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ek rajya me raja 10 dino se bimar tha. Or use abhi 2 din pehle hi khuskhabri milli thi, uske do judwa bachhe huye the. Par raja khushi manane ki halat me nahi tha. Us rajya ke sare vedo ko bulaya gya opchar ke liye par sab ke sab nakam ho gaye.
5 din baad raja gujar gaya. Rani ko kafi bada jhatka laga par. Use apne dono beto ke liye jinda rehna tha. To rajya ka sara kaam rani ke kandho par tha jab tak unke bachhe bade nahi ho jate tab tak.
Phir aise 10 saal gujar gaye.sab khusi se chal raha tha par un dono rajukumar ki tabiyat achhanak se bigad gayi. Or vo bimar ho gaye. Jab vedo ne janch kiya to pata laga yeh dono bhi usi bimari ke shikar huye h jis bimari se raja bimar huye the.
Rani ko dar tha ki unke bachho ko kuchh ho na jaye. Or vahi huya jiska unhe dar tha. Unme se ek rajkumar jinda nahi bachh paya.
Par dusre rajkumar ki tabiyat abhi bhi tik nahi thi ki rani bhi bimar ho gayi or vo pehle se hi sadme me thi is karan bimar hone ke do din baad hi vo bhagwan ko pyari ho gayi.
Rajkumar kuch dino me thik ho gaya par vo kafi kamjor ho gya. Uss rajya ke sare mantriyon ne yeh tay kiya ki rani ke bhai yani is rajya ke mitra rajya ko iss rajya ko sonpa jayega jab tak rajkumar iss rajya ko sambhlne layak nahi ho jaye.
Rajkumar bada ho gaya or ab vo kafi tandrust bhi tha. Usne har vo niti sikhi jo ki ek raja ko achha raja banane me madad kare.
Vo din aa gaya jis din rajkumar ko raja banaya jayega. Sab sahi se ho gaya. Rajkumar raja bhi ban gaya. Raja banne ke 2 ghante baad hi ek dut aata hai or ek buri khabar deta hai.
Is rajya ke ek gaanv ke sare logo ko buri tarike se khatam kar diya. Or us gaanv ke andar koi bhi jivit nahi bachha sab nasht ho gaya hai.
Is baat se raja ko kafi dukh huya. Usne is baat ki tah tak janne ke liye us gaanv me jana chahte the. Or vo jaise hi gaanv ke karib pahunche unhe har taraf khoon se sani dewware najar aayi. Waha ke aisa haal ho gaya tha. Ki raja vo sab dekh na saka or jee ghabrane laga or uski ulti hone lagi. Raja ke sahayko ne unhe sambhala. Or usnhe yeh salah di ki hum sab rajmahal wapas chalte hai. Waha par jakar kuch sochte hai ki iska kya kiya ja sakta hai. To raja kuch kehne ko hi hota hai ki ek ghode par sawar ek admara sa aadmi unki tarf hi aa raha tha to raja aangrakshako ne raja ko charo taraf se gher liya unko bachhane ke liye. Par jaise hi vo ghoda aa kar ruka sab hairan ho gaye ki us ghode par jo aadmi hai vo pura khoon se lat pat tha or uske pero or hatho ki chamdi bhi udhad gayi thi. Raja phir is manjar se ghabra jata hai or phir ulti kar deta hai.
Thodi der baad ved aate hai or us aadmi ko thik karte hai or vo bolne ki halat me aate hi vo rone lagta hai. Jab us se puchha jata hai ki tum ro kyon rahe ho to usne bataya ki uska pura pariwar us gaanv me khatam ho gaya. To usse phir puchha jata hai tum kis gganv ki baat kar rahe ho to usne pass wale gaanv ka naam liya yeh sunke raja jo abhi tak aaram se betha tha vo hairani se uth jata hai or sochne lagata hi ki meri kismat kitni kharab hai ki jis din mai raja bana usi din 2 gaanv mere rahte hi tabah ho gaye. Or uski halat bhi dekhi nahi ja rahi hai. To raja ne sabhi mantriyon sahit bake bachhe gaanvo ko surksha dena ka faisla sunaya.
Sare log jald se jald tayari me jut gaye. Thodi der baad jab tayari khatam huyi tabhi ek dut aata hai or kehta hai gajab ho gaya sarkaar 2 or gaanvo ka khaatma ho gaya. Yeh sunke sabhi logo ke kaan khade ho gaye.
sab pareshaan ho gaye ki aab kya kiya jaye. Par raja ne kaha baki bachhe tin gaanvo ko abhi ke abhi surkha milni chahiye usme deri nahi karni chahiye. To sare sainik un gaanvo ke liye rawana ho gaye or vo vahan ki raksha karne lage.
Yeh din thoda sirdard tha par jaise taise nikal gaya.
Agle din raja kafi kush najar aaya pata nahi kyon par shaayad use is baat ki khusi thi ki baki tin gaanv to bachh hi gaye vo bhi uski sujh bujh se.
par raj ki khushiyon ko to najar lagi huyi thi. Or uske is naye din ke abhi 2 ghante bhi nahi gujre the ki ek dut aata hai ki ussne jo bhi sainik bheje the vo sab maare gaye or gaanv walo ko bhi khatam kar diya.
Ab us rajya me koi bhi gaanv nahi bachha tha or vo iss bat ko pachane ke liye tahal hi raha tha ki uske rajmahal me hamla hota hai.

Or us rajmahal ke sainik kab jinda se murda ho gaye is baat ki bhanak bhi nahi lagi. Jab raja apne kaksha ke andar apne aap ko ladai ke liye tayati kar raha tha ki uske kaksha ka darwaja tut gaya or waha par raja par hamala ho gya or jaise hi raja ne apne sir duri tarf kiya ki raja ka sir us kaksha ki khidki se bahar tha. Jaate jaate raja ko us saksha ki sahkal dikhi jo iss sab ke pichhe tha. Par ab is rajaya ke saath saath is kahani ka bhi aant ho gaya.

Sab khatm finish tha end suru aant se hua aur aant par hi khatm. Jo raj tha raj hi rah gaya. Sabhi ek ek kar mare gaye rajkumar ka pura parivar khatm ho gaya thodi bahut dilasha thi ki ek rajkumar jeevit hai lekin vo bhi dushman ke haatho mara gaya.

Bahut khubsurat likha kahani ko thoda aur aage badaya ja skta tha par jitna likha aur jis lahje me likha kahile tarif hai.

Adbhut atulniue lekhan kaushal:applause::applause::applause:
 
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Warning: Spoilers Ahead.. Yadi story nahi padhi toh review nahi padhne ka :buttkick:

Bahut hee badhiya koshish गंदु ब्रु :approve:

Starting se hee story me rahasya ke sath romanch tha.. Jisse story ke start se hee bhayankar wala interest apun ko aaya... Aage padhne ka.. Par fir story jaise jaise aage badhi... Story apna grip khone lagi.. Kuch writing ke kaaran, kuch predictable plot ke kaaran... Jo title se hee tha... Jaise hee wo item aur uska 20 saal kaa jhaant barabar bhai mila.. Lagbhag 99% reader guess kiye honge ki.. Aage jaa ke, hero apni gand marwayega jab use pata chalega ki dono bhoot hai....aur aisa hua bhi...

Par... Par...
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Yahi pe story ne U-turn liya... Loved the twist 💥👌 aur last ke part ne story me jo bhi kami thi, uski kami ek jhatke me mutth maarke baahar kar diya..... Is type ki short story pe jyada technicality pe ghusna gandu logo kaa kaam hai.. Overall story was good and that's all that matters in a story...

Title was good aur sach me ajeeb raat thu.. Jaha ek mara hua aadmi, mare hue aadmiyo ki baat kar rha tha...


7 /10
Ye sun k maine jawab diya “nahi mujhe koi bhi mobile number nahi yaad hai, bus apna number mujhe yaad hai uspe call kar k dekh lijiye shayad kisi ko mila ho to vo safe rakhe ho mera phone”
Lawda... Not possible
She said: “Ohh Aman apka number utha nahi aur ab apko dusre kisi janne wale ka number bhi nahi maloom. Aisa karte hain main apko auto rikshaw stand tak chhod deti hu aur kiraye k paise de deti hu taki aap wahan se rail station aur station se wapas apne ghar ya kisi janne wale k paas pahuch saken.”

Yar.. Ye kitti awesome hai yar... Jarurat padne pe chodne ko bhi de degi😜😂:pond:
 
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" Everything Is Binary "


Main roz ki tarah hi phising kar raha tha, Yahi kaam tha mera dusron ke article ko bich network se uthana aur usme kuch letter badal kar apne pass rakh lena. Jadatar ye article US, UK, Germny ke hi hote the. Malum tha ger-kanuni hai lekin snooping aur phising karne walon ko pakadna abhi mushkil kaam tha, ache paise bhi mil jaya karte the. Jabse dunia internet par channe lagi thi hum jaison ki amdani mein badhtotri jarur ho gayi thi. Open source operating system ka sabse jada fayda yahi tha ki usme sabut mitane mein asani hoti thi aur secure bhi hoti thi lekin aksar log secure chiz ko chhod wo operating system chhunte the jisme kaam asani se ho jaye isliye mera kaam aur asan ho jaya karta tha. Roz ki tarah aaj bhi meri script chal rahi thi aur UK ke ek article ko snoop karte hue uske kuch letter change karne mein lagi hui thi. Word ke kuch letter badalne par vo word galat ho jata tha lekin yahi samne walle ki demand hoti thi. Aksar mera kaam sirf script chalana hota tha baki main dusre terminal par apna alag kaam karta tha. Abhi bhi wahi kar raha tha ki tabhi meri nazar script par padhi jo ek jagah par halt kar gayi thi.

Halt dekh mene us terminal ko maximize kara aur abhi uska duplicate terminal khol kar check karta utne mein vo chal padi jise dekh mene apna irada badal diya. Ho sakta hai network par kuch time laga ho. Main terminal ko minimize karne hi wala tha ki meri nazar terminal par chal rahi commands ke output par padi jo ki aam-tor wale output se alag thi.

" ye kya chal raha hai " abhi dhayan se dekhna shuru kara hi tha ki kuch data accumulate hone laga. Kuch samajh pata use pehle achanak se screen par blue color ki dots ikhati honi shuru ho gayi aur agle hi pal ek hologram screen par ubhar kar mere samne aa gaya jo ek chehre mein tabdeel ho chuka tha.

" holy shitt... " main achanak se apni seat se uchakte hue piche ki taraf hua. Mene aaj tak aisa kabhi nahi dekha tha, ek pal laga jaise kisi fedral agency ne mujhe pakad liya hai aur ab mere bachne ka koi chance nahi tha kyun ki ab tak to unhone mere system ki har chiz ko read kar liya hoga. " shit.. jaldi se power cable nikalni hogi " dimag mein pehla khayal yahi aya jabki iska koi faiyda nahi tha par sabse pehle wahi karna theek laga. Mene fauran apna CPU aage ki taraf khincha aur power cable nikalne ko hi hua ki CPU ke bagal mein rakhe speaker mein se ek awaz ayi " Don't panic " awaz sunte hi mene CPU ek dum se chhod diya aur piche ki taraf baith gaya.

" I know what are you thinking " Awaz speaker mein se aa rahi thi lekin jo bol raha tha vo koi aur nahi balki screen wala Hologram tha. " Just Stay Calm and listen to me " Us hologram ne dubara bola jise sun na jane kyun main thodi aage ki taraf hua aur Hologram ko dhayan se dekhne laga. Na hi vo chehra mujhe insan ka lag raha tha aur na hi kisi alien ka. Kyun ki ek dafa mujhe ye bhi laga tha ki shayad mere system ko kisi Alien ne kabze mein le liya hai.

" machine jaisa chehra hai " sochte hi uski awaz ayi aur main thoda piche ki taraf ho gaya. Awaz bhi aisi thi mano jaise koi machine ki awaz ho, nahi.. machine hi bol rahi ho. " this is some super tech shit.. " main soch raha tha aur vo kuch bol raha tha isliye dhayan uski taraf laga dia.

" You are going to do some extra-ordinary things in your future days. Not today, not tomorrow but in some years. You will discover some extra-ordinary things which will be used for the betterment for this whole world "

" nahi bhai... main sirf chor hun.. ise jada kuch nahi... " khud se main bola kyun ki ise jada main kuch tha bhi nahi. Bar-bar yahi khayal aa raha tha ki kisi Fedral Agency ne mujhe hack kar liya hai aur ye sab waqt kaat rahe hain taki meri location track kar sakein, ye sab jante hue bhi na jane kyun main us Hologram se nazar hi nahi hata paa raha tha. Because for me, this is the best shit i am seeing in my life.

" I know this is difficult for you to understand but as much as it is important for you, it is more important for this world "

" difficult nahi .. main maan hi kahan raha hun.. ye sab mujhe fasane ki chaal hai.. par samajh nahi aa raha ki jisne bhi ye kiya vo kiya kaise " khud se sawal aur soch mein itna kho raha tha ki ye bholta jaa raha tha ki bas kuch der aur jiske baad main pakda jaunga.

" And I know you are not believing me right now but you will. I am gonna share something with you which will make you believe that you will gonna change this world " Hologram ne bolna band kiya aur uske baad ek ke baad ek file background open honi shuru ho gayi. Kuch hi pal mein meri puri window par alag-alag file khul gayi jise dekhte hi mere peron talle zameen hi khisak gayi aur main chair ke handle ko pakdte hue apni seat se khada hua aur un chizon ko padne ke liye mano screen mein ghus hi gaya tha.

" unbelievable " itna hi bola ki achanak se vo sabhi chizen screen se gayab ho gayi aur Hologram se awaz ate hi wapis ja baitha.

" Don't worry, this is all for you. And now i believe you are satisfied with my message. Please do not share this with anyone " iske baad ek pause aya meri life mein aur us hologram ke bolne par bhi.

" Extracting files now " Hologram ki awaz ayi aur mene dekha ki dusre terminal mein extraction shuru ho gayi jise dekhte hi samajh aa gaya ki ek path par folder ban raha hai jiske andar sab kuch jaa raha hai vo abhi chal hi raha tha ki hologram fir se bola. " And remember Everything Is Binary " usne itna hi kaha aur vo hologram destroy hokar puri screen par dots ke roop mein fial gaya. Hologram ke destroy hone ke baad bhi main screen ko hi ghurta raha jaise lag raha ho ki ab kuch hone wala hai, ab kuch hone wala hai par jab kuch nahi hua aur meri chal rahi script complete hui tab main hosh mein aya. Hosh mein atte hi sabse pehla kaam jo mene kiya vo tha susu. Ghabrahat se itna pressure bana tha ya thodi der pehle piye full glass juice se par susu karke jab aya tab pet se relax hua warna dimag to abhi bhi sann tha.

Jo folder Hologram duara extract hua tha vo ek location par pada tha lekin himmat nahi ho rahi thi ki main use khol kar dekh bhi sakun. Man hi man cha to main raha tha lekin himmat nahi ho rahi thi. Ye lag raha tha ki kuch der mein koi mujhe pakad kar le jayega aur isliye man keh raha tha ki sab kuch tabah kar dun par us hologram ki baat jaise dimag mein stuck kar rahi thi, kyun main apni zindagi ek mazak ke chalte khatam kar raha hun, utha kar le gaya koi to salon sadna padega.

" bhaad mein gayi dunia, sorry hologram bhaiya... nahi ho payega " mene terminal khola aur usme command dali ' rm -rvf /* ' bas enter daba aur khel khatam. Ye ungli enter kyun nahi daba rahi daba.. daba .dabaa.... Main man se puri takat laga kar cheekh raha tha lekin meri ungli ne enter nahi dabaya.

" shit... " mene command wala terminal band kiya aur CPU se Cd eject karke bahar nikali jiske andar meri phising wala sara data tha aur computer ki screen ko switch off kar diya. Fatt bhi rahi thi aur ek alag tarah ka utsah bhi andar paida ho gaya tha. Ab ya to meri fategi tabhi ye utsah khatam hoga ya fir is utsah ko koi maar de to chain milne wala tha. CD ko hath mein pakde main chair par piche ki taraf fel gaya aur hologram ki baat ko sochne laga, kuch der ache se sochne ke baad conclusion aya " do din se kacha nahi badla world kya badlunga.. mujhse nahi ho payega ... " apni jagah se khada hua aur telephone se number dial kiya ' 0-1-2-4-8' number dial karte hi ring jane lagi aur che-sath ring ke baad phone utha.

" hello "

" kaam ho gaya, kab milna hai "

" tumhe sham ko phone karne ko kaha tha. Kaam ke time par phone mat kiya karo "

" Kaam to main hi karta hun tumhara "

" han aur main ghanta bajati hun.. 2 ghante mein milo "

" last wali payment bhi kar dena aaj "

" han ready hai aur jada batein mat kiya karo phone par kitni baar bola hai " phone cut hua to mene bhi phone patak diya. Phone rakhte hi main ubasi lete hue bathroom mein ghusa aur naha dho kar apartment se nikal gaya. Takreeban do ghante ki bus thi aur bus mein baithe kab soya malum hi nahi chala. " Remember Everything Is Binary " achanak se ankh khuli.

" bhaiya tumhara stop aa gaya utarna nahi hai kya " conductor chillaya.

" han han.. utar raha hun.. " bus se utar kar main galiyun se hote hue ek apartment ke samne jaa ruka aur wahan lagi bell bajai. Ek bell bajte hi samne ka kiwad khula aur abhi kuch kehta usne chup rehne ka ishara kar diya. Vo phone par kisi se baat kar rahi thi. Uske darwaja kholte hi main andar aya aur andar waqt mene kundi laga di. Main wahin bistar par baith gaya aur jug se pani pine laga tab tak usne apni baat nipta li.

" lao.. " usne sidhe yahi kaha.

" na dua na salam direct lao.. "

" samay kam hai aaj " vo apne bag se kuch nikalne lagi.

" main to soch kar aya tha ki... " usne meri taraf envelope badaya. " purre hain.. gin lo.. aaj tak ka hissab chuka kar diya hai tumhara, ab jaldi se lao " mene envolpe liya aur CD use pakda di.

" rate badne wala hai " mene paise envolpe se nikal kar dekha.

" acha? kis kushi mein? " vo CD par marker se likhte hue boli " girlfriend bana li jo kharche badh gaye tere? "

" risk badh gaya hai "

" acha .. " vo halka sa tans kaste hue muh khol kar hansi " risk to sadak par bhi hai to kya ab security guard sath rakh kar chalega.. paisa nahi badega "

" yahan main apni jaan jokhim mein dal kar tumhe lakhon kamwata hun aur tum kuch hazar nahi badha sakti "

" hazar badh jayenge par fir vo nahi milega jiski jarurat puri karne ki wajah se tumne han bhari thi ... " vo kamar matkate hue mere najdeek ayi. Bas yahin main fisal jata tha aur uska kaam saste mein kar diya karta tha. Jab vo mere najdeek ayi to mene apne hath uski gardan par rakh diye, short hair ke chalte main uski gardan ki skin ko ache se feel kar sakta tha. Gardan se chatiyun tak aya aur wahan uski skin ko feel karne laga. Na jane kya jadu tha uski skin mein, chutte hi meri pent ke andar ka vajan badh jaya karta tha. Chati par hath ferte hue mene anguthe se uske honton ko dabate hue ragda. Vo bhi madhosh ho gayi thi, use bhi acha lagta tha tabhi to usne mujhe shuruwat mein indirectly offer diya tha iss kaam ko karne ke liye.

" jaldi kar.. kaam se jana hai mujhe bhi " usne mera hath apne seene se hataya aur kurti ko pakad kar apne sharir se alag kar diya. Andar safed color ki bra mein uski halki wheatish color ki skin mujhe suhawani lag rahi thi. Vo meri aaur dekhte hue palti aur mene uski bra ke huk khol diye jise usne turant zameen par gira diya. Salwar ka nada usne khol diya aur penty samet vo niche mere samne nang jhuk kar khadi ho gayi. Main ek pal uski bhari jawani ko dekhne laga jo kai baar dekh chuka tha par jab bhi dekhta aisa lagta pehli dafa dekh raha hun. Chut par halke baal dekh khujli si mach gayi mere sharir mein.

" aa naa.. " usne apni nazar piche ki aur uske chote chote baal ankhon ke aage aa gaye. Main use dekhte hue fauran khada hua, apni belt khol jeans samet kache ko niche kiya aur uske sharir ke nazdeek aa gaya. " thoda rough kario aaj.. " vo boli aur usne table ko kas kar pakad liya. Mene apne lund ko hath se pakda aur uski chut par rakh kar dhakka mara aur dono ke muh se ek sath ' aah-hh ' nikli. Chut itni gli thi ki lund asani se andar ghus gaya aur fir main zor-zor se dhakke lagane laga. Dhakon ki raftar tez thi jaisa usne kaha tha rough.. wahi de raha tha. Vo sisakti hui apna sar uppar niche karne lagi. Table puri tarah se hil rahi thi aur bich bich mein jab main dhakke aur tezi se marta to uska hath table par fisal jata.

" kahan ka gussa nikal raha hai aaj.. aahh.. "

" tune hi to kaha tha rough.. aaj tujhe itna rough chhodunga ki teri chut se bacha mera hi niklega "

" aukad ... hai teri bache paida karne ki aahahhhh... " jab usne aukad ki baat ki to piche se mene uski chutadon par chamat laga di.

" meri aukad ki baat karti hai.. tujhe kya malum main kis kaam ke liye chuna gaya hun.. " main bhi josh mein use pel raha tha aur isme aseem anand aa raha tha. Vaise bhi hum dono chudai bina baton ke karte hi nahi the.

" acha... tujhe.. kaun chunega... uhmm thoda dhire.e..se... " usne dhire bola to mene aur tez dhakke laga diye.

" Hologram ne chunna hai mujhe.. vo bhi is dunia ke liye " maine jaise hi bola vo meri taraf patli aur mujhe dekh zor-zor se hasne lagi vo jitna hansti mere andar utni hi power badh jati use thokne ki jiski wajah se uski chatiyan table se takrane lagi aur per fisalte hue table se ja chipke jo use chubne lage the. " main.. hi is dunia ko badlunga.... " main hanfte hue zor-zor se dhakke lagane laga aur uski siskiyan chekh mein badal gayi, dard aur plessure dono ki. Uske hath ki ungliyan akadne lagi thi aur jaise uske sharir ne uske ras ko bahar nikal fainka aur kuch tez dhakon ke baad mene bhi apna ras uski chut mein udhel diya jise udhelte hi sharir ko aisa laga jaise atma hi chinn gayi ho. Main hafta hua uske uppar pada tha aur mera thuk uski pith par gir kar jama ho chuka tha.

" hahahaha... " jab mene use subah ki hui ghatna batai to vo zor-zor se hasne lagi. Main kapde pehen kar ek kone par khada uski hansi ko dekh raha tha. Usne kapde pehen liye the aur abhi cigratte jalane mein vyast thi. Cigratte jala kar usne uska kasht funka .. " tu.. aur dunia badlega.. hatt salle.. tu sirf dhande ke liye bana hai.. " usne dusra kasht kincha " chori ka dhanda.. tujhe wahi suit karta hai.. usme dimag laga, ye hologram aur dunia ko badalne ka kaam kisi aur ko karne de.. tere baski nahi hai.. samjha.. " vo mujhe dekh rahi thi aur main use ghur raha tha. Har bar mujhe uske chehre ke nain-naksh bade pyare lagte the, choti ankhein, choti naak, patle gulabi honth.. par is samay vo sab bure lag rahe the. Mene use kuch nahi kaha apna envelope uthaya aur wahan se nikal gaya. Nikalte waqt usne jo kaha vo mujhe ache se sunai diya tha " Agla project jaldi dungi, chori karne ke liye, sala chor " vo hansi mere zehen mein thi aur raat bhar rahi jab tak nind nahi aa gayi.

Socha tha kuch karunga aur kiya bhi wahi roz wala kaam, kuch din beet gaye aur main apne wahi schedule main lag gaya. Bas farak itna tha ki pehle is kaam ko karte hue socha nahi karta tha par ab sochne laga tha. Kaam karte hue bar-bar dhayan Hologram, Uski awaz aur vo folder bas yahi aa raha tha. " shit.. " mene current terminal close kiya aur us folder par gaya jo us din hologram se extract hua tha. Mene use double click karke khola, kuch samay laga use kholne mein shayad bahut bada tha, jab tak vo khula nahi bechaini mein mere per hilte rahe. Folder khulte hi mene dekha us mein kafi sari files thi. Kaun si kholo pehle? Itni sari files hai .. Kaun si kholun.. aur kholun bhi ya nahi... raha to ja nahi raha. Dil zoron se dhadak raha tha, mathe par pasina tha, decision to lena hi tha, abhi tak mujhe kuch hua nahi tha jise saaf tha ki mujhe koi pakadne nahi ane wala tha.

" jo hoga dekha jayega " mene faisla liya aur gaur se screen par dekhne laga jiske baad samajh aya ki ek pattern ke tehat hi sari file us order mein ayi hai jis order mein mujhe unhe open karna hai. Mene pehle us file ko open kiya jo us order ki pehli file thi. File ka naam tha ' Journey ' Double click karte hi file open hui aur usme chuppe content se mera parichay ho gaya. Bas ab kya hona tha, jaise kisi chiz ki latt lagti hai mujhe ab latt lag gayi thi. Pehli se dusri, dusri se tisri aur ye ginti badhti chali gayi. Din raat mein tabdeel hoti to raat din mein, kabhi sota to kabhi khata, ghar se bahar sirf jaruri kaam ke liye nikalta. Pratiksha ka kaam bhi side mein karta lekin kabhi-kabhi, use milna to chhod hi chuka tha, uska kiya hua kaam jab bhi dena hota to use bula kar bahar ke bahar hi pakda deta. Vo mere is behaviour ko dekh kar sochti hogi ki us din usne jo mujhe kaha vo mujhe bura laga lekin vo galat thi, usi ki wajah se to maine thani thi, agar us din vo mujhe niche na girati to main uppar uthta hi kyun. Main ab wahi kar raha tha jo us hologram ne kaha tha, jaise uske instruction the sivai ek chiz ke jo usne mujhe mana kia tha is baat ko kisi ko nahi batane wali baat lekin mene pratiksha ko bata di thi. Par use koi farak nahi pada tha, na hi koi kaam ruk raha tha aur na hi samay. Samay ke anusar sab badalne laga, pehle jo computer use karta tha vo badala, dhire-dhire technology ne samay ke sath itni tariki kar li ki jis kaam mein mujhe ghanto lagte the vo chand samay mein hone laga tha. Ankhon par chasma kab chada malum hi nahi chala, umar usi apartment mein badhti chali gayi aur ek dashak guzar gaya. Par main kahan pahuncha tha abhi tak? Shayad kahin nahi ya fir bahut aage.. Sochna chahta tha lekin soch hume hamesha apne kaam se alag kar deti hai isliye main sirf apne kaam par focus karta raha. Pratiksha se sambhand khatam hue arsa ho gaya tha, usne kayi baar contact karne ki kosish ki par mere pas ab uske liye samay nahi tha. Akhri baar jab baat hui thi tab usne yahi bataya tha ki vo kahin bahar settle ho rahi hai, mene tab bhi uske message ka jawab nahi diya tha. Apne kaam mein itna ulajh gaya tha ki mujhe uske alwa kuch dikha nahi. Jaise-jaise vo file ka sequence aage badh raha tha, mere kaam ka roop badalta jaa raha tha. Ab sirf ghar baithe nahi balki bahar nikal kar kuch kaam karne the. Dusre dashak tak atte atte main ab kahin na kahin pehchan mein tha, internet par article chapne lage the. Mashur hua tha? Pata nahi.. parwah nahi thi kyun ki abhi mera kaam baki tha, jo mujhe karne ke liye bataya gaya tha usme abhi samay lagna tha. Akhri charan bacha tha jiske liye jagah badalni thi. Jis kaam ke liye bahar jaya karta tha ab vo pura ho chuka tha, isliye kaam karne ki jagah bhi badali gayi aur dekhte hi dekhte mene apni zindagi ke teen dashak laga diye, zindagi ke 31 saal jiski shuruwat san 2000 se hui thi aur aaj vo din tha.

25 November, 2031

Apni jagah par baitha samne screen par article padh raha tha ki Dimtri ne mera dhayan toda. Dimtri pichle ath salon se mere sath kaam kar raha tha. Main code ko chhod kar lab ka pura setup Dimtri ke hathon mein tha.

" astonishing tech " article par nazar dalte hue vo bola.

" hmm "

" is hydra-power ki energy se pure world ki electricity ki samsya dur ho jayegi vo bhi bina climate ko nuksan pahunchaye, plant start ho gaya? "

" Ha.. kal hi hua hai "

" Ye idea tumhara tha, is article mein tumhe bhi hona chahie tha, tumne apna idea kisi aur ko diya hi kyun "

" zarurat nahi thi dimtri.. tumhe pata hai mera focus kya hai " chasma utar kar main apni jagah se khada hua " and that dream will soon be completed "

" checking logs? " mene dimtri ki taraf dekha jo system check kar raha tha. Vo kuch der screen par hi dekhta raha, main janta tha ki vo kya kahega.

" logs se to yahi lag raha hai ki " Dimtri ne nazar meri taraf ki.

" its getting finalizing ... " meri nazar samne thi, jahan par ek bahut badi screen lagi hui thi.

" tumne puri raat jaag kar kaam khatam kar diya? " Dimtri hairan tha kyun ki abhi do din ka kaam baki tha jise mene pichli raat aur din laga kar pura kar diya tha.

" Chain ki nind ab sirf tab ayegi jab ye start hogi "

" I guess vo nind aaj raat ko hi mil jayegi.. its asking for the password " dimtri ne bola to mere sharir mein excitment ki lehar daud gayi. " give me the hat " main apni jagah par jaa baitha aur dimtri ne mujhe sar par uski banai hui techonogy se lais ek iron hat pehna di jo direct system se connect thi. Dimtri ke pas sirf ek yahi project tha jisko banane mein use char saal lage the. Mana is Hat ka core deisgn mene hi diya tha lekin Hat bana kar use system se jodne ka kaam usi ne kiya tha.

" ok ... i am initiating.. " dimtri ne itna kaha aur button push kar diya. Button ke dabte hi hat ne mere Brain Waves ko read karna shuru kar diya. Ye wo waqt tha jab mujhe sabse jada relax rehna tha kyun ki password koi word nahi tha balki meri brain activity thi jise code ke through binary form mein dala gaya tha jiske baad hi machine access ho sakti thi.

' Process Completed, Password accepted ' system awaz sunte hi mujhe dimtri ki 'yay' sunai di, uski itne salon ki mehnat jo rang layi thi.

" Ok i am shutting down " usne system band kiya aur mene HAT ko hata liya.

" kitna time lagega " mene faura pucha.

" just about time.. " dimtri ne itna hi kaha aur samne wali screen par dekhne laga jiske sath hi meri nazar us taraf gayi. Mere samne chand hi palon mein vo ane wala tha jiski kalpana mene 31 saal pehle ki bhi nahi thi.

' Helo Humans, I am Binary ' system awaz ke sath screen par flash hote hi mere chehre par khushi ki lehar daud ayi.

" we did it.. " dimtri bhi khushi mein chikha.

" Connect binary to the core system " core system se judte hi Binary ke pas vo power aa jati jo aaj tak kisi machine mein nahi thi. Vo dunia ki har information ko grasp karke ek aisa solo system ban jane wala tha jiske pas sari knowledge hone wali thi, yani ki sabhi mind ka ek mind. Ye process bilkul waisa hi hone wala tha jis tarah hum ek dusre se connect the. Connect hone ke liye binary internet, books, mobile phones ke through humans ke mind ko read karke ek evaluation set kar sakta tha jiski probablity 99.9% correct honi wali thi jo aaj tak hume kisi machine ne nahi di thi.

" on it " dimtri ne binary ko core system se connect kar diya aur screen par processing ane laga.

" now we celebrate " mene dimtri se kaha aur apne room ki taraf badha. Aaj mere 31 salon ki mehnat rang layi thi. Jo kabhi socha aur kiya na gaya ho vo mene karke dikhaya tha. Kamre mein pahunch kar mene apni sabse purani wine nikali jo aaj ke liye hi bacha kar rakhi thi. Abhi room se bahar nikal hi raha tha ki meri nazar kamre ke kone par padi jahan mera wahi computer pada tha jiski wajah se in sabki shuruwat hui thi.

" i was about to call you.. " dimtri ne mujhe dekhte hi kaha. " Binary puri shamta se kaam kar rahi hai, har second finotabyte memory store kar raha hai " uske bolte hi main muskuraya aur hum dono ke liye wine glass mein bharne laga.

" Ye sirf machine nahi hai dimtri, ye future hai.. Ye har bitte second sirf knowledge hi grasp nahi karega balki us knowledge se hi apne aap ko self-grow karega jaisa har ek AI karta hai. Aur jab Binary is process ko complete karegi tab hoga hamare pas hamara future. Jab sabhi mind ek jagah ho to tum jante ho ki koi kya kar sakta hai, Binary sirf universe ke bare mein, naye planets aur unpar pahuchne ke bare mein hi nahi batayega balki hum apni information ko kisi bhi samay mein bhej payenge "

" time travel? "

" Sort of dimtri.. Hum khud ko past mein nahi bhej sakte lekin information ko bhej sakte hain. Binary can send any information to any person at a specific time jo bhi hum decide karenge, socho use kitna faiyda hoga, binary hume kya sahi hai aur kya galat ye bata payegi. Uski knowledge se hui calculation ke basis par hum us information ko apne past mein bhej payenge taki ane wale drought, tsunami's aur har tarah ki activites ko control kiya jaa sake "

" this is brilliant, par this will alter the timeline, i thought Binary information collect karke future ki ek sahi prediction de sakta hai, kya tumne time line ke bare mein nahi socha, agar aisa hua to binary ka existence hi nahi rahega "

" Maybe thats what Binary wants, we are scientists dimtri, we are meant to change the world. And we change this through Binary " main scientist bilkul nahi tha par itne salon mein jo mene kiya uske liye science ki knowledge ki kya jarurat thi bas tarika pata hona chahie aur dimtri jaisa koi intelligent insan ka sath.

" then lets celebrate " hum dono ne wine ke glass apas mein khankhaye aur ek hi ghunt mein pi gaye. " well mene tumse bahut waqt se kuch puchna chahta tha, aaj sahi waqt lag raha hai to puchun ? "

" bilkul "

" how did you even build this place.. " dimtri ka sawal sahi tha koi aur hota to shayad pehle hi puch leta ki mene kaise ek barfile pahad ke niche itni badi jagah ka nirman kiya.

" do you remember 2015.. " mene pucha to dimtri sochne laga " vo saal jisme insano ne ek naya Element khoja tha? "

" Xectra "

" exactly "

" par uska ise kya matlab ? " dimtri sochne laga aur jab use samajh aya to vo hairani mein bola " Xectra tumne khoja tha? " vo ek pal chup hua " becha kisko? "

" china "

" China? are you out of your mind.. you sold it to china.. " dimtri ek dum se baukhlaya " tum jante ho ki vo kitna khatarnak element hai aur ye jante hue bhi tumne china ko bech dia? "

" Janta hun dimtri par tum khud batao itne kam samay mein china ke alawa aisi jagah kaun build kar sakta tha? har vo equipment jiski hume jarurat thi vo koi aur nahi de sakta tha isliye mene unhe becha, to build this future "

" but you know "

" i know how dangerous xectra is, Xectra element kisi bhi material, base aur crust ko bhed sakta hai i know this.. its the most powerful element humans has ever founded "

" and it can be a powerful weapon also " dimtri khush nahi tha.

" oh common dimtri.. aisa kuch nahi hoga.. tumne vo article nahi pada.. China ka.. read it.. jisme unhone Xectra element ke zariye ek aisi laser technology banai hai jo earth ki surkasha karegi " dimtri ne itne mein vo article khol liya jiska main jikar kar raha tha.

" China develops a weapon that can detroy any large asteroid "

" dekha, China can also do good, ab socho agar koi asteroid earth ki taraf aya to hum dinasaurs ki tarah lupt nahi honge " jo dimtri keh raha tha vo main tab hi janta tha ki china ko xectra dena bahut bada risk hai lekin mujhe aisa karna tha kyun ki yahi Hologram ke document mein karne ko kaha gaya tha.

" i can't believe them... but .. " abhi dimtri itna hi bol paya ki puri lab mein andhera cha gaya, electricity chali gayi thi. " power backup kyun nahi chal raha " dimtri ko hairani use jada tab hui jab samne screen par Binary ne apna kaam nahi roka. " How is this working... "

" don't worry.. Binary ko isi tarah ke backup ke liye ready kiya hai. Jis minute se ye start hui usne apne liye electricity reserve karni shuru kar di thi, uske liye seperate power backup rakha hai. Par power back kyun nahi chal raha hai vo check karo and connect our core line with binary, hamare system binary handle kar legi " Dimtri ne bilkul waisa hi kiya aur sirf lab ke system on ho gaye. System on hote hi mene binary se pucha " Binary Power Status " lekin binary ne koi response nahi diya. Main kuch check karta use pehle dimtri chillaya.

" you need to see this.. " usne apni screen se window swipe ki jo mere screen par aa gayi " power outrage.. India, China, Bangladesh, Pakistan, all suffers major electric outrage issue " dimtri ka bheja data screen par visibile tha dhire-dhire kakre part of Asia andhkar mein jaa raha tha aur usi tarah baki continents bhi.

" it must be because of the Hydra-Plant they have started in the Pacific ocean " mene dimtri se kaha " Binary Please Check Electric outrage cause " Binary ne is baar bhi koi response nahi diya. Uske response na dene ki wajah khojta use pehle dimtri fir chilla pada.

" fuck... " agli hi pal dimtri apni jagah se aise kahda hua jaise usne kuch bahut bhayanak dekh liya.

" kya hua ? " mere puchne par usne kuch nahi bola aur apne system par kuch kaam karne laga. Mene dubara pucha " what happen dimtri? "

" Power-outrage, ye hydra-plant ki wajah se nahi hai.. " vo meri taraf dekhte hue bola aur apni screen swipe kar di jo mere system par aa gayi " Binary did this " to dimtri yahi pata laga raha tha jiske baad jo mene dekha vo mujhe bhi vishwas nahi hua

" what nonsense ... how could binary.. and why " main dimtri ki baat sun kar jab system par dekhne laga to mere hosh ud gaye kyun ki binary ne sirf electric outrage hi nahi kiya tha balki usne ab " Binary ne core energy ka access kaise liya "

" core energy ? Ye kya hai " Ek ke baad ek aisi batein aa rahi thi jo dimtri nahi janta tha lekin mera dhayan is baat se jada ispar tha ki akhir Binary ne core energy ko use kaise kiya vo bhi bina meri permission diye bina hi. Sirf ek hi rasta tha janne ke liye aur vo tha binary ke core function mein dekhna. Mene wahi kiya lekin jab jab mein us function ka access karta binary mujhe bahar fenk deta " what the fuck is happening "

" Something is wrong, Binary code change kar raha hai " dimtri ne jaise hi kaha main samajh gaya ki usne khud ko permission kaise di. Vo mere likhe code ko re-write kar raha hai. " this is not being told to me.. " Mene bahut socha lekin aisa koi document tha hi nahi jiski madad se main ye rok sakun.

" vikrant.. " usne mera naam pukara vo bhi itni ghabrahat mein jaise kuch anhoni hui ho. " you need to see this " vo fatti ankhon se mujhe ghurne laga. Agle hi pal meri screen ki tasveer badli jispar chalne laga tha " China ne jo laser weapen asteroid tabha karne ke liye banaya tha usko hum sabhi asman mein dekh sakte hain "

" impact? " mene pucha aur screen par flash hone laga, jise mene do bar dekha kyun ki vishwas nahi ho raha tha " Moon "

" how did they.. even have that kind of power... Hydra " meri ankhein khuli ki khuli reh gayi " dimtri, hydra ki power china ke laser plant par kaise pahunch rahi hai check it now " mene pucha jarur par shayad andar hi andar main is baat ko janta tha.

" Its Binary ... Binary hydra ki sari power china ke laser plant ko de rahi hai and that causes power outrage "

" why binary doing this " mene khud se hi ye sawal kiya.

" With that amount of power given to the laser core, it will "

" destroy the moon.. " main apni jagah se khada hua.

" agar moon destory ho gaya to earth survive nahi kar payegi, uski rotation ki speed badh jayegi, maybe if will drift from its place, rise in earth temperature, weaker sea waves, longer days, it will wipe out every species from the planet. We need to close this fucking machine " dimtri chillaya.

" we can't.... "

" we can't? what are you saying? " dimtri ek pal ke liye chup hua.

" tumhe pata hai maine ye jagah kyun chuni " ek pal chup rehne ke baad main bola " kyun ki yahi ek aisi jagah thi jahan se binary earth ke core ke us hisse tak pahuncha jaa sakta tha jahan se vo direct power access kar sakta hai"

" tumne aisa kiya hi kyun? Earth ke core se energy deni ki kya jarurat thi "

" kyun ki yahi mujhe kaha gaya tha karne ko "

" kisne kaha tha? " vo chup hua, meri aur se jawab na ata dekh vo bola " tum keh rahe ho ki humne ek aisi machine banai jo hume hi khatam kar dena chahti hai? "

" i don't know what to do.. its not been told to me.. " main soch raha tha ki ye ho kaise sakta hai. Sab kuch mene wahi kiya jo mujhse kaha gaya tha. Kahin kuch nahi chhoda koi galti nahi ki to fir kaise.

' IN 30 Seconds - Moon will Explode ' Pehli baar tha jab message Binary ki taraf se aya tha. Jise dekhte hi meri sansein bhari ho gayi. Jab insan ke sath vo ho jaye jo usne socha bhi nahi hota toh sabse jada jhatka use tabhi lagta hai.

" we have to do something vikrant, something to shut down this machine.. koi to fail safe hoga " dimtri ne fir mujhse kaha. Main soch raha tha aur jada soch raha tha aur tabhi mujhe dhayan aya ki mene kuch banaya hai.

" backdoor.... " mene apne terminal par kaam karna shuru kiya " i build this backdoor.. jise main Binary ke kisi bhi function ko directly access karke use badal sakta hun and with that help main uske main function ko band kar dunga..

' 15 seconds ' pehli baar kaam karte hue aisa lag raha tha mano sharir se jaan nikal rahi ho. " no no what the fuck... fuckk... "

" kya hua "

" jab bhi backdoor access kar raha hun, malware mera code delete kar de raha hai "

" Everything Is Binary vikrant... "

" i don't know what to do, its not been told to me.. " mene fir wahi dahuraya aur itne mein Binary ne apni screen badli aur moon ke destory hote hi jo image hamari samne ayi usne dil dehla diya. Hamare aur moon ke bich mein distance ki wajah se koi shor ya koi halchal to nahi hui lekin usko millions of debris mein tabdeel hota dekh dimag sann reh gaya. Moon ke tukde uski debris atmosphere mein felh gaye aur dekhte-dekhte kayi satellite uski chapet mein ati chali gayi jiske sath earth par moon ki debris ki shower shuru ho gayi.

" we have destoryed our home by ourslelf " dimtri hatash hote hue bola " this could be .. " dimtri itna hi bola ki system se ek awaz ayi.

' Alert ' is baar alert dimtri ke system se aya tha ' Object Identified, Approximate size 3 KM ' ye sunte hi dimtri ke sath main samajh gaya ki ab khel khatam. " impact " mene pucha.

' Direct Impact of Origin, Himalayas '

" Ye asteroid to hamari hi taraf aa raha hai... " dimtri ne fauran calculation kari aur screen swipe kar di " adhi se jada satellite destroy hone ki wajah se humne is asteroid ko late pick kiya " par wajah ye nahi thi ki satellite ne late pick kiya balki asli wajah mujhe ab samajh ayi thi.

" ab samajh aya ki binary ne aaj ki hi date kyun chuni... kyun ki aaj moon earth ke sabse jada kareeb hai "

' Impact time 4 minute 35 second ' isi ke sath coundown shuru ho gaya aur hamara dhayan tuta.

" I can't believe this, It could be The Last day for us, but why ... Why binary did this.. " Dimtri ab mujhse nahi khud se hi sawal karne laga.

" Because it saw us... " Mene dimtri ki taraf dekhte hue kaha. " It saw us that who we are.. it saw every hate we put towards this planet.. "

" to iska badla planet destory karke nikal rahi hai ye machine "

" No.. it is taking revenge with us... but i don't understand why it has not been told to me " mene fir khud se wahi sawal kiya.

" Kaun vikrant.. tum kabse same chiz bol rahe ho kaun hai vo jisne tumhe nahi bataya "

" Wahi jiske design se mene Binary ko banaya, wahi documents jisne mujhe Hydra-Power ka idea diya, wahi document jisne mujhe bataya ki Xectra element kahan chupa hai.. "

" main kuch samjha nai... " dimtri kaise samjhta jab main hi ab samjha tha aur jaise hi mene samjha, mujhe khud par vishwas hi nahi hua.

" this could not be our last day dimtri.. this could not be.. " mene sabse pehle ye check kiya ki Binary ne abhi kuch der mein kaun-kaun si information bheji thi " tum jante ho ki Binary informations ko past mein bhej sakta hai aur agar main sahi hun to... oh my god... " Mene dimtri ki taraf dekha, " its the Bimary who send me all the information and that hologram.. "

" main kuch samjha nahi.. " dimtri ko kaise malum hota ki jo bhi mene aaj banaya hai vo mene nahi balki mujhe bheji gayi chizon se bana hai. Mene dimtri ko short mein bataya ki kaise 31 saal pehle ek hologram dwara mujhe information mili aur sab document mile jiske jariye hi main aaj uske sath khada hun. Vo meri baat sun kar sadme mein tha jiska hona lazmi tha.

" mujhe tab samajh nahi aya tha lekin samay ke sath mujhe laga ki for the betterment of this world, mujhe ye information 5th dimension se mili hai lekin ab sab kuch dekh kar samajh aa gaya ki information kisi aur ne nahi balki Binary ne bheji thi "

" lekin usne tumhe vo message mein jo batein boli vo kaise... " dimtri ka sawal sahi tha, hologram ki recording mein jo batein thi vo usne kaise bheja, sochte hue dimag ne turant jawab diya.

" my words.. dimtri.. mene har case study ko record kiya.. and for Binary it is just 0 and 1 ... usne mere hi word alag-alag jagah se jodh kar ek message bana kar mujhe bheja.. " main ek pal ke liye sochta raha

" this is a Time Paradox " samjhte hi mene kaha kyun ki ye ek loop tha jiski shuruwat bhi main hi kar raha tha aur ant bhi.

' Impact in 1 minute ' sound alaram hua tab hum dono soch se bahar aye.

" vikrant you need to break this loop... you need to inform 'you' 31 years back.. we don't have much time left " dimtri sahi tha loop ko todna jaruri tha.

" i need to send the information back to me.. but this time it should be in my words.. " main system ko use karne laga, bas ek message karna tha. Message... ' Dont do it, Its a trap ' mene message form karke send kiya aur Binary ki help se bhejne laga lekin nahi hua.

" kya hua " dimtri ne pucha.

" it does not allow me.. it knows...ki hum uske khilaf message bhej rahe hain "

' Impact in 30 seconds '

" vikrant, we dont have much time left... we have to break this loop now " dimtri bol raha tha aur main kaam kar raha tha aur fir mene wahi kiya jo main pehle karta tha.

" pratiksha sahi thi, main chor hun aur usi ke liye bana hun " mene word ke kuch letter ko badal diya jaise main pehle badal kar snooping karta tha bas wahi kiya. After all for binary it will always be 0 and 1 aur jab use 0 aur 1 ka meaning hi samajh nahi ayega to vo mere message ko rokega nahi uske liye vo message khatra nahi rahega. Mene message send kiya aur mera data process mein chala gaya.

'Impact in 10 seconds '

Meri nazar screen par hi thi aur tabhi message aya, " Message accepted, Sending " bas iske baad itni zor se dharti hili ki meri nazron ke samne tez roshni ki wajah dhundla pan cha gaya.

Main roz ki tarah hi phising kar raha tha tabhi meri nazar screen par jam gayi, kuch samajh pata use pehle screen par ek hologram dekh main ghabra kar piche ho gaya jiske baad usne jo bataya use mere hosh ud gaye.

" Remember, Everything Is Binary "
Bahut hi jabardast kahani hai dost
Vikrant ne sirf ek hologram ke chakker me funsh kar Puri duniya ko hi khatre me daal diya. Bhala ho Dimitri bhai ka jishne ushe sachet Kiya aur bhutkaal me ek message send kar paaya ki ish hologram rupi rahashymayi jaal ka na peechha kare Varna Lena ek nahi Dene do pad jaayenge.
Sirf Partiksha sang moujmashtiya aur shabdo ka her-pher me hi Lage raho mitr payare
Kyon kishi ke lafde me tang aadana aur anmol jawani ke 31 barsh khone ka.
Remember, Everything Is Binary.
 

Nevil singh

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नई नौकरानी शबनम
हम नए नए इस घर में आए थे। इस कालोनी में मेरा कोई दोस्त नहीं था। स्कूल से
आने के बाद मैं अकेला बैठ कर बोर होता रहता था। पापा सिर्फ सप्ताहांत पर घर
आते थे और मम्मी शाम ६ बजे तक। कुछ ही दिनों में मम्मी ने काम करने के लिए एक
नौकरानी रख लिया था जो कि पास ही के झुग्गी इलाके की थी। देखने में वो कुछ
खास नहीं थी पर बहुत ही सेक्सी थी। उसे देख कर अच्छे अच्छे का दिल डोल सकता
था तो फिर मैं कौन था। वो हमेशा ढीले-ढाले कपड़े पहन कर आती थी और जब झुक कर
कोई काम करती थी तो मेरा लंड तड़प कर रह जाता था।

मैंने उसे पटाने की ठानी। मेरे स्कूल से आने के थोड़ी देर बाद ही वो आ जाती
थी। अब मैं उस पर खास मेहरबान रहता था। मैं हमेशा उससे बात करने की कोशिश
करता रहता था। जब भी मेरी और उसकी नज़रें मिलती, मैं मुस्कुरा देता था। धीरे
धीरे वो मुझसे खुल कर बातें करने लगी।

एक दिन मैं बैठा टीवी देख रहा था । तभी वो काम ख़त्म करके मेरे पास आई और
बोली- देखो तनु, मैं जा रही हूँ।

मैंने कहा- अभी तो मम्मी आई भी नहीं हैं, थोड़ी देर बैठो और टीवी देखो।

वो वहीं बैठ गई और टीवी देखने लगी । वो बहुत महीन कपड़े पहने हुए थी और गौर से
देखने पर उसकी चूचियां दिखाई पर रही थी। मेरा लंड पैंट के अन्दर ही कसमसाने
लगा। मैंने अपने पैर फैला दिए और इस तरह कर दिया जिससे मेरे पैर उसके पैरों
को छूने लगें।

तभी बिजली चली गई, मैंने कहा- चलो शबनम, बालकोनी में से सड़क पर देखते हैं।

फिर हम दोनों उठ कर बालकोनी में आ गए। वो रेलिंग पर हाथ रख कर खड़ी थी। मैंने
भी अपना हाथ हौले से उसके हाथ पर रखा और बगल में खड़ा हो गया। मेरा दिल बड़े
जोर से धड़क रहा था लेकिन उसने कुछ नहीं कहा।

मेरी हिम्मत बढ़ी और मैंने हल्के से उसके हाथ को दबाना शुरू किया, उसने एक बार
मेरी तरफ देखा और मैंने मुस्कुरा दिया। इस पर उसने अपनी आँखें नीची कर ली।
मैं समझ गया कि वो भी तैयार है।

मैं अब उससे सट कर खडा हो गया और अपना हाथ उसके कूल्हे पर रख दिया। दूर से
देखने पर ऐसा लग रहा था कि जैसे हम सड़क पर कुछ देख रहे हैं। मैंने अपना हाथ
धीरे से उसके कमीज़ के भीतर डाल दिया और उसकी चिकनी पीठ सहलाने लगा।

वो धीरे से बोली- तनु अन्दर चलो यहां कोई देख लेगा।

हम अन्दर आ गये और एक सोफे पर बैठ गए। मैंने एक हाथ से उसके सर को पकड़ा और
अपने होंठ उसके होंटों पर रख दिए और चूसने लगा । कसम से उसके होंठ इतने रसीले
थे कि जैसे कोई लॉलीपोप।

शबनम ने अपनी आँखों को बंद कर लिया था। लगभग दस मिनट तक मैं उसके होंटों को
चूसता रहा। फिर मैंने उसके कपड़े उतारना शुरू कर दिया। अब वो बिल्कुल नंगी थी
और आँखें नीचे किये खड़ी थी। उसकी बड़ी बड़ी चुचियों को देख मैं पागल हुआ जा
रहा था। मैंने पहली बार किसी की नंगी चूचियां देखी थी। मैं किसी बच्चे की तरह
उसकी चुचियों को चूसने लगा था। कभी मसल रहा था और शबनम अपनी होंठों को दांतों
से दबाये सिसकारी ले रही थी।

मैंने उसे सोफे पे लिटाया और अपने कपड़े भी उतार दिए। मेरा लंड बिल्कुल खड़ा हो
चुका था। मैंने उसके पैरों को थोड़ा फैलाया और लंड के अगले मोटे भाग को उसकी
झांट से भरी चूत पर रख कर एक जोर का धक्का दिया। मेरा लंड आधे तक अन्दर घुस
गया।

शबनम के मुंह से एक दबी दबी सी सिसकारी निकली और उसने सोफे को कस कर पकड़
लिया। मैंने लंड को धीरे धीरे अन्दर बाहर करना शुरू किया और एक जोरदार धक्का
फिर दिया और शबनम के मुंह से चीख सी निकल गई। मैं अब तेजी से धक्के लगा रहा
था और शबनम भी चूतड़ उछाल उछाल कर मेरा साथ दे रही थी और उसके मुंह से लगातार
ओह...ओह.....आ अ अ अ..........इईईई ........ की आवाज़ें आ रही थी।

मैंने उसे करीब दस मिनट तक चोदा और फिर उसकी चूत में ही झड़ गया। उसकी चूत से
भी काफी पानी निकला। थोड़ी देर तक हम यूँ ही चूत में लंड डाल कर पड़े रहे। फिर
उठ कर हम साथ साथ बाथरूम गए। बाथरूम से आने के बाद हमने अपने कपड़े पहने और
फिर शबनम अपने घर चली गई और मैं अपने पहले सेक्स सम्बन्ध के बारे में सोच सोच
कर रोमांचित हो रहा था।
Bahut hi garmagarm kahani hai mitr
Shabbo to bahut chaalu maal nikli bhai
Pahli baar me hi sab nibta gai aur tanu bhai to sirf chadhti jawani ke Josh me bah chale.
 

harshit1890

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Sorry to say this but writer should considered these contests seriously. Story shuru hote hi khatam. Nothing much i will add in this but people is giving too much effort and that should be taken care of. Thanks and plz dont mind the review, it is what i feel after seeing both the stories
 

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“Everything Is Binary” by harshit1890


A Creation which can be called synonymous to Perfection. Absolutely Amazing Story!

Well, the story is based on the genre Sci–Fi along with a mix of Fantasy in it. Apocalypse & AI along with the Time Loop, inn concepts par based Stories pehle bhi maine padhi hain but I have never read something like this on an adult forum. This kind of creation just forces the reader to read it again & again. Narration, Dialogues, the Detailing and of course the most important thing – the plot.. everything was just unbelievable.

Story ka main protagonist arthat Vikrant ek AI aur Computers field se taaluq rakhne waala banda hai. Starting from the start, the first Para itself showed up with the fact that this is a contest winning story. The detailings about what Vikrant was doing and his related skills was well narrated and that just Got stuck in my mind as a reader.

Time Travel was also involved in the mix but even after the writer introduced a lot of concepts regarding AI and all, story never felt like confusing. Yahaan tak ki jinko shayad iss field ki knowledge bhi naa ho unke liye bhi ye story ek badhiya experience ho sakti hai.

I felt like Vikrant was unable to break the loop even in the end and there were certain questions that remained unanswered but that's what a short story means. Haalanki wo sex scene jo Vikrant aur Pratiksha ke beech hua I didn't expected it to be in the story but again it would be eye catching for some readers..

Overall, a story with complete perfection having a lot of concepts like Time Travel & Paradox, AI, and of course Binary itself.. But the way you presented it made it a Contest winning story.. Don't know whether someone will be able to match this quality later on in the contest or not but till now this is the one..

(There were a little bit of mistakes in the spellings and a few grammatical errors, but except that everything was perfect in its place)..

Congratulations Brother for such a masterpiece and Best Of Luck for your 2nd Story (If you're going to write)..

...[9/10]...​
Thank u for such a beautiful reply bhai :bow: :hug: Ap sahi ho ant mein bhi loop tuta nahi baki ye reader pr depend karta hai ki vo kya soch raha hai. Bas ye acha laga ki apko confusion nahi hua warna aisi story aksar confused karti hai. Thanks a lot :bow:
Bahut hi jabardast kahani hai dost
Vikrant ne sirf ek hologram ke chakker me funsh kar Puri duniya ko hi khatre me daal diya. Bhala ho Dimitri bhai ka jishne ushe sachet Kiya aur bhutkaal me ek message send kar paaya ki ish hologram rupi rahashymayi jaal ka na peechha kare Varna Lena ek nahi Dene do pad jaayenge.
Sirf Partiksha sang moujmashtiya aur shabdo ka her-pher me hi Lage raho mitr payare
Kyon kishi ke lafde me tang aadana aur anmol jawani ke 31 barsh khone ka.
Remember, Everything Is Binary.
Thank you so much bhai :hug: :dost: and yes remember, Binary is everything :D
 

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“Ajeeb Raat” by Sigma_Male


A fantastic story men!! Horror & Romance are my favourite genres when it comes to Short stories, especially horror. A good horror story is usually a mix of Thrill, Suspense & Fear of course, this one was definitely a good story.

The story starts off with the main protagonist Aman getting stuck in the train mid way around the forest and the exciting part was that he was all alone in the train. Then he met Sneha & Rohit, both of them guided Aman to the auto stand. The story, in its starting part was eye catching due to the situation created and the words used but as the story reached the mid part it seemed like it started to become quite pacy. Everything was happening a bit quickly but however, the end was like a booster to the story.

The turn of events in the end, Aman being a ghost/spirit himself and the Auto Crash in which maybe the auto – driver Manoj died, was a great twist in the story. The writer chose a great plot and had a good hold on it as the events were described nicely. But of course there was some scope of betterment out there too! Maybe the middle part was the area where you could've worked a little more.

The highlight was of course the last twist, Aman being a ghost (Aman was unaware about that too!)... So, a great attempt by you Mate, Cheers!!

Congratulations for the story and waiting for your second story in case you're going to write.

...[7/10]...​
 

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“नई नौकरानी शबनम” by Sabeh


Won't say much because you didn't left much to say. No doubt it's difficult to make a sex story of the level that Thriller or Sci – Fi or Romantica is but at least you can give it a try.

The writer seemed to be in a hurry, even if you want the Sex scene to be the highlight you could've done a lot better. This was the second story which was absolutely disappointing.

...[1.5/10]...​
 
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बहुत ही बढ़िया महोदय।

बहुत ही बेहतरीन और हृदय विदारक और दिल को झकझोर देने वाली कहानी पेश की है आपने।। जर जमीन और जोरू।। वर्तमान समय में जितने भी झगड़े होते हैं अब वो चाहे घरेलू हो या बाहरी। सभी का कारण यही होता है। माँ बाप के गुजरने के बाद शिवम को जिस प्रेम की आशा अपने बड़े भाई और भौजाई से थी। वो उसे नहीं मिला बल्कि उनके ताने और कटाक्षपूर्ण बातें सुनने को मिली से अलग।।

प्रेम, करुणा, संवेदनशीलता, त्याग, बलिदान और निःस्वार्थ भावना साथ ही बिना किसी उम्मीद के शिवम और सुप्रिया के प्यार को बहुत ही बखूबी और कम शब्दों में चरितार्थ किया गया है। दोनों ही अपनों के सताए हुए थे। शिवम को उसके भाई भौजाई ने छला तो सुप्रिया को उसके बॉयफ्रेंड ने। लेकिन दोनों की किस्मत इतनी खराब थी कि बेपनाह प्यार करने के बाद भी दोनों मिल नहीं पाए। शिवम ने सुप्रिया को अपना हृदय देकर अपने प्यार को अमर कर दिया और साथ मे अपने आपको सुप्रिया में दोबारा जिंदा किया।। बहुत ही मार्मिक और करुणा से भरपूर कहानी।।
Thanks A Lot Mahi Ji. Sahi kaha aapne jar, jameen aur joru yahi kalyugi Mahabharat ke kaaran hai. Btw. Thanks for reading the story and for the revo too...

Yun to bahut mili par tujh sa koyi na mila
Ye sajish thi kudrat ki ya phir qismat ka pher
Bas dil kaye aa jee lu tujhme jinda rah kar.

Bahut hi khoobsurat aur dil ko bhane wale shavdo se sajakr jee loon tujhe ko pesh kiya hai. Apke lekhn kaushal ka koyi jabab nehi ek ek shavd bahut hi soch vichar kar ke likha gaya.

Sivam jiske paas sabh kuch hote huye bhi koyi nehi tha. ajib si kashmkas me jee raha tha. Bahut kuch khoya phir mili ek dilruba jo na chahte huye bhi bha gaya air pyaar ho gaya. Par jinda rahte kah na paya. Bahut se pyaar aise hi adura rha jata hai. Kyuki bahut sara himmat chahiye hota hai dil baat juba par lana. Saath hi nakare jane ka dar paal paal khaye jata hai.

Par sivam ne kaha par dusra rasta chuna jab use pata chla supriya par kya bita kaise use pyaar me dhoka mila us pyaar ka natija biz banakr uske pet me palne laga par supriya ek maa thi vo maa jiske liye duniya ki sabhi dukh ek tarf aur bbacha pane ki khusi ek tarf to kiya hua bin vi hai maa ban gayi.

Phir jab pata chla supriy ke dil me infection hai aor kabhi bhi supriya ki jaan ja sakti hai to sivam ne ek bold phaisla liya aor ana dil supriya ko donet kar diya sirf dil hi nehi apna sab kuch jo uske paas tha supriya ke naam kar diya.

Aapki kahai pyaar ka ek jita jagta misal tha is kahani ne samajh ke bahrooiya hone ka bhi praman de diya jahn jhuthe pyaar ka dikhawa kar sirf sirf jismo se khela jata hai vahi sivam jaise pyaar me balidan karne vale bhi hote hai.

Adbhut atulniue lekhan kaushal:applause::applause::applause:
Thanks a lot Bro! Achha laga ke aapko kahani pasand aayi. Aapki pratikriya ke liye bahut bahut shukriya!!
 
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Bada hi rocha aur adbhut tarhyo se bhara tha ye story ajeeb raat. Pahle to aman train ki bogi me chut gaya uski help karne sheneha aayi jo ki usi rod par ek acdient meri gayi thi.

Par aman khud hi ek bhoot tha jo sal bhar huye ek train hadse me mara gaya tha. Aor vo auto driver monoj se help manga ki use railway station chhod de. Par jab use pata chala help mangne wala hi aman hi jise pahle bhi ek adh bar dekha gaya to vichare ke saath hi dueghtna ho gaya.

Ek ek shvdo ko thol mol kar likha gaya saath hi suspens ko is tarh gada gaya ki ant tak pade bina pata nehi chalega ki akhir aman hai kaun bahut khub shandar story.

Adbhut atulniya lekhan kaushal:applause::applause::applause:
Thank you Destiny for beautiful review :rose:
Ajeeb Raat by Sigma_Male


Warning: Spoilers Ahead.. Yadi story nahi padhi toh review nahi padhne ka :buttkick:

Bahut hee badhiya koshish गंदु ब्रु :approve:

Starting se hee story me rahasya ke sath romanch tha.. Jisse story ke start se hee bhayankar wala interest apun ko aaya... Aage padhne ka.. Par fir story jaise jaise aage badhi... Story apna grip khone lagi.. Kuch writing ke kaaran, kuch predictable plot ke kaaran... Jo title se hee tha... Jaise hee wo item aur uska 20 saal kaa jhaant barabar bhai mila.. Lagbhag 99% reader guess kiye honge ki.. Aage jaa ke, hero apni gand marwayega jab use pata chalega ki dono bhoot hai....aur aisa hua bhi...

Par... Par...
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Yahi pe story ne U-turn liya... Loved the twist 💥👌 aur last ke part ne story me jo bhi kami thi, uski kami ek jhatke me mutth maarke baahar kar diya..... Is type ki short story pe jyada technicality pe ghusna gandu logo kaa kaam hai.. Overall story was good and that's all that matters in a story...

Title was good aur sach me ajeeb raat thu.. Jaha ek mara hua aadmi, mare hue aadmiyo ki baat kar rha tha...


7 /10

Lawda... Not possible


Yar.. Ye kitti awesome hai yar... Jarurat padne pe chodne ko bhi de degi😜😂:pond:
Gyani bhai :applause: mast ossom possom detailed reveiw, parh k maza aa gaya, aise review k liye hi to likhta hu story contest me :thankyou: Yug Purush
Waise Chennai Express movie me bhi hero ko koi dusra number yaad nahi tha aur hero Chennai me fas gaya tha :D

“Ajeeb Raat” by Sigma_Male


A fantastic story men!! Horror & Romance are my favourite genres when it comes to Short stories, especially horror. A good horror story is usually a mix of Thrill, Suspense & Fear of course, this one was definitely a good story.

The story starts off with the main protagonist Aman getting stuck in the train mid way around the forest and the exciting part was that he was all alone in the train. Then he met Sneha & Rohit, both of them guided Aman to the auto stand. The story, in its starting part was eye catching due to the situation created and the words used but as the story reached the mid part it seemed like it started to become quite pacy. Everything was happening a bit quickly but however, the end was like a booster to the story.

The turn of events in the end, Aman being a ghost/spirit himself and the Auto Crash in which maybe the auto – driver Manoj died, was a great twist in the story. The writer chose a great plot and had a good hold on it as the events were described nicely. But of course there was some scope of betterment out there too! Maybe the middle part was the area where you could've worked a little more.

The highlight was of course the last twist, Aman being a ghost (Aman was unaware about that too!)... So, a great attempt by you Mate, Cheers!!

Congratulations for the story and waiting for your second story in case you're going to write.

...[7/10]...​
Death Kiñg :thankyou: for detailed review, aise reviews he hi writer ka improvement hota hai aur protsahan bhi milta hai, I admit story has own flaws coz I rushed to post on 1st day. But I hopeful you all enjoyed reading this story.
 
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