Incest वो तो है अलबेला (incest + adultery)

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क्या संध्या की गलती माफी लायक है??


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sumimaster

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so, Raman and team were playing game against Sandhya,her husband and their son all the time...the protector is already murdered/dead...and now son is on his flashback and also from his friend he came to know that his uncle had shown his fake dead body,the lead character must have known whatever happened was conspired by the enemy of his family...he,his father and his mother all were the prey of the conspirators...here must people have seen Sandhya as a badmother but what about her son who knowing that his mother was surrounded by the pack of wolves left her and went away... isn't it his fault...the main character must realise this and mother son duo should be together and take down all those hidden and unhidden conspirators...#edited_comments #spoiler_comments_removed
 
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kamdev99008

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Bhai ye chudai na dikhane ka chutiyapa failane ki bajay. ...
Bachche ko bina mention kiye full flashback dikhane me to koi problem nahi honi chahiye
Ya fir bina flashback ke kahani me kuchh aur bhi interesting bacha rahne ki ummeed hai....
नहीं फिर तो अभय को गाँडू और डरपोक माना जाएगा जो सब कुछ देखता रहा और डर से भाग गया हां अगर अभय घर से नहीं भागता और घर में ही रहता और संध्या से नफरत करता और संध्या को उसके और रमन के रिश्ते के बारे में बोलता तो संध्या और रमन की रासलीला दिखाने में किसी भी पाठक को कोई हर्ज नहीं होता लेकिन अब कहानी अपने दिशा से भटक जाएगा और पाठकों को भी अच्छा नहीं लगेगा, अब जब संध्या सोचेगी की रमन के साथ कैसे रिश्ता बना और अभय सोचेगा की कब , कहां और कैसे दोनो को देखा इससे ये भी पता चल जाएगा की संध्या पहली और आखरी बार चूदी थी या की उनका रिश्ता पहले से था जो की अभी एक पहेली बना हुआ है

अगर दोनो की चुदाई पहले ही पार्ट में दिखाया जाता और अभय ये जनता है ये सस्पेंस रखा जाता तो कोई हर्ज नहीं होता लेकिन अब दोनों की चूदाई दिखाना ठीक नही रहेगा कहानी लंबी और दिशाहीन हो जायेगा

भाइयों धीरे धीरे सब कुछ सामने आने लगेंगे सभी राज भी खुलेंगे भाई को अपने हिसाब से कहानी लिखने दो अब फ्लैश बैक में जाने से पाठकों के मन में भी कई सवाल उठने लगेंगे और कहानी की रोचकता खत्म हो जाएगा

Ab samjh aane laga hai ki Raman apne plan ke mutabik Sandhya ko पंपसेट के रूम में bulata hai aur kuchh yesi chij dikhata hoga jise dekh kar Sandhya dar se Raman se lipat jati hogi aur abhay ko dikhane ke liye Raman apne plan ke anusar uski chudai kar deta hoga matlab Sandhya Raman se pahli aur aakhari baar hi chudi thi
Ye sab suggestions kya kahani me kuchh interesting chhodeinge????

Mana adult forum me kuchh bhi logical nahi hota... Lekin chudai to hoti hai... Ya wo bhi hata deni hai
 

MAD. MAX

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Bhai ye chudai na dikhane ka chutiyapa failane ki bajay. ...
Bachche ko bina mention kiye full flashback dikhane me to koi problem nahi honi chahiye
Ya fir bina flashback ke kahani me kuchh aur bhi interesting bacha rahne ki ummeed hai....







Ye sab suggestions kya kahani me kuchh interesting chhodeinge????

Mana adult forum me kuchh bhi logical nahi hota... Lekin chudai to hoti hai... Ya wo bhi hata deni hai
Waise to ye bat writer pe depend krti hai ki story me ye flashback jo chl rha hai ye detail me hota hai ya shot me
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Or
Aapki bi bat apni jgh shi hai kamdev99008 bhai
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Ab agar story ke update ki hisaab se dekha jay to abi ABHAY chota hai 9 year ka jise sex ki knowledge ni hai or scene me Maa ke lye nafrat or gussa show hona hai joki main reason hai ABHAY ke ghr ko chor ke jane ka so mere hisaab se ye sex scene detail na hoke shot rhe abi ke lye jada better hai
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Story hai to sex hona chahey to iska jawab hai bilkul hona chahey joki aage hone wala hai chahe wo ABHAY ke sath me naukrani ho PAYAL ho ya uski Maa SHANTI ho ya ABHAY ki Maa SANDHYA etc etc bilkul hoga inke sath sex tbi jada mja aayga
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Ab ye sb to sirf or sirf writer pe depend krta hai hum to bs apni thinking yha pe bta skte hai
 

AssNova

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wo scene skip kr dena..
bhai accept kar lo ki sandhya ne galat kaam kiye hain

isliye scene to hone hi chahiye aur pure detail me , isse atlaest itna to clear hoga ki sandhya wo sab apni khushi se kah rhi hai ya koi aur lafda hai
akhir pata to chalna chahiye ki sandhya kitni giri hui hai .

Mujhe nahi lagta sandhya is kahani ki heroine hai , so writer se request hai ki scene ek hi baar dikhaye par detail me , kya kya biti abhi pe , kitni badchalan hai sandhya ya usko blackmail kiya ya kuch aur , detailed to hona hi chahiye
 
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Ali is back

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Ab mai to update se bahut khush hun
Aur kahani mai lekhak mahoday ka badhiya pakad hai newly hi q na ho
To mai to ek badhiya kahani ka ise soch sakta hun baaki kon kharab hai kon sahi ye depend karta hai situation mai
But abhay aur payal ye dono saath ho aur dost baaki writer sir pe meri nigahen hain
Thanks to writer sir twist banaye rakhe
Mujhe next update ka intezar rahega
 

Ali is back

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Ab mai to update se bahut khush hun
Aur kahani mai lekhak mahoday ka badhiya pakad hai newly hi q na ho
To mai to ek badhiya kahani ka ise soch sakta hun baaki kon kharab hai kon sahi ye depend karta hai situation mai
But abhay aur payal ye dono saath ho aur dost baaki writer sir pe meri nigahen hain
Thanks to writer sir twist banaye rakhe
Mujhe next update ka intezar rahega
 
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