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Update 16 - Tears and blood!
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[ This update contains graphic/gore content. ]
*Yesterday*
*Evening/At treasure*
Aryan : VIRAJ KAPOORRR!
Viraj : huh!!!?
Hawa ka rukh badla, jo ladka shayad hi kisi se chilla ke, gehri aawaz mein baad karta, wahi ladka ab-
Aryan : avni, unki family phir teri nazar meri family ki orr padhi? Uncle Sanjay ki zamin, aur unki Beti pe teri nazar padhi? Mere bahan pe???? Aakhri... Aakhri moka hai tere pass! PAHLA aur AAKHRi. Iske baad AGAR teri nazar meri bahan pe ya hamari zamin pe padhi...!
Viraj : huh!!?
Aryan : TOH, TU MERA WOH ROOP DEKHEGA, JO MAIN KHUD NAHI JAANTA, aur...! AUR HOGI TREI MOUT-!
Call cut!
Viraj kuchh keh pata usse phele Aryan ne call cut kar diya, Sirf wahi nahi usne Viraj ko mout ki dhamki bhi di? Do second tak cabin ke bahar khada Viraj phone ki black screen ko ghurta raha. Uski kanpatti ki nasen phool chuki thi. Ungliyon ki pakad itni kas gayi thi jaise phone nahi, kisi ka gala daba raha ho.
"Mr. Kapoor!?"
Peechhe se prakesh ki aawaaz aaye, jab Viraj kapoor cabin se Bahar aaye huye kucch waqt Ho Chuka tha, toh prakesh khud Bahar aaya. Aate hi unhone dekha Viraj haaton Mein phone liye Kuchh pareshan dikh raha hai.
Viraj : oh... y-yes!?
Prakesh : aap pareshan dikh rahe hai, mr kapoor?
Viraj : no it's nothing! Anyway mr prakash... So apne kya decide kya?
Viraj ke iss prashna pe prakesh kucch der chuppi rakhta hai, phir bolta hai.
Prakesh : soch liya, mere kiye business sab se phele hai, phir sab kuchh. Yeah mr kapoor Maine decide kar Liya.
Viraj (Smile) : bohat badhiya aapse yehi umid thi, well chake main aap ke office bhijwa dunga.
Prakesh Viraj se haath milata hai, uske baad prakesh apne raste nikal padhta hai, uski pareshani kharam ho chuki thi. Par Viraj? Prakesh jaane ke Baad uski chehre ki muskurahat Badal ke ek shatit dhediya jaisa ho gaya. Usne dobara kisi ko call karte huye cebin Mein gush gaya-
"Haan re Viraj bhai, bol na bhaiya. kaise yaad aa gaya is nachiz ko? ab mujhe yaad kiya?"
Viraj : chhota sa kaam hai ek, Belu?
Belu : bas boliye bhau.
Viraj : ek ladka hai Aryan Naam ka-
Belu : samajh gaya bhau lounde ko tapkana hai, na??
Viraj ke poora kehne se phele belu bol pada, jaise isse phele bhi woh Viraj ke liye kaam kiya tha, woh jaanta tha Viraj usse Kiya kam karwana chata hai. Per viraj ka dimag mein kuchh aur hi Chal raha tha. Aur ghumate huye chair pe baith Gaya, suger jalaya, dhuye ko hawa Mein chhodte huye-
Viraj : lounde ko nahi belu, lounde ko nahi!
Belu : tou phir kono ko tapkana hai.
Viraj (Smiles) : lounde ne mujhe dhamkaya, pata hai tujhe Kya Kehke dhamkaya?
Belu : Viraj Bhau... Aap ko dhamkaya konba??
Viraj : hai ek, wahi chuza hai. Ariyan karke, Maine uske aur uske bahanko dhamkaya, pata hai na Tujhe main kamm kis chiz ka karta hoon.
Belu : haa bhau, hehehe! Per bhau dhamkaya Kyu seesha maar daalte na? Mushkil kaam thodi hai. *Laugh*
Viraj (smiles) : woh Kya hai na, lounda aur Woh loundiya, meri bade bhaiya ke Ladki ke saath padhta hai. Sirf iss liye socha dhamka deta hoon bachche Hein darr jayenge. Par nahi... Tujhe pata hai lounde ne mujhe Kya dhamkaya??
Belu : Kya? Hahaha!! Aap ko dhamkaya.... Chora chutiya hai kya? Kya dhamkaya!?
Viraj : kehta hai uske zamin aur family or nazar maara toh woh mujhe marega? *Smiles* how funny haa!
Belu : *tch* Bhau... Bolo toh thok du abhi uuka??
Viraj : na na belu, Tujhe toh pata hi hoga mein kaam kaise karta hoon. Lounda ko kucch nahi karna.
Belu (confused) : toh ka kanra hai? Maarunga nahi toh ka sirf dhamkaunga?
Viraj (Smile) : na na...! Usko kucch nahi hona chahiye. Sun Meri baat! Sanjay Sharma! Lounda uske ghar rehta hai... Maarna nahi-
Belu : ohh ab samjha.. hahaha!! Aage khene ki jarurat nai, matlab lathi ko todna hai na?
Viraj : bilkul... Phone chake kar le sab details waha hai, kaha kaise maarna hai sab bejha hai. Kal ke kal hi kamm ho jaana chahiye.
Call cut!
THUD!
Phone ko usne patak ke, thoda zor se rakha. Zahir baat thi koi kal ka aaya lounda usko mout ki dhamki diya, woh thodi na chup chap baithega? Viraj woh addmi hai jo instent action keta hai. Aise woh Aryan ko kaise chhodta. Phele woh Aryan ko thode ga phir baari aayegi Aryan ki.
Belu ko sab samjha ke usne phone Rakha, auke chehre pe ab ek satir muskurahat thi, jiske do kaaran the, unmein se ekk Karan tha mr prakesh se Kari gaye woh deal. Usme wapas se phone uthaya aur iss baar kisi aur ko call Kiya-
Viraj (Smiles) : vardhani group ka malik ne haan keh diya, ab thik hai na!?
"Hahahahahahahaha.... Mujhe thukrai thi? Hahahahahaha!-" Aur uss taraf se sirf ek hasne ki Aawaz aati hai.
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Today/ 10:00 AM.
Sanjay ji subah uthkar, dono bacchon- Aryan aur Naina ka chuhe Billi ka Khel yaad karte hue, unki muskurahat aur khushiyon se bhari awaazon ko sunte hue, dil se khush hokar ghar se nikalte hain kaam pe jaane ke liye.
Darasal, Sanjay ek chhota sa garage chalate hain, jaha bikes ki servicing aur repairing ka kaam hota hai. Yeh unka apna shop hai, jaha se unki rozi-roti chalti hai, ghar ka kharcha nikalta hai. Upar se Aryan bhi unke ghar mein rehta tha, jo sb unka parivar ka hissa tha, lekin jaise apna beta hi. Isliye Sanjay ko aur bhi zyada mehnat karni padti thi - subah se shaam tak bikes aur cars ke engines kholna, parts badalna, oil change karna, sab kuch. Par woh khushi-khushi karte the. Aryan ko woh apna beta maante the, aur Aryan aisa baccha tha ki Sanjay ji aur unki beti Naina ke saath ek poora parivaar jaise hi ban gaya tha. Yeh sab sochkar Sanjay ji ke chehre par ek gehri, dil se aane wali muskurahat ubhar aati hai, lekin saath hi saath ek purani yaad bhi, jo unke dil ko ab bhi chubhti hai.
"Agar tum aaj yahan hoti toh tumhe bhi mere jitni khushi milti, Garima....! *Pause* Shayad!"
Garima aur koi nahi, balki Naina ki maa thi, jo ab unke duniya mein nahi rahi. Bohat saal ho chuke ab uss ghatna ko, Garima ab Sirf ek Naam hai, aur kuchh nahi. Aaj Sanjay ji ko pata nahi kyun, par apni patni ki yaad aa rahi thi. Shayad woh apni patni ko yeh dikhana chahte the ki woh teeno- Sanjay khud, Naina, aur Aryan uske bina bhi khush hain, zinda hain, jee rahe hain. Garima ki yaad mein unki aankhein thodi nam ho jaati hain, lekin woh apne aap ko sambhalte hain, apna purana scooter uthate hain, aur garage ki taraf nikal padte hain.
Aise hi yaadon mein khoye, scooterchalate hue, woh apne garage pahunch jaate hain. Garage sadak ke kinare tha, chhota sa, andar bikes khadi karne ki jagah, tools ki racks, aur ek chhoti si office jaisi jagah jaha woh chai peete the. Par unhe kya pata tha ki yeh din unki zindagi ka aakhri din banne wala tha? Unki buri kismat unka intezaar kar rahi thi.
Woh shop ka shutter kholne jaate hain, haath mein taala ki chaabi daalte hain, lekin tabhi unhe dikhta hai-
"Huh!? Lock pehle se toota hua hai?!"
Shop ka taala pehle se hi khula hua tha, nahi! balki toota hua. Dhaat ka taala mangal ki tarah toot kar zameen par pada tha, jaise kisi ne zor se hammer se maara ho. Sanjay ji ko yaad tha, woh har roz shop ko acche se band karte the, shutter neeche karke, taala lagakar, double check karke. Par yaha toh taala hi barbaad tha.
Dil mein ek ajeeb si ghabrahat uthi, lekin woh andar daakhil ho gaye, sochkar shayad koi galti hui hogi. Sochkar woh andar dakhil huye, par andar ka nazara dekhkar unki pair wahin ruk gaye, dil dhak se baith gaya.
"Aiye Sanjay bhau! Aap ka hi intezaar kar rahe the apan!"
Garage ke andar, ek purana stool par baitha hua tha Belu. Wahi belu jisko Kal raat Viraj Kapoor ne usko sab samjha diya tha- Sanjay kab aata hai, subah 9 baje ke aas-paas, garage ka address, aur kaise usko maarna hai. Belu ek bhade ka gunda tha, Viraj ke liye kaam karta tha, aur subah hi garage pe pahunch gaya tha. Taala todna uske liye bachchon ka khel tha, ek chhota sa crowbar se do minute mein kaam tamaam. Woh Sanjay ka hi intezaar kar raha tha, cigarette peeta hua, andar ki garmi mein paseena bahata hua.
Sanjay ji saamne baithe Belu ko dekhkar darr se kaamp uthe. Belu ek mota, tagda aadmi tha, Sanjay ki umar ka, lagbhag 45-50 saal. lekin sharir se bahut takatwar dikh raha tha. Uska pet aage nikla hua, seene se pehle woh pet hi dikhta tha, jaise beer ki wajah se. Uski aankhein laal thi, daant thode peele, aur haath mein tattoo ek bichhu ka.
"T-tum kaun ho aur yaha kya kar rahe ho?" Sanjay ki awaaz kaanpti hui nikli, woh peeche hatne lage.
Belu stool se uthta hai, dheere-dheere chalkar Sanjay ke saamne aata hai. Uski chaal bhari thi, jaise ek bhains chal rahi ho. Har kadam se zameen thodi hilti si lagti thi.
Belu : Saale, mujhe nahi pehchanta? Batao! Main Belu... Lagta hai apan ka sab dabdaba ab kam ho chuka hai?"
Sanjay : Kya kehna chahte ho?? aur... aur tum yaha...! Huhhhh???
Par Sanjay ji kuch samajh paate usse pehle, Belu ne apne bade, mazboot haathon se Sanjay ke muh ko zor se daba diya. Belu ke haath itne bade the ki Sanjay ka poora muh dhak gaya, naak aur muh dono band. Sanjay ki saans rukne lagi, woh haath-paon maarne lage, apne aap ko chhudane ki koshish karne lage, lekin Belu ki pakad maut ki pakad thi.
Sanjay : "Huh...! huh....!"
Sanjay ji ko thoda-bahut samajh aa gaya tha yeh Viraj Kapoor ka hi aadmi hai, zameen ke liye aaya hai. Unhone mana kiya tha Viraj ko zameen bechne se. Apne aap ko chhudane ki koshish karte hue,
THUD!
woh Belu ke pet par laat maari, lekin jaise pani mein paththar phenk diya, koi asar nahi. Belu ne apni jeb se ek bada sa chaku nikala blade 8 inch lamba, nukila, rusty, jaise pehle bhi khoon pee chuka ho. Chaku dekhkar Sanjay ki aankhein darr se phati ki phati reh gayi, dil zor se dhadakne laga.
Belu (Smiles) : Sanjay ji? Apne bacche ko samajhna chahiye tha ki Viraj Kapoor se panga na le-!
Sanjay : Huh????
Aur tabhi-
CHIRRR!!
Belu ne woh chaku seedha Sanjay ke pet mein ghoons diya. Blade ki nukili dhaar pet ki chamdi ko cheerti hui, muscles ko kaat-ti hui, andar tak ghus gayi. intestines tak pahunch gayi. Khoon ka faura turant hi ubhar aaya, garam, laal khoon Sanjay ke shirt ko bhigone laga.
"Aughhhhhh!!!" Sanjay ke muh se ek dard bhari cheekh nikli, lekin Belu ke haathon ke dabav mein woh cheekh dab kar reh gayi, sirf gurgling si awaaz bani.
Belu : Par, aapka baccha ab samjhega ki Viraj Bhau se panga nahi lete. Dekhiye toh uski nadani ka hashar ab aap ko bhugatna pad raha hai. Haa kya? Sanjay Bhau!? Hahaha!!
Kehte hue, Belu ne chaku ko Sanjay ke pet mein gol-gol ghuma diya, jaise butter mein knife ghuma rahe ho. Blade intestines ko kaat raha tha, pet ki deewar ko cheerta hua, andar ka sab kuch barbaad kar raha tha. Sanjay ka sharir dard se akad gaya, unki aankhein bahar nikal aayi, muh se laar aur khoon ki pichkaari nikalne lagi. Phir Belu ne zor se chaku bahar khinch liya-
blade ke saath thoda sa intestine ka tukda bhi bahar aa gaya, laal, chipchipa.
Sanjay (extreme pain mein) : Aaaaaagghhhhh!!
Belu : Na...! awaaz bilkul nahi!
Sanjay ki cheekhna chahte the, poora gala phaad kar roar karna chahte the, lekin Belu ne muh ko aur zor se daba diya, ungliyaan Sanjay ke gaal mein ghus rahi thi. Bechaare Sanjay ji ab umar ho chuki thi, karib 48-50 saal ke. Yeh dard woh seh nahi paa rahe the. Unka sharir kamzor hone laga, woh zameen par girne lage, lekin Belu ne unhe girne nahi diya. Usne Sanjay ko khada rakha, ek haath se gardan pakad kar, aur doosre haath se chaku wapas pet mein ghoons diya.
KHACH! KHACH! KHACH!!
Lagatar teeno baar, pehle pet ke neeche, phir beech mein, phir upar.
Har baar blade chamdi ko phaadta, muscles ko kaatta, andar ke organs ko barbaad karta. Pet se mangso ke tukde bahar nikal aaye, intestines bahar latakne lage, laal khoon ka sailaab bahar behne laga. Sanjay ke paon se hota hua zameen par pool ban gaya laal khoon ka. Khoon ki smell garage mein fail gayi, garam, metallic. Chaku aur Belu ke haath poore khoon se laal ho gaye, chipchipa khoon uski ungliyon se tapak raha tha.
Belu : Samajh aaya bhosdike? Zameen dene ka tha... Tune mana nahi. Ab tu toh yahi pe mar jayega, heh~ phir teri zameen bhi jayegi, phir teri beti ki izzat bhi~ fufu~! Phir sabke baad bari aayegi uss chuze ka, haa kya Naam tha? Aryan! Hai na?
Sanjay (cheekh-te hue, khoon muh se ugal-te hue) : NAAHHII!!!!!!!! Meri beti... Aughhhhhhh!!! Bacchon ko kucch nahi Karna *cough*
Belu : Hahahahahaha!!
Belu ab Sanjay ko chhod deta hai. Sanjay apne ghutno par gir jaate hain, ek haath se apne pet ko pakadte hain, jaha se intestines bahar nikal rahe the, unhe andar dabane ki koshish karte hain, lekin khoon ruk nahi raha. Doosre haath se Belu ki kamiz pakadte hain, khoon se laal haath se.
Sanjay : M-meri- ughhh!! Meri beti ko kuch mat karna..... Aughhhhh!!
Belu ne apni kamiz Sanjay ke haath se chhudwayi, aur ek zor daar laat Sanjay ke muh par maari, boot ka sole seedha muh par lagte hi naak se khoon behne laga.
THUD!
"Yyhghh!"
Sanjay ji muh ke bal gir gaye, haath pet se hat gaya, aur khoon bhari matra mein unke pet se behne laga, ab toh intestines poore bahar latak gaye, zameen par khoon aur guts ka mixture ban gaya. Woh dard se karah rahe the, sharir hil raha tha spasms mein.
Par-
Abhi bhi unhe jeena tha... apni beti ko surakshit karna tha. Bas yeh soch kar, iss maran dard mein bhi, woh uthne ki koshish karte hain. Haath zameen par tikate hain, khoon mein fisalte hain, lekin tabhi-
Belu wapas neeche jhukta hai, aur is baar!
THUD! KHACH!
Chaku ki nukili dhaar Sanjay ke seene ke beech-o-beech mein ghoons deta hai.
blade ribs ko todta hua, dil ke paas pahunchta hai, lungs ko touch karte hue. Khoon ki pichkaari seene se nikalti hai, Belu ke chehre par bhi chhitak jaati hai.
Sanjay : AAAAughhhh! *Cough* *cough* nahiii-!!
Dard se iss baar Sanjay zameen par girta hai, wapas nahi uth paata. Parantu abhi unki aankhein aadhi khuli thi, sansen chal rahi thi, har saans mein khoon muh se ugalta tha, gurgling awaaz. Uska seena aur pet se lagatar khoon beh raha tha, zameen par ek bada sa pool ban gaya tha, khoon ka. Aankhon ki dekhne ki shakti ja chuki thi iss extreme pain se. Sab kuch dhundhla, andhera hone laga.
Idhar Sanjay jab gira aur wapas nahi utha, yeh dekh Belu apni jeb se phone nikalta hai, Sanjay ki iss avastha ki photo khinchta hai. pet se bahar latakte guts, seene se behata khoon, muh se khoon ki laar. aur Viraj ko send kar deta hai. Phir kisi ko phone milata hai-
Belu : Jaldi car leke aa chutiya! Kaam ho gaya hai. Log aane se pehle nikalna hai.
Sab usne pehle se hi set kar rakha tha, car kaha rukegi, escape kaise karna. Tabhi ek purani black car shop ke bilkul saamne rukti hai, yeh Belu ke hi aadmi laaya tha, engine chalte hue. Belu ek aakhri baar Sanjay ko dekhta hai, jo ab behosh ho chuka tha, sansen dheemi, lekin Belu ko lagta hai mar chuka hai. khoon itna bah chuka tha ki koi insaan jee nahi sakta.
Belu (Smiles) : Ab pata chala main kaun hu? Hahaha! Belu... Belu kehte hai mujhe sabhi-!
"Bhau, jaldi aajao!"
Belu : Haa re maaike chhode, aa rela hun!
Woh jaldi se shop se nikal kar car mein baithta hai, haath khoon se laal, chaku jeb mein daal kar. Car aage nikal jaati hai, sadak par ghul mil jaati hai. Kisi ko kaan-o-khabar nahi chali ki idhar abhi-abhi ek brutal murder hua hai.
Car mein baitha hi Belu ki phone bajti hai. call tha Viraj ka. Usne Belu ke bheje gaye photo ko dekh call kiya tha, photo mein Sanjay ka barbaad sharir saaf dikhta tha.
Viraj : Wah! Belu mere Sher! Kaam poora hua na??
Belu : Ji bhau! Poora barbaad kar diya, ab woh nahi uthega.
Viraj : Account check karke paisa bhej diya. 2 lakh, jaise promise kiya tha.
Belu : Hehe, bhau aa gaya paisa. Thank you.
Viraj : Kisi ne dekha toh nahi?
Belu : Nahi bhau! Subah-subah koi nahi tha, aur dekhta bhi koi fadak nahi padha, ulta apanka dabbada bana rehta!
Viraj : Good, ab bhag waha se. I don't want any chaos. And don't worry about police, ab main sab kuch sambhal lunga. Tu bas kuch dino ke liye underground ho jaa, shahar se bahar nikal.
Belu : Ji boss!
Call cut hua, aur Belu ki car waha se chali gayi, highway ki taraf. Viraj ka kaam ho gaya.
Par, garage mein... Sanjay ji woh zinda the abhi bhi, behosh, sansen chal rahi thi- dheemi, har saans mein khoon bhari khansi. Unka sharir khoon ke t
alab mein pada tha, guts bahar latke, seena cheda hua. Shayad antim sansen, maut ka intezaar kar rahi thi. Garage ki garmi mein khoon ki badboo fail rahi thi, aur door se sadak ki awaazein aa rahi thi, jaise kuch hua hi na ho.
" *Cough* nahi *cough* m-main nahi mar sakta! Ughh!! abhi... aughhh!!! abhi nahi... na... hi... i....!"
Sanjay ki awaaz toot-toot kar nikal rahi thi, jaise har shabd ke saath unki saansein unhe dhokha de rahi hon. Woh zameen par rengete hue, apni kohniyon par tik kar uthne ki koshish kar rahe the, lekin unke shareer mein ab ek boond bhi taakat nahi bachi thi. Unke chehre par paseena aur khoon ki mili-juli dhaariyaan thi, aur unke honth neele pad chuke the. Farsh par faila unka apna hi khoon, garage ki thandi concrete par chipchipa hokar jam raha tha, aur hawa mein lohe ki tarah tez gandh fail rahi thi khoon ki gandh, jo kisi ko bhi jee michla de.
Phir bhi, Sanjay ki aankhon mein ek ajeeb si chamak thi, jaise maut se ladai ladte hue bhi koi raaz unke dimaag mein ghoom raha ho.
"a-agar main yaha mar gaya khaff!! to... har raaz... raaz hi reh jaayega. Ughhhh!! khaff!! a-abhi na... nah... hi...."
Aur ids baar unki awaaz adhar mein hi latak gayi. Unki palkein jhapakte-jhapakte poori tarah band ho gayin, sir ek taraf ludhak gaya, aur saansein itni dheemi ho gayin ki lag raha tha jaise sab kuch khatam ho chuka ho. Garage mein sannata chha gaya, sirf door se shehar ki traffic ki halki goonj sunai de rahi thi. Sanjay ka shareer ab poori tarah nishkriya lag raha tha ek bejaan dher.
Aur tabhi, achaanak-
"are, shutter khula hai? Sanjay uncle aa gaye honge, yaar naukri se hi nikaal na de, aaj phir se late ho gaya!"
Yeh awaaz ek yuva ladke ki thi, Raju ki. Woh Sanjay ke garage mein kaam karta tha, ek chhota-mota mechanic ka kaam. Umra hogi koi 25-27 saal, dubla-patla badan, lekin kaam mein tez. Pichhle kuch dinon se woh roz late aa raha tha, traffic ka bahana, ya kabhi bus miss ho jaana. Sanjay ne use do-teen baar chetaavni bhi di thi, "time se aaya kar, Raju! Yaha kaam ka matlab hai zimmedaari." Lekin Raju kaha maanne waala tha? Aaj bhi woh bhagte-daurete aaya, cycle par sawaar, saans phool rahi thi. Garage ka shutter aadha oopar utha dekha to socha,
'uncle pehle se aa chuke hain, ab to daant padegi.'
Woh andar daakhil hua, darwaaze se guzarte hue. Garage ki maddhim roshni meinjo sirf ek bulb se aa rahi thi. usne pehle to tools aur car ke parts ko dekha, sab waisa hi tha. Lekin phir uski nazar farsh par padi, aur waha ka nazara dekhkar uski rooh kaanp gayi. Sanjay zameen par pade the, bilkul bejaan, unke chaaron taraf khoon ka ek bada sa pool faila hua tha. Unka shirt khoon se lathpath, chehra peela pad chuka, aur aankhein band. Hawa mein woh tez, metallic gandh aur bhi tez ho gayi, jaise maut ki sugandh ho. Raju ke pair thithak gaye.
"aaaa.... aaaa bhagwan! Ye kya ho gaya?"
Raju ki cheekh nikli, lekin itni dheemi ki khud ko hi sunai di. Woh daudte hue Sanjay ke paas pahuncha, ghutnon par baith gaya. Haath kaampte hue usne Sanjay ke kandhe ko chhua, "s-sanjay ji.... sanjay ji?" Usne halke se hilaya, lekin koi jawaab nahin. Phir zor se hilaya, "uncle! Uthiye!! Kya hua aapko?" Raju ka dil zor-zor se dhadak raha tha, paseena chhoot raha tha. Usne kai baar koshish ki, unki nabz tatoli, lekin haath itne kaamp rahe the ki kuch samajh nahin aa raha. 'Bhagwan, ye to mar gaye lagte hain,' Raju ne socha, aankhon mein aansu aa gaye.
Lekin tabhi—
"*Cough* r-raju!? Haff!! Haff!!" Sanjay ki aankhein halki si khuli, aur unki kamzor awaaz nikli. Woh abhi zinda the, lekin mushkil se. Unka chehra dard se aintha hua tha, saansein tez aur ukhdi hui. Raju ki jaan mein jaan aayi, lekin dar aur bhi badh gaya.
"oh bhagwan... aap aise? Mujhe kuch samajh nahin aa raha! Ru-rukiye, main Naina aur Aryan ko call karta hoon.... hah??!"
Raju ne jeb se phone nikaala, lekin Sanjay ne kamzor haath se use roka. "Nahi.. Raju... nahi, abhi unhe mat bata. Pehle mujhe hospital le chal. Dono bacche mujhe aise nahin dekh sakenge..."
Raju : p-par....!
Sanjay : ughhhhh! Rajuuu! Derr mat kar, mere paas huff! mere paas time kam hai.
Raju ki awaaz kaamp rahi thi, "haan! Haan, main ambulance bulaata hoon!" Raju ne turant phone lagaya, 108 par. Aam dinon mein ambulance bulao to ghanton lag jaate hain traffic, staff ki kami, sab bahane. Lekin Raju ne sthiti ki gambheerta batai aur kismat se, paas ke hospital se ambulance uplabdh thi, aur woh sirf 7 minute mein aa gayi. Siren ki awaaz sunkar garage ke baahar logon ki bheed jama ho gayi padosi, raahgir, sab poochh rahe the, "kya hua? Accident?" Raju ne kisi ko andar nahi aane diya, "door hato, jagah do!"
Ambulance waale do paramedics andar aaye, Sanjay ko stretcher par litaya. Unka blood pressure check kiya, oxygen mask lagaya. Raju unke saath ambulance mein baitha, siren bajaate hue ve nikle. Raaste mein thoda sa traffic prapt hua, aur 15 minute mein ve shehar ke sarkari hospital pahunch gaye. Emergency ward mein doctoron ne turant admit kiya IV lagai, scan.
Sanjay ne jaate-jaate jaise kaha tha, Raju ne waisa hi kiya. Hospital ke baahar khade hokar usne ghar par call lagaya. Aaj ghar par Naina akeli thi, Aryan collage gaya tha, Phone uthaate hi Raju ne sab bata diya. Naina ko pata chalte hi woh hospital ki orr bhagi aur hospital pouchte hi usne Aryan ko call kya.
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Same Time/ in college
Jab Aryan, mya ke car mein baitha tha, Myra Aryan ko apne Ghar leke jaana chahti thi, uska kehna tha, janamdin ke din uske Dad ne Aryan se Acche se behave nahi kya tha uss isliye Aryan jaldi waha se Chala Gaya tha, par usko kya pata? Ki Aryan uski Dad ki vajah se nahi balki chacha ke wajah se gayabtha.
RING! RING! RING!
Aryan ka phone baj utha.
Usne jeb se phone nikaala, dekha toh call Naina ki thi.
Aryan : ek minute, Myra!
Usne phone kaan se lagaya, aur agle hi pal Uske pairon tale zameen khisak gayi.
Phone ke uss taraf se-
Naina (crying) : BHAIYAA! PAPAAA!!!
Naina ki roti hui awaaz phone ke doosre side se aa rahi thi, toot-ti hui, beech-beech mein saanson ke saath atakti hui.
Naina (crying) : Bhaiyaa…! Bhaiyaa please… jaldi ****** Hospital aa jao…!
Aryan ka dil ekdum se zor se dhadks. phir jaise ek second ke liye ruk gaya. Uski bhavhein sikud gayi. Aankhon mein confusion aur darr ek saath ubhar aaya.
Aryan : Naina? Hospital? Kya hua? Tum ro kyun rahi ho? Bolo Naina!
Doosri taraf sirf siskion ki awaaz. Jaise woh bolna chah rahi ho, par shabdon tak pahunch hi nahi pa rahi.
Phir mushkil se-
Naina : B-bhaiya… papa! Papa ko kisi ne… chaku se stab kar diya… bahut khoon… bahut khoon nikal raha tha… aap jaldi aao mujhe darr lag raha hai bhaiya *Sniff*
Aryan ki aankhein dheere-dheere phail gayi.
Uske haath, jo phone pakde hue the, halka sa kaanpne lage. Jaise kisi ne uske kaanon mein bomb phod diya ho. Sab kuch ekdum se khali lagne laga. Uske andar sirf ek hi awaaz goonj rahi thi- stab…!! khoon..!!
Uske paas baithi Myra ne turant notice kiya. Abhi kuch seconds pehle tak normal baitha Aryan, ab bilkul stone ho gaya tha. Uska chehra safed pad chuka tha. Honth halki si khule hue, aankhein ek jagah jam gayi thi.
Peeche seat par baithi Meera, jo ab tak phone mein Insta scroll kar rahi thi, Aryan ke muh se “hospital” sunte hi seedhi ho kar baith gayi. Usne phone side mein rakh diya. Car ke andar ka atmosphere ek pal mein badal gaya.
Myra (slow, worried) : A-aryan…? Kya hua?
Aryan ne jaise khud ko jhatka diya.
Aryan : M-main aa raha hoon, Naina… tu darr mat… main bas aa raha hoon.
Usne call cut kiya. Agle hi pal woh jhatke se Myra ki taraf muda aur bina soche uska haath zor se pakad liya, Yeh pehli baar tha. Uski pakad itni kas ke thi jaise woh kisi sahare ko chhodna hi nahi chahta. Myra ki nazar apne haath par gayi- Aryan ki ungliyan uski ungliyon mein dhansi hui thi. Phir usne Aryan ke chehre ki taraf dekha. Aankhon mein darr, ghabrahat… aur bechaini saaf thi. Aur naa jaane iss chhoti si vakaya ne, tension ke beech bhi Myra ka dil zor se dhadak utha.
Myra (halki awaaz mein) : A-Aryan?
Aryan (almost breathless) : Myra! jaldi ****** Hospital-!! JALDI-!!
Myra abhi tak inta toh Samajh gayi thi, ki call Naina ka aaya tha, phir Aryan "hospital" keh raha tha, matlab kucch gambhir baat huya hai. Aryan ne uske haath ko pakad rakha tha Myra mano Kuchh keh hi nahi paye, bas usne turant hami Bhari Sir hila ke. Phir bina ek second waste kiye ignition start kiya.
Myra : Meera, you coming?
Meera : Yes. I’m coming.
Agla hi pal-
VROOOOM!
Car tez speed se road par nikal gayi. Poore raste Aryan ne Myra ka haath nahi chhoda.
Uski saansen tez chal rahi thi. Kabhi woh windshield ke bahar blank stare karta, kabhi apni ungliyon ki grip aur tight kar deta. Uske hont dab rahe the.
Myra drive kar rahi thi, par usse steering ke saath-saath Aryan ki bechaini bhi feel ho rahi thi. Uski grip dard dene lagi thi… par usne haath nahi hataya.
Traffic, horns, signals sab ek blur ban gaye. Aur Kuch minutes baad hospital ka board saamne dikhai diya. Jaise hi car emergency entrance ke paas rukhi, Aryan ne turant door kholne ki koshish ki.
Click!
Door nahi khula. Usne dobara try kiya.
Click! Click!
Aryan (frustration, panic) : Shit! SHHITTT!
Myra : Aryan wait! Central lock ka button-
Par ab Aryan ka patience khatam ho chuka tha. Uske andar ka darr gusse mein badal gaya. Agla hi second-
THUD!
Usne halka force se car ke door par laath maari. Lock ka mechanism jhatke se toot gaya. Door khul gaya.
Myra aur meera dono muh kholke dekhte rahe, isliye nahi ki mahangai car thi balki liyee, ki kaise sirf ek laath mein Aryan ne lock Tod Diya.
Door khulte hi Aryan bina peeche dekhe bhaag pada. Hospital ke automatic glass doors khule. Andar antiseptic ki tez smell, white lights ki harsh brightness, logon ki bhaag-daud stretchers ki wheels ki kharr-kharr. Aryan seedha reception ki taraf daud raha tha.
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Udhar, Emergency ward ke bahar ka mahaul hamesha ki tarah bhaari aur bechaini se bhara hua tha. Safed deewaron par tube light ki pheeki roshni padh rahi thi, aur hawa mein dawa aur antiseptic ki tez khushboo ghuli hui thi. Kabhi stretcher ki aawaz, kabhi nurseon ke tez kadam, aur kabhi kisi ke dabey hue rone ki siskiaan- sab milkar ek ajeeb si ghabrahat paida kar rahe the.
Naina ek thandi lohe ki bench par jhuk kar baithi thi. Uske haath aapas mein kas ke bandhe hue the, Uski aankhon se aansu lagataar beh rahe the, aur uski nazar baar-baar ICU ke darwaze ke upar jalti hui laal batti par jaa tikti thi. Woh laal roshni jaise har pal use yaad dila rahi thi ki uske pitaji ki haalat kitni nazuk hai.
Uske bagal mein Raju baitha tha. Kabhi woh paani ki bottle aage badha deta. "Sab theek ho jayega, Naina… himmat rakho," usne kai baar kaha tha.
Par Naina ke aansu rukne ka naam hi nahi le rahe the. Kaise rukte? Raju ne jo bataya tha, uske baad to jaise uski duniya hi hil gayi thi Sanjay ji ko uss haalat mein dekhna… woh tasveer uske zehen se ja hi nahi rahi thi. Iss waqt agar koi sach mein usse sambhal sakta tha, to woh sirf ek hi insaan tha uska bhaiya.
Aryan!
Tabhi corridor mein tez kadmon ki aahat gunji.
"Naina!!!!"
Jaise hi Naina ke kaano mein Aryan ki awaaz padi, uska jhukaa hua sar ek jhatke se utha. Woh bench se turant khadi hui aur rote hue Aryan ki taraf daud padi. Lekin woh Aryan tak pahunch paati, usske pair achanak ruk gaya.
Kyunki-
Aryan ke peeche-peeche Myra bhi bhaagte hue aa rahi thi. Aryan ke lambe aur tez kadmon ka saath dena uske liye mushkil ho raha tha. Saans phool chuki thi, baal chehre par chipak gaye the, aur woh lagbhag daudte-daudte us tak pahunchi. Jaise hi Aryan ruka, Myra ne aage badhkar uska baazu pakad liya, zor-zor se saans lete hue.
Myra : Huff! huff! Aryan! Does anyone run that fast? What if you had fallen?
Uski awaaz mein chinta thi. Naina jo kuch hi kadam door, aansuon se bhari aankhon ke saath uski taraf badh rahi thi, jab usne Aryan ko dekha phir Myra ko, phir uski haathon ko jo Aryan ke baazu ko pakad rakhi thi.
Jab Aryan Naina ki aankhon mein aansu dekhta hai to woh wahi ther jaata hai, uski aankhon mein chinta thi Naina ke liye. Idhar Myra Aryan ko pareshan dekh khud worried thi. Aur Naina? Woh ek baar Aryan ko dekhti hai phir Myra ke haathon ko, jo Aryan ke baazu ko pakad rahi hai, bilkul karib.
Par ye dekh Naina ke kadam ruk gaye, aur aankhon se ek garm boond aansu ki giri.
Pata nahi ye aansu kis liye the? Apne pitaji ke haal pe? Ya apne bhaiya ko kisi aur ladki ke haathon mein dekh ke? Shayad dono bhavnaon ka ek mila-jula bhaav.
Dono ladkiyon ki nazar Aryan pe thi, aur dono ke mann mein Aryan ke liye ek khas jagah thi.
Kuch hi second ka tha ye vakya. Jab Meera bhi peeche-peeche aayi tab Naina ka dhyaan toota. Aur daud ke Aryan ke seene mein khud ko sama leti hai, aur badi chalaki se Myra ke haath ko apne bhaiya ke baazu se chhuda leti hai.
Ye dekh Myra ke muh se sirf ek hakki si awaaz nikli, "naina?"
Naina (crying) : Bhaiya papa!! *Sniff* main ghar pe thi... Raju bhaiya ki call aayi thi-
Raju jo bagal mein hi tha, phir usne saari baatein batai, jisse sun Aryan ki aankhein chaudi ho gayi.
Tabhi—
ICU se ek doctor aaya. "We checked him and it looks like koi attempt to murder case hai, so police ko involve kiye bina treatment nahi kar sakte, pehle po-"
Aryan : Please doc, police ko baad mein bhi toh-
Doc : No! Sir I'm sorry but pehle police ko inform-
Myra : Are you kidding me right now? Start treating him immediately. Get the treatment going now! You can call the police later. The patient comes first! And if you haven't started treatment yet... I swear, I will take action against you. You know exactly who my dad is, right? Kanish Mehra! Do it right this second. Or you'll regret it.
Doc Myra ko dekhta hai, unhe Kanish Mehra ka pata tha, shehar ke sabse rich aadmiyon mein se ek the, aur uska uthna-baithna MLA se lekar mantriyon tak hota tha, aise aadmi ko kaun nahi pehchaane ga.
Doc : A-aap Kanish Mehra ki beti hain?
Unhone thoda darte hue jawab diya.
Myra : Yes! Do the job right now.
Doc : O-okay Miss, kuch papers ko sign kar dijiye fir hum operation shuru karte hain.
Phir wardboy kuch papers leke aaye Naina ke sign kiye, phir jaake operation shuru ho gaya. Myra ne sirf operation shuru karane mein madad ki, usne treatment ka payment khud diya. Aryan ne sab dekha. Woh baad mein ye paisa Myra ko lauta dega. Abhi uska dhyaan sirf Naina pe hai, usko sambhalna zaroori hai abhi.
Raju wapas garage chala gaya, aur aise dekhte-dekhte 4 ghante beet gaye, sabhi bench mein baithe the, Myra, Meera, Naina, Aryan sab tension mein the kya hoga aage. Woh intezaar kar rahe the. Naina ka haal rote-rote kharab ho gaya tha. Aur lambe 4 ghanton ke intezaar ke baad doc bahar aaye, unka chehra neeche jhuka hua tha. Ye dekh Naina-
Naina : W-what happened? Papa kaise hai abhi, theek hai na? B-bataiye?
Doc : i-
Aryan : Please, kuch boliye uncle kaise hai?
Doc : I- i did everything i could, but the injuries were extremely severe. The knife wound struck her heart directly, causing lacerations in multiple areas of the heart muscle. That led to significant internal bleeding around the heart and into the chest cavity. We transfused blood as quickly as possible to try to stabilize her, but the damage was too extensive, the heart is continuing to bleed from several sites despite our efforts. Additionally, the blade penetrated deep enough to severely damage the intestines. Large sections are perforated and devascularized, meaning the tissue is destroyed and non-viable, with widespread internal contamination and bleeding in the abdomen as well. These combined injuries-massive cardiac trauma with ongoing hemorrhage and catastrophic abdominal damage-have caused irreversible shock and multi-organ failure. We've done all we can medically and surgically, but his condition has deteriorated rapidly. *Pause* He doesn't have much time left. He may only have a short while. Please, if you'd like, go in now and spend a few moments with him. Say whatever you need to say. I'm so very sorry.
Sunte hi Aryan khada hua aur doc ki hi collar pakad liya, uski aankhon mein dard, darr, gusse ka mishran tha.
Aryan : What do you mean 'I'm sorry'? Don't talk like woh zinda nahi bachenge!
Doc : I understand what you feel but we… we did our best sir. It's out of our hands.
Par utne mein-
THUD!
Naina ko doc ki baat samajh aate hi woh ICU ke or bhagi. Ye dekh Aryan bhi doc ki collar chhod diya, aur bhi ICU ke or bhaga. Dono jab ICU room mein dakhil hue, dekh toh paya ki Sanjay ji bejaan sa bed pe laite hain, uski avastha dikhne se hi pata chal raha tha. Naina ki halat toh sabse buri thi. Aur bhagi aur-
Naina (crying) : Papa! Papa.. aap.. *sniff* papa!?
Aryan : U-uncle! Aap..!
Sanjay (smiles) : Bacchon aao mere paas baitho.
Naina (crying) : Main aapko kuchh nahi hone dunga, woh... Woh doc jhooth bol raha tha, hai na bhaiya? *Sniff*
Par Aryan jo Naina se samajhdaar tha woh Sanjay ji ki muskurahat se hi samajh gaya tha, doc jhooth nahi bol raha tha. Aanshu Aryan ke aankhon se bhi nikle.
Aryan : Uncle kon tha? Aapki iss halat ki wajah kon?
Sanjay : Abhi inn sab baaton ka mauka nahi raha Aryan. *Cough* Abhi mujhe kuchh important baat-
Aryan : Nahiiiiii! Kya... Kya woh Viraj Kapoor tha? Uncle bataiye mujhe!
Aryan ki aankhon mein gussa saaf tha, Sanjay bhi samajh gaye the, isliye unhone haami bhari halke se. Ye hota hai ek mard se mard ki baat, jo critical samay mein bhi atank nahi khote.
Sanjay : Viraj Kapoor uska hi koi *cough* koi aadmi aaya tha, Belu naam ka—
Naina (crying) : Papa... Aap theek ho jaaoge, kuchh nahi hoga aapko, kuchh nahi hone dunga.
Sanjay (smiles) : Meri chinta mat karo beti, ye hona hi tha... Agar Viraj nahi marta toh koi tha jo mujhe marne aata!
Aryan : K-koi aur??
Naina (crying) : ?!?! P-papa!
Sanjay : Aryan! Aryan mere paas baitho. Mere... Mere paas samay kam hai, mujhe kuchh batana hai tumhe.
Naina : Nahi abhi aap kuchh nahi bolenge, aapko rest ki zarurat hai.
Sanjay : Nahi meri bacchi, main tumse jhooth nahi bol sakta Naina, mujhe pata hai main ab zyada der nahi rahunga. *Cough* *cough* Aryan... Suno.
Naina : Papa! Aaaaa! *Sniff* Papa please aise mat bolo, aap theek ho jaaoge, bhaiyaa... Dekho papa kaise baatein karte hain.
Aryan bed pe Naina ke bagal mein baith gaya. Sanjay ji dheere se Naina aur Aryan ke haathon ko pakadte hain, unki pakad kamzor thi.
Sanjay : Suno, *cough* Main jo kehne ja raha hoon, usse dhyaan se sunna.
Naina : P-papa!?
Aryan : Uncle???
Sanjay : Naina dhyaan se suno, hamesha Aryan ke saath rehna, jab usse zarurat pade tum uske paas rehna!
Naina : ???
Sanjay ji kya bol rahe the Naina aur hi Aryan samajh paaya.
Sanjay : Tumhare bhaiya ko bohot jaldi tumhari zarurat padegi, meri bacchi tab... tab tum Aryan ko madad karna, meri baat yaad rakhna meri bacchi?
Naina (crying) : J-ji... *sniff*
Sanjay ab Aryan ki or mudte hain, uske haath ko kas ke pakadte hain.
Sanjay : Aryan beta ab mere paas samay nahi hai, kaash hota. Lekin main abhi tumhe jo kehne ja raha hoon usse dhyaan se sunna?
Aryan : Uncle??
Sanjay (constantly coughing in pain) : Aryan! Jab kuchh samajh nahi aaye, tab kuchh raaz hai. Jo tumhari soch se bhi aage hai, kuchh raaz hai jo chhupaya gaya hai, aur... Aur tumhe usse dhundna hai.
Aryan : M-main! Main kuchh samjha nahi.
Sanjay : Jaldi hi samajh jaaoge, abhi... abhi dhyaan se suno. Tumhe Mumbai wapas jaana hoga.
Aryan : M-Mumbai??
Sanjay : *cough* Haan! Mumbai tumhara shehar, tumhe wahan wapas jaana hoga, gala-Sindhu ocean hai tumhe wahan jaana hai.
Aryan : O-ocean??
Sanjay : Ab suno, 'Tairo toh kuchh raaz ka jawab milega, saath mein 9 rakshak bhi aayenge, khud ko pehchaan gaye toh raaz ka jawab milega.' Yaad rakhna.
Aryan : ????
Na Aryan kuchh samjha na Naina, dono sab baar ko dhyaan se sun rahe the. Sanjay ji Naina ko dekhte hain.
Sanjay : Samay pe samajh jaaoge, bas yaad rakhna. Ab... *cough* Naina... Meri bacchi-!
Unhone uske sar ko dheere se sehlate hain, jaise ye aakhri baar ho, woh bade pyar se Naina ko dekhte hain unki aankhon se aansu tapakne lagte hain.
Sanjay (cry) : Kitni ichchha thi tumhari shaadi kisi acche ladke ke saath karunga, dhoom-dhaam se apni beti ki shaadi mein jhoomoonga, bida karunga, par dekho meri kismat mein hi nahi hai.
Naina (crying) : Aap aise kyun bol rahe ho? AAPKO KUCHH NAHI HOGA! Kaan khol ke sun lijiye aapko kuchh nahi hoga.
Sanjay bas muskurate hain, woh Aryan se kehte hain.
Sanjay : Ho sake toh mujhe maaf karna beta, main-
Aryan : Uncle??? Aapko kuchh nahi hoga, main aur Naina aapke saath hain.
Sanjay (smiles) : Pata hai mujhe, mere jaane ke baad dukhi mat hona, aur apni behen...! Ughhhh!!
Sanjay ji ekdam se khoon ugalte hain, ye dekh Aryan aur Naina ki dil ki dhadkan tez ho gayi, Aryan ne patient monitor mein dekha, jahan Sanjay ki heart rate bilkul dheemi dikh rahi thi.
Naina : Papaaa!! *Sniff* Doctor... DOCTOR!
Sanjay : Doctor bulake kuchh nahi hoga meri bacchi, ye meri kukarm ka phal hai jisse main bhugat raha hoon. Aryan? Apni behen ka khayal rakhna, mere baad ab uska tumhare bina koi nahi hai.
Aryan ki aankhon se aansu beh aaye, kyunki woh samajh gaya tha, shayad ab koi fayda nahi tha doc bulane ka.
Aryan : M-main... Uska dhyaan rakhunga uncle aap chinta mat karo.
Sanjay (smiles) : Mujhe pata hai. Kaash mere paas samay hota, kaash...! Aryan maine jo bhi kaha yaad rakhna sab kuchh.
Aryan : U-uncle??
Naina : P-papa!!?
Sanjay dono bhai-behen ka haath thaam apne seene pe rakhte hain, unke chehre pe ek muskurahat thi par uske peeche ka dard shayad Naina samajh nahi payi kintu Aryan ko bodh ho chuka tha. Woh dono ko baari-baari dekhte hain.
Sanjay : Meri bacchi, main khushnaseeb tha ki tumhari jaise pyari beti mili mujhe, aur Aryan... Tumhe jab ghar mein laya uske baad se ghar ghar jaisa lagne laga, shayad tumhe yaha bhi dukh mila tha... *Pause* Lekin dekho abhi Naina ko, woh tumse kitna pyar karti hai. Aur Garima...!
Garima ka naam sunte hi Aryan stabd reh gaya, aur Naina bhi.
Sanjay : Khaas aaj woh hoti...? Aaj... aaj uski bohot yaad aa rahi thi.
Naina : Papa!
Sanjay (smiles):
Aryan : Uncle jo ho chuka hai woh ho chuka hai, m-mujhe kisi baat ka dukh nahi hai ab. Jo bhi tha meri maa se toh acchi thi *smile* mujhe koi dukh nahi.
Naina : Bhaiya??
Sanjay (smiles) :
Aryan : Uncle aap log nahi hote toh main...
Naina : B-bhaiyaa!
Aryan : Huh! Naina?
Naina : P-papa!
Sanjay (smiles) :
Naina ne kaampte haathon se ishara kiya Sanjay ji ki taraf. Aryan Sanjay ji ko dekhte hain, jo bina aankhon ki palken jhapkaye muskura rahe the. Ye dekh Aryan ki reedh ki haddi jaise thandi pad gayi. Usse abhi abhi kucch bodh huya. Dono ka haath Sanjay ji ne apne seene pe rakha tha, aur tabhi Aryan ko mehsoos hua, ki-
Unki dhadkane toh chal hi nahi rahi thi. Woh... woh toh mar chuke the.
*Silence*
Marte hue bhi woh muskurate hue Aryan aur Naina ko dekh rahe the. Poore kamre mein bas sannata tha, na Aryan kuchh bol paya, na Naina.
Aur isi ke saath Naina jo bin maa ke badi ho rahi thi, ab uske sar se baap ka saaya bhi nahi raha.
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Mumbai/ 11:40 pm.
Aryan's real House.
Raat gehri ho chuki thi. Haveli ke bahar sadak par kabhi-kabhi kisi gaadi ki door se aati awaaz raat ki sannata ko ek pal ke liye tod deti, phir sab wapas shaant ho jaata. Aasmaan mein chaand aadha badalon ke peeche chhupa tha. Uski feeki roshni haveli ki unchi deewaron par padkar unhe aur bhi thanda, aur bhi suna bana rahi thi.
Andar…
Lambi marble wali gallery mein bas kuch night lamps jal rahe the. Unki halki peeli roshni zameen par lambe–lambe saaye bana rahi thi. Deewar par latki purani ghadi ki awaaz saaf sunai de rahi thi-
Tick! tock!
Poora ghar so chuka tha. Par iss gehri raat mein do insaan aise the jinke andar neend ka naam tak nahi tha. Purnima. Aur Anita.
Woh raat ka andhera gehra tha, haweli ke corridor mein sirf ek do faint bulb ki peeli roshni thi, jo deewaron par lambi parchhaiyaan daal rahi thi. Purnima ke kadam dheeme-dheeme, lekin bechaini se Anita ke kamre ki taraf badh rahe the. Uski saans tez thi, dil zor-zor se dhadak raha tha. Usko pata tha—Anita sab jaanti hai. Kyunki Aryan ke janam ke turant baad hi Anita ko iss haweli mein laaya gaya tha, uski dekhbhaal ke liye. Tab se hi Purnima ke mann mein ek sawaal baar-baar ubhar raha tha-
"Jyoti didi rehte hue bhi kyun Aryan ke liye koi doosri ladki laani padi?"
Aur aaj, sab sach jaanne ke liye, woh ruk nahi sakti thi.
Thak! Thak!
Darwaza khula. Anita bahar aayi, chehra thaka hua, aankhein laal. Purnima ko dekhkar woh chaunk gayi.
Anita: Didi? Aap iss waqt? Kuchh chahiye tha?
Purnima: Nahi... Tu andar chal.
Anita: Huh!?
THUD!
Purnima ne andar ghuskar darwaza andar se band kar diya. Kamre mein sirf ek table lamp jal raha tha, uski roshni Anita ke chehre par pad rahi thi, jisse uski aankhon ke neeche ka kaalapan aur gehra dikhai de raha tha.
Anita : Didi?
Purnima : Tu usko kya kehke bulati hai?
Anita : Kisko?
Purnima ki awaaz mein ab tak ke sabr ka bandhan toot raha tha.
Purnima : Dekh Anita, jab se main ghar aayi hoon, tab se dekh rahi hoon sab kuchh ajeeb hai. Ghar ke waris ki maut ko sab chhupa rahe hain. Aaj main sab sach jaan ke rahungi. Aur mujhe pata hai, tu sab jaanti hai. Bata mujhe sab kuchh... sab kuchh jaanna hai.
Anita ki aankhein jhuk gayi.
Anita : M-main... kuchh nahi jaanti didi.
Purnima (zor se) : Tu "Babu" kehti hai na usse? BOL!
Anita ke haath kaanp gaye.
Anita : Didi, main kuchh nahi jaanti...
Purnima : BOL Anita! Tu Babu kehti hai na usko? Tujhe uski kasam, Anita... bol!
Kasam sunte hi Anita ke chehre ka rang ud gaya. Woh sehem gayi, peeche hati, jaise koi bhari bojh uske kandhon par daal diya gaya ho.
Purnima : Anita? Tujhe uski kasam-
Anita (tootkar) : Haan! Haan! Woh mera Babu tha... mera Babu. Bas jaan liye na ab? Aap chali jaiye. Mujhe aur kuchh nahi pata.
Woh peeche mud gayi, lekin Purnima ne uska haath pakad liya. Aaj woh jaane nahi waali thi.
Purnima : Toh tujhe usshe Babu ki kasam hai mujhe sach bata, Anita...
Anita : Main...!?
Purnima : Bata Anita, sab sach bata. Tujhe teri Babu ki kasam... please!
Purnima ne dheere se Anita ke kandhe pakde aur usko apni taraf ghumaya. Anita ro rahi thi. Uske aansu bina ruke beh rahe the, gaal geele, aankhein laal, saans ruk-ruk kar aa rahi thi.
Purnima (awaaz bhar aayi) : A-Anita... Mera koi beta nahi hai. Tujhe pata hai jab maine suna tha ki Jyoti di ko beta hua hai, toh mujhe kitni khushi hui thi?
Anita : Didi...?
Purnima : Main kabhi America nahi jaana chahti thi. Par Pankaj ki wajah se jaana pada. Par jab maine suna Jyoti di ka beta hua... tujhe pata hai main kitni khush thi? Main wapas India aana chahti thi. Ek aas thi ki Jyoti di ke bete ko main bhi maa ka pyar doongi. Woh mujhe maa ya chhoti maa kehke bulayega. Aur Bhavya ko bhi apna chhota bhai milega. Kitne sapne sajaaye the, tujhe pata hai? Par saasuma ne humein India aane hi nahi diya. Pankaj ko bola toh woh bhi mukarta tha, kaam ka bahana deke. Par jab yaha wapas aayi, tab woh aas phir se jaag uthi... ki... ki- *sniff*
Purnima toot gayi. Uske aansu behne lage. Woh rone lagi, zor-zor se. Anita bhi ro rahi thi. Dono auraton ke beech sirf dard tha, aur woh dard kamre ke har kone mein ghoom raha tha.
Purnima (rote hue) : Bolo... bolo Anita, chup mat raho... Usse aankhon ke saamne dekh nahi paayi, aur uski maut ho gayi? Kaise? Kya hua tha? Ye khabar humse chhupayi kyun gayi?
Anita : Didi... m-main...!
Purnima : Bas kar Anita, ab bas kar... Tujhe kasam hai Aryan ki, tere Babu ki-
Anita (chillakar) : Kasam mat dijiye didi! Main jhooth nahi keh paungi... *sniff* aur sachai aapko aur bhi dukh pahunchayegi!
Anita rote hue boli, uski awaaz mein woh dard tha jo saalon se seene mein daba rakha tha. Woh sach jaanti thi, aur shayad iss haweli mein sabse zyada dard usi ne saha tha.
Purnima : Mujhe sach hi sunna hai. Har raaz jaanna hai uske baare mein. Bolo... bolo Anita, sab sach bolo.
Anita ne daanton se hoth dabaye. Usne apne aansu ponchhe, lekin woh ruk nahi rahe the. Phir ekdam se woh peeche mudi, ro uthi, chikh uthi-
Anita (chillate hue) : Kya sach jaanna hai aapko? Toh suniye! Iss haweli ke hawaon ne mere Babu ka sach barson se chhupa ke rakha hai. Aapko sach sunna hai na? Kshamta hai aap mein Sach sunane Ka??? Toh suniye! Mere Babu ko... *Pause* unko aur koi nahi-! balki unki khud ki maa, Jyoti didi ne... apne haathon se apne hi bete ki saanso ko cheen liya tha! *Sniff* JYOTI DIDI NE APNE HAATHON SE BABU KI JAAN LI THI!
*Silence*
Woh shabd kamre mein goonj gaye, jaise koi tez chaku dil mein utar gaya ho. Jo Sach sunane ke liye Purnima tap rahi thi vah Sach Uske samne khulate hi- Purnima ke kadam ladkhadaye. Uski aankhein badi-badi ho gayi. Usne apna muh band kiya, lekin awaaz nahi nikli. Phir woh zameen par baith gayi... nahi, gir gayi. Uske haath kaanp rahe the. Poora badan thanda pad gaya, jaise barf jam gayi ho. Aansu beh rahe the, lekin woh ro bhi nahi pa rahi thi, sirf haath se zameen pakad kar baithi rahi, jaise saans ruk gayi ho.
Anita bhi ro rahi thi, lekin ab uski awaaz dheemi ho chuki thi. Woh bas Purnima ko dekhti rahi, aur dono ke beech sirf sannata tha- bhari, gehra, dard bhara sannata.
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Aaj ke liye itna hi. Update contents 8.5k+ word count. Guys like thokdo and sabhi review bhi Diya Karo, padh rahe ho toh. Apan Chala soone, Good night. Enjoy.
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Super dhamakedar update bhai
Awesome update bro
Awesome update bhai
लज़बाब गुरु...
कहानी के किसी खंड को रोचक बनाने का उम्दा हुनर है आप में ... बेशक , ये कहानी भी इस फोरम का एक cult classics कहानी बनने को अग्रसर है । बस कहानी के अंशों को देने में ज्यादा विलंब न करो । जब कहानी में रोचक तथ्य डाला जाता है, तो उस रोचकता को कायम रखनें के लिए आखिर अंशों को भी नियमित मगर थोड़े कम अंतराल पर डालना पड़ता ही है । यही वो एक कारण है जो आपके इस कहानी को शीघ्रताशीघ्र बुलंदियों पर ले जाने में मदद करेगा ।
बाकी , कहानी तो की तो अभी बहुत सारे पहलुओं को खुलना बाकी है, फिलहाल तो शुरुआत ही कहूंगा , पर अगर शुरुआत ऐसा है तो अंत तक के राह में आने वाले रोचक गाथा से तो और उम्मीदें बढ़ गई गुरु ।
खैर, आने वाले अंशों हेतु शुभकामनाएं।
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Let's review
Starting se ending tak pace bilkul perfect rakh paye ho na zyada slow, na fast. Pehle half mein Aryan aur Naina ka emotional scene bohot strong tha. Woh forehead kiss wala moment
Aryan ka family wala dard confess karna, Naina ka suddenly gale lag jana yeh sab itna natural aur heart-touching laga ki padhte Samay
Especially jab Aryan bolta hai “mera apna koi nahi hai… par yaha parivaar mila” yeh line dil mein lag gayi. Bahut raw aur real feel aaya
Naina ki butterfly wali memory aur maa ki yaad wala flashback bhi bohot sundar tha. Yeh chhoti si cheez titli haath pe baithna ko itna meaningful bana diya ki pyaar ka realisation moment genuine lag raha tha.
Naina ka blush aur guilt mix purana nafrat wala past yaad aana yeh layer bohot accha add kiya hai. Ab character depth badh rahi hai uski.
But past mein naina ne kya kiya tha Aryan ke saath jo abhi woh gulit mein hai?
Phir Avni wala scooty scene yeh part light, fluffy aur thoda sensual bhi tha bina over kar diye. Baal chehre pe touch, khushboo, mnmh wali awaaz yeh sab chhote chhote details se chemistry feel ho rahi thi. Yeh didi dynamic bhi fresh lag raha hai, family jaisa feel de raha hai jo Aryan ko missing tha.
Mystery element ka introduction killer tha Kaale libaas wala aadmi jo Teen Elders ka ek member hai. iska entry aur woh ghost-like walk through crowd scene atmosphere ko suddenly dark aur thrilling kar deta hai. Yeh supernatural vibe ab slowly build ho rahi hai, Chai tapri se college terrace tak follow karna goosebumps moment tha
Myra ka jealousy yeh part mazedaar tha. Uska one-sided love reveal aur Aryan ke saath thoda thoda possessiveness dikhana yeh triangle ko interesting bana raha hai. Last mein Naina ka crying pe cliffhanger. Ab suspense double ho gaya ghar pe kya hua? sanjay ke saath kucch huya hoga..
Overall yeh update emotional depth, mystery aur solid cliffhanger sab kuch balanced tha. Characters ke emotions real lag rahe hain, descriptions vivid hain especially sensory details
Bro update superbb tha..
Har scene bahut acche se likha tha, lekin confusion bhi ab bahut ho gayi hai Elder ko pata chal chuka hai ki Aryan zinda hai lekin woh shyd Aryan ke asli gharwalo ko yeh nahi batayega..
Lekin 3 elder hai aur yaha abhi ek elder hai baki ke 2 elder kaha hai? Kya woh baki elders dusre logo ki talash mai hai..?
And itne saalo se elders ko Aryan ki shyd koi news nahi thi lekin us OP(overpowered) ladki ke space kaatne ke baad agle hi din unhone Aryan ko dhundh liya, shyd yeh sab aapas mai interconnected hai.
Aur yaha Naina ki mom ka bhi thoda sa intro mila tha ki woh es duniya se ab bahut duur hai, lekin jesa Naina ka character hai thoda sa childish uske according yeh bolna sahi lagta hai.
Shyd Pankaj Aryan ko apne Ghar lekr nahi aaya ho balki Naina ki maa hi Aryan ko yaha lekr aayi ho?yeh bhi to ho sakta hai, aur Naina shuru mai Aryan se nafrat karti thi shyd jab Aryan yaha aaya ho to Naina ki maa chali gayi ho jiski wajah se Naina Aryan se nafrat karti hai..
(Yeh bas ek theory hai baki to writer ke hath aur dimag mai hai usne kya socha ho..)
Wese es update mai Myra ki jealousy dekhkar maza aaya lekin jab usse pata chalega uski friend Sanya pehle hi Aryan ke sath kar chuki hai kab kya reaction hoga Myra ka..
And Next update mai aur chijen cover kar sako to maza aayega, And Aryan ke asli family ka kuch long scene dikhao..
Simply amazing going
It was so emotional when Aryan was getting beaten up and at the same time in his real house, Ria’s birthday was being celebrated.
And Kya myra was the one who planned that prank?
Reader pov se to year ho gya aisa lagta hai
Update 16 has been posted guys.
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