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★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2022 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

Aagasthya

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कहानी- वो भी क्या दिन थे
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ये कहानी तो बिल्कुल नहीं है ये एक सच्चाई है। जो हम लोगों ने जी है। आपने तो बचपन की यादें ताज़ा कर दी महोदय। 2000 के दशक का बचपन ऐसे ही था। न किसी बात का डर और न किसी बात की फिक्र। दर था तो बस इस बात का की घर जाने पर पापा पीट न दें। उस समय घर वाले भी कुछ नहीं बोलते थे, क्योंकि उन्हें पता था कि शरारत ही तो बच्चों को बहुत कुछ सिखाती है। बचपन की बात ही कुछ और थी। अगर एक बार किसी से दोस्ती कर ली तो कर ली और एक बार जो दुश्मनी कर ली तो कर ली। फिर इसमें कोई समझौता नहीं होता था।

दूरदर्शन पर प्रसारित होने वाले कार्यक्रम में मोह लेते थे। तब इतने सारे चैनल नहीं थे कि उंगलियाँ चलती रहे बस एक चैनल से ही हम बच्चों का मनोरंजन हो जाता था। लेकिन आज जब हम बड़े हो गए हैं तो वो पुराने दिन याद आते हैं हमें और हम सोचते हैं कि काश वो दिन फिर से वापस लौट आएं जब हम फिर से बच्चे हो जाएं, लेकिन बीता हुआ समय कभी वापस नहीं आता।।
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कहानी का कांसेप्ट बहुत अच्छा है जो आजकर की पीढ़ी की भावनाओ और मानसिकता को दर्शाता है। जस पूनम से बहुत प्यार करता है लेकिन पूनम उसे अपना बहुत अच्छा दोस्त मानती है। इसमें कोई बुराई भी नहीं है, क्योंकि प्यार की भावना दोनों के अंदर हो ये जरूरी भी नहीं है, लेकिन ये जो लड़के और लड़की की दोस्ती होती है न इसमें बहुत बवाल होता है। हर कोई लड़का और लड़की की दोस्ती का अलग मतलब निकालने लगता है।। यहां रवि भी पूनम और जस की दोस्ती का गलत मतलब निकाल रहा है

रवि को पूनम से प्यार हो गया है शायद पूनम भी उसे चाहने लगी है। रवि की जलन भी स्वाभाविक ही है, क्योंकि उसे लगता है कि जस पूनम से प्यार करता है वो पूनम उससे दूर हो जाएगी। लेकिन एक बात समझ मे नहीं आई कि घर पूनम सच मे जस को अपना बहुत अच्छा दोस्त मानती है तो उसने रवि की झूठी बातों पर इतनी जल्दी भरोषा कर लिया और जस के समझाने पर भी नहीं मानी। आखिर ये किस तरह की दोस्ती है।।
 
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कहानी- तीन मुलाकातें
रचनाकार- Kala Nag महोदय

बहुत ही बेहतरीन और जबरदस्त कहानी महोदय। मज़ा आ गया पढ़के।।

अवंतिका तो सचमे बहुत शातिर महिला निकली। उसने बड़ी चालाकी से और बहुत ही सोची समझी चाल के तहत अपने पति की हत्या को अंजाम दिया और इन सब में अवंतिका का साथ किसी और ने नहीं बल्कि भूतपूर्व पुलिस अधिकारी ने दिया जो अब नौकरी छोड़कर सस्पेन्स और थ्रिलर उपन्यास लिखते हैं। उनके द्वारा दी गई चुनौती को अवंतिका ने अपनी ढाल बनाया और अपने पति की हत्या के लिए क्या करना है कैसे करना है प्लान में कोई खराबी तो नहीं है सबकुछ चर्चा किया। वो पुलिस वाले होकर भी अवंतिका के इरादे को भांप नहीं पाए।

आइए देखा जाए तो इसमें पुलिस अधिकारी को भी दोष नहीं दे सकते हैं क्योंकि अवंतिका ने प्लान ही ऐसा बनाया था कि उन्हें उस पर शक होने की दूर दूर तक कि संभावना को खत्म कर दिया था। ऊपर से अवंतिका ने उन्हें अपना गुरु मान लिया तो वो फूलकर कुप्पा हो गए, लेकिन एक बात माननी पड़ेगी की अवंतिका ने उनसे जो वादा किया था उसने पूरी तरह से निभाया।

अपने पति की हत्या का आईडिया उन्ही से लेकर उन्हें चौकाने का वादा किया था और आखिर में वो सचमें चौक गए जब उन्होंने समाचार में ये घटना सुनी।। लेकिन अब विडंबना ये है कि वो सबकुछ जानते हुए भी अवंतिका का कुछ बिगाड़ भी नहीं सकते थे, नहीं तो अवंतिका से पहले ये खुद पुलिस के लपेटे में पड़ जाएंगे।।

लयकीन एक बात समझ मे नहीं आती की अगर अवंतिका शादीशुदा थी तो उसने मांग में सिन्दूर और गले मे मंगलसूत्र जरूर डाला होगा तो उनका ध्यान कभी इस बात पर क्यों नहीं गया।।
 

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यदि मैं जज रहता, जो की नही हुँ... :D तो अवश्य ही प्रतियोगिता का परिणाम घोषित करते हुए इस कहानी को कांटेस्ट के शीर्ष कहानियों मे शामिल करता... बहुत ही शानदार कहानी संजू भाई :hug:

7/10
कितने कंजूस हो आप।
आप जज नहीं हैं तो क्या हुआ। यहां पर तो दिल खोलकर अंक दे ही सकते हैं। कहानी इतनी अच्छी है कि 9 से कम अंक देना ही नही चाहिए, लेकिन कंजूसी की भी हद होती है।
अब आप इस कहानी को पुरस्कार दिलाइये ये आपकी जिम्मेदारी है।
 

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Story : कर्मों का फल by Mahi Maurya

Kahani gharelu hinsha se related hai jisme Jagdish apne bete ko bahu ke sath maar peet Karne se Mana karne aata hai par uska beta usko hi khari khoti suna deta hai

fir story flashback me Chali jati hai jisme pata chalta hai ki Jagdish to apne jamane me apne bete se bhi kahi jyada wahsi aur hawashi tha wo na sirf apni biwi par atyachar karta that balki uske bahut sari ladkiyo ke sath najayaz tallukat bhi the .. jab uski biwi ko uske kukarmo ka pata chalta hai to Ghar me ek bhuchal sa aa jata hai jisme wo pregnant awastha me hi suicide Kar leti hai aur peeche apne bete jatin ko chhod jati hai .. par uske marne ke baad bhi Jagdish nahi sudharta hai aur uske kukarmo ke wajah se uska Ghar tabah ho jata hai

Present me Jagdish ko apni patni puja ka ek dard bhara letter milta hai jisme wo sirf apne bete jatin ko acha insan banane ki khwahish jatati hai

Aur fir kuch utar chadhaw ke baad finally jatin apni patni ko pyar Karne lag jata hai aur unki life ache se chalne lagti hai

Story kafi emotional thi aur writer ne iske har character ko jivant Karne ki bharshak kosis ki hai


All the best mahi ji for the contest :superb:

Rating : 8/10
 
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Accidentally Accident.

Myself Siraj, 32yrs ditched cock, 5’10’’, wide Athletic, Fair, Handsome, Chief Mechanic of a Cloud Storage MNC’s Indian Service Engineer.

I have none to care. My both parents went away in an accident when I was in the USA and my only sister married and happy. The last person I had to care for was Naina, my beloved loving wife who deserted my life when I was 30.



My barren life was moving slowly, no desire, no pain, no past, and no future, only accepting life as it is.



It had been raining very heavily the previous night. The road was slippery as well as congested with traffic.



I was lost in my thoughts. Am I a sinner as told by my friend Raghab for which I am so lonely?



What is vise and what is virtue? I have never betrayed or hurt anybody in my sense. I helped all in all possible forms within my capacity. Accepted life as it is. I never ever escaped from the Truth, whatever bitter that might be.



Never gone to any temple nor worshiped. Am I a Nastik?



I cannot see a damsel in distress. Is fulfilling one’s biological requirement on her demand or willingness without any expectation is sin? Then what is virtue?



Yes, I lived my life according to my desire without hurting anybody’s feelings. Is it sin?



My thoughts were interrupted with the sudden brake of my taxi.



We witnessed a tragic accident. A lady in her forties was seriously hurt and bleeding profusely from the head. I took her hospital instantly.



It was my first visit to Vadodara for a client visit on the personal request of Mr. Rajat, the Indian head of the company.
I walked through the corridors of the hospital. Everyone was struggling in the hospital. Everyone's in pain. I had my own pains.


One of the strugglers I witnessed there was She.



She was wearing a blue sari and looked twenty five year old. She was crying silently, sitting outside the operation theatre.



What turned my attention was her child, about one year old male child, crying incessantly due to lack of attention from his mother. I tried to ignore at first. Then I walked to her.

If you don't mind, let me handle the child...

I extended my hand to her. She looked at me as she was seeing me for the first time. She hesitated slightly. However, after holding back for a moment, she gave in.



After a few moments of walking and singing, the child was calmed down. I walked back to her. Alash! She had also fallen asleep.



She looked very tired and I thought I shouldn't wake her up. I stood there holding the child close to my chest.



I didn't know her name. But eventually I found out her name when a nurse came and called.

Naina..

What happened? I asked her in a low voice.

I came to know that her husband Karthik felled down from the staircase while going for a sopping and damaged his shoulder joint. The operation was successful but he needed 7days to stay there and now is in observation and on sedative.

They had no nearer or dearer there in Vadodara and Karthik’s uncle may reach next day from Mumbai.



It was 3 O'clock. I was very hungry. When I was crossing the medical stores I saw her again.

Sir.. She approached me

I stopped and looked at her. She had her child in one hand and a piece of paper in the other.

Sir.. I need to buy some medicine. But that ATM isn't working. I don't know what..what to do? Please help me.

I took the paper from her hand and walked to the store. She silently followed me.

By the way I am Siraj. I introduced myself and asked her about her husband.

He was still then in sedative.

The medicine was ready. I walked with her to the hospital, again. A nurse collected the medicines from me and disappeared.



I asked her if she had lunch.



She shook her head no.

Come on, let's go, have some food. I'm hungry.

She nodded immediately. She was really hungry, I guess. We went out for a restaurant.


The food was served by then. From the way she ate it just made me realize how hungry she was?


She noticed me watching her and embarrassed.


  • I was very hungry...
  • Yeah, that I can see.. I smiled.
  • Stop smiling.. You're not allowing me to eat...
  • Okay... Okay. You eat.
  • Thanks.
After lunch I paid the bill. She said she will pay me all the money once she gets access to a working ATM.



  • Don't worry. I am with you until tomorrow evening and by then your uncle might have been reached.
  • Thank you so much.
  • You are always welcome, cannot see a damsel in distress.
It was 8 o'clock by then and the night staff said nobody is allowed to stay inside during the night.


She was shocked.


The staff said nobody is allowed to stay with the patients under observation she may go to the general wards and look for some space there.



We went there and found, that wasn't safe for an alone lady like her.

What will I do now?

She was panicked.


  • We'll have to look for some hotel rooms.
  • Hotel room? No way!
She said staunchly and stopped walking as well.

  • Do you have any other choice?
  • No. I don't." She said helplessly.
  • Then, you worried about my staying with you?
She looked at me. Without saying a word, her eyes told everything.

  • Look, I'm not a moron to jump on you at every....
  • I'm here with you for what?.... Taking a hotel room meant one for you and another for me. Now I'll stay in one hotel and you'll stay in another one. Is that okay?
She was embarrassed.

  • Sorry..
  • Oh please, don't! I felt uncomfortable and insulted.
  • I'm sorry. I'm so sorry. I've not meant... She almost cried.
  • Trust me first. Else you're just pissing on me.
Though her response had almost pissed me off, she was correct. If she had agreed instantly to my suggestion with a smile on her face, what might have I thought about her?


She was struggling with the child and the bag in her both hands.

Give me the kid.

Oh no it's okay.

Oh come on, look at yourself, you're gonna faint soon.

She gave in and handed me the child with thanks.

I hired a taxi and asked for a good restaurant.


When an ATM arrived, I asked her to withdraw some bills. She went in, and came out dejectedly.

What happened? This one's also not working?"

No. It's working...

Then what?" I raised my voice a bit.

Please don't be angry. I think Karthik has changed the pin.

Oh. Shit.

She looked down and stood like a student who was missing her notebook at home and misleading the teacher. I suddenly felt pity.

It’s OK baby. Be relaxed. You're looking like I'm your boss or something.

I walked into the ATM and withdrew a couple of thousands with my card and asked the driver to take us for a boarding.

A good, standard one.

I saw her smiling.


  • You are smiling. Please share with me too...
  • No, I was just thinking about you..
  • Oh really?... May I know about what?
  • Mmm.. It was like... You're so caring and.. everything..
She lent me those black eyes for a moment to cherish.

I saw a cloth store still open and asked the taxi driver to stop.


  • What are you for?
  • Don’t You need something to change?
  • It's okay. I can manage.
She tried to restrain me a little.


We went inside the shop. It was a small one and chose a white churidar with orange flowers in it and orange leggings.


  • Enough?
  • Yeah, enough!
  • Nothing more?
  • She looked at me in confusion.
  • Should I select your inner wears also?
I asked in a very low voice. She was embarrassed. And her embarrassment was cute. She blushed and selected a pairs of inners.

I paid the bill and she collected the packet.


  • I'll repay these when I have.
  • No need, it is a gift from me.
  • No, thanks.
We looked into each other's eyes. I saw the dignity of a married woman in hers. I could sense she wouldn't relent, no matter how much I forced her.

Okay. As you like.

We reached hotel Prem Sagar and luckily, it had only one, a double bed.


I gave her Rs.5K and asked her to book that for her.


  • What will you do?
  • I'll keep searching another. I replied to her and stepped back to the taxi leisurely with a blank and tired face.
Before reaching the taxi I heard hasty footsteps approaching me. I looked back and found none other than her with her chap.

What happened? I enquired.

With a gloomy face she answered they are not allowing a single woman to board in the middle of the night.

Then?

She has nothing to say. She only looked at me with praying eyes.


  • Are you thinking about taking me in?
  • Mmm... Do you think I have any other option?
  • Oh No! Can you imagine just you and me alone in a room?
  • Oh! Come on. Don’t tease me. She blushed and pinched on my wrist..
  • Are you sure? Think again.
  • Yes. It'll have a double bed. We can split the beds.
  • Yeah we can. But why take so much risk?
  • Because, I don’t feel that.
She smiled looking directly into my eyes. It was very pleasing.

Soon we were in the room. It was a lavious one with the problem. The bed was separable, but the mattress was not.

Oh shit! There is also no option.

I laughed and said,

I am going for a shower. You split the bed. Okay?

She looked at me helplessly.



When I stepped out of the bath, she was breastfeeding and I looked directly at her. She had her sari pallu removed and her blouse opened, and a part of her milky white bulge was visible. I saw it and she saw me seeing it.


It was a great embarrassment for both of us.

Oh shit! I’m Sorry! I blurted and quickly looked away.

She tried to hide her open skin but her chap did not allow that.


  • I'm very sorry.
  • What sorry, after showing?
  • Sorry, forget it please.
  • But how? Can I?
I heard her giggling.

  • What? Why are you laughing?
  • No, nothing.
She finished feeding the child and got up. Her sari pallu fell again and I had that scene again. This time, both of those hillocks with two medium sized grapes at their top center.


Her nicely shaped round mounds, the white and silky skin cleavage between them, and, when she got up, her stomach and it's flaps and navel revealed Just for a moment, and she covered those all with her pallu.


I stood watching it all mesmerized with opened mouth.

Stop staring.

And I regained my consciousness.


  • You're caring, but you're shameless also.
  • Oh really, really a nice compliment, Your Highness. I showed my teeth while bowing my head.
She laughed. What a beauty! Her beauty was going to override my mind with each passing moment.

  • I have one more compliment for you.
  • Oh no, no more complements please. You badly need a bath now. It's already past twelve thirty. I wanted to hide my feelings.
  • Yeah. Sure.
She returned with her blouse and petticoat after a quick shower. Her open upper chest and stomach highlighted her glowing skin. Her chest bulge, not so large but were definitely round. Her flat tummy that led to the broadening hip was flawless. Her curves made quite a view and my eyes were focused on her fleshy deep navel and forgot to blink.

  • Stop staring, please…!
  • You look really beautiful, Naina.
  • That's really, really nice to hear but you're still staring at me.
  • Especially those inviting ….
  • Stop trying to make me blush..
  • But you're already …
  • Stop it, please... She blushed again.
  • Oh no! I can’t. You looked damn sexy. I am not a saint or impotent.
  • Siraaaj….!
She watched me for a moment and came closer and put her soft tender hand on my shoulder for the first time since we met.

I raised my head suddenly and looked at her eyes. She sat on the bed, and a scintillating aroma filled my nose and spread into other senses. I couldn't make out whether it was from her body or her hair which was still wet...


Her chap woke up then and started crying nonstop.

Seems, he needs a baby bed. But what to do?

She meant a cradle for the kid.


I suddenly had an idea. It was not my idea anyway. I've seen it in many homes. I took her sari and tried to reach the vacant hook on the ceiling. But it was too high. I was sure I couldn't reach it.

Can you tie this there, I mean, if I hold you up?

She looked up and down a couple of times and nodded positively.



I handed her one end of the sari and asked her to stand on the chair. She held onto my shoulder for support and rose on to the chair.

I bent down a bit and held both her knees tight onto my chest with my hands. Then I lifted her up slowly and climbed the chair. Somehow, she managed to hook the sari on the ceiling and pulled the other end down.


Then I felt a bit naughty. Instead of climbing down with her weight, I slowly gilded her downward, feeling her thighs first, then her rear bulge. I could feel her softness in my hands, and I could feel her front bulges pressing against my face. I just put my lips on her cleavage pressed. She shivered a little. I instantly had a hard on. As I put her feet back on the chair, we came face to face. Our eyes met.


  • You're deliberately doing this, aren't you?
  • Yes, I'm. Do you think I'm a Yogi?
Her smile grew even wider.

I tied both ends of the sari together and the baby bed was ready. She put her baby inside and swings it back and forth, slowly. In no time, he fell asleep.


Then the real problem arrived. Her baby was in the swing. There to be no barrier between us on the bed.


However, I was too tired from the day’s struggle. I lay on the bed, occupying one edge.

You can sleep there. I pointed at the other edge.

She hesitantly sat on that edge still looking towards me. She took a long breath and finally lied on the bed staring at me.

I could see her perfect shape now. The curve from her flat belly goes up and forms a hill shape to the thighs. Her cleavage and the hillocks were making quite a view as well.


  • You're staring at me again... She bit her lips.
  • Are you feared of me?
Suddenly, she came to me, made me flat and hid her face on my broad chest and her round globes flattened on my abdomen.



She giggled.


  • Don't giggle like that. It's killing me.
  • Have you planned anything on me, are you?
  • What do you think?
  • You are more than a Yogi. I am quite safe with you. I am damn sure; you cannot take disadvantage of me.
  • I am honored. So much faith in me? May I have a reason please?
  • It’s a woman’s feeling.
I embraced her lightly and caressed her back and hind globes a little. She had worn nothing underneath. Her body was getting warmer.



Lava inside me started melting.



I made her down and turned to the opposite side. I knew if I kept looking at her, I would neither sleep nor let her sleep.


Well it worked. I slept soon. We both were tired alike and I don't know who slept earlier.

***



When I woke up, it wasn't morning. She was still sleeping. Her head on my left arm, left hand on my chest and left leg folded over my pelvis. Her petticoat was up enough revealing her hind globes and obviously her crotch. Our crotches are pressed together. Her soft left chest bulge was flattened on my hard chest and right one on my side ribs. My morning erection was poking her already bare thigh joint.



When I opened my eyes, the first thing I saw was her face. Her eyes were closed, lips very slightly parted inviting to be cared for. She seemed at peace and quiet.



I saw her eyes unfurled slowly like a lotus bud blooming on sunrise. Her eyes met mine. Realizing the situation, I saw a sudden change in her, a sense of reality was taken over her. She started to move and tried to pull her back.

Its’ okay, baby...

I whispered and she stopped moving.

Are you in my dream?

She smiled, slightly.


I slowly feel her face and her cheek. It was soft.

No... It's real.

Her smile was intact. I moved my face forward and landed a quick peck on her forehead.

You're incredible …

She felt my erection pocking her bare loin. Her eyes grew big at once. She felt that with her hand and blushed. She tried to pull her back. But I didn't want to let her go.

I tightened my left hand on the back of her head and pulled her face to me simultaneously pulling her bare thigh with my right, and kissed her lightly while caressing her bare hind globes.


  • You're seducing me... She hissed.
  • Can't help.. You are so lovable, seems I fall upon you...
She blushed and tried to turn away. I let her go. She got up, took a deep seducing yawn before going to the bathroom swing her bulges in an erotic manner.



She wore the new churidar. We skipped breakfast and went directly to the hospital. On the way she said she didn't want Karthik to know about our staying last night. I understood that immediately. No husband could tolrate that.

If possible, can you stay away from me at the hospital?

I looked at her confusingly.


  • Actually... Karthik is...he gets doubtful too easily. If he sees us together, he may make out things, no matter what we tell him..
  • Oh. That's not really a good thing about a husband.
We reached the hospital by seven thirty. I left her alone and informed her that I will be there again by 7pm.



I completed the work of the client and reached there by 7pm.



Around 7.15, she along with her baby went out of the hospital entrance horridly as if someone was chasing her.



I look at her inquisitively.

I am very sorry for keeping you waiting so late. What to do? Karthik was not in a mood to leave him alone. She apologized.

She clutched my left hand fingers in her right. Our hands were entangled and shoulders were touching each other and her right bosom was pressed on my left arm.

I'm very hungry. She said rubbing her cheek on my upper arm,

We started walking silently like a couple. We reached a nice restaurant. She was again impressed with the ambience there.


  • I'd find myself very lucky if I was your wife... I really envy your ex-wife...?
  • So tomorrow you'll leave... She inquired in an empty voice.
  • Yes. How are you planning to forget me once you move on with your life after my departure?
She stopped eating and looked at me.

How can I? Not because I can't, but I don't want. Never...ever... You are my Krish, my savor.

I could see the flashing of love in those moistened eyes.


  • Will you buy me a sari please? She cooed with emotion.
  • Why not, I can give you dozens of dress materials if you like.
  • No, I only need a single piece of sari from you as your token of love.
I was stunned. She was in love with me.

  • Why one, why not dozens. It will matter to me a little.
  • Yes, it may matter less to you but it matters a lot to me.
I stare at her inquisitively. Her face was expressionless.

What can I answer him when he allowed me a single sari? She answered hesitatingly.

We drove to a cloth showroom. It was a huge one. She selected a sari. I wished her to select a churidar also. But she refused vehemently. But I forced her and bought her a four piece blue transparent siphon nightie of my choice.



She also did not forget to withdraw few bills from Karthik’s a/c via ATM in front of the showroom to avoid any suspicion.


  • What about the nightie?
  • It looks premium. How much does that cost?
  • That matters less. Tell me if you like that? I tapped her head with my palm.
She grabbed my hand again and came in front of me, went to her toes, pulled my head and kissed me on my lips lovingly.

Got the answer?

I was dumbfounded by her actions. What a transformation? These ladies are unpredictable.



****

Reaching the room after freshened up she changed in to the nightie and slowly slid beside me and placed her left arm and right cheek on my bare chest. Her protruding left bulge was poking my lower chest. She brushed her cheeks and lips a few times erotically on my open hairy broad chest. She bent her left leg, kept that upon my crotch and licked one of my nipples.



I was about to burst. I controlled my erection, caressed her left cheek and hairs and silently my hands moved on her back, one at her open upper back and other was on her tight fleshy hind gloves. Feeling her upper back silk smooth skin pressed her soft rear globe lightly.


  • Hey! What are you doing? Are you seducing me?
  • Not at all. I am just responding to your actions. Newton’s third law.
She giggled and kissed my nipples again, played with my chest hairs and started rubbing her knee and soft thigh over my groin.

Please stop this nuisance baby. I am not a saint but a person like you in blood and flesh with lust and emotions. I may burst anytime with your action without any notice. I grunted.

She glided over me. Her front bulges were rubbed and flattened with my hard chest. She wore nothing inside. Our groins pasted with each other, my erection was between her thighs and she kissed me hard.

I know, you are more than a saint. I can play any game with you without any fear of losing my dignity. Looking straight into my eyes, she cooed in my ear and nibbled my earlobe.

I moaned lightly, but hearing her and feeling her platonic love, my erection dropped down to normal.



I caressed her entire back not with lust but with love and affection, kissed her forehead, eyes, cheeks, lips, all over her face.



She got down the bed. At a sudden she slid the shoulder strings of her nighty and that fell from her soldier and got stuck on her erect chestnuts. She then shook her body and that descended like a leaf shredded under the pull of gravity.



My eyes failed to blink. Pupils were fixed and eyeballs were out. The white marble Ajanta statue fully unwrapped was in front of me with her full glory in bright LED light.



I sprang up from the bed but was statuesque and was not able to move a single step. She was inviting me with her wide open tender arms.



I am Siraj, became Krish and now Sidharth in front of Naina.



She came slowly jiggling her ample bulgy chest and hind plumps, garlanded her slender arms around my neck, pulled down my head slightly.

Krish, my savior. You are my throbbing heart. You made me your slave. All of this in front of you is yours. You can handle those as per your wish.

I was speechless and action less.



I was in a full dilemma. My body and mind were not cooperating with each other. My throbbing erection was still there and saluting her majesty in assertion. But my mind was set not to hamper the dignity of a damsel in distress.



Finally the brain took over the body. I lifted her bare body holding below her hind plumps. Her delicious delicate body was gilded all over my upper torso. Her loin was on my open chest. My chest hair was entangled with her recently trimmed pubic hair. I can still feel her wetness on my upper torso.



Her head was above me. Her tender hands rested on my shoulders, warm fleshy round globes were on both my cheeks and my mouth was on her cleavage.



I placed her delicately over the bed. She had a teasing smile on her face. Her lucrative pointed hillocks were heaving up and down with each of her breathings in an inviting manner to take care of those.



I felt quite helpless, trying to divert my thoughts to have control over my emotions. I lowered my breathing rate to the minimum and recalled the saga of great Viswamitra and how Menaka was seducing him to break his penance?



By then my erection had already subsided. She could not believe that. She shook her head out of disbelieve, started hitting my chest hard with her small feasts and looked at my eyes with discontent and anger and burst into tears,


  • “Oh! Krish. Who are you? Are you a Saint or a Devil? Why did you come into my life? I was calm and dead with all my emotions. You made me alive and disturbed. Oh God! I cannot live with you nor live without you. You finished me. Everything was messed up and destroyed. I want to die instantly in your lap right now. Come, tear me. Mingle inside me to prove yourself as my savor.
  • I am very sorry dear. I can’t. I can’t take advantage of a damsel in distress. You are a married lady. You are a mother. I cannot spoil the dignity of a married lady nor of a mother.
She laughed hysterically,

  • Married lady? Do you think a married lady has no emotion? She is a rubber doll having no life, no biological need?
  • Yes, she has. But being the mother of one’s child and coupling with someone other than her hubby is adultery. It’s a vice and forbidden.
  • Do you think I am a bloody bitch? I have never ever eyed any other than my hubby. I am a dignified mother. I was a dead log. But your’ caring, loving made my dead emotions alive. Why did you do that? Now, I want to live the life of a whole woman. I know I cannot live with you the rest of my life. But a single night with you is sufficient for me for the rest of my life to continue. You are my savior. You are my Krish. I love you. I need you. Can you not help me now to feel my wholeness? Please, please Krish, feel me and make my barren life worthwhile. She knelt before me begging with her folded hands.
I was dumbfounded. I had a headache. The whole universe was revolving around me.

No, I can’t. It’s sin. I uttered feebly.

She stood up, came closer to me and shook me hard holding my shoulders. She looked at my eyes.

Sin? Fulfilling the needs of a starving person is sin? Then what is virtue? You are not impotent. Depriving of sex to a craving woman is virtue? What are your shastras and puranas depicting about this?” She uttered in a sharp voice.



I was stunned by her arguments. Yes, she is right. I had no way to escape than surrender to her.



I opened my hands wide invitingly and she pounced upon me and clung to me garlanding her arms around my neck and wrapping her slender legs around my waist. I hold her from below her back plums and with one hand downed my shorts and rubbed my tool on her already wet slit for a few times and placed the tool head on her gateway to heaven and pushed hard while pulling her tight to me and entered her to the hilt on a single go tearing her already drenched oozing love channel with a ‘Fuch’ sound.

Ahhah…..You are incredibly huge. It’s tearing me. Be slow and gentle please.

I bent down slightly and placed her head on the bed unwrapping her hands around my neck and became straight again. Her head and half of her upper back were touching the bed and her lower half were in the air in support of her legs wrapping around my waist still engulfing me inside. I licked her belly button on her flat slant belly. Her love mound was protruding out of her slit. I twitched that with my right thumb and index finger. Her body sprang up and her leg grip loosened and before falling down I supported her holding her buns from below with my hands. My member was about to get out of her when she loosened her leg grip and hit her G-spot hard when my hands gave her support from below and she shrieked loudly out of pleasure and met her maiden explosion of the evening and gushed out heavily.



I smiled at her and she closed her eyes out of shyness. Then I started her pumping slowly holding her buns from below starting from her G-spot to ending with her A-spot left, right and middle rhythmically. My glanshead never forgot to kiss her cervix with my each and every trust. She was in seventh heaven, shrieking like hell out of pleasure and gyrating her pelvis nearing to her another climax and so I am.



I was relieved from her leg grip and placed her fully on the bed and her legs were hanging down at the edge of the bed. Put pillows under her buns to adjust the height, put her legs on both of my soldiers. I looked at her, our eyes met and she smiled teasingly.



I entered her in a single go in a standing position and my tool head struck her cervix head directly and she shrieked out of pain.


  • You brute. What are you doing? Are you planning to rupture my uterus with your monster?
  • Sorry darling. Sorry for the inconvenience?
I downed her legs from my shoulder realising that was a dangerous position for her and she gripped my waist with her legs again. I bent down and kissed her light but she grabbed my head tight and crushed my lips hard and soon we were in a long hard smooch. I went on pumping her hard touching every inch of her love canal and lava inside me started boiling to erupt. I broke the smooch and we were panting heavily. Her body was going stiff and her leg grip around my waist was going tighter. It seemed, she was also in the way as I was. A huge orgasm was building in us.

  • Naina, I am going to down. I don’t have any protection. Where to unload?
  • Cum inside me. It will be my pleasure.
  • Are you in your safe period?
  • No, I am in the mid of my period.
  • Oh Shit! It is the most vital period to be conceived.
  • Yes, I know. So I want you to cum inside me.
  • It’s dangerous. If you got impregnated?
  • I want that to happen.
  • What about Karthik?
  • I don't care. I want your seeds inside my womb. That’s all.
I was under the pressure of my load. Already boiled lava inside me is about to erupt. I went on thrusting and thrusting. I found her body went rigid and my tool tip struck her cervix mouth. They greet each other pulsating hard. At a sudden she clutched me tighter, her body convulsed and her cervix mouth was got opened and simultaneously I exploded my load with a “Aah..” and my loads unloaded directly inside her uterus.

Xxxxx

It was 5.30 in the morning. She was still on me with a mischievous smile on her face. It was the times' errand that we needed to be parted.


  • Sweet heart, its’ time now for us to be parted. I said in a husky voice.
  • No, no. Not so soon. Let me enjoy my love nest more. She said in a tired tone.
Her mobile rang. It was Karthik’s uncle reaching the hospital within half an hour.



She lifted her head from my chest, moved up slightly and gave a peck on my lips.



We were running out of time and were out of the wash room after a quick bath. She turned to the mirror and made her hair. I sat in the bed watching her for the last time.

You dog's tail. Will you please stop staring at my back?

She looked at me through the mirror.


  • I’m not staring at your back. Actually, I am looking at your front bulge. They're truly..
  • Stop it!
  • I can't believe it, you know, you were with me last night and those were in these hands...
  • I told you... Stop it.
  • What are you really, madam? I am still unable to fathom you.
This time she turned to me.

We are running out of time. Being not dressed you're just sitting there and trying to flirt with me?

She came to the bed and started hitting me with the towel.


  • Go. Go. Quick ..quick...
  • So we're parting.
She looked at me. We both stood still. Our worlds stood still.

Yes, we are.

Her voice wasn't audible to me. She quickly looked away

I also concentrated on getting ready. We didn't utter a single word for the next half an hour.


  • You stopped talking, gentleman!
  • I will miss you. I finally managed to say.
She tried to smile.

  • I may miss you too. If... If I ever... If I ever end up in a divorce, would you like me to call you?
  • Oh shit! What a stupid idea. Forget it.
  • Yes you should.
  • And we shouldn't even think about it.
  • Right.
  • We're not going to meet again, ever.
  • Yes.
  • We should... we should delete our contacts.
  • What? I yelled.
  • We should not keep our numbers. We should delete those. Otherwise we will see each other again. We will expect each other's call.
  • Yes I got it. We should delete those. Are you sure?
I pulled out my mobile and handed it over to her to delete her number. She also took her mobile from her bag and handed it to me.

All is well

I said without looking at her and walked to the door.

Xxxxxxxxx

What have we done? I've never expected this from me. Any of this. Not even in my craziest dreams. She said.

We were sitting as usual, her hand around my waist, head on my shoulder and her chap on her lap.

You know I had stopped dreaming, long back. But now I will have a new dream. It's You.

I just smiled at her and kept my hand around her shoulder.


  • Am I a cheap woman, Krish?
  • Am I a cheap woman, Siraj? She repeated not hearing me.
  • No never! Don't even think about it. And don't even think about what happened. It was an accident that happened accidentally.
  • Are you ashamed of that?
  • Yes, I am…..
  • But in no way that matters to me anyway. She laughed.
  • But that matters to me.
He rose her brow querying.

I am very sorry, I loaded you last night. Believe me, you made me out of control. I was not intending that. I am worried, what will happen if you get impregnated? I am feeling guilty. Will I help you in getting a pill?

She listened to me coolly and started in a calm and firm voice.


  • Siraj, I learned from you that all our acts and moments are predestined. Do not know where it was written? But I believe your words. Our roads were designed to cross like this, and now it's time to move on.
  • You did nothing other than caring and loving me like an obedient. You were nothing but a puppet having your strings in my hand. Whatever happened happened on my errand and on my demand, on my will and there was nothing of yours personal.
  • I am not feeling guilty of my act then why you?
  • Do you think I am going to miss you?" She enquired.
  • Don’t know. But I'm going to miss you, more than anything in my world. You will be one of the best events ever to happen in my life. Love makes you helpless. I learnt.
  • Will you be able to love Karthik like you did before meeting me? I asked her.
She thought for a few moments before replying.

  • I thought we were in love with each other. But now I realise ours wasn't love. It was merely a deal, known as marriage. You know, when I married him, I was convinced that he loved me. I believed it so well. But the last days with you made me realize what love is. Loving is caring. Believing. Accepting. Encouraging. You sent me to the hotel reception entrusting and encouraging me as a whole person who is capable of doing things for oneself, and at the same time you stayed out to ensure my safety. It was your caring for me, I have learnt a lot of things from you. You turned to Krish for me, Its’ a sacrifice. I have already lived my whole life in your embrace, how little that may be does not matter. You taught me how to live and love. I know Karthik is a good person, I will love him even more than I did before I met you without any expectation that you also taught me.
  • In case you got impregnated with our union, how are you going to face it? You have not united with your hubby for a long time. How to face him? What will be your future? Better to have a pill. It’s not late, just yesterday.
She laughed,

  • Are you afraid of yourself? I may claim my child’s identity if anything happens to me later on. Do not worry, be assured, you are not going to face me in future in any way, in any case, it’s my promise. I have got what I needed from you. I am satiated fully. I lived my life to its full content. I love you. I needed your seed in me, not you. So I have.
  • I am not worried about me. I have nothing more to lose. I care about you. I am worried about your future relationship with Karthik if that happens anyway.
  • Thanks Siraj, for your kind concern. After the encounter with you, I care for none even if my parents. You made me capable of writing my own destiny. Don’t worry, now I can face the world single handedly.
I felt a sense of relief, that I had ended up soreness in her life and I would not be the root of disturbance in her stable life in future. I have made a naive girl self confident. I wasn't worried about me but her. And her words made me believe that we can move on smoothly in future.



But, did we?

We were approaching the hospital. She had told me not to get down, as it will be hard for her to say goodbye.

The car stopped outside the hospital gate.


She quickly turned to me and pressed her lips to mine for a moment.

I will miss you Krish. But it's okay. She smiled with pain in her eyes.

She looked away quickly. I knew why.

Goodbye, Naina.

I said as she opened the door and stepped out. She slammed the door hard and ran away. She didn't even look at me once till entering the Hospital.


My heart was bleeding. Vadodara is now a dungeon for me. Cannot wait till evening for my train. Told the driver for the airport.


Her mobile number was still on my call logs but I was hopelessly helpless.

I returned to my mobile screen, touched the call logs' options, and clicked the 'clear all' button and started my journey in search of the Truth,



What is Vice and what is Virtue……?
Bahott hi ajeeb laga. Ek shaadi sudha aurat jo ek bachhe ki maa hai woh ek aise insaan ke saath jisko woh jaanti tak nhi uske saath ek hi kamre mein raat guzarti hai. Agli raat ko uske saath sex karti hai aur ab usi se pregnant bhi hona chahti hai.

Aur innsab mein woh bhul gayi ke uska pati hospital mein admit hai. Yeh sab bahot hi ajeeb laga.

Koi bhi achhi ladki aisa nhi karegi. Isse yeh toh pata chal gaya ke Naina kis tarah ki ladki hai.

Aur yeh Siraj jo vadodara apne kaam se aaya. Par usse hospital jaana padha aur waha usse Naina mili. Par yeh toh uski madad karne ke baad uske pichhe hi lag gaya. Itni jyaada care aur love ek anjaan shaadi sudha aurat ke liye kisliye. Upar se uski biwi ka naam bhi Naina hi hai.

Khairr jo bhi tha jaisa bhi tha bahot hi ajeeb laga mujhee.
 
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This shall too pass by Sasha!

After the start of the contest, I asked Lamu one day that.. when are you gonna post the story this... I want to call your story boring, again :D( coz according to her, years ago I reviewed her story as a boring story on xossip.com) and i was pretty sure that.. Her story will give me that chance...

But Men...... Women.... UAs, Aliases, gays, cucks.... How wrong i was :blush:

Lamu's story has not only won my heart and head but probably won the contest too... (Though I haven't read the all stories of the contest , but imo, it's the only story that has the potential and power to compete with Hariya kaku's Everything is Binary)

Just like that, IP is fan of Lamu's writing skills... I thought they were praising each other coz of their matching matching lesbian and bdsm thoughts :rofl: but i was wrong again.....:cool:

Don't know if those emotional scenes of the story or the plot of the story moving like the waves of the sea, again and again... which I compared to Hariya's sci fi story soon after reading this....


Presenting such a huge plot in the form of a short story is a praise in itself.. And now, after praising the writer and the story in this level... If i will talk about story's language etc. It will be like... Yuddh khatam ho gaya aur teer dhanush leke main abhi aa raha hu... Lamu has threaded each word with great effort in the story.... Overall a great movie or webseries plot :adore:

The Only thing which i didnt like is... Its title :yuck: but since the Writer has decided... My review in one line will be...

This Shall too win..... :cheers: pardon the typos, i am drunk babes :cool2:

8.5-9/10


Aaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :shag:

Thats sad

Thats even sadder
Thank you so much, getting this response from you means a lot to me and have put the biggest smile on my face today. I am so glad that I didn't bored you this time :D
 

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Story : साजिश written by Mahi Maurya

As the name suggests ye ek thriller story hai jisme writer sahiba suspence ne kut kut Kar bhara hai

story me ek raees mahila ritika ki hatya ho jati hai jisme case ko investigate kar rahe commissioner aur crime branch ke officer hi involved the .... Ritika ek psycho type ki ladki this jiske commissioner ke sath najayaz tallukat the aur wo Aditya se bhi pyar karti thi

murder ke 2 saboot mile ek dairy aur ek kagaz is tukda jise writer expert ko dikhane ke baad guthi suljhi jisme Aditya ko khooni karar Diya Gaya aur commissioner ko hatya ki saajis rachne ke liye 5 saal ki saja sunayi gayi


Story ke aakhir me aditya me apna jurm Kabul karte huye Jo bhi kaha hai usse ye samajhna mushkil ho Gaya hai ki asli gunehgar kaun hai aur yehi writer ki khasiyat hai ki inhone sari Kahani Bata Kar bhi readers ko sochne ke liye chhod Diya hai ki wo khud hi decide kare ki unke anusar story ka main villain kaun hai

All the best mahi ji for the contest you have written such a masterpiece :superb:

rating : 8.5/10
 
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कहानी का कांसेप्ट बहुत अच्छा है जो आजकर की पीढ़ी की भावनाओ और मानसिकता को दर्शाता है। जस पूनम से बहुत प्यार करता है लेकिन पूनम उसे अपना बहुत अच्छा दोस्त मानती है। इसमें कोई बुराई भी नहीं है, क्योंकि प्यार की भावना दोनों के अंदर हो ये जरूरी भी नहीं है, लेकिन ये जो लड़के और लड़की की दोस्ती होती है न इसमें बहुत बवाल होता है। हर कोई लड़का और लड़की की दोस्ती का अलग मतलब निकालने लगता है।। यहां रवि भी पूनम और जस की दोस्ती का गलत मतलब निकाल रहा है

रवि को पूनम से प्यार हो गया है शायद पूनम भी उसे चाहने लगी है। रवि की जलन भी स्वाभाविक ही है, क्योंकि उसे लगता है कि जस पूनम से प्यार करता है वो पूनम उससे दूर हो जाएगी। लेकिन एक बात समझ मे नहीं आई कि घर पूनम सच मे जस को अपना बहुत अच्छा दोस्त मानती है तो उसने रवि की झूठी बातों पर इतनी जल्दी भरोषा कर लिया और जस के समझाने पर भी नहीं मानी। आखिर ये किस तरह की दोस्ती है।।
Shukriya aap ne meri kahani pr visthar se review diya....baat aisi hai ki pyar mein insaan ek baar toh doob jaata hai uss sameh usse pyaar k bin kuch achha nhi lgta yehi Poonam ke sath hua... lekin time nikalne pr jab usse ravi mein v kamiya nazar aane lgi uski ankhon se Ravi ka parda hatne laga....aur akhir mein dost toh humare sath hi hota hai kuch v kyu na ho.....
 

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Story : ये कैसी बिदाई । Written by SANJU ( V. R. )

Story kafi emotional hai jisme writer ne apni behtarin lekhni kaushal ka bharpoor pradarshan Kiya hai

story maa aur uske bachcho ke relation par based hai ... Ek maa apne bachcho ko na Jane kitne pyar aur naazo se paal posh Kar bada karti hai niswarth bhaw se jab wahi bachche bade ho jate Hain to eklauti maa ka bhi bhar uthana unke liye kathin ho jata hai


Story me writer ne ek bebas aur lachar maa ka chitran Kiya hai jiska bada beta usko sirf isliye chhod jata hai ki uske baap be matte samay usko apni jameen me hissa nahi Diya tha ... Wo apni maa aur chhote bahan aur Bhai ko chhod Kar biwi ke sath nikal jata hai

Chhote bete ko bhi jab padhayi ke liye Bahar Jane ki jarurat hoti hai to maa ne badi mushkil se usko 200 rs. Udhar lakar diye Taki uske bachche ko koi taklif na ho

Dono Beto ke Jane ke baad dono bebas maa beti par bhi duniya ne julm dhaye aur beti ki ijjat lut li jiske baad unki jindagi aur bhi kashtdayi ho gayi ... Khair ek bhalemanus me beti ko apna liya aur beti bhi doli vida ho gayi aur chhod gayi ek bebas aur lachar maa ko jisne jindagi me dikh ke siwaye aur kuch na dekha tha

Apne bachcho ki wapsi ka intjar karte karte wo budhi maa ki aankhein thak jati Hain aur wo duniya se Chali gayi ...

Wonderful story written by SANJU ( V. R. ) & All the best for the contest :superb: .. your story have everything in it which makes it one of the best story

My Rating : 9.5/10 :declare:
 
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