"Xforum Valentine Story Contest - 2019 :- Reviews Thread"

[Rahul]

And now my review for Usska naam hai Sahana by Casinar
yeh sabse best kahani hai jitne kahaniyon ko main ne contest mein padha hoon, mere hisaab se.
itni achi aur behtareen se likha gaya aur pesh kiya gaya kahani naseeb walon kp hi milta hai padhne ko.
main itne dinon se intejaar mein tha ke yahan itne saare writer hein k koyi to iss kahani ka review likhe magar sab apne apne mein lage hue hein jeise kissi ko yeh kaha i dikha hi nahin
ye ek aurat ki kaha i hai Sahana naam ki
Aur casinar bhai ne sirf do character ke beech ek baat chit ke dauraan pura kahani humko suna diya yeh ek badi kamaal ki baat hai. sirf 2 character, sahana aur OPareeniti. iss ke ilawa sirf wo lady guard haio jo khada raha magar ek do baat kaha ussne magar main protagosnist rahe Sahana aur agarwal maam.
sab kuch itne detail mein casinar ne bayaan kiya, samjhaya ke sirf sahana ke bayaan karne se ehum sab ko kahani ka pata chala
usska dard ghuttan, pareshani sab kuch khud sahana ne apne zubani bayaan kiye.
aur jo guzra sahana par wo kissi par bhi guzarti to ant kuch eisa hi hona tha magar!!1 magar Casinar ne isska ant eisa dikhaya jo kissi ne socha bhi nahin hoga padhte waqtg... kahani ke ant hone tak sab ko pata chal gaya ke chalo itne bipat ke sahana ko rehaayi to mili, kaam bhi wapas mil gayi magar kiss ne eisa socha hoga jiss ant ko Casinar ne socha aur likha?
aur bilkool hi sahi aur justified likha bhai ne....
kyunke wo bilkool mumkin end hai.... sab jab thik hogaya to ek dushman ka chota bhai apne mare hue bhai ke badla lene k liye sahana ka ant kar diya
dukh bahri end hai magar bilkool justified hai..
thanks very very much casi bhai eisi dilchasp aur behtareen kahani ke liye bhai , hamare liye eise aur behtareen kahaniyon ko jaroor likhna bhai hamein maloon hai aap ke dimaagh mein ek bhandaar bhara hua writing ki to humko nawaajna eise writin g se.
thanks bhai for this wonderful and amazing short story which marks your signature.

 

[luv4sale696969]

Casinar
I just finished your story "Dad and Son', about Sahaj and believe it or not, it took me by surprise at the end... I had almost believed that Rahul will get mad but will finally move forward... But end was really tragic... It pulled me down from all the ecstasy I was riding before that fateful incidence at the end.... So far as characters are concerned, Rahul appeared to be weak but I don't blame him... He might have grown physically but having been a pampered kid, emotionally he still was a kid.... Nisha appeared to be quite strong on the other hand like the real slut she was.... Sahaj was the weakest... How can a father, a lone father, fostering his only child for such a long time of 15 years befooled by a girl like Nisha... Maybe it was his abstinence or maybe it was the aggression by Nisha that pulls sexually dissatisfied males like a 50tons magnet... But definitely in that case the story won't have had its impact that it has now....
A real great story... Hats off to you and your creativity....

 

[luv4sale696969]

My Opinion about "Uska Naam Sahana Hair"
Honestly speaking, I am a big fan of Casinar and his writing skills... And this story more than justifies my passion about his stories....
Sahana, I really pity that poor girl... The author has described her, her thoughts, her actions and her predicament so well that it never appears to be a textual story.... Instead, one feels as if watching a movie... Rather, at certain points, living it.... Though the end was on slightly negative note, but that made it biggest punch of the story.... Over all, a fantabulous story...
Fantastic plot, fantastic flow and equally fantastic descriptions....
You rock.....

 

[Casinar]

my review for Dad And Son by Casinar
ye ek bhut hi adbudh kisam ki kahani hai
iss mein ek eisa baap jissne dusri shadi nahin karte hue apne bete ko bhut pyar se paal poss kar bada karta hai bina kissi bhi dusri aurat ke taraf dekhte hue.
aur bete ko ek ladki se pyar hota hai, magar kia vo ladki uss se pyar karti thi ya usska pyar ek tarfa tha?
magar wo ladki ladke ke baap par mohit hoti hai ya eisa samjha jaaye ke unnko apne jaal mein fansati hai.
ab baap pichle 15 saalon mein kissi bhi aurat ke taraf nahin gaya to ek jawan modern aaj ki jamane ki ladki ki chuwan aur pyar apne taraf aate hue dekh kar baap usski iskh mein par gaya aur seedhe seehde sex karne lage donon kyun ke ladki wohi chahti thi aur wo yeh sab pehle bhi kar chuki thi
aur dhire dhire ladki ladke se milna kum kiya magar baap se milti rahi barabar
baap ko patya chal gaya ke ladki usske bete se pyar vyar nahin karti thi

yeh ek eisi ladki hai jo dusron ka ghar barbaad karke chali jaati hai araam se jeise kuch hua hi nahin
haan afsos ke eisi ladkiyan, auratein sach mein hote bhi hein aur nisha ek eisi hi ladki thi
jab bete ne baap ko bisha ke saath sambhog karte hue dekha to vo pagla gaya aur
bhaagte hue raaste par nikla aur baap usske piche pareshan samjhane ke liye dauda magar bete ne jaan dedi apna
Aur Nisha bina kissi ko dekhe eisi nikli wahan se jeise kuch hua hi nahin
Nisha ka rang ab dikha ke wo keisi ladki thi
baap ne itne jatan se bete ko paal kar itne pyar se bada kiya aurek ladki ki khaatir ussi bete se haath dhona pada
bahut hi ache tarike se casinar ne iss kahani ko pesh kiya hai.
bahot hi behtareen dhang se sab kuch ek ek karke bayaan kiya gaya hai iss kahani mein jiss ne sabhi ke dil ko chhua hoga
one among the best hai mere hisab se.

bahot bahot shukriya Rahul yara itne achchi review ke liye.
dil bahot hi khush hua ke tumne kahani ko padha aur review kiya

 

[Casinar]

My review for Uska naam sahana hai..
wonderful story casi bhai maja aa gaya padhkar story me ek ladki ki bebasi jhalkti hai kaise usne itna sab bardast kiya aur last me usne wohi kiya jo karna chahiye.use aajadi mili maut ke sath.very painful but nice story bro

shukriya mere dost review dene ke liye. bahot achcha laga ke tumne kahani ko padha aur passand kiya

 

[Casinar]

And now my review for Usska naam hai Sahana by Casinar
yeh sabse best kahani hai jitne kahaniyon ko main ne contest mein padha hoon, mere hisaab se.
itni achi aur behtareen se likha gaya aur pesh kiya gaya kahani naseeb walon kp hi milta hai padhne ko.
main itne dinon se intejaar mein tha ke yahan itne saare writer hein k koyi to iss kahani ka review likhe magar sab apne apne mein lage hue hein jeise kissi ko yeh kaha i dikha hi nahin
ye ek aurat ki kaha i hai Sahana naam ki
Aur casinar bhai ne sirf do character ke beech ek baat chit ke dauraan pura kahani humko suna diya yeh ek badi kamaal ki baat hai. sirf 2 character, sahana aur OPareeniti. iss ke ilawa sirf wo lady guard haio jo khada raha magar ek do baat kaha ussne magar main protagosnist rahe Sahana aur agarwal maam.
sab kuch itne detail mein casinar ne bayaan kiya, samjhaya ke sirf sahana ke bayaan karne se ehum sab ko kahani ka pata chala
usska dard ghuttan, pareshani sab kuch khud sahana ne apne zubani bayaan kiye.
aur jo guzra sahana par wo kissi par bhi guzarti to ant kuch eisa hi hona tha magar!!1 magar Casinar ne isska ant eisa dikhaya jo kissi ne socha bhi nahin hoga padhte waqtg... kahani ke ant hone tak sab ko pata chal gaya ke chalo itne bipat ke sahana ko rehaayi to mili, kaam bhi wapas mil gayi magar kiss ne eisa socha hoga jiss ant ko Casinar ne socha aur likha?
aur bilkool hi sahi aur justified likha bhai ne....
kyunke wo bilkool mumkin end hai.... sab jab thik hogaya to ek dushman ka chota bhai apne mare hue bhai ke badla lene k liye sahana ka ant kar diya
dukh bahri end hai magar bilkool justified hai..
thanks very very much casi bhai eisi dilchasp aur behtareen kahani ke liye bhai , hamare liye eise aur behtareen kahaniyon ko jaroor likhna bhai hamein maloon hai aap ke dimaagh mein ek bhandaar bhara hua writing ki to humko nawaajna eise writin g se.
thanks bhai for this wonderful and amazing short story which marks your signature.

Rahul bhai wah itna acha likha tujhe bhi ata hai mujhe nahin pata tha
shukeiya mere bahot bahot shukriya kahani ko padhne aur passand karne ke liye.

 

[Casinar]

Casinar
I just finished your story "Dad and Son', about Sahaj and believe it or not, it took me by surprise at the end... I had almost believed that Rahul will get mad but will finally move forward... But end was really tragic... It pulled me down from all the ecstasy I was riding before that fateful incidence at the end.... So far as characters are concerned, Rahul appeared to be weak but I don't blame him... He might have grown physically but having been a pampered kid, emotionally he still was a kid.... Nisha appeared to be quite strong on the other hand like the real slut she was.... Sahaj was the weakest... How can a father, a lone father, fostering his only child for such a long time of 15 years befooled by a girl like Nisha... Maybe it was his abstinence or maybe it was the aggression by Nisha that pulls sexually dissatisfied males like a 50tons magnet... But definitely in that case the story won't have had its impact that it has now....
A real great story... Hats off to you and your creativity....

luv bro I appreciate your appreciative review so very much dear.
I am pleased to know that the story pleased you,
i am very happy with your point of view.
thanks very very much luv bro

 

[Casinar]

My Opinion about "Uska Naam Sahana Hair"
Honestly speaking, I am a big fan of Casinar and his writing skills... And this story more than justifies my passion about his stories....
Sahana, I really pity that poor girl... The author has described her, her thoughts, her actions and her predicament so well that it never appears to be a textual story.... Instead, one feels as if watching a movie... Rather, at certain points, living it.... Though the end was on slightly negative note, but that made it biggest punch of the story.... Over all, a fantabulous story...
Fantastic plot, fantastic flow and equally fantastic descriptions....
You rock.....

am so happy to see your review on Sahan story bro, was in fact eagerly waiting for this, i wanted to know what you will have to say after reading it and am so happy to read a positive review.
thanks so very very much Luv bro for the appreciative review.
Its a real pleasure to read such notes from a reader. thanks again dear

 

[luv4sale696969]

am so happy to see your review on Sahan story bro, was in fact eagerly waiting for this, i wanted to know what you will have to say after reading it and am so happy to read a positive review.
thanks so very very much Luv bro for the appreciative review.
Its a real pleasure to read such notes from a reader. thanks again dear

You are most welcome.... Please also go through conversation....

 

[Casinar]

my review for Ye un dinon ki baat hai !
Among all the stories I went through this one caught my attention only because I prefer well-narrated stories than those with only conversations going along between two or three characters.
Storytelling for me is where the writer tells a story not make a conversation between a few people and call that a story.
A story with a descriptive narration is very pleasant to read, which I found in "yeh unn dinon ki baat hai"
But this story reminded me of the story for which Jatin bhai won the valentine contest at exbii in 2010 entitled "Anokha Bandhan" which later was converted into a full story in a thread. In that year I had written my very first short story named "Annabelle"
Coming to this story of samurai, I liked it for the descriptive narrations and the very well paragraphed content which makes it a pleasure to read. The beautiful words used by the writer is commendable. The way she narrates each and every part is marvelous.
But I could anticipate what was going to happen next and when she wrote
"after 25 years" it was all revealed already. the anticipation in a contest story should always be retained till the end to keep the reader glued to it.
in the whole, I liked this story very much for the way it is written and narrated. and the way the writer has described everything all along the tale.
good job done