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★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2022 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

Adirshi

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This story really fulfilled all my wishes of reading... Plot se lekar characters tak... Ambition se lekar treachery tak... Fir sad ending.. Aaaahhhhhhhhhhhh:blush: jo ekdum kuch pal ke liye udas kar de ki.. Bc ye kyu hua.. Iski maa kaa.. :angry++:
Bas bhau aap itna bol diye kahani likhna safal ho gaya hamara :bow:
Wa ise Jaise hee Nilesh ne kaha ki wo patent nahi karwana chahta apun samajh gaya ki ye manager, bajaj aur Shanaya lawdi milke dhokha degi... :smarty: par kaise.. Ab wo jyada romanchak tha... Aur ummid thi ki at the end kuch bhi karke Nilesh baji jeetega.. Par afsos aisa nahi hua :verysad:
Saamne walo ki planning bhi to jabardast thi, baki apun bhi sab happy end karte karte pak chuka tha to socha ke ye baar sad end pe khatam karke dekha jaye baki nilesh fight back kar sakta tha but fir wahi sab iska andaja laga lete ke aage kya hoga 😌
Awesome emotional story with sci fi elements 💥💥 aur yadi ye non competitive nahi hoti toh awashya hee top 3 me se ek sthan kaayam karti.. Level hee aisa hai.. Aur sath hee sath ek dhansu sequel ka bhi marg khul jaata hai, jis hisab se ending hui hai :blush:

8/10
Bahut bhaut thank you bhau :hug: :cheers:
Randi.. Sali.. चोदरी,
Ab apne hi banaye character ko kya hi gaali du :angrysad:
 

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Kya gazab story likhe ho be padh kar sach me maza aa gaya chamdi matter ko story ka plot bana ke story likhne ka idea brilliant tha :superb:
Ab nilesh ko intelligent bole ya chutiya pata nahi lekin iska character sach me damdaar tha sharirik kamjori wala admi ke jivan ko badi achhi tarikhe se pesh kiya hai
Baki story line badhiya thi lekin fir bhi kuch kami lag rahi hai shayana ka behaviour shaq paida karne wala lag raha tha shayad isliye story ka end predictable sply tab jab chair wala part aya tab
Story achhi thi par Adirshi ke standard ke hisab se average lagi mujhe
My Rating - 7.5/10
 
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Kya gazab story likhe ho be padh kar sach me maza aa gaya chamdi matter ko story ka plot bana ke story likhne ka idea brilliant tha :superb:
:smarty: thanks bhai :hug:
Ab nilesh ko intelligent bole ya chutiya pata nahi lekin iska character sach me damdaar tha sharirik kamjori wala admi ke jivan ko badi achhi tarikhe se pesh kiya hai
Baki story line badhiya thi lekin fir bhi kuch kami lag rahi hai shayana ka behaviour shaq paida karne wala lag raha tha shayad isliye story ka end predictable sply tab jab chair wala part aya tab
Mere hisab se nilesh ke liye dono hi shabd suit karte hai, situation ke according use karlo, intelligent bhi aur chutiya bhi...
Story achhi thi par Adirshi ke standard ke hisab se average lagi
Mera standard :faint: bhai main itna acha bhi nahi likhta be :D
My Rating - 7.5/10
Dhanyawaad bhai :hug:
 
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रचनाकार- Adirshi महोदय


बहुत ही बेहतरीन और लाजवाब कहानी महोदय। कहानी sci fi भले ही है लेकिन समझ में पूरी आ रही है। इंसान आजकल अपने स्वार्थ के लिए कुछ भी कर सकता है।।

आजकल इंसान का ज़मीर सच मे मर चुका है।। इंसान इतना स्वार्थी हो गया है कि उसे पैसों के आगे किसी के नेक इरादे दिखाई ही नहीं देते।।

नीलेश एक दिव्यांग व्यक्ति है,
लेकिन जैसे कि लोग कहते हैं कि ईश्वर अगर आपसे एक चीज़ छीनता है तो उससे भी ज्यादा आपको देता है। नीलेश के साथ भी यही हुआ था। बचपन में किसी बीमारी के चलते भले ही वो दिव्यांग हो गया हो लेकिन उसमें प्रतिभा की कोई कमी नहीं थी। वो हर उस प्रतिभा का धनी था जिसके लिए लोग तरसते हैं। उसने अपनी प्रतिभा का उपयोग देश सेवा और गरीबों की मदद के लिए उपयोग करने का एक अच्छा और साहसी निर्णय लिया।।

शनाया, शक्ल सूरत से जितनी खूबसूरत थी उसका दिल उतना ही ज्यादा काला था। महाधूर्त थी वो। उसको किसी के जज्बात से कोई मतलब नहीं था बल्कि वो नीलेश के साथ इसलिए काम कर रही थी कि उसका जो फॉर्मूला है कृत्रिम मानव अंग बनाने का उसे हासिल कर सके।। शनाया का नीलेश के प्रति प्यार, झुकाव सब एक चाल का हिस्सा था। वो बजाज के साथ मिलकर इस दुनिया पर राज करना चाहती थी इसीलिए उसने निलेष को गुमराह किया और उसका फॉर्मूला चुरा लिया, साथ मे नीलेश को पागलखाने में भिजवा दिया।

अब इसमें नीलेश को क्या कहें समझ मे नहीं आ रहा है। जैसा कि शनाया ने नीलेश को कहा कि वो महामूर्ख है। तो ऐसा मुझे भी लगता है,
क्योंकि किसी पर हद से ज्यादा भरोसा करना भी ठीक नहीं है खासकर लड़की पर तो उस समय बिल्कुल भी भरोसा नहीं करना चाहिए जब आपने अंदर कोई कमी हो और लड़की आपके साथ अत्यधिक प्रेम और मित्रवत व्यवहार करें। क्योंकि लड़की कभी भी एक दिव्यांग को अपना हमसफ़र नहीं बनाएगी। यहीं पर नीलेश गलती कर गया और हनी ट्रैप का शिकार हो गया।।

कहानी सच में बहुत अच्छी है। कहानी की स्थिति, परिस्थिति, पटकथा, संवाद और संवेदनशीलता बहुत ही उच्च कोटि की है। टॉप तीन कहानियों में ये कहानी चुनी जानी चाहिए।
 
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Behn ko bhai se chudwaya behn ki hi saheli ne

Hum family me sirf 4 log hai,Mere Mummy Saroj 45 yr,mere papa Rajan 48 yr,Me Vikas 26 yr B tech ki hai, fair colored, height 5ft8 inch,achhi personality hai meri, aur meri behen Shallu👇 21 yr,fair colored, 5ft2inch

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height, figure 34 30 36. mere mummy papa gaon me rehkar kheti karte hai, kafi zameen hai, hum ameer hai.Meri sehar me achhi naukri laggi hui hai, company ne mujhe achha flat diya hua hai.Meri behn ne plus 2 pass kar li thi, to mummy papa ne usko mere pass bhej diya, College me dakhla lene aur mere saath rehne ke liye. Mene apni behn ko College me dakhla dilva diya, Shallu ke marks achhe the to koi dikkat nahi hui.Kuch hi dino me meri behn ki ek class mate Pihu uski achhi friend ban gayi.Pihu bhi meri behn ki tarah hi beautiful thi, dono friends takriban ek jaisi lagti thi.Me apni behn ko College chhodne aur lene jata tha, to mere se bhi Pihu kuchh frank ho gyi thi.Jab me College jata tha to kai baar Pihu mujhe bahane se touch karti rehti thi, kabhi mere lund ko touch kar deti, kabhi apne boobs mere sath daba deti.Mujhe bhi achha lagta tha.Jaise meri behn ne muhje baad me sab kahani batai: ek din, Pihu ne apne mobile me meri behn ko blue film dikhai. Shallu ne bahut enjoy kiya film ko, mujhe Shallu ne mobile dilane ke liye kaha, mene usko next day mobile dila diya. Fir dono friends blue films dekhne lagi mobile per, aur apas me porn msg share karne lagi.Pihu ne Shallu se kaha asli maza to lund chut me lene me hai, film se to hum bas, chut me fingering kar ke jhad hi sakti hai.Shallu ne kaha boys se agar chut marvai to baad me blackmail karne lag jaayege.Pihu ne kaha ek tarika hai agar tum mano to, me tumare bhai ko pata leti hu, fir hum dono mauj karege,aram se chut marva liya karege Vikas se.Shallu ne kaha Vikas to mera bhai hai, aur vo mujhe aisa lagta bhi nahi hai. Bhai hai to kya hua, lund to uska bahut bada hai, 9 inch lamba aur 2 inch mota hai, mast maza dega hum dono ko.Tum kese keh sakti ho, uska lund bada hai, Pihu ne kaha mene to kai baar pakad ke dekha hai uska lund, agar tu ha kare to jald hi uska lund pehle tumhare hath me aur phir teri chut me hoga.Shallu ne kaha me tyar hu lekin mujhe nahin lagta Vikas aisa hai.Pihu ne kaha tum bhi to pehle aisi nahi thi,lund aur chut ke hatho sab majboor ho jate hain.

Tum ab ghar me bra aur penty mat pehno, apne top ke upar ke 2 button khule rakho, apne room me, jab Vikas aye to usko apne mummay dikhana, aur ho sake to kisi bahane se apni chut bhi dikhana, uski body ke sath apne boobs dabana.Kal mujhe batana, phir agge bata dungi. Shallu ne ghar a kar vesse hi kiya, jab usne apne boobs Vikas ke sath dabaye, to Vikas ne bhi bahane se uske boobs masal diyev aur uski gand per hath pher diya. Shallu ne College a kar Pihu ko sab bataya. Jab Vikas, College me Shallu ko lene aya, to Pihu ne kaha aj tum ,hum dono ko treat do, Shallu ke test ka result excellent aya hai, sath hi Vikas ka loda masal diya. Vikas ne fauran ha kar di aur dono ko bike per baitha liya. Shallu Vikas ke sath lag kar aur Pihu uske pichhe baith gyi.Raste me Pihu jan bujh kar Shallu ke mummay Vikas ke sath press karvati rahi, aur ek bar to uska hath pakad kar achhe se Vikas ke lund per bhi rakhva diya.Restaurant me teeno cabin me baith gye, Vikas beech me baitha. Shallu unko bolkar bathroom chali gayi. Uske jate hi Pihu ne Vikas ka lund pakad liya, aur Vikas uske mummay dabane laga. Pihu ne kaha, tume apni behn ki zaraa bhi fiqr nahi, bahut heat me hai vo, aj chod do usko, agar aisa na kiya to kisi aur ka lund apni chut me dalva kar, tumhari badnami karva degi.Abhi jyada baat nahi kar sakti, me tume msg karungi, jaise kahungi, vaise hi karna,Vikas ne achhe se uski chuchiyon ko daba kar, ha kardi. Itne me Shallu a gyi, aur treat ke baad sab apne ghar pahuch gaye.

Raat ko 9 p m per, Shallu ko Pihu ka msg aya, kya kar rahi ho.Usne kaha, kya bataun yar chut me ag lagi hui hai, jab se tumne Vikas ke lund per mera hath rakh vaya hai.Me tujh ko thori der baad msg karti hu, teri chut ki khujli ka ilaj dhund kar.Phir Pihu ne Vikas ko msg kiya, kese ho handsome. To Vikas ne kaha mera lund tumne khada to kar diya,ab iska koi ilaj bhi to kar yar.Pihu ne msg kiya, ab Shallu ayegi tumare room me tumare sath saune ke liye.Tum ne jaise marzi us ki chut me lund dal dena, vo kuchh nahin bolegi.Vikas ne kaha, kahi vo gusse na ho jaye, aur tum kab dogi apni chut. Pihu ka jawab aya, vo khud chal ke ayegi tumare pass apni chut me lund dalvane, phir gussa kaisa,vo khud sauti rahegi, kuch nahi bolegi, tum jaise marzi usko chodte rehna, ek baar tum Shallu ki chut marlo,phir me bhi Marva lungi apni chut tumse.Pihu ne phir Shallu ko msg kiya, tum Vikas ke room me ja kar, usko kehna, mujhe dar lagta hai, mujhe tumare pass sauna hai, aur uske sath let jana.Phir vo jisse bhi tumhari chut mare,apni aankhe band rakhna aur saune ka natak karna.Shallu ne ha kar di.
Ab agge ki kahani Shallu ki Zubani:. Jaise Pihu ne kaha tha,me ja kar Vikas ke sath let gai.Vikas ne thori der baad mujhe jaffi dal li,apna Lund meri chut per set kar liya aur top ke upar se mere mummay dabane laga, aur apna lund meri chut per ghisne laga.Me chup chap saune ka natak karne lagi.Jab Vikas ne 💚 green signal dekha to usne mera top aur skirt utar diya.Mene bhi clothes utarne me uski help ki.Vikas ne mere haath me apna Lund pakda diya aur mere mummay dabane aur masalne laga.Meri siskiyan nikal ne lagi, hiiiiiiiii cccccçccccc uffffff, aur me bhi apne bhai ka loda sahlane lagi.Me bahut hot ho gai aur Vikas ka lund suck karne lagi,aur Vikas meri chut chatne laga.Vikas ne apna ghode jaisa lund mere munh me dal diya,aur mere munh ko chodne laga, mujhe bahut swad aane laga aur usko kaha,bhai ab dal do apna lund meri chut me, bahut khujli ho rahi hai meri pyasi chut me.Vikas ne kuchh Vaseline meri chut per aur kuch apne lund par laga li, aur lund ke supare ko meri chut ke mouth per rakh ke, meri aur dekha, meri smile dekhne ke baad usne dhakka mara,adha lund meri chut ki seal todta hua meri chut me chala gaya,dard se meri cheekh nikal gyi,Vikas mujhe kiss karne laga aur mere boobs dabane laga,10 mint baad mera pain kuchh Kum hua, to me apni gand hilane lagi, to Vikas bhi dhire dhire apna loda andar bahar karne laga, mujhe swad aane laga to me bhi apni gand utha utha ke pura lund andar lene lagi.Ab dard ki jagah par mujhe bahut jyada swad aane laga.Vikas bhi ab zor zor se ghasse marne laga.20 mint ki chudai ke baad hum dono ikathe hi jhad gaye,aur Vikas ne apni cum se meri fuddi bhar di.Mujhe Vikas se chud kar bahut maza aaya.Phir jab tak me Vikas ke sath rahi,us se chudti rahi,hum dono ne bahut enjoy kiya The end.
Rajizexy Bohot acchi story...incest theme Pr bassed apki story Punjabi mein v hit chal rahi ..lekin yeh story uss se alagh hai...good keep rocking..
 
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Rajizexy Bohot acchi story...incest theme Pr bassed apki story Punjabi mein v hit chal rahi ..lekin yeh story uss se alagh hai...good keep rocking..
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बहुत ही बेहतरीन और लाजवाब संगीता जी।।

आपने जो लिखा है वो कोई कहानी नहीं है बल्कि 100 सच है ये वो काला सच है जिससे प्रशासन भाग रहा है। जिसे मानने के लिए प्रशासन तैयार ही नहीं है।। आपने बिल्कुल सही कहा कि लोमड़ पार्टी और लड़ाकू पार्टी ने फोरम की छवि सुधारने के लिए ही ये चुनाव लड़ा था। वैसे तो लोमड़ पार्टी के अध्यक्ष बहुत ही अनुभवी थे और लड़ाकू पार्टी के अध्यक्ष अभी नए थे। लेकिन दोनों का मुख्य एजेंडा मिलता जुलता था और वो किसी से छुपा नहीं है। तीसरी पार्टी के बारे में हम कुछ कहना ही नहीं चाहते हैं।।


आपने पूरे चुनाव का बहुत बारीकी से अध्ययन किया है और जो जो बिंदु आपने उठाये हैं वो अच्छा विशेषज्ञ ही उठा सकता है।। साथ ही आपने लवड़े जी का चरित्र चित्रण बिल्कुल सजीव ढंग से किया है। लोमड़ पार्टी के अध्यक्ष सच मे बहुत समझदार और शांत प्रवित्ति के इंसान हैं उन्होंने जरूर आवाज उठाई होगी अन्याय के खिलाफ, लेकिन इस कलयुग में अन्याय के खिलाफ आवाज़ उठाने वाले की सुनता ही कौन है।😜 उसकी आवाज को दबा दिया जाता है।। मज़ा आ गया पढ़कर। मेरे हिसाब से तो प्रथम पुरस्कार की हकदार आप ही होनी चाहिए🤣🤣
आपके रिव्यु के लिए बहुत बहुत आभार 🙏 ...............बहुत कम लोग ही मेरी हिम्मत की दाद दे रहे हैं.............उच्च अधिकारियों से डरते है सब :roflol:
 
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Pehale to dost mein aap ko badhaee doonga ke aap ne bhaag liya iss contest mein… best of luck!!
Kahanee likahana koyee aasan kaam nahee he… yeh aik creative kaam he… jis ko writer apne khoon aur bhaavanaon se seench kar rachtaa he…

Remember… Everything Is Binary” se shuroo hotee yeh adhbut rachna… romaanch aur kalpana kee seemaon tak le gayee apne readers ko…

Shuroo se ant tak... iss kahaanee ne readers ko jode rakha khud se… yeh lekhanee ka wo kamaal he jo thode hee lekhakon ko naseeb hotaa he…

Artificial Intelligence ya phir Technology ka maanv se badh jaane par aadharit kaafi stories padheen hein mein ne… magar iss story mein kuch alag tha…

Writer ke andar likhane ke gunn to hein… saath hee uss ne visheshagy roop se iss ka upayog bhee kiya he… readers ko shuruaat lekar ant tak “everything in binary” ke beech chalte hue rollercoaster chakravyuh mein phansaye rakha… saare events praakrtik roop se saamne aaye… events ke beech aik natural flow aur saapekshata rahee…

Jo bhee technical language use huee uss ne keval story / events ko samajhne mein madad kee… kaheen bhee in sab technical terms ke kaaran koyee bhaaree pan ya phir atyadhikata nazar naa aayee…

Story mein lekhak ne apne adhbut shabdon ka istemaal karte hue story ka mood bhee halka phulka karte hue usse comical aur funny bhee rakha… jess eke aik chote se kaamuk scene ka tadka… yaa phir yeh dialogues:

“Hosh mein atte hi sabse pehla kaam jo mene kiya vo tha susu.”

"do din se kacha nahi badla world kya badlunga.. mujhse nahi ho payega ..."


Writer ne jaan boojh kar ya phir anaayaas roop se yeh bhee jatta diya ke “har kamyaab mard ke peechhe aik mahila hotee he…”… jo iss line se prakat hua…

“Vo mere is behaviour ko dekh kar sochti hogi ki us din usne jo mujhe kaha vo mujhe bura laga lekin vo galat thi, usi ki wajah se to maine thani thi, agar us din vo mujhe niche na girati to main uppar uthta hi kyun.”
Chahe ye virtual vrddhi thee phir bhee yeh anubhav tau naseeb hua Vikrant ko…

"It saw us that who we are… it saw every hate we put towards this planet…"
Iss line ke dwara writer ne shayad yeh batane kee koshish kee ke ham dharatee ke saath theek vyavahaar naheen kar rahe… aur yeh line bataatee he ke writer ko paryaavaran seemaon ka ullanghan ke bare mine bhee chinta he jo kiya he maanv jaati ne aur uss ko bhaaree pad sakta he…

Writer kee multi-dimensional knowledge, sochane ke alag dhang, aur kalpana Shakti ne hamen iss shandaar kahanee ko padhne ka mauka diya…

Aap ke bhavishy ke prayaason ke lie shubhakaamanaen...
 
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Stadium logo se khachakhach bhara hua tha, aur ho bhi kyu na, football ka match chal raha tha, log apne pasandida palyers ko cheer kar rahe the, pura stadium fans ki awaj se goonj raha tha aur is chillam chilli me sabse aage tha… Nilesh…

Nilesh ball ke hone wale har paas par romanchit hokar apni team ko cheer kar raha tha, uski favoutire team argentina ka player Messi opponant team ke defenders ko chakma dete huye goal post ki taraf bad raha tha.. match khatam hone me bas chand pal baki the aur ab match apne nirnayak mod par tha.. aur ekdum pura stadium shant ho gaya.. sabko utsukta thi aage kya hoga dekhne ki aur ab bas messi aur goalkeeper hi bache the, Nilesh saans roke is pal ko dekh raha tha aur fir aayi messi ki jaduai kick aur ball swing hote huye goalkeeper ke hath ke uper se goal post me ja pahuchi aur shant stadium logo ki awaj se ek baar fir gunj utha…

Nilesh ko to aisa lag raha tha mano abhi bhag ke maidan me jaye aur players ke sath hi is jeet ka jashna manaye but afsos wo ye nahi kar sakta tha, daudna to dur uske liye to chalna bhi mushkil tha

Bachpan se hi Nilesh ke dono pairo me shakti nahi thi.. wo chhota tha tab baki baccho jaisa hi tha par baad me use ek bimari ne jakad liya jisme uske pairo ki takat kam hone lagi.. pehle to kisi ko samajh nahi aaya ke kya ho raha hai aur Nilesh ab ache se chal bhi nahi pata tha, gharwalo me kayi koshish ki par koi fayda nahi hua aur ab Nilesh ne bhi apni halat se samjhauta kar liya, ha dawaiyo aur malish ki wajah se uske pairo me itni takat thi ke wo lathi ke sahare chal sake par apan football player nahi ban paye iska dukh use hamesha raha.

Aaj Nilesh ek international company me ek bade post par kaam kar raha tha, wo kehte hai na bhagwan agar aapse koi ek chiz leta hai to dusri bahut khubiya aapko deta bhi hai aur ye baat Nilesh ke mamle me sach thi.. uska dimag yani ek super computer tha

Company ke sare important software ke code usi ne tayar kiye the aur company ko bhi usse bahut umeede thi, uske company me hone se wo internationl market me tike huye the, rival companies Nilesh ko man chahe package par hire karne ko ready thi par Nilesh ko paiso ka lalach nahi tha, is company ne use tab sahara diya tha jab sabne uska sath chhoda tha isiliye wo is company ko chhodne wala nahi tha aur iske piche ek aur reason bhi tha… Shanaya…

Use wo din aaj bhi yaad tha jab Shanaya uski jindagi me aayi thi, uska employee of the year ke liye selection hua tha aur wo kafi khush tha, sath hi uski research ab khatam hone aayi thi aur uske research papers ko international magazines ne bahut saraha tha aur agar wo is project me safal ho gaya to ye information technology ki field me ek badi kranti hone wali thi aur uski company world ki top companies me pahuch jati..

Isiliye khud company ke malik ki taraf se aaj Nilesh ke liye dinner ka ayojan kiya gaya tha aur waha maujud sabhi logo ne Nilesh ki bhar bhar ke tarik ki aur sath hi aaj waha naye join huye employes ke liye bhi welcom party thi aur inhi naye logo me se wo bhi thi.. Shanaya… Nilesh ne use dekha aur dekhta hi rehgaya.. aisi khubsurti usne aaj ke pehle kabhi nahi dekhi thi.. uski khubsurti me ek alag hi najakat thi.. ek ada thi…. Shanaya waha sabse mil kar has kar baat kar rahi thi aur aise baat karna Nilesh ko kabhi nahi jama tha.. shayad uski sharrrik kami ke wajah se wo apne aap ko auro se alag manta tha isiliye to sabse thoda hekdi me baat karta tha aur agar koi uske sath sahanubhiti dikhane ki koshish kare to Nilesh ko uska bahut gussa aata tha.. isiliye Nilesh ka koi dost bhi nahi tha.. halanki wo rehta sabke sath tha par fir bhi akela tha.. use ab ye akelapan hi pasand aane laga tha par aaj uske man me Shanaya ko dekh ke irshya nirman hi gayi aur sath hi ek akarshan bhi.. is akarshan ke piche bhi ek reason tha… Shanaya ka beech beech me Nilesh ki taraf dekhna… ya ye shayad bas Nilesh ka bhram tha..?

Naye join huye engineers ko alag alag teams me bata gaya aur purane logo ke sath milaya gaya, Shanaya ko Nilesh ke team me hi jana tha aur uske liye usne request bhi ki thi aur uska science background hone ki wajah se uske liye ye easy tha aur waise bhi koi aur Nilesh ki team me jana nahi chahta tha.. ek to Nilesh ka gussail swabhav upar se wo jo kaam kar raha tha wo bahut mushkil tha sath hi Nilesh kaam ke mamle me bahut strict tha.. uske sath kaam karne se acha kalepani ki saja kaat aaye aisa purane employes ka kehna tha.. Shanaya ko ek ache project me america jane ka chance hokar bhi usne ye khadus Nilesh ke sath lab ka kaam kyu chuna ye kaiyo ko samajh bhi nahi aaya tha..

Aaj Shanaya ka Nilesh ke sath kaam karne ka pehla din tha.. Nilesh ke office me

“may I come in sir”

“yes, come in, have a seat”

“miss Shanaya, mujhe subah 9 baje kaam shuru karne ki adat hai aur raat me kitna late hoga kuch keh nahi sakte.. chutti bhi agar aur koi option na ho tab hi le sakte ho.. sara documentation aapko dekhna padega aur kaam ke beech mujhe disturbance bilkul pasand nahi hai aur sabse important baat hai is project ko gupt rakhna.. rival companies is project ki info lene ki bahut koshish karengi par fir bhi abhi unhe hamare leval me aane ke 5 saal lagenge aur tab tak main ye project khatam kar dunga” itna bol ke Nilesh ruka aur Shanaya ke hav bhav dekhne laga aur fir dobara usne bolna shuru kiya

“agar chahe to tum abhi bhi team switch kar sakti ho, but sirf aaj, baad me koi reason kaam nahi aayega, mujhe aisa koi chahiye mere sath jo is kaam me mera pura sath de”

Nilesh ne thoda kade shabdo me kaha, asal me wo Shanaya ki taraf dekhna taal rahatha aur ladkiyo se baat karne ki adat na hone ki wajah se use uske sath baat karna mushkil ho raha tha aur Shanaya ye baat samajh gayi aur wo muskurayi aur boli

“yes sir, I understand, maine aapke research ke papers padhe hai aur mujhe aapke sath hi kaam karna hai”

“ok then, Shanaya ab tum meri team me ho, tum mujhe Nilesh bula sakti ho”

“thank you sir, sorry Nilesh”

“theek hai fir aaj se hi kaam shuru karte hai, tumne research padhi hi hai fir bhi ek baar batata hu artificial intellegence, virtual and augumented reality aur quantum technology in sab ko mila kar hum information technology me ek naye yug ki shuruwat karne wale hai, digitisation se hone wale changes se hum manvi jeevan aur jeevanshaili ko ek alag mukam par la khada kar denge, biological computing ke bare me chalu is research se sari genetical informantion jaisa DNA aur RNA ko hum computer se connect kar sakenge aur conputer ek DNA storage jaisa bhi kaam kar sakega aur aane wale samay me hum is bio computer aur 3D printing ki madad se insani sharir ke parts hum tayar karenge jo body ke baki parts ki tarah hi kaam karenge, internet of things aur computing technology se jud kar wo brain tak message bhej sakenge aur brain ka command bhi receive kar sakenge, for example jaise hamare hath par hum sparsh mehsus kar sakte hai, tempreture mehsus kar sakte hai, koi chiz naram hai ka sakht hai ye jaan sakte hai ye tabhi hota hai jab hamara hath brain ko aise signal bhejta hai aur hamara central nervous system fir hame us chiz ke bare me batata hai ke ha ye naram hai ye sakht hai ab theek waisa hi hamara banaya hua ye nakli hath bhi kisi chiz ya usse related sari bato ki details brain tak pahucha payega aur is messaging me computer ke neural network ka kaam sabse jyada important ho jata hai, neuromorphic technology ke madad se insani brain ka clone jaisa computer hum tayar karne wale hai jiske liye hame neuromorphic chip ko develop karna hoga aur ye computerised brain har chiz me ek human brain se jyada prabhavi hoga”

Shanaya Nilesh ki kahi sari baate gaur se sun rahi thi..

“Nilesh tum jante to tumhare is project se science ki field me ek bahut badi kranti hone wali hai, aur agar hum ye sab banane me safal rahe to ho sakta hai ke shayad is chiz ke liye tumhe nobel prize bhi mile duniya bhar ke mahan scientists me tumhara naam hoga” Shanaya ne kaha

“Shanaya, mujhe kahi bhi apna koi naam nahi karna hai na hi mujhe koi prize chahiye, hum agar isme safal ho gaye to lakho apang logo ka jeena saral ho jayega, mere jaise logo ka aur yahi mere liye sabse bada puraskar hoga” Nilesh ne kuch muskura kar kaha aur Shanaya achambit hokar uski taraf dekhne lagi

Dheere dheere samay beetne laga, Shanaya samay ke mamle me ekdum punctual thi wo barabar 9 bajne ke 5 minute pehle pahuch jati thi aur kai baar Nilesh ke baad hi ghar jati thi, uska kaam ke prati lagav dekh kar Nilesh bhi prabhavit tha, wo kaam ke mamle me bhi tatpar thi, uski hoshiyari aur kaam karne ka tarika dekh kar kabhi kabhi Nilesh bhi shock ho jata tha, Nilesh ne bahut logo ke sath kaam kiya tha.. par wo log kaam ki kathinai dekh kar pareshan ho jate ya usme lagne wala samay dekh kar, aur unke kaam ka utsah dekh kar Nilesh unpar gussa karta tha par Shanaya ke mamle me aisa kuch nahi tha.. aur Shanaya bhi man laga kar kaam karti thi…

Human brain ki taraf se aane wala message kaise decode karna hai aur fir unke banaye nakli body part se electronic message wapis brain tak kaise bhejna hai isme Shanaya ko khasi dilchaspi thi aur apne project ke sare notes bhi usne barabar rakhe the isiliye ab kaam ko speed mil gayi thi, Nilesh ka Shanaya par vishwas badh gaya tha aur ab wo project ki detail bhi uske sath share karne laga tha jo shayad uske alawa kisi ko pata nahi the..

Shanaya ke khushnuma swabhav ki wajah se ab Nilesh me bhi changes hone lage the aur ye changes company ke baki employes bhi notice kar rahe the, unke beech ka rishta ab formal nahi raha tha balki usse aage badh gaya tha, Shanaya Nilesh ki chinta karne lagi thi, Nilesh ka kaam me busy hone ke baad khane pine ka bhi dhyan nahi rehta tha, par ab waha Shanaya thi jo use in sab ki yaad dilati thi

Ek din company ke manager Mr. Gupta Nilesh ki lab me project ka kaam dekhne aaye the… baad me company ke malik Mr. Bajaj bhi aane wale the tab tak Mr. Gupta Nilesh aur Shanaya sare project ki details le rahe the aur future plans bata rahe the aur manager ne Nilesh se baat chit suru ki..

“Nilesh main jaanta hu ke ye bahut mushkil kaam hai lekin hum chahte hai ke ye project jald se jald pura ho, hame fir is technology ka patent le kar jald se jald production ka kaam bhi shuru karna hai”

“Sir, ye project shuru karne se pehle hi meri Mr. Bajaj se baat ho gayi hai.. Artficial intellegence ka use karke hum jo source code tayar kar rahe hai aap uska patent le lijiye lekin body parts ka patent mat ljiyega kyuki usse ye technologoy se bas ameero ko fayda hoga garibo ko kuch nahi milega, maine isi shart par ye project shuru kiya hai aur Bajaj sir ne mujhe aisa vachan bhi diya hai aur agar aisa nahi hai to main abhi resign kar deta hu”

“Nilesh tumhe pata hai na tum kisse baat kar rahe ho? Company ne tumhare upar itna paisa kharch kiya tumhare is project pat itna paisa lagaya wo aise waste karne ke liye? Aur agar tumhe apne talent ka itna hi ghamand chadh gaya hai to tum ye company chhod sakte ho”

“sir, main itne saal din raat ek karke ye project pura kar raha hu kyuki is duniya me mere jaise najane kitne apang log hai jo garib bhi hai unko iska fayda ho par ek baat aap dhyan me rakhiyega, is project ki sari details bas mere dimag me hai, mere bagair aap ye kabhi pura nahi kar paoge”

Nilesh gusse me kaamp raha tha aur Shanaya ek taraf khadi hokar ye sab dekh rhi thi aur itne me waha Bajaj sir ki entry huyi aur unhone saari baat jani, unke aane se mahol thod shant ho gaya tha Mr. Bajaj waha apni khurchi par baithe aur unhoe Shanaya aur Nilesh ko dekha aur bole

“kisi ko job chhodne ki jarurat nahi hai, manager sahab Nilesh sahi bol raha hai, maine usse wada kiya hai aur ab mujhe is bare me koi baat nahi karni hai.”

Uske din ke baad se Nilesh wapis kaam me lag gaya tha aur ab unka project last stage me pahuch chuka tha, aur jaise jaise project complete hone ke karib pahuch raha tha Nilesh aur Shanaya bhi paas aa rahe the, Nilesh ko Shanaya ka sath pasand aane laga tha, use ab Shanaya ka usi fikra karna use kya acha lagta hai kya nahi dekhna, uske liye nayi chize banana sab bhane laga tha, Nilesh ki itni care kabhi kisi ne nahi ki thi, Shanaya ki waha hone se Nilesh ab pura badal gaya tha,

Ek din Nilesh ko company ki taraf se kuch kaam ke liye london bheja ja raha tha aur jiske chalte wo pandhra din bharat ke baahar rehne wala tha aur isi beech kabhi chutti na lene wali Shanaya ne bhi chutti le li thi, isse Nilesh chauka jarur par usne chutti de di thi

London ke 15 din Nilesh ke liye bahut mushkil the, wo kab bharat jayega aur Shanaya se milega aisa use lag raha tha, ab uske man me Shanaya ko shadi ke liye propose karne ka plan chal raha tha par sath hi ek darr bhi sata raha tha ke wo uske jaise apang insan se shadi ke liye raji hogi ya nahi ? kahi iske baad jo dosti hai wo bhi na tut jaye ? nahi nahi Shanaya aisi nahi hai, wo is sab pe kaise react karegi? Aadi kayi sawal uske man me ghum rahe the

Wapis aane ke baad wo Shanaya se mila par na jane kyu use Shanaya ka bartav thoda alag laga, wo Nilesh se door door rehne lagi thi aur achanak ek din dophar me Shanaya ko ek phone aaya aur phone par bolte huye hi wo Nilesh ke cabin me aayi, “….. ha ha theek hai, chalega, main Nilesh se baat karti hu wo na nahi kahega.. theek,ok..bye”

“kiska phone tha” Nilesh ne pucha “tumhe pata nahi na mujhe kaam par aane ke baad phone ka disturbance nahi chahiye”

“ha, I know par mere ek dost ka phone tha usne shahar ke thoda bahar kitaraf ek gaming zone open kiya hai.. naam bhi thoda ajeeb hi hai ‘
WishMaster’.. wo jane do.. main baat ye hai ke wo chahta hai ke uska opening tumhare hatho se ho aur maine tumhare behalf par use ha bol diya hai”

“arey par…”

“ab par var kuch nahi tumhe aana hi padega tum kabhi kisi ke sath mix nahi hote ho milte nahi ho aise kaise chalega”

Aur Shanaya ke bolne ke baad aakhir Nilesh ready hua aur aakhir me wo dono us gaming zone ki taraf jane nikle.. Shanaya bhi kafi khush thi aur idhar udhar ki baate kar rahi thi Nilesh ko bhi lag raha tha ke wo bhi uske sath baate kare par fir bhi wo shant hi raha, uske dimag me asankhya khayal ghum rahe the par fir bhi wo shant tha aur akhir wo log waha pahuch hi gaye, gaming zone ke bahar hi ek ucha handsome yuvak khada tha Shanaya use dekhte hi uski taraf gayi aur uske gale lag gayi

“aaj kitne dino baad mulakat huye hai Gaurav, kaha chale gaye the itne din, main to police ke complaint karne wali thi tumhari gumkhudgi ki acha hua call kara tumne”

Wo dono ekdum khush the aur Nilesh unki taraf dekh raha tha, Gaurav aage aaya aur usne Nilesh se hath milaya

“Nilesh, thank you so much yaha aane ke liye, main tumhe Nilesh bula sakta hu na ? wo asal me main aur Shanaya college friends hai baad me wo uski field me aur main apni field me chale gaye, mujhe bhi artificial intellegenge aur biotechnology me kafi interest hai aur apne hisab se main bhi kuch chote chote experiments karta rehta hu usi se ek idea mere dimag me aayi aur maine uska rupantar fir is gaming zone me kar diya…”

Baad me Nilesh ke hatho se ribbin kata gaya aur sabne waha taaliya bajayi.. Nilesh bhi apne ko mile hua is sanman se khush tha, baad me Gaurav Nilesh ko sara game zone dikhane laga aur end me wo use leke ek khurchi ke paas aaya, wo khurchi yani ek chota sofa hi tha.. ekdum aaramdayak, us khurchi ke upar ke adhe gole ke aakar ka kaanch topa laga hua tha aur uspe ECG machin ko hote hai waise alag alag cords jode huye the

“Nilesh ye khurchi yani is gaming zone ki shan hai, ab main aapko batata hu ke is khurchi par baithne se yaha aane wale logo ki wishes kaise puri hoti hai, pehle aap is khurchi par baithiye”

Shanaya ne fir Nilesh ko khurchi par baithne me madad ki aur Gaurav Nilesh ko explain karne laga

“insan ke man me anek ichhaye hoti hai par wo sari to puri nahi ho sakti lekin hame unke pura hone ki umeed jarur hoti hai.. insan ka man yani kya iske bare me kai salo se kai scientist research kar rahe hai, hum kaun hai hamara kya astitva hai ye hum hamesha sochte hai, humhare khayal, feelings, kalpanaye, humhare sapne, personality sab kuch hamare man ki hamare brain ki den hai, saari feelings wahi tayar hoti hai, hamara brain asankhya neorons ka bana hua hai jo ekdusre se jude hai aur isi neuro circuit ke bare me maine research ki hai jiska vishay hai insan ki behavior aur uske piche tayar hone wali feelings…. Hum kaun hai? Ye sawal akhand manav jati ko sadiyo pareshan karta aaya hai, aur ye sawal insan ke dimag me aaya kyu? Kyuki hum soch sakte hai aur hamari soch ka aur sapno ka ek sidha sambandh hai, hum jo din bhar sochte hai wahi hame sapne me dikhta hai na? kyu ki din bhar sochte huye vivchar karte huye hum hamare brain cells ke jo neurons ko activate karte hai wahi raat me hame sapna dikhate hai aur isi idea ka use karke maine ke khurchi banayi hai jo aapke brain ke sare activate neurons ko ek jagah lakar aapko aapna man chaha sapna dikhata hai jisse bhale ki real me na sahi lekin aap apni wishes puri kar sakte hai”

“ab ye goli kha lo isse tumhare brain par jyada stress nahi aayega”

Nilesh ne wo goli kha li aur us khurchi par aaram se baith gaya aur wo kanch ka topa uske sar par lag raha aur uske lage alag alag cords uske sar par alag alag jagah lagaye gaye aur kuch hi samay me Nilesh ko neend aa gayi..

Ab wo ek football ke maidan par khada tha.. sare stadium me log uske naam se cheer kar rahe the, messi ne usko awaj diya aur sath hi uski taraf ball paas kiya aur ab ball leke wo goalpost ki taraf bhag raha tha samne aaye defender ko chakma dete huye uske ball ko ek kick mari aur ball sidha goalkeeper ke upar se goalpost me ja pahuchi aur sara stadium khushi se gunj utha, Nilesh ne khusi me apna tshirt bhi faad diya tha fir aage use ek bada sa restaurent dikha jaha Shanaya uske samne khadi thi aur wo bilkul kisi raja ke jaisa uske samne khada tha aur Shanaya uski taraf aayi aur Shanaya ke use gale laga liya aur boli “kitne dino baad mile ho Nilesh, kaha the itne din”

Aur ab wo shadi ke mandap me khada tha aur uske samne Shanaya thi aur abhi wo Shanaya ke gale me haar daalne hi waha tha ke tabhi sab taraf andhera ho gaya……

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Uske dimag me ek jordar jhatka laga aur kano ke paas mano koi jor jor se dhol baja raha ho aisa lagne laga aur ankho par ek tivra roshni padi.. use aage ka kuch nahi dikh raha tha, wo chillana chahta tha lekin awaj nahi nikal rahi thi, usse kuch bolte nahi ban raha tha aur akhir ek naam uske muh se nikla… Shanaya… par koi response nahi aaya usne dheere dheere aankhe kholi aur idhar udhar dekha to wo ek cot par soya hua tha, aaju baju dekha to wo samajh gaya ke wo hospital me tha aur uske sharir par marijo ke kapde the aur hath me saline lagi huyi thi, sar par safed patti lagi huyi thi, uski hulchal sun kar nurse ander aayi usne nurse se ishare se pucha ke use kya hua hai to wo boli

“aap yaha pichle 6 mahine se ho, aap kaun ho hum nahi jaante 6 mahine pehle 3 log aaye the unhone aake aapko yaha admit kiya aur unme se ek ne hospital ko aapki dekhbhal ke liye 5 lakh rupaye diye tab se aap yahi ho”

Nilesh ne bed se uthne ki koshish ki lekin fir se wo chakker kha kar gir gaya aur behosh ho gaya.. baad me 3 mahine baad use fir hosh aaya, doctor aur nurses ne uski bahut ache se dekhbhal ki aur use bolne ki stithi me laya par use apna pehle ka kuch yaad nahi aa raha tha aur yaad karte time uska sar bahut jor se dukhne lagta tha isiliye is bare me usse kisi ne kuch nahi pucha..

Ek din gardan me wheel chair par jab wo baitha tha tab use waha rakhe news paper me ek news dikhi..

‘Shanaya aur Gaurav in pati patni ko artificial intellegence aur banavati body parts ke liye nobel prize ke liye chuna gaya hai’

Aur dusri news aisi thi

‘Bajaj tech company ko artificial intellegence ke use se human body parts banane ka patent mil gaya’

Ye sab padh ke Nilesh ko kuch sujh nahi raha tha, uska sar chakrane laga tha aur wo jor se chillane laga.. uski awaj sunkr nurse waha bhagte huye aayi aur pucha ki kya hua to usne wo news use dikhayi aur un dono ka photo dekh kar nurse boli

“yahi to hai wo log jinhone aapko yaha admit kiya tha” fir paper me chape Mr. Bajaj ki photo ko dekh kar boli “aur ye wo sir hai jinhone 5 lakh diye the aapki dekhbhal keliye”

Ye sunkar Nilesh ekdum shocked reh gaya

Shanaya ka naam padh kar nurse boli

“ab mujhe yaad aaya, I am sorry sir par ye madam ne aapko dene ke liye ek letter bhi diya tha par aapki tabiyat theek nahi thi isiliye maine wo apko naih diya, main abhi lakar deti hu”

Uske baad us nurse ne ek safed lifafa lakar Nilesh ko diya aur wo use open karke wo khat padhne laga

“Nilesh,

Main tumhare liye ye letter chhode ja rahi hu, main jaanti hu ke tum ye khat kam se kam chhe mahine baad padhoge, maine waisi sari vyastha kar di hai isiliye tum hamara kuch nahi bigad paoge..

Tumhe yaad hai hamari pehli mulakat jab maine tumhe kaha tha ke tume iske liye nobel prize mil sakta hai tab tumne meri baat ko taal diya tha au tab hi main samajh gayi thi ke tum murkh ho..

Itni badi khoj ki aur uske liye ki gayi itni mehnat ko aise hi waste karna chahte ho to ye murkhta ka hi lakshan hai.. tumhare strich swabhav aur gussail bato ki wajah ne tumne kai baar mera apman kiya aur tumhe pata nahi bhai chala.. fir bhi maine sab has kar sehan kiya kyuki brain se aane wale message kaise decoe karna hai aur fir electronic messages brain tak jaise jayenge ye mujhe tumse seekhna tha isiliye main itne din tumhare sath ye sab dhyan se seekh rahi thi..

Mujhe laga tha kuch samay baad tum samajhdar ho jaoge lekin nahi, manager se jis din tumne jhagda kiya main usidin samajh gayi thi ke tum murkh nahi maha murkh ho, jo apni ki gayi research ka fayda lena bhi nahi jaante…

Us meeting ke baad mujhe Bajaj sir ne milne bulaya tha meri tarah unhe bhi laga tha ke tum samay ke sath samajhdar ho jaoge lekin aisa nahi hua baad me hum dono ne is samasya par hal dhundhna shuru kiya aur tab mujhe Gaurav ki yaad aayi, wo hamare rival company ka scientist tha aur wo bhi isi field me research kar raha tha, Bajaj sir se use jyada package par hamari company me le liya

Tumhe jab 15 dino ke liye london bheja gaya tha tab maine aur Gaurav ne wo khurchi banayi.. yaad hai wo game zone wali khurchi.. tumhe bas us khurchi par lakar bithana bas itna hi kaam bacha tha aur wo maine bakhubi kiya..

Nilesh tumhe samajh hi nahi aaya ke agar koi hamara brain control kar sake to wo kitna khatarnak ho sakta hai.. humne tumhi se seekhe huye knowledge ka tumpar hi istamal kiya, tumhare brain me chipe sare source code, tumhari aage ke sare ideas humne decode kar liye aur hamara kaam aasan ho gaya..

Tumhe kya laga tha main tum jaise langde se shadi karungi?

Tumhe ek aur baat batati hu.. humne tumhare brain par ek naya experiment bhi kiya aur ye sari bate tumhare dimag se delete ki.. ab tum unhe yaad nahi kar paoge.. is process me tumhara brain bahut thak gaya tha isiliye tum kam se kam 6 mahine nahi uthne wale ye hum jante hai aur isi beech hum hamari sari wishes puri kar sakte hai aur tum kisi ko kuch batane ki koshish bhi ki to tumpar kaun yakin karega, tum jis hospital me ho wo mental hospital hai..
hoshiyar insan ne swarthi hona chahiye nahi to bade log tumhara istamal apne swarth ke liye kar sakte hai is baat ko hamesha dhyan me rakhna…

Aur tum jinda jo ise hamara ehsan samajhnaaur dobara hamare raste mat aana.”


Ye sab padh kar Nilesh ka dimag chakrane laga tha, usne kabhi nahi socha tha ke uske sath aisa bhi kuch ho sakta hai aur Shanaya uske sath aisa kar sakti hai, Nilesh ka sar bahut jyada dard karne laga tha uski aankho ke samne andhera chhane laga aur wo behosh ho gaya…….
Wahhhh.... Adirshi shandar story... starting ekdum mast... Sci fi type..computer +brain...jabb Shanaya ki entry Hui muje tabhi laga yehi kuch karegi....uske baad maneger ka lafda.... London se aana aur gaming zone mein jaana wahin mujhe yakeen hogea ki yeh toh gea ...pr kursi per beth k sapno mein kho Jana or fir hosh aana..yeh ju ne kmaal krdiaa...dil ke raha tha story aur aagey chalti rahe ...yehi achhi story hoti hai jisme hum kho jayein......lekin sad end de dil toot gea..... 😥 .....
 
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Story: SEXCAPADES WITH SISTER - IN - LAW (YOUNGER BROTHER'S WIFE)

Writer: Captain Jack Sparrow

Total word Count ~ 3500 approx.

Pehale to dost mein aap ko badhaee doonga ke aap ne bhaag liya iss contest mein… best of luck!!
Kahanee likahana koyee aasan kaam nahee he… yeh aik creative kaam he… jis ko writer apne khoon aur bhaavanaon se seench kar rachtaa he…

kahaanee ka vishay jishu aur rashmi ke beech incestous sambandh hai, jo ke uss kee bhaabhee hai…

Pooree kahaanee keval Jishu aur Rashmi kee beech hue aik sex scene par aadhaarit aik kathaatmak prakaar kee kahaanee thee…
Story kee bhaasha aur shabdon ka chayan aur kaamuk vivaran achchha tha. Lekhak ne zayada dhyaan yaun muthabhed ke vivaran ko diya… yeh baat naheen saamne aayee ke un donon ke beech faasla kese khatam hua… wo donon kesse nazdeek aaye… husband aur lover kaa naam aik jesse the… jis ne kuch confusion create kiya…

Lekhak ne 1-2 jagah kuch cheezen ruchi vikasit karane ke liye keen… jessa ke…

“Rashmi rolled her eyes, a thin smile forming on her beautiful face, and walked slowly towards her lover. Okay, sure . . . sure she said kneeling between his legs, No, I'm still shopping. I should be home in an hour she hesitated before adding quickly or two.
Smiling lustily up at Jishu, she began to slowly stroke his cock as she continued her conversation with her husband. Moments later, staring intently at the long, hard monster she held in her hand, she said I love you, too!”


“Jishu watched her hungrily, but when she finished and kneeled on the bed, he stopped her. Wait. Do me a favor and slip those shoes back on.”

Yeh paat tau pakkee he ke Lekhak ke andar aik achhee kahanee likhane ke gunn hein… Yeh kahanee adhik behtar aur romaanchak saktee thee yadi kuch background diya jata donon ke beech maamle ke spice-up hone ka… ya phir koyee aesee situation hotee jahan donon ke pakde jaane ka darr hota… kaheen koyee seduction ya phir kissi baat par sahmatee na honaa… overall it was a good story…

Aap ke bhavishy ke prayaason ke lie shubhakaamanaen… 🙏
 
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