam-o-nishaan nahi mil raha tha.

"Just, where are you-!?"

Aur, kuch duri tay karne ke baad hi uske qadam saamne ke drishya ko dekh tham gaye.

'What the-!?'

Uske saamne ek neher thi. Parantu, uske upar bana rassi aur lakdi ka pul kata hua neeche latak raha tha. Erica ne neeche jhaank ke dekha toh paaya ki pul ka thoda hissa neher ke andar bhi dooba hua tha. Usne wapas apni nazre saamne gadayi.


[Pul ko saamne ki orr se kisi ne kaata hai, Erica.]

'Tumne sahi kaha Genie. Aur, ye abhi kuch derr pehle hi kaata gaya hai. Shit-!!! Iska matlab Veer zaroor uss orr hai. Woh wapas kaise aayega?'

Woh pul ko dobara se sahi karne ke baare me soch hi rahi thi jab uski nazre unn magarmaccho par padi jo beecho beech ek adanga bann ke waha niyukt hue terr rahe the.

'Shittt-!!! Ye yaha kya kar rahe hai? Ek hi jagah par!? Aisa lag raha hai kisi ne inhe jaan boojh ke yaha par chhora ho.'


[Ab uss orr jaane ke do hi upaay hai. Ya toh tum inhe pehle yaha se kisi tarah distract kar ke hatao aur fir terr ke jao. Ya fir thodi dur side se chhalaang lagao aur fir terr ke uss orr jao. Upaay koi bhi ho, udhar terr ke pahuchne ke baad tumhe climb toh karna hi padega kyuki pul toot chuka hai.]

'I know! I know! Let's try the first method first.'

Erica ne neeche zameen se ek patthar uthaaya aur nishana lagaate hue zorr se neher me unn magarmachho se halka sa dur fek diya.

*Splash*

Magarmacch chaukanne hue, woh sabhi terrte hue uss orr gaye magar, do teen chakkar maarne ke baad wapas se apni jagah par aake jamm gaye.

'What the-!?'


[They are keeping a watch. Hume dusra method hi try karna padega. Let's go!]

'Urgh! Alright-!'

Na chaahte hue bhi Erica ko apna rukh badalna pada. Woh dayi orr aage badhi. Kuch duri par aane ke baad usne neeche dekha. Neher me halka halka bahaav tha. Lekin, ye bahaav zyada tezz nahi tha. Woh apne shareer ko behne se rok sakti thi. Agar, bahaav tezz hota toh woh behte hue unn magarmaccho ke paas pahuch jaati. Aur, fir waha se nikalna uske liye bhaari pad jaata. Shayad woh maari bhi jaa sakti thi.

'I can handle this much current.'


[Good! Then, dive in!]

Kapde pehen ke paani me koodna Erica ko zara bhi pasand nahi tha. Magar, woh janti thi ki Veer abhi mushqil me tha. Samay zaaya nahi kar sakti thi woh-

'You better thank me later, Mister-!!!'

Aur, mann me budbudate hue woh uss chhor se kood gayi.

Chhapaak ki awaaz ke saath woh neher me aake giri. Neher gehri thi aur chaudayi me badi bhi. Yeh sirf Lancang Mekong ki kayi tributaries me se ek thi jo jangal me se hoke guzarti thi. Agar, yeh swayam Lancang Mekong nadi hoti toh Erica ko ise paar karne ke baare me 10 baar sochna pad jaata.

Neher paar kar woh dusre chhor par aayi aur usne chattaan ko pakad upar chadhna shuru kar diya. Pattharo par apne haatho ki pakad mazboot banaate hue woh ahista ahista upar chadhti gayi jab tak ki ekdum upar na pahuch gayi.

*Huff* *Huff*

Upar aate hi usne ek rahat ki saans li. Uske poore kapde paani se bheeg chuke the. Halki thand ke chalte uska badan bhi ab kaanpna shuru ho chuka tha.

Genie ne turant hi 'Chameleon' ka upyog kar uske badan ka tapmaan sahi kiya tab jaa ke Erica ko thoda behtar mehsoos hua.

Aur, bina waqt barbad kiye woh punah aage badh gayi. Pul isi orr se kaata gaya tha iska matlab khatra iss orr hi tha. Isliye, woh sambhal ke apne qadam aage badha rahi thi. Kuch duri hi usne abhi tay ki thi ki tabhi use bhi-

'Huh!?'

Woh gandh aayi.

'Th-This-!'


[It's blood!]

Khoon me maujood lohe ki dhaans hawa me soonghte hi Erica ke badan me ruye khade ho gaye.

*Whooooosh*

Woh apni jagah se gayab hui aur ped par chadh gayi. Usne apne aas paas poore ilaaqe ka aaklan kiya lekin kahi bhi kuch bhi use nazar na aaya.

Ek ped se dusre ped ki daali me chhalaang maarte hue woh thoda aur aage badhi. Jaise jaise woh aage badh rahi thi, khoon ki mehek aur bhi prabal hoti jaa rahi thi.

'What the hell is this-!? Urgh!'

Aur, tabhi woh ek daali par aake ruk gayi. Neeche use saaf saaf khoon ki ek lambi rekha dikhayi di.

'Y-Ye-!?'


[Kisi blood trail ki tarah nazar aa rahi hai. Pata nahi kitni dur tak gayi hogi.]

'B-But ye hai kya?'

[Check it first.]

'Ah right! Check!'

*Ding*


[A trail of fresh human blood.]

'F-Fresh human blood? Genie?'

[Hmm! Zaroor uss Jaw Long ka hi kaam hoga ye.]

'Jaw Long?'

[Hmm! He must be using some kind of skill or a card.]

'P-Par ye kaisi skill hai jisme human blood ki zaroorat padti ho?'

[There are many of them!]

'Ahhhh!? But why?? Aur, agar ye human blood hai toh-!? Toh, unka kya jinka yeh blood hai? Are they alive?'

[I don't know. Remember, Erica! Aisi bahut si skills aur cards hote hai jo evil practices bhi apnaate hai.]

'Huh???'

[Zaroori nahi ki koi skill ya card hamesha accha hi ho. They can be bad too.]

'Hmm!'

Erica bechari chup chaap Genie ki baat sunti rahi. Use jaise ye jaan ke thes pahuchi thi ki system ka upyog insaan ke khoon se kuch karne ke liye bhi kiya jaa raha tha.

'Kya tum jaanti ho ki yeh kya hai, Genie?'


[Hmm! Mein pata laga sakti hu. Lekin, usme mujhe thoda samay lagega. Kyuki, khoon ka istemal karne waali laakho skills hai. Unme se ye kaun si ek hai iske baare me pata karne me mujhe samay toh lagega hi na?]

'Hmm! Okay! Thank you!'

[Sambhal ke aage badhna.]

'Umm! Kuch hoga toh nahi na? Mujhe kuch theek nahi lag raha.'

[Hum kuch nahi kar sakte. Hume iss trail ko cross karna hi hoga. If you want to save that guy... Then, there isn't any other option.]

'Okay! I see!'

Erica ne ped par ek daal se dusri daal par koodate hue aage badhna hi theek samjha. Neeche ka vatavaran use kuch theek malum nahi pad raha tha.

Aur, jaise hi usne trail ko paar kiya... Udhar andar Jaw Long ki bauhe prashn ke chalte upar ko ho gayi.

'We've entered!'


[Keep going!]

Erica mehsoos kar paa rahi thi ki yaha ka tapman kuch zyada hi thanda pad chuka tha. Geele hone ki wajah se use apna tapman banaye rakhne me dikkat aa rahi thi.

Bheetar pravesh karte hi use kuch ajeeb si awaazein sunayi padne lagi. Ye janglee janvaro ki awaazein thi. Erica ki dhadkane tezz ho gayi. Awaazein aur adhik bhayanak aur ugra hoti jaa rahi thi. Aur, jaise hi woh ek daal pe aake ruki.

'Nocturnal Shade' ki madad se usne dur ho rahi halchal ko gaur se dekha. Aur, jo usne dekha... Use dekh uske perr wahi kaanp gaye. Uska poora badan thar-tharaane laga. Woh itna ghabra gayi ki kampan ke chalte woh neeche girne ko hui magar, ped ko haath se thaam usne khud ko girne se bachaya aur daal pe hi thithurte hue baith gayi. Uski aankhein bhauchakke hone ke chalte feli hui thi. Aisa nazara usne aaj se pehle kabhi apni zindagi me nahi dekha tha.

Saamne-!!!

Saamne Veer ghayal awastha me bhaagta jaa raha tha aur uske peeche-!? Uske peeche poora ka poora jangal ka samrajya laga hua tha. Pedo par koodate bandaro ka samooh jo daali se latak latak ke furti me aage badh rahe the.

Neeche daudate lakadbagghe, bhediye, aur seengh waale hiran jo jhund me sirf Veer ko apne perro se kuchalne ke liye bhaag rahe the.

Upar hawa me udta baaj jo Veer ke upar kisi helicopter ki spotlight ki tarah use apni nigrani me rakha hua tha.

Aur, peeche bhaagta Black Panther, jo Veer ke maans ko apne nukeele daanto se phaadne ki firaaq me tha. Magar, khauf sirf inka hi nahi tha.

Khauf tha uss aadmi ka...! Jo inhe apne vash me kiye hua tha. Jaw Long-!!!

*Grooooowwwwwlll*

Ek aisi dahaad waha par goonji ki Erica ke poore badan me raungte khade ho gaye. Jaise hi usne Veer ke peeche apni nazro ko le jaate hue dekha toh maano uske badan se uski rooh hi nikal gayi.

Jangalo ke janvaro me se sabse ugra aur sabse ghatak ~ Baagh! Kintu, uske upar koi tha. Uss baagh ki sawari koi aur nahi balki Jaw Long kar raha tha.

Veh bhaari, peeli aankhon waala, dhaari-daar bhayankar janvar Jaw Long jaise vyakti ka wazan uthaane ke baad bhi itni tezz daud raha tha. Akhir, kitni kshamta thi usme?

Erica aayi toh Veer ko bachaane thi. Magar, drishya dekh woh itna bhaybheet ho gayi ki bechari ke perr wahi jawab de gaye.

'I- M-My legs...! G-Genie!!! Mere perr hilne ke naam nahi le rahe, Genie!!! M-My whole body is shivering.'


[Don't worry! Calm yourself!]

'N-No wonder-! *huff* No wonder his shirt was destroyed. *shivers* H-How can he???'

[???]

'H-How can he-!? Itna sab kuch hone ke baad bhi woh waha kyu hai, Genie? It's suicidal. *huff* Agar, woh waha aur raha toh maara jayega.'

[If he's running at that pace, then it means he's fine for now.]

'Y-Ye tum kya bakwas kar rahi ho Genie? *huff* Th-This is suicide! It's pure suicide. J-Just how long he has been running for?'

[Stay calm!]

'F-Fuck it-!!! Haha! H-He will die, Genie! *sniff* At this rate, he will die. *sniff* Is he stupid??? K-Kyuuu? He could have just-!!! Woh chaahta toh yaha aata hi nahi...! Even then-! *sniff* Why did he???'

[I can see now!]

'???'

[He's a man who stays true to his convictions.]

'Huh!!??'

Aur, aaj pehli baar Erica ko Veer ke uss dradh nishchay ka abhaas hua. Uss naujavan ko dekh jo aisi awastha me apne mann ko shaant banaye rakh aisi musibat se ladd raha tha, pehli baar aaj Erica ka dil kisi aur wajah se zorr se dhadka.

Veer ke punah woh bol uske mann me goonj gaye.


'You can't even imagine the chaos when 2 system holders fight each other without any restraint.'

'J-Just how many battles have he fought to achieve that level of confidence and such calmness?'

[I'm not gonna lie. I'm very impressed. Aisi paristhiti me agar khud tumhare dad hote toh mujhe nahi lagta ki woh itna shaant khud ko rakh paate.]

'!!!?'

[He might be having a very good system like me.]

'Huh-!!?'

[You are lucky... to have him on your side. Imagine the destruction he can bring if he was your enemy.]

Aisa vichaar karte hi Erica ke badan me ek sihran daud gayi. Veer agar unka dushman hota toh-!? Kya kar sakta tha woh? Woh sochna bhi nahi chaahti thi. Genie ki baat poornta sach thi. Woh sab kismat waale the jo Veer unki taraf tha.

'I-I want to help him! Lekin, mere perr kaanp rahe hai.'


[Zaroorat nahi. Jis halat me tum abhi ho uske liye ek musibat hi banogi. Khud ko shaant karo aur halaat ke hisaab se dhaalo khud ko. Use dekh ke lag raha hai ki uske paas kuch plan hai.]

'R-Really???'

[Hmm!]

'G-Genie-! Agar mein uski jagah hoti, toh shayad kab ka maari gayi hoti. Mujhe nahi lagta mein uss tarah himmat rakh ke unn janvaro se bhaagi hoti. Mere toh perr wahi jamm gaye hote. Balki, abhi bhi use dekh... Mere badan me raungte khade hue hai. Bas, soch rahi hu ki akhir uske paas kaise itni himmat aayi hogi? J-Jaw Long-!! Kisne socha tha ki uske paas aisa kuch hoga-!?'

[Abhi tum bas apne aap ko niyantran me lao. Agar, kuch anhoni ke asaar bane toh mein action lungi. I will help you. So, don't worry. For now we can watch.]

'Mmm-!!'

Woh bas Veer ke liye yaha se dua hi kar sakti thi. Iss sthiti me agar woh jaati toh Veer ke liye madad kam balki adanga zyada sabit hoti. Veer ne apni situation ko turant bhaanp ke khud ko adapt kar liya tha, magar harr kisi me ye capability nahi hoti thi.

'Fuck!! Fuck! Fuckkkk!!!'

Idhar Veer apna stamina gawata hua bhaage jaa raha tha. Ye janvar na jaane kab se uske peeche lage hue the.



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'Kya tumhe kuch pata chala? For fuck sake aur kitna time lagega???'

[Urghhh! Shut the fuck up! Tumhe andaza bhi hai ki kitni saari skills hai blood se related? I had to go one by one to look for the one that motherfucker was using...!]

'Toh? Ab ye mat kehna ki kuch pata nahi laga. I've been stalling them for quite a long. Aur, ab mujhe nahi lagta ki mein unhe aur zyada chhaka sakta hu. Jaw Long-!!! Fucking hell-!! He's riding a tiger!!!'

[Fufufu~ Are you scared? Call me 'Mommy' and I will tell you everything.]

'Huh? Matlab tumne pata laga liya?'

[Of course! Mujhe pata lag gaya hai ki woh kya istemal kar raha hai.]

'Oh really? Toh? Kya?'

[First call me, 'Mommy!' Tabhi, kuch bataungi.]

'What the hell-!? You freakin-'

[Bata rahi hu. Don't spoil the mood now.]

'Be quick!!!'

[Woh blood trail... Definitely, woh human blood tha. Lekin, woh jaan boojh ke waha giraya gaya tha.]

'What? Jaan boojh ke?'

[Yes! It was this-]

*Ding*

[Legendary skill : Jemisha's Blood Ring.
Description : The skill allows the host to have limitless perception for a certain area. Pour the human blood and form a trail to create a circular ring of blood. If anyone enters the ring, the host will immediately come to know about them.
Note : There is no limit to the area covered by the blood ring. The bigger the ring, the bigger the area which can be perceived.]

'Th-This-!!'

Veer ne jaise hi skill ka description padha, toh uske hosh hi udd gaye.

'Fuck this-!! Toh ye baat thi. Isliye usko mere andar aane ka pata pehle se hi lag gaya tha.'

[That's right!]

Jemisha's Blood Ring ek legendary skill thi jo insaan ke khoon ka istemal karti thi. Khoon ko ek golakar ki rekha me kheencha jaata tha jiske baad usme pravesh karte hi system holder ko pata lag jaaya karta tha ki woh kaha par hai. Veer ke andar ghuste hi Jaw long ko pata lag chuka tha ki woh kaha par rekha ko paar kiya tha.

'Legendary skill-!!? Uske paas legendary skill hai?'

[Not one but two.]

Pari ne jaise hi ye kaha Veer ke perro tale jaise zameen khisak gayi.

'Wh-Wha-!?'

[Have a look at this.]

*Ding*

[Legendary skill : Shayna's Blood Ritual.
Description : Bestows a set of instructions to perform Shayna's Blood Ritual. A ritual meticulously written by the legendary entity Shayna herself. The host must have 'Shayna's Access' and 'Animal Kingdom' cards before performing the ritual.
Click 'here' to view the set of instructions.

Note : Ritual will only last for 25 minutes.]

'What the-!?'

Veer ko ab jaise baatein samajh aa rahi thi. Shayna's Blood Ritual woh ritual tha jisme kuch mayavi nirdesh diye gaye the. Veer ne jaise hi use 'click' kar kholna chaaha toh woh khula hi nahi. Balki, ek notification uske saamne prakat ho gaya.

*Ding*

[Only after claiming the skill you can view the instructions.]

'Toh ye baat hai. I see!'

[Ritual ki timing 25 minutes hai. Iska matlab woh janvar bas 25 minutes tak hi uss Jaw Long ke ishaaro par naachenge. Bas, 5 minute aur hold kar ke rakhna hoga.]

'Hmm!'

[Aur, rahi baat cards ki toh woh iska istemal kar raha hai.]

*Ding*


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Card ko padhte hi Veer sab kuch samajh gaya.

'I see! Toh ek prakar se woh iski madad se unhe control kar raha tha?'

[Sirf iski madad se nahi. Use inn sab ko upyog me laane ke liye kayi cheezon ka istemal karna pada. Jemisha's blood ring hamare aane ki khabar dene ke liye istemal ki gayi thi.]

'I know!'

[Uske baad Shayna's Blood Ritual perform kiya gaya taaki janvaro ko niyantran me laaya jaa sake.]

'How powerful-!'

[Aur, uske baad unhe niyantran me banaye rakhne ke liye 'Animal Kingdom' card ka istemal kiya gaya. Isme koi shaq nahi ki usne abhi yahi equip kar rakha hoga. Itna sab karne ke liye usne apni 2 legendary skills aur do cards ka prayog kiya hai.]

'2 cards? Dusra kaun sa card hai?'

[Shayna's Access. Shayna woh entity hai jo inn tantra vidyao me maahir hai.]

'Shayna? Who the fuck is Shayna?'

[I can't tell you.]

'Fuckkk!!!'

[Uske saath communication baithane ke liye Shayna's Access card ka hona zaroori hai. Aise samjho ki agar tum kisi aatma ki shaktiyo ka prayog karne ke liye uss se sampark karna chaahte ho, toh pehle uss aatma ka ek card hona zaroori hai. Kuch samajh aaya?]

'Samajh gaya!'

*Ding*

[This is her card.]


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'I get it!'

[Good!]

*Booooooooommmmmm*

Magar, Veer zyada derr baato me lage reh ke unn janvaro se peechha nahi churra sakta tha. Ek aur dhamake ne use ye baat batla di.

[Bas 2 minute aur-!!!]

Veer ne bhaagte hue peeche mud ke dekha toh paaya ki ek baagh par baithe hue Jaw Long uski taraf hi aa raha tha. Uske haath me ek bada sa kulhada tha. Par, uski aankhein abhi bhi band thi.

'What the hell? Uski aankhein agar band hai-!! Toh, woh dekh kaise paa raha hai sab kuch?'

[It's his skill.]

'Kaun si??'

*Ding*

[Skill : Aura Vision.
Description : Allows the host to see the world even after losing the eyesight. Aura vision grants a grey scenery vision. Different living beings are shown in different colored auras.
Note : Non living things cannot be observed through Aura Vision.]

'Fuck this-!!! It's getting complicated. Akhir, aur kitni skills hai iske paas?'

Pari ne ekdum sateek aaklan kar ke diya tha. Jaw Long pehle hi Veer ke neele rang ke aura ko dur se dekh ke pehchan chuka tha ki koi insaan uski territory me ghus aaya hai.

Insaano ka aura neele rang se nazar aata tha toh wahi ped paudho ka hare rang se. Aur, janvaro ka peele rang se. Ye rang uske liye kaafi the aankh na hote hue bhi sab kuch dekhne ke liye.

[Oh shit-!!!]

'What?!?'

[I just realised...! Isliye, uski aankhein nahi hai buddhu!]

'Huh???'

[Arre, isliye woh aankhein band kiya hua hai. Ab tumhe samajh aaya ki kyu uski band aankhon se khoon beh raha tha? Kyuki, usne apni aankhein nikaal di thi.]

'What the-!?'

Veer ke badan me ek sihran daud gayi. Apni aankhein nikaal di? Kya matlab?

[Rituals pagal... Rituals...! Koi bhi ritual perform karne ke liye kuch balidan dena hota hai. Considering, ye dono skills legendary thi zahir hai usne koi na koi sacrifice diya hoga jisme usne khud ka koi ang ritual me chadhaya hoga. Now everything makes sense.]

'Wait! Toh iska matlab usne 2 rituals perform kiye. Aur, unn dono me usne apna ek ek balidan diya. Yaani ki... Uski ek ek aankh!?'

[Exactly!!!!]

'He's going to such lengths just to chase me down???'

[Use thodi pata tha ki tum aa jaoge. Usne ye sab toh Renshu ke liye prepare kar rakha tha. Humne uski mehnat par paani ferr diya. Sirf ek minute aur ab bas-!!!]

Ab harr baat sense bana rahi thi. Shukriya Pari ka jo usne samay rehte sab kuch khoj nikala tha. Veer janta tha ki use bas ek minute aur inse bhaagna tha aur fir ye sabhi niyantran se mukt ho jaane waale the.

[Also, woh unhe poori tarah control nahi kar raha hai. Bas, unhe tame kar raha hai. Hypnosis nahi hai yeh.]

'Got it!'

[25 seconds.]

Veer bhaagta gaya. Use saamne ek aur pul nazar aaya. Pul patla tha. Veer bina soche samjhe uss orr bhaaga aur idhar peeche se Black Panther theek uske peeche aate hue pul par dauda.

[20 seconds.]

Veer ke qadam tezz raftaar me pul par bhaag rahe the. Toh wahi Panther bhi Veer ki gati milaate hue uske qareeb aane laga. Pul dono ke bhaar se poori tarah se dol ke idhar udhar hone laga.

Aur, abhi Veer chhor tak pahuch paata ki tabhi uss chhor se ek bada sa ajgar pul par chadh uski orr tezz raftaar se reng ke aane laga.

'Shitttt-!!!'

Ek Deadlock!!!

[10 seconds.]

Ajgar achanak hi uski orr uchka. Toh wahi peeche se aa raha panther bhi uski orr lapka aur tabhi-

*Ding*

Panther ka perr lakdi ke pul ke ek takhte par padte hi andar ghus gaya. Probability manipulation ne ek baar fir uski jaan bacha li. Veer ne samay rehte hue khud ko baayi orr rassi par jhukaaya aur dono ajgar aur panther ek dusre se jaa bhide.

[5 seconds.]

Pul ki rassi par bhaar badha. Ek orr santulan hone laga... Pul baayi orr jhukne laga. Aur, derr na lagi jab Veer ke bhaar ke chalte pul poori tarah se baayi orr jhuk gaya.

'Fuckkkkk!!!'

Veer, panther aur ajgar samet seedhe dusri neher me jaa gira. Lancang Mekong ki ek aur tributary. Parantu, ye kaafi chhoti thi aur bahaav ekdum na ke barabar.

*Splaaaaaaaasssshhhh*

Neher me Veer chhapaak se gira. Aur, jaise hi Panther aur ajgar gire woh dono pehle toh khud ko kinare kar Veer ko dhundhe. Par agle hi shan-

*Ding*

[O seconds.]

[Shayna's Blood Ritual ki time limit khatam. They are no longer in control.]

Maano jaise janvaro ko bhi achanak se kuch ho gaya. Fir, Veer ne ek hairat angez drishya dekha. Jis Panther aur ajgar me thodi derr pehle itni ekta thi, jo use maarne ke liye ek dusre par dhyaan tak nahi de rahe the. Wahi ab ek dusre par jhapatta maarne par tule the.

Veer apni aankhon ko bas paani me se nikaalte hue sab kuch dekhta gaya. Panther ne ajgar ko apne jabdo me pakda aur use ghaseet ke le jaane laga.



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Aur, derr na lagi jab woh use apne daanto ke beech fasa ke waha se le jaane me qamyab ho gaya.

Shayna's Blood Ritual ki time limit samapt ho chuki thi. Magar, asli ladayi ab shuru honi baaki thi. Abhi woh Aquatic Breathing ka upyog kar paani me saans lene hi wala tha jab Pari ne use mana kar diya-

[Wait!!]

'Hmm?'

[Check the water first.]

'Right! Check!!'

*Ding*

[Water body induced with an unknown venom.]

'Shittttt!!! Akhir ye banda kitni dur ki planning kar ke baitha hai?'

Woh saans le leta toh abhi ke abhi maara jaata. Pehle se hi Jaw Long ne uss hisse me apne kisi zeher ko gira ke neher ko dooshit kar rakha tha.

Aur tabhi, Veer ke kaano me ek dahaad sunaayi di. Jaw Long upar baagh par baithe use hi neeche ghoor ke dekh raha tha.

'Pari!!! Agar Animal Kingdom aur Shayna's Ritual ka asar khatam ho gaya hai toh fir woh baagh abhi bhi uske niyantran me kaise hai?'

[Woh uska paaltu bhi ho sakta hai.]

'Hmm!'

Jaw Long tabhi apne baagh par se utra. Aur, ek chhalaang me hi seedhe neeche ko kood neher me utar aaya.

*Splaaaaaaaasssshhhh*

Paani chhalakte hue upar uchhla aur boondo me bikharte hue neeche girne laga. Jaw Long apna kulhada liye wahi paani me khusi ek lakdi par chadh gaya. Uski aankhein aag baboola ho chuki thi.

Jagah jagah ped ki ye lakdiyaan aadhi kati hui paani ke andar ekdum neeche zameen me dhasi hui thi. Shayad pehle yaha ped hua karte the jinhe baad me kaat diya gaya tha aur neher ke paani ko nikaalne ke liye iss orr se raasta bana diya gaya.

Unhi ardh kati lakdiyo ka sahara lete hue Veer bhi unhi me se ek par chadh gaya. Ab muqabla tha barabri ka. Do system holder jo ek dusre se bhidne ke liye taiyaar the.

Veer 25 minute ki iss bhaag daud se thak chuka tha lekin abhi bhi usme itni taqat thi ki woh Jaw Long se yuddh kar sake.

Aur, fir shuru hua asli muqabla...

*Swoosh* *Swoosh*

Jaw Long ek lakdi se doosri par koodate hue Veer ki orr aaya.

"Come then-!!" Veer taiyaar tha.

Veer ke nazdeek waali lakdi par aate hi Jaw Long ne zorr se apna kulhada ghumaya jise Veer ne jhuk ke dodge kar liya.

Aur, woh koodate hue peeche ke ardh ped par jaa ke khada ho gaya.

'Violet ke dwara di gayi saari needles aur woh serum uss blast me wahi gir gayi. I only have one knife and one pocket knife.'

[Use the normal knife for emergency parrying.]

'Yeah-!!!'

Iss baar woh tezzi me ek lakde se dusre par phaandte hue aage badha aur uski laat seedhe Jaw Long ke pait par aayi.

'What-!?'

Lekin, ek haath se hi Jaw Long ne uski taang ko jakad liya. Achanak hi Veer ke jism me ek sihran daud gayi. Aisa laga jaise agar abhi woh waha se na hata toh uska perr wahi katt ke ukhaad diya jayega.

Aur, wahi hota...! Jaw Long ne apna kulhada hawa me upar kiya...! Veer ki aankhein woh dekhte hi fel gayi. Aur, kulhada neeche aane hi waala tha ki Veer ne apni dusri taang se seedhe Jaw Long ke perr ke ghutno ke bagal me vaar kiya.

*Thuck*

Santulan bigda... Ek side se Jaw Long jhukne par majboor ho gaya. Pakad dheeli hui aur Veer ko mauka mil gaya.

*Whooooooosshhhh*

Woh palak jhapakte uske changul se nikal peeche ke lakde par kooda. Aur koodate hi uske kaano me hawa me sansanati hui aati kisi cheez ki awaaz padi,

*Whoosh* *Whoosh* *Whoosh*

*Ding*


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Apne aap uska shareer neeche jhuka aur jhukte hi Jaw Long ka kulhada uske sarr ke upar se bhayanak raftaar se nikal gaya. Uske sarr ke 8-10 baal chhalni hoke hawa me hi udd gaye. Agar, sahi samay par woh na jhukta toh unn kuch baalo ki jagah uska sarr waha hawa me udd raha hota.

Veer ne apni baah ko dekha. Goosebumps poore shareer par bikhre hue the. Aur, tabhi-

"Shebaaaaaaaa-!!!!!!"

Jaw Long dahaada!!!! Uska kulhada ab uske haatho me nahi tha. Aur, beshaq uske awaaz lagaate hi-

*Keeaaaaaaarrrrrrrr*


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Sheba raat ke uss andhere me hawa me apne par felaye aasman me uske madad ke liye haazir ho gaya.

[See! I told you! That eagle is a pain in the ass.]

Sheba ke panjo me ek bhaala latak raha tha. Woh upar udte hue Jaw Long ke nazdeek aaya aur panje kholte hue usne bhaala chorr diya jo seedha neeche girte hue Jaw Long ke haatho me jaa gira.

Bhaale ko apne ird gird zorro se gol gol ghumaate hue Jaw Long punah Veer ki taraf lapka. Woh bhari bharkam shareer, aur kayi shero ke barabar taqat rakhne waala danav insaan iss baar Veer ki khaal ukhaadne ki firaaq me nazar aa raha tha.

[Careful-!!!]

*Whoosh*

Uske hamle shuru ho gaye. Bhaale ko woh itni taqat aur itni nipudta se chala raha tha ki uske praharo se neeche paani me tarange paida ho rahi thi.

Woh jaan gaya tha ki Veer ne paani ki ek boond bhi apne andar nahi li thi. Uski ek aur tactic barbad jaa chuki thi. Gussa uske sarr par savaar tha. Ya toh ab woh yaha se zinda bach ke nikalne waala tha ya fir Veer.

Woh garja-

"Haaaaaarrrrrrggghhhhhhh!!!!!"

Uski garaj sunn Veer ko hawa me kampan mehsoos hone laga. Jaw Long ne bhaala fir itni zorr se feka ki Veer ko aage ki rann-neeti banaane ka koi samay na mila.

*Swooosh*

Woh bhaala tezi se uske perro ki orr aaya toh Veer hawa me ek jhatke me ucchak gaya.

*Thuck*

Aur, bhaala seedhe lakde par jaa ke dhans gaya. Magar, jaise hi Veer uchka...! Use agle hi pal apne nirnay par glaani mehsoos hui. Kyuki-

*Poooooooowwwwww*

Zordaar laat seedhe aake uske pait par padi. Ek feint attack. Jaan boojh ke uske perro ki orr woh bhaala feka gaya tha. Taaki, woh hawa me uchke aur Jaw Long yahi soch pehle hi hawa me kood chuka tha.

Veer ka shareer hawa me uda... Jaise patthar ko paani ki sateh par tez gati me fekne se woh uske upar tappe khaate hue dur jaata tha. Waise hi Veer ka shareer bhi iss waqt neher ke paani ke upar tappe khaate hue dur jaa gira.

Gati dheeme padte hi uska shareer paani ki sateh ko chorr andar doob gaya. Veer ne aav dekha na taav aur seedhe kinaare ki orr terrte hue woh chhor ke liye bhaaga.

Jaw Long ko jaise hi uske iraado ka pata chala, toh bhala woh kaha peeche rehne waala tha. Veer ka peecha karte hue woh bhi neher chorr ke usme se baahar aa gaya.

Zameen par qadam padte hi Veer uss se ek duri banaane ke liye bhaaga. Woh dono jangal ki aur bhi gehrayi me aa chuke the aur yaha se mine ka raasta ab thoda hi bacha tha.

Beecho beech ek jagah par aate hi Veer palat ke Jaw Long se bhidne ke liye taiyaar ho gaya. Martial arts ka stance lete hi usne khud ko taiyaar kiya. Saamne se baagh ke samaan woh danav bhaagte hue aa raha tha.

Toh wahi upar thehri Erica ko achanak hi hawa me antar samajh aa gaya. Janvar ab ajeeb tareeqe se idhar udhar hote hue bhaag rahe the.


[Lagta hai woh sab control se baahar aa gaye hai ab.]

'Ohh! P-Par Veer kaha hai?'

Woh bechain hote hue idhar udhar nazre daudayi.


[We need to check it out. Tum ab theek ho?]

'H-Haan shayad-! I can move my legs now.'

[Good! We need to make a dash. Quick!]

'Y-Yes!'

Woh apni jagah se uthate hue Veer aur Jaw Long ki talaash me ek baar fir aage badhi.

Toh wahi Veer yaha neeche Jaw Long se yuddh me bhida hua tha. Bhaale se bachte hue Veer apne attack uss par land kar raha tha magar, koi bhi vaar aisa nahi kar paaya jis se Jaw Long ko ghaat pahuch sake.

Kintu, jaise usne koi tarqeeb soch rakhi thi. Ek dusre par vaar kar rahe jaise hi iss baar Jaw Long ka bhaala Veer ke seene ko chhalni karne ke liye aaya.

*Thuck*

Veer ne khud ko peeche kar liya. Bhaale ki nok zameen me ghusi aur agle hi shan-

"Haaarghhh!!!"

Veer ki laat ne bhaale ke lakde ke do tukde kar diye. Beech se tootate hi bhaala ab vyarth ho gaya.

Usne ladaayi iss mod par laa ke khadi kar di ki ab hand to hand combat ke alawa Jaw Long ke paas aur koi chaara na tha.

Dekh ke prateet ho raha tha ki uss baagh par bhi uska koi khaas niyantran nahi tha. Animal kingdom ke asar khatam hote hi woh baagh bhi kahi nazar nahi aa raha tha.

Aur, ab shuru hui thi asli combat. Jaw Long ka pehla prahaar Veer ki kamar ki orr badha.

Shareer ko peeche kar Veer ne khud ko bachaya. Uske hontho par muskaan feli...! Woh jaise hi aage badh hamla karne ka socha ki tabhi Jaw Long ka wahi haath wapas se uss par hamla karne ke liye tezi se aaya.

'Tch!!!'

Aur, iss baar-

*Swish*

Veer ne duck kar liya. Woh tezz raftaar se neeche jhuka. Uski aankhon ke saamne Jaw Long ka pait tha. Aur, uska mukka kass ke maarne ke liye taiyaar tha.

Magar, Jaw Long bhi jaise ye padh chuka tha. Woh ghoomte hue peeche hua aur Veer ka vaar vyarth chala gaya. Agle hi shan, Veer ko apne chehre par ek parchhayi chadhti nazar aayi.

Upar jaise hi dekha-

*Baaaaammmmmmm*

Jaw Long ka perr zameen par zorr se pada aur uss zameen ke parchhatte udd gaye. Ek halka gehra gaddha waha bann gaya. Agar, sahi samay par woh na hatata toh woh laat use kaafi haani pahucha sakti thi.

[What are you doing? Probability Manipulation teen baar istemal ho chuka hai. Ab 12 baje ke baad agla din lagne par hi uska istemal dobara kar paoge. Fight carefully!]

'Yeah yeah-!! I know-!!'

Dono ke mukke, haath aur laat ek dusre se bhidne lage. Taqat itni thi ki haath se haath bhidne par hi uss ilaaqe me awaazein paida hone lagi. Neeche pade patte unki harqat ki raftaar se udd ke bikharne lage. Toh wahi chhote ped paudhe unke praharo ki gati ki hawa se lehraane lage.

Combos ke baad combos woh dono ek dusre par maar rahe the. Magar, dono hi ek dusre ke combo ender ko poora hone nahi de rahe the. Veer ki pasli par Jaw Long ka mukka padte hi uske muh se ek karaah nikal gayi. Usne apne daant meeste hue uske haath ko thaama-

*Ding*

LIMBO!!!!

Par-

*Baaaaammmmmmm*

Ek laat seedhe aake uske seene par padi kyuki, Limbo ke asar lene se pehle hi Jaw Long ne apna haath chhina liya.

Veer ka shareer hawa me udta hua dur gaya. Jaw Long pehle se hi daud laga diya. Veer tamaam maujood pedo me se ek ped par jaa ke bhida aur uske bhidte hi-

*Baaaaammmmmmm*

"Urgh-!! Uck-!!"

Jaw Long ka tabadtod mukka uske pait par aake laga. Na jaane woh yaha kab prakat ho gaya. Aur, mukke aur pait ka sampark hote hi-

*Ding*

[Bone Reaper has been equipped.]

*Craaaaaaacccccckkk*

*Booooooooommmmmm*

Ped ke tukde beech se hue, Veer ka shareer ek nahi peeche maujood aur 2-3 pedo ko ek saath todte hue jaa gira. Ped ke baad ped bikhar kar ab gir rahe the. Ab ye ladayi ghatak ho rahi thi. Bone Reaper uski haadiyo ko toh bacha ke rakha tha. Magar, pait me koi haddi nahi hoti thi...

*Bluuurrghhhhhh*

Uske muh se khoon nikla. Pait aise dard kar raha tha maano kisi ne kass ke hathoda maar diya ho.

Ladkhadate qadam ko sambhalte hue jaise hi woh khada hua-

*Gwaaakhhhh*

Veer ki aankhein hairat me chaudi ho gayi. Jaw Long ne uske gale ko apne haath ki giraft me liya aur punah kass ke ek ped se bhed use hawa me utha diya.

"Argh-! Ack-!!!"

Aur, pehli baar Jaw Long ke bol uske kaano me pade.

"Tum...! Ek acche yoddha ho!!! Magar, mujhse behtar nahi!"

Kehte hue usne agle hi shan Veer ke shareer ko upar hawa me uchhaal diya. Veer ka badan ped ki daali ko tukdo me bikherte hue aur upar ko gaya. Neeche se Jaw Long khud bhi uchka. Dusri daali ka sahara lete hue woh aur upar uchka...!

Jaise hi hawa me woh Veer ke nazdeek aaya uski aankhon me khoon karne ka bhoot sawar ho gaya. Ghaatak prahar woh Veer pe barsaane hi waala tha ki Veer ne unn hamlo ko apne vaaro se block kar unhe rok liya.

Dono hawa me hi the aur neeche girne lage. Haath perr itni tezz raftaar se chal rahe the ki bas unki after images hi nazar aa rahi thi.

Par, ek laat itni tezz gati se Veer ki orr aayi. Hawa me iss se bacha nahi jaa sakta tha keval ise block hi kiya jaa sakta tha. Aur, Veer ne kiya bhi wahi-

Jaise hi usne apne dono haath perr modte hue khud ke sarr ko dhaaka, Jaw Long ki kick uski kohniyo par padi aur woh neeche dhadaam se gir, zameen ko ukhaadte hue dur tak jaata chala gaya. Zameen ke udhadte hi waha halka dhua uth gaya.

Jaw Long toh jaise bhooke bhediye ki tarah uss par dhaawa bol raha tha. Veer ki thakaan ne apna asar dikha diya tha. Agar, woh 25 minute ki bhaag daud na hui hoti toh abhi maajra kuch aur hota...

*huff* *huff*

Uski saansein ab ukhdi ukhdi aa rahi thi. Jagah jagah badan par chote pahuchi rakhi thi aur jagah jagah par gehre ghaav bhi bann chuke the. Khoon se lathpath uska shareer kisi bhi waqt ab neeche gir sakta tha.

'H-His weight is helping him in his blows.'

Paseene ke saath khoon uske chehre par bhi fela hua tha. Aankhein fadakte hue band hone ko bol rahi thi par uski dridhta unn palko ko khol ke rakhe hue thi. Baalo ki ek latt uski aankh ke saamne aake jhool gayi. Jaw Long saamne se uss par antim vaar karne aa raha tha.

Veer ka haath apni jebo ko tatolte hue hidden knife ko dhundha aur usne tezz raftaar se aa rahe Jaw Long ke nazdeek aane ka intezar kiya.

Jaise hi woh 4 qadam ki duri par aaya. Veer ne ek jhatke me woh knife uski orr fek di. Jaw Long iss hamle ke liye jaise taiyaar nahi tha. Woh achambhav me reh gaya aur knife seedhe jaake uske kandhe me ghus gayi.

Aur, idhar Veer ki ek theory sach saabit ho gayi.

'So, he doesn't have any sort of dodging skills...! I see!'

Veer ki theory toh saabit ho gayi. Magar, Jaw Long ka agla hamla itni zorr se pada ki Veer ke poora jism andar se leke baahar tak hil gaya.

Khoon hawa me ucchla aur uska shareer bhayanak gati se pedo ko cheerte hue kayi feet dur jaa gira.

Jaw Long uski mrityu ke samaan dheere dheere chalte hue uske nazdeek aane laga. Usne wahi khusa bhaala zameen par se ukhaad ke nikaala aur ahista ahista Veer ke paas aane laga.

Veer koi bhi harqat nahi kar raha tha. Probability Manipulation ka istemal ab woh nahi kar sakta tha. Limbo barbaad jaa chuki thi. Bone Reaper keval uski haddiyo ko hi bacha sakta tha. Andar ki maanspeshiyo aur aham ango ko nahi.

Beowulf's Blessings keval uske senses hi badhaata tha na ki uski taqat. Agar woh ek neend le leta toh kam se kam woh ladayi me kuch antar laa sakta tha. Magar-

Jaw Long uss se kuch qadam ki duri par khada ho gaya. Aur, bina deri kiye woh aage daudte hue hawa me ucchla par tabhi uski aankhein bhay ke maare fel gayi.

Uske haath apne aap uske chehre ke saamne aake use dhaak liye aur agle hi shan-

*Booooooooommmmm*

Uska bhaari bharkam shareer hawa me vipreet disha me atyant dur jaa ke gira. Prahar ki awaaz se Veer ne apna chehra kar upar dekha toh paaya ki-

Koi khada hua tha.

'*huff* K-Kaun-!? *huff*'

Koi tha...! Usne upar se neeche tak kaale kapde pehne hue the jo uski gori safed twacha ke ekdum vipreet the. Wahi lambe, seedhe, kaale ghane baal jo mand hawa me lehra rahe the. Uski chamak daar aankhein jo andhere me vishesh roop se chamak rahi thi. Aur, uske ird gird fela uska woh strong aura jo inn sabhi visheshtao ko baandh ke rakha tha.

Uska yeh swaroop Veer ke dil-o-dimag me ankit ho gaya. Nahi! Balki, ye aisa tha ki ise bhoolna hi namumkin tha.

Tabhi, Veer ka dil chehra dekhte hi zorr se dhadka...! Hairat me uski aankhein chaudi ho gayi.

'Y-You-!!!???'

Woh ladki bina Veer ko dekhe aage badhi ki tabhi Veer ne use peeche se pukaarte hue rok liya.

"W-Wait-!!!!"

Ladki ke qadam wahi tham gaye. Uski mutthi Zorro se kass gayi. Jaise maano woh yaha rukna nahi chaahti thi.

"I-It's you-!!! Wh-Why???"

Parantu, ladki kuch na boli. Woh punah jaise hi aage badhne ke liye hui-

"Avaaaaa-!!!!"

Iss baar fir uske qadam Veer ki pukaar par rukk gaye. Veer ki dhadkane tezz thi. Uske mann me kayi sawaal uthal puthal machaaye hue the. Magar, inka samay nahi tha.

"Wh-Why??? *huff* *huff* T-Tum yaha...? Kyu??!"

Uski awaaz me krodh, aashcharya aur peeda sab kuch tha. Par, Ava mudi aur usne jo jawaab diya... Unme bhi yahi bhaav the.

"Why? You ask me why?"

Woh palti... Veer ne uska chehra saamne se dekha toh uska muh khula ka khula reh gaya. Ava ki aankhon me aasu the...!


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"Yaad karo Veer! Kya kaha tha tumne mujhse akhiri baar?"

Veer ne jaise hi uss baare me socha Ava utne me ek jhatke me hawa ke jhoke ki tarah apni jagah se gayab ho gayi.

"Avaaaaaaa-!!!!"

Veer ki pukaar ka koi fayda na hua. Woh Jaw Long ki disha ki orr jaa chuki thi. Magar, uske bol zaroor Veer ke mastishq me goonjte reh gaye.


'Yaad karo Veer! Kya kaha tha tumne mujhse akhiri baar?'

Veer ko yaad aaya. Akhiri baar usne Ava ko jo kuch kaha tha... Woh uss island par kaha tha jiske kinaare woh Crimson se ladd raha tha. Dhoka dene ki wajah se woh Ava se apne saare rishte naate tod chuka tha. Usne kaha tha ki-

'Tum apne raaste! Aur mein apne! Humare beech ab koi rishta nahi. And, don't you dare ever cross paths with me. You are on your own from now on.'

'And don't show me your face ever again.'


Magar, sirf itna hi nahi tha. Ava apni maa ko bachaane ke liye ye sab kari thi. Aur, isliye Island chorr kar jaane se pehle Veer ne ek vaakya aur kaha tha. Itni dheere ki sirf use hi sunaayi de sake. Lekin, Ava ne woh sunn liya tha.

Woh bol the-


'Go and protect your loved one now.'
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Aaj ke liye itna hi guys.
Update consists of 11k words. Mere khayal se ye sabse bada update hai kahani ka. Also, aap sabhi ko Holi ki shubhkamnaye. Update late aane ke kayi saare kaaran hai jinke baare me mein baar baar baat nahi karunga. Achanak food poisoning ki wajah se bhi mera swastha beech me dagmaga gaya. Anyways, update 176 is here. Baaki, likes thokne aur revos rakhne ka. Target apna 200 hi hai. Pahucha do.
Happy Holi once again!

Dhanyavad. ✨
Nice bro its fantastic pr veer ki halat zyada ni patli kr di usy come back krwao isi fight mai that would be good. Magar kahani apki hy so continue. loving it 👍
 
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I have read youur story thrice till your latest update[176]. Over all the story is good and mind grasping, but it could be more atractive and interesting. That i'll tell you how....
Desclaimer!!!!!
This comment is not for any hatred purpose, being a reader, it's my right ... So, let's start....
1: Start se story bohat achi pick up ki, scenes description or character ploting bhi bohat realistic thi. As the story progresses and veer found a system or phir pari or veer ki chemistry devalope hui. Everything was going good, but why this system is having Multiple personality disorder??
I... mean, system is not a human right? Or DID sirf humans ko hota hai na k virtual softwares ko. In the begening, veer was very curious to know about system's secrets. But now it seems like he doesn't have any interest in system, because ab pari level 10 par hai or she can answer veer's every possible questions about her. Bohat saray secrets still secrets hain jo abhi tak unfold ho janay chahyie thay or wo nai huay jinn mai system ka raaz top of the list hai...
2: Nidhi iss story mai key character hai, OK..... maan liya. She let veer stay at her home, she helped him every time for sake of veer's character devalopment. But yahan toh veer seems in love with her and wo ussay ghaas tak nai daal rahi. Means, come on buddy... Wolf bro you can do better then this. Nidhi's character is so stubbon. She is like in denile state every time, this element made your updates booring even when I was reading it for the very first time. Jab veer ne nidhi or shraya k sath kuch karna he nai hai toh wo ab tak plot mai kar kya rahi hain???
3: Now let's talk about some adultry stuff. I think this story is insest, but insest k naam par ab tak kya he hua hai... Aik devorced lirki k sath sex jo veer ki bhabi thii... Come on man this is not insest. Suman sunali or abha wo toh veer ki slaves hain na toh wo toh insest mai count he nai hoon gee or sath he baki parizaad ghar ki aurteen bhi..
Tej, Bhoomika, Arohi, ye insest element ka key element hain... But inn k sath halki phulki kissing k ilawa kuch bhi nai hua... kyou???
Kiara ko start mai verginity lose karnay k liye use kar liya or uss k baat say he uss k sath koi romantic scene he nai hai.. On the contrary, Sonia jo veer k sath itni close ho rahi hai thi uss ki bhi kuch samajh nai aa rahi, kabhi wo veer k bohatcloser hoti toh kabhi kahan hoti kdoubt hota hai k wo story mai hai bhi k nai...
I have also read your first story, Akhir kyou: uss mai jiss tarha aap ne aurtoon ka haram banaya tah or at the end ek sath bari bari rahul unhay use kar raha tha that was intance booring. Agar iss story mai bhi aap ki approach wohi honay wali hai toh bro I'm sorry to say but, your this story is going to be a big disapointment for readers....
Now let me make you understand in your way, jessay aap examples detay ho. Maan lo k aap ko nahana hai or shampoo ki bottle almost khali hai. Aap k paas new shampoo bottle hai, but aap purani wali mai paani daal kar ussay he recycle kar k use kartay ja rahay ho. Bhai jab new bottlre hai toh purani kyou recycle kar rahy ho??? SAme case with your characters. Jab itni females hain toh kyou baar baar sirf suman or abha ko sex doll bana k rakha hai? Why don't use Bhoomika, tej, arohi or kavia instead?.. Wo toh veer mai interested bhi hain... Sonia or suhana bhi bekaar mai ghoom rahi hain because aap unhay toh use karo gay nai. Right?
4: Veer ko kiara ka mission mila k use k emotions retrieve karnay hain. Agar nai kiye toh wo kabhi normal nai ho sakay ge or veer ussay kho bhi de ga.. Aik taraf kiara Julia se kehtay hai k I want veer to clame me or doosri taraf you say k she doesn't have any emotions. Or agar ye emotions, ye feelings uss mai diary padhnay k baad ayen hain toh veer ka mission abhi tak clear kyou nai hua kiara wala???? WTF is going on???
5: NOw let's come to main fighting scenes jo iss story ki jaan hain... First of all veer ka fighting style kyou defined nai hai? Martialart in genral is an amalgamation of various fighting sports. Like.. Karatee, BJJ, Taikondo, Judo, Kungfuand many more. Veer kis style or form ko carry kar ra hai????
NOw, What rationalism is this????.. Ab tak jitnay system holders show case huay hain unn k paas aik he categorie k legendary cards kyou hain? Means veer Indian region ka hai iss liye uss k paas genral cards hain, crimson america se tha iss liye uss k paas bhi genral category k cards hain like limb substitution, probability manipulation etc etc.. But on the other hand Jaolong k paas black magic walay cards hain jo ab tak disclose huay.. HOwww and Whyyy???? Legendary cards toh kismat se miltay hain na khud ki marzi se toh nai, toh phir uss k paas same categorie k cards kaisay? Waheen Ranchu k paas shaolin fighting based cards hain and so the case with rest of the system holders... aisa kyou nai k veer k paas koi black magic wala card hota ya Ranchu k paas Beo wolf blessings ya aisay he cards shuffle bhi toh saktay thay na... toh kyou nai???????
6: Crimson K paas koi buff card nai tha jaisa veer k paas veo wolf hai, right? If you say no then tis is your biggest blunder. Because crimson k marnay k baad uss k cards veer or Ava mai distribute huay thay or humay ye samajh aa gaya k kisi bhi system holder k marnay k baad uss k legendary cards he reward k roop mai miltay hain na k uss ki skils bhi, toh agar aisa hai k crimson k paas aisa koi card nai tha or wo veer se sirf apnaay stats or bertigo skil ki base par lad raha tha toh uss k stats kya 200+ thay kya? Because paris mai veer ki agility 140 par thi or kyou k full moon nai tha toh uss ki speed 50% he extra thi that means 140 orignal agility + 70 beo wolf blessings card ki agility = 210... Or iss k bavajood veer ko crimson ki agility match karna mushkil lag ra tha. uss time toh veer ki strength bhi 140 thi jo baad mai oceant island tak jatay jatay 150 tak pohanch gai thi, or iss k bavajood crimson was almost 3 times stronger then him. How????
First. crimson was fighting only with the help of his stats no buff card was involved phir bhi wo itna strong tha jab k ussay b system milay 1 ya 1.5 saal se zayada nai hua, so how can he be so much powerful???
Now comes the latest fight. Here... congratulations.... your oponent is blind... [claps, claps..] But, he has ora vission skil jiss ki help se wo human, animals or trees ka ora dekh sakta hai.. OK, no problem... But the problem is, how much insane system he is having???
Abhi tak yahi samajh aye hai k Mr.X or chchoor kar baki sab ko system milay 1 se 2 saal he huay hai. Or hum ye baat achi tarhan se samajhtay hai k itnay time system kahan tak upgrade ho sakta hai toh crimson or jaolong itna havvy system kaisy rakhay huay hain wo bhi kisi buff card k bina???? Or jaolong toh blind hai na, wo toh sirf veer ka ora he dekh sakta hai. so, wo veer k haath paun ki exact movement kaisy dekh paa raha hai???? He should not be able to see veer's movement but yahan toh scene he kuch or hai. Veer is not even able to touch him dispite of his blindness... Means, WtFFFF..

So, these were some mistakes which I remember.. In real, there are many more but unfortunatly I can't write them down. Agar aisa kia toh meri khud ki aik update ban jaye ge mistakes par.. hahaha
so this was it, hope you won't make further illogical mistakes.
Waiting for next update.. smiles..
 
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