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I used to read and write such quick fuck stories several years ago. :D
I like to write and read romantic stuff but this time i wanted to try something new. That's why i choose BDSm
Orgasm denial was the sexiest part. :hot:
Orgasm denial is my favourite part too :shy:
What is missing? Emotions! Seriously missing! I don't know about Doms but subs have some very serious emotions of surrender towards their Doms which makes them take anything for their pleasure. I'm thinking, along with the description there could have been more emphasis about how Megha is feeling with Aarav's every move,
Tbh i don't know much about subs still i wanted to write girl's point of view
Baki thanks for ur valuable review
 

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Rita Ki Adhuri Life
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Rita aur Rahul dono first cousin the aur college ma sath padte the ek dosre ka ghar ana jana laga rehta tha college ka kam sath ma karte the aur sath ma college ate jate the kab unki dosti pyar ma badal gai pata hi nahi chala uske baad ek dosre k itne close howe first time dono ne sex ka maza ek sath liya yaani ek dosre ki Virginity thodne ka time dono ne khud hi dekha ab fir luckily dono ne apne parents ko razi kiya aur shadi karli dono k parents achche paise wale the aur dono Dubai ma reh chuke the Rita hamesha se apni family k sath rahi isliye uska kabhi bhi akelapan feel nahi kiya.

Rita ki graduation complete nahi howi unfortunately kyuk shadi jaldi ho gai but Rahul ne master kiya shadi k baad aur shadi k ek saal baad hi Rahul ko Dubai ma ek achchi Job mili aur woh Rita Rahul k parents k sath Mumbai ma rehne laagi sath ma uske parents bhi the isliye uska time guzar raha tha but Bhagwan ko kuch aur hi manzoor tha aur Rita k Parents ki death ho gai Rita iss dunya ma ek akeli reh gai kyuk uske koi bhai behan nahi the aur fir Rita ko Rahul k parents ka pyar mila but Rita ki life ma shayed kuch aur hi lekha tha aur unki bhi car accident ma death ho gai aur Rita ek dafa fir akeli ho gai .

Rahul jab parents ko Alvidaa karne aya aur fir se job pe jane laaga tuo Rita ne Rahul ko bola muhje bhi sath le jao ab ma yaha akele kese rahongi but Rahul bola abhi meri job set nahi howi wait karlo try karo honey akele rehne ki baas thode time ki baat hai Ab Rita ki life ma akelapan tuo tha hi aur Pati k naa hone se ab koi aisa bhi nahi tha jiske sath uska time pass tuo ho kuch time k baad jo badi kami Rita ki life ane lagi jo shadishuda Aurat ki sabse badi zarorat hai woh hai sex kehte hain jab aap ek dafa sex ka maza le lete ho tuo fir maan aur bhi machalta hai aur karne ko uske baad Rita ki life ki sabse badi yahi kami rahi uska reaction yahi howa Rita porn movies, adults stories dekhne lagi aur social media pe logo se baat hone lagi aur jab aap baat hoti hai stranger se tuo dosti pe hoti aur fir yahi howa Rita ki dosti howi 2 3 ladkon se jo usko nahi pata tha uske neighbor ma hi rehte the aur usko khubsurati k ashiq the jiska Rita ko nahi pata tha As usual jo hota hai baat karne k baad sharing hoti hai baten photos ab kyuk Rita ki life ma badi kami thi sex tuo Rita yahi soch k apni nude Pics bhi share kar di.

Ab hamari society ma jo mostly hota hai ek akeli aurat k sath wahi howa usko us nude pics pe blackmailed karna shuru howa ab akeli aurat apni izzat bachne k liye unki demands ko pura karne lagi kabhi paise kabhi new mobile aur zabardasti milna lastly jab Rita ki bardasht ki limit khatam howi tuo Rita ne apne Pati ko sab pata hi diya kya karti kab taak tension leti ab Rahul ko ana pada wapas apni biwi k pass aur police case bana aur lastly ek badi amount dekh k jaan chuti aur Rita ko le k Dubai agaya.

Rita ki life ma ek bar fir se kuch khushiyan ayi aur usko dobara mila sex ka maza but unfortunately woh bhi kuch din k liya tha shayed kyuk ek raat Rita ka hubby usko bola honey muhje business karne ka chance mila hai UK ma apne friend k sath aur muhje jana hoga Rita ne bola but Rahul ma akeli kese rahongi ab muhjse nahi raha jata fir ek kam karte hain muhje pregnant kar do fir
Rahul abhi nahi darling muhje kuch karne do tumhare liye apne liye aur bacho k liye future achcha ho aur ek khubsurat luxury life ho isliye tuo ma itni hard work kar raha hon aur ek bar fir woh Rita ko chhod k chala Rita ko sex ki aag ma jala k ab saal ma ek dafa ata hai aur Rita ki usi Adhuri life ma Jee rahi hai .


Rita isi jaali howi life ma Jee rahi thi fir ek din uske hubby ka phone aya uska business partner apna ek office open kar raha hai Dubai ma aur ham ne socha hai tum kab tak akeli rahongi tuo kyu naa tum us chote se office ka look after karo Rita ko bhi ye acha laga tuo usne Yes bol diya aur kuch dino baad office open howa aur Rita uska care karne lagi aur business achcha hota gaya aur fir business k kuch bade cleint ki mulaqat Rita se howi aur woh Rita k jism k diwane howe aur Rita jo phele hi apni jism ki aag ma Jaal rahi uske close hoti gai aur unho ne Rita k jism ko pane k liye apni dolat aur Jhote pyar ko use kiya kabhi Rita ko shopping, parties, Gold aur luxury items dete rehte the aur Rita k achche dost ban gaye aur finally unho ne Rita k sath bed share kiya kyuk unka pata chal gaya ek Pyasi aurat k life ma yahi kami hai apna kam poora karne k baad unho ne bhi Rita ko apne haal pe chhod diya aur aaj bhi Rita apni Adhuri life ma Jee rahi hai pata nahi kab uski life ka ye adhura Pan khatam hoga ....
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Rita Ki Adhuri Life
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Rita aur Rahul dono first cousin the aur college ma sath padte the ek dosre ka ghar ana jana laga rehta tha college ka kam sath ma karte the aur sath ma college ate jate the kab unki dosti pyar ma badal gai pata hi nahi chala uske baad ek dosre k itne close howe first time dono ne sex ka maza ek sath liya yaani ek dosre ki Virginity thodne ka time dono ne khud hi dekha ab fir luckily dono ne apne parents ko razi kiya aur shadi karli dono k parents achche paise wale the aur dono Dubai ma reh chuke the Rita hamesha se apni family k sath rahi isliye uska kabhi bhi akelapan feel nahi kiya.

Rita ki graduation complete nahi howi unfortunately kyuk shadi jaldi ho gai but Rahul ne master kiya shadi k baad aur shadi k ek saal baad hi Rahul ko Dubai ma ek achchi Job mili aur woh Rita Rahul k parents k sath Mumbai ma rehne laagi sath ma uske parents bhi the isliye uska time guzar raha tha but Bhagwan ko kuch aur hi manzoor tha aur Rita k Parents ki death ho gai Rita iss dunya ma ek akeli reh gai kyuk uske koi bhai behan nahi the aur fir Rita ko Rahul k parents ka pyar mila but Rita ki life ma shayed kuch aur hi lekha tha aur unki bhi car accident ma death ho gai aur Rita ek dafa fir akeli ho gai .

Rahul jab parents ko Alvidaa karne aya aur fir se job pe jane laaga tuo Rita ne Rahul ko bola muhje bhi sath le jao ab ma yaha akele kese rahongi but Rahul bola abhi meri job set nahi howi wait karlo try karo honey akele rehne ki baas thode time ki baat hai Ab Rita ki life ma akelapan tuo tha hi aur Pati k naa hone se ab koi aisa bhi nahi tha jiske sath uska time pass tuo ho kuch time k baad jo badi kami Rita ki life ane lagi jo shadishuda Aurat ki sabse badi zarorat hai woh hai sex kehte hain jab aap ek dafa sex ka maza le lete ho tuo fir maan aur bhi machalta hai aur karne ko uske baad Rita ki life ki sabse badi yahi kami rahi uska reaction yahi howa Rita porn movies, adults stories dekhne lagi aur social media pe logo se baat hone lagi aur jab aap baat hoti hai stranger se tuo dosti pe hoti aur fir yahi howa Rita ki dosti howi 2 3 ladkon se jo usko nahi pata tha uske neighbor ma hi rehte the aur usko khubsurati k ashiq the jiska Rita ko nahi pata tha As usual jo hota hai baat karne k baad sharing hoti hai baten photos ab kyuk Rita ki life ma badi kami thi sex tuo Rita yahi soch k apni nude Pics bhi share kar di.

Ab hamari society ma jo mostly hota hai ek akeli aurat k sath wahi howa usko us nude pics pe blackmailed karna shuru howa ab akeli aurat apni izzat bachne k liye unki demands ko pura karne lagi kabhi paise kabhi new mobile aur zabardasti milna lastly jab Rita ki bardasht ki limit khatam howi tuo Rita ne apne Pati ko sab pata hi diya kya karti kab taak tension leti ab Rahul ko ana pada wapas apni biwi k pass aur police case bana aur lastly ek badi amount dekh k jaan chuti aur Rita ko le k Dubai agaya.

Rita ki life ma ek bar fir se kuch khushiyan ayi aur usko dobara mila sex ka maza but unfortunately woh bhi kuch din k liya tha shayed kyuk ek raat Rita ka hubby usko bola honey muhje business karne ka chance mila hai UK ma apne friend k sath aur muhje jana hoga Rita ne bola but Rahul ma akeli kese rahongi ab muhjse nahi raha jata fir ek kam karte hain muhje pregnant kar do fir
Rahul abhi nahi darling muhje kuch karne do tumhare liye apne liye aur bacho k liye future achcha ho aur ek khubsurat luxury life ho isliye tuo ma itni hard work kar raha hon aur ek bar fir woh Rita ko chhod k chala Rita ko sex ki aag ma jala k ab saal ma ek dafa ata hai aur Rita ki usi Adhuri life ma Jee rahi hai .


Rita isi jaali howi life ma Jee rahi thi fir ek din uske hubby ka phone aya uska business partner apna ek office open kar raha hai Dubai ma aur ham ne socha hai tum kab tak akeli rahongi tuo kyu naa tum us chote se office ka look after karo Rita ko bhi ye acha laga tuo usne Yes bol diya aur kuch dino baad office open howa aur Rita uska care karne lagi aur business achcha hota gaya aur fir business k kuch bade cleint ki mulaqat Rita se howi aur woh Rita k jism k diwane howe aur Rita jo phele hi apni jism ki aag ma Jaal rahi uske close hoti gai aur unho ne Rita k jism ko pane k liye apni dolat aur Jhote pyar ko use kiya kabhi Rita ko shopping, parties, Gold aur luxury items dete rehte the aur Rita k achche dost ban gaye aur finally unho ne Rita k sath bed share kiya kyuk unka pata chal gaya ek Pyasi aurat k life ma yahi kami hai apna kam poora karne k baad unho ne bhi Rita ko apne haal pe chhod diya aur aaj bhi Rita apni Adhuri life ma Jee rahi hai pata nahi kab uski life ka ye adhura Pan khatam hoga ....
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Wow..grt piece of work Ritadanny ..D way u've described d rollercoaster of ur sex lyf in summarized manner is really commendable..Rahul ka pehla galti ye tha ki jisse wo itna pyar karke shadi kiya usse Dubai nahi liya..jiski waja ye hua ki Rita ladkon ke sath sexchat ,nudes share kiya..Ab jab Rahul ko pata chala ki Rita ye sab karke blackmail ki sikar ho chuki hai to achha pati ke nate usko ye sab se bahar kiya aur sath me le gaya..Lekin iske bawajud wo firse Rita ko chhodkar Uk chala gaya..I mean kaise..usko samajhna chahiye tha ki Rita sex ki pyasi rehkar is kadam uthayi..Aur uske jane ke baad Rita ne firse uske client ke sath bistar garam kiya jo ki hona hi tha..kyunki ek jawaan aurat kirna resist karegi apni andar ki hawas ko..Sukar ki pehle jaisa isbar Rita blackmail ki sikar nahi hui ..par saloon ne Rita ko thik se satisfy v nahi kar paye..jald hi usse dur chale gaye aur Rita firse pyasi ki pyasi reh gayi..Rahul jaisa workaholic se to umeed hi chhodo..Kaas Rita ki lyf me koi aisa mard aaye jo Rita ko puri tarah satisfy kare bina uski privacy ko harm karke..Fir Rita ko Rahul ki kami mehsus nahi hogi aur wo uske parwah kare bina apni sex lyf ko achhe se ji paye😍
 
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SEXCAPADES WITH SISTER - IN - LAW (YOUNGER BROTHER'S WIFE)
Rashmi looked into the rearview mirror of Jishu car as she applied the finishing touches to her eye make-up. She had bought a fashion magazine that gave details on how to achieve the smoky eyes favored by some celebrities. Jishu had mentioned to her that he liked that look and Rashmi had taken the hint since starting her relation with her brother-in-law.
Rashmi had made several changes to her appearance at her lovers subtle, and sometimes not so subtle, suggestion. Her hair was longer, below her shoulders, and heavily shampoo-ed, making her more of a Mallu whore. She used a flat iron so that it would hang even straighter than usual. She wore only wet look lip gloss whenever they planned to be together and applied it liberally. Rashmi had even shaved her pussy hair, leaving only a closely trimmed triangle above her slit after Jishu had made it clear that he wanted her that way.
Her husband Jishnu had been thrilled, naively thinking she had shaved her pussy for his benefit, and Rashmi made sure he had no reason to think otherwise. Rashmi was still surprised that he had no clue as to what she had been doing with Jishu, and that everyone at her work or home appeared to be equally clueless. She only hoped her luck would continue. The past couple of months, the two of them had been meeting at a local park over their lunch break and screwing in the backseat of his car.
Rashmi had, thus far, resisted meeting him at a hotel thinking their neighbors would wonder why these two are always alone. There had, however, been some quickies at their home when Jishnu her husband was out. With little-to-no hesitation, Rashmi had taken Jishu by the hand and led him up to the marital bedroom.
Even though the sex was incredible, as always, she was uncomfortable bringing Jishu back to her bedroom. While she had her lovers cock in her mouth, Rashmi was unsettled when she caught herself looking at the picture of her husband on the bedside table. Jishu had also insisted that they fuck on her husband Jishnu's side of the bed, and although more than willing at the time, she did have some pangs of regret afterward.
As a result, when Jishu had mentioned that he could get their corporate suite at a local hotel, Rashmi agreed to the meeting. Rashmi slipped on her sunglasses and stepped out of the car. She was wearing a short, black leather jacket over top of a white, sleeveless, mock turtleneck, tight tan capri pants and was wearing her new Manalo Bramnick slingbacks with the regular twenty-inch stiletto heels leather shoe. She walked rapidly through the lobby to the elevator, not being able to shake the thought that the clerk knew exactly why she was there. Once safely in the elevator, she put her sunglasses in her purse and made a few last adjustments to her hair in the reflection of the door.
She walked down the hallway looking for the suite number Jishu had given her. Once outside the door, she started to knock when it suddenly flew open and she found herself being drug swiftly into the room by her wrists. Jishu pushed her forcefully against the inside of the door, kissing her roughly, his tongue pushing past her glossy red lips. Although initially surprised by his actions, Rashmi opened her mouth and met his oral thrusts with her own, drinking in the familiar smells and tastes of her brother in law. After a few moments, Jishu broke their kiss and smiled broadly, his face inches from her own.
I guess I don't have to tell you that I'm glad to see you! he laughed, his brown eyes sparkling. Part of me wondered if you would still come. Rashmi relaxed and smiled back at him, her arms reaching up over his broad shoulders, pulling him back down to her. You're kidding, right? You know I cant stay away from you!
With that Rashmi kissed him deeply, her hands sliding down to cradle his face as their tongues danced. Rashmi noticed that Jishu was wearing a short cotton robe and her hands reached down further to his fat crotch. One slid through the folds of the robe to cup his heavy ball sack while the other worked to open his belt. Whoa . . .Whoa . . .Slow down girl! Jishu said pulling her hands up from his cock. This is one time we don't have to be in such a hurry!
With a quick kiss, Jishu steered Rashmi into the front room of the suite and helped her remove her leather jacket. Rashmi dropped her purse next to her on the couch as she took a seat. She smiled when she noticed that Jishu had bought a bottle of Chardonnay that she had once mentioned as a favorite. He poured her wine in a long-stemmed glass and fixed a scotch for himself, joining her on the couch.
To Jishnu for leaving town early. If I told him I was meeting you here, he would never believe me! Jishu toasted, clinking his glass gently with Rashmi. They sipped their drinks as Jishu explained how easy it was to get their suite. Plus he added playfully Its on the company's tab! Rashmi laughed and reached for her purse, removing a pack of Virginia Slims Menthol 120s. She flipped the top of the hard pack and slowly removed one of the long cigarettes. Using a small gold lighter that Jishu had given her when she had mentioned that she had started smoking again, Rashmi lit her cigarette exhaling a thin stream of smoke towards the ceiling. She settled back against the cushions, her legs crossed seductively, wine glass in hand and found Jishu studying her. Damn girl. he whispered with approval. What have I done to you? he asked only somewhat in jest, remembering the demure wife and mother he had first met several months ago. Rashmi took a deep, slow draw on her cigarette and directed the smoke towards him.
I guess youve released my inner slut . . . and I cant thank you enough! she added with a sly smile. Jishu laughed and kissed her, tasting the tang of her breath, feeling his cock begin to stiffen. His hand slid up to cup one of her smallish, firm breasts and was pleased to find that, per his instructions, she was not wearing a bra. Moments later, Rashmi leaned forward and with a final drag, stubbed her cigarette out. Another sip of wine and she slid towards Jishu, her hands reaching for his sash.
I think she purred that I've been patient enough! She untied the belt and pulled his robe open, excited by the contrast of his cinnamon skin and the white fabric. Rashmi reached for his semi-erect cock, stroking it slowly. There's what I've been looking for! she sighed as she kneeled in front of him. Holding the base of his thick shaft, she directed the head of his cock towards her wetly shining lips. Only taking the large head into her mouth, Rashmi began sucking him forcefully, running her tongue over its sensitive top, her cheeks hollowing. Rashmi then dropped her jaw to take all of his cock into her warm throat. She knew what her lover liked and she was eager to please. Mmmm! she moaned, savoring the taste and feel of her brother-in-laws cock in her mouth.
Rashmi jacked him while she noisily blew him, occasionally removing her mouth altogether to lick her way up and down his long shaft and to suck his balls. With one of his large rocks in her mouth, Rashmi heard her cell phone ring. When she let his nut slip from her lips with a loud plop, Jishu quickly hissed: Let it ring!
Rashmi was already reaching into her purse and opening her cell. I cant. It might be important. Looking at the number displayed she added Shit. Its from your brother. Straightening up and stepping away from the couch, Rashmi tilted her head bringing the phone under her hair to her ear, her free arm crossed under her breasts supporting her elbow. Hello? she said. Its Jishnu! she mouthed silently to Jishu who remained seated on the couch, his robe thrown open. So! Jishu mouthed back, irritated at his timing.
Rashmi frowned and turned her back Yea, that would be okay she said into the cell Either night would work for me. When she turned back around she found Jishu pointing his hard cock at her, frowning comically. Rashmi rolled her eyes, a thin smile forming on her beautiful face, and walked slowly towards her lover. Okay, sure . . . sure she said kneeling between his legs, No, I'm still shopping. I should be home in an hour she hesitated before adding quickly or two.
Smiling lustily up at Jishu, she began to slowly stroke his cock as she continued her conversation with her husband. Moments later, staring intently at the long, hard monster she held in her hand, she said I love you, too! before flipping the phone shut, tossing it on the couch and eagerly swallowing his entire cock into her warm, wet mouth once again.
As Rashmi's head bobbed rhythmically up and down and his lap, Jishu placed his hand on her head. Leaning back, Jishu closed his eyes and listened to Rashmi moan and snort as she made love to his dick. Rashmi raised up, her eyes locked on Jishu, then she slowly licked his shaft from its base, ending with a wet kiss on its bulbous head. Jishu helped her to her feet and led her to the bedroom.
Jishu pulled her top off and threw it on the bed. Rashmi kissed him and pushed the robe off his shoulders, allowing it to pool at his feet. She ran her hands gently over his tight, smooth body across the breadth of his shoulders and down his heavily muscled arms. Her fingers traced a line down his chest, over his flat belly then creeped back to cup his hard ass cheeks. She pushed Jishu onto the bed and slowly removed the rest of her clothing. Jishu watched her hungrily, but when she finished and kneeled on the bed, he stopped her. Wait. Do me a favor and slip those shoes back on.
Rashmi smiled and picked up her long shoes. Taking a seat on a cushioned chair across from the bed, she made a show of putting the sling backs back onto her feet, running her hands slowly up her shapely legs. She stood and turned, legs spread slightly, looking over her shoulder at Jishu. You like these baby? she teased as she modeled for her lover, her hands moving lewdly over her jutting breasts, then lower, her fingers tracking the moist slit between her legs.
Get over here and Ill show you! Jishu replied, his voice heavy with desire. Rashmi smiled and walked over to the foot of the bed. She crawled between his legs, his hard cock rubbing against her naked body, and then further up the bed where Jishu crushed her in a strong embrace.
He rolled Rashmi over on her back, kissing her deeply, his fingers began tracing a trail up one of her firm thighs to her trimmed bush. He used the heel of his hand on her swollen clit before plunging his thick middle finger into her sopping wet hole. Rashmi began to rotate her hips on the bed in response to his manipulations. When Jishu added a second finger and began to vigorously rub the interior of her pussy wall, the sexy sister-in-law began to moan loudly pulling Jishu deeper into their hot embrace, her tongue thrust into his mouth.
Jishu shifted and positioned himself between her outstretched legs. He lifted himself on his hands as Rashmi reached between them and placed his big cock against her willing pussy. Jishu entered her slowly and easily, her cunt now accustomed to his cocks bulbous head. Rashmi's body felt like she had been hit with an electric current, moaning loudly and moving eagerly beneath him. Jishu withdrew his cock completely and entered her slowly again, then several more times driving the newly married in anticipation of the fucking she was about to receive. When he finally shoved his entire length into her tight tunnel and began to lustily fuck her, Rashmi's head began to thrash back and forth on the bed, her eyes screwed shut.
Ohhhh . . . That feels so fucking good! Chetta, I love your big, hard, cock inside of me! As Jishu continued fucking her with long, deep strokes, Rashmi hooked her heels around his calf muscles, locking her body under his, and began to move in rhythm with his thrusts. Rashmi's hand grasped the back of his thick arms as her hips ground against him in raw lust, her desire overwhelming her.
Her first orgasm hit her quickly, almost without warning, her legs wrapped tightly around her lover, her hands grasping his straining ass as she writhed underneath him. ahhhh . . . fuck . . .ohhh hell chettaaa . . .shit . .! I am coming on your big beautiful cock!! Rashmi shouted as Jishu continued to pound into her. Jishu covered her mouth with his to quiet her, Rashmi grabbing the sides of his face as they kissed, her orgasm beginning to subside. Jishu broke their kiss and withdrew his cock from Rashmi, rolling off her. Getup on your hands and knees! he ordered directing Rashmi to face the foot of the bed.
Rashmi positioned herself as instructed and felt Jishu place one hand on her upraised ass. She felt the head of his thick cock against her pussy lips briefly before he shoved his entire length into her slit. Rashmi's head arched back sharply as she fell into the rhythm of his thrusting. Somehow, his cock felt even bigger and harder in this position and Rashmi's pussy seemed completely full. Jishu grabbed her by the waist and the sound of his fleshy stomach smacking her ass cheeks filled the room as they fucked wildly.
Rashmi opened her eyes and saw their reflection in the large mirror over the dresser. Looking back at her was a young woman being seriously fucked by a muscular man, her own brother-in-law. A sheen of sweat covered his body highlighting the definition of his body. As Jishu continued to fuck her, Rashmi thought back to earlier in the week when she had helped with his daughters Birthday Day party at Kollam.
None of the other mothers would recognize her as she now appeared: whipping her long hair around, shouting profanities, driving her ass back to meet her brother-in-law lovers thrusts, her breasts swinging lewdly beneath her. She barely recognized herself her lips shining wetly, eye makeup heavily applied, naked on the hotel bed except for her regular famous long shoes. She thought she looked like a Vegas hooker or one of the girls in the porno movie her husband Jishnu had brought home one time.
Jishu grunted behind her, fucking his cock into her even faster, his fingers now digging into her ass cheeks. Rashmi was not a stupid woman, nor was she naïve. She knew that Jishu was a pussy hound who liked to fucking her and that she was his fuck material. She also knew there would come a time when Jishu would tire of her and move on, but she was all right with that. Although Jishu was not her first lover, she had to admit that he likely would not be her last. She wasn't going to be able to put this particular genie back in the bottle.
But for now, she was going to do everything in her power to keep him interested as long as she could. Jishu liked slutty, and she could do slutty. She looked back over her shoulder at her brother-in-law, his face intense, body sweaty, muscles bulging as he drove his long cock into her faithless pussy. You like doing me like this? she asked sexily. Oh yeah . . .I like fucking you like this . . .I love looking at your fine, tight ass girl! Jishu managed between hard thrusts.
Ahhh chetta . . .You fuck me so good . . . and your cock is so big! I love it! Fuck me harder! That's it chettaaa! fuck me harder!!!!! Jishu slammed into his own younger brothers wife causing her ass cheeks to ripple with his force. Rashmi's orgasm hit her like a tidal wave, starting at her feet, up past her overheated pussy and her swinging breasts, leaving her glossy red lips in a stream of profanities. shit . . . ohhhhh fuuuuucckk . . .ummmmm! ahhhhh . . .fuck . . . Jishu chetta! ahhhhhh . . .fuucckk!!!!
Jishu continued to fuck Rashmi as she began to recover. She felt his cock twitch as his breathing became more labored. Realizing that her young lover was close, Rashmi pushed her ass back harder to meet his deep thrusts. Come on chetta . . .cum in my pussy. I want to feel you cum inside me! Fuck your whore harder chetta . . . fuck me!!!!
When she heard a low growl start to build in her lovers throat, Rashmi quickly spun around and grabbed his cock, aiming it at her mouth. His first jet of spunk hit her on the chin before she was able to get her mouth around his entire dick. Rashmi grabbed his hips for support and began fucking his cock with her mouth, taking load upon load down her throat. Jishu shouted as he came: As his climax began to weaken, Rashmi removed his cock from her lips but continued to jack him, taking the last spurts of his jism on her outstretched tongue before swallowing that as well.
Mmmmmmm . . .My Jishu chettan tastes sooo good! Rashmi looked up at Jishu, her beautiful blue eyes shining brightly through the smoky make-up, smiling in satisfaction at the pleasure she had just brought to brother-in-law. She continued to stroke his cock and would occasionally slide its head past her shiny lips for a brief, loving suckle. Jishu eventually fell back against the headboard, still breathing hard. Rashmi rolled off the bed and disappeared into the front room, walking unsteadily on her high heels, still light headed from the fucking she had just received.
She returned with their drinks, kissing Jishu sweetly as she handed him his glass. Rashmi leaned naked against the dresser, her feet crossed in front of her and sipped her wine. She studied Jishu over the rim of her glass, his gorgeous body sprawled across the bed, thick cock lying across his muscular thigh. God, I love fucking you! a bit of wonder in her voice. Jishu laughed and let the ice cube he was sucking on drop back into his glass. I've noticed! Both of them were quiet for a while, lost in their own thoughts, as they regained their strength. Rashmi
finally broke the silence. You know what Id really like to do sometime? What's that? I'd like for us to go out of town together, some weekend. Someplace where now one would know us. I could get dressed up for you, anyway you would want, and we could go out . . .to a bar or for dinner.
We would be all over each other so that anyone who saw us would know that I was yours and that I would do anything for you . . .or to you for that matter! Rashmi added with a sly laugh. And when we go all hot and horny,. . . just short of fucking each other in public, wed go back to our room. Intrigued, Jishu responded playfully I like the sound of this. What would we do next? Rashmi put her wine glass on the dresser and walked over to the bed . Kneeling next to her lover, she cradled his face in her hands and kissed him, her tongue darting quickly into his open mouth. Why should I tell you when Id much rather show you! she whispered in his ear as her hand slid down his deep chest to his stiffening dick. Remember, we don't have to be in any hurry!
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Hmm, :hot: that was some grilled and spiced hot scene, it could bring your mood to some great exotic experience. Loved the writing skills, you turned up the heat so much in a short story. :applause:
I wonder if we can read more Rashmi's episodes :blush: .

Rashmi's character seemed to be a sub, which is great combo for a alpha male, and you done a great job showing it. :superb:
 

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Hmm, :hot: that was some grilled and spiced hot scene, it could bring your mood to some great exotic experience. Loved the writing skills, you turned up the heat so much in a short story. :applause:
I wonder if we can read more Rashmi's episodes :blush: .

Rashmi's character seemed to be a sub, which is great combo for a alpha male, and you done a great job showing it. :superb:
Actually I thought of multiple episodes. But for character limit in contest had to shrink as much as possible.
Will write one on Rashmi & her sexcapades with Jishu soon..
 
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Main station pahuchne me kafi late ho chuka tha, bus dua kar raha tha ki train na ayi ho, main jaise hi station k platform pahucha train k horn ki awaz sunai di, train chal di thi. Main daud kar train me chad gaya aur apne coach jo ki 3rd AC tha usme pahuch gya. Raat ka time tha to main apni seat pe let gya aur pet already bhara tha to ankh lag gyi.

Der raat meri ankh khuli, main dekh k hairan rah gya train poori khali thi, train kisi jungle me thi aur lights bhi band thi, mujhe samajh nahi aa raha tha ki ye train khali kaise ho gyi aur jungle me kaha ruk gyi. Main seat se utha aur train se bahar nikla to pata chala train ka koi ata pata nahi tha, bus ek coach jisme main baitha tha vo jungle k virane me ek purani abandoned patri pe tha. Dar k mare dil tezi se dhadakne laga. Baki ki train, mere coach k Baki log kahan gaye, main yahan kaise aa gya, ye sub sawal mere dimag me kaundh rahe the, ek pal to mujhe laga ki ye zaroor koi bura sapna hai, maine apne chikuti kaati, ye koi sapna nahi tha ye hakikat hi thi. Fir mujhe ahsas hua ki kisi ne mujhe koi nasheela padarth sungha k mera sara saman hadap liya hai akyuki mera bag mobile and purse wagahra gayab tha. Par mera saman le k hi jana tha to le jate mujhe virane me iss abandoned train me, sunsan jungle me kyu chhod gaye ye samajh nahi aa raha tha.

Iss jungle me raat me dahshat ka mahaul tha, kab koi jungli janwar ya chor daku mujhe maar de koi bharosa nahi tha. Main bahar ek disha me chalna laga, fir maine socha wapas coach me jaa k dhundhta hu Shayad mera purse ya mobile wahan mil jaye kisi cabin me, main wapis coach pe jane k liye muda hi tha ki mujhe kutto k bhaukne ki awaz ayi aur jangli kutto k dar se maine wapas coach me jaa k mobile lene ka irada chhoda. Dar k mare main wapas uss disha me tez tez bhagne laga. Kuchh der to laga ki pichhe kutte aa rahe hain, par meri pichhe mud k dekhne ki himmat nahi hui. Main bhagta raha, thodi der baad kutto k bhaukne ki awaze bhi ana band ho gyi. Ab main hafne laga aur jungle me koi aabadi nazar nahi aa rahi thi. Main thoda ruka aur ab tez tez kadmo se chalne laga kyuk ab aur bhagne ki himmat nahi thi mujhme. Thodi der baad main jungle k kinare pahuch gya aur ek road pe nikla jo sunsan thi. Road k dusri taraf khet tho aur ek taraf yani jidhar se main aya tha jungle. Road sunsan thi aur koi bhi waahan guzarta nahi dikh raha tha, maine jeb tatoli jeb me purse bhi nahi tha, purse bhi coach me hi chhut gya tha. Maine socha agar jeb pe aise hote to kisi commercial gaadi me chad jata ab paise nahi hain free me hi kisi se lift leni padegi. Main sadak pe hi khada raha thodi der, kafi der baad ek car dikhai di maine hath dikhaya par car nahi ruki. Zahir si baat hai sunsan me ek ajnabi k hath dikhane pe car kaun rokega. Aise hi adhe ghante se zyada waqt beet gya is dauran kai car nikli par kisi ne car nahi roki. Main nirash hoke sadak pe kinare baith gya sir jhuka k. Thodi der baad maine notice kiya ki ek car mere paas aa k ruki, main khada hua, dekha car me ek lady baithi thi 25-30 saal ki.

“Aap sadak pe aise baithe hain? Theek to hain ya koi takleef ha?” Us lady ne puchha.

Main socha ki usko train se jungle me pahuchne wali baat bataunga to ye mujhe nashedi ya paagal samajhlegi aur tab shayad meri help na kare, mujhe ise aisa kuchh batana hoga jispe ye yakeen kar sake. Ye soch k maine usse kaha

“Ji mera naam Aman hai, vo meri train chhut gyi hai, actually train jungle me ruki thi main bahar nikla thoda tahalne k liye aage nikal aya aur achanak se train chal di jab tak main train pahuchta train jaa chuki thi, main akela safar kar raha tha train me koi janne wala hota to vo chain khich k train rok leta, mera mobile, purse, sara saman train me hi chhut gya hai”

“Ohh rail line toh I guess yahan se 4-5 km door hogi, aap wahan se paidal aa rahe hain, aiye baithiye.” Usne ye kah k door khola car ka aur main car me sawar ho gaya. Main aage baitha aur tab mujhe ahsas hua ki car me pichhe koi aur bhi baitha hai, koi young ladka tha pichhe baithe, uske halke halke kharrate ki awaz aa rahi thi.

“Ji madad k liye shukriya” maine kaha.

“Main Sneha Pichhe jo so raha hai vo mera chhota bhai Rohit hai, hum dono ek function se laut rahe hain. To apko apne kisi janne wale ka number yaad hai? Agar ho to unse baat kar k apni location bata dijiye ki abhi aap Ramnagar district me hain.” Us lady ne kaha.

Ye sun k maine jawab diya “nahi mujhe koi bhi mobile number nahi yaad hai, bus apna number mujhe yaad hai uspe call kar k dekh lijiye shayad kisi ko mila ho to vo safe rakhe ho mera phone”

Aur maine use apna number bataya jispe usne call kiya par phone switch off aya yani jis kisi ko bhi mera bag aur phone mile the uski wapas karne ki mansha nahi thi.

She said: “Ohh Aman apka number utha nahi aur ab apko dusre kisi janne wale ka number bhi nahi maloom. Aisa karte hain main apko auto rikshaw stand tak chhod deti hu aur kiraye k paise de deti hu taki aap wahan se rail station aur station se wapas apne ghar ya kisi janne wale k paas pahuch saken.”

Ye kahte hue Sneha ne kuchh note purse se nikal kar mujhe diye.

Meri ankho me ansu aa gye the, mujhe ummid nahi thi koi anjan meri help karega, par insaniyat abhi bhi zinda hai.

Me : “Ji bahot bahot shukriya, agar apko aitraz na ho aap apna ya apne bhai ka koi contact number de dijiye jab main apni manzil pahuch jaunga main apko paise lauta dunga.”


Sneha: “Are uski koi zarurat nahi hai, par haan ek contact number main apna aapko de deti hu agar koi problem aye to call kar k bata dijiyega, nahi to safely pahuch jaiyega to bata dijiyega.”


Me: “Thank you again apka sneha, jab main road pe pahucha tha to maine kai cars ko hath deke rokne ki kosish ki thi par koi nahi ruki thi, ant me main nirash ho kar road kinare baith gaya, aap ne car rokne ka risk liye aur meri madad ki main dua karta hu ishwar se, Upar wala apko tarakki de.”


Sneha: “Are bus shukriya ki ab koi zarurat nahi hai, haan aise me help karne me risk to hota hai, par apko aise baithe dekh mujhe feel hua ki shayad apko such me help ki madad ki zaroorat hai aur aapse baat kar k clear ho gya tha ki aapko wakai me madad ki zarurat thi.”

Tabhi pichhe se awaz aayi “What the hell didi ye admi kaun hai.”

Ye 19-20 saal ka Rohit tha Sneha ka Chhota bhai tha jo pichhe baitha so raha tha aur achanak se jaga aur aage ek admi ko baithe dekh ghabra gaya shayad.

Rohit ki awaz sun k Sneha ne usko jawab diya.

“Ohh rohit tum jag gaye are ghabrao nahi ye Aman hain, inka sara saman including Mobile train me chhut gaya, ye train rukne par train se kuchh minutes k kiye nikle the aur train chal di, to ab inke paas kuchh bhi nhi hai even koi contact number bhi nahi yaad hai siwaye apne khud k phone k aur inka phone switched off aa raha hai."

Aman (me): "Hello Rohit."

Rohit: "Hello aman! Sorry main sote se achanak jaga tha to chauk gaya tha."


Khair mujhe sneha se puchhne pe time pata chala ki raat ya balki kahen subah me 2 baje se upar ho chuka tha. Ab humari car kai km chal chuki thi aur akhirkar sunsan rasta khatam hua aur car ek kasbe k paas se guzri kuchh aabadi nazar aane lagi halaki der raat ka time hone ki wajah se sannata hi pasra hua tha makaan zaroor dikh rahe the par koi bhi shakhs sadak pe nazar nahi aa raha tha, khair hum ek auto rikshaw stand k paas pahuche jahan Sneha ko mujhe drop karna tha. Khair maine Sneha se vida liya aur usko ek baar aur shurkiya bol kar main uski car se utar gaya.

Main auto rickshaw stand pe pahucha jahan itni raat ka samay hone k kaaran aur chhota mota kasba k nazdik hone k kaaran 2 auto khade hi nazar aa rahe the. Main auto k paas gaya to ek auto lock the aur koi driver nahi tha dusre auto me driver auto k andar so raha tha.


Mujhe uski nind se jagane me thodi hichak mahsoos hui main thodi der wahi khada raha. Thodi der baad wahan ek aur Auto wala aya, shayad vo kisi sawari ko chhod k aa raha tha kyuki auto khali tha. Mujhe khada dekh k usne mujhe puchha "kahan jana hai bhayya aapko, itni raat me aap yahan kaise, itni raat ko to koi sawari nahi milti main khud yaha auto khada kar k sone aya tha kyuki ghar mera kafi door hain yahan se par apko kahi jana ho to bataiye chhod deta hu"

Me "vo actually mera naam Aman hai mera phone kahi gayab hai aur train se main galti se yahan utar gaya bich me jungle me train rukne pe, mujhe train se Delhi tak jana tha"

He "ohh to aise karta hu apko Ramnagar k Railway station chhod deta hu wahan se apko Delhi ki koi na koi train mi hi jayegi."

Me "theek hai aap mujhe Railway station pe chhod do."

Aur main uske auto pe sawar ho gaya. Khair usne bataya ki uska naam Manoj hai aur railway station tak ka rasta thoda lamba hai to main aur auto driver manoj baate bhi karne lage raste me.

Manoj (auto driver) : "to yahan tak kaise pahuche sir aap."

Me: "Vo ek car me ek ladki aur uska bhai tha unhone lift di thi"

Manoj: "Oh….achha ajeeb baat hai kuchh din pahle ek accident hua tha usi route pe jahan ki aap bata rahe hain uss accident me ek ladki aur uska chhota bhai mare gaye the truck se hua tha accident santro car thi white color ki"

Ye sun k main sann ho gaya kyuki Sneha ki car bhi white thi. Mujhe laga kahi ye auto wala faltu me mujhe dara to nahi raha hai. Par maine socha isne to mujhe Sneha ki car me baithte ya utarte dekha bhi nahi, Balki ye to sneha k mujhe drop karne k kafi der baad mujhe mila. Maine himmat kar k usse puchha.

"Hmm...ajeeb sanyog hai, waise jo log mare the unke naam bata sakte ho kya?"

Driver Manoj: "are sahab ab naam kahan yaad rahenge vo to main wahan se uss din guzar raha tha to accident se damage santro car khud maine dekhi thi jise police kisi tarah raste se hata rahi thi accident k baad, isiliye yaad hai mujhe color."

Me : "kahi ladki kaa naam Sneha to nahi tha?"

He : "kahe dara rahe ho sahab ab koi mara hua shakhs thodi lift dega apko, unko car bhi white santro thi kya?"

Me "yes"

Ye sun k uss auto driver manoj ke expression ek dum badal gaye vo ghabraya hua dikhne laga, usne kisi ko phone milaya. Aur phone pe baat karye hue kaha "haa bhai sorry itni raat ko phone kar raha hu koi serious baat nahi bus vo accident hua tha pichhle month to vo ladki ka kya naam tha?"

Jawab sun k meri taraf dekhte hue usne kaha "achha sneha naam tha"

Me "Aur bhai kaa naam?"

Manoj "haa bhai vo ladki k bhai ka naam?...........achha Rohit"

Ye sun k mere dil ki dhadkane tez ho gayin, how can this be possible? No way they were alive. Sneha ne even mujhe apna number bhi diya tha. Yahi sub main sochne laga. Yahi Manoj phone pe baat kar chuka tha.

He "to uske bhai ka naam bhi Rohit tha kya jisne apko lift di thi?"

Me "yes"

He "hm...ab jo hua so hua ab mujhe dar lag raha hai to abhi ispe charcha ab aur nahi karte hain main apko station chhod deta hu, fir main sidha jaunga apne ghar."

Me "dekho main tumhe dara nahi raha par dar to mujhe lag raha hai tum jiske accident ki baat kar rahe ho usne mujhe lift di lift hi nahi paise bhi diye aur apna phone number bhi diya hai"

Ye bol k main apni jeb tatolne laga ki vo rupay aur vo parchi jisme sneha ne mujhe apna number likh k diya tha vo main driver ko dikha saku. Par meri dono hi jebe khali thi. Ab samajh gaya zaroor mera ghost encounter hua tha. Khair maine manoj se puchha "waise kisse baat kar rahe the tum"

Manoj "are sahab vo local police me hain mere ek janne wala night duty lagti hai unki accident k baad vo bhi wahan pahuche the to isliye maine phone se unse info li, dost hai vo police wala mera."

Tabhi manoj ka phone baja, usi police wale ka phone tha jiske bare me manoj baat kar raha tha, iss baar phone receive kar k Manoj ne speaker pe laga diya, taki baat mujhe bhi sunai pade.

Vo police wala on phone : "haa kya hua Manoj koi bhoot voot to nahi dekh liya? Aur sala tum daru to peete nahi ho kahi aaj pee to nahi li? Itni raat me auto chala rahe ho 3 se upar ho gaya main bhi ab night duty khatam kar k jaa raha hu tum bhi ab so jaao."

Manoj "haa bhai sawari chhod k ab ghar hi jaunga"

Police man "ok waise main dara nahi raha par raat me thoda sambhal k rahiyo, kuchh din pahle ek car wale ko bhoot dikh gaya tha"

Manoj "bhoot? Kiska bhoot? Wahi accident wali ladki Sneha ka?"

Police man: "are nahi re….koi admi tha 30 k aas paas ka uska bhoot, uss admi ki maut kai saal pahle hui thi train accident me yahi apne jile me, par saal bhar ho gaya hai shayad uss accident ko."

Manoj "achha k...kya naam tha uss admi ka ko accident me mara tha….mera matlab rail accident me?"

Police "abe tu naam aise puchhta hai jaise mujhe rata hua ho, aur rail accident me ek nahi kareeb 30 se zyada log mare the bogi k patri se utarne ke kaaran par uss ghata ko saal bhaar ho gaya hai, vo admi bhi un 30 me se ek tha jo mare the, ruk hold kar phone me dekh k batata hu uska kya naa tha jiska bhoot dikhne ki ghatna hui thi……………...haan vo... Aman…Aman Kumar naam tha uska…."

Uss police wale ne Phone pe itna hi kaha tha ki manoj behosh ho gaya aur auto aniyantrit ho k sadak kinare jaa k ek ped se takrayi………...
:bow: kya zabardast horror thriller likha hai, maja aa gya ek dum. Jo ek suspense banna chahiye horror story me wo is story me bakhoobi likha gya hai.

Aur to aur story ke shabdo ko aise chuna gya hai ki, kahani ki lay bilkul steek thi. Kahi gap nahi laga, saare scene aapas me connect the.
Writing skills ki baat kare to first person ko lekar story likhi gyi hai, jo ki baad me third person bana di, ek horror angle aise me hit baithta hai. Bahut maja aaya mujhe padhkar, aisa laga jaise mere aage hi ghatna ghat rahi ho. :applause:
 
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He just wanted an entry and he got it... He never intended to recive lot of reviews or others vag things... Chudayi wali story alag category me aa jaati hai aur usko apun rating nahi de sakta... Baaki prayas achha tha.. Xf ke दृष्टिकोण se yadi incest rahtae to chiej jyada better rahti.... Baaki language and etc. Were top notch... :approve:

Seriously koyi story likhne ka........:slap:
 
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Me: To me kia keroon? Me to Maa banna chahti hoon naa. Lekin nahi bun pa rahi. Kia sab mere bass me hai? Apse kitni bar kaha hai k Dr k pas chalain.

Amir: Yar Sabar ker lo. Mene agle hafte jana hai Dr k pas.

Me: G Nahi! Me Ap k sath chaloon gi. Ap hamesha aise hi kerte ho. Or Ami mujhe banjh hone k tanay deti hain.

Amir: Tum Q fikar kerti ho? Ami ki bato ko dil per matt lo.

Me: Kaise naa dil per loon? Ap kam per chale jatay hain. Un k tanay to me sunti hoon.

Ye keh ker meri aankho me aansu bhar aey. Amir ne mujhe apne sath laga liya or mujhe behlanay ki koshish kerne lagay.

Ye behes ab nahi pichle do saal se chal rahi hai. Or Amir hamesha meri baat taal jatay hain. Meri saas jald se jald apne waris ko dekhna chahti hain. Lekin haey re qismat! Mere shohar ko jaise koi parwa hi nahi. Thori hi der me wo hamesha ki tarah kharatay bhar rahay thay.

Mera nam hai Huma. Meri umar is wakt 30 sal hai. Mera qad 5 feet 6 inches or Mera figure 34C-30-36 hai. Jo kisi b mard ko rijhanay k liye kafi hai. Mene shadi se pehle sex ka naam tak nahi suna tha. Q k mere maa baap ne hamesha sakhti ki k me agar bahar ja rahi hoon to parday me rahoon. Mujhe kisi saheli k ghar janay ki ijazat b nahi thi. Mene sirf BA tak parhai ki or us k bad meri shadi ho gai. Mene matric me b science nahi parhi thi k mujhe mard or orat k darmiyan kia hota hai, uski samajh aey. Shadi ki raat jab mere shohar ne mere kapre utaray me andar hi andar simat ker reh gai. Jab unho ne meri chut me lund dala to mujhe kafi dard hua or halka sa khoon b nikla. Amir 4-5 dhakkay laga ker hi farigh ho gaey. Jis k bad ye routine bun gai. Amir hafte ya do hafte me meri chut me apna lund dalte or kuch dhakkay laga ker jhar jatay or so jatay. Unka lund men eek do bar hath se chu ker dekha tha. Jo k meri ek ungli k barabar tha. Lekin me is zindagi me khush thi. Q k Amir apna general store chelate, jis se ghar me paise ki koi kami nahi thi. Or sex k hawale se jab mujhe kuch b pata nahi to kisi shikayat ka sawal hi nahi hota. Mere nazdeek sex yei tha jo mere shohar kerte. Lekin mera nazariya tab badla jab meri zindagi me entry hui Hira or us k shohar Kamal ki.

Hira or kamal hamare ghar k sath wale ghar me aey. In ki naee naee shadi hui hai. Or dono Dr hain. Hira meri hi umar ki jis ka figure 40C-36-42 hai. Or qad 5 feet 4 inch hai. Jab k Kamal ka qad kam se kam 6 feet or dikhne me bilkul pehelwan lagta hai. Unho ne apni achi khasi body bana rakhi hai. Hira or Kamal apna clinic chalate hain. Subha k wakt Hira clinic jati hai or sham ko Kamal.

Hamesha ki tarah Amir ne doctor se koi check up nahi kerwaya. Idhar Hira k sath meri achi bun chuki thi. Hum dono dhero batain kiya kerte thay. Men eek din himmat ker k us k sath apna masla discuss ker liya.

Hira: Ye batao k tumhara shohar kis tarah chodta hai?

Me: Kia matlab kis tarah chodta hai?

Hira: Matlab tumhain kahan kahan chumta hai or phir tumhare kapre utar ker tumhain kitni der tak chodta hai?

Me: (sharma ker) Kaisi batain kerti ho? Kapre kon utarta hai bhala? Wo to apni shalwar utarte hain or me apni. Us k bad wo kuch der dhakkay lagatay hain or bus.

Hira: Kia? Tum ne kabhi bina kapro k chudai nahi ki?

Me: Nahi.

Hira: Acha ye batao k tumhare shohar ka lund kitna lamba hai?

Me: Meri is ungli k jitna. (Mene usko ishara ker k bataya)

Hira: Jaise tum bata rahi ho. Is tarah to kabhi b pregnant nahi ho sakti.

Me: (rohansi ho ker) Q? Aise Q keh rahi ho?

Hira: Q k tum janti hi nahi ho k sex kaise kiya jata hai? Or doosra tumhare shohar ka lund nahi sirf 3 inch ki lulli hai. Is k elawa naa tum dono ek doosre ko piyar kerte ho. Na oral sex kerte ho. To tum pregnant ho hi nahi sakti.

Me: To iska kia hal hai?

Hira: Tumhare is problem ka ek hal hai.

Me: Wo kia?

Hira: Dekho me jo kahoon gi, us se tumhain gussa aey ga lekin tum wada kero k meri poori bat suno gi.

Me: Theek hai me wada kerti hoon.

Hira: Dekho aj se 6maheenay pehle mere sath hadsa hua tha. Me 6month pregnant thi or seerhiyo se gir gai. Jis ki waja se mera bacha zaya ho gya. Or ab me kabhi maa nahi bun sakti. Tumhare or mere problem ka ek hal hai mere pas. Or wo ye k tum mere shohar se chudwa ker bacha paida kero. Tumhain do bachay paida kerne hon gay. Ek tumhara ho ga or doosra tum hamain do gi.

Me herat se moo kholay Hira ko dekhti rahi. Meri aankho me gussa utar aya tha. Or sath hi herat b ho rahi thi.

Me: Ye kia keh rahi ho? Tum hosh me to ho?

Hira: Me hosh me hon. Tum bashak achi tarah soch lo. Dekho! Tumhara shohar kabhi tumhain bacha nahi de sakta. Or me kabhi maa nahi bun sakti. To dono mil ker ye soda ker lete hain. Jis me tumhara b faida hai or mera b.

Me bina kuch kahay kuch der tak usko dekhti rahi or phir uth ker ghar aa gai. Agle ek hafte tak me khoi khoi si rahi or sochti rahi. Q k mujhe jo sikhaya gya us k mutabik ye bohot bara gunah hai k me shohar k elawa kisi or se talluk qaim keroon. Phir ek din meri saas ne mujhe khoob khari khoti sunaein or jee bhar ker tanay diye. K me unko ek waris nahi de sakti. Yei nahi! Unho ne to yahan tak keh diya k wo Amir ki doosri shadi karain gi. Ye sab meri bardasht se bahar ho chukka tha. So, Mene wo qadam uthanay ka soch liya jo kisi b larki ya orat k liye sab se mushkil hota hai.

Agle din sham me mein Hira k pas pohonch gai.

Me: Hira! Mujhe kuch poochna hai.

Hira: poocho.

Me: Agar kisi ko pata chal gya to…

Hira: Kisi ko pata nahi chale ga. Q k is bat ka zikar na tum kisi se kero gi or naa hum.

Me: Doosra ye k jab pehla bacha ho ga to tab us ko ap le lo gay?

Hira: Nahi! Pehla bacha tum log rakho gay. Doosre bachay ko hum adopt ker lein gay.

Me: Agar mera shohar na mana to.

Hira: Koi bat nahi! Usko Kamal mana lein gay.

Me: Kia ap ne kamal hai se bat ker li hai?

Hira: Haan! Me un se kuch nahi chupati. Tumhare baray me mene unko bata diya hai. Or wo maan gaey hain.

Me: Me jab Ap k husband k sath rahoon gi to Ap b sath ho gi?

Hira: Nahi.

Me: Jab me Ap k husband k sath rahoon gi to kamre me bilkul andhera ho ga.

Hira meri sunn ker muskura uthi. Or boli.

Hira: Pehli bat to ye k mere husband ko andhere me chudai ki adat nahi. Doora ye k wo sirf bedroom me hi nahi ghar k her konay me tumhain chodain gay. Is liye tumhain me kuch clips bhejti hoon. In sab me her ek cheez ko ghor se dekh lo or samajh lo. Us k bad hum agay barhain gay.

Ye keh ker Hira ne mujhe kuch video clips bhej diye. Jin ko mene save ker liya. Is k elawa hira ne mujhe ek shoper diya jis me kuch kapre thay.

Me: Is me kia hai?

Hira: Is me tumhare liye nighties or Bra Panties hain. Jin ko tum pehenne ki adat daal lo.

Me: Mujhe inki kia zarorat?

Hira: Zarorat hai. Ab tum mere shohar ki rakhail banne ja rahi ho to tumhain us tarah jeena ho ga jaise mere shohar chahte hain.

Mujhe rakhail lafz sunn ker bura laga jis ko hira ne b note ker liya.

Hira: Dekho bura nahi mano. Jo orat apne shohar k elawa kisi or mard se rishta banati hai to wo uski rakhail kehlati hai. Or befikar raho, tumhare sath jo commitment hai usko poora karain gay. Or haaan! Apni chut k balo ko hamesha saaf rakhna. Ab tum jao or kal sham 5bje tum is packet me jo hai usko pehen k ana, Is k elawa sirf burka pehen lena.

Me ghar aa gai or sara din sochti rahi k kia hoga mere sath? Me hira ko keh to aei hoon lekin kia mujhe aisa qadam uthana chahiye? Dekhte hi dekhte raat ho gai. Amir k sonay k bad mujhe khayal aya k Hira ne jo clips bhejay, wo dekh loon. Pehli video chelate hi mere mathay per paseena anay laga. Q k manzar hi kuch aisa tha. Ek nanga mard apna 8 inch lamba lund nikal ker sofay per baitha tha or ek larki us ki tango k beech baithi thi. Jo us k lund ko sehla rahi thi. Kuch der bad us larki ne lund ko chatna shuru ker diya. Jab lund us k thook se geela ho gya to us ne mard k lund ko moo me bhar liya or ahista ahista chusna shuru ker diya. Dekhte hi dekhte us aadmi ka poora lund larki k moo k andar bahar hone laga. Yahan per ye clip khatam ho gya or idhar meri halat kharab ho chuki thi. Reh reh ker meri aankho k samne us admi ka lund jhool raha tha.

Phir mene himat ker k doosra clip chalaya. Ek larki bilkul nangi apni tangain khol ker sofay per leti hui thi. Tabhi ek admi us ki tango k beech aya or uski chut ko sehlane laga jis per ek b baal nahi tha. Kuch der tak chut ko oper se sehlanay k bad us admi ne apna moo larki ki chut per rakh diya. Larki k moo se zordar aahhh nikal gai or sath mere moo se b. Kuch der tak wo admi oper hi oper se larki ki chut chatta raha phir us ne chut k labo ko ungli se khola or chut me apni zaban daal di. Larki jaise tarap ker reh gai. Wo zor zor se kamar hilanay lagi or aaaahhhh aaaahhhhh yyyeeesssss kerte huay apni chut chatwanay lagi.


Kuch der bad ye clip khatam ho gya. Phir ek clip me ek larki kuttiya bani thi or ek admi us ko peeche se chod raha tha. Aise hi baki clips b thay. Jin me larki kabhi khari ho ker, kabhi lait ker, kabhi ek tang utha ker. Kabhi mard k oper k aa ker chud rahi hoti. Ye sab dekh ker jahan me be inteha garam ho gai wahin sex k baray me sari batain me samajh chuki thi. Ab mujhe aise lagne laga jaise me Amir k sath apni zindagi barbad ker rahi hoon. Q k ye to mujhe theek se chod hi nahi sakte, to bacha kahan se dein gay.

Agle roz Amir k janay k bad mene achay se shower liya. Apni chut or jism k baalo ko achi tarah saaf ker k kamre me aa gai. Mene Hira ka diya hua packet uthaya. Jab mene packet khola to meri aankhain chowdi ho gaien. Q k is me ek aisa set tha jis ko mene kabhi nahi dekha tha. Mene wo kapre nikalay or bari mushkil se unko pehen liya jaise model bani hui thi.

Kalay rung ka bra panty set jis k thigh highs thien. Mujhe khud ko aise kapro me dekh ker bohot sharam aei. Lekin mene ab soch liya tha k kisi ki parwa nahi keroon gi. Mene burka pehna or Hira k pas aa gai. Mujhe dekh ker wo bohot khush hui. Wo mujhe andar kamre me le gai jo unka bedroom tha.

Hira jab mujhe bedroom me le ker gai to us ne mujhe burka utarne ka kaha. Mene sharmatay huay burka utar diya. Ye pehla moka thaa k me is tarah se kisi k samne thi. Mere jism per jo kapre thay, wo chupanay se ziada mere jism ko dikha rahay thay.

Hira: Wah! Tum bohot khubsurat lag rahi ho. Agar me larka hoti to din raat tumhain chodti. Lekin koi bat nahi! Ab tumhari chudai me to nahi lekin mere husband karain gay.

Phir us ne apne husband ko awaz di jo doosre room me thay. Hira k awaz dene per wo kamre me aa gaey. Jab wo kamre me aey to jahan mujhe dekhte hi unki saans tham gai wahin me sharam se zameen me gari ja rahi thi. Meri himat nahi ho rahi thi k nazrain utha ker unko dekhoon. Ye pehla moka tha k me kisi b mard k samne is halat me khari thi. Yahan tak k Amir ne b mujhe aj tak nanga nahi dekha tha. Kamal ahista ahista chalet huay mere pas aey. Un k qadmo ki chap sunte hi meri saansain bhari hone lagien. Kamre me gehri khamoshi thi jis ko hira ne tora.

Hira: Dekha! Kitni piyari hai ye? Mene apko kaha tha.

Kamal: Tum sahi keh rahi thien. Ye wakei behad haseen hai. Isko chod ker maza aey ga.

Hira: Haan! Chalo tum isko chodo. Me beth ker dekhti hoon.

Ye keh ker Hira ek side per beth gai or Kamal mere pas aa ker khare ho gaey. Kamal ne ek angoothi uthai or mere left hand ki ungli me pehna di.

Kamal: Dil to kerta hai k tumhain apni jan bana loon lekin me Hira ko apni jan bana chukka hoon. Aj tum meri najayaz biwi banne ja rahi ho. Is liye ye tohfa samajh lo.

Ye keh ker kamal ne mujhe apni baho me bhar liya. Kamal k seene k sath lagte hi mujhe aise laga jaise me kisi pathar k sath ja lagi hon. Kamal ka jism bohot mazboot tha. Kamal ne mere chehre ko oper uthaya or mere honto se apne honth mila diye. Kamal mere honto ko chusne laga. Or meri saans bhari hone lagi.

Thori hi der me unki zaban mere moo me ghoom rahi thi. Or me b sab kuch bhool ker unko kiss kiye ja rahi thi. Kamal k hath mere jism ko sehla rahay thay. Kabhi wo meri gaand ko dabate to tabhi meri kamar ko sehlate huay mere boobs ko dabatay. Mere hosh gum ho rahay thay. Meri panty itni hi der me geeli ho chuki thi. Aj tak Amir k sath mene aise ehsas ko mehsus nahi kiya tha. Jo mujhe aj ho raha tha. Mujhe aise lag raha tha jaise meri saans band ho jaey gi. Tab kamal ne mujhe chora. Me tez tez saans lene lagi. Tabhi kamal ne mujhe ghuma diya or mere peeche khare ho ker meri garden ko chumne chatne lagay.


Sath sath Kamal meri chut ko masal rahay thay. Mere moo se aaaahhhh… oooohhhhh… ssssss….. ki siskariyan nikal rahi thien jo kamre k mahol ko or b ziada garam ker rahi thien. Tab kamal ne meri bro k hook khol diya. Mere boobs khuli hawa me saans le rahay thay. Kamal ne kuch der tak mere boobs ko dabaya or phir mujhe bistar per lita diya. Sharam se meri aankhain band ho chuki thien. Kamal ne mere sath leit ker mere boobs ko chusne lagay. Aj pehli bar koi mere boobs ko is tarah istamal ker raha tha. Pata nahi kab or kaise mere hath kamal k sir per chalne lagay. Jaise usay keh rahay hon k chustay raho. In boobs ka sara ras nichor lo.

Meri bechaini barhti ja rahi thi. Meri chut kitni bar pani baha chuki thi, mujhe is ka andaza hi nahi. Q k her 10-15 second me mera jism jhatkay khata or aise lagta jaise meri chut me se kuch beh nikla hai. Ahista ahista Kamal mere jism ko chumte huay neeche ki taraf barhne lagay. Thori der me wo mere pait ko chumne lagay. Unka agla nishana meri panty thi.


Meri naaf ko chumte huay Kamal ne meri panty ko niche utarna shuru kiya to mene b madhoshi k alam me apni gand oper utha di jis ne unhain panty utarne me asani ho. Kuch hi der me meri panty sarakti hui mere paaoo se nikal chuki thi. Mere jism per ab thigh highs or garter belt thi. Kamal ahista ahista meri naaf se niche k hissay ko chatne lagay. Kuch hi second me meri saans mere galay me atak ker reh gai. Q k kamal ki zaban ne ab meri chut per hamla ker diya tha.

Me un ki pakar se nikalne k liye jhatpatanay lagi lekin me zara b hil nahi saki. Q k Kamal ne meri tango ko kas k jakar rakha tha. Un k dono hath meri tango se hote huay mere boobs ko daba rahay thay. Me is dohre hamre ko nahi jhel pa rahi thi. Me aaahhhh… ooohhh.., kerti hui apni kamar hila rahi thi k un ka chehra door ker sakoon lekin is tarah me un k liye asani paida ker rahi thi. Kamal kafi der tak meri chut ko chuste rahay or apni piyas bujhatay rahay. Is doran me do bar farigh hui. Meri chut se nikal eke k qatra wo pee gaey. Jab unho ne jee bhar k chut ras pi liya to wo mere sath lait gaey.

Kamal: Chalo huma ab mera lund chuso.

Me: Mene kabhi nahi kiya.

Kamal: koi bat nahi. Tum pehle mere lund ko charo taraf se chato. Jab tumhain ye lagay k tum mera lund apne moo me le sakti ho to le lena.

Me kamal ki bat sun ker un ki tango k pas baith gai. Unka akra hua lund meri aankho k saamne tha. Jis per balo ka namo nishan nahi tha. Unka lund koi 10 inch lamba tha or bohot mota b tha. Sath hi wo hawa me jhatke khaa raha tha. Ye pehla moka thaa k mene haqeeqat me lund dekha tha. Aj tak mene sirf Amir k sath chudai ki or wo b andhere me. Me soch rahi thi k inka lund meri chut ko phaar ker rakh de ga. Tabhi kamal ne agay barh ker apna lund mere honto se chu liya. Jis se me hosh ki dunia me wapas aei.

Kamal k lund se ajeeb si halki halki boo aa rahi thi. Lekin mujhe buri nahi lag rahi thi. Mene himmat ker k ahista ahista apni zaban bahar nikali or kamal k lund ko chu liya. Pani ka ek qatra meri zaban per lag gya. (bad me pata chala isko precum kehte hain.) Mene us qatre ko apne halaq se neeche utar liya. Uska koi taste nahi tha. Or naa hi mujhe bura laga. Ahista ahista mene kamal k lund ko charo tarah se chatna shuru ker diya. Un k lund ko achay se geela kerne k bad mene ahista se un k lund ko moo me bhar liya. Un k lund ki topi or koi 2 inch lund hi mere moo me ja saka or mujhe aise lagne laga jaise mera moo full ho chukka hai. Mene un k lund ko chusna jari rakha. Or koshish kerte huay un lund ko or b ziada moo me bharti rahi. Ahista ahista unka aadhay se ziada lund mere moo me ja chukka tha. Jo mere halaq se takra raha tha. Meri aankho me aansu aa chukay thay, lekin me phir b sab kuch bhool ker josh se un k lund ko chus rahi thi.

Phir kamal ne mere moo se lund nikal diya or mujhe bed k kinaray per lita diya, Unho ne meri tangain poori tarah se khol dien. Or meri chut me ungli andar bahar kerte huay mere chehre ko chumne lagay. Mujhe unki ungli se halka halka dard ho raha tha lekin me bardasht ker rahi thi. Kamal b ye jantay thay or meri chut ko kholne ki koshish ker rahay thay ta k me un k lund ko jhel sakoon. Unho ne thora tail meri chut per dala or phir se apni ungli andar bahar kerne lagay, Kuch hi der me do or phir 3 ungliya meri chur me andar bahar hone lagien. Is doran me 3-4 bar manzil k qareeb pohonchi lekin unho ne mujhe jharne nahi diya. Phir jab unho ne dekha k me poori tarah se tayar hoon to unho ne meri tangain apne kandhay per rakhien or meri chut per apna lund fit ker diya.

Bari mushkil se un k lund ka topa meri chut me phas saka. Kamal ne apne lund per dabao dalna jari rakha. Jis se unka lund ahista ahista andar sarakne laga. 2 inch lund hi andar gya k mere moo se halki si cheekh nikal gaie. Kamal ne foran ruk ker mere boobs ko sehlana shuru ker diya. Sath hi sath wo meri chut k danay ko masal rahay thay. Is k sath sath unho ne utne hi lund ko andar bahar kerna shuru ker diya. Jab me relx hoti to wo koshish ker k thora or lund meri chut me daal dete.

Aadhay ghante k andar andar meri chut un ka poora lund khaa chuki thi. Mere andar ek toofan mach chukka tha, Ye ehsas aj tak mene kabhi mehsus nahi kiya tha. Kamal ne ab meri thukai shuru ker di thi. Wo berehem banay mere chut me zor zor se dhakkay laga rahay thay. Meri chut ab un k lund k hisab se khul chuki thi. Kuch der me unho ne meri chut se lund nikala or khud leit gaey. Me un k lund k oper baithi to mujhe aise laga jaise koi khonta meri chut me ghusta ja raha hai. Kamal ne koi jaldi nahi ki bal k sara kam mujhe kerne diya. 5min me hi me unka lund apni chut me le chuki thi. Jis k bad ek bar phir se kamal ne dhua dhar chudai shuru ker di. Me ab tak mazeed 3 bar jhar chuki thi. Mujhe piyas lag rahi thi or kamal apni piyas bujha rahay thay. Meri aankhain bhari hone lagien, me behosh hone ko thi k kamal ne apna lund meri chut se nikal liya or mujhe bistar per lita diya. Hira jaldi se mere liye pani le aei.
10min bad mere hosh bahal huay. Is bar kamal ne thori der mujhe apna lund chuswaya. Phir mujhe doggy style me khara ker k meri chut bajanay lagay. Sach bat to ye hai k is style me jab unka lund meri chut me andar bahar ho raha tha to mujhe dard hone laga. Mujhe aise lag raha thaa k jaise meri chut phatt rahi hai. Is liye kamal ne 2-3min bad hi neeche lita ker chodna shuru ker diya. Is bar kamal dhakkay laganay ki machine ban chukay thay. Me mazeed 2 bar farigh ho chuki thi or meri chut me ab bohot ziada jalan or dard ho rahi thi. Kamal ne is cheez ko mehsus ker liya tha. Wo b ab jharne k kafi qareeb aa chukay thay. Un ki saans bhari ho chuki thi. Phir wo apna lund meri chut me jar tak daal ker ek dum se ruk gaey. Sath hi mujhe aise mehsus hone laga jaise meri chut me koi aag lag gai ho. Unka pani itna garam thaa jis ko chut me mehsus ker k me ek dum hawaoon me urnay lagi. Us ehsas ko me lafzo me bayan nahi ker sakti. Meri chut ko poori tarah se bharne k bad kamal mere oper se hat gaey.

Me uthne lagi lekin hira ne mujhe rok diya.

Hira: Nahi Huma! Zara b nahi hilna apni jaga se. Aise hi leti raho. Or tangain oper takiye per rakho.

Mene aisa hi kiya. Me tangain khol ker takiye per rakh ker leti rahi. Koi 20 min bad kamal fresh ho ker kamre me aey.

Kamal: Maza aa gya tumhain chod ker huma. Tum such me bohot zabardast larki ho. Suhagrat me Hira 2 bar behosh hui thi. Or mere lund ko jhelne me isko koi 1 maheena laga tha. Or tum pehli bar me mere lund ko jhel gaein.

Me kamal ki is bat per sharma gai. Kamal agay aey or ek bar phir mere honto ko chusne lagay. Sath sath wo mere boobs ko b masalne lagay. Kuch der bad wo mujhse alag huay or Hira ko kiss ker k apne kapre pehen ker clinic chalay gaey. Hira ne us wakt mujhe sambhala. Q k ek to meri chut buri tarah sooj chuki thi or doosra mujhe chut k andar tak bohot dard ho raha tha.

Me ek ghanta mazeed wahan rest ker k apne ghar aa gai. Jis k bad ye silsila hi chal nikla. Me rozana Hira k ghar jati. Jahan jab dil kerta kamal mujhe nanga kerte or chodna shuru ker dete. Me unki marzi k kapre b pehenti. Her bar aisa hota k jab meri chut pan ichor chor ker thak jati tab kahin ja ker kamal ka pani nikalta. Or wo pani b bohot ziada hota tha, jiska nateeja ye hua k me sirf ek maheene me hi pregnant ho gai. Ye khabar sun ker Arif or meri saas bohot khush huay. Or zahir hai Kamal or Hira ko khush hona hi tha. Pregnancy me b 8th month tak kamal ne mujhe khub choda. 9maheenay poore hone me abhi kuch din rehte thay k mujhe labor pain shuru ho gya. Or tab hamari goad me nanha mehman aa gya. Men eek khubsurat se betay ko paida kiya tha. Jis ko dekh k sab khush thay. Kisi ko ehsas nahi tha k is bachay k liye mene kia qurbani di hai.

Khair aise hi wakt guzra, jab mera beta 4-5months ka hua to meri chudai ka silsila phir se shuru ho gya. Aisa koi style naa ho ga jis me kamal ne mujhe naa choda ho. Lita ker, khara ker k, tang utha ker etc ek lambi list hai. Me b ab chudwana seekh chuki hoon. Mujhe her tarah se chudwanay me maza ata hai. Kamal se chudwatay 2 months bad me phir se pait se ho gai. Is bar phir mene betay ko janam diya. Mene, Hira ne or Kamal ne Arif or unki ami ko razi ker liya k ye bacha Kamal or Hira ko de dein.

Me Kamal ki najayaj patni or rakhael bun ker itni khush thi k me her doosre din un se chudwanay pohonch jati. Wo b dil bhar ker mujhe chodte. So, ye bachay ki chah me “Najayaz Rishtay” ka jo safar shuru hua, wo aj 10 saal bad b chal raha hai. Mene mazeed do betiyo or ek betay ko janam diya hai. Hira ko is per koi b aitraz nahi k me aj b kamal se chudwati hoon.

Me kuch bato per aj b heran hoti hoon k baki mardo ki tarah naa to kamal ne aj tak meri gand marne ki koshish ki or naa hi mujhe apni lund ka pani pilaya. Jab k wo ye jante hain k me unki kisi b baat ka mana nahi keroon gi.

Dekhte hain ye safar agay hum ko kahan tak le k jata hai. Umeed hai apko meri ye kahani pasand aei ho gi. Jald hi milte hain ek naey qissay, ek naei kahani k sath. Tab tak apni writer “hira” ko ijazat dijiye. Bye….!
Achhi storyy thiii. Padh ke maza aaya. Aapki baaki stories ki tarah hi thi yeh bhi. Agar aap isme kuch pics add karti toh aur achha hotaa.

Khairr aapki aisi hi ek aur story ka intezaar rahegaa.
 

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कहानी के शीर्षक को देखकर लगा था कि ये कुछ अलग तरह की कहानी होगी लेकिन ये तो उसी तरह की कहानी निकली जिसकी इस फोरम पर भरमार है।।

आमिर कपड़ों का एक सफल व्यवसायी है। जो मोतियों की कारीगरी के लिए प्रसिद्ध है।। रजनी जो आमिर की दोस्त है उसने आलिया नामक लड़की की सिफारिश की।। लड़की भी चलते पुर्जे वाली निकली।। उसने काम पाने के चक्कर मे आमिर के साथ ही सो गई।। मतलब ये कि गुण और अच्छा काम मायने नहीं रखता आलिया के लिए। अपने जिश्म की नुमाइश करो और अपना काम निकालो यही सिद्धात है आलिया का जिसके कारण वो पहली मुलाकात में वो सबकुछ कर गई जो कोई सभ्य लड़की कभी न करती।।
 
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